Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPGYX2JEYZ8V5ZR925YBJC

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Duration:
26.5s
Cost:
$0.004097
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt clicked like a gunshot. Rory stood in the doorway, her fingers still curled around the key she’d just turned, her bright blue eyes wide. The scent of curry from the restaurant below curled into the hallway, thick and spiced, but it did nothing to mask the cologne clinging to the man on her doorstep. Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather, a hint of smoke. Lucien Moreau. His platinum hair was slicked back, just as she remembered, but the amber of his left eye seemed to glow in the dim light of the hallway, sharp and predatory. The black of his right eye swallowed the light whole. He leaned on his ivory-handled cane, the picture of casual elegance, but his knuckles were white around the handle. "You’re not Eva," he said, voice smooth as aged whisky. Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat. "No. I’m not." A beat of silence. The weight of three years pressed between them, heavy as the London fog outside. She hadn’t seen him since that night in the alley behind Silas’ bar, when his hands had been warm on her skin and his mouth had been colder than she’d expected. When she’d walked away before he could. Lucien’s gaze flicked over her shoulder, into the flat. "Is she here?" "Out." Rory didn’t step aside. "What do you want?" His lips quirked, just slightly. "Straight to the point. I forgot how much I liked that about you." The words settled between them, sharp as the blade she knew was hidden in his cane. She should slam the door. She should walk away. But the way he looked at her—like she was something precious he’d lost—rooted her to the spot. "Five minutes," he said. "Then I’ll leave." Rory exhaled through her nose, then stepped back, letting him inside. The flat was exactly as he remembered it—cluttered, lived-in, the air thick with the scent of old books and the faint metallic tang of magic. Eva’s research notes were pinned to every available surface, scribbled in a mix of languages Rory couldn’t read. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, blinked at Lucien from his perch on the armchair, tail flicking in slow assessment. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floorboards as he moved further inside, his gaze sweeping over the room before landing back on her. "You’re living here now?" "Temporarily." Rory crossed her arms. "Eva’s been helping me sort some things." "Things." His voice was dry. "That’s one way to put it." She didn’t need to ask what he meant. The bruises Evan had left were long gone, but the memory of them lingered in the way Lucien’s jaw tightened, in the way his fingers flexed around his cane. Ptolemy chose that moment to leap down and wind himself around Lucien’s legs, purring loudly. Traitor. Lucien crouched, running a hand over the cat’s back. "Still the world’s worst judge of character, I see." Rory’s fingers twitched. "He’s not the one who showed up unannounced." Lucien straightened, his expression unreadable. "I needed to see her. Eva." "Bullshit." His eyes flashed. "You always did have a way with words." "Someone has to." She stepped closer, close enough to see the faint scar above his eyebrow, the one he’d gotten the same night she’d left. "You didn’t come here for Eva. You came here for me." The air between them crackled, charged with something darker than memory. Lucien’s gaze dropped to her mouth, then back up. "And if I did?" Rory’s breath hitched. Three years. Three years of wondering what would’ve happened if she’d stayed. If she’d let him kiss her again. If she’d let herself fall. But then his expression shuttered, just like that, and he stepped back. "I need her help." Of course. Because Lucien Moreau didn’t do anything without a reason. Rory exhaled, forcing herself to think. "With what?" "A job." He reached into his jacket and pulled out a folded piece of paper. "Something’s coming into the city. Something that shouldn’t be here." She took the paper, unfolding it carefully. The sketch was crude—a symbol, jagged and unfamiliar, inked in what looked like blood. Her stomach twisted. "What is this?" "Trouble." Lucien’s voice was low. "And Eva’s the only one who might know what it means." Rory studied the symbol, her mind racing. She’d seen enough of Eva’s research to know this wasn’t just some occult doodle. This was real. Dangerous. And Lucien had brought it to her doorstep. She looked up at him, searching his face. "Why now? Why come to her after all this time?" Lucien’s expression was unreadable. "Because whatever’s coming, it’s not just a threat to her. It’s a threat to you." Rory’s blood ran cold. "Me?" His gaze locked onto hers, intense and unwavering. "You’re part of this now, whether you like it or not." The weight of his words settled over her, heavy and inescapable. She’d spent the last three years trying to outrun her past, trying to build something normal. But normal had never been in the cards for her. Not with Lucien standing in her flat, looking at her like she was the only thing that mattered. Not with a symbol like this burning a hole in her hand. Rory folded the paper carefully, her mind already racing ahead. "Eva’s at the British Library. She won’t be back until late." Lucien’s lips curved, just slightly. "Then I’ll wait." The way he said it—like he had all the time in the world—sent a shiver down her spine. Rory should’ve told him to leave. Should’ve walked away. But she didn’t. Instead, she met his gaze and said, "Make yourself useful. There’s tea in the kitchen." Lucien’s smile deepened, slow and dangerous. "Lead the way."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount956
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"carefully"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount956
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"unreadable"
count2
5
word"eyebrow"
count1
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"racing"
count2
9
word"unwavering"
count1
10
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"flicked"
4"unreadable"
5"eyebrow"
6"charged"
7"stomach"
8"racing"
9"unwavering"
10"down her spine"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"The weight of his words"
2"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences103
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords949
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount733
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.18
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau2
Rory13
London1
Lucien16
Evan1
Eva2
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
3"Evan"
4"Eva"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.409
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like blood"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount949
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences103
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean19.77
std14.95
cv0.756
sampleLengths
06
161
259
310
49
556
612
79
818
942
107
1111
1261
1326
1412
1511
1637
1716
1818
1911
2011
211
2211
2336
2424
2527
2616
2711
288
2925
3027
3116
3225
338
3418
3519
365
3719
3837
3918
4012
4121
428
4318
449
453
4615
479
91.41% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences76
matches
0"was slicked"
1"was hidden"
2"were pinned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs139
matches(empty)
4.16% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences103
ratio0.049
matches
0"Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather, a hint of smoke."
1"But the way he looked at her—like she was something precious he’d lost—rooted her to the spot."
2"The flat was exactly as he remembered it—cluttered, lived-in, the air thick with the scent of old books and the faint metallic tang of magic."
3"The sketch was crude—a symbol, jagged and unfamiliar, inked in what looked like blood."
4"The way he said it—like he had all the time in the world—sent a shiver down her spine."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount298
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.03691275167785235
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.003355704697986577
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences103
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences103
mean9.21
std6.84
cv0.742
sampleLengths
06
120
230
39
42
530
610
719
810
96
103
114
1214
1331
147
159
163
175
184
195
2013
2116
225
234
2417
254
263
2711
2825
2918
3018
3122
324
335
347
355
366
378
3829
3915
401
419
429
433
448
455
466
471
483
498
67.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.42718446601941745
totalSentences103
uniqueOpeners44
47.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Instead, she met his gaze"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences70
matches
0"His platinum hair was slicked"
1"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
2"he said, voice smooth as"
3"She hadn’t seen him since"
4"His lips quirked, just slightly."
5"She should slam the door."
6"She should walk away."
7"His voice was dry"
8"She didn’t need to ask"
9"His eyes flashed."
10"She stepped closer, close enough"
11"He reached into his jacket"
12"She took the paper, unfolding"
13"Her stomach twisted."
14"She’d seen enough of Eva’s"
15"She looked up at him,"
16"His gaze locked onto hers,"
17"She’d spent the last three"
ratio0.257
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences70
matches
0"The deadbolt clicked like a"
1"Rory stood in the doorway,"
2"The scent of curry from"
3"Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather,"
4"His platinum hair was slicked"
5"The black of his right"
6"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
7"he said, voice smooth as"
8"Rory’s pulse hammered in her"
9"A beat of silence."
10"The weight of three years"
11"She hadn’t seen him since"
12"Lucien’s gaze flicked over her"
13"Rory didn’t step aside"
14"His lips quirked, just slightly."
15"The words settled between them,"
16"She should slam the door."
17"She should walk away."
18"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
19"The flat was exactly as"
ratio0.8
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences70
matches
0"If she’d let him kiss"
1"If she’d let herself fall."
2"Because Lucien Moreau didn’t do"
ratio0.043
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She’d spent the last three years trying to outrun her past, trying to build something normal."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice smooth as aged whisky"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.056
leniency0.111
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.5177%