Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPM2HXW17NTVNFRSK8VCKX

Run Details

Duration:
47.4s
Cost:
$0.005996
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning London’s streets into a slick, reflective maze. Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t slow her pace. Her boots splashed through ankle-deep puddles, each step deliberate, controlled. The suspect—lean, quick, dressed in a dark hoodie—darted around the corner of a brick alley, his silhouette flickering under the sickly glow of a broken streetlamp. Harlow’s breath came steady, her pulse a metronome in her throat. Three years since Morris had vanished in an alley just like this one, and she still hadn’t learned to trust the dark. She rounded the corner, fingers brushing the cold metal of her sidearm. The alley stretched ahead, narrow and clogged with overflowing dumpsters, the stench of rotting food thick in the damp air. No sign of him. Then—a scuffle, the clatter of metal against cobblestone. She pivoted, eyes locking onto a fire escape twenty feet ahead. The suspect was already halfway up, his gloved hands gripping the rusted rungs. Harlow didn’t hesitate. She lunged for the ladder, her leather watch snagging on the bottom rung as she hauled herself up. The rain hammered against the metal, a drumbeat of chaos. At the top, the suspect glanced back—just for a second. Long enough for her to see the glint of something in his hand. Not a knife. Not a gun. A token, small and pale, carved from what looked like bone. Then he was over the railing, dropping into the black mouth of an alley below. Harlow swore under her breath and followed. She hit the ground hard, knees bending to absorb the impact. The alley opened into a dead-end courtyard, the bricks slick underfoot. A rusted door hung ajar at the far end, swaying slightly in the wind. No other exits. She advanced, gun drawn now, the weight of it familiar in her grip. The door creaked as she pushed it open, revealing a steep staircase descending into darkness. The air changed instantly—thicker, heavier, laced with the scent of damp earth and something older, something metallic. Like blood, but not quite. Harlow’s fingers tightened around her torch. The beam cut through the gloom, illuminating crumbling concrete walls, the remnants of old Tube station tiles. The suspect’s footsteps echoed ahead, rapid, urgent. She followed. The staircase bottomed out in a wide, arched tunnel. The walls were lined with stalls—makeshift tables draped in velvet, glass cases displaying vials of iridescent liquid, bundles of dried herbs, things that looked like teeth strung on wire. A market. Not the kind that sold fruit or secondhand clothes. The kind that sold secrets. The Veil Market. Harlow had heard the whispers, of course. Every cop who’d spent more than five years in London had. A black market for things that shouldn’t exist, moving like a shadow beneath the city, surfacing only when the moon was full. She’d never believed in it. Until now. The suspect was already halfway down the central aisle, weaving between shoppers who eyed him with the kind of disinterest that screamed *regular*. Harlow holstered her gun—no point drawing attention—and adjusted her jacket, making sure her badge was hidden. She stepped forward, boots silent on the damp stone. The market was a living thing, pulsing with low conversation and the occasional sharp laugh. A woman with silver-streaked hair stirred a cauldron of something that bubbled violet. A man with too many fingers counted out coins onto a scale. Harlow kept her gaze locked on the suspect’s retreating back. He ducked into a stall draped in black cloth, the air above it shimmering like heat haze. She moved closer, shoulder brushing against a display of jars filled with things that twitched. “Lost, love?” The voice came from her left. A man leaned against a stall selling what looked like preserved eyes in brine. His grin was lazy, but his eyes were sharp, assessing. Harlow didn’t break stride. “Just passing through.” He chuckled, low and knowing. “Ain’t we all.” The suspect was still at the stall, his back to her, speaking in hushed tones to a figure obscured by the cloth. Harlow sidestepped a crate of what smelled like rotting meat, her pulse kicking up. She needed to get closer. Needed to hear. Then the suspect turned slightly, and she saw it—the glint of a Saint Christopher medallion at his throat. *Tomás Herrera.* She froze. Not a suspect. A person. One she’d been tailing for weeks, ever since his name had surfaced in connection with the clique she was convinced was running something far worse than petty crime through the Raven’s Nest. But this—this was different. Herrera wasn’t buying drugs or stolen goods. He was buying *information*. And if he was here, then the clique was deeper in this than she’d thought. Herrera took a small package from the stallkeeper—a pouch, by the look of it—and tucked it into his jacket. Then he turned, scanning the market with the practiced wariness of someone who knew he was being watched. Harlow ducked behind a stall selling what looked like enchanted knives, her back pressing against the rough wood. Her mind raced. She could follow him out, tail him back to the Nest, see what he did with whatever he’d just bought. Or she could confront him here, in a place where she was the outsider, where the rules were unknown and the exits unclear. A hand clamped down on her shoulder. She spun, fist already flying, but the man—tall, gaunt, his skin the color of old parchment—caught her wrist mid-strike. His grip was like iron. “No fighting in the Market,” he said, his voice a dry rasp. “Bad for business.” Harlow yanked free. “I’m not here for trouble.” “Aren’t you?” His smile was humorless. “Detective.” She stiffened. “You don’t know me.” “I know a cop when I see one.” His gaze flicked to the badge-shaped bulge under her jacket. “And I know when they’re out of their depth.” Harlow didn’t rise to the bait. Instead, she glanced past him, searching for Herrera. He was gone. *Damn it.* She pushed past the man, shoving through the crowd. The market seemed to shift around her, the stalls blurring, the air thick with the scent of burning sage and something sweeter, sicklier. Her torch beam cut through the gloom, catching on a flicker of movement—Herrera, slipping into a side tunnel. She broke into a run. The tunnel was narrower, the ceiling low enough that she had to duck. The walls were lined with symbols carved into the stone, their edges worn smooth by time. The air hummed, a low vibration that set her teeth on edge. Then the tunnel opened into a cavernous space, the ceiling lost in darkness. A train platform, abandoned decades ago, the tracks rusted and warped. Herrera stood at the edge, staring down at the rails. Harlow slowed, her breath coming faster now. “Herrera.” He didn’t turn. “Detective Quinn. Didn’t expect to see you here.” “Funny. I was about to say the same.” She stepped closer, hands raised, non-threatening. “What’d you buy?” “Something that’s none of your business.” He finally looked at her, his warm brown eyes unreadable. “You shouldn’t be here. This place… it’s not for people like us.” “People like us?” “People who don’t know the rules.” He reached into his jacket, and for a second, Harlow tensed. But he only pulled out the pouch, holding it up between them. “This? It’s a key. And it’s dangerous.” Harlow studied the pouch. The material was dark, stitched with thread that glowed faintly blue in the dim light. “A key to what?” Herrera’s jaw tightened. “To something you don’t want to open.” A sound echoed through the cavern—a low, rhythmic *clacking*, like bones knocking together. Harlow’s skin prickled. “We’re not alone.” “No,” Herrera said quietly. “We’re not.” The clacking grew louder. Shadows shifted at the edges of the platform, coalescing into shapes that moved against the laws of physics. Harlow’s hand twitched toward her gun, but Herrera grabbed her wrist. “Don’t,” he hissed. “You draw attention, you don’t walk out of here.” “Then what do we do?” His grip tightened. “We run.” The first of the shapes detached from the dark—a figure tall and skeletal, its limbs too long, its face a smooth expanse of bone-white skin. No eyes. No mouth. Just the *clacking*, the sound of its fingers tapping against its own ribs as it took a step toward them. Harlow didn’t need to be told twice. She turned and bolted, Herrera right beside her. They crashed through the tunnel, the thing’s footsteps echoing behind them, too fast, too *wrong*. The market was in chaos now, stalls overturned, shoppers scattering like rats. Harlow’s lungs burned as she skidded around a corner, her shoulder slamming into the wall. Herrera grabbed her arm, yanking her into a side passage just as the skeletal figure lunged. The passage was tight, the ceiling so low they had to crouch. Harlow’s torch beam bounced wildly, illuminating symbols carved into the stone—wards, maybe, or warnings. Herrera moved like he’d been here before, his steps sure even in the dark. “Where the hell are we going?” Harlow gasped. “Up,” he grunted. “There’s an exit near the old Camden station. If we can—” A scream cut him off, high and raw. Not theirs. Someone else’s. Harlow risked a glance back. The tunnel behind them was empty, but the sound of *clacking* echoed from the darkness, closer now. Herrera shoved her forward. “Move.” They burst out of the tunnel into a narrow service corridor, the walls lined with rusted pipes. A ladder led up to a manhole cover, the metal groaning as Herrera wrenched it open. Rain poured in, cold and sudden. Harlow didn’t hesitate. She climbed, her muscles screaming, and hauled herself out into the street. The rain was still coming down in sheets, the world above ground a blur of neon and headlights. Herrera followed, slamming the manhole cover shut behind them. For a moment, they just stood there, chest heaving, the adrenaline still singing in their veins. Then Harlow turned to him, her voice low and dangerous. “You’re going to tell me what the hell that was.” Herrera wiped rain from his face, his expression grim. “No, Detective. I’m not.” She grabbed the front of his jacket, shoving him back against the brick wall. “Three years ago, my partner disappeared chasing something just like that. Something *supernatural*. And now I find you—some two-bit medic for a gang of criminals—buying *keys* in a fucking nightmare market. So you *will* tell me what’s going on, or I swear to God, I’ll—” “You’ll what?” Herrera’s voice was steady, but his eyes flickered with something raw. “Arrest me? You think that’ll keep you safe?” He shook his head. “You don’t understand what you’re messing with.” “Then *make* me understand.” For a long moment, he just stared at her, the rain plastering his dark curls to his forehead. Then, slowly, he reached into his jacket and pulled out the pouch. He held it out to her. Harlow hesitated, then took it. The moment her fingers brushed the fabric, a jolt ran up her arm, sharp and electric. The pouch was warm, almost *alive*. Inside, something pulsed, like a heartbeat. “That,” Herrera said quietly, “is a key to the Locked Door. And if the clique gets their hands on it, a lot of people are going to die.” Harlow’s grip tightened. “Then why the hell did you buy it?” “Because I’m trying to *stop* them.” His voice was low, urgent. “But I can’t do it alone.” The rain fell between them, the city’s lights reflecting in the puddles at their feet. Harlow looked down at the pouch, then back at Herrera. Three years of chasing ghosts. Three years of dead ends. And now, a door. She met his gaze. “Tell me what we’re walking into.” Herrera exhaled, long and slow. Then he nodded. “Not here. Somewhere safer.” Harlow tucked the pouch into her own jacket, the weight of it settling against her ribs. “Lead the way.” He turned, heading toward the flickering green neon of the Raven’s Nest. Harlow followed, her mind racing, her instincts screaming at her to turn back. But for the first time in years, she wasn’t chasing a suspect. She was chasing the truth.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Herrera said quietly [quietly]"
1"Herrera said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.468
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.085
92.75% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2069
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2069
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"glint"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count2
5
word"footsteps"
count2
6
word"echoed"
count3
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"flicker"
count1
12
word"unreadable"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"echoing"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"electric"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count1
18
word"racing"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"glint"
2"weight"
3"familiar"
4"gloom"
5"footsteps"
6"echoed"
7"velvet"
8"scanning"
9"raced"
10"flicked"
11"flicker"
12"unreadable"
13"rhythmic"
14"echoing"
15"flickered"
16"electric"
17"pulsed"
18"racing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences175
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences175
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences208
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords16
totalWords2041
ratio0.008
matches
0"regular"
1"Tomás Herrera."
2"information"
3"Damn it."
4"clacking"
5"clacking"
6"wrong"
7"clacking"
8"supernatural"
9"keys"
10"will"
11"make"
12"alive"
13"stop"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
64.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions67
wordCount1751
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.71
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
London2
Harlow30
Quinn1
Morris1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Saint1
Christopher1
Raven2
Nest3
Herrera20
Three3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Market"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Raven"
7"Herrera"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.643
windowScore0.667
42.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences116
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like bone"
1"looked like teeth strung on wire"
2"looked like preserved eyes in brine"
3"smelled like rotting meat, her pulse kicki"
4"looked like enchanted knives, her back pr"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2041
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences208
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs80
mean25.51
std22.34
cv0.875
sampleLengths
090
199
240
315
47
567
652
72
854
93
1047
1148
1267
1315
142
1534
163
178
1844
1918
202
212
2252
2315
2437
2564
267
2724
2815
298
307
316
3227
3317
342
3550
365
3775
388
3911
4017
4128
423
4336
4423
4510
4619
476
4833
4912
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences175
matches
0"were lined"
1"was hidden"
2"was convinced"
3"was gone"
4"were lined"
69.28% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs306
matches
0"was running"
1"wasn’t buying"
2"was buying"
3"was being"
4"wasn’t chasing"
5"was chasing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences208
ratio0.067
matches
0"The suspect—lean, quick, dressed in a dark hoodie—darted around the corner of a brick alley, his silhouette flickering under the sickly glow of a broken streetlamp."
1"Then—a scuffle, the clatter of metal against cobblestone."
2"At the top, the suspect glanced back—just for a second."
3"The air changed instantly—thicker, heavier, laced with the scent of damp earth and something older, something metallic."
4"The walls were lined with stalls—makeshift tables draped in velvet, glass cases displaying vials of iridescent liquid, bundles of dried herbs, things that looked like teeth strung on wire."
5"Harlow holstered her gun—no point drawing attention—and adjusted her jacket, making sure her badge was hidden."
6"Then the suspect turned slightly, and she saw it—the glint of a Saint Christopher medallion at his throat."
7"But this—this was different."
8"Herrera took a small package from the stallkeeper—a pouch, by the look of it—and tucked it into his jacket."
9"She spun, fist already flying, but the man—tall, gaunt, his skin the color of old parchment—caught her wrist mid-strike."
10"Her torch beam cut through the gloom, catching on a flicker of movement—Herrera, slipping into a side tunnel."
11"A sound echoed through the cavern—a low, rhythmic *clacking*, like bones knocking together."
12"The first of the shapes detached from the dark—a figure tall and skeletal, its limbs too long, its face a smooth expanse of bone-white skin."
13"Harlow’s torch beam bounced wildly, illuminating symbols carved into the stone—wards, maybe, or warnings."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1776
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount70
adverbRatio0.039414414414414414
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.006756756756756757
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences208
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences208
mean9.81
std6.8
cv0.693
sampleLengths
014
17
210
326
411
522
612
720
84
98
1011
1113
123
1318
1410
1510
1613
173
183
1911
2015
217
2211
2311
2414
253
2613
2715
2817
295
306
3117
327
332
349
3529
362
379
385
393
407
4111
4222
435
442
4523
4616
479
4815
4913
44.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.2692307692307692
totalSentences208
uniqueOpeners56
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount10
totalSentences160
matches
0"Then—a scuffle, the clatter of"
1"Then he was over the"
2"Then the suspect turned slightly,"
3"Then he turned, scanning the"
4"Instead, she glanced past him,"
5"Then the tunnel opened into"
6"Just the *clacking*, the sound"
7"Then Harlow turned to him,"
8"Then, slowly, he reached into"
9"Then he nodded."
ratio0.063
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences160
matches
0"Her boots splashed through ankle-deep"
1"She rounded the corner, fingers"
2"She pivoted, eyes locking onto"
3"She lunged for the ladder,"
4"She hit the ground hard,"
5"She advanced, gun drawn now,"
6"She’d never believed in it."
7"She stepped forward, boots silent"
8"He ducked into a stall"
9"She moved closer, shoulder brushing"
10"His grin was lazy, but"
11"He chuckled, low and knowing."
12"She needed to get closer."
13"He was buying *information*."
14"Her mind raced."
15"She could follow him out,"
16"She spun, fist already flying,"
17"His grip was like iron."
18"he said, his voice a"
19"His smile was humorless"
ratio0.256
63.13% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount127
totalSentences160
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t slow"
2"Her boots splashed through ankle-deep"
3"The suspect—lean, quick, dressed in"
4"Harlow’s breath came steady, her"
5"She rounded the corner, fingers"
6"The alley stretched ahead, narrow"
7"She pivoted, eyes locking onto"
8"The suspect was already halfway"
9"Harlow didn’t hesitate."
10"She lunged for the ladder,"
11"The rain hammered against the"
12"A token, small and pale,"
13"Harlow swore under her breath"
14"She hit the ground hard,"
15"The alley opened into a"
16"A rusted door hung ajar"
17"She advanced, gun drawn now,"
18"The door creaked as she"
19"The air changed instantly—thicker, heavier,"
ratio0.794
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences160
matches(empty)
ratio0
92.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences85
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The walls were lined with stalls—makeshift tables draped in velvet, glass cases displaying vials of iridescent liquid, bundles of dried herbs, things that looke…"
1"A black market for things that shouldn’t exist, moving like a shadow beneath the city, surfacing only when the moon was full."
2"A woman with silver-streaked hair stirred a cauldron of something that bubbled violet."
3"Harlow sidestepped a crate of what smelled like rotting meat, her pulse kicking up."
4"Then he turned, scanning the market with the practiced wariness of someone who knew he was being watched."
5"Just the *clacking*, the sound of its fingers tapping against its own ribs as it took a step toward them."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, his voice a dry rasp"
1"She stepped, hands raised, non-threatening"
86.17% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he hissed (hiss)"
1"Harlow gasped (gasp)"
2"he grunted (grunt)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.128
leniency0.255
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.128
80.7022%