Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPMBWPSYETME578TV9C6NE

Run Details

Duration:
42.9s
Cost:
$0.005466
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning London’s neon glow into a smear of bleeding colors—crimson, amber, the sickly green of *The Raven’s Nest*’s sign flickering above the alley like a dying pulse. Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t break stride as she vaulted over a stack of sodden crates, her boots splashing through puddles deep enough to soak her ankles. The cold seeped in, but she barely registered it. Three years of chasing ghosts had taught her to ignore discomfort. What mattered was the figure ahead—lean, quick, a dark jacket flapping like broken wings as he ducked around the corner of Greek Street. She skidded on wet cobblestones, her left hand shooting out to brace against the brick wall of a closed kebab shop. The scent of grease and stale meat clung to the air, thick beneath the rain’s metallic tang. Her watch—leather worn smooth from years of service—glinted under a flickering streetlamp as she checked the time. 2:17 AM. The city was a graveyard at this hour, save for the drunks and the desperate. And her. And *him*. She pushed off the wall, muscles burning. The suspect—tall, broad-shouldered, moving with the easy confidence of someone who knew these streets better than she did—had a twenty-meter lead. Not enough. Never enough. Not when she’d spent eighteen months tracing the edges of something rotten in this city, something that stank of the same wrongness that had swallowed Morris whole. A shout rose behind her—uniforms, late to the party as always. She didn’t turn. Didn’t slow. The radio at her hip crackled with static and the frantic voice of DC Whitaker, but she ignored it. This was hers. The suspect glanced back. Just for a second. Long enough for the green neon of *The Raven’s Nest* to catch the sharp angle of his jaw, the glint of something metallic at his throat—a chain, maybe. A medallion. Then he was gone again, slipping into the mouth of an alley so narrow her shoulders nearly brushed both walls. Harlow followed. The alley twisted, a serpent’s path lined with overflowing dumpsters and the rusted skeletons of fire escapes. The rain drummed against the metal, a discordant rhythm that set her teeth on edge. She drew her sidearm, the weight of it familiar in her grip. “Police! Stop where you are!” No response. Just the echo of footsteps splashing ahead, the scuffle of shoes on wet stone. Then—nothing. She skidded to a halt at the alley’s dead end, a brick wall slick with moss and the stench of urine. No doors. No windows. Just a drain grate, its iron bars bent outward like broken teeth. *Too easy.* Harlow crouched, rain dripping from her cropped hair into her eyes. The grate was old, the metal corroded, but the bend was fresh. She holstered her weapon and grabbed the bars, testing their give. They groaned but held. She gritted her teeth and pulled harder. The muscles in her arms trembled—*forty-one, Quinn, not twenty-one*—but the grate shrieked and gave way, tearing free with a sound like a dying animal. The drop beneath was black. Not the dark of a closed shop or a shadowed corner, but the absolute, suffocating dark of a throat waiting to swallow her whole. She reached for her torch, flicking it on. The beam cut through the gloom, revealing a ladder bolted to the wall, its rungs slick with moisture. The stink rising from below was worse than the alley—damp earth, something chemical, and beneath it all, the coppery reek of old blood. *Christ.* She swung her legs over the edge, boots finding the first rung. The ladder shuddered under her weight but held. The torchlight wavered as she descended, the circle of illumination shrinking until it was just her, the rungs, and the dark. The tunnel opened into a space so vast her torch couldn’t find the walls. The air was thicker here, humid and electric, like the moment before a storm breaks. She swept the beam left, right. Concrete pillars rose like the ribs of some buried beast, and between them— *Stalls.* Wooden tables laden with jars of murky liquids, bundles of herbs, things that might have been bones. A market. Not the kind that sold fruit and secondhand jumpers, but the kind that sold *secrets*. The Veil Market. She’d heard the whispers, of course—every cop who’d spent more than five minutes in Soho had. A black market for things that shouldn’t exist. Things that made men disappear. And there, at the far end of the chamber, the suspect. He was bent over a table, talking to a hooded figure, his back to her. Harlow killed the torch and slipped behind a pillar, pressing her spine against the cold concrete. Her pulse hammered in her throat. She should call it in. Should turn around, climb back up to the world where the rules made sense, where suspects didn’t vanish into underground labyrinths and partners didn’t get erased from existence mid-conversation. But Morris’s face floated behind her eyes—the way he’d looked that last night, pale under the flickering fluorescents of the station, his usual smirk replaced by something like fear. *“Quinn, listen to me—”* And then nothing. Harlow exhaled through her nose and stepped out from behind the pillar. The market’s denizens noticed her immediately. A woman with too many teeth hissed from behind a table of glass vials. A man with a face like melted wax went still, his milky eyes tracking her movement. The suspect—*Herrera*, the file had called him, Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, suspected clique affiliate—turned slowly, as if he’d been expecting her. Up close, he was younger than she’d thought. Late twenties, maybe. Olive skin, dark curls damp with rain, a scar running the length of his left forearm—defensive wound, if she had to guess. And the medallion, glinting against his chest. Saint Christopher. Patron of travelers. *Irony, that.* His hands were empty. Relaxed. “Detective Quinn,” he said, voice low, accented. Seville, if the intel was right. “You’re a long way from the station.” She didn’t draw her weapon. Not yet. “Tomás Herrera. Or do you prefer ‘Tommy’?” A flicker of something crossed his face—amusement, maybe. “Depends on who’s asking.” “You’re under arrest for the possession and distribution of controlled substances.” She kept her voice steady, but her fingers twitched at her sides. The market’s silence was a living thing, pressing in. “Turn around. Hands behind your back.” Herrera didn’t move. “You don’t want to do that.” “Funny. That’s what Morris said, right before he vanished into thin air.” The words slipped out before she could stop them. Too personal. Too *raw*. Something shifted in his expression. Not pity. Recognition. “You don’t know what you’re walking into.” “I know you’re running.” She took a step forward. The stench of the market—damp, metallic, *wrong*—filled her lungs. “I know you’re part of the clique. And I know you’ve got something to do with whatever the hell is happening in this city.” Herrera’s gaze flicked to the shadows behind her. “Detective—” She didn’t let him finish. She lunged, grabbing for his arm, but he twisted away, faster than she expected. His hand shot out, gripping her wrist, fingers digging into the tendon just above her watch. Pain lanced up her arm, sharp and bright. “Let go,” she snarled. “You don’t understand,” he hissed. “This isn’t just drugs. This isn’t just *people*.” His other hand came up, fingers brushing the Saint Christopher medallion. “There are things down here that’ll eat you alive.” She drove her knee into his thigh, aiming for the nerve cluster. He grunted but didn’t release her. Instead, he yanked her closer, his breath hot against her ear. “Look around you, *detective*.” The emphasis on her title was a blade. “You think this is a market? It’s a *hunting ground*.” A sound cut through the tension—a wet, clicking noise, like bones knocking together. Harlow twisted in Herrera’s grip, torch snapping back on. The thing that had been the wax-faced man was no longer a man at all. Its limbs had elongated, joints bending the wrong way, its skin sloughing off in thick, gelatinous strips. Black eyes, too large for its skull, reflected the torchlight like oil on water. It *clicked* again, a sound that vibrated in Harlow’s teeth, and then it *moved*, scuttling toward them on too many legs, too many *fingers*. Herrera cursed and shoved her backward. “Run.” She didn’t. She drew her sidearm, the motion smooth, practiced. The thing—*the thing*—hissed, its mouth splitting wider than a human’s should, rows of needle teeth glistening. Harlow fired. The shot echoed, deafening in the confined space. The creature shrieked, its body jerking, but the bullet didn’t slow it. Black ichor sprayed the stall behind it, sizzling where it landed. “It won’t die like that!” Herrera grabbed her arm again, dragging her toward the far end of the market. “We have to go *now*!” Harlow let him pull her, but only because the alternative was standing her ground and dying on principle. They wove between stalls, knocking over tables, sending jars crashing to the ground. The market erupted into chaos—shouts, screams, the wet, tearing sounds of things that weren’t human giving chase. A tunnel yawned ahead, darker than the rest. Herrera didn’t hesitate. He plunged into it, and Harlow followed, the torchlight bouncing wildly off the walls. The tunnel sloped downward, the air growing colder, the stench of decay stronger. “Where the hell are we going?” she demanded, her voice raw. “Somewhere it can’t follow!” He skidded to a halt at a junction, pressing his back to the wall. Three tunnels branched off. All identical. All black. Harlow’s torch flickered. The batteries were dying. She swallowed hard, the taste of gunpowder and fear thick on her tongue. “You’re telling me that *thing* is what you’ve been running from?” Herrera’s chest heaved. “No. I’ve been running from *them*.” He jerked his chin upward. “The clique. The market. All of it.” His fingers tightened around the medallion. “I didn’t have a choice.” “Bullshit.” She holstered her weapon—what good was it now?—and wiped rain and sweat from her brow. “You always have a choice.” “Not when you’ve seen what I’ve seen.” His voice dropped. “Not when you know what’s coming.” A sound echoed down the tunnel—a wet, dragging noise, like something heavy being pulled across stone. Harlow’s skin prickled. “What the hell *is* coming?” Herrera met her gaze. For the first time, she saw real fear in his eyes. “The end of this city.” He pushed off the wall. “Come on. Before it’s too late.” Harlow hesitated. Every instinct screamed at her to turn back, to climb out of this nightmare and pretend she’d never seen it. But Morris’s face was there again, his last words unspoken, his fate unknown. She followed Herrera into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His fingers tightened around [around]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.056
97.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1825
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1825
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"footsteps"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"wavered"
count1
10
word"electric"
count1
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"flicked"
count1
15
word"tension"
count1
16
word"vibrated"
count1
17
word"glistening"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count2
19
word"flickered"
count1
20
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"tracing"
2"glint"
3"weight"
4"familiar"
5"echo"
6"footsteps"
7"trembled"
8"gloom"
9"wavered"
10"electric"
11"glinting"
12"flicker"
13"silence"
14"flicked"
15"tension"
16"vibrated"
17"glistening"
18"echoed"
19"flickered"
20"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences160
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences160
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences180
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans24
markdownWords38
totalWords1799
ratio0.021
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"him"
2"The Raven’s Nest"
3"Too easy."
4"forty-one, Quinn, not twenty-one"
5"Christ."
6"Stalls."
7"secrets"
8"“Quinn, listen to me—”"
9"Herrera"
10"Irony, that."
11"raw"
12"wrong"
13"people"
14"detective"
15"hunting ground"
16"clicked"
17"moved"
18"fingers"
19"the thing"
20"now"
21"thing"
22"them"
23"is"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1578
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
London1
Raven2
Harlow13
Quinn2
Greek1
Street1
Morris3
Whitaker1
Wooden1
Veil1
Market1
Soho1
Tomás1
Herrera11
Christopher2
Seville1
Saint2
Three2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
4"Market"
5"Tomás"
6"Herrera"
7"Christopher"
8"Saint"
9"Three"
places
0"London"
1"Greek"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"Seville"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences99
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like fear"
88.83% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.112
wordCount1799
matches
0"Not the dark of a closed shop or a shadowed corner, but the absolute, suffocating dark of a throat waiting to swallo"
1"Not the kind that sold fruit and secondhand jumpers, but the kind"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences180
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean31.02
std22.22
cv0.716
sampleLengths
0102
174
22
359
438
558
62
749
816
91
1037
112
1269
1378
141
1541
1648
171
1866
1948
2034
2133
223
2312
2457
2547
2625
2714
2812
2938
309
3125
3215
3342
349
3543
364
3733
3851
3922
4015
4155
427
4328
4431
4524
4648
4738
4811
4926
96.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences160
matches
0"was gone"
1"was bent"
2"get erased"
3"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs275
matches
0"was standing"
1"were dying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences180
ratio0.117
matches
0"The rain came down in sheets, turning London’s neon glow into a smear of bleeding colors—crimson, amber, the sickly green of *The Raven’s Nest*’s sign flickering above the alley like a dying pulse."
1"What mattered was the figure ahead—lean, quick, a dark jacket flapping like broken wings as he ducked around the corner of Greek Street."
2"Her watch—leather worn smooth from years of service—glinted under a flickering streetlamp as she checked the time."
3"The suspect—tall, broad-shouldered, moving with the easy confidence of someone who knew these streets better than she did—had a twenty-meter lead."
4"A shout rose behind her—uniforms, late to the party as always."
5"Long enough for the green neon of *The Raven’s Nest* to catch the sharp angle of his jaw, the glint of something metallic at his throat—a chain, maybe."
6"Then—nothing."
7"The muscles in her arms trembled—*forty-one, Quinn, not twenty-one*—but the grate shrieked and gave way, tearing free with a sound like a dying animal."
8"The stink rising from below was worse than the alley—damp earth, something chemical, and beneath it all, the coppery reek of old blood."
9"Concrete pillars rose like the ribs of some buried beast, and between them—"
10"She’d heard the whispers, of course—every cop who’d spent more than five minutes in Soho had."
11"But Morris’s face floated behind her eyes—the way he’d looked that last night, pale under the flickering fluorescents of the station, his usual smirk replaced by something like fear."
12"The suspect—*Herrera*, the file had called him, Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, suspected clique affiliate—turned slowly, as if he’d been expecting her."
13"Olive skin, dark curls damp with rain, a scar running the length of his left forearm—defensive wound, if she had to guess."
14"A flicker of something crossed his face—amusement, maybe."
15"The stench of the market—damp, metallic, *wrong*—filled her lungs."
16"A sound cut through the tension—a wet, clicking noise, like bones knocking together."
17"The thing—*the thing*—hissed, its mouth splitting wider than a human’s should, rows of needle teeth glistening."
18"The market erupted into chaos—shouts, screams, the wet, tearing sounds of things that weren’t human giving chase."
19"“Bullshit.” She holstered her weapon—what good was it now?—and wiped rain and sweat from her brow."
20"A sound echoed down the tunnel—a wet, dragging noise, like something heavy being pulled across stone."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1604
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic, suspected clique"
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.035536159600997506
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.004364089775561097
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences180
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences180
mean9.99
std7.23
cv0.723
sampleLengths
033
126
29
311
423
521
617
717
82
915
102
112
127
1321
142
152
1627
1711
183
192
2019
213
224
234
2428
252
2620
272
2817
2915
3012
315
322
3314
341
3521
362
372
3812
392
4011
4112
4211
434
447
4524
465
4724
488
4918
51.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3611111111111111
totalSentences180
uniqueOpeners65
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences129
matches
0"Just for a second."
1"Then he was gone again,"
2"Just the echo of footsteps"
3"Just a drain grate, its"
4"Instead, he yanked her closer,"
ratio0.039
92.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences129
matches
0"She skidded on wet cobblestones,"
1"Her watch—leather worn smooth from"
2"She pushed off the wall,"
3"She didn’t turn."
4"She drew her sidearm, the"
5"She skidded to a halt"
6"She holstered her weapon and"
7"They groaned but held."
8"She gritted her teeth and"
9"She reached for her torch,"
10"She swung her legs over"
11"She swept the beam left,"
12"She’d heard the whispers, of"
13"He was bent over a"
14"Her pulse hammered in her"
15"She should call it in."
16"His hands were empty."
17"he said, voice low, accented"
18"She didn’t draw her weapon."
19"She kept her voice steady,"
ratio0.318
56.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences129
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t break"
2"The cold seeped in, but"
3"She skidded on wet cobblestones,"
4"The scent of grease and"
5"Her watch—leather worn smooth from"
6"The city was a graveyard"
7"She pushed off the wall,"
8"The suspect—tall, broad-shouldered, moving with"
9"A shout rose behind her—uniforms,"
10"She didn’t turn."
11"The radio at her hip"
12"This was hers."
13"The suspect glanced back."
14"The alley twisted, a serpent’s"
15"The rain drummed against the"
16"She drew her sidearm, the"
17"She skidded to a halt"
18"Harlow crouched, rain dripping from"
19"The grate was old, the"
ratio0.806
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
ratio0
48.32% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The rain came down in sheets, turning London’s neon glow into a smear of bleeding colors—crimson, amber, the sickly green of *The Raven’s Nest*’s sign flickerin…"
1"The suspect—tall, broad-shouldered, moving with the easy confidence of someone who knew these streets better than she did—had a twenty-meter lead."
2"Not when she’d spent eighteen months tracing the edges of something rotten in this city, something that stank of the same wrongness that had swallowed Morris wh…"
3"The rain drummed against the metal, a discordant rhythm that set her teeth on edge."
4"The suspect—*Herrera*, the file had called him, Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, suspected clique affiliate—turned slowly, as if he’d been expecting her."
5"The thing that had been the wax-faced man was no longer a man at all."
6"Its limbs had elongated, joints bending the wrong way, its skin sloughing off in thick, gelatinous strips."
7"It *clicked* again, a sound that vibrated in Harlow’s teeth, and then it *moved*, scuttling toward them on too many legs, too many *fingers*."
8"The thing—*the thing*—hissed, its mouth splitting wider than a human’s should, rows of needle teeth glistening."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, voice low, accented"
1"She kept, but her fingers twitched at her sides"
2"other hand came up, fingers brushing the Saint Christopher medallion"
3"she demanded, her voice raw"
66.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she snarled (snarl)"
1"he hissed (hiss)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.167
80.9143%