Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPP9B1E4NP7T008HSY44E7

Run Details

Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.006044
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning London’s neon glow into a smear of watercolors against the slick pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t break stride as she rounded the corner onto Old Compton Street, her breath steady despite the burn in her lungs. The suspect—a wiry man in a black bomber jacket—had a twenty-yard lead, his boots splashing through puddles that sent up arcs of dirty water. He glanced back once, his face half-lit by the flicker of a dying streetlamp, and Harlow caught the glint of something metallic in his hand. A knife? A syringe? She didn’t intend to find out. Her leather watch strap dug into her wrist as she tightened her grip on the Glock at her side. *Not yet.* Too many civilians, even at this hour. The bars were still spilling drunks onto the pavement, their laughter too loud, their movements too slow. She wove between them, her sharp jaw set, salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her skull. The rain had soaked through her coat an hour ago, the weight of it dragging at her shoulders like a second skin. The man ducked left, into the narrow alley between a boarded-up sex shop and a halal butcher. Harlow followed, her pulse hammering in her throat. The alley stank of rotting meat and stale urine, the walls slick with moss and something darker. Her boots skidded on a patch of grease, but she caught herself against the brick, fingers scraping mortar. Ahead, the man’s silhouette hesitated at a rusted fire escape, then dropped into the shadows below. She reached the ladder just as he hit the ground. The metal groaned under her weight, the rungs slick. She descended fast, landing in a crouch, gun raised. The alley opened into a dead-end courtyard, the bricks glistening under the sickly yellow glow of a single bulb. No exit. Nowhere to run. Except the man was gone. Harlow exhaled through her nose, scanning the shadows. A dumpster, its lid askew. A stack of wooden pallets. And—there—a flicker of movement near the far wall. She advanced, gun steady, her military precision honed by eighteen years of chasing men who thought they were smarter than her. Then she saw it: a manhole cover, slightly ajar, the iron rim beaded with rain. Fresh scratches marred the metal, like someone had pried it open in a hurry. *Shit.* She holstered her weapon and crouched, fingers hooking under the lip. The stench rising from below was thick—sewage, damp earth, something metallic and old. The kind of smell that clung to the back of your throat. She pulled the cover aside with a grating scrape and peered into the dark. A ladder descended into blackness, the rungs slick with condensation. Harlow hesitated. Protocol said call it in. Wait for backup. But protocol hadn’t done jack three years ago when DS Morris vanished mid-chase, leaving behind nothing but a pool of blackened blood and a case file stamped *unsolved*. Protocol didn’t explain the things she’d seen since—the way suspects sometimes moved too fast, or the way wounds that should’ve been fatal healed overnight. The Met had no jurisdiction for the kind of things that lurked in the dark. She swung her legs over the edge and descended. The ladder dumped her into a tunnel barely tall enough to stand in, the walls lined with ancient brick, the air thick with the hum of distant machinery. A trickle of water ran down the center of the floor, disappearing into a grate. She pulled her torch from her coat, the beam cutting through the gloom. The tunnel split—left into darkness, right into a faint, pulsating glow. Harlow went right. The glow intensified, a sickly green light bleeding through the cracks of a corroded door ahead. Voices murmured on the other side, low and rhythmic, like a chant. She pressed her ear to the metal. Not English. Spanish, maybe? A phrase repeated: *“Sangre por paso.”* Blood for passage. Her fingers twitched toward her gun. Instead, she reached for the door handle. It opened before she could turn it. A man stood on the other side, broad-shouldered, olive-skinned, his dark curls damp with sweat. A scar ran the length of his left forearm, pale against his skin. He wore a Saint Christopher medallion on a chain, the silver dull in the greenish light. His warm brown eyes locked onto hers, unblinking. “Lost, *detective*?” His voice was smooth, accented—Seville, if she had to guess. He leaned against the doorframe, blocking her view. “This isn’t a place for cops.” Harlow didn’t flinch. “Tomás Herrera. Former paramedic. Lost his license for treating patients who didn’t officially exist.” She tilted her head. “Or so the file says.” A flicker of something—respect? annoyance?—crossed his face. “You’ve done your homework.” “Where is he?” She jerked her chin toward the tunnel behind her. “The man I was chasing. He came this way.” Tomás exhaled, rubbing his scar absently. “He’s long gone by now. And you’re about three seconds from being *invited* to leave. Permanently.” She sidestepped, trying to see past him. The door opened into a cavernous space, the ceiling lost in shadow, the walls lined with stalls. Lanterns cast flickering light over tables laden with jars of viscous liquids, bundles of herbs, things that might’ve been bones. Figures moved in the gloom—buyers, sellers, things that weren’t quite human. The air smelled of burnt copper and something sweet, like rotting fruit. *The Veil Market.* She’d heard the rumors. A black market for the supernatural, hidden beneath the city, moving with the full moon. Cops who asked too many questions ended up floating in the Thames. Harlow’s fingers curled into her palms. “I’m not here for the market.” “No?” Tomás folded his arms. “Then you’re either very brave or very stupid.” “Both.” She met his gaze. “I want the man in the bomber jacket. He’s connected to a case.” “A lot of men wear bomber jackets, *detective*.” “This one’s got a tattoo on his neck. A raven’s wing.” She watched his face carefully. “He’s working with Silas.” Tomás went very still. The name hung between them, heavy. Silas ran *The Raven’s Nest*, the bar that served as a neutral ground for the clique—the group of supernaturals and their human allies that Harlow had been chasing for months. The group she was convinced had something to do with Morris’s disappearance. “Silas’s people don’t take kindly to cops snooping around,” Tomás said finally. “Then they shouldn’t leave trails.” She stepped forward, forcing him to either move or shove her back. He didn’t shove her. “I’m not asking permission. I’m telling you how this goes. You point me in the right direction, or I start asking every stall in this hellhole where your boss hides his dirty laundry.” Tomás’s jaw tightened. For a second, she thought he’d call her bluff. Then he sighed, stepping aside. “You’ve got a death wish, you know that?” “Just doing my job.” He muttered something in Spanish that sounded like a prayer and a curse rolled into one. Then he jerked his chin toward the far end of the market. “Third stall on the left. Red awning. Ask for Marisol. Tell her Tommy sent you.” Harlow didn’t thank him. She moved into the market, her boots silent on the damp stone. The stalls loomed on either side, their wares strange and unsettling—a row of glass eyes that seemed to follow her, a cage of something furred and many-limbed that hissed as she passed. A woman with skin like polished mahogany offered her a vial of black liquid. “For seeing what shouldn’t be seen,” she murmured. Harlow ignored her. The red awning was easy to spot, the fabric stained and frayed. Behind the table, a woman with silver-streaked hair and a face like a blade looked up as Harlow approached. Her eyes were entirely black. “Marisol,” Harlow said. “Tommy sent me.” The woman’s lips curled. “Tomás has a soft spot for lost causes.” She leaned forward, her fingers steepled. “You’re the cop.” Not a question. Harlow didn’t deny it. “I’m looking for a man. Raven’s wing tattoo. Came through here ten minutes ago.” Marisol’s gaze flicked to the left. Harlow followed it—to a narrow passage between the stalls, hung with beads that clicked softly in the damp air. “He went that way,” Marisol said. “But he didn’t go alone.” Harlow reached for her gun. Marisol’s hand shot out, gripping her wrist. Her skin was cold, too smooth, like polished stone. “You pull that in here, *detective*, and you won’t leave in one piece.” Harlow yanked free. “Noted.” She pushed through the beads, the plastic cool against her skin. The passage opened into another tunnel, this one lit by flickering torches. The air was thicker here, the scent of copper stronger. Blood magic. She’d read about it in Morris’s notes—the kind of thing that left stains on the soul. A shadow moved at the far end. She broke into a run. The tunnel sloped downward, the walls closing in. The torches sputtered out behind her, plunging her into darkness. She slowed, her breath loud in her ears. Then—light ahead. A door, slightly ajar, golden light spilling onto the stone. Harlow pressed her back to the wall, peering through the crack. The room beyond was circular, the ceiling domed, the walls lined with shelves of books and jars. A pentagram was carved into the floor, the grooves filled with something dark and glistening. In the center stood the man in the bomber jacket, his back to her. Across from him, a figure in a tailored suit, his face obscured by shadow. Silas. Harlow’s pulse spiked. She’d never seen him in person, only grainy CCTV stills and sketches from informants. But she knew his voice—the cultured purr that had taunted her over anonymous calls for months. “You were followed,” Silas said. The man in the bomber jacket stiffened. “No. I lost him.” “Did you?” Silas stepped forward, the light catching the silver cufflinks at his wrists. “Because if you did, then who is *she*?” Harlow’s blood turned to ice. Silas’s gaze locked onto the door. onto *her*. She didn’t wait. She kicked it open, gun drawn. “Police! Hands where I can see them!” The man in the bomber jacket lunged for a knife on the table. Harlow fired. The shot echoed, deafening in the confined space. The man screamed, clutching his shoulder as he hit the ground. Silas didn’t move. He simply stood there, watching her, his face still half-hidden. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his voice like honeyed gravel. “I was wondering when you’d pay me a visit.” Harlow kept the gun trained on him. “You’re under arrest.” Silas chuckled, low and dark. “For what, exactly?” “Conspiracy. Obstruction. Take your pick.” He tilted his head, the light finally catching his face. His eyes were the color of old gold, his smile too knowing. “You have no jurisdiction here, *detective*.” She didn’t lower the gun. “Try me.” Behind her, the beads rattled. Tomás’s voice cut through the tension. “Harlow.” She didn’t take her eyes off Silas. “Stay back.” “You don’t understand what you’re walking into,” Tomás said, closer now. Silas spread his hands. “She understands perfectly. Don’t you, Detective? You’ve been chasing ghosts for years. Literally.” He stepped forward. “Ask me about Morris.” Harlow’s finger tightened on the trigger. Silas smiled. “Or don’t. But you’ll never find him on your own.” The air between them crackled, charged. Harlow’s mind raced. She could pull the trigger. She could drag Silas in, force answers out of him. But something in his eyes told her bullets wouldn’t stop him. And if she was wrong—if this was just a man, just a criminal—she’d burn her career to the ground. Tomás’s hand closed around her arm. “We need to go. *Now.*” She hesitated. One second. Two. Then she holstered her gun. Silas’s smile widened. “Smart girl.” Harlow let Tomás pull her back toward the beads, the passage, the market. The last thing she saw before the darkness swallowed her was Silas, still standing in the center of the pentagram, his golden eyes gleaming. “Next time, Detective,” he called after her, “bring a bone token. The entry fee’s gone up.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Tomás said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.352
leniency0.704
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.037
80.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2061
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count3
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"carefully"
3"softly"
4"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2061
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"flicker"
count3
1
word"glint"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"glistening"
count2
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"gloom"
count2
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"loomed"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
12
word"charged"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"the last thing"
count1
15
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"glint"
2"weight"
3"pulse"
4"glistening"
5"scanning"
6"gloom"
7"rhythmic"
8"loomed"
9"flicked"
10"echoed"
11"tension"
12"charged"
13"raced"
14"the last thing"
15"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences180
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences180
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences215
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords21
totalWords2031
ratio0.01
matches
0"Not yet."
1"Shit."
2"unsolved"
3"“Sangre por paso.”"
4"detective"
5"invited"
6"The Veil Market."
7"detective"
8"The Raven’s Nest"
9"detective"
10"she"
11"her"
12"detective"
13"Now."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount1675
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.49
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
London1
Harlow25
Quinn1
Old1
Compton1
Street1
Glock1
Morris3
Met1
English1
Blood2
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville1
Tomás9
Veil1
Thames1
Raven1
Spanish2
Silas13
Marisol3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Met"
4"Blood"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
8"Veil"
9"Raven"
10"Silas"
11"Marisol"
places
0"London"
1"Old"
2"Compton"
3"Street"
4"Seville"
5"Thames"
6"Spanish"
globalScore0.754
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite human"
1"sounded like a prayer and a curse rolled i"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2031
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences215
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean26.04
std23
cv0.883
sampleLengths
0102
181
276
352
45
547
629
71
860
977
109
1167
123
1348
1413
157
1652
1726
1826
1911
2021
2122
2267
233
2431
2512
2613
2718
288
2920
3052
3112
3254
3325
344
3543
3673
3736
386
3921
4021
4136
425
4329
444
4551
4612
4738
4811
4960
99.42% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences180
matches
0"was gone"
1"was convinced"
2"was carved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs299
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences215
ratio0.074
matches
0"The suspect—a wiry man in a black bomber jacket—had a twenty-yard lead, his boots splashing through puddles that sent up arcs of dirty water."
1"And—there—a flicker of movement near the far wall."
2"The stench rising from below was thick—sewage, damp earth, something metallic and old."
3"Protocol didn’t explain the things she’d seen since—the way suspects sometimes moved too fast, or the way wounds that should’ve been fatal healed overnight."
4"The tunnel split—left into darkness, right into a faint, pulsating glow."
5"“Lost, *detective*?” His voice was smooth, accented—Seville, if she had to guess."
6"A flicker of something—respect?"
7"annoyance?—crossed his face."
8"Figures moved in the gloom—buyers, sellers, things that weren’t quite human."
9"Silas ran *The Raven’s Nest*, the bar that served as a neutral ground for the clique—the group of supernaturals and their human allies that Harlow had been chasing for months."
10"The stalls loomed on either side, their wares strange and unsettling—a row of glass eyes that seemed to follow her, a cage of something furred and many-limbed that hissed as she passed."
11"Harlow followed it—to a narrow passage between the stalls, hung with beads that clicked softly in the damp air."
12"She’d read about it in Morris’s notes—the kind of thing that left stains on the soul."
13"Then—light ahead."
14"But she knew his voice—the cultured purr that had taunted her over anonymous calls for months."
15"And if she was wrong—if this was just a man, just a criminal—she’d burn her career to the ground."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1705
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.026979472140762465
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.007624633431085044
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences215
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences215
mean9.45
std6.44
cv0.681
sampleLengths
019
124
224
325
42
52
66
719
89
917
1014
1122
1217
138
1417
1518
1616
1710
189
199
2019
212
223
235
248
255
265
278
2821
2915
3014
311
3211
3313
3412
3514
3610
372
385
393
4028
4124
4215
439
4428
4515
4613
4711
483
4916
44.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.27906976744186046
totalSentences215
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences160
matches
0"Nowhere to run."
1"Then she saw it: a"
2"Instead, she reached for the"
3"Then he sighed, stepping aside."
4"Then he jerked his chin"
5"Then she holstered her gun."
ratio0.038
97.50% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences160
matches
0"He glanced back once, his"
1"She didn’t intend to find"
2"Her leather watch strap dug"
3"She wove between them, her"
4"Her boots skidded on a"
5"She reached the ladder just"
6"She descended fast, landing in"
7"She advanced, gun steady, her"
8"She holstered her weapon and"
9"She pulled the cover aside"
10"She swung her legs over"
11"She pulled her torch from"
12"She pressed her ear to"
13"Her fingers twitched toward her"
14"It opened before she could"
15"He wore a Saint Christopher"
16"His warm brown eyes locked"
17"His voice was smooth, accented—Seville,"
18"He leaned against the doorframe,"
19"She tilted her head"
ratio0.306
31.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount137
totalSentences160
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn didn’t break"
2"The suspect—a wiry man in"
3"He glanced back once, his"
4"She didn’t intend to find"
5"Her leather watch strap dug"
6"The bars were still spilling"
7"She wove between them, her"
8"The rain had soaked through"
9"The man ducked left, into"
10"Harlow followed, her pulse hammering"
11"The alley stank of rotting"
12"Her boots skidded on a"
13"She reached the ladder just"
14"The metal groaned under her"
15"She descended fast, landing in"
16"The alley opened into a"
17"Harlow exhaled through her nose,"
18"A dumpster, its lid askew."
19"A stack of wooden pallets."
ratio0.856
31.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences160
matches
0"And—there—a flicker of movement near"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She advanced, gun steady, her military precision honed by eighteen years of chasing men who thought they were smarter than her."
1"The kind of smell that clung to the back of your throat."
2"Lanterns cast flickering light over tables laden with jars of viscous liquids, bundles of herbs, things that might’ve been bones."
3"Figures moved in the gloom—buyers, sellers, things that weren’t quite human."
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She leaned, her fingers steepled"
1"Silas stepped, the light catching the silver cufflinks at his wrists"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"A phrase repeated: (repeat)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.074
84.0393%