Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPSMKG11V93RM0C39DQRKV

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Duration:
25.9s
Cost:
$0.004025
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt clicked like a gunshot. Rory stood in the doorway, her fingers still curled around the key she’d just turned, her bright blue eyes wide. The scent of curry from the restaurant below curled into the hallway, thick and spiced, but it did nothing to mask the cologne clinging to the man on her doorstep. Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather, a hint of smoke. Lucien Moreau. His platinum hair was slicked back, just as she remembered, the amber and black of his eyes catching the dim light of the hallway. The ivory-handled cane rested against his thigh, tapping once, twice, against the floorboards. He didn’t smile. He didn’t have to. “Rory,” he said, and the way her name rolled off his tongue—like a secret, like a sin—made her stomach tighten. She didn’t move. “What are you doing here?” “Straight to business. I always admired that about you.” His gaze flicked past her, into the flat. “May I come in?” “No.” A beat of silence. The cane tapped again. “Then I’ll make this quick. I need your help.” Rory exhaled through her nose, sharp and controlled. “I don’t work for you anymore.” “You never worked *for* me.” His lips quirked, just slightly. “We were partners. Once.” “Partners don’t disappear in the middle of the night.” The quirk vanished. Lucien’s expression didn’t change, but something in his eyes darkened. “I had my reasons.” “And I had mine for leaving.” The hallway felt too small, the air too thick. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, wound between Rory’s legs, purring, but she barely felt him. Her pulse hammered in her throat. She should slam the door. She should walk away. But she didn’t. Instead, she stepped back. Lucien’s mouth twitched, just for a second, before he followed her inside. The door clicked shut behind him, the three deadbolts sliding home with a finality that made her chest ache. Eva’s flat was exactly as she’d left it—books stacked on every surface, scrolls unrolled across the coffee table, the faint scent of old paper and candle wax. Lucien took it in with a single sweep of his gaze, his fingers tightening around the cane. “Still researching the Veil?” “Still pretending you don’t care?” He turned to her, slow, deliberate. “I care about the things that matter.” “And I don’t?” “That’s not what I said.” “It’s what you meant.” Lucien sighed, a sound that was almost a growl. He set the cane against the arm of the sofa and shrugged out of his tailored charcoal coat, draping it over the back. The movement was fluid, controlled, but Rory caught the way his shoulders tensed. He was wound tighter than she’d ever seen him. “Eva’s not here,” she said, crossing her arms. “If that’s who you’re looking for.” “I know.” He reached into his breast pocket and pulled out a folded slip of paper. “She left this for you.” Rory didn’t take it. “When?” “Two days ago. She was… in a hurry.” The way he said it—careful, measured—made her stomach drop. “What happened?” Lucien hesitated. Then, with a flick of his wrist, he unfolded the paper and held it out. Rory snatched it from his fingers, her pulse spiking as she recognised Eva’s messy scrawl. *Rory, if you’re reading this, I’m already gone. Don’t trust the usual channels. Lucien knows the way in. Find me before they do.* The paper trembled in her grip. “Gone where?” “Somewhere you can’t follow without me.” She looked up, her vision sharpening. “You’re enjoying this.” “Hardly.” His voice was low, rough. “But I *am* the only one who can get you there.” “And why would you do that?” “Because Eva’s in trouble. And because, despite what you think, I don’t leave my debts unpaid.” Rory’s laugh was sharp, bitter. “Debts? That’s what this is about?” “What else would it be about?” The question hung between them, heavy and loaded. Rory’s fingers curled into fists, the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist burning like a brand. She wanted to scream. She wanted to hit him. She wanted to press her mouth to his and see if he still tasted like danger and dark promises. Instead, she said, “I don’t need your help.” Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips, then back to her eyes. “Liar.” The word was a whisper, a caress, and it sent a shiver down her spine. She stepped back, putting distance between them, but the flat was too small. The air was too thick. His cologne wrapped around her, intoxicating and familiar. “Tell me where she is,” Rory said, her voice steadier than she felt. “Not here.” Lucien reached for his coat. “There’s a place. The Black Stag. Midnight. Come alone, or don’t come at all.” She should refuse. She should tell him to go to hell. But Eva’s note burned in her hand, the ink smudged as if written in haste—or fear. “Midnight,” Rory repeated. Lucien nodded, already turning toward the door. He paused, his hand on the deadbolt. “And Rory?” She didn’t answer. “Don’t be late.” The door clicked shut behind him. Rory stood there, her breath coming too fast, her skin too tight. The flat was silent except for the distant hum of the curry house below and the sound of her own heartbeat. She unfolded Eva’s note again, her fingers tracing the words. *Find me before they do.* Rory exhaled, slow and controlled. She had until midnight.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His lips quirked just [just]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.214
leniency0.429
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.048
94.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount908
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount908
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"stomach"
count2
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"flicked"
2"silence"
3"pulse"
4"measured"
5"trembled"
6"whisper"
7"down her spine"
8"familiar"
9"tracing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords30
totalWords900
ratio0.033
matches
0"for"
1"Rory, if you’re reading this, I’m already gone. Don’t trust the usual channels. Lucien knows the way in. Find me before they do."
2"am"
3"Find me before they do."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
56.07% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount692
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity1.88
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Eva5
Rory13
Lucien10
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0.561
windowScore0.667
94.44% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences45
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"tasted like danger and dark promises"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount900
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs55
mean16.36
std14.65
cv0.895
sampleLengths
06
161
244
320
48
521
61
717
814
914
109
1117
126
1341
144
1531
1648
175
1813
193
205
214
2254
2314
2421
255
268
2711
2832
2923
308
316
329
3317
346
3516
3611
376
3851
398
4012
4141
4213
4321
4427
453
4616
473
483
496
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs133
matches(empty)
10.58% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences108
ratio0.046
matches
0"Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather, a hint of smoke."
1"“Rory,” he said, and the way her name rolled off his tongue—like a secret, like a sin—made her stomach tighten."
2"Eva’s flat was exactly as she’d left it—books stacked on every surface, scrolls unrolled across the coffee table, the faint scent of old paper and candle wax."
3"The way he said it—careful, measured—made her stomach drop."
4"But Eva’s note burned in her hand, the ink smudged as if written in haste—or fear."
90.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount700
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.05142857142857143
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004285714285714286
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean8.33
std5.91
cv0.709
sampleLengths
06
120
230
39
42
524
613
73
84
920
103
115
1217
134
141
154
164
179
188
196
2010
214
229
233
2410
254
266
279
2814
296
305
314
323
334
3412
3519
3627
3717
384
395
406
417
423
435
444
459
4623
4713
489
498
56.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.37962962962962965
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences73
matches
0"Instead, she stepped back."
1"Then, with a flick of"
2"Instead, she said,"
ratio0.041
66.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences73
matches
0"His platinum hair was slicked"
1"He didn’t smile."
2"He didn’t have to."
3"he said, and the way"
4"She didn’t move."
5"His gaze flicked past her,"
6"His lips quirked, just slightly"
7"Her pulse hammered in her"
8"She should slam the door."
9"She should walk away."
10"He turned to her, slow,"
11"He set the cane against"
12"He was wound tighter than"
13"she said, crossing her arms"
14"He reached into his breast"
15"She looked up, her vision"
16"His voice was low, rough"
17"She wanted to scream."
18"She wanted to hit him."
19"She wanted to press her"
ratio0.384
14.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences73
matches
0"The deadbolt clicked like a"
1"Rory stood in the doorway,"
2"The scent of curry from"
3"Something dark and expensive—bergamot, leather,"
4"His platinum hair was slicked"
5"The ivory-handled cane rested against"
6"He didn’t smile."
7"He didn’t have to."
8"he said, and the way"
9"She didn’t move."
10"His gaze flicked past her,"
11"A beat of silence."
12"The cane tapped again."
13"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
14"His lips quirked, just slightly"
15"The quirk vanished."
16"Lucien’s expression didn’t change, but"
17"The hallway felt too small,"
18"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, wound"
19"Her pulse hammered in her"
ratio0.89
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The door clicked shut behind him, the three deadbolts sliding home with a finality that made her chest ache."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory said, her voice steadier than she felt"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.119
leniency0.238
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.048
82.9038%