Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPV4DZTXGS2N5G45TZZWCV

Run Details

Duration:
35.1s
Cost:
$0.005298
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air changed before the trees did. Rory exhaled, her breath curling in the cold like smoke, though the London evening had been mild when they’d slipped into the park. The scent of damp earth and green things gave way to something richer—wild honey and crushed herbs, the faint metallic tang of ozone. She flexed her fingers around the hilt of the Fae blade at her belt, its moonsilver chill seeping through the leather gloves she’d pulled on against the autumn bite. The dagger had been a gift, though *gift* felt too small a word for something that hummed against her hip like a living thing, its weight both foreign and familiar. Beside her, Nyx shifted. One moment they were a ripple of darkness clinging to the trunk of an ancient oak, the next a solid figure—tall, limned in the faintest violet glow of their eyes. Their voice, when they spoke, was the sound of wind through dead leaves. *"This place does not like us."* Rory shot them a look. "You say that like it’s a person." *"It is."* Nyx’s form wavered at the edges, shadows peeling away like silk in a breeze. *"Older than the stones. Older than the Fae who carved them."* Ahead, the standing stones loomed—gnarled oaks petrified into jagged monoliths, their bark blackened as if scorched by some long-ago fire. Moss grew in the crevices, luminescent in the dimming light, pulsing faintly, like a slow, steady heartbeat. Rory reached out, hesitated, then brushed her fingertips against the nearest stone. A shudder ran up her arm, not quite pain, not quite pleasure—more like the prickle of a half-remembered dream. The crescent scar on her wrist, pale against her skin, burned for a single, sharp second. "Well," she muttered, "that’s not ominous at all." Isolde had already passed between the stones. She moved without sound, her silver hair catching the strange, golden light that filtered through the canopy above. The half-Fae didn’t look back, but her voice drifted to them, light as thistledown. *"Hurry, little moths. The grove does not wait for the hesitant."* Rory exchanged a glance with Nyx—if a being made of shadow *could* exchange glances—and stepped forward. The world folded. One moment, she was standing in Richmond Park, the distant hum of London traffic a dull throb in her bones. The next, the air *thickened*, like pushing through a curtain of warm syrup. Her skin tingled, the fine hairs on her arms rising as the Veil—thin here, almost translucent—brushed against her. She could *see* it, if she squinted: a shimmering distortion, like heat rising off asphalt, but shot through with threads of gold and deep, bruise-purple. The Fae blade at her hip grew heavier, colder. The Heartstone pendant tucked beneath her shirt pulsed once, warm as a heartbeat against her sternum. Then she was through. The grove was nothing like the park. The trees here were impossibly tall, their trunks wide as houses, bark etched with symbols that writhed when she tried to focus on them—like words in a language her mind couldn’t quite grasp. The leaves were too green, too *lush*, catching the light in a way that made them seem lit from within. Wildflowers carpeted the ground, blooming in impossible colors: blues so deep they bordered on black, reds like fresh-spilled blood, whites that hurt to look at. The air smelled of rain and something sweetly decaying, like overripe fruit left too long in the sun. And the *light*. The sky—if it *was* a sky—was a swirling tapestry of twilight hues, neither day nor night but something in between. Stars flickered, but they weren’t stars; they were too close, too bright, shifting like fireflies trapped in amber. Rory tilted her head back, dizzy for a moment, as if the grove itself was tilting beneath her. Nyx materialized beside her, their form more solid here, less like smoke and more like polished obsidian. Their violet eyes reflected the grove’s strange glow. *"This place is not entirely of your world,"* they murmured. *"Nor theirs. It is the space between, where the Veil is thin as spider’s silk."* Rory swallowed. "Great. So if I trip, I might fall into Hel?" *"Or the Fae Courts. Or nowhere at all."* Nyx’s voice held something almost like amusement. *"The in-between is hungry."* A rustle of fabric. Isolde stood a few paces ahead, her pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory. The half-Fae’s lips curved, not quite a smile. *"You feel it, don’t you? The weight of the unseen."* She extended a hand, palm up. Resting there was a single flower, petals the color of moonlight, its center a swirl of silver and deep violet. *"The grove offers gifts to those who listen."* Rory eyed the flower. "What’s the catch?" Isolde’s laughter was the sound of wind chimes. *"Clever girl."* She closed her fingers, and the flower was gone—vanished, or perhaps never there at all. *"The catch is that the grove does not give without taking. A memory. A breath. A name."* She turned, her silver hair swaying like a river of liquid metal. *"Come. There is something you must see."* They followed. The deeper they went, the more the grove seemed to *shift* around them. Paths appeared where there had been none, winding between trees that leaned in as if to whisper secrets. Rory’s boots made no sound on the ground—no crunch of leaves, no snap of twigs. She glanced down. No footprints. Of course. Isolde left none either. Only Nyx’s passage marked the earth, and even that was strange: where their shadowy form brushed the flowers, the petals blackened for a heartbeat before springing back to life, brighter than before. A sound cut through the silence. Music. No—not music. *Singing*. A voice, high and clear, wordless but not without meaning. It raised the hairs on Rory’s neck, sent a chill down her spine. The melody twisted through the air, wrapping around her like smoke, sweet and intoxicating. She found herself moving toward it before she realized she’d decided to. Nyx’s hand—cool and insubstantial—closed around her wrist. *"Do not."* Their voice was sharp, urgent. *"Fae song is not for mortal ears."* Rory blinked, the haze of the music lifting like a broken spell. She shook her head, suddenly aware of how dry her mouth was, how her pulse hammered in her throat. "What the hell was that?" *"A trap,"* Nyx said. *"Or a test. The Fae do not distinguish between the two."* Isolde had stopped ahead, her back to them. She stood before a pool of water, its surface so still it might have been glass. The reflection within wasn’t the grove. It wasn’t *anything* Rory recognized. A sky the color of storm clouds, a city of spires and bridges that defied physics, and— Her breath caught. A figure. Tall, crowned in antlers, their eyes two pits of endless dark. They stood at the edge of the pool’s reflection, one hand outstretched, as if beckoning. Then the water rippled, and the image was gone. Rory’s fingers twitched toward the Fae blade. "What was *that*?" Isolde turned, her expression unreadable. *"A warning. Or an invitation."* She knelt, trailing her fingers across the water’s surface. The liquid parted like silk, revealing not her reflection, but a swirl of images: a flash of fire, a scream frozen in time, a pair of hands—*her* hands—clutching a dagger slick with blood. Rory’s stomach twisted. Then the water stilled. Isolde rose. *"The Veil weakens. The solstice approaches, and with it, the hunger of those who wait beyond."* She looked at Rory, her pale eyes knowing. *"You have been marked, Aurora Carter. The pendant. The blade. The scar on your wrist that was not always yours."* She reached out, brushed her thumb over the crescent-shaped mark. A jolt ran through Rory, sharp as static. *"You are a key. And keys are meant to turn locks."* Rory jerked her hand back. "I don’t know what you’re talking about." Isolde’s smile was sad. *"Not yet. But you will."* A gust of wind tore through the grove, sending petals swirling like snow. The trees groaned, their branches twisting as if in pain. The air grew heavier, thick with the scent of iron and something older, something *wild*. Nyx’s form flickered, their edges bleeding into the shadows. *"We are not alone."* Rory didn’t need to ask what they meant. She could feel it—the press of unseen eyes, the weight of something *watching*. Waiting. Isolde’s voice dropped to a whisper. *"Run, little moth. The grove has shown you what it will. Now you must choose: stay and be consumed, or flee and carry the fire with you."* Rory didn’t wait for more. She turned, boots pounding a path that hadn’t been there a heartbeat before. The trees blurred past her, their whispers rising into a chorus of voices, some pleading, some laughing, some screaming. The standing stones loomed ahead, the way out—a tear in the world, a wound that bled golden light. She didn’t look back. Behind her, Isolde’s voice rose in a cry, half song, half curse. Nyx’s shadow stretched long and thin, a thread binding her to the grove. Rory’s lungs burned. Her legs ached. The Fae blade was a brand against her hip, the Heartstone a coal against her chest. She burst through the Veil— —and collapsed onto damp earth, gasping. The park was dark now, the stars overhead cold and distant. The grove was gone. Or she was. Nyx materialized beside her, their form flickering like a dying flame. *"We should not have gone,"* they rasped. *"Some doors should not be opened."* Rory rolled onto her back, staring up at the sky. Her hand found the pendant beneath her shirt. It was warm. Too warm. She thought of the figure in the pool. The hands covered in blood. *You are a key.* And for the first time, she was afraid the lock had already begun to turn.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1674
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sweetly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"sweetly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
19.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1674
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"silk"
count3
5
word"loomed"
count2
6
word"throb"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"etched"
count1
9
word"tapestry"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count2
11
word"whisper"
count2
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"down her spine"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"unreadable"
count1
16
word"stomach"
count1
17
word"could feel"
count1
18
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"weight"
2"familiar"
3"wavered"
4"silk"
5"loomed"
6"throb"
7"pulsed"
8"etched"
9"tapestry"
10"flickered"
11"whisper"
12"silence"
13"down her spine"
14"pulse"
15"unreadable"
16"stomach"
17"could feel"
18"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a chill down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences128
matches
0"was sad"
1"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences128
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans41
markdownWords248
totalWords1649
ratio0.15
matches
0"gift"
1"\"This place does not like us.\""
2"\"It is.\""
3"\"Older than the stones. Older than the Fae who carved them.\""
4"\"Hurry, little moths. The grove does not wait for the hesitant.\""
5"could"
6"thickened"
7"see"
8"lush"
9"light"
10"was"
11"\"This place is not entirely of your world,\""
12"\"Nor theirs. It is the space between, where the Veil is thin as spider’s silk.\""
13"\"Or the Fae Courts. Or nowhere at all.\""
14"\"The in-between is hungry.\""
15"\"You feel it, don’t you? The weight of the unseen.\""
16"\"The grove offers gifts to those who listen.\""
17"\"Clever girl.\""
18"\"The catch is that the grove does not give without taking. A memory. A breath. A name.\""
19"\"Come. There is something you must see.\""
20"shift"
21"Singing"
22"\"Do not.\""
23"\"Fae song is not for mortal ears.\""
24"\"A trap,\""
25"\"Or a test. The Fae do not distinguish between the two.\""
26"anything"
27"that"
28"\"A warning. Or an invitation.\""
29"her"
30"\"The Veil weakens. The solstice approaches, and with it, the hunger of those who wait beyond.\""
31"\"You have been marked, Aurora Carter. The pendant. The blade. The scar on your wrist that was not always yours.\""
32"\"You are a key. And keys are meant to turn locks.\""
33"\"Not yet. But you will.\""
34"wild"
35"\"We are not alone.\""
36"watching"
37"\"Run, little moth. The grove has shown you what it will. Now you must choose: stay and be consumed, or flee and carry the fire with you.\""
38"\"We should not have gone,\""
39"\"Some doors should not be opened.\""
40"You are a key."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1378
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.52
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Fae6
Nyx11
Ahead1
Isolde10
Richmond1
Park1
Veil2
Heartstone2
Rory21
Resting1
persons
0"Fae"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Rory"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore0.738
windowScore0.5
33.72% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"not quite pain, not quite pleasure—more like the prickle of a half-remembered dream"
1"not quite pleasure—more like the prickle of a half-remembered dream"
2"quite grasp"
3"not quite a smile"
4"as if beckoning"
78.71% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.213
wordCount1649
matches
0"neither day nor"
1"not her reflection, but a swirl of images: a flash of fire, a scream frozen in time"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences148
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean32.98
std29.19
cv0.885
sampleLengths
07
1105
253
312
427
584
68
750
816
93
10101
114
127
1396
1459
1550
1612
1719
1869
197
2061
212
2289
236
241
2552
2621
2736
2815
2952
303
3137
3210
3355
3479
3512
369
3751
3822
3933
4055
414
4247
435
4424
4524
4623
4713
484
4915
94.30% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences128
matches
0"being made"
1"was gone"
2"was gone"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs222
matches
0"was standing"
1"was tilting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences148
ratio0.128
matches
0"The scent of damp earth and green things gave way to something richer—wild honey and crushed herbs, the faint metallic tang of ozone."
1"One moment they were a ripple of darkness clinging to the trunk of an ancient oak, the next a solid figure—tall, limned in the faintest violet glow of their eyes."
2"Ahead, the standing stones loomed—gnarled oaks petrified into jagged monoliths, their bark blackened as if scorched by some long-ago fire."
3"A shudder ran up her arm, not quite pain, not quite pleasure—more like the prickle of a half-remembered dream."
4"Rory exchanged a glance with Nyx—if a being made of shadow *could* exchange glances—and stepped forward."
5"Her skin tingled, the fine hairs on her arms rising as the Veil—thin here, almost translucent—brushed against her."
6"The trees here were impossibly tall, their trunks wide as houses, bark etched with symbols that writhed when she tried to focus on them—like words in a language her mind couldn’t quite grasp."
7"The sky—if it *was* a sky—was a swirling tapestry of twilight hues, neither day nor night but something in between."
8"Stars flickered, but they weren’t stars; they were too close, too bright, shifting like fireflies trapped in amber."
9"*\"Clever girl.\"* She closed her fingers, and the flower was gone—vanished, or perhaps never there at all."
10"Rory’s boots made no sound on the ground—no crunch of leaves, no snap of twigs."
11"No—not music."
12"Nyx’s hand—cool and insubstantial—closed around her wrist."
13"A sky the color of storm clouds, a city of spires and bridges that defied physics, and—"
14"The liquid parted like silk, revealing not her reflection, but a swirl of images: a flash of fire, a scream frozen in time, a pair of hands—*her* hands—clutching a dagger slick with blood."
15"She could feel it—the press of unseen eyes, the weight of something *watching*."
16"The standing stones loomed ahead, the way out—a tear in the world, a wound that bled golden light."
17"She burst through the Veil—"
18"—and collapsed onto damp earth, gasping."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1402
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.033523537803138374
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.003566333808844508
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean11.14
std7.67
cv0.689
sampleLengths
07
123
223
329
430
54
630
713
86
95
107
1116
1211
1320
1417
1512
1619
1716
188
197
2018
2114
2211
2316
243
2520
2613
2718
2825
299
3016
314
327
3333
3420
3525
3618
373
3820
3918
4018
4117
428
4310
4415
452
4610
4715
484
494
48.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.31756756756756754
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences113
matches
0"Then she was through."
1"Only Nyx’s passage marked the"
2"Then the water rippled, and"
3"Then the water stilled."
ratio0.035
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences113
matches
0"She flexed her fingers around"
1"Their voice, when they spoke,"
2"She moved without sound, her"
3"Her skin tingled, the fine"
4"She could *see* it, if"
5"Their violet eyes reflected the"
6"She extended a hand, palm"
7"She closed her fingers, and"
8"She turned, her silver hair"
9"She glanced down."
10"It raised the hairs on"
11"She found herself moving toward"
12"Their voice was sharp, urgent"
13"She shook her head, suddenly"
14"She stood before a pool"
15"It wasn’t *anything* Rory recognized."
16"Her breath caught."
17"They stood at the edge"
18"She knelt, trailing her fingers"
19"She looked at Rory, her"
ratio0.265
26.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences113
matches
0"The air changed before the"
1"Rory exhaled, her breath curling"
2"The scent of damp earth"
3"She flexed her fingers around"
4"The dagger had been a"
5"Their voice, when they spoke,"
6"Rory shot them a look."
7"Nyx’s form wavered at the"
8"Moss grew in the crevices,"
9"Rory reached out, hesitated, then"
10"A shudder ran up her"
11"The crescent scar on her"
12"Isolde had already passed between"
13"She moved without sound, her"
14"The half-Fae didn’t look back,"
15"Rory exchanged a glance with"
16"The world folded."
17"The next, the air *thickened*,"
18"Her skin tingled, the fine"
19"She could *see* it, if"
ratio0.867
44.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"—and collapsed onto damp earth,"
ratio0.009
56.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The dagger had been a gift, though *gift* felt too small a word for something that hummed against her hip like a living thing, its weight both foreign and famil…"
1"Ahead, the standing stones loomed—gnarled oaks petrified into jagged monoliths, their bark blackened as if scorched by some long-ago fire."
2"She moved without sound, her silver hair catching the strange, golden light that filtered through the canopy above."
3"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, blooming in impossible colors: blues so deep they bordered on black, reds like fresh-spilled blood, whites that hurt to look at…"
4"Rory tilted her head back, dizzy for a moment, as if the grove itself was tilting beneath her."
5"They stood at the edge of the pool’s reflection, one hand outstretched, as if beckoning."
6"The trees blurred past her, their whispers rising into a chorus of voices, some pleading, some laughing, some screaming."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Nyx’s form wavered, shadows peeling away like silk in a breeze"
1"She closed, and the flower was gone—vanished, or perhaps never there at all"
2"She turned, her silver hair swaying like a river of liquid metal"
3"She looked, her pale eyes knowing"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"they murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.091
leniency0.182
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.121
74.5217%