Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPW6RGZ5ATZDBNW1B05DZM

Run Details

Duration:
49.3s
Cost:
$0.004559
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The standing stones loomed like the ribs of some long-dead giant, their gnarled oak trunks blackened with age and veined with silver moss. Rory adjusted the strap of her messenger bag, the Heartstone Pendant tucked safely inside, its faint warmth pulsing against her sternum like a second heartbeat. The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November. She exhaled, watching her breath curl into mist that didn’t dissipate, but instead drifted upward like smoke caught in an unseen current. Nyx materialized beside her, their form solidifying from the shadows between the stones. The violet glow of their eyes flickered like candlelight in a draft. *"The Veil is thin here,"* they murmured, their voice a whisper that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. *"Can you feel it?"* Rory could. It prickled along her skin, a static charge that made the fine hairs on her arms stand on end. She nodded, then glanced back at the path they’d taken. The trees beyond the stones were already fading, their edges blurring as if viewed through warped glass. *"We’re not in Richmond Park anymore, are we?"* *"Not quite,"* Nyx said, stepping forward. Their shadow stretched long and wrong, pooling at their feet like spilled ink before snapping back into place. *"The Grove remembers those it welcomes. And it has welcomed you before."* Rory didn’t have time to dwell on that. Ahead, the trees parted, revealing a clearing bathed in golden light. She sucked in a breath. The Fae Grove was nothing like the stories. It wasn’t just a circle of mushrooms or a glade of silver trees—it was a living tapestry of impossible beauty. Flowers the size of dinner plates unfurled in hues Rory had no name for, their petals shimmering with dew that never fell. The grass beneath her boots was soft as velvet, springing back with each step as if eager to cradle her weight. Above, the sky wasn’t sky at all, but a vast, shifting canopy of leaves in every shade of green and gold, woven together so tightly that the light filtering through them painted the world in dappled amber. And the sounds—God, the sounds. A melody hummed in the air, not from any instrument Rory could see, but from the Grove itself. It vibrated in her bones, a low, resonant thrum that made her teeth ache. Birds—if they were birds—flitted between the branches, their wings leaving trails of starlight in their wake. Their songs were wordless, but Rory understood them anyway. *Welcome. Stay. Wonder.* Nyx moved ahead of her, their form flickering between solid and shadow as they tested the air. *"Time moves differently here,"* they said, though Rory hadn’t asked. *"An hour could be a minute. A day could be a year. The Grove decides."* Rory swallowed. She’d heard the warnings, of course. But hearing and *seeing* were two different things. She flexed her fingers, the crescent scar on her wrist itching. *"Isolde’s here?"* *"She’s always here,"* Nyx said. *"But she won’t come to us. Not yet."* Rory stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into the earth. The ground wasn’t just soft—it was *alive*, pulsing faintly beneath her soles like a heartbeat. She crouched, pressing her palm to the grass. The moment her skin made contact, images flashed behind her eyes: a woman with silver hair laughing as she danced beneath a waterfall of light; a child with pointed ears weaving flowers into a crown; a man with eyes like polished river stones, his hands stained with ink as he wrote in a book that never ended. She jerked back with a gasp. Nyx was at her side in an instant, their shadow pooling around her like a cloak. *"What did you see?"* *"Memories,"* Rory breathed. *"Not mine."* *"The Grove shows what it wishes,"* Nyx said. *"Be careful what you touch."* Rory stood, brushing the dirt from her knees. The Heartstone Pendant burned against her chest, its warmth spreading through her like a slow sip of whiskey. She reached into her bag and pulled it out, the crimson gem catching the light as it swung from its silver chain. The glow inside it pulsed brighter, as if responding to the Grove’s energy. *"It knows this place,"* Nyx observed, their voice tight. *"Or it knows what we’re here for,"* Rory said. A rustle in the undergrowth made them both turn. Between the trees, something moved—not an animal, not quite a person. A figure, slender and pale, with skin that seemed to shift between bark and flesh. It tilted its head, watching them with eyes like polished obsidian. Rory’s pulse spiked. *"What the hell is that?"* Nyx’s form darkened, their edges bleeding into the shadows. *"A guardian. They won’t harm us unless we threaten the Grove."* The creature—*thing*—stepped forward, its movements fluid, unnatural. It reached out a hand, fingers elongating into vines that curled toward Rory’s wrist. She flinched, but didn’t pull away. The vines brushed her scar, and suddenly she was *falling*, tumbling through a vision: A battlefield. Smoke and fire. A man in tattered robes screaming as his body unraveled into shadow. The Veil tearing like wet parchment. And then—nothing. Just the echo of a name. *Aldric.* She gasped, stumbling back. The guardian recoiled, its form dissolving into mist. Nyx caught her before she could fall. *"Rory?"* She pressed a hand to her temple. *"I saw—"* She cut herself off. The vision was already slipping away, like a dream upon waking. *"I don’t know. Something about the Veil. And you."* Nyx went very still. *"What about me?"* *"You were human once,"* Rory said slowly. *"Aldric."* The name hung between them, heavy as a curse. Nyx’s violet eyes flickered, their form wavering like a candle flame in the wind. For a moment, Rory thought they might deny it. But then they exhaled, their voice barely a whisper. *"Yes."* Before Rory could respond, the air itself seemed to *breathe*. The golden light dimmed, the melody shifting into something slower, deeper. The trees at the edge of the clearing parted, and Isolde stepped forward. She was exactly as Rory remembered—ageless, ethereal, her silver hair cascading down her back like a river of moonlight. But her lavender eyes were sharp, knowing. She wore a dress woven from spider silk and petals, the fabric shifting colors as she moved. And though she walked, her bare feet left no prints in the grass. *"Little thief,"* Isolde said, her voice like wind through reeds. *"You’ve returned."* Rory’s mouth went dry. *"I’m not here to steal."* *"Aren’t you?"* Isolde tilted her head, a smile playing at her lips. *"The Grove remembers your last visit. The way you plucked the nightshade from its roots. The way you lied to its guardians."* Rory’s fingers twitched toward the Fae blade hidden in her boot. *"That was different."* *"Was it?"* Isolde stepped closer, her presence pressing against Rory’s skin like a physical weight. *"You take what isn’t yours. You ask questions you shouldn’t. You walk the line between worlds and pretend you don’t see the cracks."* Rory lifted her chin. *"I’m here because I need answers."* *"And what makes you think I’ll give them?"* *"Because you *want* to,"* Rory said. *"You’re Fae. You can’t lie. And you wouldn’t have let us in if you didn’t have something to say."* Isolde’s smile widened, sharp as a blade. *"Clever girl."* She turned, her dress whispering against the grass. *"Come. The Grove is patient, but even it grows weary of mortals who linger too long."* Rory exchanged a glance with Nyx, who gave a barely perceptible nod. Together, they followed Isolde deeper into the clearing, where the trees grew taller, their branches twisting into arches that seemed to defy gravity. The air hummed with power, thick and electric, raising the fine hairs on Rory’s arms. Isolde led them to a pool of water so still it might have been glass. The surface reflected not the sky, but a swirling void, stars blinking in and out of existence like fireflies. She knelt, dipping her fingers into the water. The ripples spread outward, and the void *shifted*, revealing glimpses of other places—other worlds. *"The Veil weakens,"* Isolde said, her voice distant. *"Not just at the solstice. Everywhere. The rifts grow. The Helbound slip through. And something stirs beneath Dymas, something hungry."* Rory’s stomach twisted. *"What does that have to do with me?"* Isolde’s gaze snapped to hers, sharp as a blade. *"You carry a piece of Dymas in your pocket, little thief. The Heartstone is not just a key—it is a *beacon*. And beacons draw moths to flame."* Rory’s hand flew to the pendant. *"You’re saying it’s calling them? The demons?"* *"I’m saying it is calling *him*,"* Isolde corrected. *"Belphegor. Prince of Gluttony. And he is not the only one who has noticed."* A cold weight settled in Rory’s chest. *"Who else?"* Isolde didn’t answer. Instead, she reached into the folds of her dress and withdrew something small and silver. She held it out—a dagger, its leaf-shaped blade catching the light. The Fae blade. *"Take it,"* she said. *"You’ll need it before the end."* Rory hesitated, then reached out. The moment her fingers closed around the hilt, the metal burned cold against her skin. She hissed, but didn’t let go. The blade hummed, vibrating faintly, as if recognizing her. *"It will cut through the Veil,"* Isolde said. *"Through flesh. Through lies. But be warned—Fae steel has a price. Every wound it inflicts is a debt. And debts must be repaid."* Rory swallowed, tucking the dagger into her belt. *"Noted."* Isolde stood, her form already beginning to fade at the edges. *"The Grove will let you leave. For now. But remember, little thief—you are marked. By the Heartstone. By the blade. By the blood in your veins."* Her lavender eyes gleamed. *"And blood calls to blood."* With that, she was gone, dissolving into the golden light like mist. Rory exhaled, her breath shaky. The Grove seemed to sigh around her, the melody shifting once more, this time into something mournful. The guardian from before reappeared at the edge of the clearing, its obsidian eyes fixed on her. Nyx’s voice was quiet. *"We should go."* Rory nodded, but as she turned to leave, the Heartstone Pendant flared against her chest, its heat searing through her shirt. She gasped, clutching it as the crimson gem pulsed like a heartbeat—once, twice— And then, from the shadows between the trees, a voice whispered her name. *"Aurora."*
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.351
leniency0.702
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.035
85.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1766
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"tightly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"tightly"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
3"very"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
29.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1766
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"flickered"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"tapestry"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"weight"
count3
7
word"vibrated"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count2
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"wavering"
count1
12
word"cascading"
count1
13
word"silk"
count1
14
word"electric"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"beacon"
count1
17
word"moths to flame"
count1
18
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"warmth"
2"flickered"
3"whisper"
4"tapestry"
5"velvet"
6"weight"
7"vibrated"
8"pulsed"
9"pulse"
10"echo"
11"wavering"
12"cascading"
13"silk"
14"electric"
15"stomach"
16"beacon"
17"moths to flame"
18"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
87.49% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences129
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences166
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans65
markdownWords408
totalWords1750
ratio0.233
matches
0"\"The Veil is thin here,\""
1"\"Can you feel it?\""
2"\"We’re not in Richmond Park anymore, are we?\""
3"\"Not quite,\""
4"\"The Grove remembers those it welcomes. And it has welcomed you before.\""
5"Welcome. Stay. Wonder."
6"\"Time moves differently here,\""
7"\"An hour could be a minute. A day could be a year. The Grove decides.\""
8"seeing"
9"\"Isolde’s here?\""
10"\"She’s always here,\""
11"\"But she won’t come to us. Not yet.\""
12"alive"
13"\"What did you see?\""
14"\"Memories,\""
15"\"Not mine.\""
16"\"The Grove shows what it wishes,\""
17"\"Be careful what you touch.\""
18"\"It knows this place,\""
19"\"Or it knows what we’re here for,\""
20"\"What the hell is that?\""
21"\"A guardian. They won’t harm us unless we threaten the Grove.\""
22"thing"
23"falling"
24"Aldric."
25"\"Rory?\""
26"\"I saw—\""
27"\"I don’t know. Something about the Veil. And you.\""
28"\"What about me?\""
29"\"You were human once,\""
30"\"Aldric.\""
31"\"Yes.\""
32"breathe"
33"\"Little thief,\""
34"\"You’ve returned.\""
35"\"I’m not here to steal.\""
36"\"Aren’t you?\""
37"\"The Grove remembers your last visit. The way you plucked the nightshade from its roots. The way you lied to its guardians.\""
38"\"That was different.\""
39"\"Was it?\""
40"\"You take what isn’t yours. You ask questions you shouldn’t. You walk the line between worlds and pretend you don’t see the cracks.\""
41"\"I’m here because I need answers.\""
42"\"And what makes you think I’ll give them?\""
43"\"Because you *want"
44"\"You’re Fae. You can’t lie. And you wouldn’t have let us in if you didn’t have something to say.\""
45"\"Clever girl.\""
46"\"Come. The Grove is patient, but even it grows weary of mortals who linger too long.\""
47"shifted"
48"\"The Veil weakens,\""
49"\"Not just at the solstice. Everywhere. The rifts grow. The Helbound slip through. And something stirs beneath Dymas, something hungry.\""
50"\"What does that have to do with me?\""
51"\"You carry a piece of Dymas in your pocket, little thief. The Heartstone is not just a key—it is a *beacon"
52"\"You’re saying it’s calling them? The demons?\""
53"\"I’m saying it is calling *him"
54"\"Belphegor. Prince of Gluttony. And he is not the only one who has noticed.\""
55"\"Who else?\""
56"\"Take it,\""
57"\"You’ll need it before the end.\""
58"\"It will cut through the Veil,\""
59"\"Through flesh. Through lies. But be warned—Fae steel has a price. Every wound it inflicts is a debt. And debts must be repaid.\""
60"\"Noted.\""
61"\"The Grove will let you leave. For now. But remember, little thief—you are marked. By the Heartstone. By the blade. By the blood in your veins.\""
62"\"And blood calls to blood.\""
63"\"We should go.\""
64"\"Aurora.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions74
wordCount1345
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.38
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Pendant3
November1
Rory32
Fae3
Grove4
God1
Nyx13
Veil1
Isolde13
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Nyx"
3"Veil"
4"Isolde"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore0.31
windowScore0
15.59% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences93
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"whisper that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
1"as if responding to the Grove’s energy"
2"not quite a person"
3"skin that seemed to shift between bark and flesh"
4"as if recognizing her"
85.71% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.143
wordCount1750
matches
0"not from any instrument Rory could see, but from the Grove itself"
1"not the sky, but a swirling void, stars blinking in"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences166
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean28.69
std22.12
cv0.771
sampleLengths
090
150
256
336
424
58
6100
765
842
929
1013
1190
126
1320
145
1513
1661
179
189
1946
208
2120
2241
2332
2412
258
2633
277
288
2942
3034
3156
3212
339
3434
3514
3638
3710
388
3925
4033
4150
4256
4328
4411
4536
4613
4722
489
4932
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs255
matches
0"was *falling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences166
ratio0.078
matches
0"The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November."
1"It wasn’t just a circle of mushrooms or a glade of silver trees—it was a living tapestry of impossible beauty."
2"And the sounds—God, the sounds."
3"Birds—if they were birds—flitted between the branches, their wings leaving trails of starlight in their wake."
4"The ground wasn’t just soft—it was *alive*, pulsing faintly beneath her soles like a heartbeat."
5"The moment her skin made contact, images flashed behind her eyes: a woman with silver hair laughing as she danced beneath a waterfall of light; a child with pointed ears weaving flowers into a crown; a man with eyes like polished river stones, his hands stained with ink as he wrote in a book that never ended."
6"Between the trees, something moved—not an animal, not quite a person."
7"The creature—*thing*—stepped forward, its movements fluid, unnatural."
8"And then—nothing."
9"She was exactly as Rory remembered—ageless, ethereal, her silver hair cascading down her back like a river of moonlight."
10"The ripples spread outward, and the void *shifted*, revealing glimpses of other places—other worlds."
11"She held it out—a dagger, its leaf-shaped blade catching the light."
12"She gasped, clutching it as the crimson gem pulsed like a heartbeat—once, twice—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1358
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.039764359351988215
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007363770250368188
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences166
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences166
mean10.54
std7.57
cv0.718
sampleLengths
023
125
220
322
413
512
621
74
82
919
1010
1117
128
136
1418
1512
168
1711
185
198
2020
2122
2221
2337
245
2518
2614
2716
289
291
301
311
3217
3310
3415
352
366
378
3811
392
405
418
4210
4315
448
4557
466
4716
484
493
48.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3072289156626506
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners51
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Just the echo of a"
1"Instead, she reached into the"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences113
matches
0"She exhaled, watching her breath"
1"they murmured, their voice a"
2"It prickled along her skin,"
3"She nodded, then glanced back"
4"Their shadow stretched long and"
5"She sucked in a breath."
6"It wasn’t just a circle"
7"It vibrated in her bones,"
8"Their songs were wordless, but"
9"they said, though Rory hadn’t"
10"She’d heard the warnings, of"
11"She flexed her fingers, the"
12"She crouched, pressing her palm"
13"She jerked back with a"
14"She reached into her bag"
15"It tilted its head, watching"
16"It reached out a hand,"
17"She flinched, but didn’t pull"
18"She gasped, stumbling back."
19"She pressed a hand to"
ratio0.257
26.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences113
matches
0"The standing stones loomed like"
1"Rory adjusted the strap of"
2"The air here was different—thicker,"
3"She exhaled, watching her breath"
4"Nyx materialized beside her, their"
5"The violet glow of their"
6"they murmured, their voice a"
7"It prickled along her skin,"
8"She nodded, then glanced back"
9"The trees beyond the stones"
10"Nyx said, stepping forward"
11"Their shadow stretched long and"
12"Rory didn’t have time to"
13"She sucked in a breath."
14"The Fae Grove was nothing"
15"It wasn’t just a circle"
16"Flowers the size of dinner"
17"The grass beneath her boots"
18"A melody hummed in the"
19"It vibrated in her bones,"
ratio0.867
44.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"Before Rory could respond, the"
ratio0.009
44.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November."
1"She exhaled, watching her breath curl into mist that didn’t dissipate, but instead drifted upward like smoke caught in an unseen current."
2"It prickled along her skin, a static charge that made the fine hairs on her arms stand on end."
3"The trees beyond the stones were already fading, their edges blurring as if viewed through warped glass."
4"The grass beneath her boots was soft as velvet, springing back with each step as if eager to cradle her weight."
5"It vibrated in her bones, a low, resonant thrum that made her teeth ache."
6"The glow inside it pulsed brighter, as if responding to the Grove’s energy."
7"It reached out a hand, fingers elongating into vines that curled toward Rory’s wrist."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Nyx observed, their voice tight"
1"Isolde stepped, her presence pressing against Rory’s skin like a physical weight"
2"She turned, her dress whispering against the grass"
3"Isolde said, her voice distant"
79.82% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"they murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx observed (observe)"
3"Isolde corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.263
leniency0.526
rawRatio0.267
effectiveRatio0.14
71.0475%