Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXQ0MJ7W0VN075154PCVBV8

Run Details

Model:: Mistral Large 3
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 29.1s
Cost:: $0.003031
Provider:: Mistral

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
82.35%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
85.65%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
23.44%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
0.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
44.93%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
5.07%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.79%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
58.87%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
40.88%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
17.86%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
61.76%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
67.1869%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The standing stones loomed like the ribs of some long-dead giant, their gnarled oak trunks blackened with age and veined with silver moss. Rory adjusted the strap of her messenger bag, the Heartstone Pendant tucked safely inside, its faint warmth pulsing against her sternum like a second heartbeat. The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November. She exhaled, watching her breath curl into mist that didn’t dissipate, but instead drifted upward like smoke caught in an unseen current.

Nyx materialized beside her, their form solidifying from the shadows between the stones. The violet glow of their eyes flickered like candlelight in a draft. *"The Veil is thin here,"* they murmured, their voice a whisper that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. *"Can you feel it?"*

Rory could. It prickled along her skin, a static charge that made the fine hairs on her arms stand on end. She nodded, then glanced back at the path they’d taken. The trees beyond the stones were already fading, their edges blurring as if viewed through warped glass. *"We’re not in Richmond Park anymore, are we?"*

*"Not quite,"* Nyx said, stepping forward. Their shadow stretched long and wrong, pooling at their feet like spilled ink before snapping back into place. *"The Grove remembers those it welcomes. And it has welcomed you before."*

Rory didn’t have time to dwell on that. Ahead, the trees parted, revealing a clearing bathed in golden light. She sucked in a breath.

The Fae Grove was nothing like the stories. It wasn’t just a pretty glade—it was alive. The grass beneath her boots was soft as velvet, shifting subtly underfoot as if breathing. Flowers in impossible hues—deep indigo, molten gold, the pale blue of twilight—bloomed in spirals, their petals unfurling and retracting like time-lapse photography. Above them, the sky was a tapestry of swirling colors, not quite day, not quite dusk, but something in between, as if the sun and moon had agreed to share the sky.

And the trees. Rory had never seen trees like these. Their trunks were silver-barked, their leaves shimmering like polished metal, catching the light and throwing it back in fractured rainbows. Some grew upside down, their roots twisting toward the sky like grasping fingers. Others pulsed faintly, their bark expanding and contracting in slow, rhythmic breaths.

*"It’s beautiful,"* Rory breathed.

*"It’s hungry,"* Nyx corrected, though there was no malice in their tone. *"The Grove feeds on time. And it’s been starving."*

A sound cut through the air—a chime, clear and sweet, like a bell made of glass. Rory turned just as a figure stepped from behind one of the inverted trees.

Isolde.

The Half-Fae seer was exactly as Rory remembered—ageless, ethereal, her silver hair cascading down her back like a waterfall of moonlight. But her lavender eyes were sharp, missing nothing. She wore a dress of woven vines and petals, shifting colors as she moved, as if the fabric itself was alive.

*"You’ve come back,"* Isolde said, her voice like wind through reeds. *"I wondered if you would."*

Rory swallowed. *"I didn’t have much of a choice."*

Isolde smiled, but it wasn’t a kind expression. *"There is always a choice. You simply made the one that led you here."* She tilted her head, studying Nyx. *"And you’ve brought a shadow to my doorstep. How… interesting."*

Nyx didn’t rise to the bait. Instead, they drifted forward, their form flickering between solid and smoke. *"The Veil is weakening. You must have felt it."*

*"I feel many things,"* Isolde said, her gaze never leaving Rory. *"The question is, what do you intend to do about it?"*

Rory’s fingers twitched toward her bag, where the Heartstone Pendant lay hidden. *"I need answers. About this. About Hel. About why someone would want me to have it."*

Isolde’s smile deepened. *"Then you’ve come to the right place."* She turned, her bare feet making no sound against the grass. *"Follow me."*

The deeper they walked into the Grove, the stranger the world became. The air hummed with a low, constant vibration, like the distant thrum of a plucked harp string. Rory’s skin tingled, her pulse quickening. She could *feel* the Grove watching her, tasting her, deciding if she was worthy.

Ahead, the trees parted again, revealing a pool of water so still it looked like a mirror. But it wasn’t reflecting the sky. It was showing something else—flickering images, half-formed, like a film strip caught between frames. Rory saw a city of spires wreathed in amber light. She saw a feast hall where the tables groaned under the weight of impossible delicacies—fruits that bled when cut, meats that still twitched on the plate, wines that swirled with colors not found in nature.

*"Dymas,"* Nyx said softly. *"The realm of Gluttony."*

Rory’s stomach twisted. *"That’s where the pendant is from."*

*"Yes,"* Isolde said. *"And where you will go, if you’re not careful."*

Rory tore her gaze away from the pool. *"What’s that supposed to mean?"*

Isolde didn’t answer. Instead, she reached into the folds of her dress and withdrew something slender and gleaming. The Fae-forged blade. Its leaf-shaped edge caught the light, throwing a cold blue glow across the seer’s face.

*"Take it,"* Isolde said, offering the dagger hilt-first. *"You’ll need it where you’re going."*

Rory hesitated. The metal was ice-cold, even through the leather wrapping of the hilt. When she took it, the blade hummed faintly, as if recognizing her. *"Why are you giving this to me?"*

*"Because the Veil is thinning,"* Isolde said, her voice suddenly grave. *"And when it tears, the things that slip through won’t be kind. You’ve been marked, Aurora Carter. By the pendant. By the realms. By fate."* She stepped closer, her lavender eyes burning into Rory’s. *"The question is—what will you do with it?"*

Rory’s grip tightened on the dagger. The Grove seemed to hold its breath. Even the flowers stilled.

Then, from somewhere deep in the trees, a sound—low, guttural, like something large shifting in its sleep.

Nyx’s form flickered, their violet eyes narrowing. *"We’re not alone."*

Isolde’s smile vanished. *"No,"* she said softly. *"You’re not."*

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

82.35%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Nyx said softly [softly]"
1	"she said softly [softly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.412

leniency

0.824

rawRatio

0.143

effectiveRatio

0.118

85.65%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1045

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"softly"
count	2

adverb	"suddenly"
count	1

highlights

0	"softly"
1	"suddenly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

23.44%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1045

totalAiIsms

found

word	"loomed"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	2

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"velvet"
count	1

word	"tapestry"
count	1

word	"fractured"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"rhythmic"
count	1

word	"cascading"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"gleaming"
count	1

word	"grave"
count	1

highlights

0	"loomed"
1	"warmth"
2	"flickered"
3	"whisper"
4	"velvet"
5	"tapestry"
6	"fractured"
7	"pulsed"
8	"rhythmic"
9	"cascading"
10	"pulse"
11	"weight"
12	"stomach"
13	"gleaming"
14	"grave"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	74
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	94
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	36
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

218

totalWords

1026

ratio

0.212

matches

0	"\"The Veil is thin here,\""
1	"\"Can you feel it?\""
2	"\"We’re not in Richmond Park anymore, are we?\""
3	"\"Not quite,\""
4	"\"The Grove remembers those it welcomes. And it has welcomed you before.\""
5	"\"It’s beautiful,\""
6	"\"It’s hungry,\""
7	"\"The Grove feeds on time. And it’s been starving.\""
8	"\"You’ve come back,\""
9	"\"I wondered if you would.\""
10	"\"I didn’t have much of a choice.\""
11	"\"There is always a choice. You simply made the one that led you here.\""
12	"\"And you’ve brought a shadow to my doorstep. How… interesting.\""
13	"\"The Veil is weakening. You must have felt it.\""
14	"\"I feel many things,\""
15	"\"The question is, what do you intend to do about it?\""
16	"\"I need answers. About this. About Hel. About why someone would want me to have it.\""
17	"\"Then you’ve come to the right place.\""
18	"\"Follow me.\""
19	"feel"
20	"\"Dymas,\""
21	"\"The realm of Gluttony.\""
22	"\"That’s where the pendant is from.\""
23	"\"Yes,\""
24	"\"And where you will go, if you’re not careful.\""
25	"\"What’s that supposed to mean?\""
26	"\"Take it,\""
27	"\"You’ll need it where you’re going.\""
28	"\"Why are you giving this to me?\""
29	"\"Because the Veil is thinning,\""
30	"\"And when it tears, the things that slip through won’t be kind. You’ve been marked, Aurora Carter. By the pendant. By the realms. By fate.\""
31	"\"The question is—what will you do with it?\""
32	"\"We’re not alone.\""
33	"\"No,\""
34	"\"You’re not.\""

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	12
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

44.93%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

809

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

2.1

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

3.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Heartstone	2
Pendant	2
November	1
Rory	17
Fae	3
Grove	4
Nyx	7
Half-Fae	1
Fae-forged	1
Isolde	10

persons

0	"Pendant"
1	"Rory"
2	"Nyx"
3	"Isolde"

places

0	"Fae"
1	"Grove"

globalScore

0.449

windowScore

0.5

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"whisper that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
1	"as if breathing"
2	"not quite day, not quite dusk, but something in between, as if the sun and moon had agreed to share the sky"
3	"not quite dusk, but something in between, as if the sun and moon had agreed to share the sky"
4	"looked like a mirror"
5	"as if recognizing her"

5.07%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.949

wordCount

1026

matches

0	"not quite day, not quite dusk, but something in between, as if the sun"
1	"not quite dusk, but something in between, as if the sun"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	94
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

31.09

std

23.23

0.747

sampleLengths

0	90
1	50
2	56
3	36
4	24
5	85
6	55
7	4
8	21
9	30
10	1
11	50
12	16
13	9
14	38
15	26
16	22
17	28
18	23
19	49
20	82
21	8
22	9
23	12
24	13
25	36
26	14
27	33
28	53
29	17
30	17
31	10
32	9

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	74
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

163

matches

0	"wasn’t reflecting"
1	"was showing"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.085

matches

0	"The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November."
1	"It wasn’t just a pretty glade—it was alive."
2	"Flowers in impossible hues—deep indigo, molten gold, the pale blue of twilight—bloomed in spirals, their petals unfurling and retracting like time-lapse photography."
3	"A sound cut through the air—a chime, clear and sweet, like a bell made of glass."
4	"The Half-Fae seer was exactly as Rory remembered—ageless, ethereal, her silver hair cascading down her back like a waterfall of moonlight."
5	"It was showing something else—flickering images, half-formed, like a film strip caught between frames."
6	"She saw a feast hall where the tables groaned under the weight of impossible delicacies—fruits that bled when cut, meats that still twitched on the plate, wines that swirled with colors not found in nature."
7	"Then, from somewhere deep in the trees, a sound—low, guttural, like something large shifting in its sleep."

94.79%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	827
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	38
adverbRatio	0.045949214026602174
lyAdverbCount	8
lyAdverbRatio	0.009673518742442563

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	94
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

10.91

std

7.21

0.661

sampleLengths

0	23
1	25
2	20
3	22
4	13
5	12
6	21
7	4
8	2
9	19
10	10
11	17
12	8
13	6
14	18
15	12
16	8
17	11
18	5
19	8
20	8
21	15
22	22
23	32
24	3
25	7
26	20
27	13
28	12
29	4
30	12
31	9
32	16
33	14
34	1
35	21
36	8
37	21
38	11
39	5
40	2
41	7
42	8
43	20
44	10
45	6
46	11
47	9
48	11
49	11

58.87%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.3723404255319149
totalSentences	94
uniqueOpeners	35

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead, they drifted forward, their"
1	"Instead, she reached into the"
2	"Even the flowers stilled."
3	"Then, from somewhere deep in"

ratio

0.059

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She exhaled, watching her breath"
1	"they murmured, their voice a"
2	"It prickled along her skin,"
3	"She nodded, then glanced back"
4	"Their shadow stretched long and"
5	"She sucked in a breath."
6	"It wasn’t just a pretty"
7	"Their trunks were silver-barked, their"
8	"She wore a dress of"
9	"She tilted her head, studying"
10	"She turned, her bare feet"
11	"She could feel the Grove"
12	"It was showing something else—flickering"
13	"She saw a feast hall"
14	"Its leaf-shaped edge caught the"
15	"She stepped closer, her lavender"
16	"she said softly"

ratio

0.25

40.88%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The standing stones loomed like"
1	"Rory adjusted the strap of"
2	"The air here was different—thicker,"
3	"She exhaled, watching her breath"
4	"Nyx materialized beside her, their"
5	"The violet glow of their"
6	"they murmured, their voice a"
7	"It prickled along her skin,"
8	"She nodded, then glanced back"
9	"The trees beyond the stones"
10	"Nyx said, stepping forward"
11	"Their shadow stretched long and"
12	"Rory didn’t have time to"
13	"She sucked in a breath."
14	"The Fae Grove was nothing"
15	"It wasn’t just a pretty"
16	"The grass beneath her boots"
17	"Flowers in impossible hues—deep indigo,"
18	"Rory had never seen trees"
19	"Their trunks were silver-barked, their"

ratio

0.838

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	68
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The air here was different—thicker, sweeter, laced with the scent of wildflowers that shouldn’t have been blooming in late November."
1	"She exhaled, watching her breath curl into mist that didn’t dissipate, but instead drifted upward like smoke caught in an unseen current."
2	"It prickled along her skin, a static charge that made the fine hairs on her arms stand on end."
3	"The trees beyond the stones were already fading, their edges blurring as if viewed through warped glass."
4	"The grass beneath her boots was soft as velvet, shifting subtly underfoot as if breathing."
5	"Flowers in impossible hues—deep indigo, molten gold, the pale blue of twilight—bloomed in spirals, their petals unfurling and retracting like time-lapse photogr…"
6	"Their trunks were silver-barked, their leaves shimmering like polished metal, catching the light and throwing it back in fractured rainbows."
7	"Some grew upside down, their roots twisting toward the sky like grasping fingers."
8	"Others pulsed faintly, their bark expanding and contracting in slow, rhythmic breaths."
9	"She wore a dress of woven vines and petals, shifting colors as she moved, as if the fabric itself was alive."
10	"She saw a feast hall where the tables groaned under the weight of impossible delicacies—fruits that bled when cut, meats that still twitched on the plate, wines…"

17.86%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"She turned, her bare feet making no sound against the grass"
1	"Isolde said, her voice suddenly grave"
2	"She stepped, her lavender eyes burning into Rory’s"

61.76%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"they murmured (murmur)"
1	"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2	"Nyx corrected (correct)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.324

leniency

0.647

rawRatio

0.273

effectiveRatio

0.176

67.1869%