Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXQ82KB5C7Z7X2KJHVB0QP6

Run Details

Duration:
34.0s
Cost:
$0.005114
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air smelled wrong the moment they crossed the threshold. Rory exhaled sharply, her breath curling into mist despite the mild London evening they’d left behind. The scent was thick, cloying—like overripe fruit left to ferment in the sun, undercut with something darker, earthier. The standing stones loomed behind them, their gnarled oak surfaces carved with spirals that seemed to shift when she looked too long. She flexed her fingers, the Fae blade’s hilt cold against her palm, its moonsilver edge catching the strange, golden light filtering through the canopy. Nyx didn’t breathe, but they *reacted*. Their shadowy form rippled, stretching taller for a heartbeat before contracting into something more solid, more *human*—or at least, human-adjacent. Their violet eyes flickered like dying embers. *"This place is older than memory,"* they murmured, their voice the sound of wind through dead leaves. *"And it does not like us."* Isolde, already three steps ahead, turned with a smile that didn’t reach her lavender eyes. "Oh, it doesn’t *dislike* you," she said, her silver hair catching the light like strands of liquid mercury. "It simply *remembers*." She gestured to the path beneath their feet—or what passed for a path. The ground was spongy, covered in moss so thick it swallowed the sound of their footsteps. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors: blues that hurt to look at, reds that pulsed like a heartbeat, whites that glowed faintly in the dim. "The Grove has seen many visitors. Few leave unchanged." Rory adjusted the strap of her bag, the Heartstone pendant warm against her sternum. It had been pulsing since they’d stepped between the standing stones, a slow, steady rhythm like a second heartbeat. She didn’t like it. "Changed how?" Isolde’s laugh was a chime, light and hollow. "Would you prefer the answer to be a warning or a promise?" Nyx made a sound that might have been a scoff if they’d had lungs. *"Fae."* Their form flickered at the edges, shadows peeling away like smoke before reforming. "You could just *tell* her." "Where’s the fun in that?" Isolde twirled a finger, and the flowers nearest her bent toward her touch, petals unfurling as if starved for her attention. "Besides, some things must be *felt* to be understood." Rory exhaled through her nose. "Great. So we’re walking into a magical funhouse where the rules are ‘trust the vibes.’" She tightened her grip on the Fae blade. The metal hummed faintly, as if resonating with the air itself. The deeper they went, the more the world *warped*. The trees here weren’t just old—they were *ancient*, their trunks wide as houses, their bark etched with runes that burned with a faint inner light. The branches twisted upward, forming a cathedral ceiling that shifted when Rory wasn’t looking directly at it. Once, she swore she saw a face in the knots of the wood—a woman’s visage, lips parted as if about to speak. When she blinked, it was gone. The air hummed. Not a sound, exactly, but a vibration in her bones, like the deep thrum of a bass note played too low to hear. It set her teeth on edge. Nyx paused, their head tilting. *"Do you hear that?"* Rory listened. At first, there was nothing but the hum, the rustle of leaves that weren’t moving, the distant *drip* of water from somewhere unseen. Then— Music. Faint, so faint she almost missed it. A melody played on instruments she didn’t recognize, their notes sliding together like silk over skin. It was beautiful. It was *wrong*. The tune didn’t follow any scale she knew; it bent and twisted, pulling at something deep in her chest. "Don’t follow it," Nyx said sharply, their voice snapping her out of the daze she hadn’t realized she was falling into. *"That’s not for us."* Isolde, who had been walking ahead with her hands clasped behind her back, glanced over her shoulder. "Oh, but it *is*. Just not yet." She stepped over a root that pulsed faintly, like a vein. "The Grove sings to those who are listening. And you, Aurora Carter, are *very* good at listening." Rory swallowed. The music was still there, a whisper at the edge of her hearing. She forced her attention back to her surroundings. The flowers here were larger, their petals unfolding to reveal centers that looked like eyes—dozens of them, blinking lazily in the golden light. She sidestepped one, and it turned to track her movement. "Okay," she muttered, "this is officially the creepiest nature walk I’ve ever been on." Nyx’s form shivered, their edges bleeding into the shadows cast by the trees. *"You think *this* is creepy?"* They gestured to a cluster of mushrooms growing in a perfect spiral. Each cap was a different size, arranged like steps. *"Wait until you see the heart of it."* Isolde didn’t deny it. Instead, she reached out and plucked a flower Rory hadn’t noticed before—a small, bell-shaped thing with petals like stained glass. She held it out. "Here. A gift." Rory eyed it suspiciously. "What does it do?" "Nothing." Isolde’s smile was serene. "And everything. It’s a *memory*." "Of what?" "*Of this.*" Isolde pressed the flower into Rory’s palm. The moment her fingers closed around the stem, the world *shifted*. She was standing in the Grove again, but it wasn’t the same. The trees were younger, their trunks slender, their leaves a brighter green. The air smelled of rain and ozone, and the sky—visible through the canopy—was a stormy gray, lit by flashes of something that wasn’t lightning. Figures moved between the trees: tall, slender, their skin shimmering like polished metal. Fae. Dozens of them, their laughter ringing like bells. One turned, and Rory’s breath caught— Isolde. But not the Isolde she knew. This one was younger, her silver hair braided with flowers, her lavender eyes bright with something like joy. She was dancing with a Fae male, their hands clasped, their movements fluid and effortless. Around them, others feasted at a long table laden with food that glowed faintly, steam rising in impossible colors. Then the vision *twisted*. The storm above darkened. The Fae froze, their heads snapping up as one. A sound like thunder rolled through the Grove, but it wasn’t thunder—it was a *voice*, deep and resonant, speaking words Rory couldn’t understand. The Fae scattered. Isolde turned, her face pale, her lips moving in a silent scream. The vision dissolved. Rory gasped, stumbling back. The flower in her hand had withered to dust, the petals crumbling between her fingers. Her palm tingled, the ghost of Isolde’s touch lingering like a brand. Isolde was watching her, her expression unreadable. "Now you understand," she said softly. Rory’s throat was dry. "That was you. That was *here*." "A long time ago." Isolde turned away, her silver hair swaying as she moved deeper into the Grove. "Some memories are better left buried." Nyx’s form coiled tighter, their voice a rasp. *"Some memories are *hungry*."* Rory didn’t ask what that meant. She didn’t want to know. The path—if it could be called that—sloped downward, the moss giving way to smooth stone slick with moisture. The air grew heavier, the scent of fermenting fruit stronger, cloying. Rory’s head swam. The Heartstone pulsed faster, its warmth bordering on *hot*. She touched it through her shirt, half-expecting to find it burning her skin. It wasn’t. But it was *alive*. The trees thinned. And then they were there. At the heart of the Grove was a clearing, circular and vast, the ground covered in black sand that shifted like liquid. In the center stood a tree—no, not a tree. A *pillar*. Its trunk was smooth, obsidian-black, its branches spreading wide and upward, each one ending in a point like a blade. Hanging from the branches were *things*. Rory’s stomach twisted. Fruits. Dozens of them, ripe and glistening, their skins in every color imaginable. But they weren’t just fruits. They *moved*. Pulsed. Some had faces—tiny, half-formed things that twisted in silent agony. Others had *hands*, small and delicate, pressing against the inside of their skins as if trying to escape. And at the base of the tree, coiled around its roots like a sleeping cat, was a *shadow*. Not like Nyx. This was something else. Something *older*. It didn’t have a shape, not really—just a shifting, roiling darkness that seemed to *drink* the light around it. Rory’s skin prickled. The Fae blade in her hand grew heavier, its glow brightening to a harsh white. Nyx went utterly still. *"Oh,"* they breathed. *"Oh, no."* Isolde stepped forward, her bare feet sinking slightly into the black sand. "Ah," she said, her voice eerily calm. "I see." Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat. "See *what*?" Isolde didn’t answer. She was looking up, into the branches of the tree. Following her gaze, Rory’s blood turned to ice. One of the fruits was *her*. Not her face. Not exactly. But her *shape*. A small, Rory-sized figure curled inside the translucent skin of a peach-colored fruit, her hands pressed against the membrane, her eyes wide and pleading. Rory’s breath came fast, shallow. The fruit-*Rory* moved her lips. *Help me.* The shadow at the base of the tree *stirred*. Isolde’s voice cut through the rising panic, sharp as a blade. "Run." Rory didn’t need to be told twice.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
37.84% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Nyx said sharply [sharply]"
1"she said softly [softly]"
2"Isolde turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.405
leniency0.811
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.162
74.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1564
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"lazily"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count1
5
adverb"utterly"
count1
6
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"very"
2"lazily"
3"softly"
4"really"
5"utterly"
6"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1564
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count4
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"silk"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"dancing"
count1
9
word"effortless"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count1
12
word"stomach"
count1
13
word"glistening"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"flickered"
2"footsteps"
3"pulsed"
4"etched"
5"silk"
6"whisper"
7"perfect"
8"dancing"
9"effortless"
10"unreadable"
11"warmth"
12"stomach"
13"glistening"
14"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences138
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans43
markdownWords74
totalWords1544
ratio0.048
matches
0"reacted"
1"human"
2"\"This place is older than memory,\""
3"\"And it does not like us.\""
4"dislike"
5"remembers"
6"\"Fae.\""
7"tell"
8"felt"
9"warped"
10"ancient"
11"\"Do you hear that?\""
12"drip"
13"wrong"
14"\"That’s not for us.\""
15"is"
16"very"
17"\"You think *this"
18"\"Wait until you see the heart of it.\""
19"memory"
20"Of this."
21"shifted"
22"twisted"
23"voice"
24"here"
25"\"Some memories are *hungry"
26"hot"
27"alive"
28"pillar"
29"things"
30"moved"
31"hands"
32"shadow"
33"older"
34"drink"
35"\"Oh,\""
36"\"Oh, no.\""
37"what"
38"her"
39"shape"
40"Rory"
41"Help me."
42"stirred"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1357
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London1
Fae7
Isolde16
Heartstone2
Rory23
Music1
Nyx8
Grove4
Rory-sized1
persons
0"Fae"
1"Isolde"
2"Rory"
3"Nyx"
places
0"London"
1"Grove"
globalScore0.653
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"spirals that seemed to shift when she looked too long"
1"as if resonating with the air itself"
2"looked like eyes—dozens of them, blinking"
3"something like joy"
4"as if trying to escape"
5"darkness that seemed to drink* the light around it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.648
wordCount1544
matches
0"Not a sound, exactly, but a vibration in her bones, like the deep thrum of a bass note"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean27.57
std23.85
cv0.865
sampleLengths
010
180
256
398
439
520
633
735
839
979
1032
119
1226
131
1448
1525
1652
1756
1814
1947
2031
218
2210
232
249
2511
2676
271
2858
294
3051
313
3231
3313
3410
3524
3612
3711
3860
393
405
4159
423
4349
4418
4546
469
4721
488
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"was gone"
10.30% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs246
matches
0"wasn’t looking"
1"weren’t moving"
2"was falling"
3"was standing"
4"was dancing"
5"was watching"
6"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences159
ratio0.101
matches
0"The scent was thick, cloying—like overripe fruit left to ferment in the sun, undercut with something darker, earthier."
1"Their shadowy form rippled, stretching taller for a heartbeat before contracting into something more solid, more *human*—or at least, human-adjacent."
2"\"It simply *remembers*.\" She gestured to the path beneath their feet—or what passed for a path."
3"The trees here weren’t just old—they were *ancient*, their trunks wide as houses, their bark etched with runes that burned with a faint inner light."
4"Once, she swore she saw a face in the knots of the wood—a woman’s visage, lips parted as if about to speak."
5"Then—"
6"The tune didn’t follow any scale she knew; it bent and twisted, pulling at something deep in her chest."
7"The flowers here were larger, their petals unfolding to reveal centers that looked like eyes—dozens of them, blinking lazily in the golden light."
8"Instead, she reached out and plucked a flower Rory hadn’t noticed before—a small, bell-shaped thing with petals like stained glass."
9"The air smelled of rain and ozone, and the sky—visible through the canopy—was a stormy gray, lit by flashes of something that wasn’t lightning."
10"One turned, and Rory’s breath caught—"
11"A sound like thunder rolled through the Grove, but it wasn’t thunder—it was a *voice*, deep and resonant, speaking words Rory couldn’t understand."
12"The path—if it could be called that—sloped downward, the moss giving way to smooth stone slick with moisture."
13"In the center stood a tree—no, not a tree."
14"Some had faces—tiny, half-formed things that twisted in silent agony."
15"It didn’t have a shape, not really—just a shifting, roiling darkness that seemed to *drink* the light around it."
76.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1377
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"small, bell-shaped thing"
1"smooth, obsidian-black, its"
2"tiny, half-formed things"
3"small, Rory-sized figure"
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.0392156862745098
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.011619462599854757
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean9.71
std6.92
cv0.713
sampleLengths
010
116
218
322
424
56
620
77
817
96
1015
1118
1216
1316
1424
159
1614
1719
184
192
208
2112
2214
2314
245
2526
269
275
2823
2911
309
3125
3217
3322
346
353
3623
376
385
394
402
4123
421
431
447
4516
463
473
4819
4921
54.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3710691823899371
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners59
81.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences122
matches
0"Once, she swore she saw"
1"Instead, she reached out and"
2"Then the vision *twisted*."
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences122
matches
0"She flexed her fingers, the"
1"Their shadowy form rippled, stretching"
2"Their violet eyes flickered like"
3"they murmured, their voice the"
4"she said, her silver hair"
5"She gestured to the path"
6"It had been pulsing since"
7"She didn’t like it."
8"Their form flickered at the"
9"She tightened her grip on"
10"It set her teeth on"
11"It was beautiful."
12"It was *wrong*."
13"She stepped over a root"
14"She forced her attention back"
15"She sidestepped one, and it"
16"They gestured to a cluster"
17"She held it out."
18"She was standing in the"
19"She was dancing with a"
ratio0.23
50.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences122
matches
0"The air smelled wrong the"
1"Rory exhaled sharply, her breath"
2"The scent was thick, cloying—like"
3"The standing stones loomed behind"
4"She flexed her fingers, the"
5"Nyx didn’t breathe, but they"
6"Their shadowy form rippled, stretching"
7"Their violet eyes flickered like"
8"they murmured, their voice the"
9"Isolde, already three steps ahead,"
10"she said, her silver hair"
11"She gestured to the path"
12"The ground was spongy, covered"
13"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors:"
14"Rory adjusted the strap of"
15"It had been pulsing since"
16"She didn’t like it."
17"Isolde’s laugh was a chime,"
18"Nyx made a sound that"
19"Their form flickered at the"
ratio0.82
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
10.58% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The standing stones loomed behind them, their gnarled oak surfaces carved with spirals that seemed to shift when she looked too long."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible colors: blues that hurt to look at, reds that pulsed like a heartbeat, whites that glowed faintly in the dim."
2"The trees here weren’t just old—they were *ancient*, their trunks wide as houses, their bark etched with runes that burned with a faint inner light."
3"At first, there was nothing but the hum, the rustle of leaves that weren’t moving, the distant *drip* of water from somewhere unseen."
4"Isolde, who had been walking ahead with her hands clasped behind her back, glanced over her shoulder."
5"The flowers here were larger, their petals unfolding to reveal centers that looked like eyes—dozens of them, blinking lazily in the golden light."
6"The air smelled of rain and ozone, and the sky—visible through the canopy—was a stormy gray, lit by flashes of something that wasn’t lightning."
7"Around them, others feasted at a long table laden with food that glowed faintly, steam rising in impossible colors."
8"Some had faces—tiny, half-formed things that twisted in silent agony."
9"Others had *hands*, small and delicate, pressing against the inside of their skins as if trying to escape."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"they murmured, their voice the sound of wind through dead leaves"
1"Their form flickered, shadows peeling away like smoke before reforming"
2"she said, her voice eerily calm"
41.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"they murmured (murmur)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"Isolde pressed (press)"
3"they breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.216
leniency0.432
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.216
68.3907%