Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXQBVF97AQ9XTF1FN1442QX

Run Details

Duration:
1m 27s
Cost:
$0.001174
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the platform of the abandoned Tube station, her boots echoing in the cavernous space. The air was thick with the scent of damp concrete and something else—something metallic and sharp. She adjusted the cuff of her coat, the worn leather of her watch brushing against her fingers. The station was a relic, forgotten by time, yet tonight it pulsed with an eerie energy. Her colleague, Detective Morris—no, not Morris. Morris was gone. She had to stop thinking of him. This was Detective Evans, a young, eager face with a penchant for jumping to conclusions. He stood near the center of the platform, his flashlight cutting through the gloom. "Evening, Quinn," Evans called out, his voice echoing slightly. "Took you long enough." Quinn didn't respond immediately. She took in the scene, her sharp brown eyes scanning every detail. The platform was littered with debris—broken glass, scattered papers, and what looked like remnants of a makeshift market stall. A bone token lay near the edge, its surface smooth and worn. "What have we got?" Quinn asked, her voice steady and measured. Evans gestured to the mess. "Looks like some kind of underground market. Probably a drug deal gone wrong." Quinn crouched down, examining the bone token. It was cold to the touch, and there was something unsettling about it. She had seen similar tokens before, but never in this context. "This isn't a drug deal, Evans. This is something else." She stood up, her military precision evident in her movements. The station was eerily quiet, the only sound the distant drip of water echoing through the tunnels. She walked further into the platform, her eyes taking in every detail. The debris was scattered haphazardly, but there was a pattern to it. The stalls had been set up in a specific arrangement, and the debris was concentrated around certain areas. "Look at this," Quinn said, pointing to a series of symbols etched into the concrete. They were faint, almost imperceptible, but they were there. Protective sigils, designed to ward off something—or someone. Evans frowned. "What are those?" "Sigils," Quinn said. "They're used in occult practices. This wasn't just a market, Evans. This was a gathering place for something supernatural." Evans looked skeptical. "Supernatural? Come on, Quinn. You're not seriously buying into that, are you?" Quinn ignored him, her eyes scanning the symbols. She had seen similar sigils before, in the case files of her former partner. Morris had been obsessed with the supernatural, convinced that there was more to the world than met the eye. Quinn had always dismissed his theories, but now she wasn't so sure. She walked over to a pile of debris, her eyes narrowing as she examined a small brass compass. It was old, the casing tarnished with a patina of verdigris. The face was etched with the same protective sigils, and the needle pointed towards the far wall of the station. "What's that?" Evans asked, peering over her shoulder. Quinn picked up the compass, her fingers brushing against the cold metal. The needle was pointing towards a specific spot on the wall, a spot that was slightly darker than the rest. She walked over to it, her heart pounding in her chest. There was something about this place, something that sent a shiver down her spine. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the wall. It was cold and damp, but there was something else—a faint pulse of energy. She could feel it, a low hum that seemed to resonate through her bones. "Quinn, what are you doing?" Evans asked, his voice laced with concern. Quinn ignored him, her eyes fixed on the wall. There was a faint outline of a door, almost imperceptible, but it was there. She reached out, her fingers tracing the outline. The energy pulsed stronger, and she could feel a slight resistance, as if the door was locked. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to get this door open." Evans looked at her like she had lost her mind. "Quinn, we don't even know what's behind that door. It could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to open it. Whatever is behind that door is connected to this case, and I intend to find out what it is." She turned back to the door, her fingers tracing the outline once more. The energy pulsed stronger, and she could feel the resistance fading. She pushed against the door, her muscles straining. For a moment, nothing happened, and then, with a sudden jolt, the door gave way. A gust of cold air rushed out, and Quinn stumbled back, her eyes widening in shock. The door led to a narrow tunnel, the walls lined with more of the protective sigils. The air was thick with the scent of ozone, and there was a faint glow coming from the end of the tunnel. Quinn took a deep breath, steeling herself for what lay ahead. She stepped into the tunnel, her heart pounding in her chest. The sigils on the walls seemed to pulse with energy, and she could feel the power coursing through her veins. Evans hesitated at the entrance, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, are you sure about this? We don't know what's down there." Quinn turned to him, her eyes blazing with determination. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is down there is connected to this case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the tunnel, her eyes fixed on the faint glow at the end. She took a deep breath and stepped forward, her heart pounding in her chest. The tunnel seemed to stretch on forever, the walls lined with the protective sigils. The air was thick with the scent of ozone, and she could feel the power coursing through her veins. As she neared the end of the tunnel, the glow grew brighter, and she could see a faint outline of a door. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the cold metal. The door was locked, but she could feel the energy pulsing through it. She pushed against the door, her muscles straining. For a moment, nothing happened, and then, with a sudden jolt, the door gave way. A gust of cold air rushed out, and Quinn stumbled back, her eyes widening in shock. The room beyond the door was vast, the walls lined with shelves filled with ancient tomes and artifacts. The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp. Quinn stepped into the room, her eyes scanning the shelves. The tomes were written in languages she didn't recognize, and the artifacts were unlike anything she had ever seen. There was a sense of power in the room, a sense of something ancient and forgotten. She walked over to a shelf, her fingers brushing against the spine of a tome. The leather was worn and cracked, and the pages were yellowed with age. She opened the tome, her eyes scanning the text. It was written in a language she didn't recognize, but she could feel the power coursing through the pages. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to find out what this place is. It's connected to the case, and I intend to find out how." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what we're dealing with here. This could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is in this room is connected to the case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the shelves, her eyes scanning the tomes. She could feel the power coursing through the room, and she knew that she was on the verge of something big. She just had to find the right tome, the right artifact, and she would uncover the truth. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the spine of a tome. The leather was worn and cracked, and the pages were yellowed with age. She opened the tome, her eyes scanning the text. It was written in a language she didn't recognize, but she could feel the power coursing through the pages. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to find out what this place is. It's connected to the case, and I intend to find out how." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what we're dealing with here. This could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is in this room is connected to the case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the shelves, her eyes scanning the tomes. She could feel the power coursing through the room, and she knew that she was on the verge of something big. She just had to find the right tome, the right artifact, and she would uncover the truth. As she reached out to another tome, she heard a faint noise behind her. She turned, her eyes widening in shock. The door to the room was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She turned to Evans, her eyes wide with fear. "Evans, we need to get out of here. Now." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what's happening. We need to stay and find out." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "No, we need to get out of here. Now." She turned back to the door, her heart pounding in her chest. The door was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the cold metal. The door was locked, but she could feel the energy pulsing through it. She pushed against the door, her muscles straining. For a moment, nothing happened, and then, with a sudden jolt, the door gave way. A gust of cold air rushed out, and Quinn stumbled back, her eyes widening in shock. The room beyond the door was vast, the walls lined with shelves filled with ancient tomes and artifacts. The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp. Quinn stepped into the room, her eyes scanning the shelves. The tomes were written in languages she didn't recognize, and the artifacts were unlike anything she had ever seen. There was a sense of power in the room, a sense of something ancient and forgotten. She walked over to a shelf, her fingers brushing against the spine of a tome. The leather was worn and cracked, and the pages were yellowed with age. She opened the tome, her eyes scanning the text. It was written in a language she didn't recognize, but she could feel the power coursing through the pages. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to find out what this place is. It's connected to the case, and I intend to find out how." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what we're dealing with here. This could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is in this room is connected to the case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the shelves, her eyes scanning the tomes. She could feel the power coursing through the room, and she knew that she was on the verge of something big. She just had to find the right tome, the right artifact, and she would uncover the truth. As she reached out to another tome, she heard a faint noise behind her. She turned, her eyes widening in shock. The door to the room was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She turned to Evans, her eyes wide with fear. "Evans, we need to get out of here. Now." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what's happening. We need to stay and find out." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "No, we need to get out of here. Now." She turned back to the door, her heart pounding in her chest. The door was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the cold metal. The door was locked, but she could feel the energy pulsing through it. She pushed against the door, her muscles straining. For a moment, nothing happened, and then, with a sudden jolt, the door gave way. A gust of cold air rushed out, and Quinn stumbled back, her eyes widening in shock. The room beyond the door was vast, the walls lined with shelves filled with ancient tomes and artifacts. The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp. Quinn stepped into the room, her eyes scanning the shelves. The tomes were written in languages she didn't recognize, and the artifacts were unlike anything she had ever seen. There was a sense of power in the room, a sense of something ancient and forgotten. She walked over to a shelf, her fingers brushing against the spine of a tome. The leather was worn and cracked, and the pages were yellowed with age. She opened the tome, her eyes scanning the text. It was written in a language she didn't recognize, but she could feel the power coursing through the pages. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to find out what this place is. It's connected to the case, and I intend to find out how." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what we're dealing with here. This could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is in this room is connected to the case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the shelves, her eyes scanning the tomes. She could feel the power coursing through the room, and she knew that she was on the verge of something big. She just had to find the right tome, the right artifact, and she would uncover the truth. As she reached out to another tome, she heard a faint noise behind her. She turned, her eyes widening in shock. The door to the room was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She turned to Evans, her eyes wide with fear. "Evans, we need to get out of here. Now." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what's happening. We need to stay and find out." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "No, we need to get out of here. Now." She turned back to the door, her heart pounding in her chest. The door was slowly closing, the energy pulsing through the air. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the cold metal. The door was locked, but she could feel the energy pulsing through it. She pushed against the door, her muscles straining. For a moment, nothing happened, and then, with a sudden jolt, the door gave way. A gust of cold air rushed out, and Quinn stumbled back, her eyes widening in shock. The room beyond the door was vast, the walls lined with shelves filled with ancient tomes and artifacts. The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp. Quinn stepped into the room, her eyes scanning the shelves. The tomes were written in languages she didn't recognize, and the artifacts were unlike anything she had ever seen. There was a sense of power in the room, a sense of something ancient and forgotten. She walked over to a shelf, her fingers brushing against the spine of a tome. The leather was worn and cracked, and the pages were yellowed with age. She opened the tome, her eyes scanning the text. It was written in a language she didn't recognize, but she could feel the power coursing through the pages. She turned to Evans, her eyes blazing with determination. "We need to find out what this place is. It's connected to the case, and I intend to find out how." Evans hesitated, his eyes wide with fear. "Quinn, we don't know what we're dealing with here. This could be dangerous." Quinn's jaw set in a sharp line. "That's exactly why we need to find out. Whatever is in this room is connected to the case, and I intend to get to the bottom of it." She turned back to the shelves, her eyes scanning the tomes. She could feel the power coursing through the room, and she knew that she was on the verge of something big. She just had to find the right tome, the right artifact, and she would uncover the truth.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.146
leniency0.293
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2865
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count6
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Evans"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2865
totalAiIsms64
found
0
word"echoing"
count3
1
word"pulsed"
count3
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count16
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"etched"
count2
6
word"pounding"
count6
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count2
9
word"could feel"
count19
10
word"tracing"
count2
11
word"sense of"
count8
highlights
0"echoing"
1"pulsed"
2"gloom"
3"scanning"
4"measured"
5"etched"
6"pounding"
7"down her spine"
8"pulse"
9"could feel"
10"tracing"
11"sense of"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches8
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count7
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
1"sent a shiver down"
38.95% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells19
narrationSentences184
matches
0"g with determination"
1"e with fear"
2"g with determination"
3"g with determination"
4"e with fear"
5"g with determination"
6"e with fear"
7"e with fear"
8"e with fear"
9"g with determination"
10"e with fear"
11"e with fear"
12"e with fear"
13"g with determination"
14"e with fear"
15"e with fear"
16"e with fear"
17"g with determination"
18"e with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences184
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences219
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2856
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount2289
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.31
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn30
Tube1
Detective3
Morris4
Evans26
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Detective"
3"Morris"
4"Evans"
places(empty)
globalScore0.845
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences178
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like remnants of a makeshift marke"
1"hum that seemed to resonate through her bones"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2856
matches(empty)
90.56% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount5
totalSentences219
matches
0"knew that she"
1"knew that she"
2"knew that she"
3"knew that she"
4"knew that she"
92.20% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs77
mean37.09
std17.53
cv0.473
sampleLengths
068
145
213
347
411
518
641
769
832
95
1022
1115
1253
1349
148
1557
1637
1712
1848
1916
2023
2134
2247
2354
2442
2522
2636
2763
2868
2950
3045
3156
3230
3320
3435
3549
3653
3730
3820
3935
4049
4144
429
4320
4416
4569
4650
4745
4856
4930
78.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount14
totalSentences184
matches
0"was gone"
1"was littered"
2"was scattered"
3"been obsessed"
4"was etched"
5"were written"
6"was written"
7"was written"
8"were written"
9"was written"
10"were written"
11"was written"
12"were written"
13"was written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs383
matches
0"was pointing"
25.44% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences219
ratio0.041
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp concrete and something else—something metallic and sharp."
1"Her colleague, Detective Morris—no, not Morris."
2"The platform was littered with debris—broken glass, scattered papers, and what looked like remnants of a makeshift market stall."
3"Protective sigils, designed to ward off something—or someone."
4"It was cold and damp, but there was something else—a faint pulse of energy."
5"The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp."
6"The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp."
7"The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp."
8"The air was thick with the scent of old parchment and something else—something metallic and sharp."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2298
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.022628372497824196
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.005221932114882507
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences219
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
99.05% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences219
mean13.04
std5.19
cv0.398
sampleLengths
019
116
217
316
46
53
67
715
814
99
104
114
1212
1319
1412
1511
165
1713
187
1913
2011
2110
2210
2317
2412
2512
2618
2715
289
298
302
313
323
3319
343
3512
368
3714
3819
3912
4018
4111
4220
438
4412
4520
4611
4714
489
4914
34.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats33
diversityRatio0.1187214611872146
totalSentences219
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences182
matches(empty)
ratio0
52.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount76
totalSentences182
matches
0"She adjusted the cuff of"
1"Her colleague, Detective Morris—no, not"
2"She had to stop thinking"
3"He stood near the center"
4"She took in the scene,"
5"It was cold to the"
6"She had seen similar tokens"
7"She stood up, her military"
8"She walked further into the"
9"They were faint, almost imperceptible,"
10"She had seen similar sigils"
11"She walked over to a"
12"It was old, the casing"
13"She walked over to it,"
14"She reached out, her fingers"
15"It was cold and damp,"
16"She could feel it, a"
17"She reached out, her fingers"
18"She turned to Evans, her"
19"She turned back to the"
ratio0.418
3.96% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount166
totalSentences182
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She adjusted the cuff of"
3"The station was a relic,"
4"Her colleague, Detective Morris—no, not"
5"Morris was gone."
6"She had to stop thinking"
7"This was Detective Evans, a"
8"He stood near the center"
9"Evans called out, his voice"
10"Quinn didn't respond immediately."
11"She took in the scene,"
12"The platform was littered with"
13"A bone token lay near"
14"Quinn asked, her voice steady"
15"Evans gestured to the mess."
16"Quinn crouched down, examining the"
17"It was cold to the"
18"She had seen similar tokens"
19"She stood up, her military"
ratio0.912
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences182
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences124
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The needle was pointing towards a specific spot on the wall, a spot that was slightly darker than the rest."
1"There was something about this place, something that sent a shiver down her spine."
2"The energy pulsed stronger, and she could feel a slight resistance, as if the door was locked."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Evans called out, his voice echoing slightly"
1"Quinn asked, her voice steady and measured"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Evans called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.146
leniency0.293
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.049
68.3108%