Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7JDE7TR4GCJB7PEW979PB

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Duration:
40.0s
Cost:
$0.001702
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn's worn leather watch ticked against her wrist as she descended the rusted metal stairs into the abyss beneath Camden. The air thickened with the stench of damp stone and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground. Her flashlight beam sliced through the gloom, catching graffiti-smeared tiles and the skeletal remains of a platform long abandoned by the Tube. But this wasn't just any forgotten station. The Veil Market had bloomed here last full moon, peddling its forbidden wares to those who knew the right token. Quinn's sharp jaw tightened; she'd palmed a bone key from a jittery informant two nights back. Supernatural black market or not, murder didn't care about realms. Uniformed constables milled at the cordoned-off end of the platform, their faces pale under the harsh portable lights. Forensics techs in white suits buzzed like flies over a sprawled figure amid shattered crates. Quinn's military bearing cut through them as she ducked under the tape, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair unmussed by the descent. Eighteen years on the force had drilled precision into her bones; she scanned the scene with brown eyes that missed nothing. "Eva," she said, spotting the curly redhead crouched near the body. Eva Kowalski pushed her round glasses up her freckled nose, tucking a stray lock behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had clocked years ago, back when the researcher had first crossed her path consulting on "weird cases." "Detective Quinn," Eva replied, voice steady but eyes wide. Her worn leather satchel slumped beside her, books peeking from the flap. "I found him like this an hour ago. Came for research—Veil Market's got leads on rifts. He's Milo, Shade artisan. Crafts these." She nodded at a brass casing glinting in the debris, verdigris-patinaed and etched with sigils that twisted Quinn's gut. A Veil Compass, half-assembled. The needle lay still, but Quinn knew its trick: it pointed to supernatural breaches. Quinn knelt, gloved hands hovering over the corpse. Milo—or what was left—sprawled face-down, gray skin mottled unnaturally, like marble cracked by frost. No blood pool, just faint frost-rimed slits across his throat and chest, precise as scalpel work. Cause of death? Exsanguination, maybe, but the wounds wept a silvery ichor that forensics was scraping into vials. No weapon nearby. Crates of half-finished compasses and vials of glowing sludge lay toppled, but nothing screamed robbery—valuables untouched. "First impression?" Quinn asked, not looking up. Her voice carried the clipped authority of command. Eva hesitated, glancing at the hovering sergeant—a lanky kid named Patel, her ostensible "colleague" tonight, pulled from night shift. "Robbery gone south. Buyer got greedy, slit his throat with one of his own tools. Market's rough; Shades don't play by human rules." Patel nodded eagerly from his notepad. "Agreed, ma'am. No CCTV down here, but witnesses scarpered when we arrived. Footprints lead to the east tunnel, then vanish—probably scarpered through a service door. Toxicology on the ichor pending, but looks like a blade job. Clean, professional." Quinn's watch hand itched; it was 2:17 AM. She rose, boots crunching glass phials, and paced the stall's perimeter. Military precision guided her: observe, catalog, contradict. The frost on Milo's wounds gleamed under her light, unnatural in the clammy air. No spatter pattern—blood should arc if slashed mid-struggle. And those footprints Patel mentioned: scuffed earth trailing east, yes, but ending abruptly at a blank tile wall. No door, no grate. She traced the sigils on the wall—faint, glowing faintly blue. Protective wards? Her partner's death flashed: DS Morris, gutted in an alley with wounds that defied physics, whispers of "portals" in his final report. Dismissed as delusion. Not by her. "Something's off," Quinn muttered, brown eyes narrowing. She crouched again, peering at Milo's left hand—clenched, nails chipped black. Residue flecked his palm: verdigris powder, matching the compass casings. Defensive wound? No. She pried open his fingers gently; inside, a shard of brass needle, snapped clean. The killer took the full compass. But why leave this? Eva shifted, satchel creaking. "Quinn, listen. Milo wasn't human. Shade—shadow-folk, attuned to rifts. Those slits? Not blades. Rift-tears. Something pulled him through a breach mid-fight. Compass was charging; it draws energy from portals. Buyer argues price, Milo activates it, boom—dimensional snag. Ichors from the other side. Explains the frost; rifts chill the veil." Patel snorted softly. "Occult bollocks, Kowalski. We've got prints, struggle signs. Occam's razor: thief stabs, grabs loot, bolts." Quinn ignored him, mind whirring. Eva's theory itched—too neat, too supernatural. But evidence piled against the mundane. She shone her light on the footprints again: size 10, heavy tread, ending at the wall. No smudge of exit, no hidden latch. She pressed the tiles—solid. Back to the body: throat slits formed a perfect arc, three inches apart, edges cauterized like plasma cuts. Human blade? No char. And the air—ozone lingered heaviest here, strongest at the wall. "Patel, bag those footprints in plaster. And the wall—every inch, luminol it." She straightened, turning to Eva. "You said Milo crafts these. How's it work, exactly?" Eva tucked hair behind her ear again, green eyes flicking to her satchel. "Needle spins to nearest rift or portal. Sigils stabilize it—protect from feedback. Milo's stall specializes; he etched the faces himself. I bought one last moon—tracks anomalies for my archives work." Quinn's jaw sharpened. Archives at the British Museum—restricted section. Eva's Oxford polish hid deeper dives into the occult, ties to that clique Quinn had tailed: Aurora Voss and her merry band of rift-chasers. Suspects in half a dozen "vanishings." "Show me yours." Eva rummaged, producing her own Veil Compass—identical brass, patina gleaming. Quinn snatched it, flicking the lid. The needle quivered, then snapped east—toward the blank wall. Ozone spiked; the sigils on the wall pulsed brighter. "See?" Eva pressed. "Rift residue. Thief didn't run; they ported out. Market moves next full moon, but echoes linger." Patel cleared his throat. "Ma'am, with respect—compass could be faulty. Prints are real. We drag the tunnel, find the perp." Quinn held up a hand, silencing him. Deduction crystallized: mundane robbery demanded mess—blood trails, dropped loot, panic. Here, precision ruled. Frost wounds matched rift lore she'd buried after Morris: "cold edges, no exit." Footprints ended because the killer stepped through. But the shard in Milo's hand—Quinn examined it closer under light. Micro-etchings: not protective sigils, but inversions. Disruptors. Milo hadn't summoned the rift; he'd tried to close one. "Wrong," she said flatly. "Not robbery. Not thief-porting." She pocketed the needle shard, mind mapping vectors. Killer approached from stall rear—no prints there, air thickest. Milo grabs disruptor shard to seal breach. Struggle rends him—slits from claws or edges protruding the veil. Killer emerges fully, snatches charged compass, retreats same way. No human boots on exit; the approaching prints were bait, or decoy. Eva frowned. "What then? Shade vendetta?" Quinn's watch ticked 2:23. She leveled her gaze at the researcher. "Staged. Killer knew we'd find this—prints to tunnel, compass half-done to scream 'market hit.' But frost cauterizes; no bleed-out time for portal escape. And this." She tapped the wall sigils, now fading. "Wards intact—no breach. Killer was already here, human height prints. Pulled Milo into a pocket rift, did the work inside, dumped body back. Compass taken to track more—our rifts." Patel's notepad drooped. "Pocket rift? That's..." "Fantasy," Quinn cut in, voice steel. "But evidence isn't. Morris died like this—dumped, wounds cold-sealed. Clique like yours, Kowalski, chase these tears. One of yours closes them sloppy, artisan spots, gets silenced. Compass points to the next." Eva's freckles blanched. "That's a leap. I research, not—" "Save it." Quinn spun to the uniforms. "Seal the east tunnel—no one in or out. Forensics: prioritize ichor spectrography, match to known anomalies. Patel, canvass Market ghosts—anyone see a redhead with a satchel?" Her eyes locked on Eva, probing. Eva met them steadily, but her hand twitched toward her ear. "Quinn, you're chasing shadows. This is Veil business." Quinn's lips thinned. "Shadows bleed silver. And they leave prints that lie." She glanced at Eva's compass, needle steady now. Wrong, it whispered. Something watched from the walls, rift-wind ghosting her neck. The Market held secrets, but Quinn's precision would carve them out—one deduction at a time. The techs murmured as she stepped back, cataloging: no weapon because claws sufficed; no spatter because vacuum-sealed kill; footprints decoy to misdirect from the true entry—a shimmer she'd glimpsed earlier, air warping like heat haze. She'd need UV on the walls, rift-tracers if brass had them. Morris's file burned in her mind—supernatural, unexplained. Not anymore. "Double the guard," she ordered. "This scene's live." The ozone hummed approval, or warning. Quinn didn't flinch. Eighteen years, and the veil was cracking. She'd stitch it shut, starting here. Word count edged past as she circled once more, spotting the miss: Milo's watch—stopped at 1:47, face spiderwebbed. Hers ticked on. Time bent in rifts. Colleague Patel logged it mundane; Eva spun occult. Quinn saw truth: murder across veils, compass the key. The clique's trail ran cold no more.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:14:04.369Z" 2/20/2026, 7:14:04 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said flatly [flatly]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.543
leniency1
rawRatio0.053
effectiveRatio0.053
90.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1547
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"eagerly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"eagerly"
1"gently"
2"softly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1547
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"gloom"
count1
1
word"shattered"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"glinting"
count1
4
word"etched"
count2
5
word"marble"
count1
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"gleaming"
count1
10
word"quivered"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
12
word"echoes"
count1
13
word"crystallized"
count1
14
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"shattered"
2"scanned"
3"glinting"
4"etched"
5"marble"
6"traced"
7"chill"
8"perfect"
9"gleaming"
10"quivered"
11"pulsed"
12"echoes"
13"crystallized"
14"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
70.22% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"observe"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences132
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1490
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Wrong, it whispered."
44.01% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1085
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity2.12
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn23
Camden1
Tube1
Veil3
Market2
Eva16
Kowalski1
Compass2
Patel7
Milo7
Morris3
British1
Museum1
Oxford1
Aurora1
Voss1
Footprints1
Killer2
Wrong1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Eva"
4"Kowalski"
5"Compass"
6"Patel"
7"Milo"
8"Morris"
9"Museum"
10"Footprints"
11"Killer"
places
0"British"
1"Oxford"
globalScore0.44
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.671
wordCount1490
matches
0"not protective sigils, but inversions"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean46.56
std27.13
cv0.583
sampleLengths
0114
175
249
380
475
515
642
744
8110
955
1053
1118
1276
1326
1443
1542
1634
1719
1820
1968
2063
216
2272
236
2437
259
2639
2719
2847
2955
3030
3149
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs230
matches
0"was scraping"
1"was cracking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount16
flaggedSentences35
totalSentences132
ratio0.265
matches
0"The air thickened with the stench of damp stone and something sharper—ozone, like a storm trapped underground."
1"Quinn's sharp jaw tightened; she'd palmed a bone key from a jittery informant two nights back."
2"Eighteen years on the force had drilled precision into her bones; she scanned the scene with brown eyes that missed nothing."
3"Eva Kowalski pushed her round glasses up her freckled nose, tucking a stray lock behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had clocked years ago, back when the researcher had first crossed her path consulting on \"weird cases.\""
4"Milo—or what was left—sprawled face-down, gray skin mottled unnaturally, like marble cracked by frost."
5"Crates of half-finished compasses and vials of glowing sludge lay toppled, but nothing screamed robbery—valuables untouched."
6"Eva hesitated, glancing at the hovering sergeant—a lanky kid named Patel, her ostensible \"colleague\" tonight, pulled from night shift."
7"\"Robbery gone south. Buyer got greedy, slit his throat with one of his own tools. Market's rough; Shades don't play by human rules.\""
8"Quinn's watch hand itched; it was 2:17 AM."
9"No spatter pattern—blood should arc if slashed mid-struggle."
10"She traced the sigils on the wall—faint, glowing faintly blue."
11"She crouched again, peering at Milo's left hand—clenched, nails chipped black."
12"She pried open his fingers gently; inside, a shard of brass needle, snapped clean."
13"\"Quinn, listen. Milo wasn't human. Shade—shadow-folk, attuned to rifts. Those slits? Not blades. Rift-tears. Something pulled him through a breach mid-fight. Compass was charging; it draws energy from portals. Buyer argues price, Milo activates it, boom—dimensional snag. Ichors from the other side. Explains the frost; rifts chill the veil.\""
14"Eva's theory itched—too neat, too supernatural."
15"She pressed the tiles—solid."
16"And the air—ozone lingered heaviest here, strongest at the wall."
17"\"Needle spins to nearest rift or portal. Sigils stabilize it—protect from feedback. Milo's stall specializes; he etched the faces himself. I bought one last moon—tracks anomalies for my archives work.\""
18"Archives at the British Museum—restricted section."
19"Eva rummaged, producing her own Veil Compass—identical brass, patina gleaming."
20"The needle quivered, then snapped east—toward the blank wall."
21"Ozone spiked; the sigils on the wall pulsed brighter."
22"\"Rift residue. Thief didn't run; they ported out. Market moves next full moon, but echoes linger.\""
23"Deduction crystallized: mundane robbery demanded mess—blood trails, dropped loot, panic."
24"But the shard in Milo's hand—Quinn examined it closer under light."
25"Milo hadn't summoned the rift; he'd tried to close one."
26"Killer approached from stall rear—no prints there, air thickest."
27"Struggle rends him—slits from claws or edges protruding the veil."
28"No human boots on exit; the approaching prints were bait, or decoy."
29"\"Staged. Killer knew we'd find this—prints to tunnel, compass half-done to scream 'market hit.' But frost cauterizes; no bleed-out time for portal escape. And this.\" She tapped the wall sigils, now fading."
30"The Market held secrets, but Quinn's precision would carve them out—one deduction at a time."
31"The techs murmured as she stepped back, cataloging: no weapon because claws sufficed; no spatter because vacuum-sealed kill; footprints decoy to misdirect from the true entry—a shimmer she'd glimpsed earlier, air warping like heat haze."
32"Morris's file burned in her mind—supernatural, unexplained."
33"Word count edged past as she circled once more, spotting the miss: Milo's watch—stopped at 1:47, face spiderwebbed."
34"Colleague Patel logged it mundane; Eva spun occult."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1122
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"faint frost-rimed slits"
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.025846702317290554
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.00980392156862745
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences132
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences132
mean11.29
std9.02
cv0.799
sampleLengths
022
117
222
37
420
516
610
718
815
921
1021
1111
1238
139
1412
1541
164
1714
188
1914
2016
213
2215
233
2416
257
268
2719
2823
296
3038
318
3211
337
3414
358
3618
374
3810
392
4022
413
423
437
4411
4510
462
471
4814
496
79.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.49242424242424243
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners65
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences108
matches
0"Her flashlight beam sliced through"
1"she said, spotting the curly"
2"Her worn leather satchel slumped"
3"She nodded at a brass"
4"Her voice carried the clipped"
5"She rose, boots crunching glass"
6"She traced the sigils on"
7"Her partner's death flashed: DS"
8"She crouched again, peering at"
9"She pried open his fingers"
10"She shone her light on"
11"She pressed the tiles—solid."
12"She straightened, turning to Eva"
13"she said flatly"
14"She pocketed the needle shard,"
15"She leveled her gaze at"
16"She tapped the wall sigils,"
17"Her eyes locked on Eva,"
18"She glanced at Eva's compass,"
19"She'd need UV on the"
ratio0.204
71.11% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences108
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's worn leather"
1"The air thickened with the"
2"Her flashlight beam sliced through"
3"The Veil Market had bloomed"
4"Quinn's sharp jaw tightened; she'd"
5"Forensics techs in white suits"
6"Quinn's military bearing cut through"
7"she said, spotting the curly"
8"Eva Kowalski pushed her round"
9"Eva replied, voice steady but"
10"Her worn leather satchel slumped"
11"She nodded at a brass"
12"A Veil Compass, half-assembled."
13"The needle lay still, but"
14"Quinn knelt, gloved hands hovering"
15"Milo—or what was left—sprawled face-down,"
16"Cause of death?"
17"Exsanguination, maybe, but the wounds"
18"Quinn asked, not looking up"
19"Her voice carried the clipped"
ratio0.778
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had drilled precision into her bones; she scanned the scene with brown eyes that missed nothing."
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva replied, voice steady but eyes wide"
1"Quinn asked, not looking up"
64.29% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1"Eva pressed (press)"
2"she ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.171
80.4794%