Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7JPC4QFA1TBZT7KGA59VJ

Run Details

Duration:
32.6s
Cost:
$0.001470
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air bit at Rory’s cheeks as she huddled deeper into her coat. Winter solstice. The Veil thinned. She’d seen the rumors online—folk claiming to hear voices in the wind, to touch something that wasn’t quite there—but never *seen* it. Not until Nyx materialized beside her, a shadow made flesh, their violet eyes glowing like embers in the failing light. “Ready, Carter?” their voice was a whisper, cold as the grave, but there was a thread of something like excitement in the wind. Rory nodded, her free hand brushing the Heartstone pendant at her throat. It pulsed faintly, a slow, warm thrumming, as if it knew what lay ahead. Beside Nyx stood Isolde, her silver hair catching the last of the sunlight, pale lavender eyes sharp as a blade. She’d worn no shoes, Rory noticed, though the ground was damp with dew. No footprints, as the codex had said. “Beyond the stones,” Isolde said, her voice like wind chimes, “the line blurs. Time does not tick as it does for you.” She turned, and for the first time, Rory saw the rift— a shimmer, faint as a heat mirage, just beyond the ring of ancient oaks. The Veil. Nyx stepped forward, their shadowy form dissolving into the gloom before reappearing on the other side. “It’s a breath,” they said, when Rory hesitated. “Like holding your own heartbeat.” Rory took a step. The world shifted beneath her. One moment, she was in the chill of Richmond Park, the next, warm as a bakery oven, the scent of jasmine thick in the air. She blinked. Wildflowers carpeted the ground, blooms in every color— magenta, indigo, gold— and their petals shifted, as if lit from within. A breeze stirred, and the flowers hummed, a sound like distant laughter. “Isolde,” Rory said, turning. The Half-Fae had already moved past the standing stones, her bare feet silent on the moss. “You were right. The stones—” “The oaks,” Isolde corrected, not looking back. “They mark the boundary. The summer lands end where the winter begins, mortal.” Rory followed, Nyx close behind. The ground sloped gently downward, and up ahead, a ribbon of water glinted in the light. Not a river— the water was still, a mirror for the sky, which was the color of burnished amber. No sun, no moon, just that warm glow. She touched a nearby flower, its petals soft as silk. When she pulled her hand away, a drop of nectar remained, glowing like liquid starlight. “Careful,” Nyx said, their form shifting slightly, as if the light discomforted them. “They do not appreciate intrusion.” Rory dropped her hand. A beetle, iridescent green, crawled over her knuckle. It paused, antennae quivering, then flew off. When she looked down, the spot where it had been was now a sprig of tiny white flowers, opening before her eyes. “Magic,” Nyx murmured, their voice softening. “Not the loud kind. The *old* kind. The kind that remembers.” Isolde knelt by the water. Rory leaned over her shoulder. The reflection wasn’t of them— it was of a garden, sprawling and lush, with fountains that shot emerald water into the air, and trees heavy with fruit that glowed like rubies and sapphires. “Is that… your realm?” Rory asked. Isolde shook her head. “A pocket. Between. Earth bends here. Fae linger. Mortals… they forget.” She stood, and her eyes flickered, as if seeing something Rory couldn’t. “You came for a vision, Carter. But visions do not come easy. The Grove tests those who enter.” Rory’s hand went to the pendant. It burned now, a sharp, warm pain. “I know. But Evan—” “—the ex,” Nyx said, cutting her off. Their tone was flat, but there was a flicker of something in their eyes. *Sympathy.* “He’s in Dymas. Gluttony. They say he feasts forever.” Rory’s stomach tightened. Evan had loved food— loved *taking* it, hoarding it, then discarding it when he was sated. Now he was a soul in a realm of excess. She thought of his laugh, the way he’d called her “Rory” like it was a secret. *Softer than I remembered*, a voice in her head said. She pushed it down. “The pendant glows when near Hel,” Isolde said, her gaze fixed on the stone. “See how it pulses? It senses the rifts. Dymas is close. The Veil here is thin enough to slip through.” Nyx shifted, their shadow pooling at their feet. “Did you think I’d let you go alone? The Shades remember the tides of Hel. I can smell the fear in the air— not mortal fear, but the rot of it. Dymas feeds on it.” Rory looked at them, at the flicker of shadow that wasn’t quite solid, and felt a surge of gratitude. She’d met Nyx three months ago, a chance encounter in a London alley when she’d stumbled on a man being dragged into a shadow. He’d saved her, then vanished— only to reappear a week later, waiting outside her flat. “Why me?” she’d asked. “Because you *see*,” he’d said, then left. Now, she thought she understood. She was a liar, she told herself, but she’d learned to read people— to see the lies in their eyes. Maybe Nyx had seen that, too. They moved closer to the water. The flowers along the bank had begun to glow more brightly, their light casting prisms on the stones. Isolde stepped onto a flat boulder in the middle of the pond, and her feet didn’t disturb the water. It rippled, though, as if she’d spoken to it. “Step,” she said, extending a hand. “The surface is kind here.” Rory hesitated. The water looked inviting, but there was something about it— a wrongness, like a mirror that showed a distorted reflection. She glanced at Nyx, who nodded. “Go on,” they said. “I’m right behind you.” She stepped onto the boulder. It was smooth, warm, as if the sun itself had kissed it. The water lapped at her shoes, cold and clear. When she leaned down, she saw not her own reflection, but Evan’snot in the flesh, but as a soul, trapped in the form he’d had when he’d first met her, slim, with dark hair and a smile that had made her knees weak. “No,” she whispered, pulling back. The image vanished, replaced by a field of grain, golden and swaying. Then a kitchen, with a stove, a sink, a table set for two. *Us*, she thought, horrified. She’d been so happy then, she realized. So *stupid*. “Evan,” a voice said. It was his voice, but deeper, warped, like a radio tuned to the wrong station. “You wanted more. Now you have it.” Rory staggered back, her hand flying to the pendant. It burned so fiercely she thought it might break through her skin. The boulder beneath her shifted, and she fell into the water. It wasn’t water. It was warm, thick, like honey. She struggled to breathe, but the liquid filled her lungs, and she felt herself sinking— not into the pond, but into something else. Memories flooded her: Evan slamming doors, calling her names, breaking her favorite mug. “You’re nothing without me,” he’d said. “A waste of space.” “I am not,” she gasped, voice carried away by the tide. The pendant glowed brighter, a beacon in the darkness. Something pulled her upward— Nyx, she realized, their shadowy form wrapping around her, lifting her out of the water. She coughed, gasping for air, and fell into their arms. “You saw,” Isolde said, her voice calm. “The Grove shows what you *need* to see, not what you *want*.” Rory pushed herself up, her eyes stinging. Nyx’s face was close, their violet eyes soft. “It was real,” she said, voice hoarse. “The guilt. The… pain.” “They are lies,” Isolde said. “Fae magic likes to play with what it knows. But the truth is— Evan is a soul. Souls are not so easily broken. They heal. They grow.” She paused, then added, “Sometimes. Depends on the soul.” Rory leaned against a nearby tree, its bark smooth and cool. The pendant had stopped burning, but it still pulsed, a gentle reminder. She looked out at the Grove, at the flowers, the water, the standing stones. It was beautiful, she decided, but also dangerous. It had shown her her fears, her regrets, her worst self. “What now?” Nyx asked, their voice breaking the silence. Isolde closed her eyes, and for a moment, she looked different— older, the lines in her face deeper, as if time had crept up on her. When she opened her eyes, her lavender gaze was sharp. “The rift to Dymas is through the east grove. But beware— Belphegor’s court is a feast of lies. They will show you what you desire most. What you *crave*. Do not reach for it.” Rory frowned. “Why?” “Because desire is a worm,” Isolde said. “It gnaws at the edges. Soon, you will do anything to satisfy it. Even betray yourself.” Nyx’s shadow coiled around their arm, a rare sign of unease. “We’ll be careful,” Rory said. “Together.” Isolde nodded, but her eyes lingered on the water, as if she saw something there— something that made her skin prickle. “Careful is not enough, mortal. You carry a blade in your pocket— the Fae blade. It will cut through the lies, but only if you trust it.” Rory felt the hilt of the dagger at her waist, the cold of the moonsilver seeping through her coat. She’d received it from Isolde three weeks ago, a gift wrapped in silk. “I trust it,” she said, without hesitation. “Good,” Isolde said. “The Grove will test you. Do not fail.” They turned, and Rory noticed for the first time the path leading into the east grove— a narrow trail, bordered by thorned bushes that glowed with bioluminescent sap. The flowers along the path had started to wilt, their petals turning gray, as if they’d seen something terrible. Nyx stepped ahead, their shadow melting into the darkness. “Shadows here are alive,” they said. “They remember.” Rory followed, her hand on the dagger hilt, the pendant warm at her throat. The air grew thinner, the light dimmer, until they emerged from the trees into a clearing. Dymas. It was everything the codex had said— a sprawling city of marble and gold, with vineyards that stretched to the horizon and orchards heavy with fruit no mortal had ever seen. The sky was amber, the air sweet with the scent of baked bread and ripe strawberries. A grand feast was underway in the central square, tables piled high with food, people laughing, singing. But Rory’s stomach turned. The air was thick with a rot— not the stench of death, but of excess. Of people eating until they could not stand, then being carried away, their bodies already forgotten, their plates filled again. Evan was there, too. He stood at the edge of the square, a plate in his hand, loaded with meat, cheese, and a fruit that looked like a grape but was the color of blood. His hair was shorter, his face more haggard, but his smile was the same— empty, greedy. “Rory,” he called, his voice loud over the music. “Come. Eat. Stay with me.” Rory’s chest tightened. She took a step forward, but Nyx’s shadow wrapped around her wrist, stopping her. “Not yet,” they said. “He is a projection. A lie.” Isolde touched her shoulder. “It is what he *wants* you to see. The version of himself he believes makes him happy. The version of you that never left.” Rory looked at Evan again. The plate in his hand had begun to fade, the food turning to ash. “It’s not real,” she said, more to herself than to them. “No,” Isolde said. “But it *hurts* like it is.” Rory drew the Fae blade. The dagger glowed faintly, its moon silver surface reflecting the amber sky. She stepped forward, the blade in her hand, and called, “Evan!” He looked up, his smile faltering. “You came.” “I did,” she said, “to tell you— I’m sorry. For leaving. For not seeing how broken you were.” Evan’s face crumpled. For a moment, Rory saw the boy she’d met all those years ago, the one who’d cried when his dog died, the one who’d stolen pies from the local bakery to share with her. “You left,” he said, voice breaking. “You left me.” “I was scared,” she said. “Scared of you. Of the way you made me feel. But you were scared, too. Of being alone. Don’t you see? We were both broken. And we hurt each other.” The feast around them began to fade, the tables, the people, the food dissolving into shadow. Evan’s figure wavered, his form becoming more indistinct. “I don’t want to leave,” he said, tears in his eyes. “I’m so tired of being hungry.” “I know,” she said, her voice soft. “But this isn’t real. You’re not here. You have to let go.” Evan looked at her, and for a moment, his eyes were clear— *he* was clear. “Thank you,” he said. “For seeing me.” Then he was gone, dissolved into shadow, and the clearing was empty. Rory lowered the dagger, her hands shaking. Nyx stepped closer, their shadow comforting. “You did well,” they said. Isolde nodded. “The rift is beyond the square. But be quick. The winter solstice wanes. The Veil will harden again. If we’re not back in an hour… we won’t be back at all.” Rory looked at the square, at the empty tables, at the shadows that shifted like living things. She thought of Evan, of the boy she’d loved, of the man he’d become. Grief and relief tangled in her chest. “Let’s go,” she said, and started forward. Nyx and Isolde fell in beside her, the Grove fading behind them as they stepped toward the rift— toward Dymas, toward answers, toward whatever lay ahead. The pendant burned once more, a final, warm pulse, as if it were cheering her on. Rory gripped the dagger hilt, her eyes fixed on the rift, and walked into the light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags42
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She paused then [then]"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.545
leniency1
rawRatio0.024
effectiveRatio0.024
95.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2346
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.98% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2346
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"whisper"
count1
1
word"grave"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"chill"
count1
5
word"silk"
count2
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count2
8
word"stomach"
count2
9
word"encounter"
count1
10
word"beacon"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"desire"
count2
14
word"marble"
count1
15
word"wavered"
count1
16
word"comforting"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"grave"
2"pulsed"
3"gloom"
4"chill"
5"silk"
6"flickered"
7"flicker"
8"stomach"
9"encounter"
10"beacon"
11"reminder"
12"silence"
13"desire"
14"marble"
15"wavered"
16"comforting"
17"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences171
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences171
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences204
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords17
totalWords2343
ratio0.007
matches
0"seen"
1"old"
2"Sympathy."
3"taking"
4"Softer than I remembered"
5"see"
6"Us"
7"stupid"
8"need"
9"want"
10"crave"
11"wants"
12"hurts"
13"he"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions43
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
61.01% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions91
wordCount1798
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.78
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory32
Veil2
Nyx19
Heartstone1
Isolde18
Richmond1
Park1
Half-Fae1
London1
Evan9
Grove2
Fae2
Dymas2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Veil"
2"Nyx"
3"Isolde"
4"Half-Fae"
5"Evan"
6"Fae"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Grove"
4"Dymas"
globalScore0.61
windowScore0.667
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"quite there—but never *seen* it"
1"something like excitement in the wind"
2"as if seeing something Rory couldn’t"
3"looked like a grape but was the color of"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.134
wordCount2343
matches
0"not mortal fear, but the rot of it"
1"not her own reflection, but Evan’s"
2"not in the flesh, but as a soul, trapped in the form he’d had"
3"not into the pond, but into something else"
4"not the stench of death, but of excess"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences204
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean33
std18.36
cv0.556
sampleLengths
060
123
266
349
429
568
625
720
873
918
1041
1117
1249
1345
1417
1531
1659
1734
1843
1962
2038
2152
2211
2336
2470
2543
2626
2732
2855
2949
3019
3126
3241
3356
349
3570
363
3723
3817
3948
4039
4111
4247
4317
4430
451
4664
4739
484
4947
95.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences171
matches
0"been was"
1"was sated"
2"being dragged"
3"being carried"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs327
matches
0"were cheering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences204
ratio0.098
matches
0"She’d seen the rumors online—folk claiming to hear voices in the wind, to touch something that wasn’t quite there—but never *seen* it."
1"“Beyond the stones,” Isolde said, her voice like wind chimes, “the line blurs. Time does not tick as it does for you.” She turned, and for the first time, Rory saw the rift— a shimmer, faint as a heat mirage, just beyond the ring of ancient oaks."
2"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, blooms in every color— magenta, indigo, gold— and their petals shifted, as if lit from within."
3"Not a river— the water was still, a mirror for the sky, which was the color of burnished amber."
4"The reflection wasn’t of them— it was of a garden, sprawling and lush, with fountains that shot emerald water into the air, and trees heavy with fruit that glowed like rubies and sapphires."
5"Evan had loved food— loved *taking* it, hoarding it, then discarding it when he was sated."
6"He’d saved her, then vanished— only to reappear a week later, waiting outside her flat."
7"She was a liar, she told herself, but she’d learned to read people— to see the lies in their eyes."
8"The water looked inviting, but there was something about it— a wrongness, like a mirror that showed a distorted reflection."
9"When she leaned down, she saw not her own reflection, but Evan’s— not in the flesh, but as a soul, trapped in the form he’d had when he’d first met her, slim, with dark hair and a smile that had made her knees weak."
10"She struggled to breathe, but the liquid filled her lungs, and she felt herself sinking— not into the pond, but into something else."
11"Something pulled her upward— Nyx, she realized, their shadowy form wrapping around her, lifting her out of the water."
12"Isolde closed her eyes, and for a moment, she looked different— older, the lines in her face deeper, as if time had crept up on her."
13"Isolde nodded, but her eyes lingered on the water, as if she saw something there— something that made her skin prickle."
14"They turned, and Rory noticed for the first time the path leading into the east grove— a narrow trail, bordered by thorned bushes that glowed with bioluminescent sap."
15"It was everything the codex had said— a sprawling city of marble and gold, with vineyards that stretched to the horizon and orchards heavy with fruit no mortal had ever seen."
16"The air was thick with a rot— not the stench of death, but of excess."
17"His hair was shorter, his face more haggard, but his smile was the same— empty, greedy."
18"Evan looked at her, and for a moment, his eyes were clear— *he* was clear."
19"Nyx and Isolde fell in beside her, the Grove fading behind them as they stepped toward the rift— toward Dymas, toward answers, toward whatever lay ahead."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1801
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount51
adverbRatio0.028317601332593003
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.003886729594669628
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences204
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences204
mean11.49
std8.44
cv0.734
sampleLengths
013
12
23
322
420
523
612
714
820
913
107
1147
122
1316
148
155
164
175
1825
192
2020
2112
224
2316
245
257
2613
275
2816
2919
308
3110
3215
3313
345
354
368
377
3822
396
4011
415
425
4333
446
454
4623
4718
486
497
47.55% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.27941176470588236
totalSentences204
uniqueOpeners57
68.03% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences147
matches
0"Maybe Nyx had seen that,"
1"Then a kitchen, with a"
2"Then he was gone, dissolved"
ratio0.02
75.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences147
matches
0"She’d seen the rumors online—folk"
1"their voice was a whisper,"
2"It pulsed faintly, a slow,"
3"She’d worn no shoes, Rory"
4"they said, when Rory hesitated"
5"She touched a nearby flower,"
6"It paused, antennae quivering, then"
7"She stood, and her eyes"
8"It burned now, a sharp,"
9"Their tone was flat, but"
10"She thought of his laugh,"
11"She pushed it down."
12"She’d met Nyx three months"
13"He’d saved her, then vanished—"
14"he’d said, then left"
15"She was a liar, she"
16"They moved closer to the"
17"It rippled, though, as if"
18"she said, extending a hand"
19"She glanced at Nyx, who"
ratio0.361
24.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount128
totalSentences147
matches
0"The air bit at Rory’s"
1"The Veil thinned."
2"She’d seen the rumors online—folk"
3"their voice was a whisper,"
4"Rory nodded, her free hand"
5"It pulsed faintly, a slow,"
6"She’d worn no shoes, Rory"
7"Isolde said, her voice like"
8"Nyx stepped forward, their shadowy"
9"they said, when Rory hesitated"
10"Rory took a step."
11"The world shifted beneath her."
12"Wildflowers carpeted the ground, blooms"
13"A breeze stirred, and the"
14"Rory said, turning"
15"The Half-Fae had already moved"
16"Isolde corrected, not looking back"
17"Rory followed, Nyx close behind."
18"The ground sloped gently downward,"
19"She touched a nearby flower,"
ratio0.871
68.03% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences147
matches
0"Now he was a soul"
1"Now, she thought she understood."
ratio0.014
35.23% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"It pulsed faintly, a slow, warm thrumming, as if it knew what lay ahead."
1"The reflection wasn’t of them— it was of a garden, sprawling and lush, with fountains that shot emerald water into the air, and trees heavy with fruit that glow…"
2"Rory looked at them, at the flicker of shadow that wasn’t quite solid, and felt a surge of gratitude."
3"The water looked inviting, but there was something about it— a wrongness, like a mirror that showed a distorted reflection."
4"When she leaned down, she saw not her own reflection, but Evan’s— not in the flesh, but as a soul, trapped in the form he’d had when he’d first met her, slim, w…"
5"Memories flooded her: Evan slamming doors, calling her names, breaking her favorite mug."
6"Isolde closed her eyes, and for a moment, she looked different— older, the lines in her face deeper, as if time had crept up on her."
7"Isolde nodded, but her eyes lingered on the water, as if she saw something there— something that made her skin prickle."
8"They turned, and Rory noticed for the first time the path leading into the east grove— a narrow trail, bordered by thorned bushes that glowed with bioluminescen…"
9"The flowers along the path had started to wilt, their petals turning gray, as if they’d seen something terrible."
10"It was everything the codex had said— a sprawling city of marble and gold, with vineyards that stretched to the horizon and orchards heavy with fruit no mortal …"
5.95% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags42
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"Isolde corrected, not looking back"
1"Nyx said, their form shifting slightly, as if the light discomforted them"
2"Nyx murmured, their voice softening"
3"she gasped, voice carried away by the tide"
4"Isolde said, her voice calm"
5"Nyx asked, their voice breaking the silence"
6"he called, his voice loud over the music"
7"she said, more to herself than to them"
8"he said, voice breaking"
9"she said, her voice soft"
85.06% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags36
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Isolde corrected (correct)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"he’d (would)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
4"she gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences77
tagDensity0.468
leniency0.935
rawRatio0.139
effectiveRatio0.13
75.7360%