"She tugs the collar of her Golden Empress restaurant jacket tight against the frost that nips at her cheeks, her bright blue eyes locking on the wildflowers cascading up each stone’s base—crimson poppies, sun-yellow daisies, purple lupines, all blooming when the rest of Richmond Park’s flora lies crumpled under a blanket of white."
1
"Her left wrist’s crescent scar tugs, a faint throb she ties to the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her shirt; the deep crimson gem pulses once, warm enough to seep through the thin cotton and settle against her skin."
2
"Their whisper-on-wind voice tangles with the rustle of oak leaves that shouldn’t be moving in the still air—no breeze stirs the rest of the park’s branches."
3
"Rory’s jaw tightens—she’s heard Isolde’s cryptic twists before, when the Half-Fae seer pressed the Fae-Forged Blade into her palm after a delivery run gone wrong, but the uncertainty of the unknown coiled in her gut isn’t something she can outthink with the pre-law logic she’d abandoned in Cardiff."
4
"She checks her phone—her delivery app’s clock flashes 1:07 PM, then 3:42 PM, then 12:19 PM, the numbers sputtering like a dying bulb before the screen goes black entirely."
5
"A stray daisy petal falls onto her palm; she tucks it into her mouth, and it bursts with the taste of blackcurrant and honey, sweet enough to make her tongue tingle."
6
"Here, time bends to the grove’s breath—an hour inside can stretch to a day outside, or shrink to a minute, depending on the stones’ mood."
7
"Rory shoves her dead phone into her jacket pocket, her fingers brushing the Heartstone Pendant again—this time, it pulses in a steady rhythm, a warm thrum that seeps through her shirt and into her chest, matching the beat of her heart."
8
"She kneels, her scuffed boots sinking into the soft, mossy ground that feels softer than any blanket she’s ever owned, and touches the water—its temperature shifts from scalding hot to icy cold in a heartbeat, making her yank her hand back, her fingers tingling with the aftershock."
9
"Glimpses—fragments of what was, what could be, what the Fae Courts buried to protect their secrets."
10
"Nyx drifts to the pool’s other side, their shadow form stretching into the water—instead of a reflection, a faint image of a 17th-century sorcerer (Aldric, their past self) flashes across the surface, his hands clutching a tattered summoning scroll, his face twisted with fear before a shimmering Veil rift swallowed him whole."
11
"The water hisses, sending up a cloud of steam that smells like burnt honey and iron, and the image of Aldric solidifies for a heartbeat—his scroll bears a symbol matching the crescent moon carved into her Heartstone Pendant, his lips moving in a word she can’t hear before the rift yanks him away."
12
"Isolde glides away from the pool, her silver hair trailing behind her as she heads toward a cluster of wildflowers that glow brighter than the rest—crimson poppies with silver edges, their petals humming with a faint sound that’s not quite a song."
13
"Tears that lead to Dymas—where Helbound souls tend to the vineyards that feed Prince Belphegor’s gluttonous feasts."
14
"The Heartstone Pendant’s warm pulse grows louder, enough to make her chest hum, and she notices that the air around the bright wildflowers shimmers—a faint distortion she now recognizes as the Veil, weakening with the winter solstice, its shimmering edges rippling like a pond struck by a stone."
15
"Nyx drifts to her side, their shadow form wrapping around her wrist for a moment—their touch is cold, like a block of ice pressed to her skin, but it eases the scar’s throb entirely, the pain vanishing as if it never was."
16
"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in, her mind racing through the fragments she’s gathered—the pendant’s symbol on Aldric’s scroll, the Veil’s fray leading to Dymas, the grove’s time shifts unlocking hidden memories."
17
"She steps closer to the shimmering Veil rift, the Fae-Forged Blade held firm at her side, and spots a flicker of something beyond it—sprawling Dymasian vineyards under a warm amber sky, Helbound souls in tattered robes tending to plump grapes, a figure in a black hood watching her from the edge of the vineyard before the rift snaps shut for a heartbeat."
18
"Rory follows, her scuffed delivery boots sinking into the mossy ground that now smells like ripe peaches and pine, a scent that clashes with the jasmine and blackcurrant but somehow works. She pauses at one of the smaller stones, running her fingers over its carved symbol—she feels a faint vibration, a hum that matches the Heartstone Pendant’s pulse. She presses her pendant to the stone. The stone glows, sending a wave of warmth through her body that eases every tight muscle in her back (an ache from hours of delivery runs), and a hologram-like image bursts forth—an unknown hooded figure (the Helbound soul) handing the pendant to a younger Rory, her face hidden by a hood, standing outside Silas’ bar where she lives, before vanishing into a Veil rift that flickered with the same amber light as Dymas’ sky."
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"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in. She presses the Heartstone Pendant firmer to the stone. The stone’s glow brightens, and the image expands—she sees the hooded figure talking to Prince Belphegor in a Dymasian feast hall, piles of exotic food spread across a long table, the figure handing over a scroll (Aldric’s summoning scroll) in exchange for the Heartstone Pendant, before vanishing through the Veil rift to find Rory."
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"Rory’s scuffed delivery boots skid to a halt at the edge of a ring of gnarled oak standing stones, their bark furrowed like the palms of a centenarian’s hands, …"
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"She tugs the collar of her Golden Empress restaurant jacket tight against the frost that nips at her cheeks, her bright blue eyes locking on the wildflowers cas…"
2
"Isolde steps past them, her silver waist-length hair catching a stray beam of amber light that has no business cutting through the overcast winter sky, weaving …"
3
"She grabs the blade clipped to her belt, its moonsilver hilt cold enough to make her fingers prickle even through her frayed wool glove, the slender leaf shape …"
4
"She blinks, and the oak leaves above her bloom into bright green, their edges glistening with dew that drips onto her jacket’s collar, cool enough to make her f…"
5
"Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes darting between her lifeless phone and the wildflowers carpeting the grove’s floor, each petal glowing with a fain…"
6
"Isolde glides deeper into the clearing, her silver hair weaving through the branches of a willow that droops with blush-pink blossoms no willow should bear in D…"
7
"Nyx drifts after her, their shadow form stretching and coiling around the willow’s branches, their faintly glowing violet eyes widening at the way the wood abso…"
8
"Rory shoves her dead phone into her jacket pocket, her fingers brushing the Heartstone Pendant again—this time, it pulses in a steady rhythm, a warm thrum that …"
9
"She kneels, her scuffed boots sinking into the soft, mossy ground that feels softer than any blanket she’s ever owned, and touches the water—its temperature shi…"
10
"Nyx drifts to the pool’s other side, their shadow form stretching into the water—instead of a reflection, a faint image of a 17th-century sorcerer (Aldric, thei…"
11
"The water hisses, sending up a cloud of steam that smells like burnt honey and iron, and the image of Aldric solidifies for a heartbeat—his scroll bears a symbo…"
12
"Rory’s words cut through the steam, her bright blue eyes locking on Nyx’s faintly glowing violet ones, her fingers tightening around the blade’s hilt."
13
"Isolde glides away from the pool, her silver hair trailing behind her as she heads toward a cluster of wildflowers that glow brighter than the rest—crimson popp…"
14
"Tears that lead to Dymas—where Helbound souls tend to the vineyards that feed Prince Belphegor’s gluttonous feasts."
15
"She reaches out, her fingers brushing the shimmer, and a jolt of electricity zaps her, making her yank back, her fingers tingling for minutes afterward."
16
"Nyx drifts to her side, their shadow form wrapping around her wrist for a moment—their touch is cold, like a block of ice pressed to her skin, but it eases the …"
17
"Isolde’s pale lavender eyes lock on Rory’s bright blue ones, her riddle-laced speech sharpened by the Fae compulsion that forbids lies, her voice dropping to a …"
18
"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in, her mind racing through the fragments she’s gathered—the pendant’s symbol on Aldric’s scroll, the Veil’s fray leading to Dyma…"
19
"Isolde glides to a cluster of smaller standing stones tucked behind the willow, their surfaces carved with the same crescent moon symbol as Rory’s pendant, thei…"
20
"Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dimming a little."
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"Nyx’s shadow form wraps around the stone, their faintly glowing violet eyes narrowing at the way the glow pulls their shadow into the stone’s core, as if the st…"
22
"The lock guards a memory. A memory that ties the Veil to Dymas, to Aldric’s summoning, to your benefactor’s deal with Prince Belphegor."
23
"Rory’s words come firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dying down to a faint hum."
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"Rory’s words are firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the center of the smaller stone ring, her hand tightening around the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt."