Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7KGGRCPARTFGDF92S2MAJ

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Duration:
3m 37s
Cost:
$0.020078
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory’s scuffed delivery boots skid to a halt at the edge of a ring of gnarled oak standing stones, their bark furrowed like the palms of a centenarian’s hands, crusted with a faint silver residue that glints in the winter solstice’s thin sunlight. She tugs the collar of her Golden Empress restaurant jacket tight against the frost that nips at her cheeks, her bright blue eyes locking on the wildflowers cascading up each stone’s base—crimson poppies, sun-yellow daisies, purple lupines, all blooming when the rest of Richmond Park’s flora lies crumpled under a blanket of white. Her left wrist’s crescent scar tugs, a faint throb she ties to the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her shirt; the deep crimson gem pulses once, warm enough to seep through the thin cotton and settle against her skin. Nyx drifts beside her, their humanoid shadow form wavering between solid and incorporeal, faintly glowing violet eyes narrowing at the stones’ silver residue. Their whisper-on-wind voice tangles with the rustle of oak leaves that shouldn’t be moving in the still air—no breeze stirs the rest of the park’s branches. This space bites my shadow. It won’t hold solid for long if we linger at the edge. Isolde steps past them, her silver waist-length hair catching a stray beam of amber light that has no business cutting through the overcast winter sky, weaving it into strands that glow like liquid moonlight. She leaves no footprints in the frost-dusted grass, her ethereal frame gliding like smoke over the frozen ground without so much as a crinkle of ice under her bare feet. Her pale lavender eyes fix on Rory, her riddle-laced speech wrapping around the group like a thin veil. The stones guard the breath of two worlds. Step through, and the clock’s hands snap free. Rory’s jaw tightens—she’s heard Isolde’s cryptic twists before, when the Half-Fae seer pressed the Fae-Forged Blade into her palm after a delivery run gone wrong, but the uncertainty of the unknown coiled in her gut isn’t something she can outthink with the pre-law logic she’d abandoned in Cardiff. She grabs the blade clipped to her belt, its moonsilver hilt cold enough to make her fingers prickle even through her frayed wool glove, the slender leaf shape catching the strange amber light into a faint luminescence that paints the grass at her feet with pale blue streaks. Nyx shifts fully solid for a heartbeat, their 6’2” frame towering over Rory’s 5’6” form, their shadow stretching long enough to blot out a clump of poppies, before flickering back to incorporeal, their violet eyes never leaving the stones. I’ve slipped through Veil rifts before, when the winter solstice weakens the barrier between Earth and Hel, but this one hums different. No acrid stench of Dymasian vineyard rot. Only Fae honey and forgotten spells that tickle the edges of my old mortal memories. Rory steps through the first stone’s gap. The frost vanishes. A wave of warmth wraps around her, thick with the scent of jasmine and ripe blackcurrants, even though winter’s frost should have scoured every sweet thing from the earth. She blinks, and the oak leaves above her bloom into bright green, their edges glistening with dew that drips onto her jacket’s collar, cool enough to make her flinch. She checks her phone—her delivery app’s clock flashes 1:07 PM, then 3:42 PM, then 12:19 PM, the numbers sputtering like a dying bulb before the screen goes black entirely. She jostles it, slaps its back, but it stays dead. The clock’s broken. Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes darting between her lifeless phone and the wildflowers carpeting the grove’s floor, each petal glowing with a faint inner light that shifts from crimson to gold when she steps closer. A stray daisy petal falls onto her palm; she tucks it into her mouth, and it bursts with the taste of blackcurrant and honey, sweet enough to make her tongue tingle. Isolde glides deeper into the clearing, her silver hair weaving through the branches of a willow that droops with blush-pink blossoms no willow should bear in December, their petals drifting to the ground without a sound. Broken is a mortal word. Here, time bends to the grove’s breath—an hour inside can stretch to a day outside, or shrink to a minute, depending on the stones’ mood. Nyx drifts after her, their shadow form stretching and coiling around the willow’s branches, their faintly glowing violet eyes widening at the way the wood absorbs their shadow instead of reflecting it, as if the tree is drinking in their essence for sustenance. It’s feeding on my form. Not harmful. Curious. Like a child prodding a strange bug with a stick. Rory shoves her dead phone into her jacket pocket, her fingers brushing the Heartstone Pendant again—this time, it pulses in a steady rhythm, a warm thrum that seeps through her shirt and into her chest, matching the beat of her heart. She steps deeper, the Fae-Forged Blade held loose at her side, and spots a pool of water tucked between two jagged stones, its surface so still it mirrors the warm amber sky above instead of the willow’s branches or the wildflowers around it. She kneels, her scuffed boots sinking into the soft, mossy ground that feels softer than any blanket she’s ever owned, and touches the water—its temperature shifts from scalding hot to icy cold in a heartbeat, making her yank her hand back, her fingers tingling with the aftershock. The water’s not right. Rory’s voice tightens, her crescent scar throbbing again as she stares at the pool’s unblinking mirror, where a faint reflection of the Veil’s shimmering distortion flickers at the edge. Isolde pauses at the pool’s edge, her pale lavender eyes locking on the water’s surface, her silver hair trailing into the pool without wetting a single strand. It shows what the Veil lets slip. Not truths. Glimpses—fragments of what was, what could be, what the Fae Courts buried to protect their secrets. Nyx drifts to the pool’s other side, their shadow form stretching into the water—instead of a reflection, a faint image of a 17th-century sorcerer (Aldric, their past self) flashes across the surface, his hands clutching a tattered summoning scroll, his face twisted with fear before a shimmering Veil rift swallowed him whole. It knows my name. The one I buried when I became a shade. The grove’s digging up the bones of my mortal life. Rory’s cool-headedness kicks in, her quick out-of-the-box thinking sparking as she unclips the Fae-Forged Blade and dips its moonsilver tip into the pool. The water hisses, sending up a cloud of steam that smells like burnt honey and iron, and the image of Aldric solidifies for a heartbeat—his scroll bears a symbol matching the crescent moon carved into her Heartstone Pendant, his lips moving in a word she can’t hear before the rift yanks him away. I see him. The sorcerer. Your past. His scroll has my pendant’s symbol. Rory’s words cut through the steam, her bright blue eyes locking on Nyx’s faintly glowing violet ones, her fingers tightening around the blade’s hilt. Nyx’s shadow form flickers, shrinking into a smaller silhouette for a moment before expanding again, wrapping around the pool’s edge like a blanket. It’s a bait. The grove wants us to dig deeper, to tie the threads of my past to your pendant, to the Veil’s fray. Isolde glides away from the pool, her silver hair trailing behind her as she heads toward a cluster of wildflowers that glow brighter than the rest—crimson poppies with silver edges, their petals humming with a faint sound that’s not quite a song. She plucks one, its petals leaving no stain on her pale fingers, and tucks it behind Rory’s ear, where it glows against her straight, shoulder-length black hair. Digging uncovers roots. Roots tie to the Veil’s tears. Tears that lead to Dymas—where Helbound souls tend to the vineyards that feed Prince Belphegor’s gluttonous feasts. Rory brushes the poppy behind her ear, its glow warming her cheek, and follows Isolde. The Heartstone Pendant’s warm pulse grows louder, enough to make her chest hum, and she notices that the air around the bright wildflowers shimmers—a faint distortion she now recognizes as the Veil, weakening with the winter solstice, its shimmering edges rippling like a pond struck by a stone. She reaches out, her fingers brushing the shimmer, and a jolt of electricity zaps her, making her yank back, her fingers tingling for minutes afterward. The Veil’s here. Weak. Winter solstice’s doing. Rory’s words come breathless, her crescent scar throbbing so hard she has to press her hand to it, the pressure easing the pain just a little. Nyx drifts to her side, their shadow form wrapping around her wrist for a moment—their touch is cold, like a block of ice pressed to her skin, but it eases the scar’s throb entirely, the pain vanishing as if it never was. The Wardens monitor rifts like this, but they can’t see Fae-touched ones. This grove’s hidden from their sight. Isolde’s pale lavender eyes lock on Rory’s bright blue ones, her riddle-laced speech sharpened by the Fae compulsion that forbids lies, her voice dropping to a whisper that carries over the grove’s hum. The scar’s throb is a map. The Heartstone’s pulse is a key. The blade’s cold is a shield. All three tie you to the Helbound soul who gave you the pendant. Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in, her mind racing through the fragments she’s gathered—the pendant’s symbol on Aldric’s scroll, the Veil’s fray leading to Dymas, the grove’s time shifts unlocking hidden memories. She steps closer to the shimmering Veil rift, the Fae-Forged Blade held firm at her side, and spots a flicker of something beyond it—sprawling Dymasian vineyards under a warm amber sky, Helbound souls in tattered robes tending to plump grapes, a figure in a black hood watching her from the edge of the vineyard before the rift snaps shut for a heartbeat. I saw Dymas. A hooded figure. Rory’s words are a whisper, her bright blue eyes wide with wonder and unease, the poppy behind her ear glowing brighter at the mention of the Hel realm. Nyx’s faint glowing violet eyes narrow, their shadow form shifting fully solid for a few seconds, their 6’2” frame towering over her, their hands balled into fists (a mortal habit they can’t shake). The hooded figure’s the benefactor. A Helbound soul from Dymas. They’re tied to Aldric’s summoning ritual. Isolde glides to a cluster of smaller standing stones tucked behind the willow, their surfaces carved with the same crescent moon symbol as Rory’s pendant, their edges glowing with a faint amber light. She glides around them, leaving no trace of her passage, her silver hair glowing with the same light as the stones. The Veil’s tears weave threads between Earth, the Fae realm, and Dymas. These stones are a knot in those threads. Rory follows, her scuffed delivery boots sinking into the mossy ground that now smells like ripe peaches and pine, a scent that clashes with the jasmine and blackcurrant but somehow works. She pauses at one of the smaller stones, running her fingers over its carved symbol—she feels a faint vibration, a hum that matches the Heartstone Pendant’s pulse. She presses her pendant to the stone. The stone glows, sending a wave of warmth through her body that eases every tight muscle in her back (an ache from hours of delivery runs), and a hologram-like image bursts forth—an unknown hooded figure (the Helbound soul) handing the pendant to a younger Rory, her face hidden by a hood, standing outside Silas’ bar where she lives, before vanishing into a Veil rift that flickered with the same amber light as Dymas’ sky. I don’t remember this. I was living above Silas’ bar then, fresh from Cardiff, but I never saw anyone like that. Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dimming a little. Nyx’s shadow form wraps around the stone, their faintly glowing violet eyes narrowing at the way the glow pulls their shadow into the stone’s core, as if the stone is drinking in their shadow to power the image. The grove’s unlocking what the Veil hid. Your mind blocked the memory to protect you from the Hel realm’s tug. Isolde glides to the center of the smaller stone ring, her silver hair glowing with the same light as the stones, her ethereal frame seeming to merge with the glow for a heartbeat. The lock guards a memory. A memory that ties the Veil to Dymas, to Aldric’s summoning, to your benefactor’s deal with Prince Belphegor. Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in. She presses the Heartstone Pendant firmer to the stone. The stone’s glow brightens, and the image expands—she sees the hooded figure talking to Prince Belphegor in a Dymasian feast hall, piles of exotic food spread across a long table, the figure handing over a scroll (Aldric’s summoning scroll) in exchange for the Heartstone Pendant, before vanishing through the Veil rift to find Rory. They made a deal. For my pendant. Rory’s words come firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dying down to a faint hum. Nyx’s shadow form shifts back to solid for a heartbeat, their 6’2” frame looming over her, their voice a whisper-on-wind that carries urgency. The deal’s tied to the Veil’s fray. If we don’t untangle it, Dymasian demons will slip through the rift and into London. Isolde’s pale lavender eyes lock on Rory’s, her riddle-laced speech cutting through the grove’s hum. Memories are threads. Threads weave fate. Rory yanks her pendant away from the stone. The glow dies. She tucks the pendant back under her shirt, her fingers brushing the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt. She glances at the grove’s edges, where the oak standing stones now glow with a faint amber light, the Veil’s shimmering distortion flickering between them. She feels the Veil’s fray again, a faint tug at her chest, and knows they’re only scratching the surface of the grove’s secrets. We need to go deeper. Rory’s words are firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the center of the smaller stone ring, her hand tightening around the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Nyx shifts fully [fully]"
1"Nyx’s shadow form shifts back [back]"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.286
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2432
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2432
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"furrowed"
count1
1
word"cascading"
count1
2
word"throb"
count3
3
word"wavering"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count4
5
word"warmth"
count2
6
word"glistening"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count3
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
11
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"furrowed"
1"cascading"
2"throb"
3"wavering"
4"whisper"
5"warmth"
6"glistening"
7"pulse"
8"racing"
9"flicker"
10"flickered"
11"looming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
94.70% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences110
matches
0"A wave of warmth"
1"d with fear"
2"e with wonder"
3"a wave of warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen141
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2390
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions144
wordCount2317
uniqueNames28
maxNameDensity1.08
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone8
Pendant7
Rory25
Isolde10
Half-Fae1
Fae-Forged6
Blade6
Cardiff1
Veil17
Earth2
Hel3
Dymasian4
Fae12
December1
Nyx10
Courts1
Aldric6
Dymas6
Helbound5
Prince3
Belphegor3
Wardens1
Fae-touched1
London1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Isolde"
3"Blade"
4"Veil"
5"Nyx"
6"Courts"
7"Aldric"
8"Prince"
9"Belphegor"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Heartstone"
3"Cardiff"
4"Earth"
5"Hel"
6"Dymasian"
7"December"
8"Dymas"
9"Helbound"
10"London"
globalScore0.961
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a song"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2390
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"notices that the"
81.68% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean68.29
std29.77
cv0.436
sampleLengths
0134
166
298
396
483
5107
672
766
861
9131
1033
1152
1275
1376
1437
1547
1695
1788
1833
1960
2064
2193
2234
2349
2474
25139
2642
2758
2856
2968
3031
3145
3221
3376
3430
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"tied"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs348
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences110
ratio0.182
matches
0"She tugs the collar of her Golden Empress restaurant jacket tight against the frost that nips at her cheeks, her bright blue eyes locking on the wildflowers cascading up each stone’s base—crimson poppies, sun-yellow daisies, purple lupines, all blooming when the rest of Richmond Park’s flora lies crumpled under a blanket of white."
1"Her left wrist’s crescent scar tugs, a faint throb she ties to the Heartstone Pendant tucked under her shirt; the deep crimson gem pulses once, warm enough to seep through the thin cotton and settle against her skin."
2"Their whisper-on-wind voice tangles with the rustle of oak leaves that shouldn’t be moving in the still air—no breeze stirs the rest of the park’s branches."
3"Rory’s jaw tightens—she’s heard Isolde’s cryptic twists before, when the Half-Fae seer pressed the Fae-Forged Blade into her palm after a delivery run gone wrong, but the uncertainty of the unknown coiled in her gut isn’t something she can outthink with the pre-law logic she’d abandoned in Cardiff."
4"She checks her phone—her delivery app’s clock flashes 1:07 PM, then 3:42 PM, then 12:19 PM, the numbers sputtering like a dying bulb before the screen goes black entirely."
5"A stray daisy petal falls onto her palm; she tucks it into her mouth, and it bursts with the taste of blackcurrant and honey, sweet enough to make her tongue tingle."
6"Here, time bends to the grove’s breath—an hour inside can stretch to a day outside, or shrink to a minute, depending on the stones’ mood."
7"Rory shoves her dead phone into her jacket pocket, her fingers brushing the Heartstone Pendant again—this time, it pulses in a steady rhythm, a warm thrum that seeps through her shirt and into her chest, matching the beat of her heart."
8"She kneels, her scuffed boots sinking into the soft, mossy ground that feels softer than any blanket she’s ever owned, and touches the water—its temperature shifts from scalding hot to icy cold in a heartbeat, making her yank her hand back, her fingers tingling with the aftershock."
9"Glimpses—fragments of what was, what could be, what the Fae Courts buried to protect their secrets."
10"Nyx drifts to the pool’s other side, their shadow form stretching into the water—instead of a reflection, a faint image of a 17th-century sorcerer (Aldric, their past self) flashes across the surface, his hands clutching a tattered summoning scroll, his face twisted with fear before a shimmering Veil rift swallowed him whole."
11"The water hisses, sending up a cloud of steam that smells like burnt honey and iron, and the image of Aldric solidifies for a heartbeat—his scroll bears a symbol matching the crescent moon carved into her Heartstone Pendant, his lips moving in a word she can’t hear before the rift yanks him away."
12"Isolde glides away from the pool, her silver hair trailing behind her as she heads toward a cluster of wildflowers that glow brighter than the rest—crimson poppies with silver edges, their petals humming with a faint sound that’s not quite a song."
13"Tears that lead to Dymas—where Helbound souls tend to the vineyards that feed Prince Belphegor’s gluttonous feasts."
14"The Heartstone Pendant’s warm pulse grows louder, enough to make her chest hum, and she notices that the air around the bright wildflowers shimmers—a faint distortion she now recognizes as the Veil, weakening with the winter solstice, its shimmering edges rippling like a pond struck by a stone."
15"Nyx drifts to her side, their shadow form wrapping around her wrist for a moment—their touch is cold, like a block of ice pressed to her skin, but it eases the scar’s throb entirely, the pain vanishing as if it never was."
16"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in, her mind racing through the fragments she’s gathered—the pendant’s symbol on Aldric’s scroll, the Veil’s fray leading to Dymas, the grove’s time shifts unlocking hidden memories."
17"She steps closer to the shimmering Veil rift, the Fae-Forged Blade held firm at her side, and spots a flicker of something beyond it—sprawling Dymasian vineyards under a warm amber sky, Helbound souls in tattered robes tending to plump grapes, a figure in a black hood watching her from the edge of the vineyard before the rift snaps shut for a heartbeat."
18"Rory follows, her scuffed delivery boots sinking into the mossy ground that now smells like ripe peaches and pine, a scent that clashes with the jasmine and blackcurrant but somehow works. She pauses at one of the smaller stones, running her fingers over its carved symbol—she feels a faint vibration, a hum that matches the Heartstone Pendant’s pulse. She presses her pendant to the stone. The stone glows, sending a wave of warmth through her body that eases every tight muscle in her back (an ache from hours of delivery runs), and a hologram-like image bursts forth—an unknown hooded figure (the Helbound soul) handing the pendant to a younger Rory, her face hidden by a hood, standing outside Silas’ bar where she lives, before vanishing into a Veil rift that flickered with the same amber light as Dymas’ sky."
19"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in. She presses the Heartstone Pendant firmer to the stone. The stone’s glow brightens, and the image expands—she sees the hooded figure talking to Prince Belphegor in a Dymasian feast hall, piles of exotic food spread across a long table, the figure handing over a scroll (Aldric’s summoning scroll) in exchange for the Heartstone Pendant, before vanishing through the Veil rift to find Rory."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount550
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.025454545454545455
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0036363636363636364
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean21.73
std19.5
cv0.897
sampleLengths
043
153
238
323
426
55
612
734
830
918
108
118
1248
1348
1439
1522
167
1715
187
193
2029
2129
2229
2310
243
2538
2631
2736
285
2925
3043
315
322
331
3410
3541
3643
3747
384
3929
4027
417
422
4316
4452
454
469
4710
4823
4953
42.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.3
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners33
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Only Fae honey and forgotten"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences104
matches
0"She tugs the collar of"
1"Her left wrist’s crescent scar"
2"Their whisper-on-wind voice tangles with"
3"It won’t hold solid for"
4"She leaves no footprints in"
5"Her pale lavender eyes fix"
6"She grabs the blade clipped"
7"I’ve slipped through Veil rifts"
8"She blinks, and the oak"
9"She checks her phone—her delivery"
10"She jostles it, slaps its"
11"It’s feeding on my form."
12"She steps deeper, the Fae-Forged"
13"She kneels, her scuffed boots"
14"It shows what the Veil"
15"It knows my name."
16"I see him."
17"His scroll has my pendant’s"
18"It’s a bait."
19"She plucks one, its petals"
ratio0.279
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount96
totalSentences104
matches
0"Rory’s scuffed delivery boots skid"
1"She tugs the collar of"
2"Her left wrist’s crescent scar"
3"Nyx drifts beside her, their"
4"Their whisper-on-wind voice tangles with"
5"This space bites my shadow."
6"It won’t hold solid for"
7"Isolde steps past them, her"
8"She leaves no footprints in"
9"Her pale lavender eyes fix"
10"The stones guard the breath"
11"Rory’s jaw tightens—she’s heard Isolde’s"
12"She grabs the blade clipped"
13"Nyx shifts fully solid for"
14"I’ve slipped through Veil rifts"
15"Rory steps through the first"
16"The frost vanishes."
17"A wave of warmth wraps"
18"She blinks, and the oak"
19"She checks her phone—her delivery"
ratio0.923
48.08% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"If we don’t untangle it,"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount25
matches
0"Rory’s scuffed delivery boots skid to a halt at the edge of a ring of gnarled oak standing stones, their bark furrowed like the palms of a centenarian’s hands, …"
1"She tugs the collar of her Golden Empress restaurant jacket tight against the frost that nips at her cheeks, her bright blue eyes locking on the wildflowers cas…"
2"Isolde steps past them, her silver waist-length hair catching a stray beam of amber light that has no business cutting through the overcast winter sky, weaving …"
3"She grabs the blade clipped to her belt, its moonsilver hilt cold enough to make her fingers prickle even through her frayed wool glove, the slender leaf shape …"
4"She blinks, and the oak leaves above her bloom into bright green, their edges glistening with dew that drips onto her jacket’s collar, cool enough to make her f…"
5"Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes darting between her lifeless phone and the wildflowers carpeting the grove’s floor, each petal glowing with a fain…"
6"Isolde glides deeper into the clearing, her silver hair weaving through the branches of a willow that droops with blush-pink blossoms no willow should bear in D…"
7"Nyx drifts after her, their shadow form stretching and coiling around the willow’s branches, their faintly glowing violet eyes widening at the way the wood abso…"
8"Rory shoves her dead phone into her jacket pocket, her fingers brushing the Heartstone Pendant again—this time, it pulses in a steady rhythm, a warm thrum that …"
9"She kneels, her scuffed boots sinking into the soft, mossy ground that feels softer than any blanket she’s ever owned, and touches the water—its temperature shi…"
10"Nyx drifts to the pool’s other side, their shadow form stretching into the water—instead of a reflection, a faint image of a 17th-century sorcerer (Aldric, thei…"
11"The water hisses, sending up a cloud of steam that smells like burnt honey and iron, and the image of Aldric solidifies for a heartbeat—his scroll bears a symbo…"
12"Rory’s words cut through the steam, her bright blue eyes locking on Nyx’s faintly glowing violet ones, her fingers tightening around the blade’s hilt."
13"Isolde glides away from the pool, her silver hair trailing behind her as she heads toward a cluster of wildflowers that glow brighter than the rest—crimson popp…"
14"Tears that lead to Dymas—where Helbound souls tend to the vineyards that feed Prince Belphegor’s gluttonous feasts."
15"She reaches out, her fingers brushing the shimmer, and a jolt of electricity zaps her, making her yank back, her fingers tingling for minutes afterward."
16"Nyx drifts to her side, their shadow form wrapping around her wrist for a moment—their touch is cold, like a block of ice pressed to her skin, but it eases the …"
17"Isolde’s pale lavender eyes lock on Rory’s bright blue ones, her riddle-laced speech sharpened by the Fae compulsion that forbids lies, her voice dropping to a …"
18"Rory’s cool-headed logic kicks in, her mind racing through the fragments she’s gathered—the pendant’s symbol on Aldric’s scroll, the Veil’s fray leading to Dyma…"
19"Isolde glides to a cluster of smaller standing stones tucked behind the willow, their surfaces carved with the same crescent moon symbol as Rory’s pendant, thei…"
20"Rory’s words come sharp, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dimming a little."
21"Nyx’s shadow form wraps around the stone, their faintly glowing violet eyes narrowing at the way the glow pulls their shadow into the stone’s core, as if the st…"
22"The lock guards a memory. A memory that ties the Veil to Dymas, to Aldric’s summoning, to your benefactor’s deal with Prince Belphegor."
23"Rory’s words come firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the image as it fades, the stone’s glow dying down to a faint hum."
24"Rory’s words are firm, her bright blue eyes locking on the center of the smaller stone ring, her hand tightening around the Fae-Forged Blade’s hilt."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.0484%