Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7KNJE2TAE3V1J7H634WY8

Run Details

Duration:
3m 48s
Cost:
$0.018395
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory hauled her delivery bag’s strap higher on her shoulder, boots crunching over frost-dusted grass that should’ve been brown and brittle in mid-January’s London chill. She’d ducked out of the Golden Empress mid-shift, a crumpled note from an unmarked envelope burning a hole in her denim jacket pocket—“The Grove holds the pendant’s truth. Go at midnight.” She paused at the first oak standing stone, its bark ridged like a prisoner’s knuckles rubbed raw from years of chain, and brushed a strand of straight black shoulder-length hair from her bright blue eyes. The wildflowers at its base hit her first, a riot of clover, poppies, and cornflowers bursting in hues that shouldn’t exist under a cloud-shrouded moon—no flower blooms in January’s frost, not even in Richmond Park’s well-tended borders, and the Grove’s year-round wildflower flora felt like a silent taunt. She twisted the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a childhood accident’s memento that pulled tight whenever she tensed, and let her eyes scan the stone’s circumference for any sign of the unknown benefactor who’d slipped the Heartstone Pendant into her delivery bag three weeks prior. I shouldn’t have left the restaurant. The pendant hung around her neck, its silver chain digging slightly into her collarbone, thumbnail-sized crimson gem glowing with a faint inner warmth she’d learned to ignore until last night’s note arrived. She’d worn it every day since it appeared—through delivery runs to rain-soaked London flats, through late nights studying old Pre-Law textbooks she’d abandoned in her flat above Silas’ bar (a relic of her reluctant Cardiff University tenure), through the quiet moments she’d caught herself staring at Evan’s old text messages before deleting them. The pendant’s odd behavior—faint pulses when she passed certain alleyways, a glow that brightened when she felt Evan’s presence nearby—had nagged at her, but she’d brushed it off as a trick of the light until the note came. The note gave no other clues. She stepped past the standing stone, crossing the Grove’s hidden boundary between Earth and the Fae realm, and the air shifted. It thickened, sweet with pine that had no business growing in Richmond Park’s deciduous landscape, and the frost under her boots vanished. The grass turned soft, dewy, as if it were mid-July’s peak, and her watch’s hands spun backward for three sharp ticks before freezing at 12:01 AM. She’d left the Golden Empress at 11:50 PM, a ten-minute bike ride to the park’s edge, but the Grove’s warped time behavior—an hour inside minutes or days outside—pricked at her intelligent, quick-thinking mind. She’d heard old tales from her Welsh mother about Fae-touched places, but she’d never believed them until now. My watch isn’t broken. She tapped the face with a gloved finger, the leather scraping against the metal. A branch creaked overhead. She froze. No wind stirred the oak boughs, no leaves rustled beyond the initial creak. She reached into her delivery bag, fingers wrapping around the cold metal of her bike lock—her only weapon, a heavy U-shaped piece she’d carried since Evan’s last attempt to corner her on a delivery run to a quiet London alley. Where’s the wind? She took another step, and the Heartstone Pendant pulsed. The warmth seeping through her shirt flared, a tiny flame fighting the dark, and the crimson gem’s inner glow brightened to match. She grabbed the silver chain, pulling it into view, and watched as its light danced across the Grove’s clearing—empty, save for the oak standing stones that ringed it like silent sentinels, and the wildflowers that dotted the ground in impossible hues. You’re reacting to something. She turned in a slow circle, eyes darting to the edges of her vision. A flash of movement—something small, pale, darting behind the next standing stone. She stepped toward it, left wrist’s scar pulling tighter as she clenched her fist, and let her bright blue eyes narrow. The wildflowers at her feet closed their petals, as if hiding from the thing she couldn’t quite see, their vibrant hues fading to a dull gray. Show yourself. The sound hit her next: a lullaby, high and thin, the same one her Welsh mother used to sing her before bed, the words tangled in a melody that had faded from her memory until now. She stumbled back, boots hitting a patch of poppies that had been blooming seconds before, and felt her breath catch. The lullaby wasn’t coming from the Grove’s edges—it was coming from inside her head, as if someone were prying into her most private memories, digging up the comfort of her mother’s voice to disarm her. Mom’s lullaby. She fumbled with her jacket pocket, pulling out the crumpled note. The ink had faded, the words rearranged into a new message—“The Grove hunts those who seek answers.” She crumpled it tighter, her mind racing to connect the dots: the pendant’s pulse, the time shift, the lullaby, the vanishing frost, the closed petals. She’d fled Cardiff for London at Eva’s behest to escape Evan’s abuse, to start over with a part-time delivery job and a tiny flat above a bar, but now she’d walked into another trap, one tied to the pendant she couldn’t explain. I didn’t come here to be hunted. Another creak. This time, it came from every standing stone at once. The oak boughs overhead drooped, their leaves rustling in a wind she still couldn’t feel, and the dewy grass vanished again—frost coating the ground once more, the wildflowers turning black as ash. She pressed her hand to her chest, the pendant’s pulse quickening with each creak, as if it were warning her of an approaching threat. You’re warning me. She turned again, and a flash of movement caught her eye—closer this time, pale and elongated, with fingers that curved like thorns. It darted behind a standing stone, and she followed, boots slipping on the frost. The Heartstone Pendant’s glow brightened, and she noticed a faint crack in the stone’s ridged bark—wider than the others, oozing a thin black liquid that looked like tar, its stench mixing with the pine’s sweet scent to create a sickening aroma. That’s the source. She stepped closer, left wrist’s scar throbbing as she raised the bike lock. The lullaby merged with Evan’s voice, sharp and cruel—“You can’t run from me, Rory.” She flinched, not from fear, but from the memory of his fist connecting with her left wrist, the scar’s origin a childhood accident (a fall from a Cardiff park’s oak tree) but its pain amplified by his abuse. She’d fought back that day, grabbing a broken bottle to defend herself, and that’s when she’d fled to London. I ran once. I’ll run again if I have to. The crack in the standing stone widened, and a small, pale figure stepped out—child-sized, with skin like dry paper and eyes like empty sockets. It reached for her, its thorn-like fingers grazing her delivery bag’s strap, and she swung the bike lock, hitting its arm with a loud clang. The figure dissolved into a cloud of black petals, which floated to the ground and vanished into the frost, leaving no trace behind. That’s one. Another figure appeared, then another, all around her—dozens of pale, paper-thin beings with thorn-like fingers and empty eyes. They moved in a slow, jerky rhythm, their whispers growing louder, a tangle of Evan’s voice and her mother’s lullaby that made her head ache. She swung the bike lock again, hitting nothing but air, and the Heartstone Pendant’s glow dimmed. The warmth faded, leaving a cold weight around her neck. She glanced at her watch: 12:04 AM. By her internal clock, she’d been in the Grove for hours, and the Golden Empress’s boss, Yu-Fei, would be wondering where she’d vanished to mid-shift, her undelivered orders piling up by the restaurant’s counter. Time’s not on my side. She pushed herself back, boots slipping on the frost, and her quick out-of-the-box thinking kicked in—she’d use the pendant’s fading pulse to find the boundary stone, then escape before the time shift trapped her outside for days, leaving her flat above Silas’ bar empty and her job at the Golden Empress lost. She couldn’t afford to lose either; the flat was her first safe space in years, and the delivery job was her only source of income. Follow the last of the warmth. She turned toward the nearest standing stone that marked the Grove’s boundary, the pendant’s faint warmth guiding her. The pale figures followed, their whispers growing louder, a tangle of taunts that picked at her most vulnerable memories—Evan’s rage, her father’s disappointment when she left Pre-Law, her mother’s quiet sadness when she fled Cardiff. She ran toward the stone, boots crunching over the frost-dusted grass, and grabbed its ridged bark as the time shift hit her hard. One second, she was in the Grove’s cold dark, surrounded by whispering figures; the next, she was standing in Richmond Park’s normal grass, her watch reading 12:05 AM. Don’t let them catch you. She leaned against a normal oak tree, breathing hard, left wrist’s scar throbbing, and stared at the Heartstone Pendant. Its crimson gem had returned to its faint inner glow, the warmth gone. She pulled out her phone, seeing a missed text from Yu-Fei—“Where are you? Your deliveries are piling up. Get back here or you’re fired.” She clenched her fist, the scar pulling tight, and tucked the phone back into her pocket. I have to get back. She turned toward her bike, parked by the park’s edge, but paused. A flash of movement caught her eye—something pale, darting behind a tree. It was smaller than the Grove’s figures, but its thorn-like fingers were visible in the moon’s faint glow. She clenched her fist, raising the bike lock, and watched as the figure vanished into the dark. She didn’t stay to look for it. She mounted her bike, pedaling toward the Golden Empress, her legs burning with the effort. The Grove’s cold still clung to her jacket, and the pendant’s faint glow pulsed once more against her chest.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:14:45.463Z" 2/20/2026, 7:14:45 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1707
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1707
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count6
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"sentinels"
count1
4
word"racing"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count3
6
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"pulsed"
3"sentinels"
4"racing"
5"pulse"
6"weight"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count3
highlights
0"clenched her fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences82
matches(empty)
73.17% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences82
filterMatches
0"watch’s"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen68
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1669
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1517
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.79
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
London5
Golden4
Empress4
Grove12
January2
Richmond3
Park3
Heartstone5
Pendant5
Pre-Law2
Evan6
Earth1
Fae2
Welsh2
Fae-touched1
Cardiff2
Eva1
You3
Yu-Fei2
Yu-Fei-She1
persons
0"Empress"
1"Grove"
2"January"
3"Pendant"
4"Evan"
5"Eva"
places
0"London"
1"Golden"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Heartstone"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
38.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a silent taunt"
1"as if hiding from the thing she couldn’t quite see, their vibrant hues fading to a dull gray"
2"quite see, their vibrant hues fading to a dull gray"
3"looked like tar, its stench mixing with t"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.599
wordCount1669
matches
0"not from fear, but from the memory of his fist connecting with her left wrist"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences82
matches
0"back that day"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean50.58
std49.15
cv0.972
sampleLengths
0185
16
2123
36
4120
54
673
73
872
94
1073
112
1291
132
1495
157
1668
173
1877
193
2084
2110
2272
232
24110
255
2677
276
28104
295
3072
315
32100
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
73.26% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs263
matches
0"was coming were prying"
1"were warning"
2"was standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences82
ratio0.256
matches
0"She’d ducked out of the Golden Empress mid-shift, a crumpled note from an unmarked envelope burning a hole in her denim jacket pocket—“The Grove holds the pendant’s truth. Go at midnight.” She paused at the first oak standing stone, its bark ridged like a prisoner’s knuckles rubbed raw from years of chain, and brushed a strand of straight black shoulder-length hair from her bright blue eyes."
1"The wildflowers at its base hit her first, a riot of clover, poppies, and cornflowers bursting in hues that shouldn’t exist under a cloud-shrouded moon—no flower blooms in January’s frost, not even in Richmond Park’s well-tended borders, and the Grove’s year-round wildflower flora felt like a silent taunt."
2"She’d worn it every day since it appeared—through delivery runs to rain-soaked London flats, through late nights studying old Pre-Law textbooks she’d abandoned in her flat above Silas’ bar (a relic of her reluctant Cardiff University tenure), through the quiet moments she’d caught herself staring at Evan’s old text messages before deleting them."
3"The pendant’s odd behavior—faint pulses when she passed certain alleyways, a glow that brightened when she felt Evan’s presence nearby—had nagged at her, but she’d brushed it off as a trick of the light until the note came."
4"She’d left the Golden Empress at 11:50 PM, a ten-minute bike ride to the park’s edge, but the Grove’s warped time behavior—an hour inside minutes or days outside—pricked at her intelligent, quick-thinking mind."
5"She reached into her delivery bag, fingers wrapping around the cold metal of her bike lock—her only weapon, a heavy U-shaped piece she’d carried since Evan’s last attempt to corner her on a delivery run to a quiet London alley."
6"She grabbed the silver chain, pulling it into view, and watched as its light danced across the Grove’s clearing—empty, save for the oak standing stones that ringed it like silent sentinels, and the wildflowers that dotted the ground in impossible hues."
7"A flash of movement—something small, pale, darting behind the next standing stone."
8"The lullaby wasn’t coming from the Grove’s edges—it was coming from inside her head, as if someone were prying into her most private memories, digging up the comfort of her mother’s voice to disarm her."
9"The ink had faded, the words rearranged into a new message—“The Grove hunts those who seek answers.” She crumpled it tighter, her mind racing to connect the dots: the pendant’s pulse, the time shift, the lullaby, the vanishing frost, the closed petals."
10"The oak boughs overhead drooped, their leaves rustling in a wind she still couldn’t feel, and the dewy grass vanished again—frost coating the ground once more, the wildflowers turning black as ash."
11"She turned again, and a flash of movement caught her eye—closer this time, pale and elongated, with fingers that curved like thorns."
12"The Heartstone Pendant’s glow brightened, and she noticed a faint crack in the stone’s ridged bark—wider than the others, oozing a thin black liquid that looked like tar, its stench mixing with the pine’s sweet scent to create a sickening aroma."
13"The lullaby merged with Evan’s voice, sharp and cruel—“You can’t run from me, Rory.” She flinched, not from fear, but from the memory of his fist connecting with her left wrist, the scar’s origin a childhood accident (a fall from a Cardiff park’s oak tree) but its pain amplified by his abuse."
14"The crack in the standing stone widened, and a small, pale figure stepped out—child-sized, with skin like dry paper and eyes like empty sockets."
15"Another figure appeared, then another, all around her—dozens of pale, paper-thin beings with thorn-like fingers and empty eyes."
16"She pushed herself back, boots slipping on the frost, and her quick out-of-the-box thinking kicked in—she’d use the pendant’s fading pulse to find the boundary stone, then escape before the time shift trapped her outside for days, leaving her flat above Silas’ bar empty and her job at the Golden Empress lost."
17"She couldn’t afford to lose either; the flat was her first safe space in years, and the delivery job was her only source of income."
18"The pale figures followed, their whispers growing louder, a tangle of taunts that picked at her most vulnerable memories—Evan’s rage, her father’s disappointment when she left Pre-Law, her mother’s quiet sadness when she fled Cardiff."
19"One second, she was in the Grove’s cold dark, surrounded by whispering figures; the next, she was standing in Richmond Park’s normal grass, her watch reading 12:05 AM."
20"A flash of movement caught her eye—something pale, darting behind a tree."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount325
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"over frost-dusted grass"
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.027692307692307693
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean20.35
std14.71
cv0.723
sampleLengths
025
166
248
346
46
532
653
738
86
921
1022
1126
1233
1318
144
1514
164
172
1813
1940
203
219
2222
2341
244
2514
2612
2721
2826
292
3036
3120
3235
332
3411
3542
3642
377
382
3910
4032
4124
423
4322
4414
4541
463
4713
4852
4919
42.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.2682926829268293
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners22
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences77
matches
0"She’d ducked out of the"
1"She twisted the crescent-shaped scar"
2"I shouldn’t have left the"
3"She’d worn it every day"
4"She stepped past the standing"
5"It thickened, sweet with pine"
6"She’d left the Golden Empress"
7"She’d heard old tales from"
8"My watch isn’t broken."
9"She tapped the face with"
10"She reached into her delivery"
11"She took another step, and"
12"She grabbed the silver chain,"
13"You’re reacting to something."
14"She turned in a slow"
15"She stepped toward it, left"
16"She stumbled back, boots hitting"
17"She fumbled with her jacket"
18"She’d fled Cardiff for London"
19"I didn’t come here to"
ratio0.584
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences77
matches
0"Rory hauled her delivery bag’s"
1"She’d ducked out of the"
2"The wildflowers at its base"
3"She twisted the crescent-shaped scar"
4"I shouldn’t have left the"
5"The pendant hung around her"
6"She’d worn it every day"
7"The pendant’s odd behavior—faint pulses"
8"The note gave no other"
9"She stepped past the standing"
10"It thickened, sweet with pine"
11"The grass turned soft, dewy,"
12"She’d left the Golden Empress"
13"She’d heard old tales from"
14"My watch isn’t broken."
15"She tapped the face with"
16"A branch creaked overhead."
17"She reached into her delivery"
18"She took another step, and"
19"The warmth seeping through her"
ratio0.935
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount18
matches
0"Rory hauled her delivery bag’s strap higher on her shoulder, boots crunching over frost-dusted grass that should’ve been brown and brittle in mid-January’s Lond…"
1"The wildflowers at its base hit her first, a riot of clover, poppies, and cornflowers bursting in hues that shouldn’t exist under a cloud-shrouded moon—no flowe…"
2"She twisted the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a childhood accident’s memento that pulled tight whenever she tensed, and let her eyes scan the stone’s …"
3"The pendant’s odd behavior—faint pulses when she passed certain alleyways, a glow that brightened when she felt Evan’s presence nearby—had nagged at her, but sh…"
4"It thickened, sweet with pine that had no business growing in Richmond Park’s deciduous landscape, and the frost under her boots vanished."
5"The grass turned soft, dewy, as if it were mid-July’s peak, and her watch’s hands spun backward for three sharp ticks before freezing at 12:01 AM."
6"She grabbed the silver chain, pulling it into view, and watched as its light danced across the Grove’s clearing—empty, save for the oak standing stones that rin…"
7"The wildflowers at her feet closed their petals, as if hiding from the thing she couldn’t quite see, their vibrant hues fading to a dull gray."
8"The lullaby wasn’t coming from the Grove’s edges—it was coming from inside her head, as if someone were prying into her most private memories, digging up the co…"
9"The oak boughs overhead drooped, their leaves rustling in a wind she still couldn’t feel, and the dewy grass vanished again—frost coating the ground once more, …"
10"She pressed her hand to her chest, the pendant’s pulse quickening with each creak, as if it were warning her of an approaching threat."
11"The Heartstone Pendant’s glow brightened, and she noticed a faint crack in the stone’s ridged bark—wider than the others, oozing a thin black liquid that looked…"
12"The figure dissolved into a cloud of black petals, which floated to the ground and vanished into the frost, leaving no trace behind."
13"They moved in a slow, jerky rhythm, their whispers growing louder, a tangle of Evan’s voice and her mother’s lullaby that made her head ache."
14"She turned toward the nearest standing stone that marked the Grove’s boundary, the pendant’s faint warmth guiding her."
15"The pale figures followed, their whispers growing louder, a tangle of taunts that picked at her most vulnerable memories—Evan’s rage, her father’s disappointmen…"
16"She leaned against a normal oak tree, breathing hard, left wrist’s scar throbbing, and stared at the Heartstone Pendant."
17"She mounted her bike, pedaling toward the Golden Empress, her legs burning with the effort."
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