Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7MX7XZM4M9MVG1KVSR6ZC

Run Details

Duration:
19.4s
Cost:
$0.000756
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air smelled wrong the moment they stepped through the standing stones. Rory’s boots sank into damp earth that gave way too easily, as if the ground itself had forgotten how to hold weight. She paused, fingers brushing the rough bark of an oak so ancient its rings had grown in spirals, defying time. Nyx moved ahead, their shadow stretching unnaturally long across the moss, as if the light here bent to some unseen rule. “This isn’t just a grove,” Rory muttered, voice low. “It’s a *place*.” Isolde didn’t answer. She never did, not in words that made sense. Instead, she turned her head—slow, deliberate—and her lavender eyes caught the dappled light filtering through the canopy. The trees here weren’t just tall; they *leaned*, their branches twisting into shapes that almost looked like hands reaching for something just out of sight. Nyx’s fingers twitched at their sides. “The Veil’s thinner here. I can feel it.” Rory’s pulse jumped. She’d read about the Veil in fragments of old texts, but feeling it was different. It prickled against her skin like static, a hum beneath the silence. She reached for the Heartstone pendant tucked beneath her shirt, the crimson gem warm against her palm. It pulsed once, faintly, as if in agreement. “You’re bleeding,” Isolde said suddenly. Rory blinked. A thin line of dark red welled from her wrist, the crescent scar she’d had since childhood. She hadn’t even noticed the cut. “What?” Isolde’s gaze was fixed on the wound. “The grove doesn’t like strangers.” Nyx’s shadow deepened, pooling at their feet like spilled ink. “Or it doesn’t like *her*.” Rory ignored them, pressing her thumb to the cut. The blood didn’t stop. Instead, it *moved*, creeping up her arm in a slow, deliberate trail, as if something was pulling it toward her elbow. She hissed, jerking her hand back—but the blood had already stopped. No mark remained. “What the hell was that?” Isolde smiled, but it didn’t reach her eyes. “A test.” The grove shifted around them. One moment, the path was a narrow dirt trail winding between ferns and wildflowers that bloomed in impossible colors—purple like bruises, blue like frozen fire. The next, the flowers had *moved*. Petals unfurled toward them, stems bending in unnatural arcs, as if the grove itself was breathing. Nyx exhaled sharply. “It’s reacting to the blade.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the hilt of the Fae-forged dagger at her belt. The moment she’d drawn it, the air had grown heavier, the scent of damp earth and something metallic—like old coins—filling her lungs. The trees groaned, their leaves rustling though there was no wind. “It knows what you are,” Isolde murmured. Rory swallowed. “What *are* we?” Isolde’s lips curled. “Not what you think.” They pressed deeper into the grove. The standing stones loomed ahead, their surfaces carved with spirals and symbols that made Rory’s head ache just to look at them. The ground beneath her feet shifted from soft earth to something slick and smooth, like polished stone, then back again. Shadows stretched where there should have been light, and the light itself seemed to *pulse*, as if the grove was alive. Nyx stopped suddenly. Their breath hitched. “There.” A clearing opened before them, bathed in golden light that didn’t come from the sun. At its center stood a pool of water so still it looked like glass. But the surface wasn’t flat—it *rippled*, though nothing touched it. And beneath the water, shapes moved. Not reflections. Not illusions. *People.* Or what looked like them. Figures with too-long limbs, their faces blurred as if the grove itself refused to let them be seen clearly. One reached out a hand toward the surface, fingers brushing the water—but the moment they did, the ripple distorted, and the figure *changed*. Their form stretched, warped, then settled into something else entirely. Rory’s stomach twisted. “What are they?” Isolde stepped forward, her bare feet not disturbing the water’s surface. “Echoes.” Nyx’s voice was a whisper. “Of what?” “The things that *shouldn’t* be here.” The water’s ripples accelerated, the figures beneath growing more frantic. One lunged upward— —and the grove *screamed*. The trees shuddered. The flowers withered in an instant, their petals crumbling to dust. The air turned thick, suffocating, like breathing through wet wool. Rory’s skin prickled, her vision swimming. She fumbled for the dagger, gripping the hilt as the ground beneath her feet *shifted*. The pool’s surface exploded. Water sprayed upward in a geyser, and from its depths rose a shape—tall, skeletal, its limbs too long, its fingers ending in claws. Its face was a void, a darkness that *pulled*, like staring into a black hole. It had no eyes, but Rory felt them anyway, burning into her skull. “Run,” Nyx hissed. Rory didn’t need to be told twice. She turned—and the grove *closed* behind them. The path vanished. The standing stones shifted, their surfaces sealing together like a wound knitting shut. The trees groaned, their branches twisting into a barrier, leaves forming a thicket that blocked the way back. The air smelled of ozone and something older, something *hungry*. Isolde’s voice cut through the panic. “It’s not letting us leave.” Nyx’s shadow writhed, their form flickering between solid and smoke. “Then we don’t leave.” Rory’s breath came in ragged gasps. The thing in the pool had vanished, but the grove still *felt* wrong. The ground beneath her feet was no longer earth—it was *stone*, cold and unyielding, carved with the same spirals as the standing stones. She pressed her palm against it, and the stone *pulsed* beneath her touch, as if it had a heartbeat. “What is this place?” she demanded. Isolde’s smile was serene. “A door.” Nyx’s voice was a blade. “To where?” The grove answered for her. The standing stones *moved*. Not shifted. Not groaned. *Moved*, like gates swinging open on unseen hinges. Beyond them, darkness yawned—a void that wasn’t empty, but *full*, pressing against the edges of Rory’s vision. The air smelled of burnt sugar and something metallic, like old blood. And then the whispers started. Not words. Not voices. *Sounds*, like fingers dragging across glass, like breath against a microphone, like a thousand voices speaking at once but saying nothing. Rory’s grip tightened on the dagger. The Heartstone pendant burned against her chest. Isolde took a step forward. “Don’t,” Nyx warned. She didn’t listen. Her foot crossed the threshold—and the world *shifted*. The grove dissolved. The standing stones crumbled to dust. The air turned thick, cloying, the scent of spiced wine and roasting meat filling Rory’s lungs. She staggered, her vision swimming as the ground beneath her feet changed from stone to something softer, something *alive*—vines, petals, the press of too many bodies in too small a space. Nyx’s shadow stretched out, their form flickering as they tried to anchor themselves. “We’re not in the grove anymore.” Rory’s fingers found the dagger’s hilt again. The blade was ice-cold, but it *burned* in her grip. Ahead of her, a feast stretched out beneath a sky the color of amber. Tables groaned under the weight of platters piled high with fruits she didn’t recognize, meats that steamed in their own juices, desserts that glistened with syrups thick as honey. Servants—no, *slaves*—moved between the tables, their faces hollow, their movements jerky, as if they were being pulled by strings. And at the center of it all, seated on a throne of gilded bone, was a man. His skin was the color of polished mahogany, his eyes black as pitch. He wore a crown of twisted silver, and in his hands, he held a goblet brimming with wine that *moved* even as he didn’t drink from it. Prince Belphegor. Rory’s breath caught. The feast *noticed* her. Heads turned. Forks clattered. The whispers became words—hushed, greedy, *hungry*. And then the music started. A violin’s cry, high and keening, like a soul being torn apart. The slaves began to dance, their movements stiff, unnatural, as if they were being forced to perform. The air hummed with the scent of roasting flesh and something sweeter, something *wrong*. Belphegor’s gaze locked onto hers. And he *smiled*. His teeth were too white. Too sharp. “Welcome,” he said, his voice like velvet over a blade. “To Dymas.”
created_at"2026-02-20T19:15:26.09Z" 2/20/2026, 7:15:26 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.071
89.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1387
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1387
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"loomed"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"echoes"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"depths"
count1
9
word"dance"
count1
10
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pulse"
2"silence"
3"pulsed"
4"loomed"
5"stomach"
6"echoes"
7"whisper"
8"depths"
9"dance"
10"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences131
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences152
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans32
markdownWords32
totalWords1370
ratio0.023
matches
0"place"
1"leaned"
2"her"
3"moved"
4"moved"
5"are"
6"pulse"
7"rippled"
8"People."
9"changed"
10"shouldn’t"
11"screamed"
12"shifted"
13"pulled"
14"closed"
15"hungry"
16"felt"
17"stone"
18"pulsed"
19"moved"
20"Moved"
21"full"
22"Sounds"
23"shifted"
24"alive"
25"burned"
26"slaves"
27"moved"
28"noticed"
29"hungry"
30"wrong"
31"smiled"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.47% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1276
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.41
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Isolde10
Veil1
Heartstone2
Rory18
Fae-forged1
Belphegor2
Nyx11
One3
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Rory"
2"Belphegor"
3"Nyx"
4"One"
places(empty)
globalScore0.795
windowScore1
88.27% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like hands reaching for something"
1"looked like glass"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1370
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences152
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean19.57
std19.92
cv1.018
sampleLengths
012
163
212
354
414
555
65
726
812
915
1048
115
1210
135
1447
158
1646
177
185
197
2069
217
2249
231
2457
256
2612
277
286
2913
304
3145
324
3351
343
357
367
3744
3811
3914
4061
416
426
437
445
454
4641
475
4825
4913
94.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences131
matches
0"was fixed"
1"being pulled"
2"being torn"
3"being forced"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs233
matches
0"was pulling"
1"was breathing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences152
ratio0.112
matches
0"Instead, she turned her head—slow, deliberate—and her lavender eyes caught the dappled light filtering through the canopy."
1"The trees here weren’t just tall; they *leaned*, their branches twisting into shapes that almost looked like hands reaching for something just out of sight."
2"She hissed, jerking her hand back—but the blood had already stopped."
3"One moment, the path was a narrow dirt trail winding between ferns and wildflowers that bloomed in impossible colors—purple like bruises, blue like frozen fire."
4"The moment she’d drawn it, the air had grown heavier, the scent of damp earth and something metallic—like old coins—filling her lungs."
5"But the surface wasn’t flat—it *rippled*, though nothing touched it."
6"One reached out a hand toward the surface, fingers brushing the water—but the moment they did, the ripple distorted, and the figure *changed*."
7"One lunged upward—"
8"—and the grove *screamed*."
9"Water sprayed upward in a geyser, and from its depths rose a shape—tall, skeletal, its limbs too long, its fingers ending in claws."
10"She turned—and the grove *closed* behind them."
11"The ground beneath her feet was no longer earth—it was *stone*, cold and unyielding, carved with the same spirals as the standing stones."
12"Beyond them, darkness yawned—a void that wasn’t empty, but *full*, pressing against the edges of Rory’s vision."
13"Her foot crossed the threshold—and the world *shifted*."
14"She staggered, her vision swimming as the ground beneath her feet changed from stone to something softer, something *alive*—vines, petals, the press of too many bodies in too small a space."
15"Servants—no, *slaves*—moved between the tables, their faces hollow, their movements jerky, as if they were being pulled by strings."
16"The whispers became words—hushed, greedy, *hungry*."
99.13% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1293
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.040989945862335654
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006187161639597835
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences152
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences152
mean9.01
std6.93
cv0.768
sampleLengths
012
122
220
321
49
53
63
79
817
925
106
118
123
1315
1412
1517
168
175
182
1917
206
211
227
235
2410
255
269
274
2821
2911
303
315
328
332
345
3525
366
3716
383
395
4013
4122
4211
437
442
453
463
474
486
4922
43.20% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3223684210526316
totalSentences152
uniqueOpeners49
58.48% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences114
matches
0"Instead, she turned her head—slow,"
1"Instead, it *moved*, creeping up"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences114
matches
0"She paused, fingers brushing the"
1"She never did, not in"
2"She’d read about the Veil"
3"It prickled against her skin"
4"She reached for the Heartstone"
5"It pulsed once, faintly, as"
6"She hadn’t even noticed the"
7"She hissed, jerking her hand"
8"They pressed deeper into the"
9"Their breath hitched."
10"Their form stretched, warped, then"
11"She fumbled for the dagger,"
12"Its face was a void,"
13"It had no eyes, but"
14"She turned—and the grove *closed*"
15"She pressed her palm against"
16"She didn’t listen."
17"Her foot crossed the threshold—and"
18"She staggered, her vision swimming"
19"His skin was the color"
ratio0.202
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences114
matches
0"The air smelled wrong the"
1"Rory’s boots sank into damp"
2"She paused, fingers brushing the"
3"Nyx moved ahead, their shadow"
4"Rory muttered, voice low"
5"Isolde didn’t answer."
6"She never did, not in"
7"The trees here weren’t just"
8"Nyx’s fingers twitched at their"
9"Rory’s pulse jumped."
10"She’d read about the Veil"
11"It prickled against her skin"
12"She reached for the Heartstone"
13"It pulsed once, faintly, as"
14"Isolde said suddenly"
15"A thin line of dark"
16"She hadn’t even noticed the"
17"Isolde’s gaze was fixed on"
18"Nyx’s shadow deepened, pooling at"
19"Rory ignored them, pressing her"
ratio0.833
43.86% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"—and the grove *screamed*."
ratio0.009
7.39% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Nyx moved ahead, their shadow stretching unnaturally long across the moss, as if the light here bent to some unseen rule."
1"The trees here weren’t just tall; they *leaned*, their branches twisting into shapes that almost looked like hands reaching for something just out of sight."
2"Instead, it *moved*, creeping up her arm in a slow, deliberate trail, as if something was pulling it toward her elbow."
3"One moment, the path was a narrow dirt trail winding between ferns and wildflowers that bloomed in impossible colors—purple like bruises, blue like frozen fire."
4"Petals unfurled toward them, stems bending in unnatural arcs, as if the grove itself was breathing."
5"The trees groaned, their branches twisting into a barrier, leaves forming a thicket that blocked the way back."
6"She pressed her palm against it, and the stone *pulsed* beneath her touch, as if it had a heartbeat."
7"Beyond them, darkness yawned—a void that wasn’t empty, but *full*, pressing against the edges of Rory’s vision."
8"Tables groaned under the weight of platters piled high with fruits she didn’t recognize, meats that steamed in their own juices, desserts that glistened with sy…"
9"Servants—no, *slaves*—moved between the tables, their faces hollow, their movements jerky, as if they were being pulled by strings."
10"The slaves began to dance, their movements stiff, unnatural, as if they were being forced to perform."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory muttered, voice low"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"Nyx warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.357
78.3324%