Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7N0WV15HWVEY8HV0VFZKW

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 38s
Cost:
$0.039255
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape that fluttered like a warning flag in the stale underground draft, her sharp jaw set as she scanned the dim expanse of the abandoned Tube station. Vendors scattered, their ethereal wares vanishing into shadows as uniforms herded them back. She spotted the body immediately, sprawled amid overturned crates of glowing herbs and shattered vials that leaked iridescent fluid onto the cracked platform tiles. "Quinn, over here," called a uniform from the far end, his torch beam cutting through the haze. "It's a mess. Looks like a deal gone bad." Harlow strode forward, her worn leather watch ticking steadily on her left wrist, a remnant from her military days that kept her grounded in chaos like this. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of it in debriefs, dismissed as urban legends until now. An underground bazaar peddling enchanted trinkets and forbidden knowledge, tucked beneath Camden's bustling streets. Entry required a bone token, they'd said, but someone had forced their way in tonight. The victim lay face-down, a Shade artisan by the looks of his elongated fingers and pallid skin etched with faint runes. Blood pooled around his head, dark and viscous, mingling with the spilled alchemical substances that fizzed softly on contact. Harlow knelt, pulling on gloves with military precision. No visible weapon, but the wound at the base of his skull suggested blunt force. She tilted her head, noting the angle—struck from behind, mid-stride perhaps. Crates nearby bore fresh dents, as if a scuffle had erupted suddenly. "Detective Quinn," came a familiar voice from the shadows, laced with a slight Polish lilt softened by Oxford polish. Eva Kowalski emerged, her curly red hair tucked behind her left ear in that nervous habit Harlow had clocked during their last encounter. She clutched a worn leather satchel bulging with books, round glasses perched on her freckled nose. "They called me in for consultation. British Museum's restricted archives—occult expertise, you know." Harlow straightened, her brown eyes narrowing. Eva, the researcher who'd crossed her path during that warehouse raid last month. Always popping up where the weird cases clustered. "What are you doing here, Kowalski? This is a crime scene, not a field trip." Eva adjusted her satchel strap, green eyes flicking to the body. "The Met requested it. This market deals in artefacts that defy conventional analysis. Look at those vials—banned substances, yes, but laced with ectoplasmic residue. Not your standard robbery gone wrong." Harlow glanced at the uniform nearby, who nodded confirmation. Fine. But she didn't like it. Eva's involvement screamed connections to that clique she'd been tracking—the ones dabbling in the unexplained, the same sort that had claimed her partner DS Morris three years back. Unexplained circumstances, the report said. Supernatural, her gut insisted. "Walk me through it," Harlow said, stepping around a puddle of glowing liquid that hummed faintly, like distant bees. Eva crouched beside the body, careful not to disturb the evidence. "Victim's a known vendor here. Sold attuned items—compasses, amulets, that sort of thing. See this?" She pointed to a small brass object clutched in the dead Shade's hand, its face etched with protective sigils, needle frozen northward. A patina of verdigris coated the casing. "Veil Compass. Points to supernatural rifts. But it's damaged—needle's bent, like someone tried to pry it free." Harlow leaned in. Indeed, the compass looked tampered with, but the victim's grip was rigid, post-mortem. "So, motive: theft. Attacker grabs for it, victim resists, bang—skull meets crate edge." Eva shook her head, tucking a stray curl behind her ear again. "Too straightforward. The Market moves every full moon for a reason—security. No one just stumbles in. And look at the blood spatter." She gestured to the arcing pattern on the nearby wall, droplets that seemed to defy gravity, hanging mid-air before dripping slowly. Harlow frowned. Physics didn't bend like that. The spatter suggested high velocity, but the wound was blunt, not piercing. Something didn't add up. She paced the platform, her boots echoing in the cavernous space where old Tube tracks vanished into darkness. Stalls lined the walls, makeshift booths draped in velvet that shimmered unnaturally, offering everything from whispering scrolls to jars of captured shadows. A few vendors lingered at the edges, watched by officers, their eyes glowing faintly in the low light. "Uniforms said they found the body after a tip-off," Harlow noted. "Anonymous call, traced to a burner in Camden. No witnesses stepping forward?" "Market folk keep to themselves," Eva replied, her voice dropping to a scholarly murmur, as if quoting from one of her ancient tomes. "But I've heard rumours. This compass wasn't just any trinket—crafted by Shade artisans, attuned to rifts. If it pointed to something valuable, say a portal opening nearby, that could be the real prize." Harlow picked up a shard of vial glass, holding it to the light. It refracted oddly, casting rainbow patterns that danced like fireflies. "You're saying this isn't about the compass itself? Then why bash his head in for it?" Eva stood, brushing dust from her knees. "Perhaps misdirection. Kill the vendor, make it look like a botched theft, while the real goal is whatever the compass was pointing to. Check the needle—it's stuck, but before it bent, it might have indicated direction." Harlow examined it closer. The sigils pulsed faintly under her touch, warm despite the chill air. She recalled Morris's case—similar oddities, evidence that twisted logic. A warehouse full of glowing artefacts, her partner vanishing in a flash of light. No body, just echoes. She shook off the memory, focusing. The blood. That hanging spatter bothered her. She reached out, and her finger brushed a droplet—it clung, viscous and cool, then fell with a deliberate plop. "Not blood," Harlow murmured. "Or not just blood." Eva's eyes widened behind her glasses. "Alchemical admixture? But that would mean—" "The wound's a fake." Harlow probed the victim's skull gently. No give, but the "blood" smeared wrong, too thick, like theatrical gel mixed with something luminous. She wiped it on her glove, and it shimmered. "This is staged. Victim's not dead from trauma—look at the pooling. No livor mortis yet, but the body's cool. Poison, maybe, administered earlier." Eva leaned in, her freckled face paling. "Staged? But why? The Market's wards would detect intruders. Unless..." Harlow's mind raced. The tip-off, the anonymous call—too convenient. She glanced at the compass again. If Eva was right, it pointed to rifts. Portals. The kind that could swallow a detective whole, like Morris. She twisted the compass casing experimentally. A click, and the needle sprang free, whirring to life. It spun wildly, then settled—not north, but toward the dark tunnel mouth at the platform's end. "Something's there," Harlow said, her voice steady despite the pulse in her veins. "A rift, you think?" Eva nodded, but her hand strayed to her satchel, fingers twitching. "Possibly. But Detective, if it's active, we shouldn't—" Harlow ignored her, pocketing the compass temporarily—evidence, after all—and motioned to a uniform. "Secure the perimeter. No one leaves." As she moved toward the tunnel, the air thickened, a hum building like static before a storm. The vendors murmured, their eyes following her. One, an elderly crone with scales on her arms, cackled softly. "Foolish mortal. The Veil thins." Harlow's watch ticked louder in her ears. She drew her torch, beam piercing the gloom. Tracks gleamed wetly, and up ahead, a faint glow emanated from a crack in the wall—no, not a crack. A shimmering portal, edges fraying like torn fabric. Eva caught up, breathing quick. "Quinn, wait. This could be what the killer wanted us to find. A trap." "Or the truth," Harlow countered. She stepped closer, the compass vibrating in her pocket. The glow intensified, revealing shapes beyond—another market? No, a chamber, figures moving in silhouette. One figure turned, face obscured, but holding something familiar—a bone token, perhaps, or another compass. The air warped, pulling at her clothes. Then the portal pulsed, and a hand reached through—from the other side, grasping at the air. Harlow froze. The hand bore a scar she knew well. Morris's scar, from that botched raid in '18. "Impossible," she whispered. Eva grabbed her arm. "Detective—" But the portal surged, the hand extending further, and a voice echoed through, distorted but unmistakable. "Harlow... help..." The ground trembled as the rift widened, cracks spidering across the platform. Vendors screamed, stalls collapsing in a cascade of enchanted debris. Harlow lunged forward, but Eva pulled her back just as a burst of energy erupted, flinging shards of reality like shrapnel.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.382
leniency0.765
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1450
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"suddenly"
2"slowly"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
17.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1450
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"fluttered"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"shattered"
count1
3
word"etched"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count2
5
word"lilt"
count1
6
word"encounter"
count1
7
word"standard"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"velvet"
count1
10
word"shimmered"
count2
11
word"traced"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count2
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"echoes"
count1
15
word"raced"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
17
word"gloom"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
19
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"fluttered"
1"scanned"
2"shattered"
3"etched"
4"familiar"
5"lilt"
6"encounter"
7"standard"
8"echoing"
9"velvet"
10"shimmered"
11"traced"
12"pulsed"
13"chill"
14"echoes"
15"raced"
16"pulse"
17"gloom"
18"echoed"
19"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences99
matches(empty)
99.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences99
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences120
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1423
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
52.05% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1072
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.96
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow21
Quinn1
Tube2
Veil1
Market1
Camden1
Shade2
Polish1
Oxford1
Eva15
Kowalski1
Morris4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tube"
3"Camden"
4"Shade"
5"Eva"
6"Kowalski"
7"Morris"
places
0"Oxford"
globalScore0.521
windowScore0.667
85.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"droplets that seemed to defy gravity, hanging mid-air before dripping slowly"
1"as if quoting from one of her ancient tomes"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.703
wordCount1423
matches
0"not north, but toward the dark tunnel mouth at the platform's end"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences120
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean33.88
std18.98
cv0.56
sampleLengths
047
124
226
372
440
546
671
742
841
952
1019
1172
1229
1355
1481
1523
1656
1739
1843
1943
2032
218
2212
2358
2417
2534
2632
2717
2819
2919
3040
3142
3219
3328
3422
3516
3618
373
385
3918
4022
4121
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs207
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences120
ratio0.092
matches
0"She tilted her head, noting the angle—struck from behind, mid-stride perhaps."
1"Eva's involvement screamed connections to that clique she'd been tracking—the ones dabbling in the unexplained, the same sort that had claimed her partner DS Morris three years back."
2"She recalled Morris's case—similar oddities, evidence that twisted logic."
3"She reached out, and her finger brushed a droplet—it clung, viscous and cool, then fell with a deliberate plop."
4"The tip-off, the anonymous call—too convenient."
5"It spun wildly, then settled—not north, but toward the dark tunnel mouth at the platform's end."
6"Harlow ignored her, pocketing the compass temporarily—evidence, after all—and motioned to a uniform."
7"Tracks gleamed wetly, and up ahead, a faint glow emanated from a crack in the wall—no, not a crack."
8"The glow intensified, revealing shapes beyond—another market?"
9"One figure turned, face obscured, but holding something familiar—a bone token, perhaps, or another compass."
10"Then the portal pulsed, and a hand reached through—from the other side, grasping at the air."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1024
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.03515625
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.0185546875
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences120
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences120
mean11.86
std8.08
cv0.681
sampleLengths
034
113
224
317
49
527
63
713
814
915
1021
1119
128
1315
1411
1512
1619
1723
1816
1913
206
2113
228
2315
2411
2530
269
271
285
2928
305
314
3219
3311
3437
357
3617
373
3813
3913
4012
4143
422
435
4412
454
4618
4722
4818
4911
72.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.43333333333333335
totalSentences120
uniqueOpeners52
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences90
matches
0"Always popping up where the"
1"Indeed, the compass looked tampered"
2"Then the portal pulsed, and"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences90
matches
0"She spotted the body immediately,"
1"She'd heard whispers of it"
2"She tilted her head, noting"
3"She clutched a worn leather"
4"She pointed to a small"
5"She gestured to the arcing"
6"She paced the platform, her"
7"It refracted oddly, casting rainbow"
8"She recalled Morris's case—similar oddities,"
9"She shook off the memory,"
10"She reached out, and her"
11"She wiped it on her"
12"She glanced at the compass"
13"She twisted the compass casing"
14"It spun wildly, then settled—not"
15"She drew her torch, beam"
16"She stepped closer, the compass"
ratio0.189
65.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences90
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
1"Vendors scattered, their ethereal wares"
2"She spotted the body immediately,"
3"Harlow strode forward, her worn"
4"The Veil Market."
5"She'd heard whispers of it"
6"An underground bazaar peddling enchanted"
7"Entry required a bone token,"
8"The victim lay face-down, a"
9"Blood pooled around his head,"
10"Harlow knelt, pulling on gloves"
11"She tilted her head, noting"
12"Eva Kowalski emerged, her curly"
13"She clutched a worn leather"
14"Harlow straightened, her brown eyes"
15"Eva, the researcher who'd crossed"
16"Eva adjusted her satchel strap,"
17"Harlow glanced at the uniform"
18"Eva's involvement screamed connections to"
19"Harlow said, stepping around a"
ratio0.789
55.56% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"If Eva was right, it"
ratio0.011
12.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape that fluttered like a warning flag in the stale underground draft, her sharp jaw set as she scanned the dim …"
1"She spotted the body immediately, sprawled amid overturned crates of glowing herbs and shattered vials that leaked iridescent fluid onto the cracked platform ti…"
2"Harlow strode forward, her worn leather watch ticking steadily on her left wrist, a remnant from her military days that kept her grounded in chaos like this."
3"Blood pooled around his head, dark and viscous, mingling with the spilled alchemical substances that fizzed softly on contact."
4"Eva, the researcher who'd crossed her path during that warehouse raid last month."
5"Eva's involvement screamed connections to that clique she'd been tracking—the ones dabbling in the unexplained, the same sort that had claimed her partner DS Mo…"
6"Stalls lined the walls, makeshift booths draped in velvet that shimmered unnaturally, offering everything from whispering scrolls to jars of captured shadows."
7"A warehouse full of glowing artefacts, her partner vanishing in a flash of light."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"called a uniform from the far end, his torch beam cutting through the haze"
1"Harlow said, her voice steady despite the pulse in her veins"
32.35% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Harlow noted (note)"
1"Harlow murmured (murmur)"
2"Harlow probed (probe)"
3"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.235
leniency0.471
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.235
80.7811%