Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7PCC650TZX6STDQHKB4H6

Run Details

Duration:
32.5s
Cost:
$0.002000
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant, its deep crimson gem pulsing like a heartbeat against her palm. The silver chain bit into her skin, warm—not hot, but insistent, as if urging her forward. She stood at the edge of the rift, a tear in the Veil that shimmered like heat haze over asphalt, distorting the familiar chill of a London winter night. Richmond Park stretched behind her, fog-shrouded oaks whispering in the wind, but ahead... ahead was something else entirely. Isolde's pale lavender eyes gleamed in the dim light filtering through the ancient standing stones that ringed the clearing. The Half-Fae seer moved without a sound, her silver hair swaying like willow branches in a breeze that didn't touch the ground. No footprints marred the frost-kissed grass where she stepped. "The amber veil thins where hunger calls," she murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk. "Step through the feast's open maw, and taste the glutton's thrall." Nyx hovered at Rory's shoulder, their form a humanoid silhouette of writhing shadow, faintly glowing violet eyes the only anchor to something humanoid. They had no breath to fog the air, no weight to sink the earth, but Rory felt their presence like a chill draft down her spine. "It's stable," Nyx whispered, their voice a wind through cracked stone. "The portal holds. For now." As a Shade, they could slip between realms like smoke through fingers, but even they paused, tendrils of darkness coiling uneasily. Rory glanced at the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a relic from a childhood tumble off her father's garden wall. It itched now, as if the past tugged at her too. At twenty-five, she'd fled Cardiff's stifling expectations—Pre-Law lectures, an abusive ex named Evan who left bruises deeper than skin—for London's chaotic anonymity. Delivering dim sum by day, crashing above Silas's bar by night, she'd thought her life mundane enough. Then Eva's warnings, the pendant's anonymous arrival, and now this: chasing whispers of Hel to unravel a curse she barely understood. Cool-headed, they called her. Quick-thinking. But her heart hammered like a delivery van over potholes. "Right," Rory said, forcing steadiness into her voice. Straight shoulder-length black hair whipped across her bright blue eyes as she squared her shoulders. At five-foot-six, she felt small against the rift's pull, but the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip—Isolde's gift, slender and leaf-shaped, cold as moonlight—reminded her she wasn't defenseless. Moonsilver hummed faintly against her thigh, eager. "Let's not linger. In we go." She stepped forward first, the Veil parting like cool silk against her skin. A disorienting lurch yanked at her gut, as if the world folded inward. Then, solidity returned, but nothing else did. The air hit her like a sip of mulled wine—thick, spiced, laced with the heady perfume of overripe fruit and roasting meats. No London fog here; the sky arched overhead in a warm amber glow, not the black-velvet night she knew, but a perpetual dusk lit from within, as if the heavens simmered on a low boil. Below, the ground unfurled in rolling waves of green, but not the tidy lawns of Richmond Park. Vineyards sprawled like living tapestries, grapes the size of fists dangling from trellises that twisted into impossible knots, their skins shimmering in hues of sapphire and gold. Orchards dotted the landscape, trees heavy with fruits she'd never seen: orbs like swollen hearts pulsing with inner light, clusters of berries that wept crimson nectar onto the soil. Rory's boots sank into loamy earth, soft and yielding, as if the ground itself feasted on excess. She inhaled deeply, and a wave of warmth flooded her chest, tempting her to loosen her coat, to taste the air. But unease prickled at the edges—too sweet, too inviting, like the false comfort of Evan's apologies. "God, it's... alive," she breathed, turning in a slow circle. The air hummed with distant laughter, clinking goblets, the sizzle of unseen fires. No birdsong, but a low, rhythmic thrum, like a heartbeat echoing from the earth. Nyx materialized fully beside her, their six-foot-two frame solidifying into a lean silhouette cloaked in shadow. They tilted their head, violet eyes scanning the horizon. "Dymas," they confirmed, the name slipping out like a sigh. "Gluttony's domain. I remember fragments from Aldric's time—feasts that never end, hungers that devour the soul." Their voice carried the weight of centuries trapped between realms, a sorcerer's hubris turned to eternal whisper. Isolde glided past, her ethereal form ageless and untouched by the warmth, silver hair catching glints of amber like threads of captured sunlight. She paused at a vine, plucking a golden grape that burst under her touch, releasing a scent of honeyed smoke. "The prince's table stretches long," she said, lips curving in a knowing smile. "But beware the salt that seasons the endless course. What fills the belly empties the spirit." Rory shot her a look. "Riddles later, Isolde. We need to move." The pendant throbbed hotter now, its glow visible through her clenched fist, pointing deeper into the vineyards like a compass drawn in blood. They were here for answers—why the pendant had chosen her, what rift in the Veil threatened London—but first, survival. The group pressed on, weaving through the vines. The path—if it could be called that—emerged unbidden, a winding trail of crushed petals and fallen fruits that squelched underfoot. Rory's senses sharpened with each step: the air grew denser, carrying strains of music—lutes and flutes weaving melodies that tugged at her resolve, making her mouth water despite the half-eaten sandwich in her pocket from the shift at Golden Empress. She shook it off, focusing on the details. The leaves rustled without wind, as if breathing, and shadows stretched long under the amber sky, pooling like ink in the dips between hills. Unease crept in as they crested a rise. Below, in a vast amphitheater carved from obsidian-veined marble, a feast unfolded. Tables groaned under platters of extravagance: roasted beasts with hides like jeweled mosaics, pies that steamed with visions of golden crusts revealing rivers of gravy, fruits carved into sculptures that wept ambrosia. Helbound souls—mortals contracted from Earth, their eyes hollow with eternal servitude—scurried about, clad in silks stained with sauces. Chefs bellowed orders in tongues that twisted like smoke, their knives flashing as they diced exotic roots that pulsed with faint life. One soul, a burly man with flour-dusted hands, glanced up and froze. His gaze lingered on Rory's pendant, hunger flickering—not for food, but recognition. "Travelers," he rasped, voice thick as porridge. "Come to compete? Prince Belphegor delights in new palates." Rory's hand drifted to the Fae blade, its cold bite grounding her. "We're just passing through. Seen any... unusual stones? Red ones?" The man laughed, a wet, indulgent sound, and waved a dripping ladle. "All is feast here, lass. Eat, and forget your quests." He turned back to his work, but Rory caught the tremor in his hands, the way his eyes darted to the shadows beyond the tables. Wonder bloomed despite the dread. As they skirted the amphitheater's edge, Rory reached out, brushing a low-hanging branch. The fruit yielded like velvet, warm juice trickling over her fingers. She licked it instinctively—sweetness exploded on her tongue, a cascade of flavors: sun-ripened peaches laced with cinnamon, the tang of forgotten summers. For a heartbeat, Cardiff's gray rains vanished; she was a child again, racing through her mother's garden, free. But the aftertaste lingered, cloying, pulling at her like chains disguised as silk. "Stop," Nyx hissed, their shadow-form flickering as they grabbed her wrist. Tendrils of darkness cooled the stickiness on her skin. "It's laced. The excess binds you here." Rory yanked her hand back, wiping it on her jeans, cheeks flushing. "Bloody hell. Thanks." Her pulse raced, the pendant's warmth now a warning burn. Isolde watched with those unblinking lavender eyes. "The vine gives what the heart craves, but the root drinks deep from the vein. Deeper we go, where the true banquet hides." They descended into a sunken garden, the air shifting to a humid embrace, heavy with the scent of blooming nightshade and caramelized sugar. Streams of what looked like liquid gold wound through beds of herbs that sang softly when brushed—high, ethereal notes that raised gooseflesh on Rory's arms. Flowers unfurled petals wide as dinner plates, their centers glowing with bioluminescent pollen that drifted like fireflies, alighting on her coat before dissolving into sparks of warmth. But the wonder soured as they moved deeper. The streams' glow revealed submerged shapes: half-sunken statues of revelers, mouths agape in eternal laughter, vines creeping over stone limbs as if devouring them. A low groan echoed from the earth, not wind but something alive, hungry. Rory's scar itched fiercely now, and she scratched at it, drawing a thin line of blood. The pendant throbbed in sync with the ground's pulse, guiding them toward a grand archway of woven branches, thorns like curved daggers guarding its entrance. Nyx scouted ahead, slipping incorporeal into the shadows. They returned swiftly, form coalescing with urgency. "Demons patrol beyond. Belphegor's guards—gluttons themselves, bloated on souls. But there's a hall, lit by eternal flames. Your stone... it calls to something there." Rory nodded, gripping the blade's hilt. Its moonsilver chilled her palm, a faint luminescence blooming as if sensing the demonic taint. "Then that's where we head. Stay close." Isolde's laugh tinkled like glass chimes. "Close as the shadow to the feast, the riddle to the truth. But remember, child of earth: in Dymas, every bite is a bargain sealed." They slipped under the arch, the thorns parting with a sigh, as if reluctant to let go. The hall beyond yawned vast, a cathedral of indulgence where chandeliers of crystallized honey dripped slow amber tears onto floors of polished ivory. Tables stretched into infinity, laden with dishes that shifted—roasts becoming puddings, wines bubbling into soups—attended by more helbound souls, their movements mechanical, eyes glazed with insatiable want. A hush fell as they entered, heads turning. Unease coiled in Rory's gut like overeaten curry. Whispers slithered through the air: "Fresh meat... new hungers..." One figure detached from the throng—a demon, perhaps, its form a bloated parody of humanity, skin stretched taut over rolls of flesh, eyes like bottomless pits. It lumbered toward them, jowls quivering. "Join the banquet," it boomed, voice echoing like thunder in a full stomach. "Prince Belphegor welcomes all who hunger." Rory drew the Fae blade in a fluid motion, its edge singing as it cut the air. The demon recoiled, a hiss escaping its maw—moonsilver bit true against infernal flesh, a ward against the gluttony's grasp. "We're not here to eat," she said, voice steady despite the tremor in her knees. "We're here for what's ours." Nyx flanked her, shadows elongating into claws. Isolde merely smiled, weaving a hand through the air; pollen from the gardens clung to her fingers, forming illusory vines that snared the demon's ankles, tripping it into a puddle of its own spilled sauce. Wonder and terror warred in Rory as they pushed past, deeper into the hall's heart. The pendant's glow intensified, illuminating a pedestal at the far end—a twin to her own stone, crimson and pulsing, embedded in a cradle of thorns. Answers, perhaps. Or a trap. But in Dymas, the line blurred, and every step deeper pulled her into the feast's inexorable embrace. The air thickened with moans of delight from unseen revelers, the amber sky pressing down like a lover's too-heavy arm. Rory's mouth watered again, unbidden, but she pressed on, the group's breaths—human, Shade, Fae—mingling in the alien chorus. Discovery beckoned, but so did the devouring dark beneath the splendor.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:16:14.354Z" 2/20/2026, 7:16:14 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.063
97.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1988
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1988
totalAiIsms40
found
0
word"shimmered"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"chill"
count2
3
word"silk"
count3
4
word"maw"
count2
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"down her spine"
count1
7
word"chaotic"
count1
8
word"unravel"
count1
9
word"lurch"
count1
10
word"velvet"
count2
11
word"warmth"
count4
12
word"rhythmic"
count1
13
word"echoing"
count2
14
word"scanning"
count1
15
word"carried the weight"
count1
16
word"whisper"
count1
17
word"throbbed"
count2
18
word"resolve"
count1
19
word"marble"
count1
20
word"pulsed"
count1
21
word"racing"
count1
22
word"pulse"
count2
23
word"raced"
count1
24
word"echoed"
count1
25
word"chilled"
count1
26
word"crystallized"
count1
27
word"mechanical"
count1
28
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"shimmered"
1"familiar"
2"chill"
3"silk"
4"maw"
5"weight"
6"down her spine"
7"chaotic"
8"unravel"
9"lurch"
10"velvet"
11"warmth"
12"rhythmic"
13"echoing"
14"scanning"
15"carried the weight"
16"whisper"
17"throbbed"
18"resolve"
19"marble"
20"pulsed"
21"racing"
22"pulse"
23"raced"
24"echoed"
25"chilled"
26"crystallized"
27"mechanical"
28"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences110
matches
0"a wave of warmth"
1"g with urgency"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1939
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Cool-headed, they called her."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount1693
uniqueNames29
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Veil3
London4
Park2
Half-Fae1
Nyx6
Rory19
Shade2
Cardiff2
Pre1
Law1
Evan2
Silas1
Eva1
Hel1
Straight1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Isolde6
Richmond2
Golden1
Empress1
Earth1
Fae5
Wonder2
Tendrils1
One2
Dymas1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Nyx"
2"Rory"
3"Law"
4"Evan"
5"Silas"
6"Eva"
7"Isolde"
8"Wonder"
places
0"London"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Richmond"
4"Golden"
5"Earth"
6"Dymas"
globalScore0.939
windowScore0.833
51.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"as if urging her forward"
1"as if breathing and shadows stretched long under the amber sky, pooling like ink in the dips between hills"
2"looked like liquid gold wound through bed"
3"as if sensing the demonic taint"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.063
wordCount1939
matches
0"not hot, but insistent, as if urging her forward"
1"not the black-velvet night she knew, but a perpetual dusk lit from within, as if the heavens simmered"
2"not for food, but recognition"
3"not wind but something alive, hungry"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
86.82% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean58.76
std26.67
cv0.454
sampleLengths
081
177
286
3108
463
533
6130
754
837
968
1072
1154
12100
1392
1440
1522
1647
1782
1827
1925
2030
2175
2286
2339
2428
2531
2667
2751
2825
2956
3042
3162
3249
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs306
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences122
ratio0.164
matches
0"The silver chain bit into her skin, warm—not hot, but insistent, as if urging her forward."
1"At twenty-five, she'd fled Cardiff's stifling expectations—Pre-Law lectures, an abusive ex named Evan who left bruises deeper than skin—for London's chaotic anonymity."
2"At five-foot-six, she felt small against the rift's pull, but the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip—Isolde's gift, slender and leaf-shaped, cold as moonlight—reminded her she wasn't defenseless."
3"The air hit her like a sip of mulled wine—thick, spiced, laced with the heady perfume of overripe fruit and roasting meats."
4"No London fog here; the sky arched overhead in a warm amber glow, not the black-velvet night she knew, but a perpetual dusk lit from within, as if the heavens simmered on a low boil."
5"But unease prickled at the edges—too sweet, too inviting, like the false comfort of Evan's apologies."
6"They were here for answers—why the pendant had chosen her, what rift in the Veil threatened London—but first, survival."
7"The path—if it could be called that—emerged unbidden, a winding trail of crushed petals and fallen fruits that squelched underfoot."
8"Rory's senses sharpened with each step: the air grew denser, carrying strains of music—lutes and flutes weaving melodies that tugged at her resolve, making her mouth water despite the half-eaten sandwich in her pocket from the shift at Golden Empress."
9"Helbound souls—mortals contracted from Earth, their eyes hollow with eternal servitude—scurried about, clad in silks stained with sauces."
10"His gaze lingered on Rory's pendant, hunger flickering—not for food, but recognition."
11"She licked it instinctively—sweetness exploded on her tongue, a cascade of flavors: sun-ripened peaches laced with cinnamon, the tang of forgotten summers."
12"For a heartbeat, Cardiff's gray rains vanished; she was a child again, racing through her mother's garden, free."
13"Streams of what looked like liquid gold wound through beds of herbs that sang softly when brushed—high, ethereal notes that raised gooseflesh on Rory's arms."
14"Tables stretched into infinity, laden with dishes that shifted—roasts becoming puddings, wines bubbling into soups—attended by more helbound souls, their movements mechanical, eyes glazed with insatiable want."
15"Whispers slithered through the air: \"Fresh meat... new hungers...\" One figure detached from the throng—a demon, perhaps, its form a bloated parody of humanity, skin stretched taut over rolls of flesh, eyes like bottomless pits."
16"The demon recoiled, a hiss escaping its maw—moonsilver bit true against infernal flesh, a ward against the gluttony's grasp."
17"Isolde merely smiled, weaving a hand through the air; pollen from the gardens clung to her fingers, forming illusory vines that snared the demon's ankles, tripping it into a puddle of its own spilled sauce."
18"The pendant's glow intensified, illuminating a pedestal at the far end—a twin to her own stone, crimson and pulsing, embedded in a cradle of thorns."
19"Rory's mouth watered again, unbidden, but she pressed on, the group's breaths—human, Shade, Fae—mingling in the alien chorus."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1370
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.02335766423357664
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.008029197080291971
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean15.89
std8.33
cv0.524
sampleLengths
018
116
229
313
45
519
622
79
816
911
1023
1126
1211
1326
1422
1511
1622
1717
1821
194
201
2110
228
2315
2427
257
266
2713
2813
297
3022
3135
3217
3327
3429
3517
3621
3716
3810
3913
4014
4116
429
4310
4433
4523
4620
4713
4816
495
76.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4672131147540984
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners57
62.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"Then Eva's warnings, the pendant's"
1"Then, solidity returned, but nothing"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences107
matches
0"She stood at the edge"
1"she murmured, her voice a"
2"They had no breath to"
3"It itched now, as if"
4"She stepped forward first, the"
5"She inhaled deeply, and a"
6"she breathed, turning in a"
7"They tilted their head, violet"
8"they confirmed, the name slipping"
9"Their voice carried the weight"
10"She paused at a vine,"
11"she said, lips curving in"
12"They were here for answers—why"
13"She shook it off, focusing"
14"His gaze lingered on Rory's"
15"he rasped, voice thick as"
16"He turned back to his"
17"She licked it instinctively—sweetness exploded"
18"Her pulse raced, the pendant's"
19"They descended into a sunken"
ratio0.243
76.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences107
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The silver chain bit into"
2"She stood at the edge"
3"Richmond Park stretched behind her,"
4"Isolde's pale lavender eyes gleamed"
5"The Half-Fae seer moved without"
6"she murmured, her voice a"
7"Nyx hovered at Rory's shoulder,"
8"They had no breath to"
9"Nyx whispered, their voice a"
10"Rory glanced at the small"
11"It itched now, as if"
12"Rory said, forcing steadiness into"
13"Moonsilver hummed faintly against her"
14"She stepped forward first, the"
15"A disorienting lurch yanked at"
16"The air hit her like"
17"Vineyards sprawled like living tapestries,"
18"Orchards dotted the landscape, trees"
19"Rory's boots sank into loamy"
ratio0.766
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount20
matches
0"The silver chain bit into her skin, warm—not hot, but insistent, as if urging her forward."
1"She stood at the edge of the rift, a tear in the Veil that shimmered like heat haze over asphalt, distorting the familiar chill of a London winter night."
2"Isolde's pale lavender eyes gleamed in the dim light filtering through the ancient standing stones that ringed the clearing."
3"The Half-Fae seer moved without a sound, her silver hair swaying like willow branches in a breeze that didn't touch the ground."
4"At twenty-five, she'd fled Cardiff's stifling expectations—Pre-Law lectures, an abusive ex named Evan who left bruises deeper than skin—for London's chaotic ano…"
5"No London fog here; the sky arched overhead in a warm amber glow, not the black-velvet night she knew, but a perpetual dusk lit from within, as if the heavens s…"
6"Vineyards sprawled like living tapestries, grapes the size of fists dangling from trellises that twisted into impossible knots, their skins shimmering in hues o…"
7"Orchards dotted the landscape, trees heavy with fruits she'd never seen: orbs like swollen hearts pulsing with inner light, clusters of berries that wept crimso…"
8"She paused at a vine, plucking a golden grape that burst under her touch, releasing a scent of honeyed smoke."
9"The path—if it could be called that—emerged unbidden, a winding trail of crushed petals and fallen fruits that squelched underfoot."
10"Rory's senses sharpened with each step: the air grew denser, carrying strains of music—lutes and flutes weaving melodies that tugged at her resolve, making her …"
11"The leaves rustled without wind, as if breathing, and shadows stretched long under the amber sky, pooling like ink in the dips between hills."
12"Tables groaned under platters of extravagance: roasted beasts with hides like jeweled mosaics, pies that steamed with visions of golden crusts revealing rivers …"
13"Streams of what looked like liquid gold wound through beds of herbs that sang softly when brushed—high, ethereal notes that raised gooseflesh on Rory's arms."
14"Flowers unfurled petals wide as dinner plates, their centers glowing with bioluminescent pollen that drifted like fireflies, alighting on her coat before dissol…"
15"The pendant throbbed in sync with the ground's pulse, guiding them toward a grand archway of woven branches, thorns like curved daggers guarding its entrance."
16"Its moonsilver chilled her palm, a faint luminescence blooming as if sensing the demonic taint."
17"They slipped under the arch, the thorns parting with a sigh, as if reluctant to let go."
18"Tables stretched into infinity, laden with dishes that shifted—roasts becoming puddings, wines bubbling into soups—attended by more helbound souls, their moveme…"
19"Isolde merely smiled, weaving a hand through the air; pollen from the gardens clung to her fingers, forming illusory vines that snared the demon's ankles, tripp…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk"
1"Nyx whispered, their voice a wind through cracked stone"
2"they confirmed, the name slipping out like a sigh"
3"she said, lips curving in a knowing smile"
4"he rasped, voice thick as porridge"
5"Nyx hissed, their shadow-form flickering as they grabbed her wrist"
6"it boomed, voice echoing like thunder in a full stomach"
7"she said, voice steady despite the tremor in her knees"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
3"they confirmed (confirm)"
4"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.357
71.1651%