Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7SRARVJJYHPXMYB0TZC48

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Duration:
28.6s
Cost:
$0.001421
Provider:
xAI

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs into the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, her worn leather watch ticking steadily against her left wrist like a metronome counting down to some inevitable revelation. The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—decay, perhaps, or the faint ozone bite of exposed wiring. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair caught the beam of her torch, casting fleeting shadows across her sharp jaw as she moved with military precision, each step deliberate on the cracked concrete platform. She'd been roused from a fitful sleep by the call an hour earlier: body found in a derelict station, unauthorized access, possible foul play. But this wasn't just any derelict—whispers in the department spoke of the Veil Market, a ghost story for cops who worked too many late nights. An underground bazaar that slithered through London's forgotten veins, peddling shadows and secrets. Quinn had scoffed at the tales before, but three years since DS Morris vanished into thin air on a case like this, she'd learned to pay attention to the unbelievable. Her brown eyes narrowed against the gloom, scanning the arched brick vaults overhead, where faded advertisements for Bovril and Brylcreem peeled like ancient skin. The platform stretched out, littered with debris: shattered glass phials that glinted unnaturally, scraps of fabric embroidered with symbols that twisted her gut—runes, maybe, or some foreign script she'd seen in cold case files. At the far end, cordoned off by fluttering police tape, lay the body. A man in his forties, sprawled face-down amid the rubble, his suit rumpled and expensive, the kind that screamed mid-level fixer. Blood pooled beneath him, dark and viscous, but it didn't spread like it should; it beaded at the edges, as if repelled by an invisible barrier. "Quinn," came a familiar voice from the shadows, soft but edged with urgency. Eva Kowalski stepped into the torchlight, her curly red hair a wild halo under the dim emergency bulbs. At 5'4", she seemed almost swallowed by the vastness of the station, her freckled complexion pale against the grime. Round glasses perched on her nose, magnifying her green eyes, which darted nervously. She tucked a stray curl behind her left ear—a habit Quinn had seen a hundred times since Eva started consulting for the Met on "unusual" cases. Slung over her shoulder was her worn leather satchel, bulging with books and notes, the strap frayed from constant use. "Eva," Quinn replied, her voice clipped, betraying none of the irritation that simmered beneath. Consulting civilians on active scenes chafed, but Eva's expertise in the occult had cracked open cases that stumped the forensics team. "What are you doing down here? This is a restricted area." Eva adjusted her glasses, glancing at the tape. "Superintendent's orders. He said you might need... perspective. The initial team's already scratching their heads. Blood's not right, and that stall over there—" She nodded toward a makeshift booth of splintered wood and tattered cloth, half-collapsed against the wall. "It's not your standard market junk." Quinn ducked under the tape, her boots crunching on what looked like dried herbs scattered across the floor. The body was positioned oddly, arms splayed as if he'd been clawing at the air, fingers curled into rigid hooks. No weapon in sight, but a gash across his throat yawned wide, clean but jagged at the edges, like it'd been made by something serrated and unseen. She knelt, gloved hands hovering over the wound. The blood was congealed, sure, but it shimmered faintly, iridescent under her torch— not the flat crimson of a knife job. And the pool: it formed a near-perfect circle, six feet in diameter, undisturbed by the drafts whispering through the tunnels. "Time of death?" Quinn asked, not looking up. "Coroner pegs it around midnight," Eva said, joining her at a crouch. Her satchel thumped against her hip. "But get this: no exit wound. The cut's deep, severed the carotid, but the spray pattern—there isn't one. It's like the blood just... stopped." Quinn's jaw tightened. She traced the circle's edge with her finger, inches above the floor. No drag marks, no footprints overlapping the pool. The victim had been standing here, in the heart of what must have been the Veil Market's busiest hour—stalls implied crowds, yet the platform bore only faint scuffs from boots long gone. The market moved every full moon, according to the briefing notes; tonight's sliver phase meant it was dormant, or so the informant claimed. But if that was true, why was this stall intact, its contents spilled like entrails: vials of glowing liquid, amulets on leather cords, and a small brass compass half-buried in the dust. She picked up the compass gingerly, turning it in her palm. The casing bore a patina of verdigris, etched with sigils that made her eyes water—protective wards, if the department's occult liaison was worth her salt. The needle didn't spin north; it quivered, pointing erratically toward the body, then jerking away as if burned. Veil Compass, her mind supplied from fragmented reports. Attuned to rifts, portals—supernatural hot spots. Crafted by some Shade artisan, whoever the hell that was. "Looks like a robbery gone wrong," came a gruff voice from the platform's edge. PC Reilly, a burly colleague with a decade on the beat, lumbered over, notepad in hand. He'd been first on scene, his interpretation already filtering through the radio chatter: mugging in a squat, victim surprised mid-deal. "Pockets turned out, wallet gone. Probably some junkie looking for a score. These tunnels are crawling with them." Quinn stood, slipping the compass into an evidence bag. Reilly's take was tidy, the kind that closed files fast. But it itched. No signs of struggle beyond the pose—no defensive wounds on the hands, no debris displaced. And the blood: if he'd been standing, arterial spray should paint the walls, not pool neatly like spilled ink. "Junkie with a magic knife?" she muttered, handing the bag to Reilly. "Check that for prints. And get luminol on the circle—see if it's hiding anything." Reilly snorted, but complied, waving over the techs. Eva sidled closer, her voice dropping to a whisper. "Harlow, this isn't mundane. That compass? It's pointing to a rift right here. Feel the air—it's humming, like static before a storm. The Veil Market isn't just a flea market; it's a nexus. Enchanted goods, alchemicals... and worse. Your vic? He was a broker, I think. Sold info on portals." Quinn shot her a sidelong glance, her bearing unyielding. Eva's theories veered into fantasy, but they'd saved her ass once before, when a "gas leak" in Whitechapel turned out to be something that dissolved flesh. Still, three years ago, Morris had chased a lead like this—unexplained death, whispers of the unnatural—and poof. Gone. Quinn wouldn't chase ghosts again without proof. "Interpretation's premature, Kowalski. Stick to facts." But as the techs set up, Quinn circled the body, her torch sweeping methodically. The stall's contents drew her back: a shattered vial leaked a residue that fizzed on the concrete, eating tiny pits like acid. Nearby, the victim's hand clutched a fragment of bone, polished smooth—entry token, maybe, for this hidden bazaar. She pried it free, noting the carvings: a stylized eye, weeping shadows. Her pulse quickened; it matched a sketch in Morris's old file, from a case involving a "clique" of occult dabblers. Eva knelt by the stall, pulling a slim volume from her satchel—a dog-eared tome on ancient markets, its pages yellowed. "See these sigils on the compass? They're Shade work, from the underrealms. If he was brokering, someone didn't want the deal closed. But the blood—it's not human, not entirely. Look at the beads." She pointed, her finger trembling slightly. "That's ectoplasm mixing in. Supernatural kill." Quinn ignored the chill snaking up her spine, focusing on the platform's far wall. A flicker—scorch marks, faint, in a vertical line, as if something had phased through. No soot trail, no charring beyond that line. Her mind pieced it: victim confronts seller, argument escalates. But no sound of a fight; the station's acoustics would echo screams. Unless it was silent, otherworldly. She traced the scorch with gloved fingers, feeling a residual warmth, unnatural after hours in the cold. "Reilly," she called, voice steady. "Dust that wall for residue. And the body—full tox screen, including unknowns." Turning to Eva, she added quieter, "You're saying a portal did this? Swallowed the spray, left the pool?" Eva nodded, tucking hair behind her ear again. "Rifts bleed energy. The compass was his safeguard, but it failed. Or someone tampered with it." Her green eyes met Quinn's, earnest behind the lenses. "Harlow, this ties to your old case. The clique— they're users, not just dabblers. They shop here." Quinn's watch ticked louder in the silence, a reminder of time slipping. Morris's death: unexplained, supernatural origins she couldn't prove. The evidence here didn't add up because it wasn't meant to—mundane eyes saw robbery, but she'd missed the pattern before. The bone token in her palm felt heavier now, a key to doors better left shut. She pocketed it, resolve hardening her sharp jaw. "Get me everything on Veil Compasses," she told Eva, standing tall at 5'9", her frame cutting a silhouette against the tunnel's maw. "And cross-reference with missing persons from the last full moon. Reilly's right about one thing: pockets turned out. But the thief didn't walk away—they slipped through." As the team bustled, Quinn lingered by the body, torch lingering on the iridescent blood. The circle wasn't random; it mirrored the compass's face, sigils etched in fluid. Deduction clicked: not a kill, a ritual. The vic hadn't been murdered—he'd been marked, pulled partway into whatever rift the market guarded. And the compass? It hadn't failed; it'd pointed the killer straight to the weakness. Eva watched her, satchel clutched like a shield. "What do you see?" Quinn's brown eyes hardened. "The truth others miss. This isn't over—it's an invitation." The station seemed to hum in agreement, the air thickening as if the walls themselves conspired. Quinn stepped back, military precision guiding her toward the stairs, but her mind raced ahead, unraveling the threads. The clique was involved; she could feel it, a shadow echoing Morris's fate. Tomorrow, she'd follow the compass's needle, wherever it led—into the veil or straight to hell. Word count: 1,248
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.581
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.31% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1758
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"nervously"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
11.83% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1758
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"fleeting"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"standard"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"traced"
count2
9
word"etched"
count2
10
word"quivered"
count1
11
word"fragmented"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count1
13
word"pulse"
count1
14
word"quickened"
count1
15
word"chill"
count1
16
word"flicker"
count1
17
word"echo"
count1
18
word"otherworldly"
count1
19
word"warmth"
count1
20
word"silence"
count1
21
word"reminder"
count1
22
word"resolve"
count1
23
word"maw"
count1
24
word"raced"
count1
25
word"unraveling"
count1
26
word"could feel"
count1
27
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"fleeting"
1"gloom"
2"scanning"
3"shattered"
4"familiar"
5"standard"
6"shimmered"
7"perfect"
8"traced"
9"etched"
10"quivered"
11"fragmented"
12"whisper"
13"pulse"
14"quickened"
15"chill"
16"flicker"
17"echo"
18"otherworldly"
19"warmth"
20"silence"
21"reminder"
22"resolve"
23"maw"
24"raced"
25"unraveling"
26"could feel"
27"echoing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences77
matches
0"d with urgency"
31.54% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences77
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
2"think"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences81
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen115
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1725
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
98.94% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1469
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn15
Tube1
Camden1
Veil4
Market3
London1
Morris5
Bovril1
Brylcreem1
Eva10
Kowalski1
Compass1
Shade2
Reilly4
Probably1
Whitechapel1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Morris"
4"Brylcreem"
5"Eva"
6"Kowalski"
7"Compass"
8"Reilly"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
globalScore0.989
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like dried herbs scattered across"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1725
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
95.15% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs27
mean63.89
std30.86
cv0.483
sampleLengths
092
1116
294
3109
446
553
6114
78
842
9110
1078
1168
1282
1367
1466
1585
1665
1762
1852
1950
2064
2148
2264
2312
2413
2562
263
87.04% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences77
matches
0"been roused"
1"was positioned"
2"been made"
3"was congealed"
4"been murdered"
5"been marked"
6"was involved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs272
matches
0"was brokering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount9
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences81
ratio0.309
matches
0"The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—decay, perhaps, or the faint ozone bite of exposed wiring."
1"But this wasn't just any derelict—whispers in the department spoke of the Veil Market, a ghost story for cops who worked too many late nights."
2"The platform stretched out, littered with debris: shattered glass phials that glinted unnaturally, scraps of fabric embroidered with symbols that twisted her gut—runes, maybe, or some foreign script she'd seen in cold case files."
3"Blood pooled beneath him, dark and viscous, but it didn't spread like it should; it beaded at the edges, as if repelled by an invisible barrier."
4"Quinn ducked under the tape, her boots crunching on what looked like dried herbs scattered across the floor. The body was positioned oddly, arms splayed as if he'd been clawing at the air, fingers curled into rigid hooks. No weapon in sight, but a gash across his throat yawned wide, clean but jagged at the edges, like it'd been made by something serrated and unseen. She knelt, gloved hands hovering over the wound. The blood was congealed, sure, but it shimmered faintly, iridescent under her torch— not the flat crimson of a knife job. And the pool: it formed a near-perfect circle, six feet in diameter, undisturbed by the drafts whispering through the tunnels."
5"The cut's deep, severed the carotid, but the spray pattern—there isn't one."
6"Quinn's jaw tightened. She traced the circle's edge with her finger, inches above the floor. No drag marks, no footprints overlapping the pool. The victim had been standing here, in the heart of what must have been the Veil Market's busiest hour—stalls implied crowds, yet the platform bore only faint scuffs from boots long gone. The market moved every full moon, according to the briefing notes; tonight's sliver phase meant it was dormant, or so the informant claimed. But if that was true, why was this stall intact, its contents spilled like entrails: vials of glowing liquid, amulets on leather cords, and a small brass compass half-buried in the dust."
7"She picked up the compass gingerly, turning it in her palm. The casing bore a patina of verdigris, etched with sigils that made her eyes water—protective wards, if the department's occult liaison was worth her salt. The needle didn't spin north; it quivered, pointing erratically toward the body, then jerking away as if burned. Veil Compass, her mind supplied from fragmented reports. Attuned to rifts, portals—supernatural hot spots. Crafted by some Shade artisan, whoever the hell that was."
8"Quinn stood, slipping the compass into an evidence bag. Reilly's take was tidy, the kind that closed files fast. But it itched. No signs of struggle beyond the pose—no defensive wounds on the hands, no debris displaced. And the blood: if he'd been standing, arterial spray should paint the walls, not pool neatly like spilled ink. \"Junkie with a magic knife?\" she muttered, handing the bag to Reilly. \"Check that for prints."
9"And get luminol on the circle—see if it's hiding anything.\""
10"Feel the air—it's humming, like static before a storm."
11"The Veil Market isn't just a flea market; it's a nexus."
12"Quinn shot her a sidelong glance, her bearing unyielding. Eva's theories veered into fantasy, but they'd saved her ass once before, when a \"gas leak\" in Whitechapel turned out to be something that dissolved flesh. Still, three years ago, Morris had chased a lead like this—unexplained death, whispers of the unnatural—and poof. Gone. Quinn wouldn't chase ghosts again without proof. \"Interpretation's premature, Kowalski."
13"But as the techs set up, Quinn circled the body, her torch sweeping methodically. The stall's contents drew her back: a shattered vial leaked a residue that fizzed on the concrete, eating tiny pits like acid. Nearby, the victim's hand clutched a fragment of bone, polished smooth—entry token, maybe, for this hidden bazaar. She pried it free, noting the carvings: a stylized eye, weeping shadows. Her pulse quickened; it matched a sketch in Morris's old file, from a case involving a \"clique\" of occult dabblers."
14"Eva knelt by the stall, pulling a slim volume from her satchel—a dog-eared tome on ancient markets, its pages yellowed. \"See these sigils on the compass?"
15"But the blood—it's not human, not entirely."
16"Quinn ignored the chill snaking up her spine, focusing on the platform's far wall. A flicker—scorch marks, faint, in a vertical line, as if something had phased through. No soot trail, no charring beyond that line. Her mind pieced it: victim confronts seller, argument escalates. But no sound of a fight; the station's acoustics would echo screams. Unless it was silent, otherworldly."
17"And the body—full tox screen, including unknowns.\" Turning to Eva, she added quieter, \"You're saying a portal did this?"
18"The clique— they're users, not just dabblers."
19"Quinn's watch ticked louder in the silence, a reminder of time slipping. Morris's death: unexplained, supernatural origins she couldn't prove. The evidence here didn't add up because it wasn't meant to—mundane eyes saw robbery, but she'd missed the pattern before. The bone token in her palm felt heavier now, a key to doors better left shut. She pocketed it, resolve hardening her sharp jaw."
20"The circle wasn't random; it mirrored the compass's face, sigils etched in fluid."
21"The vic hadn't been murdered—he'd been marked, pulled partway into whatever rift the market guarded."
22"It hadn't failed; it'd pointed the killer straight to the weakness."
23"The clique was involved; she could feel it, a shadow echoing Morris's fate."
24"Tomorrow, she'd follow the compass's needle, wherever it led—into the veil or straight to hell."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount732
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.025956284153005466
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.00819672131147541
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences81
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences81
mean21.3
std24.1
cv1.132
sampleLengths
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630
724
834
913
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3372
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83.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5061728395061729
totalSentences81
uniqueOpeners41
48.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"Probably some junkie looking for"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences69
matches
0"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
1"She'd been roused from a"
2"Her brown eyes narrowed against"
3"He said you might need..."
4"It's like the blood just..."
5"She picked up the compass"
6"It's pointing to a rift"
7"He was a broker, I"
8"They're Shade work, from the"
9"She traced the scorch with"
10"she told Eva, standing tall"
11"It hadn't failed; it'd pointed"
ratio0.174
97.68% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences69
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air grew thick and"
2"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
3"She'd been roused from a"
4"An underground bazaar that slithered"
5"Quinn had scoffed at the"
6"Her brown eyes narrowed against"
7"The platform stretched out, littered"
8"A man in his forties,"
9"Blood pooled beneath him, dark"
10"Eva Kowalski stepped into the"
11"Quinn replied, her voice clipped,"
12"This is a restricted"
13"Eva adjusted her glasses, glancing"
14"He said you might need..."
15"The initial team's already scratching"
16"Blood's not right, and that"
17"Quinn ducked under the tape,"
18"Quinn asked, not looking up"
19"Eva said, joining her at"
ratio0.725
72.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences69
matches
0"If he was brokering, someone"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"But this wasn't just any derelict—whispers in the department spoke of the Veil Market, a ghost story for cops who worked too many late nights."
1"An underground bazaar that slithered through London's forgotten veins, peddling shadows and secrets."
2"The platform stretched out, littered with debris: shattered glass phials that glinted unnaturally, scraps of fabric embroidered with symbols that twisted her gu…"
3"A man in his forties, sprawled face-down amid the rubble, his suit rumpled and expensive, the kind that screamed mid-level fixer."
4"Blood pooled beneath him, dark and viscous, but it didn't spread like it should; it beaded at the edges, as if repelled by an invisible barrier."
5"Quinn ducked under the tape, her boots crunching on what looked like dried herbs scattered across the floor. The body was positioned oddly, arms splayed as if h…"
6"She picked up the compass gingerly, turning it in her palm. The casing bore a patina of verdigris, etched with sigils that made her eyes water—protective wards,…"
7"Quinn ignored the chill snaking up her spine, focusing on the platform's far wall. A flicker—scorch marks, faint, in a vertical line, as if something had phased…"
8"The station seemed to hum in agreement, the air thickening as if the walls themselves conspired."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn asked, not looking up"
1"she called, voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.129
leniency0.258
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.2826%