Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7T7QJD92PCMC1N5RB3G9W

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 48s
Cost:
$0.048720
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain pelted the cobblestones of Camden High Street, turning the night into a slick, treacherous blur. Detective Harlow Quinn hunched her shoulders against the downpour, her trench coat heavy with water, but her sharp jaw set in grim determination. She'd been tailing the suspect for blocks—Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic with the olive skin and the scar on his left forearm that peeked out from his sleeve when he moved just right. He was tied to that shady clique she suspected of everything from black-market dealings to the unexplained disappearance of her partner three years back. Morris. The name still burned like acid in her gut. Herrera darted ahead, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his scalp, warm brown eyes flicking back once to check if she was closing in. He was quick, weaving through clusters of late-night revelers who cursed as he shoved past, umbrellas tilting like drunken sentinels. Quinn's boots slapped against the pavement, each step measured with military precision, her worn leather watch ticking steadily on her left wrist—a relic from her days in uniform before the Met swallowed her whole. "Stop! Police!" she shouted, her voice cutting through the rain's relentless drum. But Herrera didn't slow. He veered left into a narrow alley off Inverness Street, the kind of shadowed cut-through that smelled of garbage and yesterday's curry. Quinn followed, her brown eyes narrowing as she scanned for threats—discarded bottles, uneven flagstones that could trip her up. Her hand brushed the holster at her hip, but she didn't draw; not yet. This was pursuit, not confrontation. Not until she had answers. The alley spat them out onto a quieter stretch near the canal, the water's surface rippling under the assault of raindrops. Herrera glanced back again, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting briefly under a flickering streetlamp. Patron saint of travelers—fitting for a man always on the run, patching up the supernatural underbelly of London without a license. Quinn had pieced it together from whispers: unauthorized treatments, patients who weren't quite human. It reeked of the same weirdness that had claimed Morris. He bolted toward a boarded-up entrance to what looked like an old Tube station, long abandoned after some wartime closure. The sign above it was faded, barely legible: Camden Town, but not the bustling one tourists knew. This was a ghost of the Underground, sealed off and forgotten. Herrera paused for a split second, fumbling in his pocket, then pressed something against a rusted grate—a small, bone-white token that glowed faintly in the dim light. The grate creaked open with a sound like grinding teeth, revealing a steep, unlit staircase descending into blackness. Quinn skidded to a halt at the threshold, rain streaming down her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, soaking into her collar. Her heart hammered, not just from the chase but from the prickling instinct that screamed wrongness. This wasn't on any map she'd studied. Underground markets, black ops hideouts—her mind raced through possibilities, each more dangerous than the last. Herrera vanished down the steps, the grate swinging shut behind him with a metallic clang that echoed like a challenge. She checked her watch: 11:47 PM. Backup was miles away; she'd gone rogue on this tail, driven by that gnawing suspicion she couldn't shake. The clique—whatever they were—had tendrils everywhere, and Herrera was her thread to pull. But stepping into the unknown? That was how Morris had gone down: a tip about an "unexplained disturbance" in a derelict warehouse, and then nothing but a body with wounds that defied autopsy. The rain intensified, a curtain of silver needles that blurred the world above. Quinn wiped water from her eyes, her sharp jaw tightening. Indecision clawed at her—protocol said call it in, secure the perimeter. But protocol hadn't saved her partner. She reached out, fingers brushing the grate. It was cold, unnaturally so, like touching dry ice. No lock she could pick, no handle. Just that faint etch of something arcane on the metal, a symbol she didn't recognize. "Fuck it," she muttered, the words lost in the storm. She pulled a multi-tool from her pocket—a holdover from her military days—and wedged it into the grate's edge. It gave with surprising ease, as if inviting her in. Or luring her. She descended, the stairs creaking under her weight, the air growing thick with the scent of damp earth and something metallic, like old blood. The passage twisted downward, faint emergency lights strung along the walls casting erratic shadows. Her boots echoed on cracked tiles, the sound swallowed by the oppressive depth. Up ahead, she heard footsteps—Herrera's, quick and uneven. She picked up her pace, hand hovering near her weapon, every sense on high alert. The tunnel widened into what must have once been a platform, but now it was transformed. Stalls lined the edges, makeshift booths draped in tattered fabrics that fluttered in a breeze from nowhere. Vendors hawked wares under dim, ethereal glows: vials of iridescent liquids that swirled without stirring, amulets pulsing with inner light, scrolls of parchment inscribed with symbols that made her eyes ache. The Veil Market. She'd heard rumors in the precinct's darker corners— a supernatural bazaar that popped up like a fungus, moving with the moon. Banned alchemical substances, enchanted goods, information that could topple empires. And entry required a bone token, just like the one Herrera had flashed. This was no ordinary black market; this was the underbelly of the impossible, the kind of place that explained the "unexplained" in Morris's file. Quinn melted into the shadows behind a stall selling what looked like dried herbs but smelled like singed dreams. Herrera was ahead, weaving through the crowd—a motley assortment of figures that set her nerves on edge. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian bartered for a dagger that hummed faintly; a man whose skin shimmered like oil on water whispered to a cloaked figure. No one paid Quinn much mind, but she felt exposed, her police bearing a dead giveaway in a place like this. She spotted Herrera at a booth near the far end, haggling with a vendor whose face was half-hidden by a hood. The vendor slid something across the counter—a small pouch that tinkled like glass. Herrera nodded, tucking it into his jacket, his scar visible as he adjusted his sleeve. He turned, scanning the market, and their eyes locked for a heartbeat. Recognition flared in his warm brown gaze, then panic. He bolted again, shoving through a throng of buyers toward a tunnel marked with glowing runes. Quinn surged forward, dodging a cart laden with glowing orbs that whispered unintelligible secrets as she passed. "Herrera! Stop!" Her voice bounced off the vaulted ceiling, drawing stares. A murmur rippled through the crowd—cops weren't welcome here, that much was clear. A burly figure with tattoos that seemed to writhe on his skin stepped into her path, but she sidestepped with precision, her military training kicking in. The tunnel Herrera had taken narrowed, the air growing cooler, laced with a scent like ozone after lightning. Quinn's breath came in controlled bursts, her mind racing. This was deeper than she'd imagined—potentially dangerous territory, teeming with elements that could swallow her whole. Visions of Morris flashed: his body found in that warehouse, veins blackened as if by some internal fire, no toxicology to explain it. Supernatural origins she didn't yet understand, but she was starting to. The clique, Herrera's unauthorized treatments—it all pointed here, to this hidden world beneath the city. She hesitated at the tunnel's mouth, the decision crystallizing like ice in her veins. Follow, and she might uncover the truth, but at what cost? Retreat, and lose the thread forever. Rain from above seeped through cracks in the ceiling, dripping steadily, a reminder of the sane world she'd left behind. Her watch ticked: 11:52 PM. Time was slipping. A shout echoed from deeper in—Herrera's voice, accented with that Seville lilt. "¡Ayuda! She's following me!" Quinn's jaw clenched. No turning back now. She plunged into the tunnel, the walls closing in, adorned with faded posters from decades past, now overlaid with graffiti that glowed faintly. The path sloped downward, the air humming with an unnatural energy that raised the hairs on her arms. Up ahead, Herrera's footsteps faltered; she could hear his labored breathing. He was tiring, or perhaps cornered. The tunnel opened into a smaller chamber, this one lit by bioluminescent fungi clinging to the walls, casting an eerie blue glow. Herrera stood at the center, back against a makeshift altar strewn with crystals and bones. He clutched the pouch tightly, his Saint Christopher medallion rising and falling with his chest. "Detective Quinn," he said, voice steady despite the chase. "You shouldn't be here. This place... it's not for people like you." "People like me?" Quinn advanced slowly, her boots scraping on the gritty floor. She kept her distance, eyes flicking to the chamber's exits—two more tunnels branching off, both dark. "You mean cops? Or humans who don't buy into your fairy-tale bullshit? I know about your little clique, Herrera. The off-the-books treatments, the supernatural patients. What did you do to my partner? DS Morris—three years ago. Unexplained circumstances. Ring any bells?" His warm brown eyes widened slightly, but he shook his head. "I don't know what you're talking about. I'm just a medic. Lost my license helping people the NHS wouldn't touch." "Bullshit." Quinn's voice was low, edged with steel. She circled him, her sharp jaw angled like a blade. The chamber felt alive, the fungi pulsing in rhythm with her heartbeat. "I've got files on you—Seville transplant, scar from a knife attack, always wearing that medallion like it's armor. You're neck-deep in this. That market out there? Enchanted goods, alchemical crap. It's all connected to whatever killed Morris." Herrera's olive skin paled under the blue light. "Morris... that was a tragedy, but not my doing. You chase shadows, Detective. The real danger is following you in here without understanding." A low rumble echoed from one of the tunnels, like distant thunder underground. Quinn froze, her military precision honing her senses. Footsteps—multiple sets, approaching fast. The market's denizens, perhaps, roused by the intrusion. Her hand went to her gun, drawing it smoothly, the weight familiar and reassuring. But against what? Glowing runes? Whispering orbs? Herrera edged toward the opposite tunnel. "Leave now, Quinn. Before they come. This market moves with the full moon—tonight's the shift. You don't want to be caught in the Veil when it happens." The rumbling grew louder, accompanied by voices—harsh whispers in languages she didn't recognize. Quinn's mind whirled: the decision point, sharper now. Pursue Herrera deeper, risk whatever "shift" he meant, or fight her way out through unknown threats? Her watch ticked mercilessly: 11:58 PM. The air thickened, charged with static that made her skin tingle. She leveled her gun at him. "You're not going anywhere until you talk." He bolted, diving into the tunnel just as shapes emerged from the other side—hooded figures with eyes that gleamed unnaturally. Quinn fired a warning shot into the ceiling, the crack deafening in the confined space. Chunks of tile rained down, buying her a moment. She spun and followed Herrera, plunging into the darkness, the chamber's blue glow fading behind her. The tunnel twisted like a serpent, the walls slick with moisture that wasn't just water. Herrera was ahead, his medallion clinking against his chest as he ran. Quinn's legs burned, but she pushed on, driven by the fire of unresolved loss. Morris's face haunted her—his unexplained end, the supernatural taint she could no longer deny. This was it: the threshold into the unfamiliar, the dangerous underbelly where answers lurked amid perils. A sudden shift rippled through the air, like reality bending. The walls shimmered, the tunnel elongating impossibly. Herrera's voice echoed back: "The Veil's moving! Get out!" But Quinn pressed forward, her sharp jaw set, brown eyes fierce in the dimming light. She'd decided: into the unknown, whatever the cost. The chase wasn't over; it was just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Quinn advanced slowly [slowly]"
1"Herrera's voice echoed back: [back]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.222
92.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2038
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"tightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"tightly"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2038
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"treacherous"
count1
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"streaming"
count1
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count5
8
word"etch"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"oppressive"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count3
12
word"fluttered"
count1
13
word"shimmered"
count2
14
word"scanning"
count1
15
word"racing"
count1
16
word"reminder"
count1
17
word"lilt"
count1
18
word"jaw clenched"
count1
19
word"familiar"
count1
20
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"treacherous"
1"sentinels"
2"measured"
3"scanned"
4"glinting"
5"streaming"
6"raced"
7"echoed"
8"etch"
9"weight"
10"oppressive"
11"footsteps"
12"fluttered"
13"shimmered"
14"scanning"
15"racing"
16"reminder"
17"lilt"
18"jaw clenched"
19"familiar"
20"charged"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences135
matches(empty)
89.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2000
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
86.39% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1808
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
High1
Street2
Harlow1
Quinn18
Tomás1
Herrera23
Met1
Inverness1
Saint2
Christopher2
London1
Morris6
Tube1
Town1
Underground2
Veil1
Market1
Seville1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Met"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Morris"
8"Underground"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Inverness"
4"London"
5"Town"
6"Seville"
globalScore0.864
windowScore1
44.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"quite human"
1"looked like an old Tube station, long aba"
2"as if inviting her in"
3"looked like dried herbs but smelled like"
4"smelled like singed dreams"
5"tattoos that seemed to writhe on his skin stepped into her path, but she sidestepped with precision, her military training kicking in"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.5
wordCount2000
matches
0"not just from the chase but from the prickling instinct"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences143
matches(empty)
67.03% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean64.52
std24.81
cv0.385
sampleLengths
0106
180
281
380
493
578
670
778
865
9114
1071
1185
1286
1367
1492
1559
1616
1765
1873
1970
2031
2167
2231
2354
2433
2554
2613
2760
2871
2926
3031
94.87% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences135
matches
0"was tied"
1"was faded"
2"were—had"
3"was transformed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs336
matches
0"was closing"
1"was starting"
2"was slipping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences28
totalSentences143
ratio0.196
matches
0"She'd been tailing the suspect for blocks—Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic with the olive skin and the scar on his left forearm that peeked out from his sleeve when he moved just right."
1"Quinn's boots slapped against the pavement, each step measured with military precision, her worn leather watch ticking steadily on her left wrist—a relic from her days in uniform before the Met swallowed her whole."
2"Quinn followed, her brown eyes narrowing as she scanned for threats—discarded bottles, uneven flagstones that could trip her up."
3"Her hand brushed the holster at her hip, but she didn't draw; not yet."
4"Patron saint of travelers—fitting for a man always on the run, patching up the supernatural underbelly of London without a license."
5"Herrera paused for a split second, fumbling in his pocket, then pressed something against a rusted grate—a small, bone-white token that glowed faintly in the dim light."
6"Underground markets, black ops hideouts—her mind raced through possibilities, each more dangerous than the last."
7"Backup was miles away; she'd gone rogue on this tail, driven by that gnawing suspicion she couldn't shake."
8"The clique—whatever they were—had tendrils everywhere, and Herrera was her thread to pull."
9"Indecision clawed at her—protocol said call it in, secure the perimeter."
10"She pulled a multi-tool from her pocket—a holdover from her military days—and wedged it into the grate's edge."
11"Up ahead, she heard footsteps—Herrera's, quick and uneven."
12"She'd heard rumors in the precinct's darker corners— a supernatural bazaar that popped up like a fungus, moving with the moon."
13"This was no ordinary black market; this was the underbelly of the impossible, the kind of place that explained the \"unexplained\" in Morris's file."
14"Herrera was ahead, weaving through the crowd—a motley assortment of figures that set her nerves on edge."
15"A woman with eyes like polished obsidian bartered for a dagger that hummed faintly; a man whose skin shimmered like oil on water whispered to a cloaked figure."
16"The vendor slid something across the counter—a small pouch that tinkled like glass."
17"A murmur rippled through the crowd—cops weren't welcome here, that much was clear."
18"This was deeper than she'd imagined—potentially dangerous territory, teeming with elements that could swallow her whole."
19"The clique, Herrera's unauthorized treatments—it all pointed here, to this hidden world beneath the city."
20"A shout echoed from deeper in—Herrera's voice, accented with that Seville lilt."
21"Up ahead, Herrera's footsteps faltered; she could hear his labored breathing."
22"She kept her distance, eyes flicking to the chamber's exits—two more tunnels branching off, both dark."
23"Footsteps—multiple sets, approaching fast."
24"The rumbling grew louder, accompanied by voices—harsh whispers in languages she didn't recognize."
25"He bolted, diving into the tunnel just as shapes emerged from the other side—hooded figures with eyes that gleamed unnaturally."
26"Morris's face haunted her—his unexplained end, the supernatural taint she could no longer deny."
27"The chase wasn't over; it was just beginning."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1839
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, bone-white token"
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.03643284393692224
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.011963023382272975
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean13.99
std7.45
cv0.533
sampleLengths
016
123
233
324
41
59
626
720
834
912
104
1122
1219
1314
145
155
1621
1714
1821
1914
2010
2120
2217
2311
2427
2518
2620
2716
287
2915
3020
316
3218
3313
345
3528
3613
3710
3811
396
407
419
427
4315
4410
4518
4610
473
4824
4914
54.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.32867132867132864
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners47
25.25% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences132
matches
0"Just that faint etch of"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences132
matches
0"She'd been tailing the suspect"
1"He was tied to that"
2"He was quick, weaving through"
3"she shouted, her voice cutting"
4"He veered left into a"
5"Her hand brushed the holster"
6"It reeked of the same"
7"He bolted toward a boarded-up"
8"Her heart hammered, not just"
9"She checked her watch: 11:47"
10"She reached out, fingers brushing"
11"It was cold, unnaturally so,"
12"she muttered, the words lost"
13"She pulled a multi-tool from"
14"It gave with surprising ease,"
15"She descended, the stairs creaking"
16"Her boots echoed on cracked"
17"She picked up her pace,"
18"She'd heard rumors in the"
19"She spotted Herrera at a"
ratio0.288
35.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences132
matches
0"Rain pelted the cobblestones of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn hunched her"
2"She'd been tailing the suspect"
3"He was tied to that"
4"The name still burned like"
5"Herrera darted ahead, his short"
6"He was quick, weaving through"
7"Quinn's boots slapped against the"
8"she shouted, her voice cutting"
9"He veered left into a"
10"Quinn followed, her brown eyes"
11"Her hand brushed the holster"
12"This was pursuit, not confrontation."
13"The alley spat them out"
14"Herrera glanced back again, his"
15"Patron saint of travelers—fitting for"
16"Quinn had pieced it together"
17"It reeked of the same"
18"He bolted toward a boarded-up"
19"The sign above it was"
ratio0.848
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences132
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.34% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences88
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She'd been tailing the suspect for blocks—Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic with the olive skin and the scar on his left forearm that peeked out from his slee…"
1"He was quick, weaving through clusters of late-night revelers who cursed as he shoved past, umbrellas tilting like drunken sentinels."
2"Quinn had pieced it together from whispers: unauthorized treatments, patients who weren't quite human."
3"Herrera paused for a split second, fumbling in his pocket, then pressed something against a rusted grate—a small, bone-white token that glowed faintly in the di…"
4"Herrera vanished down the steps, the grate swinging shut behind him with a metallic clang that echoed like a challenge."
5"Vendors hawked wares under dim, ethereal glows: vials of iridescent liquids that swirled without stirring, amulets pulsing with inner light, scrolls of parchmen…"
6"Banned alchemical substances, enchanted goods, information that could topple empires."
7"Herrera was ahead, weaving through the crowd—a motley assortment of figures that set her nerves on edge."
8"Quinn surged forward, dodging a cart laden with glowing orbs that whispered unintelligible secrets as she passed."
9"A burly figure with tattoos that seemed to writhe on his skin stepped into her path, but she sidestepped with precision, her military training kicking in."
10"This was deeper than she'd imagined—potentially dangerous territory, teeming with elements that could swallow her whole."
11"Visions of Morris flashed: his body found in that warehouse, veins blackened as if by some internal fire, no toxicology to explain it."
12"The air thickened, charged with static that made her skin tingle."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she muttered, the words lost in the storm"
1"he said, voice steady despite the chase"
2"Quinn advanced slowly, her boots scraping on the gritty floor"
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.222
68.5558%