Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7WMGB27JTF1QHC1KT05E3

Run Details

Duration:
28.6s
Cost:
$0.001442
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory’s boots crunched on the frost-kissed grass of Richmond Park, her breath misting in the crisp December air. The winter solstice hung like a heavy breath, and her fingers flexed around the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip—moonsilver, cold as a grave, its leaf shape glinting faintly. Beside her, Nyx shifted into a more solid form, their violet eyes glowing like embers in the dim light. Lately, they’d been slipping into shadow more often, as if the world itself was fraying at the edges. Ahead, Isolde emerged from the trees, her silver hair a halo around her face, her lavender eyes unblinking. She left no prints in the snow, as always. “You brought it,” she said, nodding at the Heartstone Pendant beneath Rory’s jacket. The crimson gem pulsed, warmer now, as if sensing the grove’s proximity. Rory had no idea who’d given it to her—maybe a thank you for a delivery, maybe something else entirely—but it had started glowing when Evan’s ghost had brushed her shoulder in September. *Not a ghost*, she thought now. *Hellspawn*. Nyx’s voice was a whisper, carried on the wind. “The Veil is thin here. Too thin.” They glanced at the trees, their fingers trailing through a shadow until it coiled around their wrist like a bracelet. “We’ll have to move fast.” Isolde stepped forward, and the world *shook*. Not with a rumble, but a hum—a vibration that made Rory’s teeth ache. The trees around them blurred, their trunks melting into mist, and when she blinked, the empty path was gone. In its place: ancient oaks, their branches gnarled with age, their bark shimmering like mother-of-pearl. The sky was a soft, honeyed gold, not blue, and the air smelled of jasmine and something sharper, like ozone. “Welcome,” Isolde said, her voice echoing. “To the Fae Grove.” Rory stared at the standing stones—tall, weathered, their surfaces carved with runes she couldn’t read. They marked the boundary, Isolde had told her, but not between realms. Between *now* and *then*. She ran a gloved hand over one stone, and her fingers brushed something alive: a faint tingle, like electricity. “How…?” “Time bends here,” Isolde said. “An hour inside may be minutes outside. A day may be years. But do not fear the stretch. The grove is kind to those who mean well.” She turned, and Rory noticed the way her hem didn’t catch on the grass, the way the light clung to her skin like a second shadow. “Follow. The Heartstone will guide you.” The pendant pulsed faster, a thrumming that matched Rory’s heartbeat. She glanced at Nyx, who was already moving toward a cluster of wildflowers—orchids, their petals shifting from indigo to gold. “You’ve been here before.” “Once,” they said, plucking one and letting it dissolve into shadow. “A gift. To remember.” They didn’t elaborate, but their voice softened, almost nostalgic. Rory stepped over a root, her boots sinking into moss that glowed pale green, as if alive. The grove was larger than it should be—trees that curved upward, vanishing into the gold sky, a path that twisted in on itself, revealing new vistas with every step. To her left, a meadow erupted in red poppies, their petals glowing like embers. To her right, a waterfall spilled into a pool, and when she leaned closer, she saw her reflection—but it wasn’t her. Her eyes were violet, her hair a swirling mass of ink, and her hands… *pulsing* with shadow. She stepped back, startled, and the vision vanished. “Mirror of the Self,” Isolde said. “Shows what you might be, not what you are. Ignore it, if it troubles you.” Rory nodded, her throat tight. She’d been running from *what she was* for months—Evan’s abuse, the ghost that wouldn’t leave, the way her heart fluttered when Nyx’s shadow brushed hers. But here, in this place, the mask felt heavier. She touched the Heartstone, and it warmed, as if it knew. They walked for hours—though Rory wasn’t sure how many, the sun never seemed to move—and the trees thinned, revealing a clearing. At its center stood a stone altar, and around it, a circle of Fae-summoned candles, their flames blue. But the real wonder was the pool: not of water, but of light, a swirling mass of silver that rippled with images—battles, feasts, a crown of thorns, a city burning. Nyx’s hand closed around Rory’s wrist, their shadowy fingers cold. “That’s Hel,” they said, their voice tight. “Dymas. The court of Gluttony. I’ve seen it in my dreams.” Rory stared at the pool, as a vision overtook her: a prince with pearlescent skin and horns, laughing as a soul writhed on a platter, roasted alive. The prince’s eyes found hers, and he smiled. *Welcome*, he seemed to say. *Come play.* She shook her head, the vision fading. “How do you know that’s real?” “Because the Veil is fraying,” Isolde said, kneeling beside the altar. Her fingers brushed the stone, and the candles flared, blue light washing over her. “Winter solstice. The barrier weakens. Rifts form. Demons slip through.” She picked up a small bone—ivory, carved with runes—and set it on the altar. “This is a Warden’s bone. They patrol the Veil, but their ranks are thin. The Heartstone… it’s a key. To close the rifts. To keep them from spilling over.” Rory’s breath caught. “Why me? I’m just a delivery person.” Isolde smiled, a rare softness in her voice. “You are more than you know. The Heartstone chose you for a reason. And youyou *think* differently. You see the gaps. The places between what is and what could be.” She stood, and the pool of light dimmed, revealing a door—solid, oak, carved with images of the grove’s history. “That door leads to Dymas. But beware. Gluttony preys on欲望 (desire), on the hunger that never ends. You will feel it. The prince will *offer* you everything. Do not take it.” Nyx stepped into the light, their shadowy form merging with the pool. “I’ll go with you.” “No,” Isolde said immediately. “The Veil is thin, but Dymas is a realm of fire and flesh. A Shade like youyou would burn. Or worse. Become part of the feast.” Rory looked at Nyx, whose violet eyes were bright. “What if I can’t go alone?” Isolde placed a hand on her shoulder. “You are not alone. The grove has guarded you long before you knew it. And I… I will guide you. Through the riddle, through the feast, through the prince.” She took a small vial from her cloak—pale green liquid—and pressed it into Rory’s hand. “Herb of forgetfulness. It will calm the hunger. Drink it, if you must.” Rory tucked the vial into her pocket. The Heartstone pulsed again, and she realized they’d been standing still, the air thick with anticipation. The door loomed, and beyond it, she could smell smoke—smoky meat, rich sauces, something sweet and cloying, *sublime*. “Remember,” Isolde said, her voice low. “The prince is not a man. He is a hunger. A void. He thinks he wants *you*, but he only wants to devour. And youyou are the key to closing the Veil. To stopping him. Do not let him trick you.” Nyx’s shadow curled around Rory’s arm, a silent promise. She drew the Fae-Forged Blade, its edge singing. The runes on the stone altar flared to life, glowing green, and the air hummed. She took a step forward, the cold of the blade seeping into her hand, and pushed the door open. The world *exploded*. Fire and light, sounds of laughter and clanging silver. A feast hall that stretched to the sky, its ceiling a dome of crystal, letting in the amber light of Dymas. Tables groaned under platters of meat—steak, roasted swan, ribs smothered in sauce—while servants poured wine from golden goblets. And at the head of the hall, on a throne of bones, sat Prince Belphegor. He was beautiful. Tall, with black hair that fell to his shoulders, eyes the color of molten gold, a smile that could melt stone. His skin was pale, almost translucent, and his horns were ivory, curved like a ram’s. But his hands… they ended in claws, sharp as daggers, and his breath smelled of rotting fruit. “Welcome, little mortal,” he said, his voice like a velvet rope. “I’ve been waiting for you. The Heartstone called to me. It *sings* to me.” He lifted a goblet, and the crystal dome trembled. “Come. Sit. Eat. Drink. Let me show you what pleasure is.” Rory’s throat went dry. The air was thick with the scent of food, of desire—*her* desire, to be wanted, to be *seen*. She thought of Evan, of his hands on her wrists, of the way he’d called her “useless.” Then she thought of Nyx, of their shadowy touch, of the way they’d saved her from the hellspawn in that alley. She thought of Isolde, of her riddles and her wisdom, of the way she’d looked at Rory like she saw something worth saving. “I don’t want your pleasure,” she said, her voice steady. “I want to close the rift. To stop you from hurting anyone else.” Belphegor’s smile faltered, and for a moment, his eyes were black—empty, hungry. “Foolish girl. You think you can *stop* me? I am Gluttony. I am hunger. I am *eternal*. You cannot kill what is already part of you.” The Heartstone burned through Rory’s jacket, searing her skin. She stumbled back, gasping, and the Fae Blade in her hand glowed, hot and bright. The servants turned, their eyes the same black as the prince’s, and began to move toward her—a tide of hunger, of *longing*. Nyx’s shadow erupted from the shadows, coiling around Rory’s legs, keeping her from falling. “Go!” they yelled. “Through the door! The rift is behind you—*close it*!” Rory looked at the door, then at the prince, at the servants, at the hall that seemed to stretch on forever. She thought of the grove, of the standing stones, of Isolde’s voice: *You see the gaps. The places between what is and what could be*. She raised the Fae Blade, and the runes on its edge flared to life, green and fierce. “You’re not part of me,” she said, her voice breaking. “I choose better.” She charged. The servants lunged, their claws slashing, but the blade cut through them like butter, sending them dissolving into smoke. The prince laughed, a sound like a furnace, and rose from his throne, his horns glinting in the light. “Prove it. Prove you are *worthy* of being devoured.” He came at her, faster than a snake, his claws aimed for her throat. Rory ducked, rolling, and the blade sliced through his leg. He roared, black blood spurting, and the crystal dome cracked. “You *dare*?” he said, his voice rising. “I will make you *beg* for death!” Rory ran, the Heartstone burning higher, guiding her toward a column of smoke—the rift, Nyx had said. Behind her, the hall collapsed, the prince’s screams mixing with the roar of fire. She reached the rift, and the walls of the dome fell, revealing the amber sky of Dymas. The Heartstone pulsed, a beacon, and she pressed her palm to it, feeling the magic surge through her. “Isolde was right,” she whispered. “The prince is a void.” She squeezed her eyes shut, focusing on the grove, on the standing stones, on the warmth of the Fae Blade in her hand. And then, with a scream of power, she pulled. The rift closed. The world went still. Rory fell to her knees, gasping, as the Heartstone dimmed, its glow returning to a faint pulse. The Fae Grove was gone, replaced by the snow-covered woods of Richmond Park. Nyx appeared beside her, their form solid, their violet eyes wide. “You did it,” they said. She looked at her hand, at the crescent scar on her left wrist, at the blade in her hand. “I don’t know what to do next.” Isolde stepped from the trees, her silver hair wind-tossed, her lavender eyes glowing. “You have a friend in a bar below you. A man named Silas. He’s been watching you. He can help you understand the Heartstone. The Fae Blade. The rifts.” She smiled, a small, sad smile. “The grove is patient. But it does not forgive waiting.” Rory stood, the blade in her hand, the pendant warm against her chest. She thought of Evan, of the ghost, of the prince, and she felt… *lighter*. Not because she’d won, but because she’d *tried*. Because she was more than the shadows, more than the hunger, more than the people who’d tried to break her. She took Nyx’s hand, and they walked into the park, the snow crunching beneath their boots. Behind them, the trees stood silent, watching. And somewhere, in the distance, the Heartstone pulsed. A new rift, maybe. Or maybe a sign. Either way, Rory was ready. She had a blade. She had a pendant. She had friends. And she had a hunger of her own—for justice, for truth, for the life she was going to build, *on her own terms*. The world, she knew, would never be the same.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said immediately [immediately]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.49
leniency0.98
rawRatio0.04
effectiveRatio0.039
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2219
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2219
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"grave"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count5
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"fluttered"
count1
6
word"desire"
count3
7
word"anticipation"
count1
8
word"loomed"
count1
9
word"crystal"
count3
10
word"velvet"
count1
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"searing"
count1
13
word"charged"
count1
14
word"beacon"
count1
15
word"warmth"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"grave"
1"glinting"
2"pulsed"
3"whisper"
4"echoing"
5"fluttered"
6"desire"
7"anticipation"
8"loomed"
9"crystal"
10"velvet"
11"trembled"
12"searing"
13"charged"
14"beacon"
15"warmth"
16"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences136
matches
0"k with anticipation"
79.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences136
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tried to"
99.19% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0.006
matches
0"“That door leads to Dymas. But beware. Gluttony preys on欲望 (desire), on the hunger that never ends. You will feel it. The prince will *offer* you everything. Do not take it.”"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans28
markdownWords49
totalWords2187
ratio0.022
matches
0"Not a ghost"
1"Hellspawn"
2"shook"
3"now"
4"then"
5"pulsing"
6"what she was"
7"Welcome"
8"Come play."
9"think"
10"offer"
11"sublime"
12"you"
13"exploded"
14"sings"
15"her"
16"seen"
17"stop"
18"eternal"
19"longing"
20"close it"
21"You see the gaps. The places between what is and what could be"
22"worthy"
23"dare"
24"beg"
25"lighter"
26"tried"
27"on her own terms"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions94
wordCount1681
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.61
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
December1
Fae-Forged2
Blade5
Nyx13
Isolde14
Heartstone8
Pendant1
Rory27
Evan4
September1
Fae-summoned1
Dymas2
Prince1
Belphegor2
Fae7
Grove1
persons
0"Blade"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Heartstone"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Prince"
7"Belphegor"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"September"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
globalScore0.697
windowScore0.667
77.88% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if sensing the grove’s proximity"
1"hall that seemed to stretch on forever"
2"appeared beside her, their form solid, their violet eyes wide"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.914
wordCount2187
matches
0"Not with a rumble, but a hum"
1"not of water, but of light, a swirling mass of silver"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean39.05
std26.36
cv0.675
sampleLengths
0110
164
241
374
410
551
664
734
824
9106
1021
1150
1269
1328
1455
1578
1610
1789
1816
1931
2015
2164
2241
2348
2451
253
2663
2756
2845
2983
3023
3138
3246
3326
3446
3530
362
3747
3834
3914
4066
4110
4232
433
444
4546
4626
4758
4855
4923
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences136
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs292
matches
0"was fraying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences162
ratio0.123
matches
0"The winter solstice hung like a heavy breath, and her fingers flexed around the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip—moonsilver, cold as a grave, its leaf shape glinting faintly."
1"Rory had no idea who’d given it to her—maybe a thank you for a delivery, maybe something else entirely—but it had started glowing when Evan’s ghost had brushed her shoulder in September."
2"Not with a rumble, but a hum—a vibration that made Rory’s teeth ache."
3"Rory stared at the standing stones—tall, weathered, their surfaces carved with runes she couldn’t read."
4"She glanced at Nyx, who was already moving toward a cluster of wildflowers—orchids, their petals shifting from indigo to gold."
5"The grove was larger than it should be—trees that curved upward, vanishing into the gold sky, a path that twisted in on itself, revealing new vistas with every step."
6"To her right, a waterfall spilled into a pool, and when she leaned closer, she saw her reflection—but it wasn’t her."
7"She’d been running from *what she was* for months—Evan’s abuse, the ghost that wouldn’t leave, the way her heart fluttered when Nyx’s shadow brushed hers."
8"They walked for hours—though Rory wasn’t sure how many, the sun never seemed to move—and the trees thinned, revealing a clearing."
9"But the real wonder was the pool: not of water, but of light, a swirling mass of silver that rippled with images—battles, feasts, a crown of thorns, a city burning."
10"“Winter solstice. The barrier weakens. Rifts form. Demons slip through.” She picked up a small bone—ivory, carved with runes—and set it on the altar."
11"“You are more than you know. The Heartstone chose you for a reason. And you… you *think* differently. You see the gaps. The places between what is and what could be.” She stood, and the pool of light dimmed, revealing a door—solid, oak, carved with images of the grove’s history."
12"“You are not alone. The grove has guarded you long before you knew it. And I… I will guide you. Through the riddle, through the feast, through the prince.” She took a small vial from her cloak—pale green liquid—and pressed it into Rory’s hand."
13"The door loomed, and beyond it, she could smell smoke—smoky meat, rich sauces, something sweet and cloying, *sublime*."
14"Tables groaned under platters of meat—steak, roasted swan, ribs smothered in sauce—while servants poured wine from golden goblets."
15"The air was thick with the scent of food, of desire—*her* desire, to be wanted, to be *seen*."
16"Belphegor’s smile faltered, and for a moment, his eyes were black—empty, hungry."
17"The servants turned, their eyes the same black as the prince’s, and began to move toward her—a tide of hunger, of *longing*."
18"Rory ran, the Heartstone burning higher, guiding her toward a column of smoke—the rift, Nyx had said."
19"And she had a hunger of her own—for justice, for truth, for the life she was going to build, *on her own terms*."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1713
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.022183304144775248
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.002335084646818447
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean13.5
std9.33
cv0.691
sampleLengths
018
128
219
318
418
59
613
712
832
96
101
119
1227
135
147
1513
1619
1715
1820
196
204
2115
2212
234
2419
251
265
2753
286
2910
3020
314
3211
3313
3417
3529
3614
3721
3814
393
408
416
4215
435
4425
459
4611
4721
4818
4930
52.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.345679012345679
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners56
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
ratio0
79.38% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences128
matches
0"She left no prints in"
1"she said, nodding at the"
2"They glanced at the trees,"
3"They marked the boundary, Isolde"
4"She ran a gloved hand"
5"She turned, and Rory noticed"
6"She glanced at Nyx, who"
7"they said, plucking one and"
8"They didn’t elaborate, but their"
9"Her eyes were violet, her"
10"She stepped back, startled, and"
11"She’d been running from *what"
12"She touched the Heartstone, and"
13"They walked for hours—though Rory"
14"they said, their voice tight"
15"Her fingers brushed the stone,"
16"She picked up a small"
17"She stood, and the pool"
18"She took a small vial"
19"She drew the Fae-Forged Blade,"
ratio0.352
65.47% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount101
totalSentences128
matches
0"Rory’s boots crunched on the"
1"The winter solstice hung like"
2"She left no prints in"
3"she said, nodding at the"
4"The crimson gem pulsed, warmer"
5"Rory had no idea who’d"
6"Nyx’s voice was a whisper,"
7"They glanced at the trees,"
8"Isolde stepped forward, and the"
9"The trees around them blurred,"
10"The sky was a soft,"
11"Isolde said, her voice echoing"
12"Rory stared at the standing"
13"They marked the boundary, Isolde"
14"She ran a gloved hand"
15"She turned, and Rory noticed"
16"The pendant pulsed faster, a"
17"She glanced at Nyx, who"
18"they said, plucking one and"
19"They didn’t elaborate, but their"
ratio0.789
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences128
matches
0"To her left, a meadow"
1"To her right, a waterfall"
2"Because she was more than"
3"Either way, Rory was ready."
ratio0.031
39.34% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences69
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She glanced at Nyx, who was already moving toward a cluster of wildflowers—orchids, their petals shifting from indigo to gold."
1"Rory stepped over a root, her boots sinking into moss that glowed pale green, as if alive."
2"The grove was larger than it should be—trees that curved upward, vanishing into the gold sky, a path that twisted in on itself, revealing new vistas with every …"
3"She’d been running from *what she was* for months—Evan’s abuse, the ghost that wouldn’t leave, the way her heart fluttered when Nyx’s shadow brushed hers."
4"But the real wonder was the pool: not of water, but of light, a swirling mass of silver that rippled with images—battles, feasts, a crown of thorns, a city burn…"
5"A feast hall that stretched to the sky, its ceiling a dome of crystal, letting in the amber light of Dymas."
6"Tall, with black hair that fell to his shoulders, eyes the color of molten gold, a smile that could melt stone."
7"Nyx’s shadow erupted from the shadows, coiling around Rory’s legs, keeping her from falling."
8"The servants lunged, their claws slashing, but the blade cut through them like butter, sending them dissolving into smoke."
9"Rory fell to her knees, gasping, as the Heartstone dimmed, its glow returning to a faint pulse."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Isolde said, her voice echoing"
1"They didn’t, but their voice softened, almost nostalgic"
2"they said, their voice tight"
3"Isolde said, her voice low"
4"she said, her voice steady"
5"she said, her voice breaking"
6"he said, his voice rising"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"they yelled (yell)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.627
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.078
80.0615%