Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7X3ENXNZ5N52NRG3GXRKB

Run Details

Duration:
40.2s
Cost:
$0.001725
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant, its deep crimson gem pulsing hot against her palm like a second heartbeat. The silver chain bit into her skin as she stepped through the shimmering rift in the Veil, the air thickening with a sweetness that cloyed her throat. Behind her, the Fae Grove's ancient oaks snapped shut like a closing jaw, their bark twisting into seamless unity. No going back now. The world beyond the portal unfolded in a rush of amber light. Rory blinked, her bright blue eyes watering against the haze. The sky arched overhead, not blue or gray but a vast, churning expanse of warm amber, veined with lazy swirls of gold—like honey stirred into molten glass. It bathed everything in a perpetual late-afternoon glow, casting long shadows that writhed unnaturally at the edges of her vision. She staggered forward a step, boots sinking into loamy soil that smelled of overripe fruit and spiced wine. Grapevines thicker than her thighs snaked across the ground, their leaves glossy and oversized, each one broad enough to shade a man. Bunches of grapes dangled like pendulums, swollen to the size of fists, skins translucent and veined with purple fire. One burst under a distant footfall, spraying juice that sizzled faintly on the earth. "By the stars," Rory whispered, her voice swallowed by the hum of the place. Her straight black hair clung to her neck in the humid air, and she brushed it back, feeling the small crescent scar on her left wrist throb faintly—a ghost of childhood pain amid this surreal excess. Nyx materialized beside her, their humanoid silhouette coalescing from wisps of shadow. At six-foot-two in solid form, they towered over Rory, faintly glowing violet eyes scanning the horizon. "Dymas," they murmured, voice like wind sighing through cracked stone. "Gluttony's belly. It hungers eternally." Isolde glided past without a sound—no footprints marred the soft earth where she tread. Her silver hair cascaded to her waist, catching the amber light in prismatic shimmers, and her pale lavender eyes gleamed with that eternal, knowing distance. "The prince's table stretches wide," she said, words curling like smoke. "But one bite may fill a belly, or empty a soul. Tread where the vines whisper sweet nothings." Rory shot her a glance, the Half-Fae's riddles already grating. "Thanks for the poetry, Isolde. Any chance of something straightforward?" She patted the Fae-Forged Blade at her hip, its moonsilver hilt cool even through her jacket. Isolde's gift, it hummed faintly now, as if eager. The seer only smiled, ethereal and ageless, lips parting to reveal teeth like polished pearls. They pressed deeper, the ground sloping gently into a vast orchard. Trees loomed, trunks gnarled and bulbous, branches sagging under fruits Rory had no names for: melons veined with liquid gold, apples the size of pumpkins blushing crimson, berries clustered like jewels that pulsed with inner light. The air thrummed with a low, rhythmic pulse—breathing, almost, as if the land itself inhaled the scents of decay and ripeness. A breeze carried laughter, distant and booming, mingled with the wet smack of chewing jaws. Rory's stomach twisted, not with hunger but a prickling unease. Her delivery job back in London had toughened her to the reek of takeout grease, but this was different—visceral, overwhelming. She licked her lips, tasting sugar unbidden. "Look there," Nyx hissed, pointing with a tendril of shadow that extended from their arm. Ahead, through a lattice of vines, sprawled a grand pavilion. Tables groaned under platters: roasted beasts the size of cattle, their flesh marbled with glowing fats; towers of pastries dripping honey that pooled and steamed; chalices overflowing with wines that bubbled like living things, fizzing up in colors from blood-red to starlit blue. Helbound souls feasted—translucent figures contracted from Earth, their faces bloated with eternal indulgence. A chef in soot-stained whites barked orders, flames leaping from his pans to sculpt flames into edible roses. One soul, a woman with cheeks puffed like a squirrel's, crammed fistfuls of glistening caviar into her mouth, eyes rolling back in ecstasy. It spilled down her chin, staining ethereal robes. Rory's breath caught. "They're... trapped here? Part of the show?" Nyx's form flickered, incorporeal edges fraying. "Contracts bind them. Belphegor's cooks, forever perfecting the feast. Eat too much, and you join the menu." Unease coiled in Rory's gut like bad takeout. She thought of her flat above Silas' bar, the simple joy of Eva's fish and chips. This place mocked it, promising infinity but delivering chains. The pendant burned hotter now, tucked against her chest, its faint glow visible through her shirt. Isolde paused at a low-hanging branch, plucking a pear-like fruit swollen to the girth of her forearm. It wept nectar as she turned it in her hands. "Skin of silk, heart of fire. One taste reveals the orchard's secret." She bit delicately, juice erupting in a spray that arced rainbow hues. Her lavender eyes sharpened. "The prince watches from the vineyard's heart. Seek the shadowed arbor, where vines weep blood-wine." Rory snatched the fruit from her, heart pounding. "No eating random demon fruit. Remember the last time someone ignored a warning?" She tossed it aside, where it split open, revealing a core that pulsed like a heart, tendrils snaking out to probe the soil. They veered left, following Isolde's lead into denser groves. The amber sky deepened, threads of gold weaving tighter, as if the heavens conspired to mimic a banquet cloth. Sounds amplified: the slurp of unseen mouths, the clink of infinite cutlery, a chorus of moans that blurred pleasure and torment. Rory's skin prickled; the air grew heavier, pressing on her lungs, urging her to indulge. A discovery jolted her—a clearing ringed by marble statues of gluttons mid-bite, mouths agape, eyes hollow. At the center, a fountain bubbled not water but a viscous chocolate, scented with vanilla and sin. Steam rose in shapes: dancing figures, writhing limbs. Nyx dipped a shadowy finger in, the substance clinging like tar. "Essence of excess. It binds the weak." Rory knelt, peering into the depths. Ripples formed visions—flashes of Earthly feasts: weddings drowned in cake, holidays bloated with turkey. Her own memories flickered: Christmas with her parents in Cardiff, her father's booming laugh over too much pudding. She jerked back, wrist scar itching fiercely. "Not yours to claim," Isolde murmured, her voice a lullaby laced with warning. "The fountain mirrors desires unquenched." Wonder crept in despite the dread. Rory rose, pushing through a curtain of vines heavy with blossoms that exhaled perfume like opium smoke. Beyond lay a culinary arena: tiered seats carved from petrified fruits, packed with shades and demons sporting curling horns and bellies like barrels. In the pit, two chefs dueled—knives flashing, ingredients conjured from thin air. One hurled a fireball of dough that exploded into buttery shards; the victor claimed a crown of woven laurels dripping sauce. The crowd roared, a wave of sound that shook leaves from the trees. Rory ducked behind a trunk, pulse racing. "This is insane. Beautiful, but... wrong." Nyx's violet eyes flared. "It seduces. My summoning in '43—shadows promised power, delivered chains. Like this." They crept onward, the path narrowing into a tunnel of arched branches. Thorns like curved fangs snagged Rory's jacket, drawing beads of blood that the vines lapped up with greedy rustles. The air cooled here, laced with fermentation—blood-wine, Isolde had said. Whispers slithered from the leaves: *Taste me. Fill the void. Forever.* Rory clamped a hand over her mouth, fighting the pull. Her out-of-the-box mind raced: the pendant's heat meant a Hel portal nearby, perhaps an exit or deeper gate. But why Dymas? The anonymous gift, Isolde's visions of "gluttony's heart hiding Hel's key"—it all pointed here, to unravel whatever bound Nyx or threatened the Veil. A break in the tunnel revealed the shadowed arbor. Vines twisted into a throne-like canopy, grapes weeping rivulets of deep burgundy that pooled in basins. At its foot, a dais held a single platter: a fruit resembling the pendant's gem, crimson and throbbing. Isolde halted, silver hair stirring without wind. "The prince's lure. Touch it, and the feast claims you. Or frees what hungers." Nyx solidified fully, shadows coiling like armor. "Belphegor tests intruders. We came for the rift-key, not his table." Rory drew the Fae blade, its leaf-shaped edge gleaming cold, luminescent even in amber gloom. It sliced a vine effortlessly, demonic sap hissing on the moonsilver. Unease peaked—footsteps thundered from the arena, feasters drawn by the disturbance. But wonder lingered in the arbor's pulse, a symphony of indulgence that sang of forbidden plenitude. She advanced, pendant scorching her skin. The fruit on the dais quivered, splitting to reveal not seeds, but a shard of obsidian veined with violet—the key to Nyx's full freedom, perhaps, or the Veil's tear. Her blue eyes narrowed, cool-headed resolve cutting through the haze. "Time to eat or be eaten," she muttered, blade raised. The arbor sighed, vines parting like welcoming arms, as the amber sky watched with golden indifference. Deeper they delved, the gluttony's heart unfurling secrets in every swallow of air, every gleam of excess. Rory's world had shrunk to this: survival amid splendor, where wonder and dread feasted side by side.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:19:54.594Z" 2/20/2026, 7:19:54 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She bit delicately [delicately]"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.476
leniency0.952
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.095
96.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1559
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1559
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"churning"
count1
1
word"footfall"
count1
2
word"throb"
count1
3
word"surreal"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"loomed"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count2
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count3
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"glistening"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count2
13
word"silk"
count1
14
word"pounding"
count1
15
word"marble"
count1
16
word"dancing"
count1
17
word"depths"
count1
18
word"racing"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"unravel"
count1
21
word"gleaming"
count1
22
word"gloom"
count1
23
word"footsteps"
count1
24
word"thundered"
count1
25
word"symphony"
count1
26
word"quivered"
count1
27
word"resolve"
count1
28
word"delved"
count1
highlights
0"churning"
1"footfall"
2"throb"
3"surreal"
4"scanning"
5"whisper"
6"loomed"
7"pulsed"
8"rhythmic"
9"pulse"
10"stomach"
11"glistening"
12"flickered"
13"silk"
14"pounding"
15"marble"
16"dancing"
17"depths"
18"racing"
19"raced"
20"unravel"
21"gleaming"
22"gloom"
23"footsteps"
24"thundered"
25"symphony"
26"quivered"
27"resolve"
28"delved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords6
totalWords1532
ratio0.004
matches
0"Taste me. Fill the void. Forever."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
86.80% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount1345
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.26
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Veil3
Fae4
Grove1
Rory17
Isolde8
Half-Fae1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
London1
Ahead1
Earth1
Earthly1
Christmas1
Cardiff1
Wonder1
Hel1
Dymas1
Nyx8
One3
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Rory"
2"Isolde"
3"Half-Fae"
4"Blade"
5"Wonder"
6"Nyx"
7"One"
places
0"Veil"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
3"London"
4"Earth"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore0.868
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.611
wordCount1532
matches
0"not blue or gray but a vast, churning expanse of warm amber, veined with lazy swi"
1"not with hunger but a prickling unease"
2"not water but a viscous chocolate, scented with vanilla"
3"not seeds, but a shard of obsidian veined with violet"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
78.12% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs33
mean46.42
std19.66
cv0.423
sampleLengths
070
169
273
350
443
568
645
715
868
952
1068
1162
1210
1323
1449
1570
1644
1764
1859
1945
2018
2179
2226
2316
2452
2554
2643
2721
2818
2953
3045
3126
3234
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs246
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences108
ratio0.139
matches
0"The sky arched overhead, not blue or gray but a vast, churning expanse of warm amber, veined with lazy swirls of gold—like honey stirred into molten glass."
1"Her straight black hair clung to her neck in the humid air, and she brushed it back, feeling the small crescent scar on her left wrist throb faintly—a ghost of childhood pain amid this surreal excess."
2"Isolde glided past without a sound—no footprints marred the soft earth where she tread."
3"The air thrummed with a low, rhythmic pulse—breathing, almost, as if the land itself inhaled the scents of decay and ripeness."
4"Her delivery job back in London had toughened her to the reek of takeout grease, but this was different—visceral, overwhelming."
5"Tables groaned under platters: roasted beasts the size of cattle, their flesh marbled with glowing fats; towers of pastries dripping honey that pooled and steamed; chalices overflowing with wines that bubbled like living things, fizzing up in colors from blood-red to starlit blue."
6"Helbound souls feasted—translucent figures contracted from Earth, their faces bloated with eternal indulgence."
7"Rory's skin prickled; the air grew heavier, pressing on her lungs, urging her to indulge."
8"A discovery jolted her—a clearing ringed by marble statues of gluttons mid-bite, mouths agape, eyes hollow."
9"Ripples formed visions—flashes of Earthly feasts: weddings drowned in cake, holidays bloated with turkey."
10"In the pit, two chefs dueled—knives flashing, ingredients conjured from thin air."
11"One hurled a fireball of dough that exploded into buttery shards; the victor claimed a crown of woven laurels dripping sauce."
12"The air cooled here, laced with fermentation—blood-wine, Isolde had said."
13"Unease peaked—footsteps thundered from the arena, feasters drawn by the disturbance."
14"The fruit on the dais quivered, splitting to reveal not seeds, but a shard of obsidian veined with violet—the key to Nyx's full freedom, perhaps, or the Veil's tear."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1044
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.023946360153256706
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008620689655172414
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean14.19
std7.61
cv0.536
sampleLengths
020
127
219
34
412
510
627
720
818
922
1019
1114
1214
1336
1412
1516
1610
175
1814
1925
2011
2118
2210
2326
249
2515
2611
2736
2821
2915
3010
3120
327
3315
3410
3543
3613
3718
3823
398
403
417
426
4317
448
4516
469
4716
4817
4910
70.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.42592592592592593
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences96
matches
0"It bathed everything in a"
1"She staggered forward a step,"
2"Her straight black hair clung"
3"they murmured, voice like wind"
4"Her silver hair cascaded to"
5"she said, words curling like"
6"She patted the Fae-Forged Blade"
7"They pressed deeper, the ground"
8"Her delivery job back in"
9"She licked her lips, tasting"
10"It spilled down her chin,"
11"She thought of her flat"
12"It wept nectar as she"
13"She bit delicately, juice erupting"
14"Her lavender eyes sharpened."
15"She tossed it aside, where"
16"They veered left, following Isolde's"
17"Her own memories flickered: Christmas"
18"She jerked back, wrist scar"
19"They crept onward, the path"
ratio0.26
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences96
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The silver chain bit into"
2"The world beyond the portal"
3"Rory blinked, her bright blue"
4"The sky arched overhead, not"
5"It bathed everything in a"
6"She staggered forward a step,"
7"Grapevines thicker than her thighs"
8"Bunches of grapes dangled like"
9"Rory whispered, her voice swallowed"
10"Her straight black hair clung"
11"Nyx materialized beside her, their"
12"they murmured, voice like wind"
13"Isolde glided past without a"
14"Her silver hair cascaded to"
15"she said, words curling like"
16"Rory shot her a glance,"
17"She patted the Fae-Forged Blade"
18"Isolde's gift, it hummed faintly"
19"The seer only smiled, ethereal"
ratio0.833
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
ratio0
60.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The silver chain bit into her skin as she stepped through the shimmering rift in the Veil, the air thickening with a sweetness that cloyed her throat."
1"She staggered forward a step, boots sinking into loamy soil that smelled of overripe fruit and spiced wine."
2"Tables groaned under platters: roasted beasts the size of cattle, their flesh marbled with glowing fats; towers of pastries dripping honey that pooled and steam…"
3"Sounds amplified: the slurp of unseen mouths, the clink of infinite cutlery, a chorus of moans that blurred pleasure and torment."
4"Rory rose, pushing through a curtain of vines heavy with blossoms that exhaled perfume like opium smoke."
5"One hurled a fireball of dough that exploded into buttery shards; the victor claimed a crown of woven laurels dripping sauce."
6"Vines twisted into a throne-like canopy, grapes weeping rivulets of deep burgundy that pooled in basins."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She patted, its moonsilver hilt cool even through her jacket"
1"Isolde murmured, her voice a lullaby laced with warning"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Rory whispered (whisper)"
1"they murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
3"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
4"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.476
72.0644%