Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7ZQBMX7K38AM9ARGS3VDK

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Duration:
33.9s
Cost:
$0.001728
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Camden High Street like a thousand accusing fingers, turning the gutters into rushing black rivers. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick asphalt, breath steady despite the burn in her lungs. Eighteen years on the force had forged her into this—military precision in a sodden trench coat, salt-and-pepper hair cropped close and plastered flat against her scalp. Her brown eyes, sharp as flint, locked on the figure darting ahead: Tomás Herrera, the ghost she'd been chasing for weeks. He was fast, the bastard. Olive skin gleaming under sodium streetlights, short curly dark hair matted and wild. That Saint Christopher medallion swung from his neck like a taunt, catching the light as he vaulted a low railing into a side alley. Quinn's worn leather watch ticked insistently on her left wrist—10:47 PM. Too late for civilians, perfect for rats like him to scurry. "Stop! Police!" Her voice cut through the roar of the storm, but the wind snatched it away. She followed, sharp jaw clenched, coat flapping like broken wings. Herrera had slipped her surveillance twice before—once from that dive in Soho, the Raven's Nest, with its green neon sign flickering like a bad omen. She'd watched him slip through the crowd there, patching up some lowlifes in the shadows, his paramedic hands steady even off the books. NHS license revoked for "unauthorized treatments," the file said. But Quinn knew better. Supernatural whispers clung to him, to his whole clique. Just like the case that took DS Morris three years back—unexplained shadows, blood that didn't match the victim. She wouldn't lose another. The alley narrowed, choked with overflowing bins and graffiti-smeared walls. Herrera glanced back, warm brown eyes widening in the gloom, scar on his left forearm flashing white as he shoved a crate aside. He bolted toward a chain-link fence bordering an abandoned construction site, the kind that dotted Camden's underbelly. Quinn vaulted it without breaking stride, wire snagging her coat sleeve. Pain flared, but she ignored it—focus on the prey. He was heading down. A service grate yawned in the concrete, half-hidden by pallets, rain pooling around its rusted edges. Herrera dropped to his knees, pried it open with practiced ease, and vanished into the dark maw below. Echoes of his boots clanged on metal stairs, swallowed by the subterranean howl of wind through forgotten tunnels. Quinn skidded to a halt at the edge, heart pounding a war drum in her chest. Flashlight beam pierced the void: a disused Tube station platform, abandoned since the Blitz, or so the maps claimed. Graffiti writhed on tiled walls like living veins—symbols she didn't recognize, jagged and arcane. The air rising from below reeked of damp stone, incense, and something sharper, like ozone after lightning. Voices drifted up, muffled laughter, haggling in tongues that twisted her gut. Not homeless. Not junkies. This was something else. Her radio crackled, static-laced. "Quinn, status? Backup en route?" Dispatch, oblivious. "Negative," she barked, thumbing the button. "Suspect in underground. Camden sector, abandoned Tube. Hold position—solo entry." She clicked off before arguments could flow. Backup would cordon the streets, miss the prize. Herrera was the key to the clique, to whatever rot festered beneath the city. And Morris... God, Morris. That night in the warehouse, his screams cut short by nothing she could see. "Supernatural bullshit," the brass called it. Cover-up. But she'd seen the residue, felt the chill that lingered. Hand on her holstered Glock, she swung her legs over the lip. The ladder was slick, rungs biting into her palms. Eighteen feet down—counted them as she descended, watch glowing faintly. Her boots hit mosaic tiles, cracked and uneven, flashlight sweeping the platform. Dim lanterns hung from exposed wires, casting pools of amber light on stalls that shouldn't exist. Booths crammed the space: tables laden with vials of glowing liquid, amulets pulsing with inner fire, books bound in hides that didn't come from cows. Vendors in hooded cloaks bartered with patrons whose eyes gleamed too yellow, too elongated. The Veil Market. She'd heard rumors in the Nest, whispers from informants too scared to name it. Bone token entry, they said—full moon relocations. Tonight wasn't full, but here it was, throbbing like a hidden heart. Herrera was twenty yards ahead, weaving through the throng. He shoved past a stall selling jars of writhing shadows, medallion tucked into his shirt now, scar hidden under rolled sleeves. A woman with scales glinting on her cheeks hissed at him, but he didn't stop, ducking under a low arch into a tunnel branch. Quinn holstered her light, kept low, coat dripping rivers onto the floor. Eyes tracked her—predatory, curious. A dwarf with filed teeth grinned, offering "eternal youth serum" from a syringe. She ignored him, pulse thundering. This place reeked of the unnatural, the same void that claimed Morris. But turning back? Let Herrera vanish into this warren, regroup with his supernatural pals? No. She was 5'9" of Metropolitan steel; she'd faced worse. The crowd thickened, bodies pressing—fur-tufted arms, skin like cracked leather. A hand brushed her watch; she jerked away, glimpsing claws retracting. "Fresh meat," a gravel voice murmured. She quickened pace, sharp jaw grinding teeth. Herrera emerged into a wider cavern, bioluminescent fungi clinging to the ceiling like sickly stars. Central market: cages with chittering imps, altars etched with runes, a fountain bubbling blood-red elixir. He paused at a booth, spoke rapid Spanish to a hooded figure—Silas? No, wrong bar. The man handed over a pouch, coins clinking. Quinn circled wide, using a pillar for cover. Rain still drummed above, distant thunder. Her mind raced: Call it in now, risk infestation scattering? Or tail him deeper? A scream pierced the din—a vendor gutting a live eel-thing, entrails steaming. Patrons cheered. This was no black market; this was hell's bazaar. Herrera moved again, toward a bookshelf-lined alcove. False front—she saw the seam. He pressed a bone token into a slot; the shelf groaned inward, revealing a hidden passage pulsing with green light. Clandestine meetings, like the Nest's back room, but amplified. He slipped through. Decision point. Sweat beaded under her collar despite the chill. Morris's face flashed—pale, eyes vacant, wounds that sealed themselves. "Harlow, it's not—" His last words. Whatever killed him hid here, in places like this. Herrera knew. The clique knew. Footsteps approached—two bruisers, horns curling from foreheads, sniffing the air. "Cop stink," one growled, nostrils flaring. Quinn's hand flew to her Glock. Military bearing snapped in: deep breath, assess. Outnumbered in the open. She darted forward, blending into the flow toward the bookshelf. The bruisers paused, distracted by a brawl over a cursed dagger. She reached the alcove, breath held. No token. Fuck. Fingers probed the edges—hidden latch? A loose brick yielded, carved with a raven. Click. The shelf parted six inches, enough. She squeezed through, coat snagging wood. The passage twisted downward, walls veined with glowing quartz. Voices echoed ahead: Herrera's accent, thick with urgency. "...Quinn's on me. Close it down." Another voice, sibilant: "The detective? Here? Bold." Quinn crept, boots silent on damp stone. Watch read 10:52. Tension coiled her spine like barbed wire. Light bloomed—a chamber, twenty by twenty, ringed by velvet drapes. Herrera stood with three others: a woman with ink-black tattoos writhing on her arms, a gaunt man exhaling smoke that formed faces, and a child—no, not child, eyes ancient—who clutched a deck of bone cards. They spun as she burst in, Glock leveled. "Metropolitan Police. Hands up, Herrera. You're nicked." Herrera's warm brown eyes met hers, no fear—resignation, laced with pity. "Detective Quinn. You shouldn't have followed." The tattooed woman snarled, tattoos surging like serpents. The smoker exhaled—a face coalescing into Morris's, mouthing "Run." Quinn's grip tightened, stomach plummeting. Hallucination? Or real? The air thickened, shadows lengthening. Her watch stopped ticking. The gaunt man chuckled. "Welcome to the Veil, Detective. Tokens don't work both ways." Panic clawed up her throat, but she held fire discipline. Military precision: target the leader. Herrera raised hands slowly, scar stark, medallion glowing faintly. "Harlow—listen. This isn't your world. Go back." The child giggled, cards fanning: Death, reversed. No retreat. Not now. Not with Morris's ghost leering. She advanced, barrel steady. "On the floor. All of you." Shadows lunged. Quinn fired—crack echoing like judgment. The tattooed woman shrieked, ink boiling from a shoulder wound. Chaos erupted: Herrera dove left, medallion flaring protective light; smoker hurled a cloud of choking vapor. Quinn coughed, eyes watering, Glock barking blindly. She stumbled back, hitting the wall. Passageway—exit sealed, bookshelf fused shut by writhing vines. Trapped. Herrera pinned her arm, surprisingly gentle. "Stop. They'll kill you." Up close, his scar told stories—knife fight, survival. "Like you killed Morris?" she spat, knee driving up. He grunted, olive skin paling. "Morris? We tried to save him." His breath hot, accent thickening. "Supernatural bleed-over. Your partner saw too much." Lies. But the smoke-face hovered, Morris's voice whispering: "Harlow... believe." The others closed in, eyes hungry. Quinn twisted free, Glock skittering away. Fists flew—her sharp jaw connected with Herrera's nose, crunching cartilage. Blood sprayed, mixing rain scent. He staggered, medallion swinging. She lunged for the gun—claws raked her back, fire lancing. Tattoo woman. Quinn rolled, grabbed a fallen card—bone edge sliced her palm. Power surged? No time. Vines snaked ankles. She slashed, freed one leg, kicked. The child laughed maniacally. Herrera yelled, "Enough! She's mine." He hauled the woman back, medallion burning her touch. Quinn retrieved the Glock, wild-eyed. Barrel on him. "Talk. The clique. Morris." He wiped blood, standing tall—5'10" to her 5'9", but no threat. "Clique protects. Veil's the danger. You followed into the beast's belly." The chamber trembled—alarms? Voices from the market swelled. Decision crystallized: Shoot to kill, extract intel dead? Or ally with the devil she knew? Rain pounded above, a world's weight. Quinn lowered the gun a fraction. "Prove it." Herrera nodded, scar throbbing. "Token." He tossed the bone—hers now. Shadows swirled. Escape or deeper plunge? She pocketed it. "Lead." They ran—into the unknown, Quinn's world shattering with every step. The thriller tightened its noose.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The passage twisted downward [downward]"
1"Your partner saw too [too]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.744
leniency1
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.063
97.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1725
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"gleaming"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"jaw clenched"
count1
3
word"gloom"
count1
4
word"practiced ease"
count1
5
word"maw"
count1
6
word"echoes"
count1
7
word"pounding"
count1
8
word"chill"
count2
9
word"mosaic"
count1
10
word"glinting"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"quickened"
count1
13
word"etched"
count1
14
word"raced"
count1
15
word"clandestine"
count1
16
word"footsteps"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count1
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"velvet"
count1
20
word"stomach"
count1
21
word"stark"
count1
22
word"echoing"
count1
23
word"trembled"
count1
24
word"crystallized"
count1
25
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"gleaming"
1"perfect"
2"jaw clenched"
3"gloom"
4"practiced ease"
5"maw"
6"echoes"
7"pounding"
8"chill"
9"mosaic"
10"glinting"
11"pulse"
12"quickened"
13"etched"
14"raced"
15"clandestine"
16"footsteps"
17"echoed"
18"tension"
19"velvet"
20"stomach"
21"stark"
22"echoing"
23"trembled"
24"crystallized"
25"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences123
matches
0"felt the chill"
1"k with urgency"
2"d with pity"
96.40% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences123
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences127
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen91
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1677
ratio0
matches(empty)
89.29% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Bone token entry, they said—full moon relocations."
1"Quinn fired—crack echoing like judgment. The tattooed woman shrieked, ink boiling from a shoulder wound. Chaos erupted: …"
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions89
wordCount1571
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden2
High1
Street1
Harlow1
Quinn17
Tomás1
Herrera20
Saint1
Christopher1
Soho1
Raven1
Nest3
Morris8
Tube1
Blitz1
Backup1
Cover-up1
Glock6
Veil2
Market1
Spanish1
Silas1
Call1
Panic1
Death1
Shadows2
Lies1
Shoot1
Rain3
Voices3
You3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Raven"
7"Morris"
8"Backup"
9"Glock"
10"Veil"
11"Market"
12"Silas"
13"Panic"
14"Death"
15"Shadows"
16"Rain"
17"Voices"
18"You"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Soho"
4"Nest"
globalScore0.863
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1677
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean34.22
std30.81
cv0.9
sampleLengths
089
164
2119
370
456
586
611
780
8134
954
1070
1187
1251
1344
1439
1516
1647
1726
1823
197
2062
2115
2217
2317
2417
2514
2631
277
2819
292
3038
3115
3210
3322
3418
3510
3627
3730
3813
3914
4012
4122
428
4315
4414
4510
466
474
4815
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs366
matches
0"was heading"
1"was, throbbing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount32
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences28
totalSentences127
ratio0.22
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had forged her into this—military precision in a sodden trench coat, salt-and-pepper hair cropped close and plastered flat against her scalp."
1"Quinn's worn leather watch ticked insistently on her left wrist—10:47 PM."
2"Herrera had slipped her surveillance twice before—once from that dive in Soho, the Raven's Nest, with its green neon sign flickering like a bad omen."
3"Just like the case that took DS Morris three years back—unexplained shadows, blood that didn't match the victim."
4"Pain flared, but she ignored it—focus on the prey."
5"Graffiti writhed on tiled walls like living veins—symbols she didn't recognize, jagged and arcane."
6"Eighteen feet down—counted them as she descended, watch glowing faintly."
7"Bone token entry, they said—full moon relocations."
8"Eyes tracked her—predatory, curious."
9"She was 5'9\" of Metropolitan steel; she'd faced worse."
10"The crowd thickened, bodies pressing—fur-tufted arms, skin like cracked leather. A hand brushed her watch; she jerked away, glimpsing claws retracting. \"Fresh meat,\" a gravel voice murmured. She quickened pace, sharp jaw grinding teeth. Herrera emerged into a wider cavern, bioluminescent fungi clinging to the ceiling like sickly stars. Central market: cages with chittering imps, altars etched with runes, a fountain bubbling blood-red elixir. He paused at a booth, spoke rapid Spanish to a hooded figure—Silas? No, wrong bar. The man handed over a pouch, coins clinking."
11"Quinn circled wide, using a pillar for cover. Rain still drummed above, distant thunder. Her mind raced: Call it in now, risk infestation scattering? Or tail him deeper? A scream pierced the din—a vendor gutting a live eel-thing, entrails steaming. Patrons cheered. This was no black market; this was hell's bazaar."
12"Herrera moved again, toward a bookshelf-lined alcove. False front—she saw the seam. He pressed a bone token into a slot; the shelf groaned inward, revealing a hidden passage pulsing with green light. Clandestine meetings, like the Nest's back room, but amplified. He slipped through."
13"Decision point. Sweat beaded under her collar despite the chill. Morris's face flashed—pale, eyes vacant, wounds that sealed themselves. \"Harlow, it's not—\" His last words. Whatever killed him hid here, in places like this. Herrera knew. The clique knew."
14"Footsteps approached—two bruisers, horns curling from foreheads, sniffing the air. \"Cop stink,\" one growled, nostrils flaring."
15"Fingers probed the edges—hidden latch? A loose brick yielded, carved with a raven. Click. The shelf parted six inches, enough. She squeezed through, coat snagging wood."
16"Quinn crept, boots silent on damp stone. Watch read 10:52. Tension coiled her spine like barbed wire. Light bloomed—a chamber, twenty by twenty, ringed by velvet drapes. Herrera stood with three others: a woman with ink-black tattoos writhing on her arms, a gaunt man exhaling smoke that formed faces, and a child—no, not child, eyes ancient—who clutched a deck of bone cards."
17"Herrera's warm brown eyes met hers, no fear—resignation, laced with pity. \"Detective Quinn."
18"The tattooed woman snarled, tattoos surging like serpents. The smoker exhaled—a face coalescing into Morris's, mouthing \"Run.\""
19"Quinn fired—crack echoing like judgment. The tattooed woman shrieked, ink boiling from a shoulder wound. Chaos erupted: Herrera dove left, medallion flaring protective light; smoker hurled a cloud of choking vapor. Quinn coughed, eyes watering, Glock barking blindly."
20"She stumbled back, hitting the wall. Passageway—exit sealed, bookshelf fused shut by writhing vines. Trapped."
21"Up close, his scar told stories—knife fight, survival. \"Like you killed Morris?\" she spat, knee driving up. He grunted, olive skin paling."
22"The others closed in, eyes hungry. Quinn twisted free, Glock skittering away. Fists flew—her sharp jaw connected with Herrera's nose, crunching cartilage. Blood sprayed, mixing rain scent."
23"He staggered, medallion swinging. She lunged for the gun—claws raked her back, fire lancing. Tattoo woman. Quinn rolled, grabbed a fallen card—bone edge sliced her palm. Power surged? No time."
24"He wiped blood, standing tall—5'10\" to her 5'9\", but no threat. \"Clique protects."
25"The chamber trembled—alarms? Voices from the market swelled."
26"Herrera nodded, scar throbbing. \"Token.\" He tossed the bone—hers now."
27"They ran—into the unknown, Quinn's world shattering with every step. The thriller tightened its noose."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount879
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.023890784982935155
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.004550625711035267
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean13.2
std12.4
cv0.939
sampleLengths
020
122
226
321
45
513
624
711
811
917
1010
1125
1223
139
144
159
1618
174
1810
1923
2017
2111
229
234
2416
2518
2618
2716
2819
2914
3017
3112
322
332
344
354
367
376
3817
398
4014
412
422
4314
446
451
4610
4712
489
4910
81.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.49606299212598426
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners63
63.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"Too late for civilians, perfect"
1"Just like the case that"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences105
matches
0"Her brown eyes, sharp as"
1"He was fast, the bastard."
2"Her voice cut through the"
3"She followed, sharp jaw clenched,"
4"She'd watched him slip through"
5"She wouldn't lose another."
6"He bolted toward a chain-link"
7"He was heading down."
8"Her radio crackled, static-laced."
9"she barked, thumbing the button"
10"She clicked off before arguments"
11"Her boots hit mosaic tiles,"
12"She'd heard rumors in the"
13"He shoved past a stall"
14"She ignored him, pulse thundering."
15"They spun as she burst"
16"You shouldn't have"
17"She stumbled back, hitting the"
18"We tried to save bleed-over."
19"Your partner saw too"
ratio0.238
40.95% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences105
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"Her brown eyes, sharp as"
2"He was fast, the bastard."
3"Olive skin gleaming under sodium"
4"That Saint Christopher medallion swung"
5"Quinn's worn leather watch ticked"
6"Her voice cut through the"
7"She followed, sharp jaw clenched,"
8"Herrera had slipped her surveillance"
9"She'd watched him slip through"
10"NHS license revoked for the"
11"She wouldn't lose another."
12"The alley narrowed, choked with"
13"Herrera glanced back, warm brown"
14"He bolted toward a chain-link"
15"Quinn vaulted it without breaking"
16"Pain flared, but she ignored"
17"He was heading down."
18"A service grate yawned in"
19"Herrera dropped to his knees,"
ratio0.838
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
ratio0
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Dim lanterns hung from exposed wires, casting pools of amber light on stalls that shouldn't exist."
1"Booths crammed the space: tables laden with vials of glowing liquid, amulets pulsing with inner fire, books bound in hides that didn't come from cows."
2"Quinn crept, boots silent on damp stone. Watch read 10:52. Tension coiled her spine like barbed wire. Light bloomed—a chamber, twenty by twenty, ringed by velve…"
3"The others closed in, eyes hungry. Quinn twisted free, Glock skittering away. Fists flew—her sharp jaw connected with Herrera's nose, crunching cartilage. Blood…"
77.38% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"one growled, nostrils flaring"
1"she spat, knee driving up"
56.98% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
1"woman snarled (snarl)"
2"The gaunt man chuckled. (chuckle)"
3"Herrera yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.14
leniency0.279
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.186
83.2833%