Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7ZX2KJERNSMB4DCTBV5GT

Run Details

Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.007932
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory yanks her arm free from a slimy green vine coiled around an ancient oak standing stone. The vine’s residue glues her fingers to the silver chain of her Heartstone Pendant. She’d ducked into Richmond Park after her last delivery for Golden Empress, the pendant’s fierce pulse cutting through the hum of her moped’s engine. Evan’s old threats had lingered in her head all shift—You can’t run forever—and the pendant’s warmth had felt like a lifeline, a nudge away from the flat above Silas’ bar she’d hidden in for six months. Now, standing at the Grove’s boundary, she rubs the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a habit from childhood when she’d panicked after falling from a Cardiff backyard tree. The scar’s rough edge grounds her, a reminder she’d survived worse than a stray vine. The first wrong sound pricks her ears: a child’s giggle, high and bright, echoing between the oaks. No footfalls follow. Rory scans the clearing—wildflowers burst in vivid purples and yellows (the codex’s year-round bloom, but here their petals glow too bright, like stained glass held to a fire) but their scent clings to her throat, sweet enough to make her gag. She tugs her delivery jacket’s frayed collar up, the fabric scratchy against her neck, and spits a petal that’s drifted onto her lip. It tastes like rot, not nectar. The Heartstone’s thud-thud pulse quickens. She presses the small crimson gem between her thumb and forefinger, its warmth seeping into her bones. She’d never known the pendant’s purpose beyond the crumpled note the unknown benefactor left tucked in her moped’s seat—Trust it when the world bends—but now it feels like a beacon drawing something toward her, not away. She’d skipped her usual post-shift pint at Silas’ bar, her cool-headed logic warring with the panic that had flared when the pendant’s glow had flared mid-delivery to a group of tourists in Kew Gardens. A flash of pale fabric catches her eye, just beyond the next standing stone. She steps forward, boots crunching on dead oak leaves that shouldn’t be there (the wildflowers bloom year-round, but the stones’ bases are littered with dry, brittle bits that crack like broken teeth underfoot). The flash vanishes when she turns her head fully. She mutters a curse her Irish barrister father would have scorned—his “language is for persuasion, not fury” lecture ringing in her ears—her cool-headed facade fraying at the edges. She tries to backtrack, but the standing stones seem to have shifted. What was a wide gap between two oaks is now a tight squeeze, their branches weaving together like locked fingers. The giggle returns, closer this time, mixed with a low rustle that isn’t wind. She can taste metal on her tongue, a faint tang that makes her swallow hard—copper, she realizes, like the blood she’d spat after Evan’s last slap. Locked. The standing stones’ branches weave tighter. She circles the nearest stone, running her hand along its rough oak surface. The wood is warm, not cold like a standing stone should be, and she feels a faint pulse beneath her fingers—matching the Heartstone’s thud-thud. She yanks her hand away, her breathing picking up. Her Welsh teacher mother had once told her stories of Fae-touched places, of things that stole time and memory, but Rory had dismissed them as childhood fables. Now, she wonders if her mother had known more than she’d let on. Then the voice cuts through the silence, soft but sharp, like broken glass: “You shouldn’t have come here, Rory.” She freezes. No one calls her that except Eva, her childhood friend who’d begged her to flee to London, and Eva’s in Cardiff, too scared to visit after Evan’s last outburst. “Who’s there?” “Someone who knows what you’re running from.” “The pendant led me here.” “Did it? Or did you follow it because you’re tired of hiding?” That stings. She’d fled Cardiff to escape Evan’s fists, his screams that she was nothing without him, but the pendant’s pulse had felt like a chance to stop running—like a clue to why Evan had grown so violent, why he’d ranted about “things that don’t belong” in their flat. She grips the chain tighter, the silver digging into her neck. The vine returns—this time coiling around her ankle, its slimy texture making her recoil. She kicks at it, but it tightens, pulling her off balance. She hits the ground, the wind knocked out of her. The wildflowers’ scent overwhelms her, and she gags, spitting out a handful of petals that taste like rot and copper. She scratches at the ground, her nails breaking on the oak’s gnarled roots, and feels the scar on her wrist tear open—warm blood dripping onto the dry leaves. The standing stones’ branches creak open, revealing a dark gap between them. The Heartstone’s glow flares, bright crimson, and a low hum starts—deep, thrumming, the same sound she’d heard in a nightmare once, when she’d dreamed of a portal swallowing her father. She realizes the pendant’s pulse matches the hum, thud-thud to its low-low. The blood on her wrist sizzles when it touches the vine, and the vine hisses, but it doesn’t let go. “Your mother warned you about this,” the voice whispers again, closer now, its breath hot on her ear. “She tried to hide you from them.” Rory’s eyes widen. Her mother had died in a car crash three years ago, a crash Evan had called “a lucky break” for him. She’d never known her mother had any ties to the Fae or portals or ancient stones. “The pendant’s a key,” the voice says, its words wrapping around her like the vine. “You’ve turned it. Now they’ll come for you.” The vine pulls her toward the gap. She scratches at the ground, her broken nails digging into the oak’s roots, and feels the gap’s faint blue light seeping into her skin—Hel portal, the pendant’s behavior says. She tries to yank the pendant off, but the chain won’t budge, its silver links fused to her skin. The hum grows louder, and she can see shadowy figures moving just beyond the blue light—tall, thin, with eyes that glow red. She kicks at the vine again, but it tightens, cutting off the blood flow to her ankle. The shadowy figures start to move toward the gap, their steps making no sound. The giggle turns into a snarl, high and sharp, and she realizes the voice belongs to one of them. The vine pulls her into the gap’s edge. The blue light wraps around her, cold and sharp, and she can feel the shadowy figures’ breath on her face—rot and ice. She tries to scream, but her voice is stuck in her throat. The last thing she sees is the Heartstone’s crimson glow merging with the blue light, and the last thing she hears is the shadowy figures’ snarls turning into triumphant howls as the vine yanks her fully into the portal.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
18.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"the voice whispers again [again]"
1"The blue light wraps around [around]"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.917
leniency1
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.182
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1182
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1182
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulse"
count5
1
word"warmth"
count2
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"beacon"
count1
5
word"facade"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"the last thing"
count2
highlights
0"pulse"
1"warmth"
2"reminder"
3"echoing"
4"beacon"
5"facade"
6"silence"
7"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences61
matches(empty)
25.76% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
1"tries to"
2"start to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences67
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1155
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount981
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Heartstone5
Pendant1
Richmond1
Park1
Golden1
Empress1
You1
Grove1
Cardiff3
Trust1
Irish1
Evan6
Welsh1
Fae-touched1
Rory4
Eva2
London1
Fae2
Hel1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"You"
2"Evan"
3"Rory"
4"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
53.85% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a lifeline, a nudge away from"
1"felt like a chance to stop running—like"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1155
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean50.22
std33.15
cv0.66
sampleLengths
031
1104
290
392
484
572
67
786
819
931
102
117
125
1312
1460
1583
1674
1725
1840
1923
2077
2150
2281
93.76% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences61
matches
0"drifted"
1"is stuck"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs168
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences67
ratio0.179
matches
0"Evan’s old threats had lingered in her head all shift—You can’t run forever—and the pendant’s warmth had felt like a lifeline, a nudge away from the flat above Silas’ bar she’d hidden in for six months."
1"Rory scans the clearing—wildflowers burst in vivid purples and yellows (the codex’s year-round bloom, but here their petals glow too bright, like stained glass held to a fire) but their scent clings to her throat, sweet enough to make her gag."
2"She’d never known the pendant’s purpose beyond the crumpled note the unknown benefactor left tucked in her moped’s seat—Trust it when the world bends—but now it feels like a beacon drawing something toward her, not away."
3"She mutters a curse her Irish barrister father would have scorned—his “language is for persuasion, not fury” lecture ringing in her ears—her cool-headed facade fraying at the edges."
4"She can taste metal on her tongue, a faint tang that makes her swallow hard—copper, she realizes, like the blood she’d spat after Evan’s last slap."
5"The wood is warm, not cold like a standing stone should be, and she feels a faint pulse beneath her fingers—matching the Heartstone’s thud-thud."
6"She’d fled Cardiff to escape Evan’s fists, his screams that she was nothing without him, but the pendant’s pulse had felt like a chance to stop running—like a clue to why Evan had grown so violent, why he’d ranted about “things that don’t belong” in their flat."
7"The vine returns—this time coiling around her ankle, its slimy texture making her recoil."
8"She scratches at the ground, her nails breaking on the oak’s gnarled roots, and feels the scar on her wrist tear open—warm blood dripping onto the dry leaves."
9"The Heartstone’s glow flares, bright crimson, and a low hum starts—deep, thrumming, the same sound she’d heard in a nightmare once, when she’d dreamed of a portal swallowing her father."
10"She scratches at the ground, her broken nails digging into the oak’s roots, and feels the gap’s faint blue light seeping into her skin—Hel portal, the pendant’s behavior says."
11"The hum grows louder, and she can see shadowy figures moving just beyond the blue light—tall, thin, with eyes that glow red."
94.92% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount131
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount6
adverbRatio0.04580152671755725
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences67
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences67
mean17.24
std10.41
cv0.604
sampleLengths
017
114
224
336
429
515
617
73
841
923
106
115
1217
1336
1434
1514
1633
179
1828
1912
2020
2114
2226
231
246
2513
2624
279
2827
2913
3019
312
3229
332
347
355
3612
372
3847
3911
4014
4111
4210
4320
4428
4512
4630
4712
4820
4918
33.58% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.26865671641791045
totalSentences67
uniqueOpeners18
60.61% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences55
matches
0"Then the voice cuts through"
ratio0.018
38.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences55
matches
0"She’d ducked into Richmond Park"
1"She tugs her delivery jacket’s"
2"It tastes like rot, not"
3"She presses the small crimson"
4"She’d never known the pendant’s"
5"She’d skipped her usual post-shift"
6"She steps forward, boots crunching"
7"She mutters a curse her"
8"She tries to backtrack, but"
9"She can taste metal on"
10"She circles the nearest stone,"
11"She yanks her hand away,"
12"Her Welsh teacher mother had"
13"She’d fled Cardiff to escape"
14"She grips the chain tighter,"
15"She kicks at it, but"
16"She hits the ground, the"
17"She scratches at the ground,"
18"She realizes the pendant’s pulse"
19"Her mother had died in"
ratio0.455
14.55% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences55
matches
0"Rory yanks her arm free"
1"The vine’s residue glues her"
2"She’d ducked into Richmond Park"
3"Evan’s old threats had lingered"
4"The scar’s rough edge grounds"
5"The first wrong sound pricks"
6"Rory scans the clearing—wildflowers burst"
7"She tugs her delivery jacket’s"
8"It tastes like rot, not"
9"The Heartstone’s thud-thud pulse quickens."
10"She presses the small crimson"
11"She’d never known the pendant’s"
12"She’d skipped her usual post-shift"
13"A flash of pale fabric"
14"She steps forward, boots crunching"
15"The flash vanishes when she"
16"She mutters a curse her"
17"She tries to backtrack, but"
18"The giggle returns, closer this"
19"She can taste metal on"
ratio0.891
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences55
matches
0"Now, standing at the Grove’s"
1"Now, she wonders if her"
ratio0.036
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She tugs her delivery jacket’s frayed collar up, the fabric scratchy against her neck, and spits a petal that’s drifted onto her lip."
1"She can taste metal on her tongue, a faint tang that makes her swallow hard—copper, she realizes, like the blood she’d spat after Evan’s last slap."
2"Her Welsh teacher mother had once told her stories of Fae-touched places, of things that stole time and memory, but Rory had dismissed them as childhood fables."
3"The hum grows louder, and she can see shadowy figures moving just beyond the blue light—tall, thin, with eyes that glow red."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"the voice cuts, soft but sharp, like broken glass:"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She mutters (mutter)"
1"the voice whispers again (whisper)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.333
73.9068%