Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY81EYM64QPMKC8ZGX0NXEY

Run Details

Duration:
15.8s
Cost:
$0.000747
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air smelled wrong the moment they stepped through the standing stones—thick with the scent of damp earth and something older, something that clung to the back of Rory’s throat like a held breath. She paused just inside the grove, her fingers tightening around the silver chain of the Heartstone pendant. The pendant pulsed faintly against her collarbone, warm as a heartbeat, and she exhaled slowly, trying to steady the way her pulse had spiked. The light here was different. Not the golden haze of London at dusk, nor the sickly glow of streetlamps, but something softer, diffused, as if the sun itself had been filtered through layers of silk. The trees—ancient oaks, their bark etched with runes Rory couldn’t decipher—stood like sentinels, their branches weaving overhead into a canopy so dense it blotted out the sky entirely. Wildflowers bloomed in impossible profusion, their petals shimmering with a faint, iridescent sheen. A breeze stirred, carrying the murmur of voices that weren’t voices at all, but something like wind chimes made of whispers. Nyx moved ahead without hesitation, their shadowed form slipping between the trees like smoke given shape. Rory followed, her boots sinking slightly into the spongy earth. The ground beneath her feet felt alive, pulsing with a rhythm just beneath perception. She glanced at Isolde, who walked beside her with an air of quiet certainty, her silver hair catching the dappled light like spun moonlight. The Seer’s lavender eyes were fixed on the path ahead, unreadable as always. “You said this place was hidden,” Rory murmured, keeping her voice low. Isolde turned her head just enough to meet Rory’s gaze. “Hidden from those who do not seek.” Ahead, Nyx had stopped. They stood perfectly still, their silhouette flickering at the edges as if caught between two states of being. Then, with a sound like fabric tearing, they dissolved into shadow and reformed a few paces deeper into the grove, their violet eyes gleaming in the dim light. “They’re testing the boundaries,” Isolde said, as if reading Rory’s unspoken question. “The Veil is thin here. Easier to slip through.” Rory swallowed. The Veil. The word settled in her mind like a stone. She’d heard of it—fragments of lore from Isolde’s riddles, whispers in the back alleys of London where the air hummed with something older than the city itself. But this was the first time she’d stood where the barrier between worlds was thin enough to touch. Nyx gestured sharply, and Rory followed, her pulse quickening as the trees closed in around them. The deeper they went, the more the grove seemed to shift, as if the very air was alive. The flowers here were different—petals like stained glass, their colors too bright, too *wrong*. Some pulsed with a faint inner light, others seemed to drink in the dimness, their edges blurring like reflections on water. Then she saw it. A clearing. At its center stood a circle of standing stones, older than the oaks, their surfaces carved with spirals and sigils that made Rory’s head ache just to look at them. And beyond the stones, where the light should have been swallowed by the trees, there was a glow—a soft, golden radiance that didn’t come from the sky. It came from *nowhere*, and yet it was undeniably there, casting long, shifting shadows that moved as if breathed upon by an unseen wind. Rory stepped forward, her boots crunching on something that wasn’t quite earth. Petals, maybe. Or ash. She reached out, her fingers hovering just above the glow. The heat was warm, but not oppressive, like standing too close to a fire that had been banked for centuries. “What is this place?” she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. Isolde didn’t answer right away. She was staring at the glow, her expression unreadable. “A threshold,” she said at last. “Where the Fae realm bleeds into ours.” Nyx drifted closer, their form flickering like a candle flame. “And beyond?” Isolde’s lips curved, just slightly. “Beyond is where the answers lie.” Rory’s fingers twitched. She wanted to touch the light, to press her palm against it and see if it burned or if it was as insubstantial as it looked. But something held her back—a instinct, maybe, or the memory of the way the Heartstone had pulsed when they’d first entered the grove. Then she heard it. A sound like a sigh, but deeper, richer, as if the very air had exhaled. It came from the trees, from the stones, from the glow itself. Rory’s breath hitched. The hair on the back of her neck stood on end. Nyx’s voice cut through the silence, low and urgent. “We are not alone.” Rory spun, her hand flying to the hilt of the Fae-forged blade at her belt. The dagger was cold against her skin, its familiar weight a small comfort in the sudden tension. The trees were still. Too still. Then she saw them. Figures. Not people. Not exactly. They moved like smoke given form, their edges blurred, their faces—if they had faces—hidden in shifting shadows. They stood just beyond the glow, watching. Waiting. Rory’s grip tightened on the blade. “How many?” Isolde’s voice was calm, almost amused. “Enough.” Nyx’s form rippled, darkening, thickening, as if they were drawing power from the shadows themselves. “They do not mean us harm,” they said, though their tone held no certainty. “They are guardians.” One of the figures stepped forward. It—*he*—was taller than the others, his form more solid, his edges sharper. His eyes glowed faintly, like embers in the dark. He tilted his head, studying them with an intensity that made Rory’s skin prickle. Then he spoke. His voice was like wind through dead leaves, dry and whispering. *“You have come to the place between.”* Rory’s breath caught. She’d heard that voice before. In dreams, maybe. In the spaces between waking and sleep, when the world felt thin enough to see through. Isolde took a step forward, her voice steady. “We seek answers.” The figure’s lips curled, though whether in amusement or disdain, Rory couldn’t tell. *“Answers are not given. They are taken.”* A rustle in the trees. Another figure emerged, this one smaller, her form wispier, her presence lighter. She—if she was a *she*—studied Rory with eyes like polished silver. *“The Seer’s companion,”* she murmured. *“The blade bears her mark.”* Rory’s fingers tightened around the hilt of the dagger. The cold bite of the moonsilver was a grounding force in the sudden unease coiling in her stomach. “What do you want?” The first figure tilted his head, considering. *“We want nothing. But the grove hungers. And hunger must be fed.”* Isolde’s voice was smooth, unhurried. “We have no offerings to give.” *“No?”* The figure’s voice was a breath of wind, carrying the weight of centuries. *“Then perhaps you will leave. Before the grove decides otherwise.”* Rory’s pulse pounded in her ears. She could feel the weight of the Heartstone against her chest, its warmth a steady pulse. She could run. She could fight. But something in the way the figures watched her—something in the way the air itself seemed to hold its breath—told her that neither would be enough. Then Nyx moved. They stepped forward, their shadowed form rippling like liquid. *“We do not fear your grove,”* they said, their voice a whisper carried on the wind. *“But we do not bow to it, either.”* The figures stilled. The air between them crackled, charged with something Rory couldn’t name. Then, slowly, the first figure inclined his head. *“Bold words for one who walks between realms.”* *“I walk where I please,”* Nyx replied. A beat of silence. Then the figure’s lips curved, just slightly. *“Then you will find the grove’s patience… limited.”* The tension eased, though not entirely. The figures melted back into the shadows, their forms dissolving like mist in sunlight. The glow at the center of the clearing pulsed once, twice, then settled into a steady, golden radiance. Isolde exhaled, long and slow. “We are not welcome here.” *“No,”* Nyx murmured. *“But we are not forbidden, either.”* Rory sheathed the blade, her hands still trembling slightly. She turned back to the glow, to the standing stones, to the place where the world felt thin enough to see through. Somewhere beyond that light was an answer. She could feel it, like a current beneath the surface of the water, pulling her forward. She took a step. Then another. The glow didn’t burn. It didn’t resist. It simply *was*, a threshold waiting to be crossed. Rory’s breath came faster. She was close now. Close enough to see the way the light shimmered, close enough to feel the heat of it against her skin. Then she heard Isolde’s voice, soft but firm. *“Rory.”* She turned, her heart pounding. The Seer was watching her, her lavender eyes unreadable. *“The grove does not give its gifts freely.”* Rory swallowed. “What does that mean?” Isolde’s lips curved, just slightly. *“It means that everything has a price.”* Behind her, Nyx’s voice was a whisper. *“And some prices are steeper than others.”* Rory looked back at the glow. At the threshold. At the place where the answers waited. She took a deep breath. Then she stepped forward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.27
leniency0.541
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
61.32% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1551
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count5
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count2
5
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"slightly"
2"perfectly"
3"sharply"
4"very"
5"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1551
totalAiIsms36
found
0
word"pulsed"
count4
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"sentinels"
count1
5
word"unreadable"
count3
6
word"gleaming"
count1
7
word"unspoken"
count1
8
word"oppressive"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count3
10
word"silence"
count2
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"weight"
count3
13
word"tension"
count2
14
word"intensity"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"could feel"
count2
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"charged"
count1
19
word"shimmered"
count1
20
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"pulse"
2"silk"
3"etched"
4"sentinels"
5"unreadable"
6"gleaming"
7"unspoken"
8"oppressive"
9"whisper"
10"silence"
11"familiar"
12"weight"
13"tension"
14"intensity"
15"stomach"
16"could feel"
17"warmth"
18"charged"
19"shimmered"
20"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences131
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences158
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
50.46% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans23
markdownWords115
totalWords1538
ratio0.075
matches
0"wrong"
1"nowhere"
2"he"
3"“You have come to the place between.”"
4"“Answers are not given. They are taken.”"
5"she"
6"“The Seer’s companion,”"
7"“The blade bears her mark.”"
8"“We want nothing. But the grove hungers. And hunger must be fed.”"
9"“No?”"
10"“Then perhaps you will leave. Before the grove decides otherwise.”"
11"“We do not fear your grove,”"
12"“But we do not bow to it, either.”"
13"“Bold words for one who walks between realms.”"
14"“I walk where I please,”"
15"“Then you will find the grove’s patience… limited.”"
16"“No,”"
17"“But we are not forbidden, either.”"
18"was"
19"“Rory.”"
20"“The grove does not give its gifts freely.”"
21"“It means that everything has a price.”"
22"“And some prices are steeper than others.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
56.92% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1343
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.86
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory25
Heartstone3
London2
Isolde12
Seer2
Nyx10
Veil1
Fae-forged1
One1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Seer"
4"Nyx"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.569
windowScore0.667
59.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"something like wind chimes made of whispers"
1"as if reading Rory’s unspoken question"
2"quite earth"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.65
wordCount1538
matches
0"Not the golden haze of London at dusk, nor the sickly glow of streetlamps, but something softer, diffused, as if the sun itself had been fi"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences158
matches
0"heard that voice"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean24.81
std22.37
cv0.902
sampleLengths
075
197
277
312
417
550
621
758
869
94
102
1181
1246
1312
1427
1512
1611
1752
184
1941
2013
2138
224
231
2429
258
267
2732
2841
293
3018
3127
3211
3320
3438
3531
3619
3711
3824
3954
403
4133
4230
437
4419
4538
4610
479
4854
494
94.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences131
matches
0"been filtered"
1"were fixed"
2"been swallowed"
3"been banked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs231
matches
0"was staring"
1"were drawing"
2"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences158
ratio0.063
matches
0"The air smelled wrong the moment they stepped through the standing stones—thick with the scent of damp earth and something older, something that clung to the back of Rory’s throat like a held breath."
1"The trees—ancient oaks, their bark etched with runes Rory couldn’t decipher—stood like sentinels, their branches weaving overhead into a canopy so dense it blotted out the sky entirely."
2"She’d heard of it—fragments of lore from Isolde’s riddles, whispers in the back alleys of London where the air hummed with something older than the city itself."
3"The flowers here were different—petals like stained glass, their colors too bright, too *wrong*."
4"And beyond the stones, where the light should have been swallowed by the trees, there was a glow—a soft, golden radiance that didn’t come from the sky."
5"But something held her back—a instinct, maybe, or the memory of the way the Heartstone had pulsed when they’d first entered the grove."
6"They moved like smoke given form, their edges blurred, their faces—if they had faces—hidden in shifting shadows."
7"It—*he*—was taller than the others, his form more solid, his edges sharper."
8"She—if she was a *she*—studied Rory with eyes like polished silver."
9"But something in the way the figures watched her—something in the way the air itself seemed to hold its breath—told her that neither would be enough."
83.38% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1356
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount80
adverbRatio0.058997050147492625
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.01327433628318584
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences158
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences158
mean9.73
std7.24
cv0.744
sampleLengths
034
117
224
35
430
528
613
721
816
910
1014
1124
1213
1312
1410
157
164
1718
1828
1912
209
212
222
239
2427
2518
2616
2718
2814
2921
304
312
3230
3327
3424
3512
362
372
3810
3920
4012
415
429
436
447
4510
462
475
486
493
37.97% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.25949367088607594
totalSentences158
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount11
totalSentences116
matches
0"Then, with a sound like"
1"Then she saw it."
2"Then she heard it."
3"Then she saw them."
4"Then he spoke."
5"Then Nyx moved."
6"Then, slowly, the first figure"
7"Then the figure’s lips curved,"
8"Somewhere beyond that light was"
9"Then she heard Isolde’s voice,"
10"Then she stepped forward."
ratio0.095
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences116
matches
0"She paused just inside the"
1"She glanced at Isolde, who"
2"They stood perfectly still, their"
3"She’d heard of it—fragments of"
4"It came from *nowhere*, and"
5"She reached out, her fingers"
6"she asked, her voice barely"
7"She was staring at the"
8"she said at last"
9"She wanted to touch the"
10"It came from the trees,"
11"They moved like smoke given"
12"They stood just beyond the"
13"they said, though their tone"
14"His eyes glowed faintly, like"
15"He tilted his head, studying"
16"His voice was like wind"
17"She’d heard that voice before."
18"She—if she was a *she*—studied"
19"She could feel the weight"
ratio0.276
67.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences116
matches
0"The air smelled wrong the"
1"She paused just inside the"
2"The pendant pulsed faintly against"
3"The light here was different."
4"The trees—ancient oaks, their bark"
5"Wildflowers bloomed in impossible profusion,"
6"A breeze stirred, carrying the"
7"Nyx moved ahead without hesitation,"
8"Rory followed, her boots sinking"
9"The ground beneath her feet"
10"She glanced at Isolde, who"
11"The Seer’s lavender eyes were"
12"Rory murmured, keeping her voice"
13"Isolde turned her head just"
14"They stood perfectly still, their"
15"Isolde said, as if reading"
16"The word settled in her"
17"She’d heard of it—fragments of"
18"Nyx gestured sharply, and Rory"
19"The deeper they went, the"
ratio0.784
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
ratio0
8.09% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences53
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The air smelled wrong the moment they stepped through the standing stones—thick with the scent of damp earth and something older, something that clung to the ba…"
1"Not the golden haze of London at dusk, nor the sickly glow of streetlamps, but something softer, diffused, as if the sun itself had been filtered through layers…"
2"She glanced at Isolde, who walked beside her with an air of quiet certainty, her silver hair catching the dappled light like spun moonlight."
3"They stood perfectly still, their silhouette flickering at the edges as if caught between two states of being."
4"At its center stood a circle of standing stones, older than the oaks, their surfaces carved with spirals and sigils that made Rory’s head ache just to look at t…"
5"It came from *nowhere*, and yet it was undeniably there, casting long, shifting shadows that moved as if breathed upon by an unseen wind."
6"Rory stepped forward, her boots crunching on something that wasn’t quite earth."
7"The heat was warm, but not oppressive, like standing too close to a fire that had been banked for centuries."
8"Nyx’s form rippled, darkening, thickening, as if they were drawing power from the shadows themselves."
9"He tilted his head, studying them with an intensity that made Rory’s skin prickle."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Isolde said, as if reading Rory’s unspoken question"
1"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"they said, though their tone held no certainty"
3"they said, their voice a whisper carried on the wind"
68.92% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Rory murmured (murmur)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.243
leniency0.486
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.162
72.9666%