Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY81TNDGFK8ZY6MMPEQFYV9

Run Details

Duration:
18.8s
Cost:
$0.001721
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Soho like a thousand furious fists, turning the narrow streets into slick black mirrors that reflected the blurred neon glow of shop signs and passing headlights. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through puddles that swallowed her ankles, each step a gritty protest against the downpour. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair clung to her scalp, water streaming down her sharp jawline and into the collar of her sodden trench coat. At forty-one, with eighteen years of decorated service etched into her bones, she'd chased worse than this through worse weather—but tonight felt different. The suspect ahead, a shadow darting between overflowing bins and shuttered doorways, wasn't just some low-level thief. He was tied to the clique, that shadowy network she'd been tracking for months, ever since whispers of unnatural crimes started bleeding into her caseload. Harlow's breath came in sharp bursts, her lungs burning as she rounded the corner onto Dean Street. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked relentlessly, its face fogged with rain, marking the seconds since she'd spotted him slipping out of The Raven's Nest. Silas's bar, with its green neon sign flickering like a dying firefly above the entrance, had been her stakeout spot for weeks. Old maps and black-and-white photos lined its walls, hiding secrets in plain sight—or so the regulars claimed. But tonight, the man she'd pegged as Tomás Herrera had bolted the moment her unmarked car pulled up curbside. No backup; she'd radioed it in, but dispatch was swamped with the storm's chaos. This was on her. "Stop! Police!" Her voice cut through the roar of the rain, but it was swallowed by the gale whipping down the alley. Tomás—if that was truly him—didn't slow. He was lean, agile, his short curly dark hair plastered flat under a hood that did little to shield his olive-skinned face from the deluge. At five-foot-ten, he matched the height in her notes, and that scar she glimpsed flashing under his sleeve as he shoved past a cluster of umbrellas? It lined up with the grainy photo from his NHS file. Former paramedic, license revoked for "unauthorized treatments." The kind that involved things no hospital would touch. Supernatural patients, her sources murmured. The same kind of madness that had claimed her partner, DS Morris, three years back—unexplained wounds, shadows that didn't behave like shadows. Harlow's hand hovered near her holster, the weight of her service pistol a cold comfort against her hip. Military precision guided her stride; she didn't slip on the wet cobblestones, didn't let the rain blind her. The chase veered north, away from the throbbing heart of Soho toward the fringes of Camden, where the streets grew meaner, the lights dimmer. Traffic snarled ahead, horns blaring as a bus hydroplaned through a flooded intersection. Tomás juked left, vanishing into a throng of late-night revelers spilling out from a pub. Harlow followed, shouldering through the crowd, her coat flapping like broken wings. "Out of the way!" she barked at a stumbling drunk who blocked her path. The man reeled back, spilling his pint, and she pressed on. Adrenaline surged, sharpening her brown eyes to slits. She could see him again—thirty yards ahead, cutting across a deserted lot littered with construction debris. The rain intensified, sheets of it stinging her face, but she didn't falter. Memories clawed at her: Morris's last case, the warehouse fire that wasn't fire, the guttural screams echoing from the smoke. Unexplained. Supernatural, if you believed the fringe reports she'd buried in her desk drawer. The clique was pulling strings in that web, and Tomás was the thread she needed to unravel it. He ducked under a chain-link fence, the metal rattling like bones in the wind. Harlow cursed under her breath and vaulted it after him, her coat snagging on barbed wire that tore a thin gash across her forearm. Blood mixed with rainwater, warm and fleeting. Pain was just data; she ignored it. The lot opened onto a side street, abandoned tube tracks visible beyond a graffiti-scarred wall—relics of London's forgotten veins. Camden's underbelly, where the city bled into myth. Tomás glanced back once, his warm brown eyes catching the distant streetlamp's glow, wide with something more than fear. Desperation? Or calculation? She gained ground as they hit Euston Road, the suspect's pace faltering on the uneven sidewalk. He clutched something at his neck—a medallion, glinting briefly. Saint Christopher, patron of travelers. Fitting for a man on the run. "Herrera! You're under arrest!" The words tasted like gravel, but she shouted them anyway. He bolted into a narrow alley, the walls closing in like jaws. Harlow's flashlight beam from her phone cut through the murk, illuminating overflowing dumpsters and the slick gleam of rats scattering from the light. The alley dead-ended at a rusted service door, half-hidden behind a cascade of ivy and stormwater. Tomás yanked it open with a screech of hinges, the sound echoing like a scream. No hesitation—he plunged downward, into the black maw of stairs descending into the earth. Harlow skidded to a halt at the threshold, heart pounding against her ribs. The air wafting up was stale, laced with mildew and something sharper—ozone? Decay? The rain battered her back, urging her forward, but instinct screamed caution. This wasn't a standard pursuit; it reeked of the unnatural, the kind of place where cases went cold because witnesses vanished. She flicked on her police-issue torch, the beam piercing the gloom. Concrete steps spiraled down, slick with seepage, leading to what looked like an abandoned Tube platform. Echoes of Tomás's footsteps faded into a low hum, like distant machinery or... voices? Murmurs, indistinct, rising like steam. Her watch read 11:47 PM. The full moon was two nights off, but that didn't matter; places like this didn't run on clocks. The Veil Market—whispers from her informants called it that. A black market for the impossible: enchanted trinkets, alchemical brews that defied science, information traded in blood oaths. Accessed through old stations like this one beneath Camden, it shifted every full moon, ghosts in the machine. Entry demanded a bone token, carved from something long dead. Did Tomás have one? Was he heading there to vanish into its shadows? Harlow's fingers tightened on the doorframe, splinters digging into her palm. Follow him, and she risked everything—her badge, her sanity, the fragile wall she'd built against the memories of Morris's death. The wound on his body hadn't been from flames; it was too precise, too otherworldly, like claws from a nightmare. The clique trafficked in that darkness, and Tomás patched them up—off the books, stitching wounds that shouldn't heal. But if she turned back now, he'd slip away, and the trail to the clique would go cold again. Another unsolved file, another ghost haunting her nights. A faint glow flickered below—lantern light? Bioluminescent fungi? She descended the first step, the metal groaning under her weight. The air grew thicker, pressing against her skin like a living thing. Water dripped from the ceiling, plinking into unseen pools. Her torch swept the walls: faded tiles cracked like old skin, posters from the '60s peeling in the damp. The hum resolved into voices—low, urgent, accented in ways that twisted English into something foreign. Laughter? No, tension coiled in the tones, like a spring about to snap. Halfway down, the stairs leveled onto the platform. Harlow froze, beam dancing over shadows that seemed to writhe. Tomás was there, twenty feet away, at the edge of a makeshift archway reinforced with iron bars and draped in tattered cloth. He fumbled at his medallion, but no—it wasn't for protection. He pressed something small into a slot in the wall, a pale sliver that clicked like ivory on stone. A bone token. The archway shimmered, reality rippling like heat haze, and a new world unfolded beyond: stalls crammed under vaulted ceilings, lit by floating orbs that pulsed with inner fire. Figures moved in the throng—human? Not quite. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian hawked vials of glowing liquid; a man with skin like bark haggled over a dagger that hummed faintly. Thriller's pulse thrummed in Harlow's veins. This was it—the heart of the clique's web. Tomás stepped through, swallowed by the crowd, his form blending with the bizarre bazaar. Vendors glanced up, eyes narrowing at the light from her torch. Whispers spread like ripples in a pond: "Mundane. Cop." Danger crackled in the air, thicker than the rain above. She could call for backup, but signal down here? Nonexistent. Her pistol felt inadequate against whatever lurked in those stalls—banned substances that twisted flesh, information that could unravel minds. Indecision gripped her, a vise around her chest. Morris's face flashed in her mind, pale and accusatory, the supernatural scar across his throat a warning. But turning back meant surrender, meant letting the monsters win. With a sharp exhale, Harlow holstered her doubts and crossed the threshold. The archway sealed behind her with a soft hiss, the Veil Market enveloping her like a shroud. Tomás was ahead, weaving through the press, but she was in now—deep, and committed. The chase twisted into something primal, the rain's roar fading to a distant memory as the underground pulse took over. She moved with predatory grace, military bearing cutting through the chaos. The air hummed with enchantments; a stall to her left sold feathers that whispered secrets when held to the ear. Tomás glanced back, his brown eyes locking on hers for a split second—recognition, then flight. He shoved past a cluster of buyers, knocking over a tray of crystalline shards that shattered into puffs of iridescent smoke. Alarms didn't blare; instead, eyes turned, predatory and curious. A hulking figure with elongated limbs blocked her path momentarily, grunting in a language that scraped like gravel. Harlow sidestepped, her hand brushing her holster, heart jackhammering. Deeper in, the market sprawled like a fever dream: tunnels branching into alcoves where deals were struck in shadows, the scent of incense and blood mingling with the metallic tang of magic. Tomás darted toward a far exit, a glowing sign etched with runes—perhaps another way out, or deeper still. Harlow's boots echoed too loudly on the uneven stone, drawing stares. A vendor, a wizened crone with teeth like needles, hissed at her: "Fresh meat, eh? Coppers don't last long here." She ignored the taunt, focusing on the suspect's back. He was tiring, his scar visible now as his sleeve rode up, a jagged reminder of his own brushes with violence. Did he know about the clique's crimes? The bodies with impossible injuries? Or was he just the medic, the fixer? Questions burned, but answers lay ahead. A hand grabbed her arm—cold, scaled fingers. "Token or tribute," a voice rasped. Harlow twisted free, elbow connecting with yielding flesh. "Police. Stand down." The creature recoiled, but others closed in, a ring of curiosity turning hostile. Panic flickered, but she pushed through, torch beam a lance in the gloom. Tomás reached the tunnel mouth, pausing to flash another token at a guardian figure—a statue? No, it moved, stone grinding as it parted. He vanished into the dark beyond. Harlow sprinted, lungs aflame, the market's din swallowing her footsteps. The decision cemented: she'd follow, into the belly of the beast, because turning back wasn't in her blood. The supernatural had taken Morris; it wouldn't take her case too. The tunnel narrowed, walls pulsing with faint veins of light—like breathing earth. Echoes of Tomás's flight bounced back: labored breaths, a muttered prayer in Spanish. "San Cristóbal, protégeme..." Saint Christopher, indeed. Harlow's watch strap chafed her wrist, rain's chill replaced by the market's humid grasp. Traps? Ambushes? Every shadow hid teeth. She emerged into a chamber, larger, ringed with alcoves. Tomás stood at bay, backed against a wall scrawled with glowing sigils. No escape. He raised his hands, medallion dangling, eyes pleading. "Detective Quinn. You don't understand. This place... it changes you." Harlow drew her pistol, steady despite the tremor in her soul. "Oh, I understand enough. You're coming with me, Herrera. For the clique. For the deaths." The air thickened, sigils flaring as if alive. The market watched, waiting for blood or bargain. Her finger hovered on the trigger, the thriller's climax hanging in the fetid air—pursuit met its end, but at what cost?
created_at"2026-02-20T19:22:29.431Z" 2/20/2026, 7:22:29 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The words tasted like [like]"
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.909
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
97.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2088
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
11.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2088
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"streaming"
count1
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"echoing"
count2
4
word"unravel"
count2
5
word"fleeting"
count1
6
word"glinting"
count1
7
word"maw"
count1
8
word"pounding"
count1
9
word"standard"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count2
12
word"echoes"
count2
13
word"footsteps"
count2
14
word"otherworldly"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count2
16
word"resolved"
count1
17
word"tension"
count1
18
word"dancing"
count1
19
word"shimmered"
count1
20
word"pulsed"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count2
22
word"crystalline"
count1
23
word"shattered"
count1
24
word"hulking"
count1
25
word"echoed"
count1
26
word"reminder"
count1
27
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"streaming"
1"etched"
2"weight"
3"echoing"
4"unravel"
5"fleeting"
6"glinting"
7"maw"
8"pounding"
9"standard"
10"flicked"
11"gloom"
12"echoes"
13"footsteps"
14"otherworldly"
15"flickered"
16"resolved"
17"tension"
18"dancing"
19"shimmered"
20"pulsed"
21"pulse"
22"crystalline"
23"shattered"
24"hulking"
25"echoed"
26"reminder"
27"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences156
matches(empty)
97.07% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences156
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2048
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount1987
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.86
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Harlow17
Quinn1
Dean1
Street1
Raven1
Nest1
Tomás17
Herrera1
Morris5
Camden3
London1
Euston1
Road1
Christopher2
Tube1
Veil2
Market2
English1
Danger1
Panic1
Spanish1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Morris"
6"Camden"
7"Christopher"
8"Tube"
9"Market"
10"Danger"
11"Panic"
places
0"Soho"
1"Dean"
2"Street"
3"London"
4"Euston"
5"Road"
6"Spanish"
globalScore1
windowScore1
93.18% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences132
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"tasted like gravel, but she shouted them"
1"looked like an abandoned Tube platform"
2"shadows that seemed to writhe"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2048
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences157
matches(empty)
45.52% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs22
mean93.09
std28.8
cv0.309
sampleLengths
0139
1121
2133
3100
4114
5101
686
7104
8137
996
1087
11132
1287
1398
14103
1581
1656
1750
1868
1951
2041
2163
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences156
matches
0"was tied"
1"was swamped"
2"was swallowed"
3"were struck"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs357
matches
0"was pulling"
1"was tiring"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount10
flaggedSentences35
totalSentences157
ratio0.223
matches
0"At forty-one, with eighteen years of decorated service etched into her bones, she'd chased worse than this through worse weather—but tonight felt different."
1"Old maps and black-and-white photos lined its walls, hiding secrets in plain sight—or so the regulars claimed."
2"No backup; she'd radioed it in, but dispatch was swamped with the storm's chaos."
3"Tomás—if that was truly him—didn't slow."
4"The same kind of madness that had claimed her partner, DS Morris, three years back—unexplained wounds, shadows that didn't behave like shadows."
5"Military precision guided her stride; she didn't slip on the wet cobblestones, didn't let the rain blind her."
6"She could see him again—thirty yards ahead, cutting across a deserted lot littered with construction debris."
7"Pain was just data; she ignored it."
8"The lot opened onto a side street, abandoned tube tracks visible beyond a graffiti-scarred wall—relics of London's forgotten veins."
9"He clutched something at his neck—a medallion, glinting briefly."
10"No hesitation—he plunged downward, into the black maw of stairs descending into the earth."
11"The air wafting up was stale, laced with mildew and something sharper—ozone?"
12"This wasn't a standard pursuit; it reeked of the unnatural, the kind of place where cases went cold because witnesses vanished."
13"The full moon was two nights off, but that didn't matter; places like this didn't run on clocks."
14"The Veil Market—whispers from her informants called it that."
15"Follow him, and she risked everything—her badge, her sanity, the fragile wall she'd built against the memories of Morris's death."
16"The wound on his body hadn't been from flames; it was too precise, too otherworldly, like claws from a nightmare."
17"The clique trafficked in that darkness, and Tomás patched them up—off the books, stitching wounds that shouldn't heal."
18"A faint glow flickered below—lantern light?"
19"The hum resolved into voices—low, urgent, accented in ways that twisted English into something foreign."
20"He fumbled at his medallion, but no—it wasn't for protection."
21"Figures moved in the throng—human?"
22"A woman with eyes like polished obsidian hawked vials of glowing liquid; a man with skin like bark haggled over a dagger that hummed faintly."
23"This was it—the heart of the clique's web."
24"Her pistol felt inadequate against whatever lurked in those stalls—banned substances that twisted flesh, information that could unravel minds."
25"Tomás was ahead, weaving through the press, but she was in now—deep, and committed."
26"The air hummed with enchantments; a stall to her left sold feathers that whispered secrets when held to the ear."
27"Tomás glanced back, his brown eyes locking on hers for a split second—recognition, then flight."
28"Alarms didn't blare; instead, eyes turned, predatory and curious."
29"Tomás darted toward a far exit, a glowing sign etched with runes—perhaps another way out, or deeper still."
30"A hand grabbed her arm—cold, scaled fingers."
31"Tomás reached the tunnel mouth, pausing to flash another token at a guardian figure—a statue?"
32"The supernatural had taken Morris; it wouldn't take her case too."
33"The tunnel narrowed, walls pulsing with faint veins of light—like breathing earth."
34"Her finger hovered on the trigger, the thriller's climax hanging in the fetid air—pursuit met its end, but at what cost?"
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1232
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"short curly dark hair"
1"thicker, pressing against her"
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.025974025974025976
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.006493506493506494
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean13.04
std6.87
cv0.527
sampleLengths
031
119
224
323
417
525
617
728
822
917
1019
1114
124
1322
146
1525
1626
1711
1816
195
2022
2118
2218
2324
2413
2515
2612
2714
2811
298
3016
3113
3220
331
3413
3518
3614
3724
387
397
4019
418
4219
431
442
4516
469
475
487
4914
69.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.43312101910828027
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners68
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences144
matches
0"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
1"He was tied to the"
2"Her voice cut through the"
3"He was lean, agile, his"
4"It lined up with the"
5"she barked at a stumbling"
6"She could see him again—thirty"
7"He ducked under a chain-link"
8"She gained ground as they"
9"He clutched something at his"
10"He bolted into a narrow"
11"She flicked on her police-issue"
12"Her watch read 11:47 PM."
13"She descended the first step,"
14"Her torch swept the walls:"
15"He fumbled at his medallion,"
16"He pressed something small into"
17"She could call for backup,"
18"Her pistol felt inadequate against"
19"She moved with predatory grace,"
ratio0.188
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount120
totalSentences144
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed"
1"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
2"The suspect ahead, a shadow"
3"He was tied to the"
4"Harlow's breath came in sharp"
5"The worn leather watch on"
6"Silas's bar, with its green"
7"This was on her."
8"Her voice cut through the"
9"Tomás—if that was truly him—didn't"
10"He was lean, agile, his"
11"It lined up with the"
12"The same kind of madness"
13"Harlow's hand hovered near her"
14"Military precision guided her stride;"
15"The chase veered north, away"
16"Traffic snarled ahead, horns blaring"
17"Tomás juked left, vanishing into"
18"Harlow followed, shouldering through the"
19"she barked at a stumbling"
ratio0.833
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences144
matches(empty)
ratio0
45.11% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences95
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Rain hammered the pavements of Soho like a thousand furious fists, turning the narrow streets into slick black mirrors that reflected the blurred neon glow of s…"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through puddles that swallowed her ankles, each step a gritty protest against the downpour."
2"He was lean, agile, his short curly dark hair plastered flat under a hood that did little to shield his olive-skinned face from the deluge."
3"The same kind of madness that had claimed her partner, DS Morris, three years back—unexplained wounds, shadows that didn't behave like shadows."
4"Harlow followed, shouldering through the crowd, her coat flapping like broken wings."
5"Memories clawed at her: Morris's last case, the warehouse fire that wasn't fire, the guttural screams echoing from the smoke."
6"Harlow cursed under her breath and vaulted it after him, her coat snagging on barbed wire that tore a thin gash across her forearm."
7"A black market for the impossible: enchanted trinkets, alchemical brews that defied science, information traded in blood oaths."
8"The clique trafficked in that darkness, and Tomás patched them up—off the books, stitching wounds that shouldn't heal."
9"Harlow froze, beam dancing over shadows that seemed to writhe."
10"Her pistol felt inadequate against whatever lurked in those stalls—banned substances that twisted flesh, information that could unravel minds."
11"He shoved past a cluster of buyers, knocking over a tray of crystalline shards that shattered into puffs of iridescent smoke."
12"A hulking figure with elongated limbs blocked her path momentarily, grunting in a language that scraped like gravel."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"The air thickened, sigils flaring as if alive"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she barked (bark)"
1"needles hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.182
leniency0.364
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.364
75.3830%