Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY81XAAZCB8SEKB7482T1VM

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28.6s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
**Chapter 1: The Raven’s Nest** The door swung shut behind her with a hiss of damp air, and Rory’s fingers tightened around the handle of her delivery bag. The Raven’s Nest smelled like it always did—warm, slightly metallic, the faint tang of spilled beer clinging to the wood and the worn carpet. She cut through the press of bodies, past the low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses, until she reached the bar’s back corner. The shelf of dog-eared paperbacks shifted under her touch, the *third* from the left groaning as she pressed it. The hidden door clicked open. Silas Blackwood sat hunched over a bottle of whisky, his signet ring catching the dim light as he turned it between his fingers. The room beyond the shelf was smaller than she remembered, the walls lined with maps she didn’t recognise. His limp was more pronounced now, the left leg dragging just a fraction slower than the rest. "Took you long enough." Rory didn’t look back. "Traffic on Shoreditch High Street. Someone’s decided to turn it into a one-way system for lorries." Silas exhaled through his nose, the sound almost a laugh. "Still the same. Always a reason." She set the bag down, the stack of menus thudding against the table. "Yu-Fei’s specials. He wanted them in your hands by midnight." "Midnight’s already passed." The words hung between them. Rory didn’t meet his eyes. "Then he wanted them in your hands *now*." Silas swirled the amber liquid in his glass, the ice cubes rattling like bones. "You’re late." "Observation noted." A beat. The kind of silence that used to stretch between them when they were younger, before words became weapons. Before the years had carved lines into his face and something sharper into his voice. "You look different." Rory’s fingers brushed the scar on her wrist, the crescent of pale skin standing out against her dark skin. "Same as always." "Black hair. Still too long." His gaze lingered on the way it fell over her shoulders, the way it used to when they were in Cardiff, when he’d still reach for it without thinking. "But your eyes—" "Brighter?" She smirked. "That’s what the contact lenses are for." He didn’t smile back. "No. They’re not." The air thickened. Rory had forgotten how well he’d always known her. How well he still did. "You’ve been in London a year," he said. "And you haven’t called." "I’ve been busy." "Busy." He took a slow sip. "That’s not what you used to say." She leaned forward, the delivery bag creaking under her weight. "What did I used to say?" "Something like *I’m alive*." His voice dropped. "Not just existing." Rory’s jaw clenched. The words stung. She’d told herself she’d left that version of herself behind. The one who’d still write letters to him, who’d still check the news for his name, who’d still wake up in the middle of the night wondering if he was safe. She wasn’t that girl anymore. "You’ve changed," she said instead. "The bar’s different. The maps—" "New era." His fingers traced the edge of the nearest one, a faded blue route through Eastern Europe. "Different threats." Rory studied him. The grey in his hair was more than just streaks now. His beard was trimmed, but not as neatly as it used to be. The limp—she’d always hated how it made him self-conscious, how he’d try to hide it when they were running through the woods near her parents’ house. "You’re still using this place," she said. "Still useful." The hidden room. The old maps. The whisky that never ran dry. She should’ve known. Should’ve guessed he’d never really left. "You’re not retired," she accused. "Never said I was." She exhaled, the tension in her shoulders easing just a little. "Good. I’d hate to think you’d settled." His eyes flickered. "You’d hate that?" "Wouldn’t you?" Silas set his glass down with a deliberate clink. "I don’t know what I’d hate anymore, Rory." The name rolled off his tongue like it always had. Like he’d never stopped calling her that. Like he’d never stopped thinking of her as the girl who’d once told him everything. "You should," she said. "You’ve got a lot to hate." He leaned back, the chair legs scraping against the floor. "Do I?" The question was quiet. Too quiet. Rory’s fingers twitched toward the scar again, the one she’d earned when she was twelve, the one that had never faded. "You’ve got the limp," she said. "The knee. The Prague job." Silas’s hand stilled. "You’ve been reading." "Not your files. Just the headlines." A muscle in his jaw worked. "I thought you’d left all that behind." "I did." "Then why are you here?" She met his gaze. "Because you’re the only one who ever knew me." The words hung between them, raw and unguarded. Silas’s breath hitched, just for a second, before he smoothed his expression back into something colder. "You’re not the only one who’s changed," he said. Rory’s pulse quickened. "No?" "Eva’s dead." The air left her lungs in a rush. "What?" "Car accident. Two years ago." Rory’s fingers dug into the edge of the table. "You could’ve told me." "I tried." The memory surfaced like a ghost. The last time they’d spoken, the way he’d hesitated before saying her name. The way she’d hung up without listening. "You didn’t," she said. "I didn’t." Silas reached for the whisky again, but Rory’s hand shot out, stopping his. "Don’t." His fingers froze. "What?" "Don’t do that." She gestured at the bottle. "Don’t drink your way through it." "I’m not—" "Bullshit." She stood, the chair legs scraping back. "You’re not the only one who’s changed, Silas. I’m not that girl anymore either." He didn’t move. Didn’t speak. Just watched her, the way he always had. "You still don’t get it," she said. "Get what?" "That I left." She turned toward the door, her fingers already brushing the shelf. "I left everything behind." The hidden door clicked shut. The Raven’s Nest stretched out beyond it, the low hum of conversation and the clink of glasses suddenly too loud. Rory’s hand trembled as she reached for the handle. "You left *me* behind," Silas said. She froze. The words cut deeper than she’d expected. "No," she said. "I left *him* behind." The door swung open. The press of bodies and the scent of spilled beer swallowed her whole. Rory didn’t look back. She’d left him behind years ago. But the truth was, he’d never really been hers to leave.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said instead [instead]"
1"The limp—she’d always [always]"
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.29
leniency0.58
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.058
81.75% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.94% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1096
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"jaw clenched"
count1
3
word"traced"
count1
4
word"tension"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"quickened"
count1
8
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"jaw clenched"
3"traced"
4"tension"
5"flickered"
6"pulse"
7"quickened"
8"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences143
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans6
markdownWords11
totalWords1090
ratio0.01
matches
0"Chapter 1: The Raven’s Nest"
1"third"
2"now"
3"I’m alive"
4"me"
5"him"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
69.25% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount805
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.61
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Rory13
Nest3
Blackwood1
Cardiff1
Eastern1
Europe1
Silas8
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Nest"
3"Blackwood"
4"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Eastern"
2"Europe"
globalScore0.693
windowScore0.833
98.98% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"smelled like it always did—warm, slightly"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1090
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences143
matches
0"left that version"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean14.53
std15.08
cv1.038
sampleLengths
05
196
258
34
420
516
623
73
818
916
102
1135
123
1322
1437
1510
167
1717
1812
193
2013
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2210
2347
245
2510
2620
2753
287
292
3021
315
324
3318
346
352
3617
3732
3810
3912
4027
4111
426
436
4413
452
465
4713
4824
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs147
matches
0"were running"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences143
ratio0.014
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest smelled like it always did—warm, slightly metallic, the faint tang of spilled beer clinging to the wood and the worn carpet."
1"The limp—she’d always hated how it made him self-conscious, how he’d try to hide it when they were running through the woods near her parents’ house."
77.41% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount547
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.06581352833638025
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.009140767824497258
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences143
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences143
mean7.62
std6.32
cv0.829
sampleLengths
05
123
224
325
419
55
623
718
817
94
104
1116
1210
136
1413
1510
163
175
185
198
2014
212
222
232
2418
2515
263
2719
283
2934
303
313
327
334
343
353
369
375
388
394
403
416
427
4310
446
457
463
473
483
4910
46.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.32867132867132864
totalSentences143
uniqueOpeners47
42.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Just watched her, the way"
ratio0.013
96.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences78
matches
0"She cut through the press"
1"His limp was more pronounced"
2"She set the bag down,"
3"His gaze lingered on the"
4"He didn’t smile back."
5"He took a slow sip"
6"She leaned forward, the delivery"
7"His voice dropped"
8"She’d told herself she’d left"
9"She wasn’t that girl anymore."
10"she said instead"
11"His fingers traced the edge"
12"His beard was trimmed, but"
13"She should’ve known."
14"She exhaled, the tension in"
15"His eyes flickered."
16"He leaned back, the chair"
17"She met his gaze."
18"His fingers froze."
19"She gestured at the bottle"
ratio0.308
4.87% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences78
matches
0"**Chapter 1: The Raven’s Nest**"
1"The door swung shut behind"
2"The Raven’s Nest smelled like"
3"She cut through the press"
4"The shelf of dog-eared paperbacks"
5"The hidden door clicked open."
6"Silas Blackwood sat hunched over"
7"The room beyond the shelf"
8"His limp was more pronounced"
9"Rory didn’t look back."
10"Silas exhaled through his nose,"
11"She set the bag down,"
12"The words hung between them."
13"Rory didn’t meet his eyes."
14"Silas swirled the amber liquid"
15"The kind of silence that"
16"Rory’s fingers brushed the scar"
17"His gaze lingered on the"
18"He didn’t smile back."
19"The air thickened."
ratio0.91
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Before the years had carved"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She stood, the chair legs scraping back"
1"She turned, her fingers already brushing the shelf"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences69
tagDensity0.145
leniency0.29
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.2120%