Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY847QDTQ0RQSB7X8D5V9ZM

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Duration:
36.6s
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$0.001996
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xAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn shoved the rusted grate aside with her boot, the screech echoing off damp brick walls like a dying rat. Her torch swept the platform below, catching glints of illicit wares: jars of writhing shadows, amulets pulsing faint blue. The Veil Market reeked of ozone and charred herbs, thick enough to coat her throat. PC Davies knelt by the body sprawled across a stall's counter, gloved fingers probing a neck. Uniforms cordoned the perimeter with fluttering tape, their radios crackling static. How the hell had a patrol stumbled into this abyss beneath Camden? Bone token in a junkie's pocket, they said. Slipped through a rift during a raid on a dealer. Now the Met owned a slice of the underworld. "DS Morris would've loved this," Davies muttered, snapping photos. "Suicide, guv. Overdose on whatever black-market sludge they peddle here. Foam at the mouth, pupils blown. Classic." Harlow dropped to the platform, gravel crunching under her boots. Military precision guided her steps: left foot first, assess sightlines, note exits. Three tunnels branched off, sealed with shimmering wards that hummed against her skin. The victim, mid-thirties male, face twisted in rictus, clutched a brass compass etched with sigils. Verdigris patina flaked under her light. Needle quivered, not north, but towards a jagged crack in the far wall, where air warped like heat haze. She crouched beside Davies, breath fogging in the chill. Copper stung her nostrils. Blood. Not from wounds. Fresh. "Foam's wrong. Too viscous, threaded with black filaments. Not chem foam. Alchemical residue." Davies rocked back on his heels, latex snapping. "Market's full of that rot. Bloke probably scored bad dreamweed, chased it with rift-dust. Happens weekly in dives like this." Harlow's gloved hand hovered over the compass. No pulse in the wrist it gripped. She prised it free, metal warm, unnaturally so. Needle whipped left, pinpointing the crack. A low thrum vibrated through her palm, syncing with her worn leather watch ticking on her left wrist. "He didn't chase anything. Look at the arms. Clean. No track marks, no powder burns. Ingested whole, maybe forced." Davies snorted, bagging a shattered vial nearby. Shards glittered with iridescent residue. "Forced? No struggle. Stall intact. No drag marks in the dust. Bloke wandered in, dosed himself, conked out mid-sale." She ignored him, torch probing the body's mouth. Teeth gritted around a pulp of dark matter, not dissolved, but chewed. Fibres clung to molars, organic. Root-like. Her sharp jaw clenched. "Chewed. Recent. And the eyes." Brown irises flecked gold, veins spiderwebbing black. Not dilated from tox. Expanding. Like ink in water. Davies straightened, dusting knees. "Post-mortem changes. We've got CCTV from the access tunnel. Shows him staggering in alone, clutching that trinket. Bone token round his neck screams regular. Probably owed debts, topped himself to dodge the shades." Harlow's brown eyes narrowed, scanning the stall. Shelves groaned under forbidden stock: vials of phoenix ash, scrolls bound in what smelled of tanned hide, a jar of teeth clicking softly. Dust undisturbed save for one trail: footprints, small, heeled boots, leading to the crack. Not the victim's scuffed trainers. Fresh. Size six, maybe seven. She followed them, torch beam dancing. "CCTV lies. Or they doctored it. These prints halve his stride length. Someone shorter dragged him here, propped him. Look." She jabbed at the counter edge. Smear of blood, handprint too narrow for his sausage fingers. Partial. Gloved. Davies lumbered over, frowning. "Kids? Market urchins? Nah, guv. Simpler explanation. Rift fever. Hits hard, makes 'em chew their own tongue half the time. Compass? Junk. Points to buyers' regrets." Her fingers traced the crack. Air there tasted metallic, tugged at her lungs. The compass needle strained towards it, casing heating. Three years since Morris vanished in a case like this. Unexplained. Supernatural whispers she buried under case files. Not again. "Fever doesn't leave boot prints. Or rig a scene." A uniform shouted from the tunnel mouth. "Guv! Backup's here. Forensics en route." Harlow pocketed the compass, ignoring protocol. Needle spun wild now, brushing sigils that glowed faint green. "Bag the vial. Test for alkaloids. And pull those prints. EVA KOWALSKI. Freckled researcher, round glasses, curly red hair. She's been sniffing these markets." Davies blinked. "The museum bird? Linked how?" "Token matches her type. Occult hobbyist. And this." She yanked a crumpled receipt from the body's pocket. British Museum restricted archives stamp. Timestamp: two hours prior. Paid in cash for "historical artefacts." "She feeds intel to a clique. Suspect Aurora's lot. This isn't suicide. Ritual disposal. To close a rift." Davies laughed, short bark. "Ritual? You're chasing ghosts again, Quinn. Brass cleared Morris as heart attack. This? Open-shut. Write it up, crack a pint." Her salt-and-pepper crop bristled. She leaned close, voice steel. "Ghosts don't wear heels. Or leave compasses tuned to rifts." The crack widened a fraction under her torch, exhaling cold mist that beaded on her skin. Whispers slithered out, wordless, pulling at her watch strap. Davies shrugged. "Your funeral. Superiors want results, not fairy tales." Harlow turned back to the body, flipping the jacket. Inner pocket: bone token, carved with a sigil matching the compass face. And a note, scrawled hasty: "Veil shifts full moon. Compass lies. E.K." E.K. Eva bloody Kowalski. Her pulse hammered. The colleague's interpretation crumbled under facts: timed note, mismatched prints, attuned tool. Murder, staged as overdose to mask a rift breach. The clique covered tracks, but left breadcrumbs for rivals. Or a warning. She straightened, bearing ramrod. "Davies, seal this tunnel. No one in or out." He saluted mockingly. "Aye, ghostbuster." Torch fixed on the crack, Harlow advanced. Mist thickened, swirling green. Compass burned in her pocket, needle stabbing fabric. The whispers sharpened: *Quinn... Morris waits...* Salt crunched underfoot. Not salt. Bones. Ground fine. The crack yawned wider, revealing not brick, but a maw of teeth, gnashing silent. Davies yelled behind her. "Guv! What the--" A hand shot from the rift, skeletal, brass-ringed. Grabbed her watch. Yanked. She stumbled forward, torch clattering. Darkness swallowed her boots. The compass screamed heat, sigils blazing. Eva's voice echoed from the gloom. "Detective. You shouldn't have followed."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1023
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.69% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1023
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"quivered"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"shattered"
count1
7
word"jaw clenched"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"dancing"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"maw"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"gloom"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"etched"
2"quivered"
3"chill"
4"pulse"
5"vibrated"
6"shattered"
7"jaw clenched"
8"scanning"
9"dancing"
10"traced"
11"maw"
12"echoed"
13"gloom"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences102
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1014
ratio0.003
matches
0"Quinn... Morris waits..."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
71.54% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount701
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Davies"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Davies"
discoveredNames
Quinn2
Veil1
Market1
Davies11
Camden1
Met1
Harlow7
Smear1
Morris2
British1
Museum1
Whispers1
Kowalski1
Salt1
Needle3
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Market"
2"Davies"
3"Met"
4"Harlow"
5"Morris"
6"Museum"
7"Whispers"
8"Kowalski"
9"Salt"
10"Needle"
places(empty)
globalScore0.715
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.959
wordCount1014
matches
0"not north, but towards a jagged crack in the far wall"
1"not dissolved, but chewed"
2"not brick, but a maw of teeth, gnashing silent"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean32.71
std18.95
cv0.579
sampleLengths
055
166
226
375
431
528
665
731
851
937
1054
1144
1230
1350
1413
1540
167
1750
1824
1944
2010
2133
2240
2313
245
2525
2622
277
2812
2915
3011
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs166
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences119
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount705
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.015602836879432624
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00425531914893617
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean8.52
std6.66
cv0.782
sampleLengths
021
119
215
316
411
512
68
710
89
99
1017
1110
1212
1313
1415
156
1619
179
184
191
203
211
2213
238
2420
257
267
278
286
2918
3019
317
325
3319
348
3512
365
371
384
3912
404
411
424
434
4433
457
4623
4714
485
491
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.6302521008403361
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners75
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences85
matches
0"Her torch swept the platform"
1"She crouched beside Davies, breath"
2"She prised it free, metal"
3"She ignored him, torch probing"
4"Her sharp jaw clenched."
5"She followed them, torch beam"
6"She jabbed at the counter"
7"Her fingers traced the crack."
8"She yanked a crumpled receipt"
9"Her salt-and-pepper crop bristled."
10"She leaned close, voice steel."
11"Her pulse hammered."
12"She straightened, bearing ramrod."
13"He saluted mockingly."
14"She stumbled forward, torch clattering."
ratio0.176
83.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences85
matches
0"Harlow Quinn shoved the rusted"
1"Her torch swept the platform"
2"The Veil Market reeked of"
3"PC Davies knelt by the"
4"Uniforms cordoned the perimeter with"
5"Davies muttered, snapping photos"
6"Harlow dropped to the platform,"
7"Military precision guided her steps:"
8"The victim, mid-thirties male, face"
9"Verdigris patina flaked under her"
10"Needle quivered, not north, but"
11"She crouched beside Davies, breath"
12"Copper stung her nostrils."
13"Davies rocked back on his"
14"Harlow's gloved hand hovered over"
15"She prised it free, metal"
16"Needle whipped left, pinpointing the"
17"A low thrum vibrated through"
18"Davies snorted, bagging a shattered"
19"Shards glittered with iridescent residue."
ratio0.753
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Now the Met owned a"
ratio0.012
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Uniforms cordoned the perimeter with fluttering tape, their radios crackling static."
1"A low thrum vibrated through her palm, syncing with her worn leather watch ticking on her left wrist."
2"Needle spun wild now, brushing sigils that glowed faint green."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Brown irises, veins spiderwebbing black"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Davies muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.042
leniency0.083
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.083
82.9827%