Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY84SAV5B7CV26E765AQ42K

Run Details

Duration:
21.3s
Cost:
$0.001706
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the heavy oak door of The Raven's Nest, the green neon sign above flickering like a faulty heartbeat against the Soho dusk. Rain slicked the streets outside, turning the cobblestones into mirrors that shattered under passing tires. She shook droplets from her black hair, shoulder-length and straight, clinging now to her neck. The bar's warmth hit her first—cigarette smoke laced with the sharp tang of spilled whiskey—followed by the low hum of voices and the clink of glasses. Walls papered in faded maps and sepia photos loomed around her, shadows pooling in corners where patrons hunched over their drinks. She scanned the room, bright blue eyes narrowing against the dim light. Her shift at Golden Empress had dragged into overtime, deliveries piling up like regrets, and now she craved just one pint before climbing the stairs to the flat above. Silas had mentioned it was available—cheap rent, no questions asked—but she hadn't met him yet. Not in person. Their exchanges had been emails, terse and efficient, like old telegrams. A figure at the end of the bar caught her gaze. Tall, broad-shouldered, with grey-streaked auburn hair catching the amber glow of a pendant lamp. He leaned on the polished wood, polishing a glass with a rag that had seen better days. The limp registered next—subtle, a shift in his weight as he pivoted to greet a regular. Silver signet ring glinted on his right hand. Rory's breath hitched. No. Couldn't be. She crossed the floor, boots scuffing the worn planks, heart thudding louder than the jazz murmuring from the jukebox. Up close, the hazel eyes confirmed it. Silas Blackwood. The man who'd slipped her sweets during her father's endless legal dinners back in Cardiff, years before she'd even thought of London. He'd been a family friend then, orbiting her parents' circle—her da's mysterious contact from some government stint. But that was a lifetime ago, before the scar on her wrist from that stupid bike crash, before Evan, before everything splintered. "Si?" Her voice cut through the din, sharper than she intended. He froze, rag midway over the glass rim. Those hazel eyes lifted, locked on hers, and something flickered there—recognition, then a wall slamming down. He set the glass aside with deliberate care, the clink echoing in the space between them. "Rory Carter." No question in his tone, just fact, gravelly from years of smoke or secrets. He straightened, the slight hitch in his left leg barely noticeable now, but she saw it. Time etched lines around his mouth, deepened the grey in his beard. She slid onto a stool, fingers tracing the crescent scar on her wrist without thinking. "Bloody hell. It's been... what, fifteen years? You look—" "Older." He cut her off, pouring a pint from the tap without asking. Froth spilled over the edge, and he pushed it toward her. "You look like your mother. Eyes and all." Rory took the glass, cool against her palm, and sipped. Bitter hops bit her tongue. She set it down, studying him. The bar's patina suited him now—the maps on the walls mirroring the hidden paths he'd walked as MI6's shadow. Back then, he'd been vibrant, full of stories he'd never quite tell, limping less from that Prague mess he never mentioned. Now, at fifty-eight, authority clung to him like the haze in the air. Changed. Hardened. "You own this place?" She gestured at the room, the photographs of forgotten spies or lovers staring back. "Silas Blackwood, barman. Suits you more than chasing ghosts for the Crown." He chuckled, low and dry, wiping his hands on his apron. Leaned closer, elbows on the bar, signet ring tapping wood. "Ghosts catch up eventually. Bought the Nest after retirement. Keeps the hands busy." His gaze dropped to her wrist, lingered on the scar. "Heard you were coming. Eva mentioned it in passing. Childhood friend, right? Pulled you out of Cardiff." Rory's grip tightened on the glass. Eva. Always the connector, the one who'd dragged her here after Evan's fists left more than bruises. "Yeah. Needed a fresh start. Delivery gig pays the bills. Flat upstairs—your doing?" "Front desk handles that." He nodded toward the stairs at the back, hidden behind a bookshelf that looked too solid to move. "No strings. Pay on time, keep the noise down." She laughed, short and forced. The tension coiled in her chest, unspoken years stretching between them like a frayed wire. Back in Cardiff, he'd been the uncle figure—quiet authority, slipping her books on ciphers when her da droned about cases. She'd idolized him, the spy in tweed, before life ground that sparkle away. Now, his limp spoke of Prague's fallout, the botched op that ended his field days. Regret hung there, in the lines of his face, the way he avoided her eyes too long. "You vanished after that dinner," she said, voice steady despite the pull. "Da said you got posted overseas. Then nothing. Letters bounced back." Silas's jaw tightened, beard shadowing the flex. He reached for a bottle of Scotch, poured himself a finger without ice. Swirled it, amber catching light. "Life pulls you under. Prague was the last straw. Knee never healed right." He tapped his left leg, casual, but his eyes darkened. "Your da—Brendan—tried to keep in touch. But I cut lines. Safer that way." "For who?" Rory leaned in, the bar's warmth pressing close. A couple at the end laughed, oblivious, but here it narrowed to them. Time's weight settled, heavy as the rain outside. She'd fled her own messes—Evan's rage, the law degree she'd abandoned like a half-read book. Silas had taught her resilience once, in stolen moments. Now, she saw the cost in him. He sipped the Scotch, throat working. Set the glass down harder than needed. "For everyone. You were a kid then, Rory. Bright, full of questions. Didn't need my shadows creeping in." "But they did." She traced the bar's grain, fingers restless. The scar itched, memory of that childish fall—bike tires on gravel, blood mixing with tears. He'd bandaged it himself, that night, murmuring about tougher skins. "Evan... he wasn't like that at first. Charming. Then it twisted. I stayed too long. You would've seen it coming, yeah? The out-of-the-box fix." Silas's hazel eyes met hers, steady now, piercing. "Hindsight's a bastard. Eva got you out. That's what matters." He paused, glancing at the door as thunder rumbled distant. "What brings you here, really? Not just rent." Rory exhaled, pint half-gone. The jazz shifted to a slower sax, notes weaving through the smoke. "Running. Always running. Ma's lessons stuck—teach to escape, I guess. But London? It's louder than Cardiff. You ever regret it? The service, the limp, all that?" He straightened, limp evident as he shifted weight. Poured another finger of Scotch, offered her some. She shook her head. "Regret's for amateurs," he said, but his voice cracked the edge. "Prague... we lost good people. I called the wrong play. Came home in pieces." His ring tapped again, rhythmic. "Opened this to remember. Maps, photos—they mark the paths not taken." She nodded, the tension thickening. Unspoken regrets layered between them: his for the op, hers for Evan, for the years lost to fear. Silas had changed—authority tempered by loss, the vibrant man dulled to this quiet sentinel. She felt it in her bones, the pull of what they'd been. Friends, almost family, severed by time's cruel edit. "Tell me about the secret room," she said suddenly, nodding at the bookshelf. "Da mentioned once. Clandestine meetings?" Silas's lips quirked, the first real smile. "Always the quick thinker." He glanced around, patrons lost in their worlds. "Push the spine on the third shelf. Ravenwood edition. Leads to... business." Rory laughed, genuine this time, easing the knot. But the regret lingered, in his averted gaze, her scarred wrist. Years apart had carved them new, yet here, in the Nest's glow, the old threads tugged. He refilled her pint, foam cresting. "Stay a while. Tell me about London. Has it broken you yet?" "Not yet." She clinked her glass to his. "But it's trying." The door swung open, bringing cold air and new faces. Silas moved to serve, limp fading into habit. Rory watched, the bar's pulse syncing with hers. Time weighed, but tonight, in words traded over whiskey, it lightened—just a fraction. She sipped, eyes on the maps, tracing paths she'd yet to walk. Silas returned, leaning in again. "Your da would be proud. Fled the barrister life?" "Pre-Law dropout." Rory shrugged, but the admission stung. "Couldn't stomach the fights. Not after Evan." He nodded, no judgment. "Smart. Law's a cage. This—" He swept a hand over the bar. "—it's freedom. Messy, but yours." The conversation flowed then, halting at first, then deeper. Rory spoke of deliveries through rain-slick streets, the Golden Empress's steam-kissed chaos. Silas countered with bar tales—drunken confessions, lost lovers washing up like driftwood. His voice warmed, stories skirting the edges of his past without diving in. Prague hovered, unnamed, in the pauses. "You've got that scar still." He nodded at her wrist midway through her pint. "Tough kid." "Learned from the best." Rory flexed her hand, silver light catching the crescent. "You bandaged it sloppy." "Lies." He grinned, beard twitching. "Saved your hide." Laughter bubbled, cutting the tension. But regret surfaced in ripples. She asked about his retirement—the bar as front, contacts lingering like ghosts. He deflected with humor, but his eyes betrayed the ache. Changed, yes. The spy who'd once dazzled a girl with lockpicks now poured pints, leg protesting each step. As the night deepened, patrons thinned. Rory felt the years' burden in their traded glances—the what-ifs unspoken. She'd idealized him; he'd protected her from afar. Now, face to face, the reality grounded them. "Ever think of going back?" she asked, voice low as the jukebox hummed. "To what? fieldwork?" Silas shook his head, refilling his Scotch. "Knee says no. Heart says never." He met her eyes. "You? Law calling?" Rory stared into her glass, foam settling. "Maybe not. This suits—the movement, the thinking on feet." "Good." He tapped the bar. "Nest's got your back. Upstairs is home now." She nodded, warmth spreading. The door rattled with wind, rain lashing windows. Time's weight pressed, but in this dim haven, with old words bridging gaps, regret softened. Silas poured one last round, ring glinting. They talked on, voices weaving through the night, the bar's secrets holding them close. Hours slipped. Rory glanced at the clock—nearing closing. Silas wiped the counter, movements efficient. "Eva's right. London's your reset." "Think so?" She stood, stretching, the flat waiting above. "Know so." He walked her to the stairs, limp pronounced in the quiet. Pushed the bookshelf aside with a creak—raven embossed on the spine. "Welcome home, Rory." She stepped through, turning back. His hazel eyes held steady, the changed man and the girl she'd been colliding in that look. Regret lingered, but so did possibility. The door clicked shut behind her, the bar's hum fading as she climbed.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:24:06.372Z" 2/20/2026, 7:24:06 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
92.86% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"His ring tapped again [again]"
1"she said suddenly [suddenly]"
2"He glanced around [around]"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.509
leniency1
rawRatio0.107
effectiveRatio0.107
94.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1869
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
80.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Ravenwood"
19.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1869
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"loomed"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"efficient"
count2
5
word"weight"
count4
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"etched"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count2
10
word"tension"
count3
11
word"unspoken"
count3
12
word"traced"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
14
word"sentinel"
count1
15
word"clandestine"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
17
word"stomach"
count1
18
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"warmth"
2"loomed"
3"scanned"
4"efficient"
5"weight"
6"flickered"
7"echoing"
8"etched"
9"tracing"
10"tension"
11"unspoken"
12"traced"
13"rhythmic"
14"sentinel"
15"clandestine"
16"pulse"
17"stomach"
18"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences142
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences169
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1834
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1429
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.98
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest2
Soho1
Golden2
Empress2
Blackwood1
Cardiff2
London1
Evan4
Froth1
Prague3
Rory14
Silas13
Scotch4
Laughter1
Pushed1
Time4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Empress"
2"Blackwood"
3"Evan"
4"Froth"
5"Rory"
6"Silas"
7"Scotch"
8"Laughter"
9"Time"
places
0"Nest"
1"Soho"
2"Golden"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences114
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1834
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences169
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean38.21
std22.84
cv0.598
sampleLengths
0102
170
272
389
411
540
644
724
832
976
1030
1161
1236
1331
1485
1523
1661
1762
1831
1959
2036
2142
2261
2357
2418
2531
2635
2718
2811
2939
3026
3115
3221
3352
3416
3517
368
3750
3833
3913
4023
4116
4213
4348
4419
459
4627
4741
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs280
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences169
ratio0.095
matches
0"The bar's warmth hit her first—cigarette smoke laced with the sharp tang of spilled whiskey—followed by the low hum of voices and the clink of glasses."
1"Silas had mentioned it was available—cheap rent, no questions asked—but she hadn't met him yet."
2"The limp registered next—subtle, a shift in his weight as he pivoted to greet a regular."
3"Those hazel eyes lifted, locked on hers, and something flickered there—recognition, then a wall slamming down."
4"The bar's patina suited him now—the maps on the walls mirroring the hidden paths he'd walked as MI6's shadow."
5"Back in Cardiff, he'd been the uncle figure—quiet authority, slipping her books on ciphers when her da droned about cases."
6"She'd fled her own messes—Evan's rage, the law degree she'd abandoned like a half-read book."
7"The scar itched, memory of that childish fall—bike tires on gravel, blood mixing with tears."
8"Silas had changed—authority tempered by loss, the vibrant man dulled to this quiet sentinel."
9"Time weighed, but tonight, in words traded over whiskey, it lightened—just a fraction."
10"\"—it's freedom. Messy, but yours.\""
11"Silas countered with bar tales—drunken confessions, lost lovers washing up like driftwood."
12"She asked about his retirement—the bar as front, contacts lingering like ghosts."
13"She'd idealized him; he'd protected her from afar."
14"Rory glanced at the clock—nearing closing."
15"Pushed the bookshelf aside with a creak—raven embossed on the spine."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount729
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.03155006858710562
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00411522633744856
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences169
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences169
mean10.85
std5.74
cv0.529
sampleLengths
025
115
215
326
421
512
629
715
83
911
1011
1114
1217
1316
148
153
161
172
1819
197
202
2122
2217
2322
2411
258
2616
2716
2816
2916
3012
3115
329
3313
3411
358
3610
375
386
3919
4021
4113
421
431
4418
4512
4611
4710
4823
4917
76.92% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.46153846153846156
totalSentences169
uniqueOpeners78
24.88% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"Always the connector, the one"
ratio0.007
52.84% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount56
totalSentences134
matches
0"She shook droplets from her"
1"She scanned the room, bright"
2"Her shift at Golden Empress"
3"Their exchanges had been emails,"
4"He leaned on the polished"
5"She crossed the floor, boots"
6"He'd been a family friend"
7"Her voice cut through the"
8"He froze, rag midway over"
9"He set the glass aside"
10"He straightened, the slight hitch"
11"She slid onto a stool,"
12"He cut her off, pouring"
13"She set it down, studying"
14"She gestured at the room,"
15"He chuckled, low and dry,"
16"His gaze dropped to her"
17"He nodded toward the stairs"
18"She laughed, short and forced."
19"She'd idolized him, the spy"
ratio0.418
45.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount111
totalSentences134
matches
0"Rory pushed through the heavy"
1"Rain slicked the streets outside,"
2"She shook droplets from her"
3"The bar's warmth hit her"
4"Walls papered in faded maps"
5"She scanned the room, bright"
6"Her shift at Golden Empress"
7"Silas had mentioned it was"
8"Their exchanges had been emails,"
9"A figure at the end"
10"He leaned on the polished"
11"The limp registered next—subtle, a"
12"Rory's breath hitched."
13"She crossed the floor, boots"
14"The man who'd slipped her"
15"He'd been a family friend"
16"Her voice cut through the"
17"He froze, rag midway over"
18"Those hazel eyes lifted, locked"
19"He set the glass aside"
ratio0.828
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences134
matches
0"Now, at fifty-eight, authority clung"
1"Now, his limp spoke of"
2"Now, she saw the cost"
3"Now, face to face, the"
ratio0.03
82.32% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"He leaned on the polished wood, polishing a glass with a rag that had seen better days."
1"The man who'd slipped her sweets during her father's endless legal dinners back in Cardiff, years before she'd even thought of London."
2"She'd idolized him, the spy in tweed, before life ground that sparkle away."
3"Now, his limp spoke of Prague's fallout, the botched op that ended his field days."
4"They talked on, voices weaving through the night, the bar's secrets holding them close."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"She gestured, the photographs of forgotten spies or lovers staring back"
1"she said, voice steady despite the pull"
2"Rory leaned in, the bar's warmth pressing close"
3"She traced, fingers restless"
4"he said, but his voice cracked the edge"
5"His ring tapped again, rhythmic"
6"Rory shrugged, but the admission stung"
7"He grinned, beard twitching"
8"she asked, voice low as the jukebox hummed"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.073
leniency0.145
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.7788%