Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY86C4B8X83KC4H1J5SRMT9

Run Details

Duration:
50.6s
Cost:
$0.001804
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant as the faint shimmer of the Veil tore open before them, a rip in the fabric of reality that hummed like a distant swarm of bees. The air in the Fae Grove had already felt charged, thicker than London's fog, laced with the perpetual bloom of wildflowers that defied the autumn chill outside. But this—this was different. Isolde had led them here, her silver hair catching the Grove's eternal twilight as she murmured a riddle about "hunger's door behind the seer's gaze." Nyx, ever the shadow at her side, had simply nodded, their form flickering between solidity and wisps of darkness, violet eyes glowing faintly in anticipation. Rory stepped forward first, her boots crunching on the mossy ground marked by those ancient oak standing stones. The pendant throbbed against her chest, warm as a heartbeat, pulling her toward the rift. "This better not be another one of your cryptic detours," she muttered to Isolde, her voice steady despite the knot in her stomach. At twenty-five, she'd fled worse than riddles—abusive exes, dead-end jobs slinging dim sum for Yu-Fei—but realms beyond the Veil? That was Eva's world of whispers and shadows, not hers. Isolde's pale lavender eyes met hers, unblinking, ethereal face ageless and serene. "The path to gluttony's feast opens only to those who starve for truth," she said, her words weaving like smoke. She couldn't lie, that much Rory knew from their brief alliance, but misleading? That was Fae blood for you. The Half-Fae seer glided forward without a sound, her long silver hair trailing like a comet's tail, leaving no imprint on the dew-kissed grass. Nyx slipped beside Rory, their shadowy form brushing her arm—a cool, insubstantial touch that sent a shiver racing down her spine. "The spaces between call to me here," they whispered, voice like wind through cracked stone. "But this... this pulls from deeper." Ageless, trapped since 1643 in that sorcerer's folly, Nyx had become her reluctant guide in this madness. Rory nodded, drawing a breath, and plunged through the Veil. The transition hit like diving into warm honey. Rory stumbled, her straight black hair whipping across her face as the world inverted. Cool Grove air gave way to a humid embrace, thick with scents of overripe fruit and spiced meats charring on unseen fires. She blinked, steadying herself on a vine-choked archway that hadn't been there moments ago. The sky above stretched in a vast dome of warm amber, not the crisp blue of Earth or the Grove's perpetual dusk, but a glowing haze like eternal sunset, casting everything in hues of gold and crimson. "What in the hells—" Rory bit off the curse, her bright blue eyes widening. Hel, she realized with a jolt. This was Hel. The pendant's pulse steadied now, a rhythmic thrum against her skin, confirming it. Around her, the group emerged one by one. Isolde stepped through gracefully, her Fae-forged blade— that slender, leaf-shaped dagger of moonsilver—glinting coldly at her belt, a gift she'd pressed into Rory's hand earlier but now reclaimed for the crossing. Nyx coalesced fully, their 6'2" silhouette solidifying into a humanoid shape cloaked in living shadow, faintly glowing violet eyes scanning the horizon. The land unfolded before them like a fever dream of indulgence. Sprawling vineyards rolled out in endless waves, grapes swollen to the size of fists, hanging heavy from trellises that twisted like living serpents. Orchards dotted the landscape, trees laden with fruits Rory couldn't name—pear-shaped orbs pulsing with inner light, berries that wept crimson juice at the slightest breeze. The air hummed with life, but not the comforting kind; it buzzed with excess, a cloying sweetness that coated her tongue unbidden. Distant laughter echoed, mingled with the clatter of platters and the sizzle of fats on hot stones. Feasts, endless and grand, she thought, her stomach twisting despite the allure. "Stay close," Nyx murmured, their whisper cutting through the din like a blade. They moved ahead, incorporeal tendrils scouting the path, slipping into shadows cast by the amber light. Rory followed, her 5'6" frame tensing as she gripped the hilt of the Fae blade at her waist—Isolde's gift, always cold to the touch, its faint luminescence stirring now in this alien realm. The ground beneath her boots was soft, almost spongy, like walking on decayed velvet, and each step released puffs of aromatic steam from hidden vents. As they ventured deeper, the unease crept in like fog. The vineyards gave way to manicured gardens where exotic herbs writhed in planters of polished bone—wait, bone? Rory knelt, brushing her fingers over a raised bed. The material gleamed white, etched with faint carvings of screaming faces. She yanked her hand back, the small crescent scar on her left wrist itching as if remembering its own origin. "This isn't right," she said, voice low. "It's... too much. Like the world's been force-fed." Isolde tilted her head, silver hair cascading like a waterfall over her shoulder. "Excess blooms where want takes root, yet roots may strangle the bloom," she replied, her tone lilting, misleading as always. But her lavender eyes darted to the horizon, where grand pavilions rose like mirages—tents of silken gauze billowing in a breeze that carried moans of pleasure and pain intertwined. Wonder sparked then, unbidden. A cluster of trees ahead bore fruits that sang—soft, melodic chimes emanating from their skins as wind rustled the leaves. Rory approached cautiously, reaching out. The nearest orb, a swollen mango-like thing veined with gold, vibrated under her palm, its song a haunting lullaby that tugged at memories of her mother's Welsh lullabies back in Cardiff. "Listen," she breathed, turning to the others. Nyx paused, their shadowy form rippling as if absorbing the sound. "Echoes of mortal souls, bound into bounty," they said, a note of sorrow in their wind-whispered voice. Further on, they stumbled upon a clearing dominated by a colossal banquet table, stretching fifty feet if it was an inch, heaped with delicacies that defied logic. Roasts glistened under amber light, their juices carving rivers down sides of crackling skin. Pies overflowed with fillings that shifted colors—emerald custards swirling to sapphire creams. Chefs in tattered aprons, their faces gaunt yet eyes wild with fervor, darted about like possessed marionettes. One, a helbound soul Rory guessed, contracted from some earthly kitchen, plated a dish of wriggling tendrils that steamed with infernal heat. "For the Prince's table!" he bellowed, voice cracking, before shoveling a handful into his mouth, sauce dribbling down his chin. Rory's mouth watered involuntarily, the scents assaulting her—cinnamon and brimstone, honey and ash. But revulsion followed swift. The man's eyes rolled back, body convulsing in ecstasy or torment; she couldn't tell. "They're trapped," she whispered, glancing at Isolde. "Feeding the excess, but it's eating them." The seer nodded, her ethereal form gliding past the table without disturbing a crumb. "Gluttony devours the devourer, in circles unending." No footprints marked her passage, even on the tiled mosaic floor depicting Belphegor's sigil—a bloated figure lounging amid vines. Rory felt the pull then, a subtle hunger gnawing at her edges, not for food but for more—more sights, more secrets. The pendant warmed again, guiding them toward a distant spire wreathed in grapevines, where culinary competitions raged under the amber sky. Cheers erupted as a competitor unveiled a cake that bloomed like a flower, petals unfurling to reveal chambers of spiced air. Nyx's form flickered, pulling Rory back as shadows deepened unnaturally around the spire. "Wards," they hissed. "Demonic bindings, thick as chains." The Shade extended a tendril, testing the edge; it recoiled with a sizzle, like water on hot iron. Unease bloomed in Rory's chest, her quick mind racing. This place was wondrous, yes— a paradise of flavors and forms Earth could only dream of—but laced with horror. Souls slaved in opulence, their labors fueling an endless cycle. She thought of her flat above Silas' bar, the simple deliveries for Golden Empress; this excess mocked such normalcy. A discovery came abruptly as they skirted the competition grounds. Tucked in a alcove of orchard trees, Rory spotted a pedestal of twisted ivory, atop which rested a cluster of orbs not unlike the singing fruits—but these pulsed with the same crimson glow as her pendant. Heartstones, smaller, raw. She reached out, but Isolde's hand—cool and firm—stayed her. "Touch not the heart that beats for another," the seer warned, her riddle carrying a genuine edge. Nyx investigated instead, phasing through the pedestal's shadow. They emerged moments later, form denser, eyes brighter. "Fragments of Dymas's core," they explained. "Power unbound, but guarded. Belphegor's eyes are everywhere." As if summoned, a distant horn blared, and the group ducked into the underbrush. Vines parted like welcoming arms, but thorns pricked Rory's skin, drawing beads of blood that the plants seemed to drink with greedy rustles. Deeper still, the air grew heavier, the amber sky pressing down like a lid on a boiling pot. They crested a hill overlooking a vast amphitheater, where a feast unfolded on a scale that stole Rory's breath. Thousands of figures—demons with horned crowns, souls in silken rags—reclined on cushions of living moss, devouring platters that refilled themselves. Music swelled, flutes carved from thighbones piping tunes that burrowed into the mind, urging indulgence. Wonder warred with dread; Rory's scar itched fiercely now, a reminder of fragility in this realm of excess. Isolde paused, her voice cutting through the revelry. "The Prince watches from his vine-wreathed throne. Seek not his gaze, lest your hunger become his." Rory nodded, heart pounding. They'd come for answers—about the pendant, about rifts tearing the Veil—but Dymas clawed at her resolve, promising delights that masked chains. Nyx's hand—shadowy, reassuring—grazed her shoulder. "We press on," they whispered. As they descended into the amphitheater's fringes, the world pulsed around them, alive with alien rhythm. Rory felt the wonder take root despite the unease, a spark of the out-of-the-box thinking that had saved her before. This place was a labyrinth of temptation, but somewhere in its glut lay the key to sealing the rifts—or unleashing worse. She straightened, blade cold against her hip, and moved forward into the heart of gluttony's domain.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:24:58.392Z" 2/20/2026, 7:24:58 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx coalesced fully [fully]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.958
leniency1
rawRatio0.043
effectiveRatio0.043
94.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1728
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"coldly"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
highlights
0"coldly"
1"cautiously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1728
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"charged"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"anticipation"
count1
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"racing"
count2
6
word"down her spine"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"glinting"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"comforting"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"whisper"
count1
14
word"velvet"
count1
15
word"etched"
count1
16
word"cascading"
count1
17
word"vibrated"
count1
18
word"echoes"
count1
19
word"mosaic"
count1
20
word"flickered"
count1
21
word"normalcy"
count1
22
word"pulsed"
count2
23
word"reminder"
count1
24
word"pounding"
count1
25
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"charged"
1"chill"
2"anticipation"
3"throbbed"
4"stomach"
5"racing"
6"down her spine"
7"pulse"
8"rhythmic"
9"glinting"
10"scanning"
11"comforting"
12"echoed"
13"whisper"
14"velvet"
15"etched"
16"cascading"
17"vibrated"
18"echoes"
19"mosaic"
20"flickered"
21"normalcy"
22"pulsed"
23"reminder"
24"pounding"
25"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
98.68% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences95
matches
0"y in anticipation"
1"d with horror"
2"d with dread"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen112
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1691
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
75.98% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount1486
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.48
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Veil4
Fae4
Grove4
London1
Nyx9
Isolde8
Yu-Fei-but1
Eva1
Rory22
Half-Fae1
Ageless1
Earth2
Hel2
Fae-forged1
Welsh1
Cardiff1
Further1
Belphegor1
Shade1
Unease1
Vines1
Dymas1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Nyx"
2"Isolde"
3"Eva"
4"Rory"
5"Ageless"
6"Earth"
7"Belphegor"
8"Shade"
9"Unease"
10"Vines"
11"Dymas"
places
0"Veil"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.76
windowScore0.833
88.27% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if remembering its own origin"
1"as if absorbing the sound"
81.73% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.183
wordCount1691
matches
0"not the crisp blue of Earth or the Grove's perpetual dusk, but a glowing haze like eternal sunset, casting everything in hu"
1"not for food but for more"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"lie, that much"
19.21% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean84.55
std18.37
cv0.217
sampleLengths
0114
185
275
369
495
597
6110
787
882
962
1095
11112
1245
13103
1496
1575
1667
1790
1859
1973
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs270
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences23
totalSentences97
ratio0.237
matches
0"But this—this was different."
1"At twenty-five, she'd fled worse than riddles—abusive exes, dead-end jobs slinging dim sum for Yu-Fei—but realms beyond the Veil?"
2"Nyx slipped beside Rory, their shadowy form brushing her arm—a cool, insubstantial touch that sent a shiver racing down her spine."
3"Isolde stepped through gracefully, her Fae-forged blade— that slender, leaf-shaped dagger of moonsilver—glinting coldly at her belt, a gift she'd pressed into Rory's hand earlier but now reclaimed for the crossing."
4"The land unfolded before them like a fever dream of indulgence. Sprawling vineyards rolled out in endless waves, grapes swollen to the size of fists, hanging heavy from trellises that twisted like living serpents. Orchards dotted the landscape, trees laden with fruits Rory couldn't name—pear-shaped orbs pulsing with inner light, berries that wept crimson juice at the slightest breeze. The air hummed with life, but not the comforting kind; it buzzed with excess, a cloying sweetness that coated her tongue unbidden. Distant laughter echoed, mingled with the clatter of platters and the sizzle of fats on hot stones. Feasts, endless and grand, she thought, her stomach twisting despite the allure."
5"The vineyards gave way to manicured gardens where exotic herbs writhed in planters of polished bone—wait, bone?"
6"But her lavender eyes darted to the horizon, where grand pavilions rose like mirages—tents of silken gauze billowing in a breeze that carried moans of pleasure and pain intertwined."
7"A cluster of trees ahead bore fruits that sang—soft, melodic chimes emanating from their skins as wind rustled the leaves."
8"Pies overflowed with fillings that shifted colors—emerald custards swirling to sapphire creams."
9"Rory's mouth watered involuntarily, the scents assaulting her—cinnamon and brimstone, honey and ash."
10"The man's eyes rolled back, body convulsing in ecstasy or torment; she couldn't tell."
11"\"Gluttony devours the devourer, in circles unending.\" No footprints marked her passage, even on the tiled mosaic floor depicting Belphegor's sigil—a bloated figure lounging amid vines."
12"Rory felt the pull then, a subtle hunger gnawing at her edges, not for food but for more—more sights, more secrets."
13"\"Demonic bindings, thick as chains.\" The Shade extended a tendril, testing the edge; it recoiled with a sizzle, like water on hot iron."
14"This place was wondrous, yes— a paradise of flavors and forms Earth could only dream of—but laced with horror."
15"She thought of her flat above Silas' bar, the simple deliveries for Golden Empress; this excess mocked such normalcy."
16"Tucked in a alcove of orchard trees, Rory spotted a pedestal of twisted ivory, atop which rested a cluster of orbs not unlike the singing fruits—but these pulsed with the same crimson glow as her pendant."
17"She reached out, but Isolde's hand—cool and firm—stayed her."
18"Thousands of figures—demons with horned crowns, souls in silken rags—reclined on cushions of living moss, devouring platters that refilled themselves."
19"Wonder warred with dread; Rory's scar itched fiercely now, a reminder of fragility in this realm of excess."
20"They'd come for answers—about the pendant, about rifts tearing the Veil—but Dymas clawed at her resolve, promising delights that masked chains."
21"Nyx's hand—shadowy, reassuring—grazed her shoulder."
22"This place was a labyrinth of temptation, but somewhere in its glut lay the key to sealing the rifts—or unleashing worse."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1103
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender, leaf-shaped dagger"
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.027198549410698096
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.009972801450589302
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean17.43
std13.47
cv0.773
sampleLengths
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4013
4120
4229
434
4420
455
4631
477
4811
4917
79.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4742268041237113
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners46
36.23% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"Further on, they stumbled upon"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences92
matches
0"she muttered to Isolde, her"
1"she said, her words weaving"
2"She couldn't lie, that much"
3"they whispered, voice like wind"
4"She blinked, steadying herself on"
5"She yanked her hand back,"
6"she said, voice low"
7"she replied, her tone lilting,"
8"she breathed, turning to the"
9"they said, a note of"
10"he bellowed, voice cracking, before"
11"she whispered, glancing at Isolde"
12"She thought of her flat"
13"She reached out, but Isolde's"
14"They emerged moments later, form"
15"They crested a hill overlooking"
16"They'd come for answers—about the"
17"She straightened, blade cold against"
ratio0.196
52.39% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences92
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The air in the Fae"
2"Isolde had led them here,"
3"Rory stepped forward first, her"
4"The pendant throbbed against her"
5"she muttered to Isolde, her"
6"That was Eva's world of"
7"Isolde's pale lavender eyes met"
8"she said, her words weaving"
9"She couldn't lie, that much"
10"That was Fae blood for"
11"The Half-Fae seer glided forward"
12"Nyx slipped beside Rory, their"
13"they whispered, voice like wind"
14"Rory nodded, drawing a breath,"
15"The transition hit like diving"
16"Rory stumbled, her straight black"
17"She blinked, steadying herself on"
18"The sky above stretched in"
19"Rory bit off the curse,"
ratio0.815
54.35% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"As if summoned, a distant"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant as the faint shimmer of the Veil tore open before them, a rip in the fabric of reality that hummed like…"
1"The air in the Fae Grove had already felt charged, thicker than London's fog, laced with the perpetual bloom of wildflowers that defied the autumn chill outside…"
2"Rory stepped forward first, her boots crunching on the mossy ground marked by those ancient oak standing stones."
3"The Half-Fae seer glided forward without a sound, her long silver hair trailing like a comet's tail, leaving no imprint on the dew-kissed grass."
4"Nyx slipped beside Rory, their shadowy form brushing her arm—a cool, insubstantial touch that sent a shiver racing down her spine."
5"She blinked, steadying herself on a vine-choked archway that hadn't been there moments ago."
6"The land unfolded before them like a fever dream of indulgence. Sprawling vineyards rolled out in endless waves, grapes swollen to the size of fists, hanging he…"
7"She yanked her hand back, the small crescent scar on her left wrist itching as if remembering its own origin."
8"But her lavender eyes darted to the horizon, where grand pavilions rose like mirages—tents of silken gauze billowing in a breeze that carried moans of pleasure …"
9"A cluster of trees ahead bore fruits that sang—soft, melodic chimes emanating from their skins as wind rustled the leaves."
10"The nearest orb, a swollen mango-like thing veined with gold, vibrated under her palm, its song a haunting lullaby that tugged at memories of her mother's Welsh…"
11"Nyx paused, their shadowy form rippling as if absorbing the sound."
12"Further on, they stumbled upon a clearing dominated by a colossal banquet table, stretching fifty feet if it was an inch, heaped with delicacies that defied log…"
13"Pies overflowed with fillings that shifted colors—emerald custards swirling to sapphire creams."
14"One, a helbound soul Rory guessed, contracted from some earthly kitchen, plated a dish of wriggling tendrils that steamed with infernal heat."
15"Vines parted like welcoming arms, but thorns pricked Rory's skin, drawing beads of blood that the plants seemed to drink with greedy rustles."
16"They crested a hill overlooking a vast amphitheater, where a feast unfolded on a scale that stole Rory's breath."
17"Thousands of figures—demons with horned crowns, souls in silken rags—reclined on cushions of living moss, devouring platters that refilled themselves."
18"Music swelled, flutes carved from thighbones piping tunes that burrowed into the mind, urging indulgence."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she muttered, her voice steady despite the knot in her stomach"
1"she said, her words weaving like smoke"
2"Nyx murmured, their whisper cutting through the din like a blade"
3"she said, voice low"
4"she replied, her tone lilting, misleading as always"
5"they said, a note of sorrow in their wind-whispered voice"
6"the seer warned, her riddle carrying a genuine edge"
7"Rory nodded, heart pounding"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
3"she breathed (breathe)"
4"he bellowed (bellow)"
5"she whispered (whisper)"
6"they hissed (hiss)"
7"the seer warned (warn)"
8"they explained (explain)"
9"As if summoned (summon)"
10"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0.733
effectiveRatio0.733
73.0059%