Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY86D5AGACRDSX78QWXA8N3

Run Details

Duration:
1m 40s
Cost:
$0.009154
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory pried the loose oak floorboard in The Raven’s Nest’s secret room with a butter knife from the bar. Her crescent scar pulled as she leaned forward, the cold metal biting into her palm. Silas had sent her there ten minutes prior, his hazel eyes sharp behind his grey-streaked auburn bangs. He’d said the floorboard held an envelope with a lead on Evan—her abusive ex from Cardiff, who’d recently been spotted loitering outside Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress restaurant where she delivered food. The scar on her left wrist throbbed at the name; Evan had given it to her in a childhood bicycle crash, but the memory now tangled with later, crueler wounds—his fist to her ribs, his voice hissing that she’d never escape. Before slipping into the secret room, Rory had walked through the main bar: dim lights glinting off beer mugs, the smell of fried peanuts and stale ale wrapping around her, Silas’s slight limp echoing as he wiped down the counter. He’d nodded toward the bookshelf lined with leather-bound novels, his silver signet ring catching the light—their silent signal to the hidden door behind it. The transition to the secret room hit her immediately: aged paper and beeswax stung her nostrils, frayed vintage maps of European cities (Silas’s old MI6 haunts) lining the walls, a single bare bulb casting long shadows over scuffed wooden floors. She levered the floorboard up with a final twist. Dirt and crumbs shifted, and she pulled out a thick manila envelope sealed with red wax. Silas’s seal—an raven’s head—pressed into the wax. She tucked it into her jeans pocket, then froze at the creak of the bookshelf door. She pulled her hand free, butter knife still gripped tight. Her bright blue eyes darted to the door. It swung open, and a woman stepped through—Eva, her childhood friend from Cardiff, whom she hadn’t seen in eight months. Eva’s appearance jolted her. Once, Eva had worn faded Nirvana tees and chipped black nail polish, her brown hair a messy curtain she’d hidden behind when their high school bullies taunted them. Now she sported a tailored navy blazer, manicured crimson nails, and a thin gold chain around her neck. Her hair was pulled into a tight bun, her face made up with sharp winged liner. She’d changed—for the worse, Rory’s gut screamed. Rory’s throat went dry. “What are you doing here?” “Looking for you.” “You haven’t texted in eight months.” “Evan found me.” The words hung in the air. Rory had fled Cardiff after Evan had broken her ribs, texting Eva a frantic plea for help before catching a train to London. Eva had responded once—“Stop being dramatic”—then gone silent. Rory had regretted not telling her the full extent of the abuse; she’d thought Eva would judge her, just like her father had when she’d tried to quit pre-law to escape Evan’s influence. “You’re working for him?” “He’s not as bad as you said.” “He broke my ribs when I tried to leave.” Rory’s voice cracked. She’d never told Eva that detail, too ashamed to admit she’d let someone hurt her that badly. “You never let me help.” Eva’s voice softened, but her eyes stayed cold. “I thought you were just running from your parents’ expectations again—your dad’s pre-law push, your mom’s constant nagging about ‘responsibility.’” Rory’s gaze flicked to the gold chain around Eva’s neck. It had a small silver charm—Evan’s initials, E.C. She’d seen it once before, when Evan had paraded it in front of her as a threat to hurt the people she loved. He’d said it was a “gift” for anyone who betrayed her. “You took his gift.” “He’s offering me a job. A good one—office in Cardiff, steady pay, no more scraping by on bar tips.” “We both know what his jobs entail.” Rory nodded to the envelope in her pocket. “Silas has proof he’s running a drug ring out of Soho. His contacts in MI6 will put him away for good.” Eva’s eyes darted to her pocket. She stepped forward, her blazer shifting to reveal a small handgun tucked in her waistband. Rory’s heart raced. She’d never seen Eva carry a weapon before—once, Eva had cried when they’d found a dead bird on their way to school. “Give me the envelope.” “No.” “Evan will hurt your mother if you don’t.” Rory froze. She’d thought her parents were safe in Cardiff, their Welsh teacher mother and Irish barrister father tucked away in their quiet terraced house. But Evan had always been good at finding people; Silas had warned her about that—said Evan had ties to Cardiff’s criminal underbelly through her father’s old barrister cases, using client secrets to blackmail people into doing his bidding. “I won’t let you hurt her.” Rory pulled the envelope from her pocket and held it up. “If you touch her, I’ll give this to Silas’s contacts. They’ll put Evan away for good—and you with him, if you’re working for him.” Eva lunged. Rory dodged, but Eva’s shoulder slammed into her, knocking the envelope out of her hand. It split open, photos scattering across the aged wood floor. Rory glanced down—one photo showed Eva signing a contract with Evan, a pen in her manicured hand; another showed Evan meeting with a known Soho drug lord, a briefcase of cash passing between them; a third showed her mother’s terraced house in Cardiff, Evan standing on the sidewalk, watching through the window. Eva’s face twisted with rage. She grabbed one of the photos, crumpling it in her hand. “You weren’t supposed to see that.” She lunged again, this time for the butter knife in Rory’s hand, her tailored blazer flapping as she moved.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.238
leniency0.476
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount961
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount961
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"charm"
count1
5
word"raced"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"glinting"
2"echoing"
3"flicked"
4"charm"
5"raced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences48
matches
0"d with rage"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences48
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences63
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords944
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount781
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity2.05
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Evan11
Cardiff6
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory15
Silas5
European1
Eva16
Nirvana1
London1
Stop1
Welsh1
Irish1
Soho1
persons
0"Nest"
1"Evan"
2"Cheung"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
6"Nirvana"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"London"
globalScore0.476
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount944
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences63
matches
0"hissing that she’d"
93.88% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs18
mean52.44
std25.1
cv0.479
sampleLengths
034
189
2104
348
438
573
621
770
873
952
1059
1146
1213
1363
1441
1579
1622
1719
90.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences48
matches
0"been spotted"
1"was pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences63
ratio0.19
matches
0"He’d said the floorboard held an envelope with a lead on Evan—her abusive ex from Cardiff, who’d recently been spotted loitering outside Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress restaurant where she delivered food."
1"The scar on her left wrist throbbed at the name; Evan had given it to her in a childhood bicycle crash, but the memory now tangled with later, crueler wounds—his fist to her ribs, his voice hissing that she’d never escape."
2"He’d nodded toward the bookshelf lined with leather-bound novels, his silver signet ring catching the light—their silent signal to the hidden door behind it."
3"Silas’s seal—an raven’s head—pressed into the wax."
4"It swung open, and a woman stepped through—Eva, her childhood friend from Cardiff, whom she hadn’t seen in eight months."
5"She’d changed—for the worse, Rory’s gut screamed."
6"Eva had responded once—“Stop being dramatic”—then gone silent."
7"Rory had regretted not telling her the full extent of the abuse; she’d thought Eva would judge her, just like her father had when she’d tried to quit pre-law to escape Evan’s influence."
8"It had a small silver charm—Evan’s initials, E.C."
9"She’d never seen Eva carry a weapon before—once, Eva had cried when they’d found a dead bird on their way to school."
10"But Evan had always been good at finding people; Silas had warned her about that—said Evan had ties to Cardiff’s criminal underbelly through her father’s old barrister cases, using client secrets to blackmail people into doing his bidding."
11"Rory glanced down—one photo showed Eva signing a contract with Evan, a pen in her manicured hand; another showed Evan meeting with a known Soho drug lord, a briefcase of cash passing between them; a third showed her mother’s terraced house in Cardiff, Evan standing on the sidewalk, watching through the window."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount795
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.02012578616352201
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005031446540880503
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences63
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences63
mean14.98
std11.11
cv0.741
sampleLengths
019
115
217
331
441
540
624
740
89
916
107
1116
1210
138
1420
154
1628
1718
1816
197
204
215
223
236
243
256
2623
278
2833
294
307
3112
3217
3313
3420
3510
368
3723
3811
394
4019
4115
4221
436
4415
453
4622
474
481
498
55.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3492063492063492
totalSentences63
uniqueOpeners22
72.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"Once, Eva had worn faded"
ratio0.022
46.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences46
matches
0"Her crescent scar pulled as"
1"He’d said the floorboard held"
2"He’d nodded toward the bookshelf"
3"She levered the floorboard up"
4"She tucked it into her"
5"She pulled her hand free,"
6"Her bright blue eyes darted"
7"It swung open, and a"
8"Her hair was pulled into"
9"She’d changed—for the worse, Rory’s"
10"She’d never told Eva that"
11"It had a small silver"
12"She’d seen it once before,"
13"He’d said it was a"
14"She stepped forward, her blazer"
15"She’d never seen Eva carry"
16"She’d thought her parents were"
17"It split open, photos scattering"
18"She grabbed one of the"
19"She lunged again, this time"
ratio0.435
3.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences46
matches
0"Rory pried the loose oak"
1"Her crescent scar pulled as"
2"Silas had sent her there"
3"He’d said the floorboard held"
4"The scar on her left"
5"He’d nodded toward the bookshelf"
6"The transition to the secret"
7"She levered the floorboard up"
8"Dirt and crumbs shifted, and"
9"Silas’s seal—an raven’s head—pressed into"
10"She tucked it into her"
11"She pulled her hand free,"
12"Her bright blue eyes darted"
13"It swung open, and a"
14"Eva’s appearance jolted her."
15"Her hair was pulled into"
16"She’d changed—for the worse, Rory’s"
17"Rory’s throat went dry."
18"The words hung in the"
19"Rory had fled Cardiff after"
ratio0.913
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences46
matches
0"Before slipping into the secret"
1"Now she sported a tailored"
ratio0.043
93.60% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He’d said the floorboard held an envelope with a lead on Evan—her abusive ex from Cardiff, who’d recently been spotted loitering outside Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden …"
1"Rory had fled Cardiff after Evan had broken her ribs, texting Eva a frantic plea for help before catching a train to London."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva’s voice softened, but her eyes stayed cold"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
82.1873%