Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY89WJ2ZTR9B89QJEMVGP6K

Run Details

Duration:
11.6s
Cost:
$0.000589
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air smelled like overripe peaches and something electric, like the moment before a storm when the sky hums with unseen energy. Aurora Carter stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into the plush, golden carpet of petals beneath her feet. The petals weren’t just flowers—each one pulsed faintly, as if breathing, their edges shimmering with a sickly sweet glow. She reached out, brushing her fingers against one, and the sensation was like touching warm honey. A ripple of warmth spread up her arm, but it wasn’t unnatural—it was *alive*. Beside her, Nyx moved like a shadow given form, their silhouette stretching and contracting as they shifted between solid and incorporeal. Their violet eyes gleamed, fixed on the sprawling vineyards that stretched endlessly before them. The vines weren’t just vines. They coiled and twisted in impossible patterns, bearing fruit that wasn’t quite real—at least, not in the way Aurora knew reality. Some were the size of melons, others no bigger than marbles, their skins rippling with colors that shifted between amber and deep crimson. A few hung suspended in midair, as if weightless, their stems frayed and lifeless. “This isn’t Earth,” Nyx murmured, their voice a whisper carried on the wind. It slithered into Aurora’s ears, cool and precise, like a blade dragged across stone. “No,” Aurora agreed, her pulse quickening. She adjusted the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant around her neck, feeling the faint warmth of it against her skin. The pendant pulsed once, as if responding to the place. “But it’s not Hel, either.” Isolde Varga stood a few paces behind them, her silver hair catching the warm amber light of the sky like spun moonlight. She didn’t move, didn’t speak—just watched, her pale lavender eyes unreadable. The air around her seemed to ripple, as if the very fabric of the world bent to her presence. Aurora had seen that before, the way time slowed when Isolde was near, the way the world felt… *thinner*. “You’re certain of this?” Isolde asked at last, her voice like the rustle of dry leaves. “That this is not one of the Nine Circles?” Aurora exhaled through her nose. “No. This is Dymas.” Isolde’s lips curled, just slightly. “Then we are in luck.” A gust of wind howled through the orchards, sending petals spiraling into the air like confetti. The fruit on the vines trembled, some of them falling to the ground with a wet *thud*. Aurora crouched, picking up one of the smaller, marble-sized fruits. It was warm to the touch, almost too warm, and when she pressed her thumb against it, a faint, sweet juice oozed between her fingers. She tasted it. It was like nothing she’d ever known—sweetness layered with something sharp, like the first bite of a fruit she’d never seen before, followed by a warmth that spread through her mouth and settled in her chest. “What is this place?” she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. Nyx stepped closer, their form flickering like a candle flame in a draft. “A place of excess. A place where hunger is never satisfied.” Aurora looked up. The sky above them wasn’t just amber—it was *alive*. Streaks of light danced across it, shifting colors like liquid fire, and the air hummed with a low, resonant vibration. It felt like standing at the edge of a storm, but one that wasn’t of this world. “And the people here?” she asked. “Those who cannot stop,” Nyx said. “Those who are bound by their desires.” Isolde’s voice cut through the silence, sharp as a blade. “And those who are not.” Aurora followed the direction of Isolde’s gaze. In the distance, between the rows of vines, a figure moved. Tall, slender, dressed in robes that shimmered like liquid silver. They carried a tray laden with more of the strange fruit, their movements fluid, effortless. Their face was obscured by the hood of their robes, but Aurora could feel the weight of their gaze. “Prince Belphegor,” Isolde murmured. The figure stopped, turning slightly. Their eyes—if they were eyes—gleamed with an unnatural light, like embers in the dark. A slow, deliberate smile curved their lips. “Ah,” the voice echoed through the air, rich and smooth as aged whiskey. “Visitors.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the fruit in her hand. The warmth of it seemed to pulse in time with her heartbeat. “You are not of this realm,” the figure continued, their voice wrapping around them like silk. “But you are welcome here, as all are welcome in Dymas.” Nyx stepped forward, their form solidifying for a moment before dissolving back into shadow. “We are not here to stay.” The figure tilted their head, the movement predatory. “No. But you will eat.” Aurora’s stomach twisted. She hadn’t realized how hungry she was until that moment, how the scent of the fruit, the warmth of it, had made her mouth water. But this wasn’t hunger. This was something deeper, something that gnawed at her bones. “Isolde,” she said, glancing back at the Half-Fae woman. “What do we do?” Isolde’s eyes were distant, her gaze fixed on the figure in the distance. “We do not eat.” The figure laughed, a sound like chimes in a gale. “No? Then why do you tremble?” Aurora’s breath hitched. She *was* trembling. Her fingers ached to reach for the fruit, to press it to her lips and taste the sweetness that called to her. She could feel it in her veins, a pull, a hunger that wasn’t her own. “Because we are not meant to be here,” she said, her voice steady despite the storm inside her. “This is not our place.” The figure’s smile widened. “Then leave.” Aurora turned, her boots crunching on the petals as she walked. Nyx moved beside her, their presence a comforting darkness. Isolde followed, her silver hair catching the light as she moved. They walked deeper into the orchards, the vines parting like a curtain before them. The air grew thicker, heavier, the scent of the fruit more intoxicating. Aurora’s lungs burned, her chest tight. She could see more of the strange fruits now, hanging from vines that stretched impossibly high, their colors shifting and pulsing. Some of them were piled in great heaps, untouched, as if waiting. “Why does it feel like we’re being watched?” Aurora asked, her voice barely audible over the hum of the air. Nyx didn’t answer. Their form flickered, their eyes fixed on something beyond the vines. Isolde stopped suddenly, her hand pressing against a tree trunk. The bark was smooth, almost silky, and when she touched it, a faint glow emanated from her fingertips. “We are.” Aurora followed her gaze. Between the vines, just beyond the reach of the light, something moved. Shadows that weren’t shadows, forms that shifted and twisted like smoke. They were watching them, their eyes gleaming with an unnatural light. “Helbound,” Isolde whispered. Aurora’s blood ran cold. “What do they want?” Isolde’s voice was a whisper. “They want you to stay.” Aurora swallowed hard. She could feel the pull of the fruit, the warmth of it, the promise of something more. But she knew, deep in her bones, that this was not her place. This was not where she belonged. “Then we leave,” she said, her voice firm. Nyx moved forward, their form solidifying as they stepped between the vines. The shadows recoiled, their forms flickering like dying embers. Aurora followed, her boots crunching on the petals, her fingers tightening around the fruit in her hand. She didn’t look back. They walked until the vines thinned, until the air grew cooler, until the scent of the fruit faded. The orchards gave way to a great hall, its walls lined with more of the strange fruit, its ceiling lost in the amber glow of the sky. At the center of the hall stood a table, laden with more of the fruit, more of the sweetness that called to them. Aurora’s breath caught. She could see it now, the feast that awaited them, the excess that was Dymas. She could feel the pull of it, the hunger that was not her own. “No,” she said, her voice steady. Nyx moved beside her, their form flickering like a candle flame in a draft. “We are not here to stay.” Aurora turned, her eyes meeting Isolde’s. The Half-Fae woman’s eyes were distant, her gaze fixed on the hall before them. “Then we leave.” And they did. They walked until the hall faded behind them, until the orchards thinned, until the vines parted like a curtain before them. The air grew cooler, the scent of the fruit fading. Aurora’s lungs burned, her chest tight, but she didn’t look back. She didn’t have to. She could feel the pull of Dymas, the hunger that was not her own, but she knew, deep in her bones, that this was not her place. This was not where she belonged. They walked until they reached the edge of the orchards, until the vines gave way to a great chasm, its depths lost in the amber glow of the sky. The air was cooler here, the scent of the fruit fading. Aurora’s breath came easier, her lungs no longer burning. “Where to now?” Nyx asked, their voice a whisper carried on the wind. Isolde’s voice was a whisper. “Home.” Aurora nodded, her eyes fixed on the chasm before them. She could see the other side now, the world beyond Dymas, the world that was not hers. But it was a world she could return to. She turned, her boots crunching on the petals as she walked. Nyx moved beside her, their presence a comforting darkness. Isolde followed, her silver hair catching the light as she moved. They walked until they reached the edge of the chasm, until the vines parted like a curtain before them. The air was cooler here, the scent of the fruit fading. Aurora’s breath came easier, her lungs no longer burning. She stepped forward, her boots sinking into the plush, golden carpet of petals. The world beyond stretched before her, familiar and strange, a place she could call home. And for the first time in a long time, Aurora Carter felt like she was exactly where she was meant to be.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.421
leniency0.842
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1718
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1718
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"electric"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count6
3
word"whisper"
count5
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"unreadable"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"marble"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"effortless"
count1
11
word"could feel"
count5
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"echoed"
count1
14
word"silk"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"comforting"
count2
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"gleaming"
count1
19
word"depths"
count1
20
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"electric"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"whisper"
4"pulse"
5"unreadable"
6"trembled"
7"marble"
8"silence"
9"shimmered"
10"effortless"
11"could feel"
12"weight"
13"echoed"
14"silk"
15"stomach"
16"comforting"
17"flickered"
18"gleaming"
19"depths"
20"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences130
matches
0"A ripple of warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences130
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences152
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords5
totalWords1707
ratio0.003
matches
0"alive"
1"thinner"
2"thud"
3"alive"
4"was"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.45% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1542
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Nyx11
Aurora27
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Varga1
Isolde15
Half-Fae2
Dymas3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Nyx"
2"Aurora"
3"Varga"
4"Isolde"
places
0"Half-Fae"
1"Dymas"
globalScore0.625
windowScore0.667
1.49% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences101
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"smelled like overripe peaches and somethin"
1"as if breathing their edges shimmering with a sickly sweet glow"
2"as if responding to the place"
3"felt like standing at the edge of a sto"
4"as if waiting"
5"felt like she was exactly where she was"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.586
wordCount1707
matches
0"not her own, but she knew, deep in her bones"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences152
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean29.95
std23.1
cv0.771
sampleLengths
089
198
227
342
471
525
69
710
8107
912
1024
1149
126
1313
1415
1562
164
1726
1814
1921
2027
2120
2213
2342
2413
2517
2616
2743
2823
296
3031
3165
3220
3314
3430
3538
363
378
3810
3939
408
4142
4268
4332
446
4520
4623
4745
4837
4949
97.17% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences130
matches
0"was obscured"
1"were piled"
2"was meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs264
matches
0"were watching"
11.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences152
ratio0.046
matches
0"The petals weren’t just flowers—each one pulsed faintly, as if breathing, their edges shimmering with a sickly sweet glow."
1"A ripple of warmth spread up her arm, but it wasn’t unnatural—it was *alive*."
2"They coiled and twisted in impossible patterns, bearing fruit that wasn’t quite real—at least, not in the way Aurora knew reality."
3"She didn’t move, didn’t speak—just watched, her pale lavender eyes unreadable."
4"It was like nothing she’d ever known—sweetness layered with something sharp, like the first bite of a fruit she’d never seen before, followed by a warmth that spread through her mouth and settled in her chest."
5"The sky above them wasn’t just amber—it was *alive*."
6"Their eyes—if they were eyes—gleamed with an unnatural light, like embers in the dark."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1553
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"smaller, marble-sized fruits."
adverbCount54
adverbRatio0.03477141017385705
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.0070830650354153256
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences152
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences152
mean11.23
std6.68
cv0.594
sampleLengths
022
118
219
316
414
521
614
75
821
923
1014
1113
1214
136
1421
1510
165
1722
1811
1919
2018
211
2216
239
245
254
265
275
2816
2917
3010
3125
323
3336
3412
3513
3611
373
389
3920
4017
416
426
437
4410
455
467
4711
4810
4915
48.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.24342105263157895
totalSentences152
uniqueOpeners37
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences125
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.20% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences125
matches
0"She reached out, brushing her"
1"Their violet eyes gleamed, fixed"
2"They coiled and twisted in"
3"It slithered into Aurora’s ears,"
4"She adjusted the silver chain"
5"She didn’t move, didn’t speak—just"
6"It was warm to the"
7"She tasted it."
8"It was like nothing she’d"
9"she asked, her voice barely"
10"It felt like standing at"
11"They carried a tray laden"
12"Their face was obscured by"
13"Their eyes—if they were eyes—gleamed"
14"She hadn’t realized how hungry"
15"she said, glancing back at"
16"She *was* trembling."
17"Her fingers ached to reach"
18"She could feel it in"
19"she said, her voice steady"
ratio0.312
4.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount114
totalSentences125
matches
0"The air smelled like overripe"
1"Aurora Carter stepped forward, her"
2"The petals weren’t just flowers—each"
3"She reached out, brushing her"
4"A ripple of warmth spread"
5"Their violet eyes gleamed, fixed"
6"The vines weren’t just vines."
7"They coiled and twisted in"
8"Some were the size of"
9"Nyx murmured, their voice a"
10"It slithered into Aurora’s ears,"
11"Aurora agreed, her pulse quickening"
12"She adjusted the silver chain"
13"The pendant pulsed once, as"
14"Isolde Varga stood a few"
15"She didn’t move, didn’t speak—just"
16"The air around her seemed"
17"Aurora had seen that before,"
18"Isolde asked at last, her"
19"Aurora exhaled through her nose."
ratio0.912
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences125
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"The petals weren’t just flowers—each one pulsed faintly, as if breathing, their edges shimmering with a sickly sweet glow."
1"Their violet eyes gleamed, fixed on the sprawling vineyards that stretched endlessly before them."
2"They coiled and twisted in impossible patterns, bearing fruit that wasn’t quite real—at least, not in the way Aurora knew reality."
3"A few hung suspended in midair, as if weightless, their stems frayed and lifeless."
4"Tall, slender, dressed in robes that shimmered like liquid silver."
5"Nyx stepped forward, their form solidifying for a moment before dissolving back into shadow."
6"She could feel it in her veins, a pull, a hunger that wasn’t her own."
7"She could see more of the strange fruits now, hanging from vines that stretched impossibly high, their colors shifting and pulsing."
8"They were watching them, their eyes gleaming with an unnatural light."
9"Aurora followed, her boots crunching on the petals, her fingers tightening around the fruit in her hand."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Nyx murmured, their voice a whisper carried on the wind"
1"Aurora agreed, her pulse quickening"
2"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
3"she said, her voice steady despite the storm inside her"
4"Aurora asked, her voice barely audible over the hum of the air"
5"she said, her voice firm"
6"she said, her voice steady"
7"Nyx asked, their voice a whisper carried on the wind"
18.42% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora agreed (agree)"
2"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
3"the figure continued (continue)"
4"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.789
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.263
68.8616%