Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8ATG5527Q7XT9BKN5GQZ4

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 29s
Cost:
$0.044613
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora stepped through the rippling air first, the Heartstone Pendant around her neck throbbing like a second heartbeat against her skin. Heat bloomed from it, insistent, pulling her forward. She gripped the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, its chill seeping through the leather sheath into her palm. Behind her, Nyx's form coalesced from the shadows, a tall silhouette that absorbed the fading light of London's evening. Isolde followed last, her silver hair catching faint glimmers as she passed the portal's edge without a sound—no footprints marked the ground where she walked. Warm amber light enveloped them. Aurora blinked, her bright blue eyes adjusting to the glow that hung in the sky like honey poured over the world. No sun pierced the haze, yet everything shimmered with an inner fire. Vines twisted up from the soil, heavy with clusters of fruit that pulsed faintly, as if breathing. She reached out, fingers brushing a low-hanging bunch—plump orbs the color of bruised sunset, their skins smooth and yielding under her touch. "This place hums with hunger," Isolde murmured, her pale lavender eyes scanning the horizon. "A feast that devours the feaster, or so the shadows whisper." Aurora glanced back. The portal had vanished, leaving only a faint shimmer in the air, like heat rising from pavement. Her stomach tightened. "Feast or not, we came for answers. That pendant led us here—it's from this realm, right? Dymas, you called it." Nyx's form shifted, edges blurring into wisps that trailed like smoke. Their voice rustled through the air, a breeze carrying secrets. "The air tastes of excess. Sweet rot beneath the bloom. We tread where mortals glut themselves eternal." A path unfurled before them, not carved but grown—interwoven roots forming a walkway that pulsed underfoot, warm and alive. Aurora took a step, felt the subtle give, like walking on a giant's vein. Unease prickled her skin; this wasn't earth she knew, solid and unyielding. Orchards flanked them now, trees laden with fruits that defied naming: some elongated like fingers, dripping nectar that sizzled on the ground; others swollen and veined, emitting low hums that vibrated in her chest. She plucked one, small and jewel-toned, its surface cool despite the ambient warmth. Juice burst across her tongue as she bit in—tart explosion, then honeyed fire that spread down her throat, igniting a craving she hadn't felt before. Her scar on her left wrist itched, a reminder of old pains in this new strangeness. "Tastes like nothing back home. Sharp, then sweet. Makes you want more." Isolde's lips curved, not quite a smile. "One bite beckons the second, the third a chain. In gardens such as these, desire blooms eternal, but the roots drink deep." Nyx extended a shadowy tendril, brushing a leaf that quivered at the touch. "Listen. The wind carries laughter, but it echoes hollow." Aurora paused, ears straining. Distant murmurs filtered through the foliage—giggles that twisted into groans, clinking utensils like bones rattling. The sound swelled as they pressed on, the path widening into a clearing where tables sprawled endlessly. Banquets heaped with dishes that steamed and glistened: roasted meats carved into impossible shapes, loaves that breathed steam like living things, sauces that shifted colors in the amber light. Figures moved among them, spectral and solid alike. One, a burly soul with eyes glazed in perpetual hunger, shoveled handfuls of glistening berries into his mouth, juice staining his chin black. He laughed, a wet, choking sound, then reached for more, his belly distending visibly. Aurora's gut twisted. Wonder clashed with revulsion—the sheer abundance stunned her, vines overhead dripping with ready harvests, yet the air hung heavy with something decayed, like overripe fruit left too long. "They're... trapped here. Eating forever. Is this what Dymas does? Turns indulgence into punishment?" "The prince of this realm savors such spectacles," Isolde replied, her voice threading through the din like a needle. "Belphegor, they name him. He weaves feasts from the souls' own cravings, a table that never empties, guests who never leave." Nyx's form solidified slightly, violet eyes flickering. "Unease stirs in me. These souls once wandered realms like ours. Now they bloat and wither in tandem." Deeper they ventured, the orchards giving way to vast gardens where flowers bloomed in riots of color, petals unfurling with audible sighs. Aurora knelt by one bloom, its center a swirling vortex of gold dust that swirled up at her breath, coating her fingers. Warmth spread through her hand, a seductive pull that made her envision banquets of her own—endless deliveries from the Golden Empress, piles of steaming dumplings she could devour without end. She shook it off, wiping the dust away. The pendant pulsed hotter now, guiding them toward a grand pavilion ahead. Stone arches loomed, carved with motifs of mouths agape, tongues lolling in ecstasy or agony. Inside, chefs labored—ethereal figures with aprons stained in iridescent sauces, their hands blurring as they chopped ingredients that wriggled on the boards. One turned, his face a mask of hollow cheeks and fevered eyes, offering a skewer of sizzling meat that dripped fat like liquid gold. "Partake," he rasped, voice thick with invitation. "From the vineyards of eternal yield. One taste, and you'll understand the true flavor of desire." Aurora hesitated, the aroma wrapping around her like a lover's arms—smoky, spiced, with an undercurrent of something metallic, like blood. Her mouth watered, but the unease won. She waved it away. "Not here for the food. We're looking for the one who sent this." She tapped the pendant, its crimson glow piercing the amber haze. The chef's grin stretched too wide. "Ah, the Heartstone. A gift from the depths. Follow the warmth; it knows the way." Isolde's eyes narrowed, lavender depths reflecting the pavilion's lights. "Gifts in such places bear teeth, hidden but sharp. The stone pulses for a reason—perhaps a summons, perhaps a trap." Nyx drifted closer to a simmering cauldron, shadows licking at the steam. "Heat rises here, but cold lingers in the spaces between. I sense watchers in the vines." A rustle echoed from the undergrowth. Aurora spun, blade half-drawn, its moonsilver edge catching the light with a faint luminescence. Eyes gleamed from the foliage—small, impish creatures with skins like bark, scurrying on all fours. One darted out, snatching a fallen fruit and vanishing with a chitter that sounded like mocking laughter. "Locals?" Aurora whispered, heart pounding. The wonder returned, sharp and thrilling—these beings moved with fluid grace, blending into the environment as if born from it. Yet their gazes held a predatory gleam, unease threading through her awe. "Denizens of excess," Isolde intoned. "They hoard the scraps, grow fat on forgotten morsels. Harmless until hunger turns them bold." The group pushed onward, the pavilion fading behind as vineyards stretched out, rows of grapes swelling to the size of fists, their skins translucent and veined with light. Aurora brushed a cluster; it chimed softly, like crystal bells, releasing a scent that dizzied her—wine-sweet, with notes of earth and fire. She imagined her old life in Cardiff, the rigid paths of pre-law, now dwarfed by this alien splendor. But doubt crept in: time moved strangely here, much like Isolde's grove. How long had they wandered already? Minutes? Hours? Nyx's form wavered, incorporeal wisps extending to probe the vines. "The ground shifts. Portals within portals, perhaps. I feel the pull of other realms, faint as echoes." A grand feast unfolded in the distance, tables circling a massive fire pit where whole beasts rotated on spits, fats crackling and popping. Souls gathered, their forms ranging from gaunt to grotesquely swollen, toasting with goblets that refilled themselves. Laughter boomed, but beneath it lurked moans, a symphony of satisfaction laced with torment. Aurora's fingers tightened on the blade. Discovery burned in her chest—the sheer ingenuity of this place, chefs conjuring dishes from air, fruits that sang when plucked. Yet unease gnawed: every delight seemed laced with a hook, pulling deeper into oblivion. "Look there," she said, pointing to a central figure on a dais, lounging amid cushions, a crown of twisted vines atop his head. His eyes locked on them, lazy and knowing. Isolde inclined her head. "The prince awaits those who seek. But remember, seeker, the heart's desire often devours the seeker whole." They approached, the air thickening with scents that clawed at Aurora's resolve. Nyx's shadows coiled tighter, ready. Wonder and dread intertwined, the world's secrets unfolding step by step in this realm of endless hunger.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.609
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1424
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1424
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"shimmered"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count3
8
word"reminder"
count1
9
word"desire"
count3
10
word"quivered"
count1
11
word"echoes"
count2
12
word"spectral"
count1
13
word"glistening"
count1
14
word"loomed"
count1
15
word"depths"
count2
16
word"simmering"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count1
18
word"pounding"
count1
19
word"crystal"
count1
20
word"wavered"
count1
21
word"symphony"
count1
22
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"shimmered"
2"pulsed"
3"scanning"
4"whisper"
5"stomach"
6"vibrated"
7"warmth"
8"reminder"
9"desire"
10"quivered"
11"echoes"
12"spectral"
13"glistening"
14"loomed"
15"depths"
16"simmering"
17"echoed"
18"pounding"
19"crystal"
20"wavered"
21"symphony"
22"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1404
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
91.49% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions39
wordCount1111
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.17
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Nyx7
London1
Aurora13
Golden1
Empress1
Cardiff1
Isolde8
One3
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Aurora"
2"Isolde"
3"One"
places
0"London"
1"Golden"
2"Cardiff"
globalScore0.915
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if breathing"
1"not quite a smile"
2"lly distending visibly"
3"sounded like mocking laughter"
4"seemed laced with a hook, pulling deeper into oblivion"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.712
wordCount1404
matches
0"not carved but grown"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
96.15% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean45.29
std22.04
cv0.487
sampleLengths
091
177
225
343
438
579
666
729
822
965
1045
1145
1240
1325
1494
1561
1623
1755
1821
1929
2028
2152
2237
2320
2488
2527
2653
2740
2831
2921
3034
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs218
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences96
ratio0.167
matches
0"Isolde followed last, her silver hair catching faint glimmers as she passed the portal's edge without a sound—no footprints marked the ground where she walked."
1"She reached out, fingers brushing a low-hanging bunch—plump orbs the color of bruised sunset, their skins smooth and yielding under her touch."
2"A path unfurled before them, not carved but grown—interwoven roots forming a walkway that pulsed underfoot, warm and alive."
3"Unease prickled her skin; this wasn't earth she knew, solid and unyielding."
4"Orchards flanked them now, trees laden with fruits that defied naming: some elongated like fingers, dripping nectar that sizzled on the ground; others swollen and veined, emitting low hums that vibrated in her chest."
5"Juice burst across her tongue as she bit in—tart explosion, then honeyed fire that spread down her throat, igniting a craving she hadn't felt before."
6"Distant murmurs filtered through the foliage—giggles that twisted into groans, clinking utensils like bones rattling."
7"Wonder clashed with revulsion—the sheer abundance stunned her, vines overhead dripping with ready harvests, yet the air hung heavy with something decayed, like overripe fruit left too long."
8"Warmth spread through her hand, a seductive pull that made her envision banquets of her own—endless deliveries from the Golden Empress, piles of steaming dumplings she could devour without end."
9"Inside, chefs labored—ethereal figures with aprons stained in iridescent sauces, their hands blurring as they chopped ingredients that wriggled on the boards."
10"Aurora hesitated, the aroma wrapping around her like a lover's arms—smoky, spiced, with an undercurrent of something metallic, like blood."
11"\"Ah, the Heartstone. A gift from the depths. Follow the warmth; it knows the way.\""
12"Eyes gleamed from the foliage—small, impish creatures with skins like bark, scurrying on all fours."
13"The wonder returned, sharp and thrilling—these beings moved with fluid grace, blending into the environment as if born from it."
14"Aurora brushed a cluster; it chimed softly, like crystal bells, releasing a scent that dizzied her—wine-sweet, with notes of earth and fire."
15"Discovery burned in her chest—the sheer ingenuity of this place, chefs conjuring dishes from air, fruits that sang when plucked."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1129
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.02037201062887511
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.008857395925597875
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean14.63
std7.15
cv0.489
sampleLengths
021
18
218
319
425
55
621
712
817
922
1014
1111
123
1317
143
1520
1611
1710
1817
1919
2014
2112
2234
2313
2425
2516
2612
277
2822
2913
309
314
3215
3317
3429
358
3623
3714
383
3928
4014
4119
4221
437
4418
4522
4622
4730
488
4912
86.81% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5208333333333334
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners50
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences77
matches
0"She gripped the Fae-Forged Blade"
1"She reached out, fingers brushing"
2"Her stomach tightened."
3"Their voice rustled through the"
4"She plucked one, small and"
5"Her scar on her left"
6"He laughed, a wet, choking"
7"She shook it off, wiping"
8"he rasped, voice thick with"
9"Her mouth watered, but the"
10"She waved it away."
11"She tapped the pendant, its"
12"She imagined her old life"
13"she said, pointing to a"
14"His eyes locked on them,"
15"They approached, the air thickening"
ratio0.208
50.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences77
matches
0"Aurora stepped through the rippling"
1"Heat bloomed from it, insistent,"
2"She gripped the Fae-Forged Blade"
3"Isolde followed last, her silver"
4"Aurora blinked, her bright blue"
5"Vines twisted up from the"
6"She reached out, fingers brushing"
7"Isolde murmured, her pale lavender"
8"Aurora glanced back."
9"The portal had vanished, leaving"
10"Her stomach tightened."
11"Nyx's form shifted, edges blurring"
12"Their voice rustled through the"
13"A path unfurled before them,"
14"Aurora took a step, felt"
15"Unease prickled her skin; this"
16"Orchards flanked them now, trees"
17"She plucked one, small and"
18"Juice burst across her tongue"
19"Her scar on her left"
ratio0.818
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Behind her, Nyx's form coalesced from the shadows, a tall silhouette that absorbed the fading light of London's evening."
1"Aurora blinked, her bright blue eyes adjusting to the glow that hung in the sky like honey poured over the world."
2"Nyx's form shifted, edges blurring into wisps that trailed like smoke."
3"Orchards flanked them now, trees laden with fruits that defied naming: some elongated like fingers, dripping nectar that sizzled on the ground; others swollen a…"
4"Juice burst across her tongue as she bit in—tart explosion, then honeyed fire that spread down her throat, igniting a craving she hadn't felt before."
5"Banquets heaped with dishes that steamed and glistened: roasted meats carved into impossible shapes, loaves that breathed steam like living things, sauces that …"
6"Aurora knelt by one bloom, its center a swirling vortex of gold dust that swirled up at her breath, coating her fingers."
7"Warmth spread through her hand, a seductive pull that made her envision banquets of her own—endless deliveries from the Golden Empress, piles of steaming dumpli…"
8"Inside, chefs labored—ethereal figures with aprons stained in iridescent sauces, their hands blurring as they chopped ingredients that wriggled on the boards."
9"One turned, his face a mask of hollow cheeks and fevered eyes, offering a skewer of sizzling meat that dripped fat like liquid gold."
10"The wonder returned, sharp and thrilling—these beings moved with fluid grace, blending into the environment as if born from it."
11"Souls gathered, their forms ranging from gaunt to grotesquely swollen, toasting with goblets that refilled themselves."
12"Discovery burned in her chest—the sheer ingenuity of this place, chefs conjuring dishes from air, fruits that sang when plucked."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Isolde replied, her voice threading through the din like a needle"
1"he rasped, voice thick with invitation"
2"She tapped, its crimson glow piercing the amber haze"
3"Aurora whispered, heart pounding"
63.04% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.174
leniency0.348
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.174
72.7128%