Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8BKNX2MB3Q9536Z6NHNX6

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Duration:
15.6s
Cost:
$0.001607
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn descended the rusted metal stairs into the bowels of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, her worn leather watch ticking steadily against her left wrist like a metronome counting down to some inevitable unraveling. The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—decay, perhaps, or the faint ozone of illicit magic that she'd learned to distrust over the years. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair caught the faint glow from her flashlight, casting jagged shadows on the graffiti-scarred walls. At 41, with eighteen years of decorated service etched into her sharp jaw and military bearing, she moved with the precision of a woman who'd stared down worse than underground gloom. But this? This felt off from the moment the call came in at 2:17 a.m. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of it in the backrooms of the Metropolitan Police— a supernatural black market that slithered through London's underbelly, peddling enchanted trinkets and banned alchemies. It moved every full moon, elusive as smoke, accessible only with a bone token clutched in your fist. Hers had come from a reluctant informant two months back, after a string of bizarre thefts she'd chalked up to organized crime with a cultish twist. Now, a body down here. Uniformed officers had sealed the perimeter above ground, but Quinn had waved them off. This wasn't their beat. Not yet. Her boots echoed on the cracked tiles as she rounded a corner, the beam of her light slicing through the darkness to reveal the market's skeletal remains. Makeshift stalls of weathered wood and canvas slumped against the platform's edge, their wares scattered like the aftermath of a frantic evacuation: vials of shimmering liquid, bundles of dried herbs that smelled of brimstone, a scattering of what looked like animal bones carved with runes. The air hummed faintly, a vibration she felt in her teeth, as if the place itself were alive and resentful of intrusion. In the center of it all, cordoned off with yellow tape that seemed absurdly mundane amid the arcane clutter, lay the crime scene. Eva Kowalski knelt by the body, her curly red hair spilling over her shoulders as she adjusted her round glasses and tucked a strand behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had noticed the first time they'd crossed paths six months ago. Eva, 26 and freckled like a map of forgotten constellations, clutched her worn leather satchel stuffed with books against her hip. She'd been Aurora's childhood friend, the occult researcher from the British Museum's restricted archives, but lately, she'd become Quinn's unofficial consultant on the weird cases. A master's in Ancient History from Oxford didn't make her a cop, but it made her useful. And tonight, with the supernatural stench hanging heavy, Quinn needed useful. "Quinn," Eva said without looking up, her green eyes fixed on the corpse. Her voice carried that soft Oxford lilt, steady despite the circumstances. "You made good time. Traffic's a beast this hour, even aboveground." Quinn ducked under the tape, her brown eyes narrowing as she took in the scene. The victim was a man in his late thirties, sprawled face-down on the grimy platform, his tweed coat splayed like broken wings. Blood pooled beneath him, dark and viscous, seeping into the cracks of the tiles. But it was the wounds that caught her—three precise slashes across his back, deep enough to sever spine and ribs, yet eerily clean, as if made by a blade that hungered for flesh. No spatter on the nearby stalls, no defensive marks on his hands. And strangest of all, clutched in his right fist: a small brass compass, its casing patinaed with verdigris, the face etched with protective sigils that seemed to shift under her light. "The Veil Compass," Eva murmured, glancing up. She rose slowly, brushing dust from her jeans, her 5'4" frame dwarfed by the cavernous space. "It's real. Attuned to supernatural rifts—points to portals, ley lines, that sort of thing. Crafted by a Shade artisan, if the archives are right. He must've been a vendor here. Name's Elias Thorne, per his wallet. No priors, but his pockets are lined with residue from alchemical trades." Quinn crouched beside the body, her gloved fingers hovering over the compass without touching it. The needle quivered, not spinning wildly as she'd half-expected, but pointing resolutely toward a shadowed alcove twenty feet away—an alcove empty save for a toppled crate of what looked like enchanted baubles. "Cause of death's obvious," she said, her voice clipped, military-honed. "Exsanguination from those cuts. But look at the edges—no tearing, no hesitation marks. Like a scalpel, not a street fight. And the blood... it's all pooled under him. No trail leading in or out." Eva nodded, pushing her glasses up her nose. "That's what doesn't add up. The Market was buzzing an hour ago—full moon's tomorrow, so vendors were prepping to relocate. Witnesses from the entry point say they heard a scuffle, then silence. But no screams, no chase. And this?" She gestured to the compass. "It's not just a trinket. If it's pointing there, that alcove might be a rift. Supernatural interference. Could be a Shade attack—ethereal blades, phasing through defenses. Explains the cleanliness." Quinn's jaw tightened. Shades. Ethereal predators from the shadows, or so the occult lore went. Eva's world, full of rifts and sigils, where her lost partner DS Morris had vanished three years ago in a haze of the unexplained. Quinn had chased leads ever since, piecing together fragments of the supernatural she refused to fully embrace. But this felt too pat, too convenient. She straightened, scanning the platform with the precision of a hawk. The stalls nearest the body were undisturbed—jars of iridescent powder intact, a rack of bone tokens gleaming untouched. If there'd been a struggle, why no toppled merchandise? And the air... that hum. It wasn't fear or magic; it was machinery, faint but persistent, like a distant train. "Interference," Quinn echoed, her tone skeptical. She stepped toward the alcove, flashlight beam cutting through the gloom. The crate there was splintered, but not from violence—more like it had been kicked aside. Behind it, partially concealed by a tattered curtain, a rusted service door hung ajar. No sigils, no glow of a portal. Just cold steel, and beyond it, the drip of water echoing from forgotten tunnels. She pushed the curtain aside, revealing a narrow corridor lined with exposed pipes. Her light caught something: a faint smear on the doorframe, not blood, but oilmechanical, slick. Eva followed, satchel bumping against her thigh. "Quinn, if it's a rift, we shouldn't—" "It's not a rift." Quinn cut her off, kneeling to examine the smear. She sniffed it—diesel, faint but unmistakable. Her mind raced, cataloging discrepancies. The victim's coat: expensive tweed, but the pockets inside were reinforced, like for smuggling. No wallet in the traditional sense; it was sewn into the lining, as if he expected a frisk. And the compass—its needle hadn't budged when she'd approached. It was fixed, mechanical perhaps, disguised as arcane. "Look at the wounds again," Quinn said, rising and striding back to the body. She tilted her head, envisioning the angle. "Three slashes, parallel, from above. If it was a Shade, ethereal or not, you'd expect phasing—entry and exit wounds mismatched. But these are straight through, consistent depth. And no residue on the skin. No ectoplasm, no burns." Eva frowned, tucking hair behind her ear again. "Then what? A coordinated hit? But in here? The Market's warded—bone tokens don't just let muggers waltz in." Quinn's eyes flicked to the compass. She pried it gently from the victim's hand, turning it over. The back plate was loose, not soldered. With a thumbnail, she popped it open. Inside, no arcane needle mechanism, but gears—tiny, precise, oiled. A fake. A prop, maybe, to sell to gullible buyers chasing supernatural highs. "It's a con," Quinn said, the pieces snapping together like a lock yielding to a pick. "Thorne wasn't a victim; he was the mark. Someone lured him here with the promise of a real Veil Compass. The Market's a front for it—enchanted goods my ass. Half these stalls are peddling fakes to tourists and wannabe witches." Eva's eyes widened behind her glasses. "But the wounds—" "Delivery system." Quinn pointed to the alcove door. "That corridor leads to the old maintenance tunnels. Camden's underbelly is riddled with them—abandoned since the Blitz. Someone rigged a trap: a weighted blade on a pulley, oil-slicked for silence. Diesel from a portable winch, maybe powered by a hand-crank. Thorne grabs the 'compass,' steps into the alcove thinking he's sealing a deal, and wham—three parallel cuts from hidden springs. Body slumps exactly where it is, blood pools without a trail because he never moved after the initial drop." She paced now, her bearing rigid as she reconstructed it. "Perp enters with a token—vendor, maybe, or a rival. Waits for Thorne to inspect the goods. The scuffle the witnesses heard? Just the crate toppling as cover. No chase because it's over in seconds. And the compass points to the alcove because it's a decoy—gears set to align just right, making it look like it's detecting a rift. Draws him in like a moth." Eva blinked, processing. "So the supernatural angle... it's misdirection. To scare off cops like you." Quinn met her gaze, a ghost of a smile cracking her sharp features. "Or to explain the unexplained. Like Morris." The name hung between them, unspoken grief flickering in Quinn's brown eyes. Three years, and the case still gnawed at her—unexplained circumstances, whispers of shadows. But this? This was human greed, cloaked in myth. She snapped the compass shut, pocketing it for evidence. "Call forensics. Tell them to bring luminol and a mechanic's kit—not the occult squad. And Eva? Next time you consult, bring your history books. Might find more cons than curses in the archives." Eva nodded, a reluctant grin tugging at her lips as she pulled out her phone. The hum in the air seemed fainter now, the Market's secrets peeling back like old wallpaper. Quinn stood sentinel over the scene, her watch ticking onward. In the shadows of London's veins, the truth always surfaced—grimy, mechanical, and utterly mundane. But as she glanced at the alcove one last time, a chill prickled her skin. The door had swung wider, just a fraction. Or had it? She shook it off, focusing on the evidence. Deduction was her anchor; the rest could wait for another night. The platform lights flickered—or was that her flashlight? No matter. She had a killer to catch, one gear at a time.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1803
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"gently"
2"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1803
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"unraveling"
count1
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"gloom"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count2
4
word"aftermath"
count1
5
word"lilt"
count1
6
word"quivered"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"gleaming"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
11
word"mechanical"
count3
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"flicked"
count1
14
word"unspoken"
count1
15
word"sentinel"
count1
16
word"chill"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"unraveling"
1"etched"
2"gloom"
3"echoed"
4"aftermath"
5"lilt"
6"quivered"
7"silence"
8"scanning"
9"gleaming"
10"echoing"
11"mechanical"
12"raced"
13"flicked"
14"unspoken"
15"sentinel"
16"chill"
17"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
83.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences97
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1770
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
96.78% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1597
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.06
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn17
Tube1
Camden2
Veil2
Market5
Metropolitan1
Police1
London2
Kowalski1
Aurora1
British1
Museum1
Ancient1
History1
Oxford2
Shade3
Elias1
Thorne3
Eva12
Morris1
Compass1
Blitz1
Body1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Camden"
3"Market"
4"Kowalski"
5"Aurora"
6"Museum"
7"Elias"
8"Thorne"
9"Eva"
10"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"British"
2"Ancient"
3"Oxford"
4"Body"
globalScore0.968
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like animal bones carved with rune"
1"seemed absurdly mundane amid the arcane clutter, lay the crime scene"
2"sigils that seemed to shift under her light"
3"looked like enchanted baubles. she said,"
4"seemed fainter now, the Market's secrets peeling back like old wallpaper"
87.01% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.13
wordCount1770
matches
0"not spinning wildly as she'd half-expected, but pointing resolutely toward a shadowed alcove twenty feet awa"
1"not blood, but oil"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"was that her"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs25
mean70.8
std37.28
cv0.527
sampleLengths
0135
199
2117
3116
435
5127
671
791
881
9121
1095
1114
1273
1358
1426
1553
1656
179
1887
1974
2015
2154
2242
23100
2421
90.79% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences97
matches
0"are lined"
1"was splintered"
2"been kicked"
3"were reinforced"
4"was sewn"
5"is riddled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs290
matches
0"was buzzing were prepping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences98
ratio0.224
matches
0"The air grew thick and stale, laced with the metallic tang of old rails and something sharper—decay, perhaps, or the faint ozone of illicit magic that she'd learned to distrust over the years."
1"She'd heard whispers of it in the backrooms of the Metropolitan Police— a supernatural black market that slithered through London's underbelly, peddling enchanted trinkets and banned alchemies."
2"Eva Kowalski knelt by the body, her curly red hair spilling over her shoulders as she adjusted her round glasses and tucked a strand behind her left ear—a nervous tic Quinn had noticed the first time they'd crossed paths six months ago."
3"But it was the wounds that caught her—three precise slashes across his back, deep enough to sever spine and ribs, yet eerily clean, as if made by a blade that hungered for flesh."
4"Attuned to supernatural rifts—points to portals, ley lines, that sort of thing."
5"Quinn crouched beside the body, her gloved fingers hovering over the compass without touching it. The needle quivered, not spinning wildly as she'd half-expected, but pointing resolutely toward a shadowed alcove twenty feet away—an alcove empty save for a toppled crate of what looked like enchanted baubles. \"Cause of death's obvious,\" she said, her voice clipped, military-honed. \"Exsanguination from those cuts."
6"But look at the edges—no tearing, no hesitation marks."
7"The Market was buzzing an hour ago—full moon's tomorrow, so vendors were prepping to relocate."
8"Could be a Shade attack—ethereal blades, phasing through defenses."
9"Quinn's jaw tightened. Shades. Ethereal predators from the shadows, or so the occult lore went. Eva's world, full of rifts and sigils, where her lost partner DS Morris had vanished three years ago in a haze of the unexplained. Quinn had chased leads ever since, piecing together fragments of the supernatural she refused to fully embrace. But this felt too pat, too convenient. She straightened, scanning the platform with the precision of a hawk. The stalls nearest the body were undisturbed—jars of iridescent powder intact, a rack of bone tokens gleaming untouched. If there'd been a struggle, why no toppled merchandise? And the air... that hum. It wasn't fear or magic; it was machinery, faint but persistent, like a distant train."
10"\"Interference,\" Quinn echoed, her tone skeptical. She stepped toward the alcove, flashlight beam cutting through the gloom. The crate there was splintered, but not from violence—more like it had been kicked aside. Behind it, partially concealed by a tattered curtain, a rusted service door hung ajar. No sigils, no glow of a portal. Just cold steel, and beyond it, the drip of water echoing from forgotten tunnels. She pushed the curtain aside, revealing a narrow corridor lined with exposed pipes. Her light caught something: a faint smear on the doorframe, not blood, but oil—mechanical, slick."
11"\"It's not a rift.\" Quinn cut her off, kneeling to examine the smear. She sniffed it—diesel, faint but unmistakable. Her mind raced, cataloging discrepancies. The victim's coat: expensive tweed, but the pockets inside were reinforced, like for smuggling. No wallet in the traditional sense; it was sewn into the lining, as if he expected a frisk. And the compass—its needle hadn't budged when she'd approached. It was fixed, mechanical perhaps, disguised as arcane."
12"If it was a Shade, ethereal or not, you'd expect phasing—entry and exit wounds mismatched."
13"The Market's warded—bone tokens don't just let muggers waltz in.\""
14"Quinn's eyes flicked to the compass. She pried it gently from the victim's hand, turning it over. The back plate was loose, not soldered. With a thumbnail, she popped it open. Inside, no arcane needle mechanism, but gears—tiny, precise, oiled. A fake. A prop, maybe, to sell to gullible buyers chasing supernatural highs."
15"\"It's a con,\" Quinn said, the pieces snapping together like a lock yielding to a pick. \"Thorne wasn't a victim; he was the mark."
16"The Market's a front for it—enchanted goods my ass."
17"Camden's underbelly is riddled with them—abandoned since the Blitz."
18"And the compass points to the alcove because it's a decoy—gears set to align just right, making it look like it's detecting a rift."
19"Tell them to bring luminol and a mechanic's kit—not the occult squad."
20"Eva nodded, a reluctant grin tugging at her lips as she pulled out her phone. The hum in the air seemed fainter now, the Market's secrets peeling back like old wallpaper. Quinn stood sentinel over the scene, her watch ticking onward. In the shadows of London's veins, the truth always surfaced—grimy, mechanical, and utterly mundane. But as she glanced at the alcove one last time, a chill prickled her skin. The door had swung wider, just a fraction. Or had it? She shook it off, focusing on the evidence. Deduction was her anchor; the rest could wait for another night."
21"The platform lights flickered—or was that her flashlight? No matter. She had a killer to catch, one gear at a time."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1128
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.026595744680851064
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.010638297872340425
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean18.06
std20.06
cv1.11
sampleLengths
037
133
219
331
42
513
63
727
818
926
105
1114
124
132
1427
1545
1622
1723
1842
1921
2025
2117
2211
2313
2411
2511
2615
2722
2814
2933
3012
3131
327
3318
3412
3510
366
376
3812
3961
409
417
423
435
446
4513
4615
4712
485
4912
78.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.47959183673469385
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners47
37.04% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"Just the crate toppling as"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences90
matches
0"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
1"She'd heard whispers of it"
2"It moved every full moon,"
3"Hers had come from a"
4"Her boots echoed on the"
5"She'd been Aurora's childhood friend,"
6"Her voice carried that soft"
7"She rose slowly, brushing dust"
8"He must've been a vendor"
9"it's all pooled under him."
10"She paced now, her bearing"
11"She snapped the compass shut,"
ratio0.133
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences90
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn descended the"
1"The air grew thick and"
2"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
3"This felt off from the"
4"The Veil Market."
5"She'd heard whispers of it"
6"It moved every full moon,"
7"Hers had come from a"
8"This wasn't their beat."
9"Her boots echoed on the"
10"The air hummed faintly, a"
11"Eva Kowalski knelt by the"
12"Eva, 26 and freckled like"
13"She'd been Aurora's childhood friend,"
14"A master's in Ancient History"
15"Eva said without looking up,"
16"Her voice carried that soft"
17"Quinn ducked under the tape,"
18"The victim was a man"
19"Blood pooled beneath him, dark"
ratio0.622
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences90
matches
0"Now, a body down here."
1"If it's pointing there, that"
2"If it was a Shade,"
3"To scare off cops like"
ratio0.044
29.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"At 41, with eighteen years of decorated service etched into her sharp jaw and military bearing, she moved with the precision of a woman who'd stared down worse …"
1"She'd heard whispers of it in the backrooms of the Metropolitan Police— a supernatural black market that slithered through London's underbelly, peddling enchant…"
2"Makeshift stalls of weathered wood and canvas slumped against the platform's edge, their wares scattered like the aftermath of a frantic evacuation: vials of sh…"
3"The air hummed faintly, a vibration she felt in her teeth, as if the place itself were alive and resentful of intrusion."
4"And strangest of all, clutched in his right fist: a small brass compass, its casing patinaed with verdigris, the face etched with protective sigils that seemed …"
5"Quinn's eyes flicked to the compass. She pried it gently from the victim's hand, turning it over. The back plate was loose, not soldered. With a thumbnail, she …"
6"Eva nodded, a reluctant grin tugging at her lips as she pulled out her phone. The hum in the air seemed fainter now, the Market's secrets peeling back like old …"
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn echoed, her tone skeptical"
1"Quinn cut, kneeling to examine the smear"
83.33% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva murmured (murmur)"
1"She snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.133
81.7939%