Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8BP3H2QED43EBPVDK9P54

Run Details

Duration:
29.7s
Cost:
$0.001876
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant, its deep crimson gem pulsing like a heartbeat against her palm. The air in the Fae Grove had thickened, carrying the scent of wildflowers that shouldn't bloom in November—honeysuckle and night-blooming jasmine twisting with something sharper, like fermented plums. Isolde had led them here, her silver hair swaying like liquid moonlight as she wove between the ancient oak standing stones that marked the grove's boundary. Nyx drifted beside Aurora, their shadowy form flickering between solid silhouette and wispy tendrils, violet eyes glowing faintly in the dim light. "This is the threshold," Isolde murmured, her pale lavender eyes distant, as if peering through veils no one else could see. She didn't turn, her bare feet leaving no imprint on the mossy earth. "The Veil thins here, like silk stretched too far. But hunger pulls from the other side. Beware the feast that never ends." Aurora glanced at Nyx, who shrugged—a fluid ripple in their shadow-form that passed for nonchalance. "Hel's not kind to first-timers," Nyx whispered, their voice a breeze rustling leaves. "But the pendant will guide us. Or trap us. Shades don't get invited often." Rory swallowed, her throat dry despite the humid air. She'd fled Cardiff for London to escape Evan, not to chase riddles into hellish realms. But Eva's disappearance—whispered ties to some underground deal with demons—had dragged her here. The pendant had arrived in her delivery bag two weeks ago, anonymous, warm against her skin ever since. Isolde's visions pointed to Dymas, the gluttonous pit of Hel, where souls bargained for excess and lost more than they gained. Isolde raised a hand, tracing an invisible arc between the oaks. The air shimmered, a faint distortion like heat haze over summer pavement, but colder. The Veil. Aurora's scar on her left wrist itched, an old reminder of a swing-set fall, as if the boundary itself stirred her blood. The Heartstone warmed further, its glow seeping through her clenched fist. "Step through," Isolde said, her words curling like smoke. "Or stay and starve for truths unspoken." Rory nodded, steeling herself. Nyx solidified, their tall frame—six-foot-two of inky blackness—brushing her shoulder in silent solidarity. Isolde glided first, vanishing into the shimmer without a ripple. Aurora followed, Nyx at her heels. The crossing hit like plunging into warm honey. Aurora's skin tingled, every nerve alight as the world inverted. Pressure built in her ears, then released with a soft pop. The grove's wildflowers blurred into streaks of color, the oaks twisting into impossible spirals. For a heartbeat, she floated in nothingness—weightless, breathless—before solidity rushed back. She stumbled onto soft earth, knees buckling. The air was thick, laced with spices and roasting meats, so rich it coated her tongue. No London chill here; warmth enveloped her like a fever dream. She straightened, blinking against the amber sky overhead—not blue, but a perpetual sunset glow, streaked with veins of gold like fat marbled through flesh. "Where..." Aurora trailed off, her voice echoing strangely, muffled yet amplified. Nyx materialized fully beside her, scanning the horizon. "Dymas. Welcome to gluttony’s belly." The landscape unfolded in alien splendor. They stood on a gentle hill overlooking sprawling vineyards that stretched to hazy horizons, vines heavy with clusters of grapes the size of fists—deep purple, shimmering as if dusted with sugar. Orchards dotted the valleys, trees laden with fruits she'd never seen: orbs of crimson that pulsed faintly, like the Heartstone; golden pears veined with sapphire; apples that hummed a low, inviting tune when the breeze stirred them. Pathways of crushed petal-stone wound between, flanked by gardens where vegetables grew in riotous excess—carrots as thick as her arm, cabbages unfurling like roses. But it was the scents that assaulted her first. Sweetness cloyed the air, mingling with savory undertones: caramelized onions, smoked herbs, the tang of citrus bursting under invisible flames. Aurora's stomach growled unbidden, a betrayal after skipping breakfast to make this trek. Isolde paused ahead, her ethereal form silhouetted against a distant pavilion. "The land feeds on desire," she said, her tone a riddle wrapped in silk. "What you crave will find you, but never sate." Unease prickled Aurora's skin. The warmth from the pendant spread up her arm, comforting yet insistent, urging her forward. She slipped it back under her shirt, the chain cool against her collarbone. Nyx's violet eyes narrowed, shadows coiling tighter around their edges. "Souls here are bound. Chefs, mostly—mortals who sold their talents for eternity in the kitchens. Listen." Aurora tilted her head. Beneath the rustle of leaves and distant laughter, a cacophony emerged: clanging pots from hidden cookhouses, the sizzle of fat on open grills, voices raised in harmonious chants—perhaps recipes, or pleas. Closer, the ground thrummed faintly, like a heartbeat syncing with her own. They descended the hill, feet sinking into loamy soil that smelled of fresh-turned earth and overripe berries. Aurora's boots left deep prints, unlike Isolde's silent passage. As they entered the vineyard, the vines seemed to lean toward them, tendrils quivering. One brushed her hand; its skin was velvety, warm, and she jerked back, heart pounding. "Alive," Nyx murmured, their whisper carrying a note of wonder. They reached out, incorporeal fingers passing through a grape without disturbing it. "Everything here hungers too." Discovery came swiftly. At the vineyard's edge, a stone archway loomed, carved with writhing figures—humans and beasts locked in eternal banquets, mouths agape. Beyond lay a grand plaza, where long tables groaned under feasts. Helbound souls moved among them: translucent figures in aprons, faces flushed with perpetual exertion. One, a burly man with a chef's toque tilted jauntily, stirred a cauldron bubbling with iridescent stew. The aroma hit Aurora like a wave—nutmeg, saffron, something metallic like blood. "New guests?" the chef called, his voice booming yet jovial. His eyes gleamed with unnatural hunger, pupils dilated. "Prince Belphegor welcomes all to sample the vine's kiss!" Aurora hesitated, but Isolde glided forward. "We seek no plate, only passage," she replied, words dancing around truth. "The shadows whisper of a stolen light." The chef chuckled, ladling stew into bowls for spectral diners who shoveled it in without pause. "All seek something here. Eat, and the way reveals itself." Nyx pulled Aurora aside, their form flickering. "Don't. Gluttony binds through indulgence. One bite, and you're theirs." The warning twisted in her gut, mingling with the saliva pooling in her mouth. Her scar burned now, a sharp reminder of pains endured. She shook her head, forcing her gaze away. "We keep moving." Deeper they pressed, past the plaza into the orchards. The amber sky deepened, casting long shadows that writhed like Nyx's form. Fruits dangled temptingly, some splitting open to reveal glistening cores—juices dripping like liquid gold. Aurora plucked a low-hanging pear, more curiosity than intent. It was cool in her hand, heavier than it looked. When she bit in, sweetness exploded—honeyed, with undertones of vanilla and smoke. For a moment, wonder overtook her; the flavor bloomed on her tongue, evoking childhood summers she'd never had, warmth spreading through her limbs. Nyx snatched it away before she could take another. "Foolish," they hissed, but their eyes held no anger, only concern. The bitten fruit withered in their shadowy grasp, skin cracking like parched earth. Aurora wiped her mouth, a flush creeping up her neck. "It was... incredible. But wrong." Isolde nodded, her silver hair catching the light like spun glass. "Taste the lie, and the truth hungers back. The heart's stone points true—follow its warmth." The pendant throbbed now, a steady pulse drawing Aurora eastward, toward a cluster of low buildings wreathed in steam. Unease grew as they approached; the air hummed with activity, but the souls here moved with frantic energy. Laughter rang out—too loud, edged with desperation. One woman, her form flickering like a faulty bulb, kneaded dough on a marble slab, muttering recipes under her breath: "Add the soul of regret, a pinch of forgotten dreams..." "Why do they stay?" Aurora whispered, voice tight. Nyx's presence beside her felt like a shield, their incorporeal chill balancing the realm's heat. "Contracts," Nyx replied, voice a low wind. "They traded skills for immortality in service. Belphegor's chefs, crafting banquets for demons and the damned. But excess devours." A grand feast unfolded in the central pavilion ahead, tables stretching endlessly under canopies of woven vines. Demons lounged there—horned figures with bellies distended, tearing into roasts that reformed as they ate. Music swelled: lutes and flutes weaving melodies that tugged at Aurora's resolve, promising forgetfulness. She gripped the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt—Isolde's gift, its moonsilver cold even through leather. It hummed faintly, a counterpoint to the chaos. Wonder resurfaced amid the opulence. Fireflies—or were they motes of hellfire?—danced above the tables, illuminating platters of delicacies: pastries flaking with edible gold, fruits sculpted into likenesses of lovers entwined. One soul presented a pie, steam rising in shapes of forgotten faces. Aurora's mouth watered again, but she pushed it down, focusing on the pendant's pull. Deeper still, beyond the pavilions, the landscape shifted. The orchards gave way to terraced gardens, where exotic blooms unfurled petals wide as platters, releasing perfumes that made her head spin. A stream wound through, its waters sparkling like champagne, bubbling with tiny fish that nipped at the surface. Isolde knelt by the bank, trailing fingers that left no ripples. "Time bends here, as in my grove," she said softly. "An hour's sip, and days flee the world above." Nyx paused, their form solidifying to peer into the water. "Rifts in the Veil echo through. This stream... it connects to Earth. Eva might have crossed here." Aurora's pulse quickened. Her friend—gone after a shady deal, whispers of a Fae artifact traded to Hel. The pendant warmed insistently, leading to a shadowed alcove where an ancient tree loomed, its trunk gnarled like a gorged stomach. Roots delved into the earth, pulsing with the same rhythm as the gem. Unease crested as they neared. Whispers emanated from the tree—souls trapped within, their voices a chorus of cravings: "More... always more..." The air grew heavier, pressing on Aurora's chest. Nyx's shadows recoiled, violet eyes flaring. "A ward. Old magic." Isolde's lavender gaze sharpened. "Draw the blade, child of earth. Cut the thread of want." Aurora unsheathed the Fae-Forged Blade, its leaf-shaped edge gleaming coldly, luminescent even in the amber light. It sliced through the air with a shiver, parting invisible threads around the tree. The whispers screeched, then silenced. The trunk split, revealing a hollow containing a faint shimmer—a tear in the Veil, small as a doorway, leading to... London fog? Eva's face flashed in Aurora's mind, a vision or hope. Wonder bloomed anew. This place, for all its excess, held keys to realms intertwined. But the cost gnawed at her—the souls' fates, the pull of indulgence that could ensnare them all. "We've found the rift," Nyx said, voice hushed with rare awe. "But closing it—or using it— that's the feast's true price." Aurora sheathed the blade, the pendant cooling against her skin. The amber sky pulsed overhead, indifferent. They had entered Dymas as strangers; emerging whole would demand more than they'd bargained for.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
85.71% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"woman her form flickering like [like]"
1"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.457
leniency0.914
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.114
94.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1896
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"coldly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"coldly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1896
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"silk"
count2
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count2
4
word"unspoken"
count1
5
word"chill"
count2
6
word"warmth"
count4
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count2
10
word"stomach"
count2
11
word"desire"
count1
12
word"comforting"
count1
13
word"cacophony"
count1
14
word"pounding"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count2
16
word"loomed"
count2
17
word"dancing"
count1
18
word"spectral"
count1
19
word"glistening"
count1
20
word"throbbed"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count2
22
word"marble"
count1
23
word"resolve"
count1
24
word"echo"
count1
25
word"quickened"
count1
26
word"delved"
count1
27
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"tracing"
2"shimmered"
3"reminder"
4"unspoken"
5"chill"
6"warmth"
7"echoing"
8"scanning"
9"pulsed"
10"stomach"
11"desire"
12"comforting"
13"cacophony"
14"pounding"
15"whisper"
16"loomed"
17"dancing"
18"spectral"
19"glistening"
20"throbbed"
21"pulse"
22"marble"
23"resolve"
24"echo"
25"quickened"
26"delved"
27"gleaming"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences126
filterMatches
0"wonder"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1858
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
71.14% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions90
wordCount1585
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.58
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Fae4
Grove1
November1
Aurora25
Nyx16
Rory2
Cardiff1
London3
Evan1
Eva2
Dymas2
Hel2
Veil2
Unease3
Isolde13
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
One4
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Aurora"
3"Nyx"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Eva"
7"Unease"
8"Isolde"
9"One"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"November"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Dymas"
6"Hel"
7"Veil"
globalScore0.711
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if peering through veils no one else could see"
1"felt like a shield, their incorporeal c"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.538
wordCount1858
matches
0"not blue, but a perpetual sunset glow, streaked with veins of gold like fa"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean44.24
std23.8
cv0.538
sampleLengths
098
156
242
376
460
516
633
754
858
911
1013
1198
1242
1334
1458
1547
1655
1726
1877
1927
2025
2126
2217
2335
2489
2533
2615
2726
2874
2923
3026
3172
3256
3378
3427
3551
3639
3715
3867
3931
4021
4131
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs304
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences146
ratio0.185
matches
0"The air in the Fae Grove had thickened, carrying the scent of wildflowers that shouldn't bloom in November—honeysuckle and night-blooming jasmine twisting with something sharper, like fermented plums."
1"Aurora glanced at Nyx, who shrugged—a fluid ripple in their shadow-form that passed for nonchalance."
2"But Eva's disappearance—whispered ties to some underground deal with demons—had dragged her here."
3"Nyx solidified, their tall frame—six-foot-two of inky blackness—brushing her shoulder in silent solidarity."
4"For a heartbeat, she floated in nothingness—weightless, breathless—before solidity rushed back."
5"No London chill here; warmth enveloped her like a fever dream."
6"She straightened, blinking against the amber sky overhead—not blue, but a perpetual sunset glow, streaked with veins of gold like fat marbled through flesh."
7"They stood on a gentle hill overlooking sprawling vineyards that stretched to hazy horizons, vines heavy with clusters of grapes the size of fists—deep purple, shimmering as if dusted with sugar."
8"Orchards dotted the valleys, trees laden with fruits she'd never seen: orbs of crimson that pulsed faintly, like the Heartstone; golden pears veined with sapphire; apples that hummed a low, inviting tune when the breeze stirred them."
9"Pathways of crushed petal-stone wound between, flanked by gardens where vegetables grew in riotous excess—carrots as thick as her arm, cabbages unfurling like roses."
10"Beneath the rustle of leaves and distant laughter, a cacophony emerged: clanging pots from hidden cookhouses, the sizzle of fat on open grills, voices raised in harmonious chants—perhaps recipes, or pleas."
11"One brushed her hand; its skin was velvety, warm, and she jerked back, heart pounding."
12"At the vineyard's edge, a stone archway loomed, carved with writhing figures—humans and beasts locked in eternal banquets, mouths agape."
13"The aroma hit Aurora like a wave—nutmeg, saffron, something metallic like blood."
14"Fruits dangled temptingly, some splitting open to reveal glistening cores—juices dripping like liquid gold."
15"When she bit in, sweetness exploded—honeyed, with undertones of vanilla and smoke."
16"For a moment, wonder overtook her; the flavor bloomed on her tongue, evoking childhood summers she'd never had, warmth spreading through her limbs."
17"Unease grew as they approached; the air hummed with activity, but the souls here moved with frantic energy."
18"Laughter rang out—too loud, edged with desperation."
19"Demons lounged there—horned figures with bellies distended, tearing into roasts that reformed as they ate."
20"She gripped the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt—Isolde's gift, its moonsilver cold even through leather."
21"Fireflies—or were they motes of hellfire?—danced above the tables, illuminating platters of delicacies: pastries flaking with edible gold, fruits sculpted into likenesses of lovers entwined."
22"Her friend—gone after a shady deal, whispers of a Fae artifact traded to Hel."
23"Whispers emanated from the tree—souls trapped within, their voices a chorus of cravings: \"More... always more...\" The air grew heavier, pressing on Aurora's chest."
24"The trunk split, revealing a hollow containing a faint shimmer—a tear in the Veil, small as a doorway, leading to..."
25"But the cost gnawed at her—the souls' fates, the pull of indulgence that could ensnare them all."
26"They had entered Dymas as strangers; emerging whole would demand more than they'd bargained for."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1592
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"anonymous, warm against her"
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.02512562814070352
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.009422110552763818
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean12.73
std6.42
cv0.505
sampleLengths
022
128
226
322
421
513
622
715
813
914
109
1115
1213
1318
1421
1511
1614
172
1822
1911
209
217
224
2313
2410
256
268
2710
2811
2914
3011
317
3216
3311
3424
3511
368
375
386
3931
4037
4124
429
4320
4413
4511
4614
479
484
4915
68.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.4246575342465753
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners62
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences124
matches
0"She didn't turn, her bare"
1"She'd fled Cardiff for London"
2"She stumbled onto soft earth,"
3"She straightened, blinking against the"
4"They stood on a gentle"
5"she said, her tone a"
6"She slipped it back under"
7"They descended the hill, feet"
8"They reached out, incorporeal fingers"
9"His eyes gleamed with unnatural"
10"she replied, words dancing around"
11"Her scar burned now, a"
12"She shook her head, forcing"
13"It was cool in her"
14"they hissed, but their eyes"
15"She gripped the hilt of"
16"It hummed faintly, a counterpoint"
17"she said softly"
18"Her friend—gone after a shady"
19"It sliced through the air"
ratio0.169
36.61% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences124
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The air in the Fae"
2"Isolde had led them here,"
3"Nyx drifted beside Aurora, their"
4"Isolde murmured, her pale lavender"
5"She didn't turn, her bare"
6"Aurora glanced at Nyx, who"
7"Nyx whispered, their voice a"
8"Rory swallowed, her throat dry"
9"She'd fled Cardiff for London"
10"The pendant had arrived in"
11"Isolde's visions pointed to Dymas,"
12"Isolde raised a hand, tracing"
13"The air shimmered, a faint"
14"Aurora's scar on her left"
15"The Heartstone warmed further, its"
16"Isolde said, her words curling"
17"Rory nodded, steeling herself."
18"Nyx solidified, their tall frame—six—foot—two"
19"Isolde glided first, vanishing into"
ratio0.847
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences124
matches(empty)
ratio0
34.36% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The air in the Fae Grove had thickened, carrying the scent of wildflowers that shouldn't bloom in November—honeysuckle and night-blooming jasmine twisting with …"
1"Isolde had led them here, her silver hair swaying like liquid moonlight as she wove between the ancient oak standing stones that marked the grove's boundary."
2"Aurora glanced at Nyx, who shrugged—a fluid ripple in their shadow-form that passed for nonchalance."
3"Aurora's scar on her left wrist itched, an old reminder of a swing-set fall, as if the boundary itself stirred her blood."
4"They stood on a gentle hill overlooking sprawling vineyards that stretched to hazy horizons, vines heavy with clusters of grapes the size of fists—deep purple, …"
5"Orchards dotted the valleys, trees laden with fruits she'd never seen: orbs of crimson that pulsed faintly, like the Heartstone; golden pears veined with sapphi…"
6"They descended the hill, feet sinking into loamy soil that smelled of fresh-turned earth and overripe berries."
7"The warning twisted in her gut, mingling with the saliva pooling in her mouth."
8"For a moment, wonder overtook her; the flavor bloomed on her tongue, evoking childhood summers she'd never had, warmth spreading through her limbs."
9"Music swelled: lutes and flutes weaving melodies that tugged at Aurora's resolve, promising forgetfulness."
10"The orchards gave way to terraced gardens, where exotic blooms unfurled petals wide as platters, releasing perfumes that made her head spin."
11"A stream wound through, its waters sparkling like champagne, bubbling with tiny fish that nipped at the surface."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"Nyx whispered, their voice a breeze rustling leaves"
1"Aurora trailed, her voice echoing strangely, muffled yet amplified"
2"she said, her tone a riddle wrapped in silk"
3"Nyx murmured, their whisper carrying a note of wonder"
4"the chef called, his voice booming yet jovial"
5"they hissed, but their eyes held no anger, only concern"
6"Aurora whispered, voice tight"
7"Whispers emanated, their voices a chorus of cravings:"
8"the cost gnawed, the pull of indulgence that could ensnare them all"
9"Nyx said, voice hushed with rare awe"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
3"they hissed (hiss)"
4"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.343
leniency0.686
rawRatio0.417
effectiveRatio0.286
71.9464%