Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8DXM5J0KF236NTN86T5BR

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Duration:
20.4s
Cost:
$0.000317
Provider:
DeepInfra

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain tasted of iron. Not a sharp, metallic tang, but a deeper, older bitterness, coating the back of my throat with each ragged breath. It wasn’t the rain itself, not exactly. It was the *feeling* of it – insistent, cold, as if the very air was trying to drag me under. I pulled my collar higher, the worn wool doing little to ward off the damp that already seemed to seep into my bones. Richmond Park was…wrong. Not frightening in the conventional sense – no snarling wolves, no obvious monsters lurking in the shadows – but fundamentally, unsettlingly out of sync. The ancient oaks lining the perimeter stood unnervingly still, their branches skeletal against the bruised purple sky. The rain hammered against them, a relentless, rhythmic drumming that seemed to pulse with a faint, internal rhythm of its own. I’d been tracing a lead, a whisper passed down through the London occult circles – a rumour of a place called Isolde’s Grove, a pocket between worlds. The Heartstone Pendant, a damnably warm weight against my wrist, had been encouraging me, pulsing with a low, insistent thrum that intensified the closer I got to…this. My benefactor, a collector named Silas Thorne, had been frustratingly vague about its origin, only stating it was “a key,” and that the Grove held something he desperately needed to retrieve. Thorne wasn’t known for subtlety, so this secrecy felt… deliberate. *Suspicious.* I was here to retrieve it, of course. The contract was clear: locate the pendant, secure it, and deliver it to Thorne. Simple. Except nothing about this felt simple. The standing stones at the Grove’s boundary – a circle of weathered oak, blackened by centuries of rain – weren't the inviting sight I’d expected. They weren’t old; they *felt* old, burdened with a weight that went beyond their physical age. The wildflowers blooming amongst their roots, usually a vibrant splash of colour, were muted, almost grey, their petals drooping as if exhausted. As I passed through the circle, the rain shifted, the drumming intensifying into a low, subsonic drone that vibrated through my teeth. The air thickened, pressing against my chest, making it difficult to breathe. The familiar scent of damp earth and pine needles faded, replaced by something colder, sharper – ozone, and something else… something vaguely floral, but tainted, like lilies rotting in a tomb. I’d been walking for what felt like an hour, pushing through the deepening gloom, guided only by the increasing resonance of the Heartstone. It was beating faster now, a frantic, insistent pulse against my skin. The trees seemed to closer, the shadows deeper. It wasn't that the Grove was shrinking; it was that my perception of space was…shifting. Time felt warped, elastic. A glance forward would reveal a dense thicket of thorns that hadn't been there moments before; a distant bird call would echo with an unnerving delay. This wasn’t just a pocket dimension; it was actively resisting my attempts to navigate it. A sound. A distinct, irregular snap of a twig. Not the natural breaking of wood in the wind, but a deliberate, forceful break – as if something had stepped through the undergrowth. I froze, every nerve screaming. Silence. Thick, suffocating silence, punctuated only by the relentless drumming of the rain. I raised my hand, instinctively reaching for the small, silver blade strapped to my thigh, but resisted. Thorne had specifically instructed me not to engage unless provoked. ‘Observation, not confrontation,’ he’d said, his voice a rasping whisper. ‘The Grove guards its secrets closely. Force will only invite unwelcome attention.’ Then, a flicker. A movement at the periphery of my vision. A fleeting glimpse of something dark and elongated slipping between the trunks of the trees. It was gone before I could focus, leaving only a deeper patch of shadow in its wake. My heart hammered against my ribs, a frantic bird trapped in a cage. I scanned the area, my eyes straining in the gloom, but saw nothing. Just trees, rain, and the unsettling feeling of being watched. Another sound. This time, it wasn't a snap. It was a murmur, a low, sibilant whisper carried on the rain. I couldn't make out the words, but the tone… it was ancient, weary, and laced with a profound sadness. It seemed to emanate from everywhere and nowhere at once, weaving its way into my mind, a cold tendril of unease. I backed away slowly, carefully, my hand still hovering near my blade. The Heartstone was now a searing brand against my wrist, its thrum escalating to a near-painful intensity. I reached a small clearing – a brief respite from the dense undergrowth, dominated by a sprawling, gnarled hawthorn tree. Its branches, laden with thorny, blackened fruit, twisted upwards like grasping claws. Beneath the tree, the ground was strangely bare, the wildflowers completely absent. The Heartstone pulsed violently, pulling me towards the center of the clearing. As I stepped into the open, I saw it – a circle of stones, smaller than the boundary stones, arranged in a perfect, unsettling symmetry. And in the center of the circle, a single, crimson bloom. A single, perfect rose, its petals shimmering with an impossible, internal light. As I reached for the rose, a voice, devoid of warmth and completely alien, echoed through the Grove. It wasn't spoken aloud, but formed directly within my mind, a cold, precise articulation of intent. *“You should not be here.”* The rain intensified, swirling around me in a dizzying vortex. I looked up, scanning the trees, but saw nothing. Just the oppressive darkness and the relentless drumming of the rain. Then, I noticed the movement again. Not a flicker this time, but a deliberate, fluid step, emerging from the shadows beneath the hawthorn. A figure. Tall and slender, cloaked in shadow, its features obscured by a wide-brimmed hat. It didn’t move with a walk, but with a glide, as if it were floating just above the ground. The air around it shimmered with a faint, iridescent haze. And as it stepped fully into the clearing, I recognized the cut of its cloak – Thorne's insignia. A stylized serpent coiled around a stone heart. “Impressive,” Thorne said, his voice a dry, rustling whisper that sent a shiver down my spine. “You’ve found your way. Most don’t even make it beyond the boundary.” He took a step closer, and I saw, for the first time, his face. It wasn’t the weathered, volatile visage I’d expected. It was young, almost unnervingly so, with eyes that burned with an unsettling intensity. His lips were painted a deep crimson, mirroring the colour of the rose. And in his hand, he held a small, silver box. “The pendant,” he continued, his voice dripping with a chilling detachment. “A rather…inefficient key. I’ve upgraded.” He opened the box, revealing not the Heartstone, but a replica – meticulously crafted from obsidian, pulsing with a faint, internal glow. "I need your replacement, Aurora." Before I could react, a shadow fell over me, not from Thorne, but from behind. I turned, and saw the figure from before – no longer hidden in the shadows, but standing directly behind the hawthorn tree. A young woman, impossibly pale, with eyes the colour of the rain-washed grey wildflowers – and a smile that didn't reach them. She held a curved blade, its silver surface reflecting the eerie glow of the rose. "He doesn't realize," she whispered, her voice like the rustle of dead leaves. "That the Grove isn't guarding a secret. It's feeding on them." Her grip tightened on the blade, and the rain seemed to coalesce around her, forming a swirling, protective shield. "And he's about to become its next meal." The pulsing of the Heartstone on my wrist became a searing, agonizing pain. The obsidian replica in Thorne's hand flared with a blinding light. And then, a low, guttural growl echoed through the Grove, rising from the earth itself – a sound that promised nothing but oblivion.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Force will only [only]"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
81.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1319
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count2
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"carefully"
3"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1319
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"rhythmic"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count4
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"vibrated"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count2
8
word"resonance"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"navigate"
count1
11
word"silence"
count2
12
word"flicker"
count2
13
word"fleeting"
count1
14
word"scanned"
count1
15
word"profound"
count1
16
word"searing"
count2
17
word"intensity"
count2
18
word"pulsed"
count1
19
word"perfect"
count2
20
word"warmth"
count1
21
word"echoed"
count2
22
word"scanning"
count1
23
word"oppressive"
count1
24
word"shimmered"
count1
25
word"down my spine"
count1
26
word"chilling"
count1
highlights
0"rhythmic"
1"pulse"
2"tracing"
3"whisper"
4"weight"
5"vibrated"
6"familiar"
7"gloom"
8"resonance"
9"echo"
10"navigate"
11"silence"
12"flicker"
13"fleeting"
14"scanned"
15"profound"
16"searing"
17"intensity"
18"pulsed"
19"perfect"
20"warmth"
21"echoed"
22"scanning"
23"oppressive"
24"shimmered"
25"down my spine"
26"chilling"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences93
matches(empty)
66.05% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences93
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords8
totalWords1331
ratio0.006
matches
0"feeling"
1"Suspicious."
2"felt"
3"“You should not be here.”"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1260
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.63
worstName"Thorne"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Park1
London1
Isolde1
Grove6
Heartstone6
Pendant1
Silas1
Thorne8
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Pendant"
2"Silas"
3"Thorne"
places
0"Park"
1"London"
2"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
88.27% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"drumming that seemed to pulse with a faint, internal rhythm of its own"
1"felt like an hour, pushing through the"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords3.757
wordCount1331
matches
0"Not a sharp, metallic tang, but a deeper, older bitterness, coating the back of my throat wi"
1"Not the natural breaking of wood in the wind, but a deliberate, forceful break"
2"Not a flicker this time, but a deliberate, fluid step, emerging from the shadows beneath"
3"not the Heartstone, but a replica"
4"not from Thorne, but from behind"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"was that my"
30.60% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs14
mean95.07
std24.44
cv0.257
sampleLengths
0140
1125
2128
3103
499
579
689
7104
869
993
1087
1143
1274
1398
97.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"was gone"
1"were painted"
58.16% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs188
matches
0"was trying"
1"was beating"
2"was shrinking"
3"were floating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences96
ratio0.177
matches
0"It was the *feeling* of it – insistent, cold, as if the very air was trying to drag me under."
1"Not frightening in the conventional sense – no snarling wolves, no obvious monsters lurking in the shadows – but fundamentally, unsettlingly out of sync."
2"I’d been tracing a lead, a whisper passed down through the London occult circles – a rumour of a place called Isolde’s Grove, a pocket between worlds."
3"The standing stones at the Grove’s boundary – a circle of weathered oak, blackened by centuries of rain – weren't the inviting sight I’d expected."
4"They weren’t old; they *felt* old, burdened with a weight that went beyond their physical age."
5"The familiar scent of damp earth and pine needles faded, replaced by something colder, sharper – ozone, and something else…"
6"It wasn't that the Grove was shrinking; it was that my perception of space was…shifting."
7"A glance forward would reveal a dense thicket of thorns that hadn't been there moments before; a distant bird call would echo with an unnerving delay."
8"This wasn’t just a pocket dimension; it was actively resisting my attempts to navigate it."
9"Not the natural breaking of wood in the wind, but a deliberate, forceful break – as if something had stepped through the undergrowth."
10"I reached a small clearing – a brief respite from the dense undergrowth, dominated by a sprawling, gnarled hawthorn tree."
11"As I stepped into the open, I saw it – a circle of stones, smaller than the boundary stones, arranged in a perfect, unsettling symmetry."
12"And as it stepped fully into the clearing, I recognized the cut of its cloak – Thorne's insignia."
13"“A rather…inefficient key. I’ve upgraded.” He opened the box, revealing not the Heartstone, but a replica – meticulously crafted from obsidian, pulsing with a faint, internal glow."
14"I turned, and saw the figure from before – no longer hidden in the shadows, but standing directly behind the hawthorn tree."
15"A young woman, impossibly pale, with eyes the colour of the rain-washed grey wildflowers – and a smile that didn't reach them."
16"And then, a low, guttural growl echoed through the Grove, rising from the earth itself – a sound that promised nothing but oblivion."
95.65% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount598
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.04013377926421405
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.02508361204013378
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean13.86
std7.25
cv0.523
sampleLengths
05
120
27
320
423
53
624
717
821
927
1027
1131
129
131
149
1514
161
176
1825
1916
2022
2122
2212
2320
2411
2523
2612
278
2815
294
3026
3115
322
337
3423
355
361
3712
3817
3910
4010
416
426
433
448
4515
4617
4713
4813
4910
53.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3645833333333333
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners35
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences87
matches
0"Then, a flicker."
1"Just trees, rain, and the"
2"Just the oppressive darkness and"
3"Then, I noticed the movement"
ratio0.046
63.68% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences87
matches
0"It wasn’t the rain itself,"
1"It was the *feeling* of"
2"I pulled my collar higher,"
3"I’d been tracing a lead,"
4"My benefactor, a collector named"
5"They weren’t old; they *felt*"
6"I’d been walking for what"
7"It was beating faster now,"
8"It wasn't that the Grove"
9"I froze, every nerve screaming."
10"I raised my hand, instinctively"
11"It was gone before I"
12"My heart hammered against my"
13"I scanned the area, my"
14"It was a murmur, a"
15"I couldn't make out the"
16"it was ancient, weary, and"
17"It seemed to emanate from"
18"I backed away slowly, carefully,"
19"I reached a small clearing"
ratio0.391
80.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences87
matches
0"The rain tasted of iron."
1"It wasn’t the rain itself,"
2"It was the *feeling* of"
3"I pulled my collar higher,"
4"Richmond Park was…wrong."
5"The ancient oaks lining the"
6"The rain hammered against them,"
7"I’d been tracing a lead,"
8"The Heartstone Pendant, a damnably"
9"My benefactor, a collector named"
10"Thorne wasn’t known for subtlety,"
11"The contract was clear: locate"
12"The standing stones at the"
13"They weren’t old; they *felt*"
14"The wildflowers blooming amongst their"
15"The air thickened, pressing against"
16"The familiar scent of damp"
17"something vaguely floral, but tainted,"
18"I’d been walking for what"
19"It was beating faster now,"
ratio0.759
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"Before I could react, a"
ratio0.011
21.79% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"It was the *feeling* of it – insistent, cold, as if the very air was trying to drag me under."
1"The rain hammered against them, a relentless, rhythmic drumming that seemed to pulse with a faint, internal rhythm of its own."
2"The Heartstone Pendant, a damnably warm weight against my wrist, had been encouraging me, pulsing with a low, insistent thrum that intensified the closer I got …"
3"They weren’t old; they *felt* old, burdened with a weight that went beyond their physical age."
4"The wildflowers blooming amongst their roots, usually a vibrant splash of colour, were muted, almost grey, their petals drooping as if exhausted."
5"As I passed through the circle, the rain shifted, the drumming intensifying into a low, subsonic drone that vibrated through my teeth."
6"A glance forward would reveal a dense thicket of thorns that hadn't been there moments before; a distant bird call would echo with an unnerving delay."
7"Not the natural breaking of wood in the wind, but a deliberate, forceful break – as if something had stepped through the undergrowth."
8"It was young, almost unnervingly so, with eyes that burned with an unsettling intensity."
9"A young woman, impossibly pale, with eyes the colour of the rain-washed grey wildflowers – and a smile that didn't reach them."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he continued, his voice dripping with a chilling detachment"
1"Her grip tightened, and the rain seemed to coalesce around her, forming a swirling, protective shield"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he continued (continue)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.4
70.6532%