Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8DZY2D883AYJXY3GP3RWK

Run Details

Duration:
2m 16s
Cost:
$0.011815
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory’s scuffed delivery boots crunched frost into Richmond Park’s bare earth, her left wrist tensing where the crescent scar throbbed—a childhood fall’s ghost stirred by the unknown. Under her pilled wool coat, the Heartstone Pendant’s silver chain bit into her collarbone; the deep crimson gem, thumbnail-sized, pulsed faintly, a warmth she’d learned to trust since the Dymasian stranger pressed it into her palm outside Golden Empress. Her other hand curled around the Fae-Forged Blade in her jeans pocket—moonsilver, leaf-shaped, always cold enough to make her fingers ache through the fabric, a gift Isolde had pressed on her three days prior with a riddle she still hadn’t unpacked. Straight shoulder-length black hair fell in her bright blue eyes as she squinted at the circle of ancient oak standing stones ahead—thick, gnarled trunks hewn into pillars, their bark blackened with age—landmarks she’d never spotted in a dozen delivery detours through the park. Isolde glided ahead, silver waist-length hair catching the winter solstice’s thin light, and Rory’s breath hitched when she realized the Half-Fae left no footprints in the frost. Nyx slithered along the shadow of an oak, their humanoid silhouette shifting between solid and incorporeal—6’2” when they coalesced, violet-glowing eyes cutting through the dim. Their voice curled in Rory’s ear like wind through a crack in her flat’s above-bar window. “The Veil shimmers here. Mortal eyes see only oak pillars. I see the thread that frays—same as the one that trapped me in 1643.” The whisper carried their old sorcerer Aldric’s unspoken weight, a nod to the failed summoning that had bound them as a Shade. Rory’s thumb brushed her wrist scar again, thinking of Evan’s fist, of fleeing Cardiff’s Pre-Law lectures, of Eva’s frantic text that had sent her to London. She’d come here seeking answers about the Dymasian chefs—Prince Belphegor’s helbound contractors—who’d been snatching mortal souls for their gluttonous feasts. The Heartstone’s pulse spiked, hot enough to make her gasp. “It’s burning.” Isolde stopped at the first oak pillar, pale lavender eyes locking on Rory. Her speech was lilted, riddling, as always—her Fae compulsion forbidding lies but permitting misdirection. “The stone that beats for Hel’s feast sees the space between what is and what might be.” Nyx coalesced at Rory’s side, their shadow form brushing her arm like cool smoke. “The Grove is a pocket. Veil thin here—winter solstice weakens it, per your mortal lore. Your pendant senses the rift between Earth and Fae—and maybe the Hel portal you seek.” Rory stepped toward the oak pillar, and for a split second, she saw it: the Veil’s faint shimmering distortion, visible only when Nyx’s shadow stretched over it. The Fae-Forged Blade’s cold seeped through her pocket, a warning. When she crossed the threshold, the world shifted. Frost vanished from her boots. Beneath her feet was soft moss, dotted with wildflowers—poppies, daisies, bluebells—blooming bright in a season that should have left Richmond Park bare. The air smelled like honey and pine, thick enough to drink, and the oak pillars behind her filtered the sun into golden streaks that twisted like Fae smoke. Rory fumbled for her phone, her mortal anchor, and stared. The screen glitched: 3:17 PM flipped to 1:02 AM, then to 9:45 AM, then went dark. “Time’s broken.” “Bent,” Isolde corrected, gliding into the clearing beyond. “Not broken. An hour here is a breath or a lifetime, depending on the wind’s whims.” She left no footprints in the moss, even as her silver hair brushed the wildflowers. Nyx shifted to incorporeal, slipping between the oak pillars’ shadows, their whisper carrying across the clearing. “The Fae’s magic tangles with my realm. I cannot hold solid form for long here—trapped between two spaces is enough for one ageless existence.” Rory knelt to touch a poppy—its petal was silk-soft, warm, even in the filtered light. “These shouldn’t be here. It’s December.” Isolde’s laugh was like wind chimes. “The Grove does not bow to mortal calendars. Wildflowers bloom for the unbound, for those who see beyond the frost.” She gestured to a cluster of mushrooms growing at the base of an oak—their caps glowed faint blue, a detail Rory hadn’t noticed before. Unease coiled in Rory’s gut. Her wrist scar tingled again, sharper this time, and she pulled the Fae-Forged Blade from her pocket. The moonsilver blade glowed faintly, even without moonlight, its cold seeping up her arm. “Why is my scar hurting?” “The Grove tastes mortal wounds,” Isolde said, her voice softening. “It does not heal. It remembers.” She couldn’t lie—Rory parsed the riddle’s layers: the childhood fall that had left the scar? Evan’s fists? The Dymasian souls she’d failed to save on a recent delivery run? Nyx reappeared, solid again but wavering, their violet eyes narrowed. “There’s a rift here. Not just Fae-Earth. Hel’s thread tangles with it. Your pendant’s pulse is proof—Dymas’s stone senses its own realm’s echo. The gluttons’ vineyards reach even into Fae-touched spaces.” Rory clutched the Heartstone Pendant, its warmth a counter to the blade’s cold. She stood, scanning the clearing. The oak standing stones loomed behind her, their bark now glowing faint green—she hadn’t noticed that either. “What do you want from me, Isolde? I came for answers about the Dymasian feasts.” Isolde stepped closer, her lavender eyes locking on the Heartstone. “The red stone that beats for gluttony will lead you to the feast’s door. But the cold blade that cuts wards will decide who eats—and who is eaten.” She paused, then added, “The shadow that walks between realms will be your key. Or your chain.” Rory glanced at Nyx, who shifted to incorporeal again, their shadow slipping into a crack in the oak. Their whisper carried: “I am no one’s key. Nor chain—I was Aldric once, a sorcerer trapped by my own hubris. I choose my own bonds.” Time glitched again. Rory checked her phone—now it showed 5:00 PM, but the sun in the Grove hadn’t moved. She realized she’d been in the clearing for what felt like ten minutes, but her delivery shift was supposed to start in an hour—would she make it back in time for Yu-Fei’s dinner rush? Or would the Grove’s time stretch into a day, making her late and risking her job? She knelt again, touching the moss, and noticed a small rift in the Veil—faint, shimmering, near the base of a standing stone. The Heartstone’s pulse spiked, hot enough to make her yelp. “There’s a portal here. Hel?” Isolde nodded, her silver hair falling over her shoulder. “A thread. Dymas’s master chefs hunger for more souls to contract for their feasts.” She couldn’t lie, but she didn’t say how to close it. Rory’s cool-headed, quick thinking kicked in—her greatest asset from her Pre-Law days. She crushed a daisy under her boot by accident, the soft snap making Isolde’s eyes flicker (a rare crack in her ethereal composure). She tucked the Fae-Forged Blade back into her pocket, clutched the Heartstone Pendant, and looked at Isolde. “Give me one clear answer. Will I survive the Dymasian feast?” Isolde’s lips curved into a faint smile. “The one who carries the cold blade and the burning stone will not be eaten. But she may feast on regret.” Rory parsed the truth beneath the riddle—she’d escape the feast, but not without cost. She nodded, knowing she had to return to the mortal world but would come back for the rift. She stepped toward the oak standing stones, the Heartstone’s pulse slowing as she nears the exit. Nyx slips into her shadow, and Isolde glides to the edge, leaving no footprints in the moss. When Rory steps back into Richmond Park, the frost is still on the ground, her phone shows 3:18 PM—only a minute has passed outside, but the honey-pine scent of the Grove lingers in her nose. She mounts her delivery bike, her left wrist scar still tingling, and glances back at the oak standing stones—now invisible to her mortal eyes. The Heartstone’s faint pulse and the Fae-Forged Blade’s cold remind her she’s not done with the Grove, with Dymas, or with the shadow that walks between realms.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She knelt again [again]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.771
leniency1
rawRatio0.037
effectiveRatio0.037
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1391
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1391
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count3
4
word"unspoken"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count5
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"wavering"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"loomed"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"whisper"
4"unspoken"
5"weight"
6"pulse"
7"silk"
8"wavering"
9"echo"
10"scanning"
11"loomed"
12"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences49
matches(empty)
84.55% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences49
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences50
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen90
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1345
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.91% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions107
wordCount1070
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity1.4
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
Heartstone8
Pendant3
Dymasian4
Golden1
Empress1
Fae-Forged5
Blade5
Isolde12
Rory15
Half-Fae1
Veil4
Evan1
Cardiff1
Pre-Law2
Eva1
London1
Prince1
Belphegor1
Fae11
Earth2
Hel2
Nyx7
Unease1
Fae-Earth1
Dymas3
Aldric1
Time1
Grove4
Yu-Fei1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Blade"
3"Isolde"
4"Rory"
5"Half-Fae"
6"Veil"
7"Evan"
8"Eva"
9"Prince"
10"Belphegor"
11"Fae"
12"Hel"
13"Nyx"
14"Dymas"
15"Time"
16"Grove"
17"Yu-Fei"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore0.799
windowScore0.833
21.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"smelled like honey and pine, thick enough"
1"felt like ten minutes, but her delivery"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1345
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
99.65% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean56.04
std27.95
cv0.499
sampleLengths
0150
1114
258
344
444
545
683
739
840
921
1050
1141
1245
1341
1450
1555
1643
1769
1837
1934
2063
2128
2265
2386
90.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences49
matches
0"was lilted"
1"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs188
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences50
ratio0.44
matches
0"Rory’s scuffed delivery boots crunched frost into Richmond Park’s bare earth, her left wrist tensing where the crescent scar throbbed—a childhood fall’s ghost stirred by the unknown."
1"Under her pilled wool coat, the Heartstone Pendant’s silver chain bit into her collarbone; the deep crimson gem, thumbnail-sized, pulsed faintly, a warmth she’d learned to trust since the Dymasian stranger pressed it into her palm outside Golden Empress."
2"Her other hand curled around the Fae-Forged Blade in her jeans pocket—moonsilver, leaf-shaped, always cold enough to make her fingers ache through the fabric, a gift Isolde had pressed on her three days prior with a riddle she still hadn’t unpacked."
3"Straight shoulder-length black hair fell in her bright blue eyes as she squinted at the circle of ancient oak standing stones ahead—thick, gnarled trunks hewn into pillars, their bark blackened with age—landmarks she’d never spotted in a dozen delivery detours through the park."
4"Nyx slithered along the shadow of an oak, their humanoid silhouette shifting between solid and incorporeal—6’2” when they coalesced, violet-glowing eyes cutting through the dim. Their voice curled in Rory’s ear like wind through a crack in her flat’s above-bar window. “The Veil shimmers here."
5"I see the thread that frays—same as the one that trapped me in 1643.” The whisper carried their old sorcerer Aldric’s unspoken weight, a nod to the failed summoning that had bound them as a Shade."
6"Rory’s thumb brushed her wrist scar again, thinking of Evan’s fist, of fleeing Cardiff’s Pre-Law lectures, of Eva’s frantic text that had sent her to London. She’d come here seeking answers about the Dymasian chefs—Prince Belphegor’s helbound contractors—who’d been snatching mortal souls for their gluttonous feasts. The Heartstone’s pulse spiked, hot enough to make her gasp. “It’s burning.”"
7"Isolde stopped at the first oak pillar, pale lavender eyes locking on Rory. Her speech was lilted, riddling, as always—her Fae compulsion forbidding lies but permitting misdirection. “The stone that beats for Hel’s feast sees the space between what is and what might be.”"
8"Veil thin here—winter solstice weakens it, per your mortal lore."
9"Your pendant senses the rift between Earth and Fae—and maybe the Hel portal you seek.”"
10"Frost vanished from her boots. Beneath her feet was soft moss, dotted with wildflowers—poppies, daisies, bluebells—blooming bright in a season that should have left Richmond Park bare. The air smelled like honey and pine, thick enough to drink, and the oak pillars behind her filtered the sun into golden streaks that twisted like Fae smoke. Rory fumbled for her phone, her mortal anchor, and stared. The screen glitched: 3:17 PM flipped to 1:02 AM, then to 9:45 AM, then went dark. “Time’s broken.”"
11"I cannot hold solid form for long here—trapped between two spaces is enough for one ageless existence.”"
12"Rory knelt to touch a poppy—its petal was silk-soft, warm, even in the filtered light. “These shouldn’t be here."
13"Your pendant’s pulse is proof—Dymas’s stone senses its own realm’s echo."
14"Rory clutched the Heartstone Pendant, its warmth a counter to the blade’s cold. She stood, scanning the clearing. The oak standing stones loomed behind her, their bark now glowing faint green—she hadn’t noticed that either. “What do you want from me, Isolde?"
15"But the cold blade that cuts wards will decide who eats—and who is eaten.” She paused, then added, “The shadow that walks between realms will be your key."
16"Nor chain—I was Aldric once, a sorcerer trapped by my own hubris."
17"Time glitched again. Rory checked her phone—now it showed 5:00 PM, but the sun in the Grove hadn’t moved. She realized she’d been in the clearing for what felt like ten minutes, but her delivery shift was supposed to start in an hour—would she make it back in time for Yu-Fei’s dinner rush? Or would the Grove’s time stretch into a day, making her late and risking her job?"
18"She knelt again, touching the moss, and noticed a small rift in the Veil—faint, shimmering, near the base of a standing stone. The Heartstone’s pulse spiked, hot enough to make her yelp. “There’s a portal here."
19"Rory’s cool-headed, quick thinking kicked in—her greatest asset from her Pre-Law days. She crushed a daisy under her boot by accident, the soft snap making Isolde’s eyes flicker (a rare crack in her ethereal composure). She tucked the Fae-Forged Blade back into her pocket, clutched the Heartstone Pendant, and looked at Isolde. “Give me one clear answer."
20"Rory parsed the truth beneath the riddle—she’d escape the feast, but not without cost. She nodded, knowing she had to return to the mortal world but would come back for the rift. She stepped toward the oak standing stones, the Heartstone’s pulse slowing as she nears the exit. Nyx slips into her shadow, and Isolde glides to the edge, leaving no footprints in the moss."
21"When Rory steps back into Richmond Park, the frost is still on the ground, her phone shows 3:18 PM—only a minute has passed outside, but the honey-pine scent of the Grove lingers in her nose. She mounts her delivery bike, her left wrist scar still tingling, and glances back at the oak standing stones—now invisible to her mortal eyes. The Heartstone’s faint pulse and the Fae-Forged Blade’s cold remind her she’s not done with the Grove, with Dymas, or with the shadow that walks between realms."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount780
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.023076923076923078
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0038461538461538464
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences50
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences50
mean26.9
std20.8
cv0.773
sampleLengths
027
139
241
343
427
545
66
736
858
944
1019
1110
1215
1345
1483
1510
1629
1723
1817
1919
202
2114
2236
2341
2414
2531
2614
273
285
2911
308
3142
328
3324
3428
353
3626
3712
385
3969
4036
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4211
4323
4457
456
4622
476
4865
4986
90.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.54
totalSentences50
uniqueOpeners27
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences45
matches
0"Her other hand curled around"
1"I see the thread that"
2"Your pendant senses the rift"
3"I cannot hold solid form"
4"Your pendant’s pulse is proof—Dymas’s"
5"I came for answers about"
6"I choose my own"
7"She knelt again, touching the"
ratio0.178
60.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences45
matches
0"Rory’s scuffed delivery boots crunched"
1"Her other hand curled around"
2"Isolde glided ahead, silver waist-length"
3"Nyx slithered along the shadow"
4"I see the thread that"
5"Rory’s thumb brushed her wrist"
6"Isolde stopped at the first"
7"Nyx coalesced at Rory’s side,"
8"Veil thin here—winter solstice weakens"
9"Your pendant senses the rift"
10"Rory stepped toward the oak"
11"Frost vanished from her boots."
12"Isolde corrected, gliding into the"
13"An hour here is a"
14"Nyx shifted to incorporeal, slipping"
15"I cannot hold solid form"
16"Rory knelt to touch a"
17"Isolde’s laugh was like wind"
18"Wildflowers bloom for the unbound,"
19"Unease coiled in Rory’s gut."
ratio0.8
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
ratio0
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences12
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory parsed the truth beneath the riddle—she’d escape the feast, but not without cost. She nodded, knowing she had to return to the mortal world but would come …"
1"When Rory steps back into Richmond Park, the frost is still on the ground, her phone shows 3:18 PM—only a minute has passed outside, but the honey-pine scent of…"
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx slithered, their humanoid silhouette shifting between solid and incorporeal—6’2"
1"Isolde said, her voice softening"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Isolde corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.057
leniency0.114
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.057
77.7445%