Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8G7KW974S2AYX7SX8SK55

Run Details

Duration:
38.6s
Cost:
$0.001720
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The wind off the Thames bit at Aurora’s cheeks as she led the way through Richmond Park, her shadow stretching long beside her. It was the winter solstice, and the air hummed with a low, almost physical energy—the Veil thinning, the old tales said, a裂缝 in the world where even the stubbornest secrets slipped through. In her pocket, the Heartstone Pendant pressed warm against her thigh, a faint, insistent pulse that matched the thrum in her own veins. Beside her, Nyx moved silently, their shadowed form merging with the dusk, and Isolde, silver-haired and lavender-eyed, glided a step ahead, her bare feet leaving no imprint on the frost-crusted grass. Aurora had never believed in ghosts or faeries or *realms folding in on themselves*—not before the pendant had arrived, not before Evan had broken her wrist and fled, not before Nyx had materialized in her flat that night, voice like a leaf rustling in a midnight gale, saying, *“He’s not the only one who can’t stay buried.”* Now, she followed Isolde as the other woman paused before a ring of ancient oaks, their trunks gnarled and black, their branches weaving a cage around the sky. The standing stones were not just wood—Aurora squinted, and saw it: a faint *shimmer* at their bases, like heat rising from asphalt on a summer day, the Veil’s edge made visible by the solstice’s magic. “Step,” Isolde said, her voice soft. “The Grove does not welcome those who hesitate.” Nyx shifted beside her, their form solidifying into a lean, shadowy human with violet eyes that glowed like embers. “You sure about this, Rory? Last time I played in a fae garden, I ended up with a bellyful of cat-shaped chaos.” Aurora pressed a hand to her pendant, the crescent scar on her wrist stinging—*Evan’s handprint, the last thing she remembered before the desert, before the benefactor who’d left the necklace on her doorstep, whispering, *“Find the Grove. Find me.”* *Who are you?* she’d asked. The woman had smiled, but her eyes had been far away. *“A guardian. A relic. A ghost.”* “Trust the stone,” Isolde said, as if reading her mind. “It chose you… as I chose you.” She turned back, and when Aurora took a step forward, the world *ripple*d. The air thickened, sweet with jasmine and something sharper, metallic, like ozone. The sky above the oaks shifted from smog-gray to amber—warm, golden amber, not the cold white of London’s winter sun. Aurora’s breath hitched. Where the park had been bare and brown, the Grove bloomed: flowers the color of storm clouds, petals translucent as moth wings, glowing faintly from within. Grass that shimmered like crushed moonstone carpeted the ground. And the trees—their leaves were silver, each vein a thread of liquid starlight, swaying not in the wind, but in some current only they could feel. “Time bends here,” Isolde said, as Nyx let out a low, awed whistle. “An hour might pass in the Grove while minutes slip by outside. And if you stay too long… well. Mortals forget how to sleep. How to hunger. How to *age*.” Her voice softens, almost sad. “I learned that the hard way.” Aurora glanced at her phone. The screen flickered—*3:17 PM*. She’d left the flat forty minutes earlier. “How?” she asked, nodding at the trees. “How does this place… *exist*?” Isolde smiled, and for a moment, Aurora saw not a woman with silver hair, but a child, barefoot and afraid, watching from the edge of a shadow. “Between,” she said. “Not Earth. Not Fae. A pocket woven from the memories of those who once loved the wild. The old oaks were druids, once—they planted this place to outrun the kings who wanted their magic. When the Fae exiled me, I came here. They let me stay. For a price.” She plucked a silver flower from a bush, and it pulsed in her palm, a heartbeat. “They ask only that we guard the Veil.” Nyx had wandered ten paces, their shadow stretching across the moonstone grass, rippling as if the ground beneath them weren’t solid. “Veil’s thin,” they said, turning back, violet eyes wide. “Thinner than I’ve felt in centuries. Someone’s punched a hole, and it’s leaking. Smells like rot. Like *hunger*.” Aurora’s pendant flared. Not a pulse—*a crack*. She fumbled for it, pulling it from her coat; the crimson gem was glowing so brightly she had to shield her eyes. “It’s… reacting,” she said. “To something.” Isolde’s smile faded. “Come. The heart of the Grove is where the Veil frays most.” She led them deeper, past a stream that sang—not with water, but with voices, human and otherwise, speaking in languages Aurora didn’t know. The trees parted to reveal a clearing where a pool lay, its surface still as glass, but reflecting *nothing* but the amber sky. Instead, the water hummed, and when Aurora leaned closer, she saw it: a faint, shimmering rippling beneath the surface, like a sheet of silk pulled tight, the Veil made visible as a patchwork of light and shadow. “The tear,” Nyx breathed. Aurora’s pendant burned through her fingers. She dropped it, and it sank into the pool, where it vanished without a splash, leaving only a momentary glow. “It… it *went* in,” she said, shocked. “To the tear?” Isolde nodded. “The Heartstone is a key. It belongs to Dymas, to the realms beyond—” “Hel,” Nyx corrected, their voice suddenly sharp. “Dymas is Hel. Gluttony. The prince rules there, but he’s not the one leaking. Someone else. Belladonna. A demon. She’s been hunting the stone for centuries. She wants to cross through the tear and feast on the mortal world.” Aurora’s hand went to her coat, where the Fae-Forged Blade rested against her ribs. It was cold, as always, but now it *tingled*, the moonilver humming with discontent. “So the benefactor… they left the stone here because it’s safest here?” Isolde’s eyes met hers. “The Grove is a shield. But even shields wear thin. Belladonna knows the stone is here now. She’ll come.” “Then we wait,” Nyx said, shadow shifting to cover their face. “We let her come. And we cut her apart.” Aurora’s scar ached. *Evan’s handprint, her mother’s voice on the phone: *“Run, Rory. Run before he finds you.”* *Run before he finds you.* But the blade in her coat felt like a promise. *She wasn’t running anymore.* Isolde reached into her pocket and pulled out a small, leather-bound book, its pages filled with sketches of summoning circles and sigils. “Belladonna can’t cross the Veil unmarked. She’ll need a portal—one to Dymas, one that *bleeds*. The Heartstone stabilized it, but… it’s still vulnerable. We need to strengthen it. Before midnight, when the Veil is at its weakest.” Nyx shifted closer, their shadow merging with Aurora’s. “And if she doesn’t come?” “Then she’s biding her time,” Isolde said. “But time is not her friend. Not here.” She tapped the pool, and the Veil rippled, growing larger, brighter. “The Grove will show us when she’s near. It always does.” They settled into the grass, the moonstone warmth seeping through Aurora’s coat. Nyx closed their eyes, their form dissolving into shadow, no doubt scrying the edges of the Grove. Isolde opened the book, murmuring incantations under her breath, the sigils glowing faintly on the page. Aurora traced patterns in the grass, her pendant cool against her thigh now, the threat a low, steady drumbeat in her chest. Ahead, the flowers flickered. Not with light, but with something *else*—a vision, Aurora realized, as the air thickened again. She saw a woman, her face hidden, standing in a garden of excess: vineyards heavy with fruit that glowed like embers, a feast laid out that included creatures she didn’t recognize, their eyes still wide with terror. “You cannot stop me,” the woman said, her voice a growl, a purr, a thousand voices at once. “The Veil is thin. The Heartstone is mine. *I am Belladonna.*” The vision shattered, and Aurora stood, her hands shaking. “She’s here,” she said. “Or… she’s *near*.” Isolde closed the book, her lavender eyes sharp. “Good. Let her come. The Grove has waited centuries to test a guardian. And you… Rory Carter, you are that guardian.” She stood, too, and took Aurora’s hand, her touch cold as moonlight. “The blade will sing when she draws near. Trust it. Trust the stone. And trust me.” Nyx reappeared, their shadow solid once more. “She’s coming. Through the Veil, from Dymas. Smells like overripe fruit and blood. *Lots* of blood.” Aurora drew the Fae Blade, its silver edge slicing through the moonlight. It hummed, eager. “Then let’s give her a welcome she won’t forget.” The pool’s Veil rippled again, wider now, and Aurora saw it—Belladonna, a towering figure of shadow and flame, her face a mask of teeth and hunger, stepping through the tear. The Grove’s flowers flared, bright as fire, and the moonstone grass hissed, as if burning. Isolde chanted, her voice rising, and the sigils on the book blazed. Nyx shifted into a storm of shadow, coiling around Belladonna’s legs, and she shrieked, a sound that split Aurora’s eardrums. Aurora charged, the blade glowing, and Belladonna turned, her eyes—*eyes like the pendant, like embers*—fixing on her. “You,” she spat. “Trifling mortal. The stone was *mine*.” But Aurora was no longer the girl who’d fled Evan. She was Rory Carter, sharp, quick, out of ideas but never out of fight. She lunged, the blade slicing through Belladonna’s arm, and she howled, the wound sealing as quickly as it opened—*demon magic*. Nyx struck again, this time at her throat, and Belladonna backhanded them, sending Nyx flying into a silver tree. Isolde’s incantation grew louder, and the sigils on the book rose into the air, forming a net. Aurora shifted, circling, the blade low. “You can’t cross,” she said, her voice steady. “The Grove won’t let you.” Belladonna smirked, blood dripping from her chin. “Foolish girl. The Grove *weeps* for me. It *hungers* for me. I am Dymas made flesh. I am—” The pendant flared, brighter than ever, and the tear in the Veil *exploded*. Belladonna screamed, her form dissolving into smoke, but Aurora held the blade high, slicing through the smoke, through the hunger, through the fear. The blade sang, a clear, pure note, and Belladonna vanished, a wail of rage echoing behind her. The Grove stilled. The Veil’s tear healed, the pool’s surface smooth as glass. Nyx pushed themselves up, their shadow form flickering. “She’s gone. For now.” Isolde collapsed onto the grass, her shoulders shaking. “We did it,” she said, almost to herself. Aurora knelt beside her, pressing a hand to her back. “We *won*.” Nyx sat cross-legged, staring at the pool. “Not for long. She’ll be back. Belladonna never stays dead.” But Aurora wasn’t listening. She was staring at the pendant, which had fallen from Isolde’s pocket, glowing softly in the moonlight. The scar on her wrist throbbed, and for a moment, she saw the benefactor again—the woman with eyes like the pendant, standing in the dark, saying, *“You’re stronger than you know.”* *Am I?* she thought, as the Grove’s flowers slowly closed, their glow dimming. The moon rose, casting silver light over the oaks, and the world felt… *alive*. Not just with magic, but with *promise*. Isolde stood, brushing herself off. “We should leave before dawn. The Veil hardens again, and the Grove will forget us until next solstice.” She paused, looking at Aurora. “You’ve a long road, Rory Carter. But the Grove will guide you. The stone will keep you safe. And Nyx… well, Nyx has a way of making sure demons learn their lessons.” Nyx laughed, a low, rumbling sound that rippled through the trees. “Told you. Cat-shaped chaos is a breeze compared to Belladonna.” Aurora stood, the blade sheathed, the pendant warm in her hand. The park lay beyond the oaks, dark and quiet, the Thames a ribbon of black in the distance. But she knew better. She’d seen the Grove’s magic, felt its hunger, and in its teeth, she’d seen hope. They walked back through the standing stones, the Veil sealing behind them, and the world shifted again—from amber to gray, from magic to cold. Aurora looked down at her pendant, at the faint glow still lingering, and smiled. Evan was gone. The benefactor was a ghost. But the Grove was real. The Veil was thin. And she was *here*. Ready. --- The scene weaves world-building through sensory detail—Aurora’s practicality clashing with the Grove’s wonder, Nyx’s shadowy observations, and Isolde’s cryptic wisdom—while grounding the story in the codex: Heartstone’s Hel origin, the Fae Grove’s time-bending properties, the Veil’s winter solstice weakening, and the Fae Blade’s demon-slaying power. The tension between wonder and unease (Belladonna’s threat) simmers, hinting at future conflict, while Aurora’s growth from fledgling to guardian underscores her character arc.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
96.55% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She turned back [back]"
1"Her voice softens almost [almost]"
2"She stood too [too]"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.466
leniency0.931
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.103
90.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2158
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"quickly"
2"softly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
62.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2158
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"the last thing"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count2
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"silk"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"shattered"
count1
10
word"charged"
count1
11
word"echoing"
count1
12
word"throbbed"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"the last thing"
2"shimmered"
3"could feel"
4"flickered"
5"pulsed"
6"silk"
7"warmth"
8"traced"
9"shattered"
10"charged"
11"echoing"
12"throbbed"
13"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences117
matches
0"e with terror"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences117
filterMatches
0"wonder"
hedgeMatches(empty)
98.79% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen85
ratio0.007
matches
0"It was the winter solstice, and the air hummed with a low, almost physical energy—the Veil thinning, the old tales said, a裂缝 in the world where even the stubbornest secrets slipped…"
92.22% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans35
markdownWords115
totalWords2134
ratio0.054
matches
0"realms folding in on themselves"
1"“He’s not the only one who can’t stay buried.”"
2"shimmer"
3"Evan’s handprint, the last thing she remembered before the desert, before the benefactor who’d left the necklace on her doorstep, whispering, *“Find the Grove. Find me.”"
4"Who are you?"
5"“A guardian. A relic. A ghost.”"
6"ripple"
7"age"
8"3:17 PM"
9"exist"
10"hunger"
11"a crack"
12"nothing"
13"went"
14"tingled"
15"Evan’s handprint, her mother’s voice on the phone: *“Run, Rory. Run before he finds you.”"
16"Run before he finds you."
17"She wasn’t running anymore."
18"bleeds"
19"else"
20"I am Belladonna."
21"near"
22"Lots"
23"eyes like the pendant, like embers"
24"mine"
25"demon magic"
26"weeps"
27"hungers"
28"exploded"
29"won"
30"“You’re stronger than you know.”"
31"Am I?"
32"alive"
33"promise"
34"here"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
40.75% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions123
wordCount1556
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity2.19
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Thames2
Aurora34
Richmond1
Park1
Veil10
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Nyx18
Isolde19
Evan5
London1
Grove9
Fae-Forged1
Blade3
Fae4
Belladonna9
Rory1
Carter1
Hel1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Veil"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
4"Nyx"
5"Isolde"
6"Evan"
7"Grove"
8"Blade"
9"Belladonna"
10"Rory"
11"Carter"
places
0"Thames"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"London"
4"Fae"
globalScore0.407
windowScore0.5
58.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if reading her mind"
1"felt like a promise"
2"as if burning"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.343
wordCount2134
matches
0"not in the wind, but in some current only they could feel"
1"not a woman with silver hair, but a child, barefoot"
2"not with water, but with voices, human"
3"Not with light, but with something *else*"
4"Not just with magic, but with *promise*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences148
matches
0"flat that night"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean42.68
std28.24
cv0.662
sampleLengths
0109
1120
214
341
461
530
696
754
828
9103
1048
1135
1215
1383
144
1536
1615
1746
1840
1923
2020
2137
2259
2313
2437
2567
2685
2716
2857
2923
3024
3177
3226
3380
3419
3525
3653
3725
3816
3912
4017
4152
4234
4360
4421
4548
4638
4721
481
4970
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences117
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs269
matches
0"was glowing"
1"wasn’t running"
2"wasn’t listening"
3"was staring"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences148
ratio0.115
matches
0"It was the winter solstice, and the air hummed with a low, almost physical energy—the Veil thinning, the old tales said, a裂缝 in the world where even the stubbornest secrets slipped through."
1"Aurora had never believed in ghosts or faeries or *realms folding in on themselves*—not before the pendant had arrived, not before Evan had broken her wrist and fled, not before Nyx had materialized in her flat that night, voice like a leaf rustling in a midnight gale, saying, *“He’s not the only one who can’t stay buried.”* Now, she followed Isolde as the other woman paused before a ring of ancient oaks, their trunks gnarled and black, their branches weaving a cage around the sky."
2"The standing stones were not just wood—Aurora squinted, and saw it: a faint *shimmer* at their bases, like heat rising from asphalt on a summer day, the Veil’s edge made visible by the solstice’s magic."
3"Aurora pressed a hand to her pendant, the crescent scar on her wrist stinging—*Evan’s handprint, the last thing she remembered before the desert, before the benefactor who’d left the necklace on her doorstep, whispering, *“Find the Grove. Find me.”* *Who are you?* she’d asked."
4"The sky above the oaks shifted from smog-gray to amber—warm, golden amber, not the cold white of London’s winter sun."
5"And the trees—their leaves were silver, each vein a thread of liquid starlight, swaying not in the wind, but in some current only they could feel."
6"The screen flickered—*3:17 PM*."
7"Not a pulse—*a crack*."
8"She fumbled for it, pulling it from her coat; the crimson gem was glowing so brightly she had to shield her eyes."
9"She led them deeper, past a stream that sang—not with water, but with voices, human and otherwise, speaking in languages Aurora didn’t know."
10"Not with light, but with something *else*—a vision, Aurora realized, as the air thickened again."
11"The pool’s Veil rippled again, wider now, and Aurora saw it—Belladonna, a towering figure of shadow and flame, her face a mask of teeth and hunger, stepping through the tear."
12"Aurora charged, the blade glowing, and Belladonna turned, her eyes—*eyes like the pendant, like embers*—fixing on her."
13"She lunged, the blade slicing through Belladonna’s arm, and she howled, the wound sealing as quickly as it opened—*demon magic*."
14"The scar on her wrist throbbed, and for a moment, she saw the benefactor again—the woman with eyes like the pendant, standing in the dark, saying, *“You’re stronger than you know.”*"
15"They walked back through the standing stones, the Veil sealing behind them, and the world shifted again—from amber to gray, from magic to cold."
16"The scene weaves world-building through sensory detail—Aurora’s practicality clashing with the Grove’s wonder, Nyx’s shadowy observations, and Isolde’s cryptic wisdom—while grounding the story in the codex: Heartstone’s Hel origin, the Fae Grove’s time-bending properties, the Veil’s winter solstice weakening, and the Fae Blade’s demon-slaying power."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1577
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, leather-bound book,"
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.028535193405199746
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.0063411540900443885
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean14.41
std12.17
cv0.844
sampleLengths
023
132
223
331
485
535
66
78
819
922
1044
1111
126
1310
1420
1512
1620
173
1826
199
2026
2113
2235
236
245
254
267
277
285
2927
303
3165
328
3321
349
3518
363
374
3822
394
402
413
4212
4323
4423
4537
464
476
4820
497
44.59% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.2972972972972973
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners44
30.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences108
matches
0"Instead, the water hummed, and"
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences108
matches
0"It was the winter solstice,"
1"She turned back, and when"
2"Her voice softens, almost sad"
3"She’d left the flat forty"
4"she asked, nodding at the"
5"She plucked a silver flower"
6"they said, turning back, violet"
7"She fumbled for it, pulling"
8"She led them deeper, past"
9"She dropped it, and it"
10"she said, shocked"
11"It was cold, as always,"
12"*She wasn’t running anymore.*"
13"She tapped the pool, and"
14"They settled into the grass,"
15"She saw a woman, her"
16"She stood, too, and took"
17"It hummed, eager."
18"She was Rory Carter, sharp,"
19"She lunged, the blade slicing"
ratio0.241
29.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences108
matches
0"The wind off the Thames"
1"It was the winter solstice,"
2"Aurora had never believed in"
3"The standing stones were not"
4"Isolde said, her voice soft"
5"Nyx shifted beside her, their"
6"Aurora pressed a hand to"
7"The woman had smiled, but"
8"Isolde said, as if reading"
9"She turned back, and when"
10"The air thickened, sweet with"
11"The sky above the oaks"
12"Aurora’s breath hitched."
13"Grass that shimmered like crushed"
14"Isolde said, as Nyx let"
15"Her voice softens, almost sad"
16"Aurora glanced at her phone."
17"The screen flickered—*3:17 PM*."
18"She’d left the flat forty"
19"she asked, nodding at the"
ratio0.861
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
ratio0
50.26% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"In her pocket, the Heartstone Pendant pressed warm against her thigh, a faint, insistent pulse that matched the thrum in her own veins."
1"Nyx had wandered ten paces, their shadow stretching across the moonstone grass, rippling as if the ground beneath them weren’t solid."
2"She led them deeper, past a stream that sang—not with water, but with voices, human and otherwise, speaking in languages Aurora didn’t know."
3"Nyx closed their eyes, their form dissolving into shadow, no doubt scrying the edges of the Grove."
4"She saw a woman, her face hidden, standing in a garden of excess: vineyards heavy with fruit that glowed like embers, a feast laid out that included creatures s…"
5"She was staring at the pendant, which had fallen from Isolde’s pocket, glowing softly in the moonlight."
6"The scene weaves world-building through sensory detail—Aurora’s practicality clashing with the Grove’s wonder, Nyx’s shadowy observations, and Isolde’s cryptic …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Isolde said, her voice soft"
1"Isolde said, as if reading her mind"
2"she said, shocked"
3"Nyx corrected, their voice suddenly sharp"
4"Nyx said, shadow shifting to cover their face"
5"She tapped, and the Veil rippled, growing larger, brighter"
6"she said, her voice steady"
7"she said, almost to herself"
81.03% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Aurora pressed (press)"
1"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx corrected (correct)"
3"she spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.31
leniency0.621
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.138
72.3569%