Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8HQWR4QM3X6MYS2RA7KEN

Run Details

Duration:
22.8s
Cost:
$0.001135
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain fell in gray sheets, stitching the city together into a sodden blanket. Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles as she sprinted down Frith Street, her breath ragged but controlled—18 years of police training had turned panicky inhales into steady, rhythmical ones. The suspect was twenty paces ahead, a shadow in a black trench coat, their hood pulled low. Rain soaked her salt-and-pepper cropped hair, plastering it to her neck, and ran off the edges of her sharp jaw like a curtain of tears. Her leather watch, scuffed at the edges, ticked against her wrist, a metronome for the chase. “You can’t outrun the file, Ortega!” she called, though she knew the man wouldn’t stop. Not this time. Ortega was a runner, a middleman for the clique—the shadowy group of supernaturals she’d been chasing for six months, ever since the body of a bank manager washed up in the Thames, drained of blood but with no visible wounds, no marks. The ME had called it *the same as Morris*. Quinn’s chest tightened. Three years ago, DS Morris had vanished into a warehouse in Bermondsey, his radio static sputtering just before a flash of light that wasn’t a lightning strike. The case remained cold, but the photos of his bloodied uniform haunted her. *Supernatural origins she doesn’t yet understand*—the report from the coroner, scrawled in shaky handwriting. She’d never believed in ghosts or ghouls until Morris had been taken. Until Ortega had slipped a tiny, blackened bone into her evidence bag, marked *clique cache*. The suspect turned into an alley, ducking between crates stacked outside a closed market. Quinn skidded to a halt, skidding on a patch of oil, and barely caught herself. The alley was narrow, lit only by a flickering neon sign from the bar at the far end—*The Raven’s Nest*. She’d been there once, with Morris, during a tip about a missing witch. The walls had been covered in old maps and black-and-white photos, the air thick with whiskey and pipe smoke. But now, it looked like a mouth waiting to swallow. Ortega was gone. Quinn’s pulse quickened. She scanned the walls—graffiti in scrawled Spanish, a handprint of black paint that smelled of iron—and spotted a loose brick near the dumpster. A secret entrance? She pressed her palm to the brick, heard a low *click*, and pulled. The wall shifted inward, revealing a staircase wound tight, its stone steps slick with rain and age. Her flashlight beam trembled as she descended, the beam cutting through the dark. The air smelled of damp stone and something sharper—brine, like the sea, or maybe salt. At the bottom, she found a metal door, its surface pockmarked, a latch shaped like a serpent’s head. She ran a finger over the latch; it was warm, as if someone had just touched it. A whisper carried up the stairs—the sound of Ortega’s voice, too low to make out, but angry. *Fear*, Quinn thought. He wasn’t just running from the police—he was running from something else. From the clique. She pressed her ear to the door. Beyond it, a murmur of voices, strange and guttural. Then a laugh, high and thin, like wind through a keyhole. Quinn gripped the flashlight tighter. *The Veil Market*, she thought. The whispers of the force had called it that—an underground market for supernaturals, banned goods, and secrets. Morris had mentioned it once, in a half-drunk ramble after a wild night at a Séance club. *“They say it’s in an old Tube station,”* he’d said, *“under Camden. You show up with a bone token, and they let you in. But don’t ask questions.”* She’d dismissed it as paranoia. Now, as Ortega’s voice grew closer, she realized Morris had been right. The serpent’s head latch turned under her fingers. The door swung open, and a wave of heat hit her—warm air, thick with incense and the smell of charred meat. Beyond it, a vast cavern stretched out, the abandoned Platform 12 of Camden Town Tube station. The walls were lined with stalls, their awnings made of tattered velvet and animal hides. Firelight flickered from braziers, casting shadows that danced across the walls—some human, some not: a gargoyle with a tail of smoke, a woman with antlers sprouting from her skull, a man with scales covering his hands. Vendors called out in languages Quinn didn’t recognize, their stalls heaped with strange goods: vials of glowing liquid labeled *“moonwater,”* skulls with eyes that followed her movement, bundles of herbs that smelled like honey and rot. A boy with no eyes sat cross-legged on a pile of coins, his hands moving in a rhythm as he chanted. A vampire in a tailored suit leaned against a stall, his lips stretched into a smile that didn’t reach his eyes, his fingers tracing a dagger made of bone. Ortega had melted into the crowd. Quinn adjusted her coat—she’d left her badge in her car, hoping to blend in—and scanned the stalls. A woman with a fox’s tail flicked over her shoulder stood selling enchanted locks of hair, her voice a purr. *“Need permanence? My locks last seven years. Better than any man.”* “Excuse me,” Quinn said, her voice steady, so different from the girl’s. The woman turned, her eyes slitted, and Quinn met her gaze. *Don’t flinch*, she told herself. *You’re a detective. You belong here.* “Lost?” the woman asked, tilting her head. Her teeth were sharper than human. “Looking for a friend,” Quinn said, nodding at Ortega’s direction. “He said he’d meet someone here. Carlos.” The woman’s tail stilled. “Carlos doesn’t meet anyone. He’s… gone.” “Was he?” Quinn said, leaning in. “He had a bone token. A black one, etched with runes.” She described it, her eyes never leaving the woman’s face. The woman’s fingers tightened around the hair she was holding. “Bone tokens are for traders,” the woman said finally. “Not for runners. You’re not a trader.” Quinn smiled, slow and tight. “No. But I’m the police. And Ortega stole something from us. Something that belongs to the living.” The woman’s eyes widened. For a moment, she looked afraidnot of Quinn, but of something behind her. “Get out,” she said, her voice a growl. “Before the Warden finds you.” Quinn turned. A man stood in the shadows, his frame broad, his face hidden by a hood. He wore a long coat, its hem stained with what looked like blood. In his hand, a staff topped with a crystal that glowed red, like a dying embers. “The Warden,” the woman whispered, backing away. “He comes for liars.” The Warden took a step forward. His hood fell away, revealing a scalp lined with black, crackling veins, his eyes two pools of ice. “You seek the Veil Market,” he said, his voice a rumble. “You do not belong here.” Quinn reached into her coat, her hand closing around her gun. *Too slow*, she thought. The Warden raised his staff, and a jolt of pain lanced through her temples, like someone had stuck a hot needle in her brain. She dropped the gun, gasping. “Leave,” the Warden said, and this time, his voice was a command. “Or I will feed you to the Veil.” A scream echoed through the cavern. Ortega stood at the far end, his trench coat torn, a gash on his arm. Blood seeped through the fabric, black and sticky. Behind him, a shadowy creature with too many teeth and a snout like a boar lunged. Quinn didn’t think. She lunged for her gun, grabbed it, and fired. The creature staggered, its shoulder seared black. Ortega ran past her, heading for a metal exit labeled *STAFF ONLY*. “Ortega!” Quinn yelled, following. The Warden raised his staff, but a vendor—an old man with a beard made of snakes—threw a bucket of water at him. The crystal flared, and the Warden cursed, stepping back. Quinn reached the exit. It was locked, but she kicked it hard. The metal bent, and she pushed through, into a narrow service tunnel. Water dripped from the ceiling, pooling at her feet. Ortega was ten paces ahead, his breath ragged, his hand clutching his side. “Stop!” Quinn shouted. “You can’t run from this!” Ortega turned, his eyes wild. “It’s not the clique! It’s *him*—the one in the dark! He’s hungry, and he’s coming for all of us!” A crash echoed behind them. They both froze. Footsteps, slow and deliberate, echoed through the tunnel. Ortega grabbed a loose pipe, his hands shaking. “You don’t understand. He’s not just a supernatural. He’s *ancient*. He feeds on the veil between worlds, and the clique… they think they can control him. But they’re wrong. He’s already here. And he’s *woken up*.” The footsteps grew closer. Quinn shone her flashlight forward. The tunnel ended at a ladder, leading up to a manhole. Beyond the ladder, a figure stood in the dark—tall, cloaked, their face hidden by a hood. Their hand was raised, and Ortega let out a shriek, falling to his knees, his body convulsing. Quinn raised her gun, but the figure wasn’t looking at her. It was looking at Ortega, its lips curled in a smile. “You should have stayed behind the veil,” the figure said, its voice a low purr, like a cat toying with a mouse. The convulsions stopped. Ortega lay still, his eyes wide open, white as marbles. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She ran for the manhole, climbed up, and burst into the night. The rain hit her face, cold and sharp, and she stumbled into the street. Her watch read 2:17 AM. She pulled out her phone, dialing 911. “Unit 5, Frith Street. We need backup. And get a forensics team to Camden Tube Station, Platform 12. There’s something down there. Something alive.” She hung up, her eyes fixed on the dark mouth of the tunnel. The figure was nowhere to be seen, but she could still feel it—the weight of its gaze, the cold hand on her shoulder that wasn’t there. Three years ago, Morris had vanished into a warehouse with a flash of light. Tonight, Ortega had died in a tunnel with a figure that wasn’t human. Quinn gripped her watch, the leather warm under her fingers. She thought of Morris, of his laugh, of the way he’d always called her *Harlow*, like it was a secret. She thought of the bone token in her evidence bag, its runes glowing faintly even in the daylight. She wasn’t going to let them take anyone else. She turned and walked into the rain, her boots splashing through puddles, her mind made up. The Veil Market might be a place of shadows, but she was going to chase the light into the dark. The rain continued to fall, dyeing the city gray, but Harlow Quinn didn’t flinch. She was a detective, and the truth was always worth the chase.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the woman said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.552
leniency1
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.063
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1830
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1830
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"quickened"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count2
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"crystal"
count2
11
word"echoed"
count3
12
word"footsteps"
count2
13
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"quickened"
2"scanned"
3"trembled"
4"whisper"
5"velvet"
6"flickered"
7"tracing"
8"flicked"
9"etched"
10"crystal"
11"echoed"
12"footsteps"
13"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences135
matches
0"looked afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences148
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans19
markdownWords75
totalWords1807
ratio0.042
matches
0"the same as Morris"
1"Supernatural origins she doesn’t yet understand"
2"clique cache"
3"The Raven’s Nest"
4"click"
5"Fear"
6"The Veil Market"
7"“They say it’s in an old Tube station,”"
8"“under Camden. You show up with a bone token, and they let you in. But don’t ask questions.”"
9"“moonwater,”"
10"“Need permanence? My locks last seven years. Better than any man.”"
11"Don’t flinch"
12"You’re a detective. You belong here."
13"Too slow"
14"STAFF ONLY"
15"him"
16"ancient"
17"woken up"
18"Harlow"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions72
wordCount1576
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.59
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow3
Quinn25
Frith1
Street1
Thames1
Morris8
Bermondsey1
Ortega16
Raven1
Spanish1
Veil2
Séance1
Platform1
Camden1
Town1
Tube1
Warden5
Market2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Ortega"
4"Raven"
5"Warden"
6"Market"
places
0"Frith"
1"Street"
2"Thames"
3"Bermondsey"
4"Séance"
5"Camden"
6"Town"
7"Tube"
globalScore0.707
windowScore0.333
75.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like a mouth waiting to swallow"
1"smelled like honey and rot"
2"looked like blood"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.553
wordCount1807
matches
0"not of Quinn, but of something behind her"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences148
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean36.88
std25.08
cv0.68
sampleLengths
0102
169
284
391
43
559
663
735
827
972
105
1112
1296
1386
146
1548
1634
1713
1817
1910
2037
2116
2222
2317
2413
2546
2611
2740
2844
2920
3045
3131
3235
3346
348
3524
3616
3744
3853
3944
4013
4134
4231
4339
4427
4548
469
4736
4826
92.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences135
matches
0"been taken"
1"been covered"
2"was gone"
3"were lined"
4"was raised"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs278
matches
0"was running"
1"was holding"
2"wasn’t looking"
3"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences148
ratio0.115
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles as she sprinted down Frith Street, her breath ragged but controlled—18 years of police training had turned panicky inhales into steady, rhythmical ones."
1"Ortega was a runner, a middleman for the clique—the shadowy group of supernaturals she’d been chasing for six months, ever since the body of a bank manager washed up in the Thames, drained of blood but with no visible wounds, no marks."
2"*Supernatural origins she doesn’t yet understand*—the report from the coroner, scrawled in shaky handwriting."
3"The alley was narrow, lit only by a flickering neon sign from the bar at the far end—*The Raven’s Nest*."
4"She scanned the walls—graffiti in scrawled Spanish, a handprint of black paint that smelled of iron—and spotted a loose brick near the dumpster."
5"The air smelled of damp stone and something sharper—brine, like the sea, or maybe salt."
6"She ran a finger over the latch; it was warm, as if someone had just touched it."
7"A whisper carried up the stairs—the sound of Ortega’s voice, too low to make out, but angry."
8"He wasn’t just running from the police—he was running from something else."
9"The whispers of the force had called it that—an underground market for supernaturals, banned goods, and secrets."
10"The door swung open, and a wave of heat hit her—warm air, thick with incense and the smell of charred meat."
11"Firelight flickered from braziers, casting shadows that danced across the walls—some human, some not: a gargoyle with a tail of smoke, a woman with antlers sprouting from her skull, a man with scales covering his hands."
12"Quinn adjusted her coat—she’d left her badge in her car, hoping to blend in—and scanned the stalls."
13"For a moment, she looked afraid—not of Quinn, but of something behind her."
14"The Warden raised his staff, but a vendor—an old man with a beard made of snakes—threw a bucket of water at him."
15"Beyond the ladder, a figure stood in the dark—tall, cloaked, their face hidden by a hood."
16"The figure was nowhere to be seen, but she could still feel it—the weight of its gaze, the cold hand on her shoulder that wasn’t there."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1599
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.020637898686679174
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0031269543464665416
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences148
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences148
mean12.21
std7.68
cv0.629
sampleLengths
014
130
217
325
416
515
63
742
89
93
1027
1113
1214
1312
1415
1514
1615
1720
1813
1919
2010
213
223
2323
243
2513
2617
2713
2815
2918
3017
3117
323
3312
343
357
369
3711
385
395
4017
4117
4228
435
4412
458
4621
4716
4815
4936
50.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.34459459459459457
totalSentences148
uniqueOpeners51
50.51% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences132
matches
0"Then a laugh, high and"
1"*Too slow*, she thought."
ratio0.015
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences132
matches
0"Her leather watch, scuffed at"
1"she called, though she knew"
2"She’d never believed in ghosts"
3"She’d been there once, with"
4"She scanned the walls—graffiti in"
5"She pressed her palm to"
6"Her flashlight beam trembled as"
7"She ran a finger over"
8"He wasn’t just running from"
9"She pressed her ear to"
10"She’d dismissed it as paranoia."
11"*You’re a detective."
12"You belong here.*"
13"Her teeth were sharper than"
14"She described it, her eyes"
15"she said, her voice a"
16"He wore a long coat,"
17"His hood fell away, revealing"
18"he said, his voice a"
19"She dropped the gun, gasping."
ratio0.258
35.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences132
matches
0"The rain fell in gray"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed"
2"The suspect was twenty paces"
3"Her leather watch, scuffed at"
4"she called, though she knew"
5"Ortega was a runner, a"
6"The ME had called it"
7"Quinn’s chest tightened."
8"The case remained cold, but"
9"She’d never believed in ghosts"
10"The suspect turned into an"
11"Quinn skidded to a halt,"
12"The alley was narrow, lit"
13"She’d been there once, with"
14"The walls had been covered"
15"Ortega was gone."
16"Quinn’s pulse quickened."
17"She scanned the walls—graffiti in"
18"A secret entrance?"
19"She pressed her palm to"
ratio0.848
37.88% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences132
matches
0"Now, as Ortega’s voice grew"
ratio0.008
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Three years ago, DS Morris had vanished into a warehouse in Bermondsey, his radio static sputtering just before a flash of light that wasn’t a lightning strike."
1"She scanned the walls—graffiti in scrawled Spanish, a handprint of black paint that smelled of iron—and spotted a loose brick near the dumpster."
2"Firelight flickered from braziers, casting shadows that danced across the walls—some human, some not: a gargoyle with a tail of smoke, a woman with antlers spro…"
3"Their hand was raised, and Ortega let out a shriek, falling to his knees, his body convulsing."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice steady, so different from the girl’s"
1"she said, her voice a growl"
2"he said, his voice a rumble"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Vendors called out (call out)"
1"She described (describe)"
2"the woman whispered (whisper)"
3"Quinn yelled (yell)"
4"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.517
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
78.4693%