Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8J4DCAT4BRN4NFK143TVH

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.045759
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the cobblestones of Soho like a thousand accusations. Detective Harlow Quinn bolted down Wardour Street, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the garish neon of pub signs. The suspect—Tomás Herrera, that slippery former paramedic with his scarred arm and saint's medallion—had a thirty-second head start. She'd spotted him slipping out the back of The Raven's Nest, that dingy bar with its green neon bird mocking her from above the door. He'd clocked her stakeout, bolted like a fox sensing hounds. Quinn's breath came in sharp bursts, her sharp jaw set against the downpour. Water slicked her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, dripped from her worn leather watch as she pumped her arms with military precision. Eighteen years on the force, and this chase felt personal. DS Morris's death three years back still gnawed at her—unexplained, whispers of something unnatural. Herrera tied into that web, she knew it. Off-the-books treatments for god-knows-what crowd. "Stop! Police!" she shouted, voice slicing through the storm. But Herrera didn't slow. He veered left onto Old Compton Street, dodging a cluster of late-night revelers spilling from a club. Laughter turned to gasps as he shoved through, Quinn hot on his heels. She leaped over a fallen umbrella, her brown eyes locked on his dark curly head bobbing in the crowd. He was 5'10", olive-skinned, built like a man who'd hauled stretchers in Seville heat. That scar on his left forearm—knife attack, files said—flashed as he vaulted a low barrier. Herrera glanced back, warm brown eyes wide with something like regret. "You don't get it, Detective! This isn't your world!" "Save your breath for custody!" Quinn fired back, closing the gap. Her legs burned, but she pushed harder, weaving through tourists clutching plastic ponchos. He cut right, into a narrow alley reeking of garbage and stale beer. Quinn followed, the walls closing in, rain funneling down like a chute. Puddles deepened here, soaking her trousers to the knee. She slipped once, caught herself on rough brick, scraping her palm raw. Herrera burst out the other end onto Charing Cross Road, traffic a blur of headlights and honking taxis. He darted across, ignoring the red light, a black cab swerving with a blare that echoed off buildings. Quinn charged after, heart pounding. "Herrera! It's over!" He didn't respond, just kept running north, toward Tottenham Court Road. The city blurred—shop windows aglow with mannequins, street vendors packing up under tarps. Rain turned everything to a glossy smear, streetlights haloed in mist. She gained ground as he tired, his curls plastered flat. But he had the edge of desperation. Quinn's mind raced: why bolt now? She'd been tailing the clique for weeks, piecing together Morris's case. Supernatural origins, they'd whispered in the precinct. Bullshit, until the evidence piled up—witnesses vanishing, wounds that healed too fast. Herrera patched them up, no questions asked. Lost his NHS license for it. They hit Oxford Street, crowds thinning in the deluge. Herrera shoved past a busker strumming a sodden guitar, coins scattering like shrapnel. "Out of the way!" Quinn barked at stragglers, flashing her badge briefly. No time for protocol. He hung a sharp left, ducking into Goodge Street tube station, stairs slick with water. Quinn followed, the descent a echoey plunge. Commuters parting like waves, murmurs rippling. "Police business—clear the path!" Herrera leaped the turnstile, vaulting with athletic grace. Quinn badged the attendant, who buzzed her through. Down to the platform, Northern Line signs flickering. A train rumbled in, doors hissing open. He jumped aboard, squeezing through closing doors. Quinn lunged, prying them apart just enough to slip in. The car jolted forward, passengers eyeing them warily. Herrera backed away, chest heaving. "Quinn, listen. You're chasing shadows. Morris— it wasn't us." She advanced, hand on her cuffs. "Then why run? Why the backroom deals at that bar?" His Saint Christopher medallion glinted under fluorescent lights. "Because people like you shoot first, ask later." The train screeched into Warren Street. Herrera bolted as doors opened, Quinn right behind. Up escalators, shoving past suits and shoppers. Back to street level, rain unrelenting. They were in Fitzrovia now, buildings looming like sentinels. Herrera zigzagged east, toward Euston Road, breath ragged. Quinn's lungs burned, but resolve hardened. She couldn't let him vanish into the night. Not with Morris's ghost hanging over her. He crossed into Camden territory, streets narrowing, graffiti blooming on walls. The chase dragged on, minutes stretching into a brutal test. Herrera stumbled once, scar on his arm catching light from a passing lorry. "Give it up, Tomás!" she called, using his first name to unsettle him. He shot her a look over his shoulder. "You have no idea what's waiting, Detective. Turn back!" Camden High Street blurred by, market stalls shuttered against the storm. Herrera veered into a side street, past locked gates and overflowing bins. The air grew heavier, laced with something metallic, unnatural. Quinn's instincts prickled. This wasn't her beat—Camden's underbelly hid things the Met whispered about but never touched. She pressed on, rain stinging her eyes. He reached an old, barricaded entrance—an abandoned Tube access, boards splintered. Herrera glanced around, then slipped through a gap, vanishing into darkness. Quinn skidded to a halt, water pooling at her feet. Peering in, she saw stairs descending into gloom, faint glow from below. Voices echoed faintly, a murmur like a hidden bazaar. The Veil Market. Whispers in the precinct files—supernatural black market, enchanted crap, banned substances. Moved every full moon, entry by bone token. Tonight, beneath Camden, in some forsaken station. Herrera's footsteps faded down there. She touched her watch, a habit from her military days, grounding her. Follow? Unfamiliar territory, no backup, potentially hostile. But letting him go meant losing the thread on Morris, on the clique's secrets. Her hand hovered near her radio. Call it in? Or plunge ahead, sharp jaw set, brown eyes narrowing. Deep breath. The rain drummed on, urging her decision. Herrera's voice floated up, muffled. "Don't, Quinn. You'll regret it." She stepped forward, military bearing propelling her. The gap in the boards swallowed her, stairs creaking underfoot. Darkness enveloped her, the air thick with incense and something feral. Down she went, each step echoing. The glow intensified—torches? No, something ethereal, flickering like will-o'-wisps. Murmurs grew into a cacophony: haggling voices, strange languages, the clink of odd wares. At the bottom, the abandoned platform opened into a sprawling cavern. Stalls lined the tracks, draped in silks and shadows. Vendors with eyes that gleamed unnaturally peddled vials of glowing liquid, talismans carved from bone, scrolls whispering secrets. Quinn froze, scanning for Herrera. He melted into the crowd—figures in cloaks, some with scales, others with horns half-hidden. A burly seller with tusks protruding from his jaw eyed her. "Fresh meat? Got your token?" She ignored him, pushing deeper. Heart raced. This place reeked of illegality, of the impossible. No turning back now. Herrera darted between stalls, glancing back. She pursued, weaving through the throng. A woman with feathers instead of hair cackled as she passed. "Lost lamb in the wolf den!" Quinn's hand brushed her sidearm, reassurance in the cold metal. The market pulsed with energy, air humming like static before a storm. He slipped behind a curtained booth, selling what looked like bottled dreams. Quinn followed, parting the fabric. Inside, dim lanterns revealed shelves of arcane oddities. Herrera stood cornered, hands up. "You followed. Stupid move." "Tell me about Morris," she demanded, voice low and lethal. His warm brown eyes flickered. "He tangled with forces beyond him. Like you are now." A shadow moved behind her—another figure? Quinn whirled, but too late. Something hard cracked against her skull. Blackness swam in. She dropped to her knees, world tilting. When vision cleared, Herrera kneeled beside her, scar vivid in the lantern light. "I warned you." "You... hit me?" she growled, struggling up. He shook his head. "Not me. Market has its own rules." Footsteps approached, heavy and deliberate. Quinn reached for her gun, but her fingers fumbled. A voice boomed from the shadows. "Intruder without token. What shall we do with her?" Herrera stood, medallion swinging. "She's with me. Back off." The figure emerged—a hulking shape with eyes like coals. "Lies. She reeks of law." Quinn pushed to her feet, swaying. The market's din filtered in, a symphony of threats. She had to decide—fight, flee, or bluff. Her sharp jaw tightened. "I'm here for answers. Not trouble." The coal-eyed one laughed, a rumble like grinding stones. "Answers cost. And you ain't paid." Herrera grabbed her arm. "Quinn, we need to move. Now." She shook him off. "Not without the truth." More shadows gathered, circling the booth. Whispers spread: "Cop... human... feast?" Tension coiled. Quinn's brown eyes darted, assessing exits. The underground pressed in, a labyrinth of peril. Herrera tugged again. "This way—there's a back tunnel." She hesitated, weighing the odds. Follow him deeper into this madness? Or stand ground, risk everything? A vendor's cry pierced the air: "Enchanted blades! Cut through veils!" The coal-eyed figure advanced, claws extending. Quinn's decision crystallized. She bolted after Herrera, into the depths. They ran through twisting corridors, market stalls giving way to raw stone. Echoes of pursuit nipped at their heels. "Why help me?" she panted. "Because you're not the enemy," he replied, voice steady. "Not yet." A gate loomed—rusted, half-open. Beyond, darkness yawned. Herrera slipped through. Quinn paused at the threshold, rain's distant thunder mocking her from above. Follow into the unknown? Or turn back to the familiar storm? Her watch ticked, relentless. Brown eyes hardened. She stepped through.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags35
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Herrera glanced back [back]"
1"Herrera tugged again. [again]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.673
leniency1
rawRatio0.057
effectiveRatio0.057
96.91% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1620
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"warily"
count1
highlights
0"warily"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
19.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1620
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"echoed"
count2
1
word"charged"
count1
2
word"pounding"
count1
3
word"raced"
count2
4
word"looming"
count1
5
word"sentinels"
count1
6
word"resolve"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count2
9
word"echoing"
count1
10
word"cacophony"
count1
11
word"scanning"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"hulking"
count1
15
word"symphony"
count1
16
word"tension"
count1
17
word"peril"
count1
18
word"crystallized"
count1
19
word"depths"
count1
20
word"echoes"
count1
21
word"loomed"
count1
22
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"charged"
2"pounding"
3"raced"
4"looming"
5"sentinels"
6"resolve"
7"gloom"
8"footsteps"
9"echoing"
10"cacophony"
11"scanning"
12"pulsed"
13"flickered"
14"hulking"
15"symphony"
16"tension"
17"peril"
18"crystallized"
19"depths"
20"echoes"
21"loomed"
22"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen67
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1587
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
61.35% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions99
wordCount1410
uniqueNames35
maxNameDensity1.77
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn24
Wardour1
Street6
Tomás1
Herrera25
Raven1
Nest1
Morris5
Old1
Compton1
Charing1
Cross1
Road3
Tottenham1
Court1
Oxford1
Goodge1
Northern1
Line1
Saint1
Christopher1
Warren1
Fitzrovia1
Euston1
Camden4
High1
Met1
Tube1
Veil1
Market2
Footsteps1
Cut1
Follow3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Raven"
5"Morris"
6"Line"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Met"
10"Market"
11"Footsteps"
places
0"Soho"
1"Wardour"
2"Street"
3"Old"
4"Compton"
5"Charing"
6"Cross"
7"Road"
8"Tottenham"
9"Court"
10"Oxford"
11"Goodge"
12"Warren"
13"Fitzrovia"
14"Euston"
15"Camden"
16"High"
globalScore0.613
windowScore0.667
80.56% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something like regret"
1"looked like bottled dreams. Quinn followe"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1587
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean21.16
std14.58
cv0.689
sampleLengths
083
171
243
348
420
524
646
736
88
935
1066
1122
1216
1328
144
1531
1625
1714
1816
1916
2021
2123
2221
2334
2413
2517
2632
2724
2822
2931
3029
3138
3218
339
3410
3528
3629
3738
3819
3916
4019
4129
4222
4317
4417
4510
4615
4717
4810
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs307
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences109
ratio0.128
matches
0"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, that slippery former paramedic with his scarred arm and saint's medallion—had a thirty-second head start."
1"DS Morris's death three years back still gnawed at her—unexplained, whispers of something unnatural."
2"He didn't respond, just kept running north, toward Tottenham Court Road. The city blurred—shop windows aglow with mannequins, street vendors packing up under tarps. Rain turned everything to a glossy smear, streetlights haloed in mist."
3"She gained ground as he tired, his curls plastered flat. But he had the edge of desperation. Quinn's mind raced: why bolt now? She'd been tailing the clique for weeks, piecing together Morris's case. Supernatural origins, they'd whispered in the precinct. Bullshit, until the evidence piled up—witnesses vanishing, wounds that healed too fast. Herrera patched them up, no questions asked. Lost his NHS license for it."
4"Morris— it wasn't us.\""
5"Quinn's instincts prickled. This wasn't her beat—Camden's underbelly hid things the Met whispered about but never touched. She pressed on, rain stinging her eyes."
6"He reached an old, barricaded entrance—an abandoned Tube access, boards splintered. Herrera glanced around, then slipped through a gap, vanishing into darkness."
7"The Veil Market. Whispers in the precinct files—supernatural black market, enchanted crap, banned substances. Moved every full moon, entry by bone token. Tonight, beneath Camden, in some forsaken station."
8"Down she went, each step echoing. The glow intensified—torches? No, something ethereal, flickering like will-o'-wisps. Murmurs grew into a cacophony: haggling voices, strange languages, the clink of odd wares."
9"Quinn froze, scanning for Herrera. He melted into the crowd—figures in cloaks, some with scales, others with horns half-hidden."
10"A shadow moved behind her—another figure? Quinn whirled, but too late. Something hard cracked against her skull."
11"The figure emerged—a hulking shape with eyes like coals. \"Lies."
12"Quinn pushed to her feet, swaying. The market's din filtered in, a symphony of threats. She had to decide—fight, flee, or bluff."
13"A gate loomed—rusted, half-open. Beyond, darkness yawned."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount342
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.011695906432748537
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.005847953216374269
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean14.56
std11.09
cv0.762
sampleLengths
010
120
218
325
410
513
621
710
814
98
105
119
124
1317
1413
1519
1629
1716
184
1924
2046
2136
226
232
2435
2566
2622
2716
2828
294
3031
3125
327
333
344
359
367
3716
3821
3923
4021
4134
4213
4315
442
4532
4624
4722
4831
4929
82.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4954128440366973
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners54
35.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences93
matches
0"More shadows gathered, circling the"
ratio0.011
82.37% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences93
matches
0"She'd spotted him slipping out"
1"He'd clocked her stakeout, bolted"
2"she shouted, voice slicing through"
3"He veered left onto Old"
4"She leaped over a fallen"
5"He cut right, into a"
6"He didn't respond, just kept"
7"She gained ground as he"
8"They hit Oxford Street, crowds"
9"He hung a sharp left,"
10"He jumped aboard, squeezing through"
11"You're chasing shadows."
12"She advanced, hand on her"
13"His Saint Christopher medallion glinted"
14"He crossed into Camden territory,"
15"she called, using his first"
16"He shot her a look"
17"He reached an old, barricaded"
18"Her hand hovered near her"
19"She stepped forward, military bearing"
ratio0.344
46.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences93
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn bolted down"
1"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, that slippery"
2"She'd spotted him slipping out"
3"He'd clocked her stakeout, bolted"
4"Quinn's breath came in sharp"
5"Water slicked her closely cropped"
6"DS Morris's death three years"
7"Herrera tied into that web,"
8"she shouted, voice slicing through"
9"He veered left onto Old"
10"Laughter turned to gasps as"
11"She leaped over a fallen"
12"Herrera glanced back, warm brown"
13"This isn't your"
14"Quinn fired back, closing the"
15"He cut right, into a"
16"Herrera burst out the other"
17"Quinn charged after, heart pounding."
18"He didn't respond, just kept"
19"She gained ground as he"
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences93
matches(empty)
ratio0
38.69% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn bolted down Wardour Street, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the garish neon of pub signs."
1"Herrera burst out the other end onto Charing Cross Road, traffic a blur of headlights and honking taxis. He darted across, ignoring the red light, a black cab s…"
2"She gained ground as he tired, his curls plastered flat. But he had the edge of desperation. Quinn's mind raced: why bolt now? She'd been tailing the clique for…"
3"Herrera leaped the turnstile, vaulting with athletic grace. Quinn badged the attendant, who buzzed her through. Down to the platform, Northern Line signs flicke…"
4"He crossed into Camden territory, streets narrowing, graffiti blooming on walls. The chase dragged on, minutes stretching into a brutal test. Herrera stumbled o…"
5"She stepped forward, military bearing propelling her. The gap in the boards swallowed her, stairs creaking underfoot. Darkness enveloped her, the air thick with…"
6"At the bottom, the abandoned platform opened into a sprawling cavern. Stalls lined the tracks, draped in silks and shadows. Vendors with eyes that gleamed unnat…"
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she shouted, voice slicing through the storm"
1"she demanded, voice low and lethal"
2"he replied, voice steady"
34.62% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"Quinn barked (bark)"
2"dim lanterns revealed (reveal)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"The coal-eyed (eye)"
5"she panted (pant)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.231
76.2763%