Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8JWA1XCH7H70RYYDVZACR

Run Details

Duration:
20.7s
Cost:
$0.001643
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Camden High Street, turning the gutters into rushing torrents that swallowed cigarette butts and crumpled flyers. Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the downpour, her boots slapping against the slick asphalt. Water streamed from her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair, blurring her vision as she dodged a cluster of late-night revelers huddled under umbrellas outside a kebab shop. The suspect—Tomás Herrera, the off-the-books medic with ties to that shadowy clique—darted ahead, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his scalp, olive skin glistening under the sodium glow of streetlamps. She had picked up his trail two blocks back, after a tip from an informant at The Raven's Nest in Soho. The bar's green neon sign had flickered behind her like a dying eye as she left, the scent of stale ale and whispered secrets clinging to her coat. Now, here in Camden, the chase pulled her north through the labyrinth of markets and alleys, the city's pulse throbbing with distant bass from hidden clubs. Tomás glanced over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes catching the light for a split second—wide, not panicked, but calculating. He knew she closed the gap. "Stop!" Harlow's voice cut through the rain's roar, sharp as her jawline. No response. He veered left, plunging into a narrower side street flanked by brick warehouses, their graffiti-smeared walls bleeding colors in the wet. Puddles exploded under her feet as she followed, her worn leather watch ticking against her wrist like a countdown. Eighteen years on the force had honed her pursuit, but this felt different—edgier, laced with the unexplained ghosts from DS Morris's death three years prior. Supernatural whispers she shoved down, focusing on the rhythm of her breath. Tomás hit a chain-link fence at the street's end, the metal rattling as he vaulted it with surprising grace for a former paramedic. His Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his collar, catching the faint moonlight before vanishing over the top. Harlow cursed under her breath, gripped the links, and hauled herself up. Barbed wire snagged her sleeve, tearing fabric and skin alike, but she dropped to the other side without breaking stride. The alley beyond opened into a derelict lot, overgrown with weeds that whipped at her calves. Abandoned cars hulked like rusted beasts, their windows shattered into jagged teeth. He was heading for the old Tube entrance, she realized—the boarded-up mouth of a forgotten station, chained and padlocked for decades. Camden's underbelly, where the living city gave way to the buried one. Rain pooled in the lot's craters, reflecting the chase in fractured mirrors. Tomás paused at the entrance, fumbling with something in his pocket. A token? Her mind raced. Intel on the clique mentioned hidden spots, black markets peddling things no sane cop should touch. She slowed, drawing her service pistol from its holster under her coat, the metal cold and slick in her palm. "Police! Hands where I can see them!" The words echoed off the concrete barriers, swallowed by the storm. Tomás turned halfway, rain carving rivulets down his face. His scar along the left forearm flexed as he raised empty hands, but his eyes flicked to the shadowed doorway behind him. "You don't want to go in there, Detective Quinn." His Spanish lilt cut through the noise, steady despite the circumstances. Born in Seville, he'd told her once during an earlier interview—before he clammed up about his lost NHS license and those "unauthorized treatments." She advanced, pistol leveled, water dripping from the barrel. "What I want is answers. About the bodies turning up with no records, no explanations. Your name keeps surfacing, Herrera." Step by step, she closed the distance, her military bearing unbroken even as mud sucked at her boots. The air thickened here, carrying a metallic tang beneath the rain—old rails, decay, and something sharper, like ozone after lightning. He backed toward the entrance, fingers brushing the chains. "This isn't your world. Turn back." A click sounded, faint but deliberate. The padlock popped open, swinging loose with a groan. How? No key in sight. Tomás's medallion glinted again as he pushed the boards aside, revealing a yawning blackness that seemed to exhale damp air laced with murmurs—impossible, yet there. Harlow's pulse hammered in her ears. Three years ago, Morris had chased a lead into a warehouse off the Thames. Unexplained circumstances: shadows that moved wrong, a scream cut short. Official report called it a gas leak. She knew better. This felt like that— the veil thinning. But duty pulled her forward. "You're under arrest for suspicion of aiding and abetting. Move, and I'll shoot." A wry smile tugged at his lips, rain masking any tremor. "Arrest me up here, then. But if you follow..." He slipped through the gap, his form swallowed by the dark staircase descending into the earth. She holstered the pistol—shooting into unknown territory screamed bad form—and squeezed after him. The stairs spiraled down, steps uneven and slick with algae. Her hand trailed the wall, fingers coming away coated in grime that pulsed faintly warm. Impossible. Flashlight beam from her phone pierced the gloom, illuminating graffiti in languages she didn't recognize: curling runes that seemed to shift when she blinked. The air grew heavier, pressing against her chest like an unseen hand. Distant echoes rose—voices haggling, clinks of glass, the sizzle of something cooking over open flame. The stairs bottomed out into a platform, the abandoned Tube station's bones laid bare. But this wasn't abandonment. Torres of crates lined the walls, stacked with vials glowing faint blues and greens. Shadows twisted into forms that resolved into people—or things wearing people's skins. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian haggled over a jar of writhing smoke with a man whose fingers ended in hooks. The scent hit her: incense, blood, and alchemical bite. The Veil Market. Her research had brushed it—whispers from informants too scared to name it outright. Entry by bone token, they said. Tomás must have one. He wove through the crowd ahead, shoulders brushing vendors who shot him nods but eyed her approach with predatory curiosity. Harlow kept low, blending into the throng as best she could, her coat blending with the damp coats of early browsers. The market sprawled beneath the station, tunnels branching into alcoves lit by lanterns that burned without flame. Stalls hawked enchanted blades that hummed to the touch, potions bubbling in skulls, scrolls promising forgotten lore. A child—no, something with a child's face but too many teeth—tugged at a parent's sleeve, pointing at a caged bird that sang prophecies in reverse. Tension coiled in her gut. This place thrummed with danger, every glance her way a potential spark. She spotted Tomás at a junction, pausing to speak with a hooded figure. Their exchange was rapid, hands flashing gestures that sealed a deal—information, perhaps, or a warning about her. He nodded, then plunged into a side tunnel, the crowd parting like water around a stone. Harlow hesitated at the tunnel's mouth. Unfamiliar territory, rules she didn't know. One wrong step, and she could end up like Morris—disappeared into the unexplained. But letting Tomás vanish meant the clique walked free, their crimes buried deeper. Suspects in her files: overdoses masking ritual poisonings, missing persons tied to this underbelly. Her sharp jaw clenched, rain still dripping from her hair onto the gritty floor. A vendor nearby, scales glinting on his neck, leaned in. "First time, copper? Best turn back. The market don't take kindly to badges." She ignored him, eyes locked on the tunnel's curve where Tomás had disappeared. Her watch ticked onward, seconds stretching. Follow, and risk everything. Stay, and lose the lead. The decision hung, the market's pulse urging her deeper into the dark. The hooded figure from earlier drifted past, murmuring to no one. "The detective enters the veil. Threads unravel." Harlow's hand tightened on her pistol's grip beneath her coat. The tunnel beckoned, shadows lengthening as footsteps echoed from within—Tomás's, or something waiting. She took a breath, the air thick with forbidden scents, and stepped forward, the line between worlds blurring under her boots. Deeper in, the tunnel widened into a cavernous hall, arches ribbed like ancient bones supporting the ceiling. Lanterns swung from chains, casting swaying pools of light that danced across faces half-hidden in hoods and masks. Tomás moved with purpose now, no longer glancing back, his medallion a faint gleam against his shirt. He bartered at a stall piled with bone tokens—entry keys, she guessed—trading a small pouch that clinked like coins mixed with something denser. She shadowed him, weaving past a group of patrons examining a map etched on human skin, the lines pulsing with inner light. Whispers followed her: "Law from above," "Smells of silver," "She carries iron—trouble." Her bearing held, steps measured, but sweat mixed with rain on her skin. The market's energy buzzed, alive and watchful, as if the walls themselves judged her intrusion. Tomás reached another junction, this one guarded by a pair of figures in tattered cloaks, their eyes milky white. He flashed his token—a carved bone thumb slipping from his pocket—and they parted. Harlow hung back, pulse racing. No token for her. Bluffing might work, or it might end with hooks in her flesh. The guard on the left tilted his head, nostrils flaring. "State your business, topsider." She straightened, channeling the precision that had earned her decorations. "Looking for Herrera. Official." Laughter bubbled from the right guard, low and wet. "Official means nothing here. Token or out." Tomás's form receded down the passage, merging with the flow of cloaked buyers. Harlow's mind whirled—options narrowing. Radio for backup? Signal dead down here, swallowed by stone. Rush past? Risk a brawl in a den of the uncanny. From the passage, Tomás's voice drifted back, calling to someone unseen. "Prepare the back way. Copper's on my tail." The guards shifted, hands drifting to concealed weapons. The decision crystallized: follow now, or watch the trail go cold in this labyrinth of lies. Harlow's brown eyes narrowed, committing to the plunge. She lunged forward, shoulder-checking the left guard as shouts erupted behind her. The passage twisted, walls closing in with jagged protrusions that snagged her coat. Footsteps pounded—hers, and pursuers'. Tomás sped up ahead, silhouette flickering in the erratic light. The air grew colder, carrying echoes of the surface storm muffled to a distant rumble. Side alcoves tempted with distractions: a stall of whispering mirrors showing alternate fates, another with jars of captured screams that begged release. She gained ground, breath steady despite the burn in her legs. "Herrera! It's over!" He spun into a wider chamber, the market's heart pulsing around them. Vendors froze mid-haggle, eyes turning as one. Tomás faced her, flanked by two clique members—rough types with tattoos that glowed faintly. "You shouldn't have come, Detective." Harlow drew her pistol again, sweeping the room. Enchanted goods hummed in response, a vial shattering on a shelf from the proximity of ordinary steel. Tension crackled, the crowd forming a ring of silent witnesses. Her decision echoed in the standoff: in too deep to retreat, the unknown territory now her battlefield. One of the flankers stepped forward, hand on a dagger hilt. "Leave the veil intact, or join it." Tomás raised a hand, halting him. Rainwater still dripped from Harlow's chin, pooling at her feet. The chamber's air thickened, charged with the supernatural edge she feared yet chased. No turning back now—the pursuit demanded she press on, into the fray.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:31:48.172Z" 2/20/2026, 7:31:48 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.389
leniency0.778
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1948
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1948
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count4
3
word"calculating"
count1
4
word"shattered"
count1
5
word"fractured"
count1
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count3
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"lilt"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"gloom"
count1
12
word"echoes"
count2
13
word"resolved"
count1
14
word"tension"
count2
15
word"potential"
count1
16
word"jaw clenched"
count1
17
word"glinting"
count1
18
word"unravel"
count1
19
word"footsteps"
count2
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"measured"
count1
22
word"racing"
count1
23
word"uncanny"
count1
24
word"crystallized"
count1
25
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"flickered"
2"pulse"
3"calculating"
4"shattered"
5"fractured"
6"raced"
7"echoed"
8"flicked"
9"lilt"
10"pulsed"
11"gloom"
12"echoes"
13"resolved"
14"tension"
15"potential"
16"jaw clenched"
17"glinting"
18"unravel"
19"footsteps"
20"etched"
21"measured"
22"racing"
23"uncanny"
24"crystallized"
25"charged"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences139
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1910
ratio0
matches(empty)
79.55% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"Entry by bone token, they said."
1"He bartered at a stall piled with bone tokens—entry keys, she guessed—trading a small pouch that clinked like coins mixe…"
99.30% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1775
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.01
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Camden3
High1
Street1
Harlow12
Quinn1
Tomás18
Herrera1
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Morris3
Saint1
Christopher1
Tube2
Spanish1
Born1
Seville1
Thames1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Veil"
8"Market"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Raven"
4"Soho"
5"Seville"
6"Thames"
globalScore0.993
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"blackness that seemed to exhale damp air laced with murmurs—impossible, yet there"
1"felt like that— the veil thinning"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.524
wordCount1910
matches
0"not panicked, but calculating"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean54.57
std29.3
cv0.537
sampleLengths
093
1101
291
3101
497
518
674
767
860
965
1036
1190
12101
13100
1463
1566
1623
1740
1818
1944
2075
2162
2253
2314
2414
2516
2638
2719
2844
2964
3014
3138
3252
3318
3441
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs332
matches
0"was heading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount27
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences149
ratio0.148
matches
0"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, the off-the-books medic with ties to that shadowy clique—darted ahead, his short curly dark brown hair plastered to his scalp, olive skin glistening under the sodium glow of streetlamps."
1"Tomás glanced over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes catching the light for a split second—wide, not panicked, but calculating."
2"Eighteen years on the force had honed her pursuit, but this felt different—edgier, laced with the unexplained ghosts from DS Morris's death three years prior."
3"He was heading for the old Tube entrance, she realized—the boarded-up mouth of a forgotten station, chained and padlocked for decades."
4"Born in Seville, he'd told her once during an earlier interview—before he clammed up about his lost NHS license and those \"unauthorized treatments.\""
5"The air thickened here, carrying a metallic tang beneath the rain—old rails, decay, and something sharper, like ozone after lightning."
6"Tomás's medallion glinted again as he pushed the boards aside, revealing a yawning blackness that seemed to exhale damp air laced with murmurs—impossible, yet there."
7"This felt like that— the veil thinning."
8"She holstered the pistol—shooting into unknown territory screamed bad form—and squeezed after him."
9"Distant echoes rose—voices haggling, clinks of glass, the sizzle of something cooking over open flame."
10"Shadows twisted into forms that resolved into people—or things wearing people's skins."
11"Her research had brushed it—whispers from informants too scared to name it outright."
12"A child—no, something with a child's face but too many teeth—tugged at a parent's sleeve, pointing at a caged bird that sang prophecies in reverse."
13"Their exchange was rapid, hands flashing gestures that sealed a deal—information, perhaps, or a warning about her."
14"One wrong step, and she could end up like Morris—disappeared into the unexplained."
15"The tunnel beckoned, shadows lengthening as footsteps echoed from within—Tomás's, or something waiting."
16"He bartered at a stall piled with bone tokens—entry keys, she guessed—trading a small pouch that clinked like coins mixed with something denser."
17"He flashed his token—a carved bone thumb slipping from his pocket—and they parted."
18"Harlow's mind whirled—options narrowing."
19"Footsteps pounded—hers, and pursuers'."
20"Tomás faced her, flanked by two clique members—rough types with tattoos that glowed faintly."
21"No turning back now—the pursuit demanded she press on, into the fray."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1623
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"heavier, pressing against her"
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.015403573629081947
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0036968576709796672
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean12.82
std6.92
cv0.54
sampleLengths
021
114
226
332
421
528
626
720
86
912
102
1121
1219
1325
1412
1523
1618
1712
1820
1916
2012
2121
2212
2312
2411
252
263
2716
2820
2918
309
3122
3220
3323
349
3538
3620
379
3812
399
401
414
4225
436
4414
4510
467
473
487
495
72.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.44966442953020136
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners67
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences134
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences134
matches
0"She had picked up his"
1"He knew she closed the"
2"He veered left, plunging into"
3"His Saint Christopher medallion swung"
4"He was heading for the"
5"Her mind raced."
6"She slowed, drawing her service"
7"His scar along the left"
8"His Spanish lilt cut through"
9"She advanced, pistol leveled, water"
10"He backed toward the entrance,"
11"She knew better."
12"He slipped through the gap,"
13"She holstered the pistol—shooting into"
14"Her hand trailed the wall,"
15"Her research had brushed it—whispers"
16"He wove through the crowd"
17"She spotted Tomás at a"
18"Their exchange was rapid, hands"
19"He nodded, then plunged into"
ratio0.239
68.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences134
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"Water streamed from her closely"
2"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, the off-the-books"
3"She had picked up his"
4"The bar's green neon sign"
5"Tomás glanced over his shoulder,"
6"He knew she closed the"
7"Harlow's voice cut through the"
8"He veered left, plunging into"
9"Puddles exploded under her feet"
10"Tomás hit a chain-link fence"
11"His Saint Christopher medallion swung"
12"Harlow cursed under her breath,"
13"The alley beyond opened into"
14"He was heading for the"
15"Camden's underbelly, where the living"
16"Rain pooled in the lot's"
17"Tomás paused at the entrance,"
18"Her mind raced."
19"Intel on the clique mentioned"
ratio0.784
37.31% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"Now, here in Camden, the"
ratio0.007
39.68% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Rain hammered the pavements of Camden High Street, turning the gutters into rushing torrents that swallowed cigarette butts and crumpled flyers."
1"His Saint Christopher medallion swung free from his collar, catching the faint moonlight before vanishing over the top."
2"Barbed wire snagged her sleeve, tearing fabric and skin alike, but she dropped to the other side without breaking stride."
3"Tomás's medallion glinted again as he pushed the boards aside, revealing a yawning blackness that seemed to exhale damp air laced with murmurs—impossible, yet t…"
4"Unexplained circumstances: shadows that moved wrong, a scream cut short."
5"Shadows twisted into forms that resolved into people—or things wearing people's skins."
6"He wove through the crowd ahead, shoulders brushing vendors who shot him nods but eyed her approach with predatory curiosity."
7"Stalls hawked enchanted blades that hummed to the touch, potions bubbling in skulls, scrolls promising forgotten lore."
8"A child—no, something with a child's face but too many teeth—tugged at a parent's sleeve, pointing at a caged bird that sang prophecies in reverse."
9"Lanterns swung from chains, casting swaying pools of light that danced across faces half-hidden in hoods and masks."
10"He bartered at a stall piled with bone tokens—entry keys, she guessed—trading a small pouch that clinked like coins mixed with something denser."
11"The market's energy buzzed, alive and watchful, as if the walls themselves judged her intrusion."
12"She straightened, channeling the precision that had earned her decorations."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"A click sounded, faint but deliberate"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
80.7758%