Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8NJMQ03E41YFNR0ZP2K5M

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Duration:
1m 2s
Cost:
$0.001187
Provider:
Parasail

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ice clinked, a brittle sound against glass that felt too loud in the dimness of The Raven’s Nest. He hadn’t bothered with a coaster, the condensation already beading on the dark wood. Just nursing the amber liquid, watching the reflections shimmer. “Rory?” The voice was a rusty hinge, worn smooth with disuse. He hadn't heard it in…God, how long *had* it been? Ten years? More? He didn’t turn immediately, letting the sound settle, confirming it wasn’t a phantom echo of a past he’d tried hard to bury. Finally, he raised his head. And nearly choked on his scotch. She hadn’t changed, not exactly. The black hair was still straight, still fell to her shoulders, and the bright blue eyes hadn’t dulled at all. But everything else… It wasn’t the physical alterations, though there *were* those—a sharper angle to the jaw, a hardness around the mouth that hadn’t been there—it was the weight she carried. It clung to her like smoke, blurring the edges of her usual composure. “Evan,” she said, her voice flat, devoid of warmth. She hadn’t moved from the entrance, was still silhouetted against the green glow of the neon sign. He managed a nod, took another sip, needing the burn to ground him. “Didn’t think I’d see you here.” “I live upstairs.” Right. Silas’ bar. He’d forgotten. Or maybe he’d deliberately avoided remembering. She moved then, threading her way through the scattered tables, her movements efficient, economical. She stopped a few feet away, not close enough to touch, but close enough that he could see the tiny crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a faded memory he’d once known so intimately. “Working for Silas?” she asked, her gaze sweeping the room, avoiding his. “Deliveries for Yu-Fei, mostly,” he said, gesturing vaguely towards the back. “Silas keeps me supplied with… odd jobs.” “Odd jobs.” She repeated the phrase with a delicate twist of irony. “Still involved, then?” He felt a prickle of annoyance. “Involved in what, Rory? Helping an old friend?” She finally met his eyes, and the blue was glacial. “Don’t. Just… don’t.” A small table sat empty near the larger window. He gestured towards it. “Sit. Let’s not have a shouting match in Silas’ establishment.” She hesitated, then moved, settling into the worn velvet chair with an almost audible sigh. He didn’t offer to pull it out, didn’t offer anything, really. He simply watched her, cataloging the changes. She wasn’t the Rory he remembered. He hadn’t even realised how much his memory had smoothed the edges. The girl he knew had possessed a restless energy, a quick wit, a laugh that could fill a room. This woman was…contained. Measured. A barman, a young man with a shaved head and multiple piercings, appeared silently and took her order—a gin and tonic. “So,” he said, filling the silence. “What brings you to this corner of Soho? Besides a convenient landlord?” “I have a case.” “A case?” He raised an eyebrow. “You back to law?” She shook her head. “Private work. A missing person. The client wants discretion.” Silas. He was likely the one who’d hired her. The Spymaster always had a network, and a penchant for tangled webs. “Sounds…complicated.” “They usually are.” She took a sip of her drink, her gaze fixed on the condensation trailing down the glass. "Heard about your… adventures in Prague.” The air in the small space seemed to thicken suddenly. Prague. He’d pushed that particular chapter of his life into a sealed box, and now here she was, picking at the lock. “Water under the bridge,” he said, his voice carefully neutral. “Is it? A botched operation, they called it. You lucky to walk away with a limp.” He clenched his jaw. He hated this. Hated the way she was peeling back the layers, forcing him to confront the ghosts he’d worked so hard to silence. “I had a bad knee.” “You had a *wake-up call*. And you traded it in for delivering dumplings and running errands for Silas.” “It’s a living.” “Is it? Or is it hiding?” He drained his glass, the scotch offering little comfort. “You always were good at getting straight to the point.” “Someone had to be. You were always lost in your head.” She finally looked at him again, her eyes assessing, almost clinical. “What happened to the ambitious lawyer, Evan? The one who wanted to change the world?” “The world doesn't need changing, Rory. It needs accepting.” He reached for the bottle, signaled the bartender for a refill. “That’s what you tell yourself, isn’t it?” She ran a finger around the rim of her glass. “A convenient excuse for giving up.” He slammed the fresh glass down, some of the amber liquid sloshing over the side. “And what about you? The bright young thing at university? The one with all the answers? Where did your idealism go?” Her smile was brittle, humourless. “I learned that answers are rarely simple, Evan. And idealism is a luxury you can’t afford when you’re staring into the abyss.” “You’ve seen the abyss?” He hadn’t meant the question to come out sounding so sharp, so accusatory. She looked away again, her gaze drifting towards the back of the bar, where Silas stood, polishing glasses with a meticulousness that bordered on obsessive. “Let’s just say I’ve seen things. Things you wouldn’t believe.” “Try me.” She shook her head. “Some things are better left buried.” “Like Prague?” he pressed, relentlessly. He needed to know. Needed to understand if the guilt devoured her as it did him. “Like everything.” Her voice was barely a whisper. The bar door swung open, letting in a blast of cold night air and a group of boisterous tourists. The sudden noise seemed to break the spell, momentarily disrupting the heavy silence. “Look,” he said, forcing a lighter tone. “It’s good to see you. Really. Just…maybe we shouldn’t dredge up the past.” “Some pasts have a habit of dredging *us* up.” She paused, and when she spoke again, her voice was dangerously soft. “I know why you’re here, Evan.” He frowned. “What are you talking about?” “The deliveries. The ‘odd jobs’. It’s not just dumplings, is it? You’re running messages for your old contacts. Gathering information. Preparing for something.” The blood drained from his face. He hadn’t mentioned his work to anyone, especially not Rory. How had she found out? Silas, as if sensing the shift in atmosphere, had abandoned the glasses and was moving towards them, his limp barely perceptible as he navigated the crowded space. He didn't offer a greeting. Didn't need one. He knew the dance. He always did. “Everything alright here?” Silas asked, his hazel eyes sharp, assessing. Rory’s gaze locked with his, a silent warning passing between them. “Just catching up with an old friend,” she said, her voice regaining some of its earlier composure. But her hand had tightened around her glass, knuckles white. Silas’ gaze turned to Evan. A slight narrowing of the eyes. A barely perceptible tightening of the lips. “Good.” Silas’ voice had a deceptively mild tone. “Always good to reconnect with the past.” Then, before either of them could respond, a commotion erupted near the bar. A shout. A crash. A figure stumbling backwards, clutching his arm. And Rory was on her feet, moving with a speed and precision that he hadn’t remembered, her bright blue eyes already scanning the room, assessing the threat. The weight she carried hadn’t made her slow. It had honed her. He knew then, with a sickening certainty, that whatever game she was playing, it was far more dangerous than anything he could imagine. And he was, somehow, right in the middle of it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"her eyes assessing almost [almost]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.039
80.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1285
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
3"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.74% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1285
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count1
3
word"efficient"
count1
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"silence"
count3
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"disrupting"
count1
10
word"navigated"
count1
11
word"dance"
count1
12
word"scanning"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"weight"
2"warmth"
3"efficient"
4"velvet"
5"measured"
6"silence"
7"eyebrow"
8"whisper"
9"disrupting"
10"navigated"
11"dance"
12"scanning"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched his jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences94
matches
0"felt a prickle"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences94
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords5
totalWords1280
ratio0.004
matches
0"had"
1"were"
2"wake-up call"
3"us"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount919
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.44
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Rory4
Spymaster1
Silas4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Spymaster"
3"Silas"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if sensing the shift in atmosphere, had abandoned the glasses and was moving towards them, his limp barely perceptible as he navigated the crowded space"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.781
wordCount1280
matches
0"not close enough to touch, but close enough"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean20.32
std14.36
cv0.707
sampleLengths
042
11
245
35
46
569
626
719
83
911
1048
1112
1218
1315
1414
1513
1623
1774
1821
1918
204
2110
2213
2321
241
2526
2632
2710
2816
2928
305
3118
323
336
3419
3537
3620
3723
3836
3927
4017
4125
4210
432
4410
4521
468
4732
4820
4927
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
83.72% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs172
matches
0"was, picking"
1"was peeling"
2"was playing"
98.56% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences129
ratio0.016
matches
0"It wasn’t the physical alterations, though there *were* those—a sharper angle to the jaw, a hardness around the mouth that hadn’t been there—it was the weight she carried."
1"A barman, a young man with a shaved head and multiple piercings, appeared silently and took her order—a gin and tonic."
83.21% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount731
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.0560875512995896
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.023255813953488372
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean9.92
std7.05
cv0.71
sampleLengths
019
114
29
31
410
510
62
71
822
95
106
115
1220
133
1428
1513
169
1717
1813
196
203
211
222
232
246
2514
2634
2712
2811
297
3012
313
326
338
3410
353
369
374
3810
3915
4011
417
426
4312
4419
453
461
4721
486
4912
59.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.40310077519379844
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners52
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences84
matches
0"Just nursing the amber liquid,"
1"Finally, he raised his head."
2"Then, before either of them"
ratio0.036
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount52
totalSentences84
matches
0"He hadn’t bothered with a"
1"He hadn't heard it in…God,"
2"He didn’t turn immediately, letting"
3"She hadn’t changed, not exactly."
4"It wasn’t the physical alterations,"
5"It clung to her like"
6"she said, her voice flat,"
7"She hadn’t moved from the"
8"He managed a nod, took"
9"She moved then, threading her"
10"She stopped a few feet"
11"she asked, her gaze sweeping"
12"he said, gesturing vaguely towards"
13"She repeated the phrase with"
14"He felt a prickle of"
15"She finally met his eyes,"
16"He gestured towards it."
17"She hesitated, then moved, settling"
18"He didn’t offer to pull"
19"He simply watched her, cataloging"
ratio0.619
37.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences84
matches
0"The ice clinked, a brittle"
1"He hadn’t bothered with a"
2"The voice was a rusty"
3"He hadn't heard it in…God,"
4"He didn’t turn immediately, letting"
5"She hadn’t changed, not exactly."
6"The black hair was still"
7"It wasn’t the physical alterations,"
8"It clung to her like"
9"she said, her voice flat,"
10"She hadn’t moved from the"
11"He managed a nod, took"
12"She moved then, threading her"
13"She stopped a few feet"
14"she asked, her gaze sweeping"
15"he said, gesturing vaguely towards"
16"She repeated the phrase with"
17"He felt a prickle of"
18"She finally met his eyes,"
19"A small table sat empty"
ratio0.845
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
81.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She looked away again, her gaze drifting towards the back of the bar, where Silas stood, polishing glasses with a meticulousness that bordered on obsessive."
1"Silas, as if sensing the shift in atmosphere, had abandoned the glasses and was moving towards them, his limp barely perceptible as he navigated the crowded spa…"
2"And Rory was on her feet, moving with a speed and precision that he hadn’t remembered, her bright blue eyes already scanning the room, assessing the threat."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she said, her voice flat, devoid of warmth"
1"she asked, her gaze sweeping the room, avoiding his"
2"he said, his voice carefully neutral"
3"he pressed, relentlessly"
4"she said, her voice regaining some of its earlier composure"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She repeated (repeat)"
1"he pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.078
82.0742%