Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8PYMNMQ2YN172JYM1DRA1

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 43s
Cost:
$0.044994
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory's heart hammered against her ribs as the shimmering rift in the Veil swallowed them whole. One moment, she stood in the misty confines of Isolde's grove in Richmond Park, the ancient oaks whispering secrets to the wind; the next, a wave of disorienting warmth crashed over her, like stepping from a Welsh winter into a sun-drenched vineyard. She blinked, her bright blue eyes adjusting to the amber glow that bathed everything in a perpetual twilight haze. The air hummed with an unnatural vitality, thick with scents of ripening fruit and roasting spices that made her mouth water despite the knot of unease twisting in her gut. Beside her, Nyx materialized from a swirl of shadows, their form coalescing into a tall, humanoid silhouette of inky blackness, faintly glowing violet eyes scanning the horizon. "We tread where mortals seldom dare," they whispered, voice like a breeze rustling dry leaves. "Hel's gluttonous heart beats here, pulsing with hungers unbound." Isolde glided ahead, her silver hair swaying like a waterfall of moonlight, though her bare feet left no imprint on the loamy soil. She turned, pale lavender eyes twinkling with cryptic amusement. "A feast for the senses, or a trap for the unwary? The vines whisper of indulgence, but roots remember the famished." Rory clutched the Heartstone Pendant at her neck, the deep crimson gem pulsing warmly against her skin, a faint inner glow confirming their crossing into this realm—Dymas, if the codex fragments in her mind were right. The silver chain felt heavier here, as if the artifact sensed the alien energies. Her other hand rested on the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade strapped to her belt, the moonsilver dagger cold to the touch, a reassuring chill against the oppressive heat. At twenty-five, she'd fled one kind of hell in Cardiff—Evan's bruising grip and her parents' disappointed stares—only to dive headfirst into this literal one. But Eva's letters from London had promised adventure, not portals to demonic feasting grounds. Still, Rory's cool head kept her steady; she scanned the landscape, mind racing for patterns, exits, advantages. They stood at the edge of a sprawling vineyard, rows of vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels under the warm amber sky—no sun visible, just an endless, diffuse light that cast no shadows except where Nyx willed them. The grapes were oversized, each berry the size of a plum, their skins a riot of colors: deep purples veined with gold, reds that bled into obsidian black. As Rory stepped forward, a vine tendril twitched, coiling lazily toward her like a curious serpent. She froze, breath catching. "Easy," Nyx murmured, extending a shadowy tendril to brush the vine aside. It recoiled with a soft, fleshy sigh, releasing a burst of aroma—sweet, almost cloying, like honeyed wine mixed with something earthier, forbidden. Isolde laughed, a sound like tinkling bells. "The land hungers as you do. Touch not without invitation, lest it claim a taste in return." Rory swallowed, her straight black hair sticking to her damp forehead. The heat pressed in, not scorching but insistent, making her part-time delivery jacket feel like a woolen trap. She shrugged it off, tying it around her waist, revealing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a reminder of childhood folly, climbing trees in Cardiff's rain-slick parks. "This place... it's alive. Not just growing, but watching." She moved deeper, boots sinking into soil that felt unnaturally fertile, springy underfoot, as if it might swallow her whole if she lingered too long. The group pressed on, the vineyard giving way to orchards where trees bore fruits Rory had no names for: orbs that pulsed with inner light, fuzzy spheres emitting a low hum, like distant beehives. One tree's branches drooped under the weight of golden apples, each one emitting a faint, melodic chime when the breeze stirred them. Nyx reached out, their incorporeal hand passing through a leaf, which shivered and turned a shade darker. "Echoes of mortal desires," they said. "Belphegor's domain feasts on excess. These groves birth banquets that could sate kings—or drive them mad." Unease prickled Rory's skin. She'd read about Hel in stolen library books after Eva's wild tales, but experiencing it was different. No fire and brimstone; instead, this seductive abundance that whispered promises of fulfillment. A distant roar echoed, not a beast's, but laughter—raucous, unending, mingled with the clatter of dishes and the sizzle of cooking fats. Her stomach growled, betraying her, even as her mind screamed caution. "We're not here to eat," she muttered, more to herself than the others. "The codex said something about rifts weakening on the solstice. We need to find the tear back to Earth before time slips away." Isolde tilted her head, her ethereal form seeming to blur at the edges. "Time dances here as fruit ripens—slowly, then all at once. Seek the heart of indulgence, where the gluttonous prince holds court, and paths may unfold like petals in bloom." She couldn't lie, Rory knew from the grove's lore, but her riddles twisted truth into knots. The half-Fae's waist-length hair caught a nonexistent wind, floating as if underwater. They crested a gentle hill, and wonder bloomed in Rory's chest, chasing away the unease for a heartbeat. Below stretched a grand pavilion, its pillars carved from what looked like petrified vines, draped in silks that shifted colors like oil on water. Tables groaned under feasts: platters of roasted meats glistening with glazes, towers of pastries dusted in sugars that sparkled like diamond dust, fountains bubbling with wines that cascaded in impossible arcs, defying gravity. Figures moved among them—helbound souls, perhaps, their forms humanoid but edged with demonic flair: horns curling like grapevines, skin textured like bark. They laughed and ate with abandon, chefs in aprons wielding knives that sang as they sliced. One soul, a burly man with eyes like smoldering coals, spotted them and waved a laden fork. "Newcomers! Join the eternal banquet! Prince Belphegor welcomes all who hunger!" Nyx's form rippled, shifting partially incorporeal, shadows lengthening around their feet. "We decline," they whispered, voice carrying like a chill draft. "Our appetites lie elsewhere." Rory felt the pull, a magnetic draw toward the tables. The air grew thicker, scented with cinnamon and charred sugar, making her head swim. She gripped the Fae blade tighter; its cold glow steadied her, the luminescent edge humming faintly, as if sensing hidden wards. "It's a trap," she said, voice low. "Like the stories of Fae food—you eat and you're stuck forever." Isolde nodded, her lavender eyes distant. "Excess binds as chains do. But look deeper, mortal seeker; the feast hides the famine beneath." Pushing past the pavilion, they entered a garden labyrinth, hedges of blooming flowers that released pollen in iridescent clouds. Rory brushed one petal, and a vision flickered in her mind: a memory not her own, of endless starvation turning to ravenous joy. She yanked her hand back, heart racing. "Did you feel that? It's... feeding on thoughts." Nyx nodded, their violet eyes narrowing. "Shades like me sense the echoes. This realm was forged from human sins, gluttony made manifest. Aldric— I—once sought power here, in rituals gone awry. Now, it seeks to consume us." Deeper in, the wonder turned eerie. They discovered a clearing where a massive tree dominated, its trunk wider than a house, bark etched with glowing runes that pulsed like heartbeats. Fruits dangled from its branches, but these were different—translucent, filled with swirling mists that formed faces, screaming silently. Rory approached, the pendant at her neck throbbing hotter. "What are these?" Isolde traced a rune with a finger, leaving no mark. "Souls ensnared, distilled into essence. Taste one, and know eternity's crave; resist, and the path reveals." Unease morphed into dread as the ground trembled faintly, vines slithering across the soil like veins coming alive. Nyx shifted fully to shadow, enveloping Rory and Isolde in a protective veil. "We must move. The land awakens to our intrusion." Rory drew the blade, its leaf-shaped edge cutting through a encroaching tendril with ease, the vine screeching as it withered. The act sparked a moment of clarity—power, rare and coveted, as Isolde had gifted it. "This way," she said, spotting a faint shimmer ahead, like the Veil's distortion but warmer, amber-tinged. They hurried through, the garden's whispers fading to a dull roar. Emerging into a vineyard overlook, Rory gasped at the vista: endless fields undulating like a living sea, dotted with colossal amphitheaters where culinary spectacles unfolded—chefs dueling with flames that danced without burning, audiences devouring the results in ecstatic frenzy. The amber sky deepened to ochre, and distant thunder rumbled, not storm but the groan of overfull bellies. Wonder gripped her again, mingled with awe at the sheer scale. This wasn't destruction; it was creation run amok, a realm where indulgence warped reality. Nyx reformed beside her, solid now, their 6'2" frame towering. "Beautiful, in its peril. But we are not of this place." Isolde smiled enigmatically. "Yet all realms touch, as hungers do. The rift calls—feel its pull?" Rory did—the pendant guided her, warmth leading to a hidden arbor where the air shimmered, a portal back flickering into view. But as they approached, shadows lengthened unnaturally, and a voice boomed from the vines: "Leaving so soon? The feast has just begun." Belphegor's minions, perhaps—figures emerging from the undergrowth, eyes hungry, hands extended. Rory's mind whirred, out-of-the-box thinking kicking in. "Nyx, shadows! Isolde, mislead them!" Nyx unleashed a wave of darkness, blinding the pursuers, while Isolde spun riddles that confused their paths: "Chase the shadow that flees not, find the fruit that sates the void." They dove through the rift, the amber world collapsing behind them. Back in the grove, time had barely passed—minutes, not the hours it felt. Rory leaned against an oak, breathing hard, the scar on her wrist itching from the phantom vines. Wonder lingered, a taste of the alien sublime, but so did the unease: Hel's gluttony had marked her, a hunger she'd carry back to London's shadowed streets.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:34:01.63Z" 2/20/2026, 7:34:01 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Isolde smiled enigmatically. [enigmatically]"
1"The feast has just [just]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.563
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
91.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1694
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"warmly"
count1
1
adverb"lazily"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"warmly"
1"lazily"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1694
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"whisper"
count1
3
word"chill"
count2
4
word"oppressive"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"racing"
count2
7
word"shimmered"
count2
8
word"reminder"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count2
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"echoes"
count2
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"dances"
count1
15
word"glistening"
count1
16
word"magnetic"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"etched"
count1
19
word"traced"
count1
20
word"trembled"
count1
21
word"tinged"
count1
22
word"peril"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"scanning"
2"whisper"
3"chill"
4"oppressive"
5"scanned"
6"racing"
7"shimmered"
8"reminder"
9"pulsed"
10"weight"
11"echoes"
12"echoed"
13"stomach"
14"dances"
15"glistening"
16"magnetic"
17"flickered"
18"etched"
19"traced"
20"trembled"
21"tinged"
22"peril"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences80
matches
0"d with awe"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen69
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1667
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Emerging into a vineyard overlook, Rory gasped at the vista: endless fields undulating like a living sea, dotted with co…"
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount1368
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Veil2
Isolde11
Richmond1
Park1
Welsh1
Nyx9
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Dymas1
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Cardiff2
Evan1
Eva2
London2
Rory18
Unease2
Hel2
Fae3
Belphegor1
One3
persons
0"Veil"
1"Isolde"
2"Nyx"
3"Pendant"
4"Blade"
5"Evan"
6"Eva"
7"Rory"
8"Unease"
9"Hel"
10"Fae"
11"Belphegor"
12"One"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Welsh"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
globalScore0.842
windowScore0.833
80.56% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like petrified vines, draped in si"
1"as if sensing hidden wards"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.4
wordCount1667
matches
0"not scorching but insistent, making her part-time delivery jacket feel like a"
1"Not just growing, but watching"
2"not a beast's, but laughter"
3"not storm but the groan of overfull bellies"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"runes that pulsed"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean57.48
std31.2
cv0.543
sampleLengths
0107
151
253
3134
490
534
624
791
895
9103
1070
11113
1228
1325
1463
1522
1657
1737
1860
1926
2040
2151
2268
2346
2415
2543
2623
2730
2868
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"were oversized"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs253
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences94
ratio0.223
matches
0"One moment, she stood in the misty confines of Isolde's grove in Richmond Park, the ancient oaks whispering secrets to the wind; the next, a wave of disorienting warmth crashed over her, like stepping from a Welsh winter into a sun-drenched vineyard."
1"Rory clutched the Heartstone Pendant at her neck, the deep crimson gem pulsing warmly against her skin, a faint inner glow confirming their crossing into this realm—Dymas, if the codex fragments in her mind were right."
2"At twenty-five, she'd fled one kind of hell in Cardiff—Evan's bruising grip and her parents' disappointed stares—only to dive headfirst into this literal one."
3"Still, Rory's cool head kept her steady; she scanned the landscape, mind racing for patterns, exits, advantages."
4"They stood at the edge of a sprawling vineyard, rows of vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels under the warm amber sky—no sun visible, just an endless, diffuse light that cast no shadows except where Nyx willed them."
5"It recoiled with a soft, fleshy sigh, releasing a burst of aroma—sweet, almost cloying, like honeyed wine mixed with something earthier, forbidden."
6"She shrugged it off, tying it around her waist, revealing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a reminder of childhood folly, climbing trees in Cardiff's rain-slick parks."
7"No fire and brimstone; instead, this seductive abundance that whispered promises of fulfillment."
8"A distant roar echoed, not a beast's, but laughter—raucous, unending, mingled with the clatter of dishes and the sizzle of cooking fats."
9"Figures moved among them—helbound souls, perhaps, their forms humanoid but edged with demonic flair: horns curling like grapevines, skin textured like bark."
10"She gripped the Fae blade tighter; its cold glow steadied her, the luminescent edge humming faintly, as if sensing hidden wards."
11"\"Excess binds as chains do. But look deeper, mortal seeker; the feast hides the famine beneath.\""
12"Fruits dangled from its branches, but these were different—translucent, filled with swirling mists that formed faces, screaming silently."
13"\"Souls ensnared, distilled into essence. Taste one, and know eternity's crave; resist, and the path reveals.\""
14"The act sparked a moment of clarity—power, rare and coveted, as Isolde had gifted it."
15"Emerging into a vineyard overlook, Rory gasped at the vista: endless fields undulating like a living sea, dotted with colossal amphitheaters where culinary spectacles unfolded—chefs dueling with flames that danced without burning, audiences devouring the results in ecstatic frenzy."
16"This wasn't destruction; it was creation run amok, a realm where indulgence warped reality."
17"The rift calls—feel its pull?\""
18"Rory did—the pendant guided her, warmth leading to a hidden arbor where the air shimmered, a portal back flickering into view. But as they approached, shadows lengthened unnaturally, and a voice boomed from the vines: \"Leaving so soon?"
19"Belphegor's minions, perhaps—figures emerging from the undergrowth, eyes hungry, hands extended. Rory's mind whirred, out-of-the-box thinking kicking in. \"Nyx, shadows!"
20"They dove through the rift, the amber world collapsing behind them. Back in the grove, time had barely passed—minutes, not the hours it felt. Rory leaned against an oak, breathing hard, the scar on her wrist itching from the phantom vines. Wonder lingered, a taste of the alien sublime, but so did the unease: Hel's gluttony had marked her, a hunger she'd carry back to London's shadowed streets."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount603
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.026533996683250415
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.009950248756218905
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean17.73
std10.9
cv0.615
sampleLengths
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330
427
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1229
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4533
4622
4716
4817
4911
70.92% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.425531914893617
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences78
matches
0"She blinked, her bright blue"
1"they whispered, voice like a"
2"She turned, pale lavender eyes"
3"Her other hand rested on"
4"They stood at the edge"
5"She froze, breath catching."
6"It recoiled with a soft,"
7"She shrugged it off, tying"
8"She moved deeper, boots sinking"
9"She'd read about Hel in"
10"Her stomach growled, betraying her,"
11"she muttered, more to herself"
12"She couldn't lie, Rory knew"
13"They crested a gentle hill,"
14"They laughed and ate with"
15"they whispered, voice carrying like"
16"She gripped the Fae blade"
17"she said, voice low"
18"She yanked her hand back,"
19"They discovered a clearing where"
ratio0.295
49.74% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences78
matches
0"Rory's heart hammered against her"
1"She blinked, her bright blue"
2"The air hummed with an"
3"they whispered, voice like a"
4"Isolde glided ahead, her silver"
5"She turned, pale lavender eyes"
6"Rory clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
7"The silver chain felt heavier"
8"Her other hand rested on"
9"They stood at the edge"
10"The grapes were oversized, each"
11"She froze, breath catching."
12"Nyx murmured, extending a shadowy"
13"It recoiled with a soft,"
14"Isolde laughed, a sound like"
15"Rory swallowed, her straight black"
16"The heat pressed in, not"
17"She shrugged it off, tying"
18"She moved deeper, boots sinking"
19"The group pressed on, the"
ratio0.821
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"She blinked, her bright blue eyes adjusting to the amber glow that bathed everything in a perpetual twilight haze."
1"Beside her, Nyx materialized from a swirl of shadows, their form coalescing into a tall, humanoid silhouette of inky blackness, faintly glowing violet eyes scan…"
2"They stood at the edge of a sprawling vineyard, rows of vines heavy with clusters of grapes that shimmered like jewels under the warm amber sky—no sun visible, …"
3"She shrugged it off, tying it around her waist, revealing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a reminder of childhood folly, climbing trees in Cardiff's r…"
4"No fire and brimstone; instead, this seductive abundance that whispered promises of fulfillment."
5"The half-Fae's waist-length hair caught a nonexistent wind, floating as if underwater."
6"Below stretched a grand pavilion, its pillars carved from what looked like petrified vines, draped in silks that shifted colors like oil on water."
7"Tables groaned under feasts: platters of roasted meats glistening with glazes, towers of pastries dusted in sugars that sparkled like diamond dust, fountains bu…"
8"She gripped the Fae blade tighter; its cold glow steadied her, the luminescent edge humming faintly, as if sensing hidden wards."
9"Fruits dangled from its branches, but these were different—translucent, filled with swirling mists that formed faces, screaming silently."
10"Emerging into a vineyard overlook, Rory gasped at the vista: endless fields undulating like a living sea, dotted with colossal amphitheaters where culinary spec…"
11"They dove through the rift, the amber world collapsing behind them. Back in the grove, time had barely passed—minutes, not the hours it felt. Rory leaned agains…"
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she muttered, more to herself than the others"
1"they whispered, voice carrying like a chill draft"
2"she said, voice low"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"she muttered (mutter)"
3"She couldn't (could)"
4"they whispered (whisper)"
5"The rift calls— (the rift call)"
6"Isolde mislead (isolde mislead)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.625
rawRatio0.7
effectiveRatio0.438
70.3414%