Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8Q29QNRGB0X5WGW6XSV7F

Run Details

Duration:
16.2s
Cost:
$0.001416
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavements of Camden like a thousand tiny fists, turning the neon-lit streets into a slick, reflective labyrinth. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through puddles that mirrored the garish signs of kebab shops and tattoo parlors, her breath coming in sharp bursts that fogged the chill night air. She was forty-one, with eighteen years of pounding these London streets etched into her bones, but tonight the weight felt heavier, like the rain itself was conspiring to slow her down. Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close to her scalp, clung damply to her forehead, and water trickled down the sharp line of her jaw. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticked relentlessly, a metronome to her pursuit. The suspect was just ahead—a wiry figure in a hooded black coat, darting through the crowd like a shadow come alive. She'd clocked him outside The Raven's Nest earlier that evening, slipping a package to a known associate of that shadowy clique she suspected was knee-deep in something unholy. Drugs? Smuggling? Worse? Three years ago, her partner DS Morris had vanished chasing a lead like this one, his body never found, just whispers of things that didn't add up—glowing eyes in the dark, screams that echoed from nowhere. Supernatural bullshit, she'd called it then, shoving the grief down deep. But lately, the cases were piling up with edges that frayed into the impossible, and this bloke? He reeked of it. "Stop! Police!" Her voice cut through the downpour, but the words dissolved into the roar of traffic on Camden High Street. He didn't slow, weaving past a group of laughing tourists under umbrellas, his footsteps a frantic patter against the wet stone. Quinn's lungs burned as she closed the gap, her military precision bearing kicking in—shoulders squared, strides measured even in the chaos. She was five-nine, built solid from years of service, but the rain made everything treacherous. A car horn blared as she jaywalked, tires hissing on the asphalt. He ducked into a narrow alley off Parkway, the kind of forgotten vein in the city where the streetlights flickered like dying stars. Quinn followed without hesitation, her hand instinctively dropping to the holster at her hip. The Glock felt cold and reassuring under her sodden jacket. The alley smelled of garbage and urine, bins overflowing from the storm, but she pressed on, eyes locked on the bobbing hood vanishing around a corner. Her mind raced: Who was he? One of Tomás Herrera's crew? She'd been watching that ex-paramedic for months—the Spaniard with the olive skin and the scar snaking down his left forearm, the one who'd lost his NHS license patching up God-knows-what in the shadows. Herrera ran with the clique, providing off-the-books care to lowlifes who didn't show up in official records. This suspect could be his courier, ferrying something forbidden. A chain-link fence loomed at the alley's end, topped with razor wire that glinted menacingly. The figure scaled it with surprising agility, dropping to the other side in a crouch before sprinting toward the derelict husk of an old warehouse. Quinn cursed under her breath, glancing around—no witnesses, no backup. She was alone, as always since Morris. Gripping the fence, she hauled herself over, the wire snagging her jacket with a rip. Pain flared in her palm from a shallow cut, but she ignored it, landing with a splash and bolting after him. The warehouse district blurred into a maze of rusted shipping containers and crumbling brick walls, the rain sheeting off them in curtains. Thunder rumbled overhead, lightning fracturing the sky and illuminating the suspect's path: he was heading for the old Tube entrance, the one boarded up decades ago after the war. Abandoned, forgotten—or so the maps said. Quinn's pulse thundered in her ears. Why there? No exits, no cover. Unless... He pried at a loose plank on the entrance's barricade, the wood splintering with a crack that echoed like a gunshot. For a split second, he glanced back—his face pale and sharp-featured under the hood, eyes wide with animal fear. Not Herrera, then; this one was younger, cleaner, maybe early twenties. Before Quinn could shout again, he slipped through the gap and vanished into the blackness below. She skidded to a halt at the threshold, chest heaving. The air from the opening carried a damp, earthy chill, laced with something metallic and wrong—like blood mixed with ozone. Her watch strap chafed against her wrist, the second hand sweeping forward. Two minutes since she'd lost visual. Backup would take fifteen, minimum, in this weather. But letting him go? That package he'd exchanged at the Nest—it could be the break she'd been chasing, the thread connecting the clique to whatever rot festered beneath the city's skin. Quinn pulled her torch from her belt, flicking it on. The beam pierced the gloom, revealing a staircase descending into oblivion, steps slick with moss and decades of neglect. Graffiti scarred the walls—symbols she didn't recognize, swirling patterns that seemed to shift in the light's edge. Her skin prickled. Morris's case had started like this: a chase into the unknown, a gut feeling that something watched from the dark. She'd buried the report, called it a tragic accident, but the nightmares lingered—his voice calling her name from voids that swallowed light. Sod it. She holstered her gun but kept her hand near it, stepping down into the maw. The plank groaned as she pushed it aside, rain dripping from her clothes in steady plops. Each step echoed unnaturally loud, the sound bouncing off unseen walls. The air grew thicker, cooler, carrying whispers now—faint murmurs like distant conversations in a language she couldn't place. Her torch swept the landing below: a platform choked with debris, old posters peeling from the tiles, advertising long-gone trains to places that no longer existed. Tracks stretched into the tunnel ahead, rusted rails vanishing into pitch. Footprints marred the dust—fresh, leading deeper. She followed, boots crunching on gravel, her bearing straight despite the creeping dread. The rain's patter faded above, replaced by a low hum, vibrational, like the earth itself breathing. Fifty yards in, the tunnel widened, and the first anomaly hit: a stall, makeshift and impossible. Wooden crates stacked against the wall, draped in faded velvet, lit by a single lantern that cast flickering shadows. Behind it stood a figure—gaunt, with skin like weathered parchment—arranging vials that glowed faintly blue. Quinn froze, torch beam pinning the vendor. "Police. Step away from the stall." The figure didn't flinch, just tilted its head, eyes reflecting the light like a cat's—too large, too yellow. "Lost, are we, detective? The Veil doesn't take kindly to uninvited guests." The Veil? Her mind reeled, connecting dots she'd ignored: rumors from informants, whispers of markets that moved like ghosts, hidden from the mundane world. Supernatural black markets, peddling enchanted trinkets and forbidden lore. The clique's playground. This was no abandoned station; it was alive, pulsing with the illicit. Before she could respond, movement ahead—her suspect, slipping past another stall where patrons huddled under hoods, bartering with items that shimmered unnaturally: a dagger with a hilt of bone, a book whose pages rustled without wind. The air thrummed with energy, a bazaar born of nightmares, stretching into caverns that shouldn't exist beneath Camden. Stalls lined the platform now, an underground warren alive with low voices and the clink of coins that weren't quite gold. A woman with scales glinting on her neck haggled over a potion; a man with horns curling from his brow examined a crystal that pulsed like a heartbeat. Quinn's hand tightened on her gun. This was madness—beyond her beat, beyond reason. But the suspect was weaving through the crowd, heading for a shadowed archway at the far end, where stairs descended even deeper. Her partner's face flashed in her mind: Morris, laughing at her caution before the dark claimed him. Unexplained circumstances. Supernatural origins. She'd vowed not to let it happen again, not to her, not to anyone. She stepped forward, torch cutting through the throng. Eyes turned her way—hostile, curious, inhuman. A vendor hissed, coiling a serpent that wasn't a snake around his arm. "Bone token or begone," one growled, flashing a carved femur on a string. Quinn's jaw set, sharp and unyielding. No token, but she had a badge, and questions that demanded answers. The suspect glanced back once more, panic etching his features, then bolted into the crowd. She pursued, heart slamming against her ribs, the hum of the market rising to a fever pitch. The chase twisted through the stalls, Quinn dodging a cart laden with jars of writhing shadows. Whispers dogged her: "Cop... fresh meat... taste the fear." Her torch beam jittered, illuminating faces that blurred at the edges—half-human, half-something else. The air grew heavy with scents: incense, blood, the sharp tang of alchemy gone wrong. She glimpsed Herrera then, or thought she did—olive skin, curly hair, bent over a figure in the shadows, Saint Christopher medallion swinging as he worked. Treating one of them? The clique's healer in his element. But no time to confront. The suspect reached the archway, fumbling at a hidden door that ground open on unseen hinges. Beyond lay darkness absolute, a void that swallowed sound. Quinn closed in, twenty feet, ten, her free hand outstretched as if she could will him to stop. "Halt! You're under arrest!" He dove through, the door slamming shut behind him with a boom that reverberated through the market. Silence fell, broken only by the vendors' murmurs turning to laughter—cold, mocking. Quinn reached the door, palm pressing against its cold iron surface. It pulsed faintly, like a vein under skin. No handle, no lock she could see. Her watch read 11:47 PM—eight minutes since the streets above. The decision loomed, sharp as her jawline: turn back, call it in, preserve the fragile line between her world and this one. Or follow, into the heart of the unknown, risking everything for the truth that had haunted her since Morris. The market watched, expectant. Rain echoed faintly from the world above, a reminder of safety lost. She drew her gun, steadying her breath with military precision. No going back now. The door yielded under her push, creaking open to reveal stairs spiraling down into abyss. She descended, torch beam a fragile lifeline, the thrill of the hunt—and the terror of what lay ahead—igniting in her veins.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1769
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
15.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1769
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count4
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"treacherous"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"loomed"
count2
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"thundered"
count1
13
word"gloom"
count1
14
word"maw"
count1
15
word"velvet"
count1
16
word"shimmered"
count1
17
word"glinting"
count1
18
word"crystal"
count1
19
word"pulsed"
count2
20
word"etching"
count1
21
word"reverberated"
count1
22
word"silence"
count1
23
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"pounding"
2"etched"
3"weight"
4"echoed"
5"footsteps"
6"measured"
7"treacherous"
8"flickered"
9"raced"
10"loomed"
11"pulse"
12"thundered"
13"gloom"
14"maw"
15"velvet"
16"shimmered"
17"glinting"
18"crystal"
19"pulsed"
20"etching"
21"reverberated"
22"silence"
23"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences121
matches(empty)
95.63% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences121
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences124
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1730
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1690
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.77
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden3
Harlow1
Quinn13
London1
Raven1
Nest2
Morris5
High1
Street1
Parkway1
Glock1
Tomás1
Herrera4
Spaniard1
God-knows-what1
Tube1
Veil1
Saint1
Christopher1
Supernatural3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Glock"
4"Tomás"
5"Herrera"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
places
0"Camden"
1"London"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"High"
5"Street"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"patterns that seemed to shift in the light's edge"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1730
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences124
matches
0"feeling that something"
91.13% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean72.08
std33.8
cv0.469
sampleLengths
0119
1120
290
3143
493
570
667
787
891
988
1096
1113
1230
1348
14103
1570
1640
1750
1888
1948
204
2129
2277
2366
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs297
matches
0"was conspiring"
1"were piling"
2"was heading"
3"was weaving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount25
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences124
ratio0.202
matches
0"The suspect was just ahead—a wiry figure in a hooded black coat, darting through the crowd like a shadow come alive."
1"Three years ago, her partner DS Morris had vanished chasing a lead like this one, his body never found, just whispers of things that didn't add up—glowing eyes in the dark, screams that echoed from nowhere."
2"Quinn's lungs burned as she closed the gap, her military precision bearing kicking in—shoulders squared, strides measured even in the chaos."
3"She'd been watching that ex-paramedic for months—the Spaniard with the olive skin and the scar snaking down his left forearm, the one who'd lost his NHS license patching up God-knows-what in the shadows."
4"Quinn cursed under her breath, glancing around—no witnesses, no backup."
5"Abandoned, forgotten—or so the maps said."
6"For a split second, he glanced back—his face pale and sharp-featured under the hood, eyes wide with animal fear."
7"Not Herrera, then; this one was younger, cleaner, maybe early twenties."
8"The air from the opening carried a damp, earthy chill, laced with something metallic and wrong—like blood mixed with ozone."
9"That package he'd exchanged at the Nest—it could be the break she'd been chasing, the thread connecting the clique to whatever rot festered beneath the city's skin."
10"Graffiti scarred the walls—symbols she didn't recognize, swirling patterns that seemed to shift in the light's edge."
11"She'd buried the report, called it a tragic accident, but the nightmares lingered—his voice calling her name from voids that swallowed light."
12"The air grew thicker, cooler, carrying whispers now—faint murmurs like distant conversations in a language she couldn't place."
13"Footprints marred the dust—fresh, leading deeper."
14"Behind it stood a figure—gaunt, with skin like weathered parchment—arranging vials that glowed faintly blue."
15"The figure didn't flinch, just tilted its head, eyes reflecting the light like a cat's—too large, too yellow."
16"This was no abandoned station; it was alive, pulsing with the illicit."
17"Before she could respond, movement ahead—her suspect, slipping past another stall where patrons huddled under hoods, bartering with items that shimmered unnaturally: a dagger with a hilt of bone, a book whose pages rustled without wind."
18"A woman with scales glinting on her neck haggled over a potion; a man with horns curling from his brow examined a crystal that pulsed like a heartbeat."
19"This was madness—beyond her beat, beyond reason."
20"Eyes turned her way—hostile, curious, inhuman."
21"Whispers dogged her: \"Cop... fresh meat... taste the fear.\" Her torch beam jittered, illuminating faces that blurred at the edges—half-human, half-something else."
22"She glimpsed Herrera then, or thought she did—olive skin, curly hair, bent over a figure in the shadows, Saint Christopher medallion swinging as he worked."
23"Her watch read 11:47 PM—eight minutes since the streets above."
24"She descended, torch beam a fragile lifeline, the thrill of the hunt—and the terror of what lay ahead—igniting in her veins."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1582
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.02654867256637168
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.008217446270543615
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences124
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences124
mean13.95
std8.12
cv0.582
sampleLengths
020
130
231
323
415
521
628
71
81
91
1036
1111
1217
134
1421
1521
1621
1715
1812
1923
2014
2110
2226
236
245
2533
2617
279
2815
2925
3010
317
3215
3321
3422
3529
366
376
382
394
401
4121
4219
4311
4416
4510
4620
4712
486
498
68.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.4274193548387097
totalSentences124
uniqueOpeners53
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences112
matches
0"She was forty-one, with eighteen"
1"Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close"
2"She'd clocked him outside The"
3"He reeked of it."
4"Her voice cut through the"
5"He didn't slow, weaving past"
6"She was five-nine, built solid"
7"He ducked into a narrow"
8"Her mind raced: Who was"
9"She'd been watching that ex-paramedic"
10"She was alone, as always"
11"He pried at a loose"
12"She skidded to a halt"
13"Her watch strap chafed against"
14"Her skin prickled."
15"She'd buried the report, called"
16"She holstered her gun but"
17"Her torch swept the landing"
18"She followed, boots crunching on"
19"Her mind reeled, connecting dots"
ratio0.268
80.54% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences112
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed"
1"She was forty-one, with eighteen"
2"Her salt-and-pepper hair, cropped close"
3"The worn leather watch on"
4"The suspect was just ahead—a"
5"She'd clocked him outside The"
6"He reeked of it."
7"Her voice cut through the"
8"He didn't slow, weaving past"
9"Quinn's lungs burned as she"
10"She was five-nine, built solid"
11"A car horn blared as"
12"He ducked into a narrow"
13"Quinn followed without hesitation, her"
14"The Glock felt cold and"
15"The alley smelled of garbage"
16"Her mind raced: Who was"
17"She'd been watching that ex-paramedic"
18"Herrera ran with the clique,"
19"This suspect could be his"
ratio0.759
89.29% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences112
matches
0"Before Quinn could shout again,"
1"Before she could respond, movement"
ratio0.018
43.40% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through puddles that mirrored the garish signs of kebab shops and tattoo parlors, her breath coming in sharp bursts that…"
1"But lately, the cases were piling up with edges that frayed into the impossible, and this bloke?"
2"Herrera ran with the clique, providing off-the-books care to lowlifes who didn't show up in official records."
3"A chain-link fence loomed at the alley's end, topped with razor wire that glinted menacingly."
4"He pried at a loose plank on the entrance's barricade, the wood splintering with a crack that echoed like a gunshot."
5"Behind it stood a figure—gaunt, with skin like weathered parchment—arranging vials that glowed faintly blue."
6"Her mind reeled, connecting dots she'd ignored: rumors from informants, whispers of markets that moved like ghosts, hidden from the mundane world."
7"Before she could respond, movement ahead—her suspect, slipping past another stall where patrons huddled under hoods, bartering with items that shimmered unnatur…"
8"The air thrummed with energy, a bazaar born of nightmares, stretching into caverns that shouldn't exist beneath Camden."
9"Stalls lined the platform now, an underground warren alive with low voices and the clink of coins that weren't quite gold."
10"He dove through, the door slamming shut behind him with a boom that reverberated through the market."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"one growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.333
82.8003%