Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8V0R6GDZVX8WSBCTJ9SWH

Run Details

Duration:
10.4s
Cost:
$0.000388
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The neon glow of *The Raven’s Nest* flickered like a dying ember against the storm’s relentless assault, its green sign bleeding through the downpour. Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the strap of her raincoat, the leather watch on her wrist ticking against the chill. She had been tracking Tomás Herrera for hours, ever since the paramedic had vanished from a shift at the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. The Veil Market—her name for it—had been rumored to move every full moon, and tonight, it was here. Her breath fogged in the cold air, her boots splashing through puddles that had turned to black sludge. The suspect, a man with olive skin and a scar along his left forearm, had led her through the labyrinth of Soho alleys, his movements deliberate, his voice low when he spoke. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* he’d said, his accent thick with something that wasn’t Spanish. *"This isn’t for the likes of you."* Quinn had laughed, sharp and dry. *"Oh, I’m not here for you, Herrera. I’m here for the things you’re selling."* The rain had turned the pavement slick, the city’s usual hum swallowed by the storm. She could hear the distant wail of sirens, the clatter of footsteps behind her, but she didn’t look back. Not yet. Not until she knew where he was going. Then she saw it—a flicker of movement beneath the neon glow. A door, half-hidden behind a stack of crates, its surface damp with rain. The kind of place that didn’t belong in the daylight. The kind of place that whispered secrets. Her fingers tightened around the grip of her pistol, the cold metal familiar after years of use. She had no idea what lay beyond that door. No idea what kind of danger Herrera might be leading her into. But she had a job to do. She stepped forward, the rain lashing her face, her boots sinking into the mud. The door creaked open with a sound like a sigh, revealing a narrow staircase descending into darkness. Herrera was already descending, his silhouette sharp against the dim light. *"You shouldn’t be down here,"* he called up, his voice echoing unnaturally. *"This isn’t safe."* Quinn hesitated. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, of things that shouldn’t exist. Things that could kill her in ways that even the most brutal gunfight couldn’t. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She took the first step down, the air growing thicker, heavier. The scent of damp earth and something metallic hung in the air, like old blood and rust. Herrera was already halfway down, his hand brushing against something cold and smooth on the wall—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use. *"You’re not supposed to be here,"* he said again, his voice lower now, more urgent. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s pulse hammered in her throat. She had no idea what he meant. But she did know that she wasn’t about to turn back now. She reached the bottom of the staircase, the air growing even thicker, the walls lined with shelves of strange, glowing objects. Herrera was already moving, his hand brushing against a door, its surface etched with strange symbols. *"Come on,"* he said, his voice barely audible over the storm. *"You’ll see."* Quinn followed, her boots sinking into the damp earth, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps. The air grew colder, the light dimmer. She could hear the distant hum of voices, the clatter of footsteps, the sound of something moving in the shadows. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* Herrera said again, his voice echoing unnaturally. *"This isn’t for the likes of you."* Quinn didn’t answer. She didn’t need to. She had seen enough in her time to know that some places weren’t meant to be seen. But she had a job to do, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She stepped forward, the door creaking open with a sound like a sigh, revealing a room bathed in an eerie, green light. The air was thick with the scent of something old and decaying, like the inside of a tomb. And in the center of the room, standing before a table laden with strange, glowing objects, was a figure she had never seen before. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She stepped forward, the door creaking shut behind her, the storm raging outside, the city’s usual hum swallowed by the storm. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, of things that shouldn’t exist. Things that could kill her in ways that even the most brutal gunfight couldn’t. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She took a step forward, the green light casting long, shadowy figures against the walls. Herrera was already moving, his hand brushing against something cold and smooth on the table—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* he said, his voice barely audible over the storm. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s grip tightened on her pistol, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps. The figure in the center of the room turned, its face obscured by a mask of blackened bone. *"Detective Quinn,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"You have come at the right time."* Herrera stepped forward, his hand reaching out, his voice low and urgent. *"She’s not supposed to be here. She’s not supposed to see what’s here."* Quinn’s eyes locked onto the figure before her, the green light casting long, shadowy figures against the walls. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She took a step forward, the door creaking shut behind her, the storm raging outside. The figure before her raised a hand, its fingers brushing against something cold and smooth—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* Herrera said, his voice barely audible over the storm’s howl. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s pistol was raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. She had seen enough in her time to know that some places weren’t meant to be seen. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She fired. The shot echoed through the room, the bullet striking the figure’s chest, sending it crashing to the ground. Herrera stumbled back, his hand flying to his side, his eyes wide with shock. The figure on the ground didn’t move, its eyes locked onto Quinn, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s breath came in short, sharp gasps, her pistol still raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She fired again. The figure on the ground didn’t move. Herrera was already running, his hand reaching out, his voice barely audible over the storm’s howl. *"She’s not supposed to be here. She’s not supposed to see what’s here."* Quinn’s eyes locked onto the figure before her, the green light casting long, shadowy figures against the walls. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do. She fired a third time. The figure on the ground lay still, its eyes locked onto Quinn, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s pistol was still raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She turned her gaze to Herrera, who was already climbing the staircase, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall. *"Come on,"* he said, his voice barely audible over the storm. *"You’ll see."* Quinn’s eyes locked onto the figure on the ground, the green light casting long, shadowy figures against the walls. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do. She followed Herrera up the staircase, the storm raging outside, the city’s usual hum swallowed by the storm. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, of things that shouldn’t exist. Things that could kill her in ways that even the most brutal gunfight couldn’t. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She reached the top of the staircase, the door creaking open with a sound like a sigh, revealing the dim glow of *The Raven’s Nest*. Herrera was already stepping out, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall, the green neon sign flickering above them. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* he said, his voice barely audible over the storm. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn stepped out, her pistol still raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. The figure on the ground lay still, its eyes locked onto her, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* She fired one last time. The shot echoed through the bar, the bullet striking the wall behind Herrera, sending a shower of dust and debris raining down. Herrera stumbled back, his hand flying to his side, his eyes wide with shock. The figure on the ground didn’t move, its eyes locked onto Quinn, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s pistol was still raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She turned her gaze to the figure on the ground, the green neon sign flickering above them, the storm raging outside. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, of things that shouldn’t exist. She lowered her pistol, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do. She stepped forward, the figure on the ground lying still, its eyes locked onto her, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn knelt beside the figure, her fingers brushing against its cold, smooth skin. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She reached into her pocket, pulling out a small, black device—a recorder, its surface cold and smooth. She pressed the button, her voice barely audible over the storm’s howl. *"Detective Quinn here,"* she said, her voice steady and firm. *"I’m here to ask some questions. And I’m not leaving until I get answers."* She pressed the button again, the figure’s voice echoing unnaturally through the device. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* Quinn’s eyes locked onto the figure on the ground, the green neon sign flickering above them, the storm raging outside. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She stood up, her pistol still raised, her finger tightening on the trigger. The figure on the ground lay still, its eyes locked onto her, its voice echoing unnaturally. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* it said, its voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. *"This is a place for the chosen."* She turned to Herrera, who was already stepping out of the bar, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall. *"Come on,"* he said, his voice barely audible over the storm. *"You’ll see."* Quinn’s eyes locked onto the figure on the ground, the green neon sign casting long shadows against the walls. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do. She followed Herrera out into the storm, the rain lashing her face, her boots splashing through puddles that had turned to black sludge. The city’s usual hum was swallowed by the storm, the distant wail of sirens echoing through the night. As they stepped into the rain-soaked streets, Quinn couldn’t shake the feeling that she had just walked into something far bigger than she ever imagined. But she had a partner’s body in her hands, and she wasn’t about to let some underground black market decide who lived and who died. She adjusted the strap of her raincoat, the leather watch on her wrist ticking against the cold. She had no idea what kind of danger lay ahead. But she had a job to do. And she was going to get answers.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said again [again]"
1"Herrera said again [again]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.098
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2364
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2364
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count2
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count10
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count2
highlights
0"flickered"
1"chill"
2"footsteps"
3"flicker"
4"familiar"
5"echoing"
6"pulse"
7"etched"
8"echoed"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences148
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount15
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences148
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"decide"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences170
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans43
markdownWords237
totalWords2355
ratio0.101
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest"
1"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
2"\"This isn’t for the likes of you.\""
3"\"Oh, I’m not here for you, Herrera. I’m here for the things you’re selling.\""
4"\"You shouldn’t be down here,\""
5"\"This isn’t safe.\""
6"\"You’re not supposed to be here,\""
7"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
8"\"Come on,\""
9"\"You’ll see.\""
10"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
11"\"This isn’t for the likes of you.\""
12"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
13"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
14"\"Detective Quinn,\""
15"\"You have come at the right time.\""
16"\"She’s not supposed to be here. She’s not supposed to see what’s here.\""
17"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
18"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
19"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
20"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
21"\"She’s not supposed to be here. She’s not supposed to see what’s here.\""
22"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
23"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
24"\"Come on,\""
25"\"You’ll see.\""
26"The Raven’s Nest"
27"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
28"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
29"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
30"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
31"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
32"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
33"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
34"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
35"\"Detective Quinn here,\""
36"\"I’m here to ask some questions. And I’m not leaving until I get answers.\""
37"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
38"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
39"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
40"\"This is a place for the chosen.\""
41"\"Come on,\""
42"\"You’ll see.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions61
wordCount2124
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.04
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Harlow1
Quinn22
Tomás1
Herrera18
Tube1
Camden1
Veil5
Market5
Soho1
Spanish1
Things3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Market"
6"Spanish"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.982
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences140
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2355
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences170
matches
0"know that she"
1"know that some"
2"know that some"
91.26% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean36.23
std17.01
cv0.469
sampleLengths
085
171
220
344
441
545
657
754
854
922
1025
1150
1243
1318
1447
1564
1633
1748
1825
1940
2020
2150
2225
2351
2440
2521
2652
272
2869
2950
303
3136
3235
335
3437
3546
3635
3736
3845
3925
4047
4120
4250
435
4452
4521
4646
4734
4828
4919
98.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences148
matches
0"been rumored"
1"was raised"
2"was swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs348
matches
0"was going"
42.02% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences170
ratio0.035
matches
0"The Veil Market—her name for it—had been rumored to move every full moon, and tonight, it was here."
1"Then she saw it—a flicker of movement beneath the neon glow."
2"Herrera was already halfway down, his hand brushing against something cold and smooth on the wall—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use."
3"Herrera was already moving, his hand brushing against something cold and smooth on the table—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use."
4"The figure before her raised a hand, its fingers brushing against something cold and smooth—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use."
5"She reached into her pocket, pulling out a small, black device—a recorder, its surface cold and smooth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2133
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.02437880918893577
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.007969995311767463
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences170
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences170
mean13.85
std6.38
cv0.461
sampleLengths
024
119
224
318
418
532
614
77
86
914
1015
1119
122
138
1411
1513
1610
177
1817
199
2012
217
2214
2317
2411
2512
263
272
2813
2914
3025
3111
3217
3326
3415
357
366
377
3812
3921
4016
4111
422
4316
447
4520
4611
477
483
494
46.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.11176470588235295
totalSentences170
uniqueOpeners19
22.99% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"Then she saw it—a flicker"
ratio0.007
48.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount62
totalSentences145
matches
0"She had been tracking Tomás"
1"Her breath fogged in the"
2"he’d said, his accent thick"
3"She could hear the distant"
4"Her fingers tightened around the"
5"She had no idea what"
6"She stepped forward, the rain"
7"he called up, his voice"
8"She took the first step"
9"he said again, his voice"
10"She had no idea what"
11"She reached the bottom of"
12"he said, his voice barely"
13"She could hear the distant"
14"She didn’t need to."
15"She had seen enough in"
16"She stepped forward, the door"
17"She had no idea what"
18"She stepped forward, the door"
19"She took a step forward,"
ratio0.428
49.66% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount119
totalSentences145
matches
0"The neon glow of *The"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the"
2"She had been tracking Tomás"
3"The Veil Market—her name for"
4"Her breath fogged in the"
5"The suspect, a man with"
6"he’d said, his accent thick"
7"Quinn had laughed, sharp and"
8"The rain had turned the"
9"She could hear the distant"
10"A door, half-hidden behind a"
11"The kind of place that"
12"The kind of place that"
13"Her fingers tightened around the"
14"She had no idea what"
15"She stepped forward, the rain"
16"The door creaked open with"
17"Herrera was already descending, his"
18"he called up, his voice"
19"The Veil Market was a"
ratio0.821
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
ratio0
68.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences106
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Her breath fogged in the cold air, her boots splashing through puddles that had turned to black sludge."
1"She stepped forward, the rain lashing her face, her boots sinking into the mud."
2"Herrera was already moving, his hand brushing against a door, its surface etched with strange symbols."
3"Quinn followed, her boots sinking into the damp earth, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps."
4"Herrera was already moving, his hand brushing against something cold and smooth on the table—a bone token, its surface worn smooth by years of use."
5"The shot echoed through the room, the bullet striking the figure’s chest, sending it crashing to the ground."
6"Herrera was already running, his hand reaching out, his voice barely audible over the storm’s howl."
7"She turned her gaze to Herrera, who was already climbing the staircase, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall."
8"Herrera was already stepping out, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall, the green neon sign flickering above them."
9"She turned to Herrera, who was already stepping out of the bar, his hand brushing against the bone token on the wall."
10"She followed Herrera out into the storm, the rain lashing her face, her boots splashing through puddles that had turned to black sludge."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"he called up, his voice echoing unnaturally"
1"he said again, his voice lower now, more urgent"
2"he said, his voice barely audible over the storm"
3"Herrera said again, his voice echoing unnaturally"
4"he said, his voice barely audible over the storm"
5"Herrera said, his voice barely audible over the storm’s howl"
6"he said, his voice barely audible over the storm"
7"he said, his voice barely audible over the storm"
8"she said, her voice steady and firm"
9"he said, his voice barely audible over the storm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he’d (would)"
1"he called up (call up)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.098
72.5312%