Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8VPKB56HMEEV2MMWYEBAD

Run Details

Duration:
24.2s
Cost:
$0.001105
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air smelled of jasmine and something sharper, metallic, like crushed mint, as Rory led the way through Richmond Park. The moon hung low, a sickle, but it cast no light through the branches, which loomed like skeletal fingers. Nyx walked at her shoulder, their shadow rippling as if alive—whether from excitement or the grove’s proximity, Rory couldn’t tell. Behind them, Isolde’s silver hair glinted even in the dimness, a beacon. She wore a dress of forest green, and her bare feet left no print in the dead leaves. “Almost,” Rory said, though her voice wavered. She pressed a hand to the nearest standing stone. It was oak, gnarled, its bark split to reveal something paler beneath—bone? Or polished stone? The Heartstone pendant at her throat pulsed, faint but insistent, a warm thrum like a bee in a jar. *This is it*, she thought. The rift in the Veil, Isolde had called it, but Rory had seen the pendant glow like this once before, in a dream of a place where the sky was amber and tables groaned under feasts. Hel, Nyx had murmured, when Rory had confessed the dream. *Gluttony’s city*. “Ready?” she asked, not looking back. Nyx’s form solidified—taller now, 6’2”, a silhouette of shifting shadows that resolved into a woman with a face like crepuscular light. “The edge hums,” they said, and Rory realized she’d been holding her breath. In front of them, the trees thinned. Not away from the park, but… *in*. A clearing opened, and the world tilted. The sky was not gray. It was amber, the color of honey left in the sun, and streaked with clouds that looked painted—swirls of violet and gold that didn’t quite match the stars. The air was warm, but not oppressive, as if the grove trapped a summer evening forever. The grass beneath their feet was not green but *alive*, a deep, iridescent teal that shifted when they stepped, releasing a scent like crushed pearls. Flowers bloomed everywhere: peonies the color of ripe pomegranates, lilies with petals that changed from pink to blue to green depending on where you stood, and a vine with tiny yellow flowers that, when Rory brushed one, tickled her palm with a sound like a wind chime. “Time doesn’t *move* here,” Isolde said, and indeed, the light felt unchanging. The sun—or whatever it was—hung low in the amber sky, not rising or setting. “An hour might be a breath,” she added, and Rory glanced at her watch; it was 11:17. When she looked up again, Isolde was still standing there, her lavender eyes steady. “Not just a breath,” the seer said, smiling. “Perhaps a year.” Nyx let out a low, whistling laugh. Their shadow coiled around the base of a tree, leaving a trail of ink-black smoke that seeped into the bark. “Between,” they said. “The Veil is thin here. Thinner than the rest of Earth.” They took a step toward a cluster of trees, and their form flickered—solid, then a wisp, then solid again, like a candle guttering. “Demons slip through here,” they added, quieter. “Shades too.” Rory’s chest tightened. The Heartstone pulsed harder, and she realized she still clutched the Fae-Forged Blade in her hand, its moonsilver blade cold against her palm. Isolde had pressed it into her fingers the night before, saying, *“It cuts what the world hides.”* Now, when she looked at it, the blade glowed faintly, a silver light that rippled along its edge, as if sensitive to the magic in the air. “Why bring us here?” she asked, nodding at the grove. “The pendant… it leads to Hel. To Dymas.” Isolde’s lips curved. “The Seer does not *lead*. She *shows*.” She turned, and Rory followed, Nyx close behind, through the trees. The grove opened into a glade, and Rory stopped. At its center was a spring, its water so clear she could see stones at the bottom, smooth and oddly shaped—crystals? Or maybe bones. But the water didn’t reflect the sky or the trees. It reflected *memories*. Rory leaned in, and for a moment, she saw a man with her father’s face, standing in a hall of amber light, a girl with her mother’s eyes pressing a pendant into his hand. Then it was gone, replaced by a vision of Dymas: tables heaped with platters of meat, rivers of wine, a prince with horns of shadow sitting on a throne of ivory. And then— “Stop,” she said, stepping back. Her head ached, and she felt sweat break out on her brow. The Heartstone burned hot against her chest. Isolde’s voice was soft, but sharp. “The Veil frays here. Fae magic, mortal hope, Hel’s hunger—they gnaw at it. Rifts open. And when they do… Dymas feeds.” She knelt by the spring, and her footprints appeared—pale, ghostly, like they’d been pressed into dust. “The stone,” she said, tapping the edge of the water. “It’s a key. Not to open, but to *breathe*.” Nyx knelt too, their shadow pooling into the spring. Where their fingers touched the water, ripples spread that were not waves but *shadows*, stretching outward into the air. “The Veil is a skin,” they said. “Here, it’s thin enough to see through.” They looked up, their violet eyes wide. “I can *taste* the realms on either side. Hel’s stench—greed, rot—but under that… Fae magic, sweet and bitter. Like honey and poison.” Rory sat on a rock, the blade still in her hand. She traced the leaf-shaped hilt with her thumb, and it hummed, a low note that vibrated in her bones. “Why not tell me this before?” she asked Isolde. The seer plucked a flower from the grass—red, with petals that looked like silk—and sniffed it. “Because you would not have *listened*. You would have tried to *fix* it, Rory Carter. But the world does not break because it is *broken*. It breaks because it is *alive*. And sometimes, to heal it, you must let it *breathe*.” She tossed the flower into the spring, and it didn’t sink. It floated, spinning, as if caught in an invisible current. “Eva,” Rory said suddenly. The name slipped out before she could stop it. Isolde and Nyx turned to her. “She told me to come here. To find the grove. She said… she said I had to *stop* something. A rift. A prince from Dymas.” Isolde’s smile was sad. “Eva Ellis. She was a good girl. Too good.” She stood, brushing grass from her dress. “Your necklace. It once belonged to her mother. Jennifer Carter’s sister. A sorceress. She died trying to close a rift. Left the pendant as a legacy. A reminder that some doors, once opened, cannot be closed. Only *watched*.” Nyx shifted, their shadow thickening. “Watch. That’s what we do, isn’t it? Shades. We watch the living, and we watch the dead. And we watch *between*.” They tilted their head. “The rift is growing. Closer to the surface. If it breaks… Dymas will pour through. And not just demons. *Hunger*. Souls that have forgotten how to hunger for anything but more.” Rory stood, the blade heavy in her hand. “Then we fix it. We close the rift.” Isolde laughed. “A seer does not *fix* things, Rory. She shows them. You think the Fae Courts exiled me for sharing visions? No. They exiled me for *telling* them the future wasn’t a cage. It’s a thread. You can weave it, but you can’t cut it.” She walked to the edge of the glade, where the trees grew thick, and lay a hand on one of the trunks. It was warm, like a pulse. “The standing stones are a circle, old magic, to keep the rift bound. But the magic is fading. The Veil… it’s bleeding.” Nyx stepped beside her, their shadow merging with the stone. “What do you need us to do?” Rory asked. Isolde turned, her eyes glowing. “You already know. The pendant. The blade. You. The girl who ran from Evan, who delivered dumplings in the rain, who thinks she’s just a delivery person. *You* are the key. Because you see the world not as a problem to solve… but as a story to *live*.” She paused, then added, “And stories have endings. Some happy. Some not. But all stories end with a choice.” Rory looked down at her hand. The Heartstone pulsed, warm now, steady. The blade hummed. The spring sparkled, reflecting not just memories but possibilities. She thought of Evan, of the way he’d hit her, of the fear in her chest when she’d fled. Of Cardiff, of her parents’ faces when she’d called to say she was safe. Of Nyx, shifting between shadow and form, as if they were made of all the things the world tried to hide. Of Isolde, who’d seen her future and not flinched. “We stay,” she said. “We watch. We… *be* the story.” Isolde smiled. “That’s the first part. The rest is already written. You just have to read it.” The wind picked up, and the trees rustled. In the distance, Rory thought she heard a sound like laughter—warm, rich, the clink of crystal. She knew it for what it was: the feasts of Dymas, starting early. The Veil was thin here, thinner than ever. And somewhere, beneath the grass, the rift waited. She took a step toward the trees, Nyx and Isolde falling into step beside her. The Heartstone glowed, a beacon, and the Fae blade hummed, eager. The world was alien, wondrous, and alive—and she was finally, completely, *here*. The amber sky shifted, just for a moment, and Rory saw it: a crack in the air, a fraying of the light, like a broken mirror. It was small, now, but growing. She pressed her hand to the Heartstone. It burned, a promise. This was the edge. And she was ready to step over.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Nyx knelt too [too]"
1"Rory said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.65
leniency1
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.077
93.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1655
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1655
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"beacon"
count2
2
word"wavered"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"resolved"
count1
5
word"oppressive"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"vibrated"
count1
9
word"silk"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count1
12
word"crystal"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"beacon"
2"wavered"
3"pulsed"
4"resolved"
5"oppressive"
6"flickered"
7"traced"
8"vibrated"
9"silk"
10"reminder"
11"pulse"
12"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences105
matches
0"was sad"
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount6
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"watch watch"
2"think"
3"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans27
markdownWords35
totalWords1636
ratio0.021
matches
0"This is it"
1"Gluttony’s city"
2"in"
3"alive"
4"move"
5"“It cuts what the world hides.”"
6"lead"
7"shows"
8"memories"
9"breathe"
10"shadows"
11"taste"
12"listened"
13"fix"
14"broken"
15"alive"
16"breathe"
17"stop"
18"watched"
19"between"
20"Hunger"
21"fix"
22"telling"
23"You"
24"live"
25"be"
26"here"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.75% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1264
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.34
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory17
Richmond1
Park1
Isolde14
Heartstone6
Veil3
Nyx9
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Hel4
Dymas4
Fae5
Carter2
Courts1
Evan2
Cardiff1
You6
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Heartstone"
3"Nyx"
4"Blade"
5"Hel"
6"Dymas"
7"Carter"
8"Courts"
9"Evan"
10"You"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Veil"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore0.828
windowScore0.833
51.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite match the stars"
1"looked like silk—and sniffed it"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.445
wordCount1636
matches
0"Not away from the park, but… *in*"
1"not green but *alive*, a deep, iridescent teal"
2"Not to open, but to *breathe*"
3"not just memories but possibilities"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean58.43
std30.81
cv0.527
sampleLengths
089
1109
255
3121
468
573
688
730
8104
924
1062
1171
1239
1378
1444
1558
1661
1716
1896
1919
2072
2187
2210
2317
2453
2538
2643
2711
98.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"was—hung"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs231
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences105
ratio0.105
matches
0"Nyx walked at her shoulder, their shadow rippling as if alive—whether from excitement or the grove’s proximity, Rory couldn’t tell."
1"It was oak, gnarled, its bark split to reveal something paler beneath—bone?"
2"Nyx’s form solidified—taller now, 6’2”, a silhouette of shifting shadows that resolved into a woman with a face like crepuscular light. “The edge hums,” they said, and Rory realized she’d been holding her breath. In front of them, the trees thinned. Not away from the park, but… *in*. A clearing opened, and the world tilted."
3"The sky was not gray. It was amber, the color of honey left in the sun, and streaked with clouds that looked painted—swirls of violet and gold that didn’t quite match the stars. The air was warm, but not oppressive, as if the grove trapped a summer evening forever. The grass beneath their feet was not green but *alive*, a deep, iridescent teal that shifted when they stepped, releasing a scent like crushed pearls. Flowers bloomed everywhere: peonies the color of ripe pomegranates, lilies with petals that changed from pink to blue to green depending on where you stood, and a vine with tiny yellow flowers that, when Rory brushed one, tickled her palm with a sound like a wind chime."
4"“Time doesn’t *move* here,” Isolde said, and indeed, the light felt unchanging. The sun—or whatever it was—hung low in the amber sky, not rising or setting. “An hour might be a breath,” she added, and Rory glanced at her watch; it was 11:17. When she looked up again, Isolde was still standing there, her lavender eyes steady. “Not just a breath,” the seer said, smiling. “Perhaps a year.”"
5"At its center was a spring, its water so clear she could see stones at the bottom, smooth and oddly shaped—crystals? Or maybe bones. But the water didn’t reflect the sky or the trees. It reflected *memories*. Rory leaned in, and for a moment, she saw a man with her father’s face, standing in a hall of amber light, a girl with her mother’s eyes pressing a pendant into his hand. Then it was gone, replaced by a vision of Dymas: tables heaped with platters of meat, rivers of wine, a prince with horns of shadow sitting on a throne of ivory. And then—"
6"Fae magic, mortal hope, Hel’s hunger—they gnaw at it."
7"Hel’s stench—greed, rot—but under that…"
8"The seer plucked a flower from the grass—red, with petals that looked like silk—and sniffed it. “Because you would not have *listened*."
9"The wind picked up, and the trees rustled. In the distance, Rory thought she heard a sound like laughter—warm, rich, the clink of crystal. She knew it for what it was: the feasts of Dymas, starting early. The Veil was thin here, thinner than ever. And somewhere, beneath the grass, the rift waited."
10"She took a step toward the trees, Nyx and Isolde falling into step beside her. The Heartstone glowed, a beacon, and the Fae blade hummed, eager. The world was alien, wondrous, and alive—and she was finally, completely, *here*."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount604
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.023178807947019868
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0016556291390728477
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean15.58
std21.67
cv1.391
sampleLengths
020
119
220
312
418
57
69
712
83
919
105
1136
1210
132
146
1555
16121
1768
1835
1938
2082
214
222
238
2422
25104
2624
2710
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292
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3131
326
3357
345
355
364
3739
3822
399
4010
416
4231
4325
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452
467
472
484
496
64.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.41904761904761906
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners44
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences81
matches
0"She wore a dress of"
1"She pressed a hand to"
2"It was oak, gnarled, its"
3"she asked, not looking back"
4"it leads to Hel."
5"she said, stepping back. Her"
6"You would have tried to"
7"It breaks because it is"
8"she said I had to"
9"She was a good girl."
10"It once belonged to her"
11"She died trying to close"
12"We watch the living, and"
13"We close the"
14"She shows them."
15"You think the Fae Courts"
16"They exiled me for *telling*"
17"It’s a thread."
18"You can weave it, but"
19"*You* are the key."
ratio0.272
77.28% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences81
matches
0"The air smelled of jasmine"
1"The moon hung low, a"
2"Nyx walked at her shoulder,"
3"She wore a dress of"
4"Rory said, though her voice"
5"She pressed a hand to"
6"It was oak, gnarled, its"
7"The Heartstone pendant at her"
8"*This is it*, she thought."
9"The rift in the Veil,"
10"Hel, Nyx had murmured, when"
11"she asked, not looking back"
12"Nyx’s form solidified—taller now, edge"
13"The sky was not gray."
14"Isolde said, and indeed, the"
15"Nyx let out a low,"
16"Rory’s chest tightened. The Heartstone"
17"it leads to Hel."
18"Isolde’s lips curved."
19"she said, stepping back. Her"
ratio0.765
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"To find the grove."
1"If it breaks…"
2"Because you see the world"
ratio0.037
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Nyx walked at her shoulder, their shadow rippling as if alive—whether from excitement or the grove’s proximity, Rory couldn’t tell."
1"The sky was not gray. It was amber, the color of honey left in the sun, and streaked with clouds that looked painted—swirls of violet and gold that didn’t quite…"
2"At its center was a spring, its water so clear she could see stones at the bottom, smooth and oddly shaped—crystals? Or maybe bones. But the water didn’t reflec…"
56.82% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory said, though her voice wavered"
1"she asked, not looking back"
2"the seer said, smiling"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Isolde laughed. (laugh)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.175
leniency0.35
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.05
79.0072%