Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8W96TFYJDAWB54DWAMGFK

Run Details

Duration:
2m 7s
Cost:
$0.011354
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory jammed her delivery bag’s metal clasp into the oak standing stone’s crevice. She’d ditched her last Golden Empress order mid-route after Eva’s frantic text—Evan’s been poking at Fae-touched spots, and the Heartstone pendant she’d hidden under her uniform had throbbed so hard it left a faint indent on her left wrist, right beside her small old crescent-shaped scar. The clasp’s sharp edge bit into the stone’s rough surface; she grunted, prying the gap wider with a broken branch she’d grabbed from the clearing’s edge. Sweet wildflower scent wrapped around her, but copper stung her nostrils under it—blood, recent, though she saw no trace of it on the lush year-round blooms at her feet. The Heartstone pendant hung from its thin silver chain around her neck, its deep crimson glow faint but steady. It thrummed against her chest, a slow throb-thrum that matched the skip of her pulse when she spotted a rolled note tucked into the crevice’s depths. She reached for it, her fingers brushing the stone’s cold surface, and the thrum spiked—sudden, hot, as if the pendant had caught fire. She yanked her hand back, blowing on her singed fingertips, and glanced at her phone. The delivery app’s notification pinged once, but the time was stuck at 8:17. She’d been here ten minutes by her count, but the torch she’d tucked into her bag cast a blurred beam that didn’t reach the oak standing stones marking the clearing’s boundary—stones that had seemed farther apart when she first slipped through the hidden path in Richmond Park. A baby’s laugh echoed through the clearing. Rory froze, her hand hovering over her bag’s strap. No houses stood within miles of this part of Richmond Park; the only sounds should be crickets and the rustle of leaves. But the laugh came again, high and tinkling, from the spot behind her where wildflower stems bent toward an invisible force—no wind stirred the air, no animal darted through the blooms. She turned slowly, her boot catching on a gnarled root she didn’t see before, and stumbled. The torch clattered to the ground, its beam flickering out. The pendant’s glow brightened, cutting through the dark, and she saw the root had wrapped around her boot’s sole—tight, as if it had grown there in the seconds she’d looked away. She pried the root loose with her branch, her cool-headed mind racing through Eva’s warnings. The Grove eats time for fun. Don’t stay too long. Don’t touch the stones unless you have to. She’d broken both rules already, but the note in the crevice held answers about Evan—answers she needed to keep herself safe, to keep Eva safe. She grabbed the note, rolling it into her palm, and tied it to her bag’s strap with a wildflower stem she plucked from the ground. The copper scent grew stronger, stinging her eyes, and she tasted metallic bitterness on her tongue. “You shouldn’t have come for the note, Laila.” The voice was lyrical, slow, as if it had been stretched thin by time. Rory’s breath caught—no one but Eva knew she used the alias Laila, and Eva was back in her London flat, checking her phone for Rory’s updates. She turned, her hand closing around the Heartstone’s small deep crimson gem, and saw nothing—but the pendant’s thrum spiked again, burning her skin through her uniform. The oak standing stones seemed closer now, their rough surfaces glowing faintly with the same crimson hue as the pendant. She stepped back, her boot hitting another root, and realized the clearing’s size had shrunk. The wildflowers had spread, covering the path she’d used to enter, and the standing stones’ shadows stretched across the ground, merging into a single dark strip that blocked her exit. The baby’s laugh came again, louder this time, and she spotted a shadowy figure moving at the edge of her vision—tall, thin, with no face, its hands outstretched. She fumbled for her torch, but it was gone—vanished into the wildflower blooms, leaving no trace of its plastic casing or its batteries. The pendant’s thrum turned to a frantic throb, and Rory’s mind raced to find a way out. She’d been a delivery person long enough to know how to use what she had—her bag held two hot containers of sweet and sour chicken, still steaming from the Golden Empress’s kitchen. She unzipped the bag, grabbing one container, and held it like a weapon. The voice spoke again, this time closer, its breath (if it had breath) tickling her ear. “Evan’s coming for the Hel portals. He knows the pendant leads him there.” Rory spun, swinging the container at the air. The lid flew off, hot sauce splattering across a wildflower patch—the blooms wilted instantly, turning black and crumbing to dust. She stared, her mouth dry; the sauce’s sweet tang mixed with the copper scent, making her stomach lurch. The shadowy figure stepped into the pendant’s glow, its hand reaching for the gem around her neck. It had no face, but its fingers were long and sharp, like thorns, and they glowed with the same faint crimson hue as the stones. She backed away, tripping over another root, and fell to the ground. The pendant’s glow brightened, burning through her uniform’s fabric, and she felt the gem’s warmth seep into her skin—warmth that turned to pain, sharp and hot, as the figure lunged. She grabbed her second container of sweet and sour chicken, hurling it at the figure’s chest. The container exploded on impact, hot sauce and chicken pieces splattering across its body. The figure screamed, a high-pitched wail that made her ears ring, and stumbled back. But the oak standing stones shifted. They moved closer, their rough surfaces grinding against each other, and blocked her only exit. The figure recovered, its thorned fingers reaching for her again, and Rory saw the note she’d tied to her bag’s strap fluttering to the ground—unfolded, its words visible in the pendant’s glow: Evan knows about the Grove. He’s bringing the Hel portal key tonight. The figure’s hand closed around the note, crumpling it into dust, and its fingers brushed the pendant’s silver chain. The pendant’s glow flared so bright it blinded her for a split second. She screamed, swinging her bag at the figure’s head, and felt the bag’s metal clasp hit something hard—something that crackled like dry leaves. The figure stumbled back again, but the standing stones had merged into a solid wall, trapping her in the clearing. The copper scent grew so strong it made her gag, and she felt a cold hand wrap around her left wrist—right where her small old crescent-shaped scar sat. She looked down, and saw the figure’s thorned fingers digging into her skin, drawing blood that dripped onto the wildflower blooms at her feet. The blood hit the blooms, and they erupted into flame. The fire spread fast, wrapping around the standing stones, and the figure’s wail grew louder—this time, with fear. But Rory didn’t have time to celebrate. The pendant’s glow burned through her neck, and she felt a pull in her chest—like the Hel portal the pendant warned about was opening right beneath her feet. She grabbed the bag’s strap, trying to pull herself up, but the figure’s hand tightened around her wrist, dragging her toward the burning blooms. The fire’s heat singed her straight shoulder-length black hair, and she saw a second shadowy figure step into the clearing—taller, broader, with a face she recognized. Evan. He smiled, his eyes glinting in the fire’s light, and reached for her pendant. That’s when the standing stones’ wall shattered, sending chunks of oak flying toward her. She screamed, swinging her bag at Evan’s face, and the pendant’s glow flared so bright it swallowed the entire clearing—burning her eyes, searing her skin, and dragging her toward the invisible pull of the Hel portal opening beneath her boots. Evan’s laugh cut through the roar of the fire, and she felt his hand close around the pendant’s silver chain, yanking it so hard it dug into her neck. The figure’s thorned fingers tightened around her wrist, and she saw the wildflower flames climbing her bag’s strap, eating through the fabric to reach the hot food containers inside.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1398
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1398
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"throb"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"depths"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"racing"
count1
6
word"raced"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"lurch"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count2
10
word"glinting"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"throb"
2"pulse"
3"depths"
4"echoed"
5"racing"
6"raced"
7"stomach"
8"lurch"
9"warmth"
10"glinting"
11"shattered"
12"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences68
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences70
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1369
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1322
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Golden2
Empress2
Eva5
Evan6
Fae-touched1
Heartstone3
Richmond2
Park2
Grove2
Laila1
London1
Rory8
Hel3
persons
0"Empress"
1"Eva"
2"Evan"
3"Heartstone"
4"Grove"
5"Laila"
6"Rory"
places
0"Golden"
1"Fae-touched"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
73.08% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed farther apart when she first slipped through the hidden path in Richmond Park"
1"seemed closer now, their rough surfaces glowing faintly with the same crimson hue as the pendant"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.73
wordCount1369
matches
0"no one but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean68.45
std46.67
cv0.682
sampleLengths
013
1101
2143
37
4119
599
68
786
896
978
1013
1188
1286
136
1478
15108
1610
17103
181
19126
89.78% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences68
matches
0"was stuck"
1"been stretched"
2"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs236
matches
0"was opening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences24
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0"She’d ditched her last Golden Empress order mid-route after Eva’s frantic text—Evan’s been poking at Fae-touched spots, and the Heartstone pendant she’d hidden under her uniform had throbbed so hard it left a faint indent on her left wrist, right beside her small old crescent-shaped scar."
1"The clasp’s sharp edge bit into the stone’s rough surface; she grunted, prying the gap wider with a broken branch she’d grabbed from the clearing’s edge."
2"Sweet wildflower scent wrapped around her, but copper stung her nostrils under it—blood, recent, though she saw no trace of it on the lush year-round blooms at her feet."
3"She reached for it, her fingers brushing the stone’s cold surface, and the thrum spiked—sudden, hot, as if the pendant had caught fire."
4"She’d been here ten minutes by her count, but the torch she’d tucked into her bag cast a blurred beam that didn’t reach the oak standing stones marking the clearing’s boundary—stones that had seemed farther apart when she first slipped through the hidden path in Richmond Park."
5"No houses stood within miles of this part of Richmond Park; the only sounds should be crickets and the rustle of leaves."
6"But the laugh came again, high and tinkling, from the spot behind her where wildflower stems bent toward an invisible force—no wind stirred the air, no animal darted through the blooms."
7"The pendant’s glow brightened, cutting through the dark, and she saw the root had wrapped around her boot’s sole—tight, as if it had grown there in the seconds she’d looked away."
8"She’d broken both rules already, but the note in the crevice held answers about Evan—answers she needed to keep herself safe, to keep Eva safe."
9"Rory’s breath caught—no one but Eva knew she used the alias Laila, and Eva was back in her London flat, checking her phone for Rory’s updates."
10"She turned, her hand closing around the Heartstone’s small deep crimson gem, and saw nothing—but the pendant’s thrum spiked again, burning her skin through her uniform."
11"The baby’s laugh came again, louder this time, and she spotted a shadowy figure moving at the edge of her vision—tall, thin, with no face, its hands outstretched."
12"She fumbled for her torch, but it was gone—vanished into the wildflower blooms, leaving no trace of its plastic casing or its batteries."
13"She’d been a delivery person long enough to know how to use what she had—her bag held two hot containers of sweet and sour chicken, still steaming from the Golden Empress’s kitchen."
14"The lid flew off, hot sauce splattering across a wildflower patch—the blooms wilted instantly, turning black and crumbing to dust."
15"She stared, her mouth dry; the sauce’s sweet tang mixed with the copper scent, making her stomach lurch."
16"The pendant’s glow brightened, burning through her uniform’s fabric, and she felt the gem’s warmth seep into her skin—warmth that turned to pain, sharp and hot, as the figure lunged."
17"The figure recovered, its thorned fingers reaching for her again, and Rory saw the note she’d tied to her bag’s strap fluttering to the ground—unfolded, its words visible in the pendant’s glow: Evan knows about the Grove."
18"She screamed, swinging her bag at the figure’s head, and felt the bag’s metal clasp hit something hard—something that crackled like dry leaves."
19"The copper scent grew so strong it made her gag, and she felt a cold hand wrap around her left wrist—right where her small old crescent-shaped scar sat."
20"The fire spread fast, wrapping around the standing stones, and the figure’s wail grew louder—this time, with fear."
21"The pendant’s glow burned through her neck, and she felt a pull in her chest—like the Hel portal the pendant warned about was opening right beneath her feet."
22"The fire’s heat singed her straight shoulder-length black hair, and she saw a second shadowy figure step into the clearing—taller, broader, with a face she recognized."
23"She screamed, swinging her bag at Evan’s face, and the pendant’s glow flared so bright it swallowed the entire clearing—burning her eyes, searing her skin, and dragging her toward the invisible pull of the Hel portal opening beneath her boots."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount623
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small old crescent-shaped scar."
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.024077046548956663
lyAdverbCount3
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100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences70
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences70
mean19.56
std9.54
cv0.488
sampleLengths
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226
329
419
526
623
715
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107
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35.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.2
totalSentences70
uniqueOpeners14
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
70.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences67
matches
0"She’d ditched her last Golden"
1"It thrummed against her chest,"
2"She reached for it, her"
3"She yanked her hand back,"
4"She’d been here ten minutes"
5"She turned slowly, her boot"
6"She pried the root loose"
7"She’d broken both rules already,"
8"She grabbed the note, rolling"
9"She turned, her hand closing"
10"She stepped back, her boot"
11"She fumbled for her torch,"
12"She’d been a delivery person"
13"She unzipped the bag, grabbing"
14"She stared, her mouth dry;"
15"It had no face, but"
16"She backed away, tripping over"
17"She grabbed her second container"
18"They moved closer, their rough"
19"He’s bringing the Hel portal"
ratio0.373
12.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences67
matches
0"Rory jammed her delivery bag’s"
1"She’d ditched her last Golden"
2"The clasp’s sharp edge bit"
3"The Heartstone pendant hung from"
4"It thrummed against her chest,"
5"She reached for it, her"
6"She yanked her hand back,"
7"The delivery app’s notification pinged"
8"She’d been here ten minutes"
9"A baby’s laugh echoed through"
10"Rory froze, her hand hovering"
11"She turned slowly, her boot"
12"The torch clattered to the"
13"The pendant’s glow brightened, cutting"
14"She pried the root loose"
15"The Grove eats time for"
16"She’d broken both rules already,"
17"She grabbed the note, rolling"
18"The copper scent grew stronger,"
19"The voice was lyrical, slow,"
ratio0.896
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"It thrummed against her chest, a slow throb-thrum that matched the skip of her pulse when she spotted a rolled note tucked into the crevice’s depths."
1"She reached for it, her fingers brushing the stone’s cold surface, and the thrum spiked—sudden, hot, as if the pendant had caught fire."
2"She’d been here ten minutes by her count, but the torch she’d tucked into her bag cast a blurred beam that didn’t reach the oak standing stones marking the clea…"
3"The pendant’s glow brightened, cutting through the dark, and she saw the root had wrapped around her boot’s sole—tight, as if it had grown there in the seconds …"
4"She turned, her hand closing around the Heartstone’s small deep crimson gem, and saw nothing—but the pendant’s thrum spiked again, burning her skin through her …"
5"She fumbled for her torch, but it was gone—vanished into the wildflower blooms, leaving no trace of its plastic casing or its batteries."
6"The pendant’s glow brightened, burning through her uniform’s fabric, and she felt the gem’s warmth seep into her skin—warmth that turned to pain, sharp and hot,…"
7"The figure screamed, a high-pitched wail that made her ears ring, and stumbled back."
8"The figure recovered, its thorned fingers reaching for her again, and Rory saw the note she’d tied to her bag’s strap fluttering to the ground—unfolded, its wor…"
9"She screamed, swinging her bag at the figure’s head, and felt the bag’s metal clasp hit something hard—something that crackled like dry leaves."
10"She looked down, and saw the figure’s thorned fingers digging into her skin, drawing blood that dripped onto the wildflower blooms at her feet."
11"She grabbed the bag’s strap, trying to pull herself up, but the figure’s hand tightened around her wrist, dragging her toward the burning blooms."
12"She screamed, swinging her bag at Evan’s face, and the pendant’s glow flared so bright it swallowed the entire clearing—burning her eyes, searing her skin, and …"
13"The figure’s thorned fingers tightened around her wrist, and she saw the wildflower flames climbing her bag’s strap, eating through the fabric to reach the hot …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
77.2778%