Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8WSAHXMGTVKJD3PTQNNW0

Run Details

Duration:
28.4s
Cost:
$0.001396
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The wind bit at Aurora’s cheeks as she paused, chest heaving, her breath misting in the winter solstice cold. The alley behind the Golden Empress restaurant had narrowed to a mere crack in the wall, black as pitch even under the streetlamp’s hazy glow. Nyx, silhouetted against the rift, shifted, their form rippling like water—solid one moment, a wisp of shadow the next. “It’s here,” they whispered, their voice a sibilant caress. “Breathe. Don’t fight the pull.” Aurora touched the Heartstone Pendant through her coat, the crimson gem warm against her skin, a faint pulse matching her racing heart. She’d found it on her windowsill three months prior, tied to a note scrawled in a script that looked like smoke: *Trust the rift. The Seer waits.* She’d laughed it off until last night, when the Veil had frayed—Eva, her only friend left in London, had staggered through a door not there, bleeding from a wound that wouldn’t heal, whispering, “Dymas. They’re taking… *it*.” Isolde had been waiting for them in the back of the bar, a silver-haired wraith in a woolen cloak that seemed to absorb the light. “The Grove,” she’d said, lavender eyes sharp as shards of ice. “Winter solstice weakens the Veil. A rift opens. You must reach it before the tide turns.” She’d pressed a dagger into Aurora’s hand—the Fae-Forged Blade, its moon-silver edge glinting, cold even through Aurora’s glove. “It cuts *between*,” Isolde had murmured. “Not just things.” Now, Nyx stepped through the rift first, their shadowy form swallowing the light. Aurora heard a soft *whoosh*, like air escaping a balloon, and when she blinked, she was through too—suddenly in a meadow that shouldn’t exist. The sky was twilight, but not the kind she knew. The stars burned bright, even in the day, and a sixth planet glowed low on the horizon, a sickly green. The grass was not grass—fine, silvery threads that tickled her ankles, releasing a sweet, honeyed scent when she knelt. Wildflowers erupted in clumps: lilies the color of dawn, poppies that pulsed like veins, and strange, star-shaped blooms that shimmered, as if stitched from liquid moonlight. “Is this… Earth?” she asked, her voice small. Nyx, now solid, stood a few paces away, their violet eyes wide—unusual, she thought. “Closer. The Fae touch it. Less *stench*,” they added, wrinkling their nose. “Like it’s *thick* here. Alive.” Aurora realized they were inhaling, greedy, as if siphoning the air. She’d forgotten—Shades thrived on the in-between. The space between worlds. Isolde stepped onto the grass, and Aurora’s breath caught. For the first time in memory, she didn’t see the silver-haired seer; she saw the Half-Fae, the exile, the one who’d been caught giving mortals too much truth. Her dress, a soft blue, rippled not with wind, but with magic, and when she took a step, there was no sound—no footprints, no indentation, just a faint shimmer where she’d stood. “Time bends here,” Isolde said, not looking at her. “An hour might be minutes. Minutes, days. But don’t be fooled—what feels long is short, and what feels short is long.” She paused, tilting her head. “You can *taste* it, can’t you? The Veil.” Aurora didn’t know what she expected, but it wasn’t the image that rose in her mind: a thin, silvery curtain, frayed at the edges, fluttering like a ghost’s hand in the distance. She squinted, and it was gone. “I… don’t see anything.” “Good.” Isolde’s voice was quieter, edged with something like fear. “Most don’t. The Fae built it that way. To keep out those who’d take without offering. To keep *truth* out.” Nyx shifted again, this time into a wisp, weaving through the star-blooms. “There are no barriers here,” they said, their voice echoing. “No walls. Just… *space*.” Aurora watched, transfixed, as Nyx’s form dissolved into the shadows between the flowers, then reappeared ten feet away, solid once more. “I could go anywhere. *Anywhere*.” Aurora’s hand tightened around the knife. The crime scene photos flashed in her mind: Eva, face down in a puddle of her own blood, the wound a ragged hole that shouldn’t heal, that *wasn’t* natural. Dymas, the realm of Gluttony, where souls were lured with feasts, their life force siphoned like wine. The Heartstone, pulsing now, its warmth spreading up her arm. *Trust the rift.* “We should move,” Isolde said, turning. “The Grove narrowing. It won’t stay open forever.” They walked for hours—though Aurora wasn’t sure how many, not with the sky changing color every few minutes, from amber to indigo to that sickly green. The flora shifted too: thickets of black thorns that glowed with bioluminescent sap, a river of liquid starlight that sang when they touched it, and a grove of trees with bark like ancient parchment, their leaves shimmering with runes Aurora couldn’t read. Nyx chattered, commenting on the architecture of the landscape—“That hill, it’s a dragon,” “These rocks, they’re whispering”—but Aurora barely heard them. She was too busy studying the world, cataloging the details, trying to ground herself in something solid. Then she saw the standing stones. They were oak trunks, gnarled and weathered, their rings visible even from fifty paces. Each was carved with intricate patterns—snakes, flowers, a sun with a blade through it. As they approached, Aurora noticed that some of the stones had words etched into them, but not in any language she knew. The Heartstone began to throb剧烈, its crimson light flaring. She stopped, yanking it free from her coat. The gem glowed brighter, almost painfully, and she realized—*they’re alive*. The stones, the words, the land itself. It was *watching*. “Go,” Isolde said, placing a hand on Aurora’s shoulder. Her skin was cold, colder than any winter she’d known. “The clearing is through. Don’t stop. Don’t look back.” Aurora nodded, her throat tight. She gripped the Fae blade, its handle cool, and followed Nyx through the stones. The clearing hit her like a wave. It was circular, surrounded by the oak stones, and at its center was a pool. Not a pond, not a lake—*a well*. The water was black, but not the empty black of night; it was rich, deep, swallowing the light of stars. The edges rippled, as if something moved beneath, and when Aurora leaned closer, she saw faces—faint, shifting, *screaming*—before they dissolved. The air here was thicker, too, cloying, like the smell of overripe fruit. She gagged. Nyx let out a low, rumbling sound. “Dymas. *This* is where the rift connects. Hel is bleeding through.” Aurora’s heart raced. “Eva… she said they’re taking *it*.” What was “it”? A relic? A soul? The Heartstone, still glowing, pulsed against her palm. “Isolde—what are we looking for?” The seer stepped into the clearing, her form no longer ethereal. She moved like a mortal, her feet sinking into the silver grass, but her eyes remained lavender, her silver hair floating loose. She walked to the well and placed a hand on the edge. “This is the Veil’s tear,” she said. “Winter solstice bends it. But it won’t hold. Soon, the doors will open wide.” She turned, her gaze locking onto Aurora. “You carry the Heartstone. It’s a key. To Dymas. To… *him*.” “Prince Belphegor,” Aurora said, her voice steady. She’d researched, in the quiet hours, after deliveries. The ruler of Gluttony, a demon with a taste for human pleasure, who fed on souls *and* memories. Eva had been a cook at the Golden Empress—too good, too curious, she’d stumbled onto something. A cache of relics. A way to open a door to Hel. Nyx shifted, their shadow pooling at their feet. “He wants the Heartstone. To seal the rift, or to break it. Either way, we die.” Isolde’s mouth twisted into a bitter smile. “Breaking it would flood Earth with Gluttony. Souls wouldn’t starve—they’d *suffocate* in excess. Too much. Too greedy.” She looked at the pool, and Aurora saw the fear in her eyes, the weight of centuries. “You must close the door. Before it’s too late.” Aurora’s fingers tightened around the dagger. “How?” “With this,” Isolde said, nodding at the blade. “It cuts through magic. Wards, barriers, demons. But it needs more. The Heartstone must be placed at the well’s center. To anchor the rift closed.” She paused, meeting Aurora’s gaze. “But there’s a cost. The blade will draw from you. Your memories. Your *self*. Each step, a piece lost.” Aurora’s breath hitched. “I don’t…” Nyx took a step closer, their form solid now, their voice soft. “You think I don’t remember? The fire. The cold. The *hunger* of being trapped. This is not a gift, Rory. It’s a choice.” Isolde spoke then, her voice low, almost a whisper. “Remember why you ran, Aurora Carter. From Evan. From the law. From the *quiet* that reminds you how small you are. This is not quiet. This is *fury*. They took your friend. They’ll take more. You have a blade. A heart that beats not for your own sake, but for those who can’t fight.” She turned away, walking toward the edge of the clearing. “I’ll watch. But you must do this alone. The Veil doesn’t let seers interfere. Not without paying the price.” Aurora looked at Nyx, at the flicker of old sadness in their violet eyes, and at the well, its black water churning. She thought of Eva, laughing as she served a plate of truffle arancini, of her smile when she said, “Rory, I found something. Something *special*.” She thought of Evan, his hands around her throat, whispering, “You’re mine.” She gripped the blade tighter. “Okay.” The word was barely a whisper, but Nyx heard it. They nodded, their shadow expanding, as if to shield her. Aurora stepped forward, her boots crunching on the silver grass, the Heartstone glowing brighter with each step. The well’s edges were sharp now, cutting at the air, and the faces beneath the water were clearer—Eva, screaming, her mouth full of fruit, her skin bloated. Aurora looked away. She reached the center of the clearing and knelt. The well’s edge was smooth, cold, as if carved from glass. Aurora placed the Heartstone on the ground, right at the center, and it settled,嵌入 the soil like a seed. It pulsed, faster now, and the ground trembled. The sky outside the clearing—*the real sky*, she realized—was dark, the stars gone. The rift was here. The blade in her hand began to burn. Not with heat, but with a cold, gnawing hunger. Aurora winced, but she didn’t drop it. The water in the well rose, swirling into a vortex, a black hole of light. She saw Belphegor then—tall, with horns like broken glass, his skin as pale as death, his eyes pools of molten gold. He smiled, and Aurora felt the fear deepen, not of his form, but of what he represented: *loss*. *Extinction*. “Close it,” Isolde’s voice echoed. Aurora stood, the blade in her hand, and raised it. The light from the well engulfed her, searing, but she didn’t look away. She thought of bridges, of doors, of the life she’d fled and the one she might save. *I am not small*, she thought. *I am more.* The blade plunged into the Heartstone. It exploded. A wave of light, warm and bright, flooded the clearing. The well collapsed, the rift tearing closed with a shriek of sound. Aurora fell, the blade slipping from her hand, her vision blurring. Nyx caught her, their shadow wrapping around her like a blanket. Isolde knelt beside her, her hand on Aurora’s forehead. “You did it,” the seer said, her voice soft. Aurora opened her eyes. The stars were back, the sky was twilight, the grass was silvery. The Heartstone was gone, but her hand still tingled, as if the gem’s warmth remained. “Eva… is she…” Isolde looked away. “I felt her. For a moment. Faint. She’s alive. For now.” Aurora smiled, small but fierce. “Good.” Nyx shifted, their form dissolving into the shadows. “The Grove will close soon. We must go.” Aurora stood,摇晃了一下,抓住Isolde的胳膊。“What now?” The seer looked at her, her eyes serious. “You’ll remember. The cost was high, but the price was worth it. Now go. Live. And when the rifts come again, you’ll know where to find the door.” She stepped back, her form fading. “And Aurora? Don’t let the quiet find you. Not this time.” The world blurred. Aurora felt Nyx’s hand in hers, cold but steady, and then they were through the rift, back into the alley, where the streetlamp glowed and the world was *normal*. She looked down at her hand. No scar. No trace of the blade. But when she closed her eyes, she saw it all—the well, the faces, the light. She smiled. This time, she wouldn’t run.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She turned away [away]"
1"She stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.491
leniency0.981
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.075
97.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2139
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2139
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"racing"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"echoing"
count1
6
word"transfixed"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"intricate"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"throb"
count1
11
word"raced"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"whisper"
count2
14
word"flicker"
count1
15
word"churning"
count1
16
word"trembled"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count1
18
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"racing"
2"glinting"
3"pulsed"
4"shimmered"
5"echoing"
6"transfixed"
7"warmth"
8"intricate"
9"etched"
10"throb"
11"raced"
12"weight"
13"whisper"
14"flicker"
15"churning"
16"trembled"
17"echoed"
18"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences143
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences143
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
91.06% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences167
gibberishSentences3
adjustedGibberishSentences3
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen64
ratio0.018
matches
0"The Heartstone began to throb剧烈, its crimson light flaring."
1"Aurora placed the Heartstone on the ground, right at the center, and it settled,嵌入 the soil like a seed."
2"Aurora stood,摇晃了一下,抓住Isolde的胳膊。“What now?”"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans32
markdownWords48
totalWords2113
ratio0.023
matches
0"Trust the rift. The Seer waits."
1"it"
2"between"
3"whoosh"
4"stench"
5"thick"
6"taste"
7"truth"
8"space"
9"Anywhere"
10"wasn’t"
11"Trust the rift."
12"they’re alive"
13"watching"
14"a well"
15"screaming"
16"This"
17"it"
18"him"
19"and"
20"suffocate"
21"self"
22"hunger"
23"quiet"
24"fury"
25"special"
26"the real sky"
27"loss"
28"Extinction"
29"I am not small"
30"I am more."
31"normal"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
37.88% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions98
wordCount1650
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity2.24
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora37
Golden2
Empress2
Heartstone8
Pendant1
Seer1
Veil1
Eva5
London1
Isolde13
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Nyx15
Shades1
Half-Fae1
Gluttony2
Fae3
Hel1
Evan1
Belphegor1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heartstone"
2"Seer"
3"Veil"
4"Eva"
5"Isolde"
6"Blade"
7"Nyx"
8"Shades"
9"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
1"London"
2"Hel"
globalScore0.379
windowScore0.5
56.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences107
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like smoke: *Trust the rift"
1"cloak that seemed to absorb the light"
2"as if siphoning the air"
3"something like fear"
10.70% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.893
wordCount2113
matches
0"not with wind, but with magic"
1"not for your own sake, but for those who can’t fight"
2"Not with heat, but with a cold, gnawing hunger"
3"not of his form, but of what he represented: *loss*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences167
matches
0"noticed that some"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs52
mean40.63
std31.31
cv0.771
sampleLengths
077
186
279
337
483
552
6112
742
830
952
1065
1114
12106
136
1487
1528
1619
177
1877
1918
2029
2184
2261
2324
2450
257
2657
275
2835
2992
3059
315
321
3367
3464
3579
365
3749
386
392
4053
419
4234
4314
446
4516
463
4753
4832
4928
92.99% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences143
matches
0"been caught"
1"was gone"
2"were lured"
3"was carved"
4"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs294
matches
0"were inhaling"
1"was *watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences167
ratio0.126
matches
0"Nyx, silhouetted against the rift, shifted, their form rippling like water—solid one moment, a wisp of shadow the next."
1"The Seer waits.* She’d laughed it off until last night, when the Veil had frayed—Eva, her only friend left in London, had staggered through a door not there, bleeding from a wound that wouldn’t heal, whispering, “Dymas. They’re taking… *it*.”"
2"“Winter solstice weakens the Veil. A rift opens. You must reach it before the tide turns.” She’d pressed a dagger into Aurora’s hand—the Fae-Forged Blade, its moon-silver edge glinting, cold even through Aurora’s glove."
3"Aurora heard a soft *whoosh*, like air escaping a balloon, and when she blinked, she was through too—suddenly in a meadow that shouldn’t exist."
4"The grass was not grass—fine, silvery threads that tickled her ankles, releasing a sweet, honeyed scent when she knelt."
5"Nyx, now solid, stood a few paces away, their violet eyes wide—unusual, she thought."
6"She’d forgotten—Shades thrived on the in-between."
7"For the first time in memory, she didn’t see the silver-haired seer; she saw the Half-Fae, the exile, the one who’d been caught giving mortals too much truth."
8"Her dress, a soft blue, rippled not with wind, but with magic, and when she took a step, there was no sound—no footprints, no indentation, just a faint shimmer where she’d stood."
9"They walked for hours—though Aurora wasn’t sure how many, not with the sky changing color every few minutes, from amber to indigo to that sickly green."
10"Nyx chattered, commenting on the architecture of the landscape—“That hill, it’s a dragon,” “These rocks, they’re whispering”—but Aurora barely heard them."
11"Each was carved with intricate patterns—snakes, flowers, a sun with a blade through it."
12"The gem glowed brighter, almost painfully, and she realized—*they’re alive*."
13"Not a pond, not a lake—*a well*."
14"The water was black, but not the empty black of night; it was rich, deep, swallowing the light of stars."
15"The edges rippled, as if something moved beneath, and when Aurora leaned closer, she saw faces—faint, shifting, *screaming*—before they dissolved."
16"Eva had been a cook at the Golden Empress—too good, too curious, she’d stumbled onto something."
17"The well’s edges were sharp now, cutting at the air, and the faces beneath the water were clearer—Eva, screaming, her mouth full of fruit, her skin bloated."
18"The sky outside the clearing—*the real sky*, she realized—was dark, the stars gone."
19"She saw Belphegor then—tall, with horns like broken glass, his skin as pale as death, his eyes pools of molten gold."
20"But when she closed her eyes, she saw it all—the well, the faces, the light."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1627
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"strange, star-shaped blooms"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.028887523048555623
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0043023970497848806
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences167
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences167
mean12.65
std9.58
cv0.757
sampleLengths
019
125
219
39
45
522
624
740
825
911
1034
116
123
1313
1424
1510
1620
1719
1826
198
2014
2112
2216
236
244
259
2628
2732
289
2926
308
3132
326
334
3410
3520
3612
3710
3825
395
406
4129
4217
4310
443
456
468
4726
4842
4921
41.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.2754491017964072
totalSentences167
uniqueOpeners46
25.06% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"Then she saw the standing"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences133
matches
0"they whispered, their voice a"
1"She’d found it on her"
2"she’d said, lavender eyes sharp"
3"She’d pressed a dagger into"
4"she asked, her voice small"
5"they added, wrinkling their nose"
6"She’d forgotten—Shades thrived on the"
7"Her dress, a soft blue,"
8"She paused, tilting her head"
9"She squinted, and it was"
10"they said, their voice echoing"
11"They walked for hours—though Aurora"
12"She was too busy studying"
13"They were oak trunks, gnarled"
14"She stopped, yanking it free"
15"It was *watching*."
16"Her skin was cold, colder"
17"She gripped the Fae blade,"
18"It was circular, surrounded by"
19"She moved like a mortal,"
ratio0.286
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount124
totalSentences133
matches
0"The wind bit at Aurora’s"
1"The alley behind the Golden"
2"Nyx, silhouetted against the rift,"
3"they whispered, their voice a"
4"Aurora touched the Heartstone Pendant"
5"She’d found it on her"
6"The Seer waits.* She’d laughed"
7"Isolde had been waiting for"
8"she’d said, lavender eyes sharp"
9"She’d pressed a dagger into"
10"Isolde had murmured"
11"Aurora heard a soft *whoosh*,"
12"The sky was twilight, but"
13"The stars burned bright, even"
14"The grass was not grass—fine,"
15"Wildflowers erupted in clumps: lilies"
16"she asked, her voice small"
17"Nyx, now solid, stood a"
18"they added, wrinkling their nose"
19"Aurora realized they were inhaling,"
ratio0.932
37.59% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences133
matches
0"Now, Nyx stepped through the"
ratio0.008
14.05% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The wind bit at Aurora’s cheeks as she paused, chest heaving, her breath misting in the winter solstice cold."
1"Isolde had been waiting for them in the back of the bar, a silver-haired wraith in a woolen cloak that seemed to absorb the light."
2"Wildflowers erupted in clumps: lilies the color of dawn, poppies that pulsed like veins, and strange, star-shaped blooms that shimmered, as if stitched from liq…"
3"The crime scene photos flashed in her mind: Eva, face down in a puddle of her own blood, the wound a ragged hole that shouldn’t heal, that *wasn’t* natural."
4"The Heartstone, pulsing now, its warmth spreading up her arm."
5"The flora shifted too: thickets of black thorns that glowed with bioluminescent sap, a river of liquid starlight that sang when they touched it, and a grove of …"
6"The edges rippled, as if something moved beneath, and when Aurora leaned closer, she saw faces—faint, shifting, *screaming*—before they dissolved."
7"The ruler of Gluttony, a demon with a taste for human pleasure, who fed on souls *and* memories."
8"They nodded, their shadow expanding, as if to shield her."
9"Aurora stepped forward, her boots crunching on the silver grass, the Heartstone glowing brighter with each step."
10"Aurora fell, the blade slipping from her hand, her vision blurring."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"they whispered, their voice a sibilant caress"
1"She’d, its moon-silver edge glinting, cold even through Aurora’s glove"
2"she asked, her voice small"
3"Isolde said, not looking at her"
4"they said, their voice echoing"
5"She turned, her gaze locking onto Aurora"
6"Aurora said, her voice steady"
7"the seer said, her voice soft"
8"She stepped back, her form fading"
36.79% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"The Seer waits.* She’d (wait. would)"
2"she’d (would)"
3"She’d (would)"
4"they added (add)"
5"Nyx chattered (chatter)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.283
leniency0.566
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.226
69.3863%