Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8XBP74VFNXQ598QSKQYJT

Run Details

Duration:
3m 48s
Cost:
$0.019200
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn’s boots splatter rain into a puddle of discarded fish and chip wrappers, the grease slickening the concrete under her feet. She keeps her gaze locked on the suspect’s scurrying form—hood up, hands stuffed in a tattered wool coat, a faint glint of a banned alchemical vial peeking from his pocket—as they veer off Soho’s main drag. Her sharp jaw tightens; she’s tracked this clique enforcer for three nights straight, ever since she spotted him slipping that vial to a wide-eyed teen outside a corner shop, the kid’s hands shaking so hard he nearly dropped it. The worn leather watch on her left wrist glints under a flickering streetlamp; its ticking cuts through the rain’s drumbeat, a steady pulse from her military days, a habit she’d never shaken—counting seconds, measuring distance, calculating every move. She skids around a brick wall, her knees screaming as she shifts weight to her balled feet, her salt-and-pepper hair clinging to her forehead under the downpour. The suspect bursts through the green neon sign-lit entrance of The Raven’s Nest—Silas’ bar, the one she’s had under surveillance for weeks, its exterior streaked with rain that blurs the neon’s glow. Quinn yanks open the door, the bar’s dim air hitting her in a wave of stale beer, old pipe smoke, and the faint tang of sulfur. Walls lined with frayed maps of 19th-century London supernatural hotspots and black-and-white photographs of past clique members blur past her; she ignores the barkeep’s startled squawk and zeroes in on the bookshelf tucked between two vinyl-upholstered booths, its shelves stacked with dust-covered leather-bound tomes that look never-read. The suspect’s hand slaps a weathered wooden panel carved with a raven’s head; the shelf swings inward with a low creak, revealing the hidden back room, its door framed by a curtain of tattered black silk. Quinn dives through before the shelf clicks shut, her coat catching on a splintered shelf edge. The back room reeks of sulfur and burnt parchment; a single candle guttered on a rickety oak table, its flame casting dancing shadows over a stack of smooth, yellowed bone tokens—each carved with a tiny rune that hums with faint enchantment. The suspect grabs one, shoves it into his pocket, and bolts through a narrow passageway at the room’s far end, its stone steps winding downward into darkness. Quinn snatches a token too—her fingers wrap around its cool, polished surface, the rune’s hum making her skin prickle, a sensation she can’t place but doesn’t have time to unpack. She doesn’t stop to question it; her partner’s unexplained death three years ago taught her to grab every small advantage, every loose thread, before it slipped away. The passageway twists downward, rain seeping through cracked stone walls to drip onto her neck, its cold bite sending a shiver down her spine. She emerges into an abandoned Camden Tube station—tile walls chipped to expose rusted metal girders, tracks overgrown with weeds that sway in the faint draft, the air thick with the stench of damp earth and rotting trash. This is the Veil Market’s current spot, she realizes; she’s read the scattered, redacted reports in the metropolitan police’s cold case files—a supernatural black market that moves every full moon, that demands a bone token for entry, that sells enchanted goods and information no one else can get. The suspect’s hood falls back as he skids to a halt at a curtain of tattered black cloth strung between two support beams; he holds up his bone token, the rune glowing bright for a split second, and the curtain ripples open to reveal flashes of glowing enchanted goods beyond—vials of neon blue liquid, cloaks stitched with stars that twinkle in the dark, amulets that hum with the same faint energy as the token in her pocket. Quinn presses her back to a rusted pillar, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps, her coat soaked through to her skin. She’s never stepped into supernatural territory before—not consciously, anyway—but her partner’s death still haunts her, the way he’d collapsed on a rainy sidewalk three years ago, his eyes turning milky white mid-sentence, his breath cut off without a wound, the coroner shrugging and labeling it natural causes when she’d known it was anything but. The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticks louder, its steady pulse a counterpoint to the chaos building in her chest, a reminder of the 18 years of decorated service that’s led her here—every case solved, every criminal put away, every lead followed until it dried up, until this clique crossed her path. A shuffle from the shadowy corner makes her reach for her sidearm. Her fingers wrap around the gun’s cold metal, but she freezes when she sees the man leaning against a neighboring pillar. Short curly dark brown hair matted with rain, olive skin streaked with grime from the passageway’s stone walls, a scar snaking along his left forearm—she recognizes him from her files: Tomás Herrera, former NHS paramedic, born in Seville, lost his license five years ago for administering unauthorized, experimental treatments to supernatural patients who’d showed up at his emergency room, now provides off-the-books care for the clique’s members when they get hurt in the market. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck glints under a faint glow from the market’s curtain, its metal warm even in the cold damp of the Tube station. He pushes off the pillar, his boots scuffing the damp concrete, his warm brown eyes narrowing as he takes in her soaked coat, her drawn gun, the bone token peeking from her pocket. You’re out of your depth, detective. Quinn’s sharp jaw sets. She doesn’t lower her gun, her brown eyes burning with the same determination that’s kept her digging for answers about her partner’s death. I’m three nights deep in a chase that leads to banned alchemicals being peddled to teens and a clique that’s been preying on the city’s most vulnerable. I don’t back down when kids are in danger. Tomás snorts, his breath fogging in the cold air. He nods toward the market’s rippling curtain, where the suspect’s form has already vanished into the crowd of shadowy figures—some tall and cloaked, some short and scurrying, some with voices that don’t sound fully human, high-pitched trills and guttural rumbles mixing with the faint clink of vials. That’s the Veil Market. Inside, they sell enchanted goods that can melt your bones from the inside out or rewrite your memories so you forget your own name. Banned alchemicals are the least of your worries. You don’t have a clue what you’re walking into—no guide, no knowledge of the rules, no defense against the things that live in the shadows there. Quinn’s gaze flickers between Tomás and the curtain. The rain’s drumbeat echoes through the Tube station, mixing with the faint chatter from inside the market, the sounds wrapping around her like a suffocating blanket. Her worn leather watch ticks on, its steady pulse a reminder of the seconds slipping away, the suspect getting further and further from her grasp. She thinks of the teen she’d seen three nights ago, his hands shaking as he took the vial, his face gaunt with hunger. She thinks of her partner, lying on that sidewalk, his eyes milky white, his last words a whisper she’d never been able to decode. You’re here for them, too. She nods toward the market’s curtain, her voice sharp. The clique. You patch up their wounds when they get hurt in there—scratches from enchanted claws, burns from alchemical vials, whatever they pick up inside. Tomás’ scar tugs at his forearm as he crosses his arms, his olive skin stretching over the old knife wound. He doesn’t deny it, his warm brown eyes softening for a split second. I do what I have to to survive. The NHS threw me out when I tried to help people no one else would—people who couldn’t go to a regular hospital because their injuries were supernatural, because no doctor would believe them. These folks—some of them are kids, just like the one you saw. They got pulled in because they had nowhere else to go. I don’t turn them away. Quinn’s gaze flickers to the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, a symbol of protection he’s clearly clinging to in this dangerous world. She doesn’t trust him—his files say he’s loyal to the clique—but she knows she needs every advantage she can get if she’s going to step into that market. A shadowy figure steps through the market’s curtain, tall and cloaked, holding a vial of glowing blue liquid that casts a neon hue over the damp concrete. The figure’s gaze sweeps the station, and Quinn ducks further into the pillar’s shadow, her finger tightening on her gun’s trigger. The figure’s head tilts, as if it can smell her human fear, before it turns and vanishes back into the market. Tomás steps closer, his voice dropping to a whisper, his breath warm against her ear. If you go in there, you don’t come out the same. They’ll smell the human fear on you—every vendor, every guard, every shadowy creature looking for a quick meal. They’ll eat you alive for your bone token, or worse—sell you to the highest bidder for information on the metropolitan police, on your cases, on the people you care about. Quinn’s jaw tightens. She glances at the bone token in her pocket, its rune humming faintly through the fabric. She thinks of her partner’s unexplained death, of the teens in danger, of the answers she’s been chasing for three years. She can’t turn back now. She shifts her weight to her balled feet, her military precision kicking in—shoulders back, core tight, every muscle ready to move. She tucks the bone token further into her pocket, her fingers brushing the worn leather watch on her left wrist. I’m not here to be eaten. I’m here to get answers. To take down the ones who are peddling those vials to kids. To find out what happened to my partner. Tomás grabs her arm before she can move. His hand is warm, his grip tight, his scar pressing into her skin, a reminder of the knife attack that had left him with that wound, a story she’d never been able to track down in his files. You don’t have a guide. You don’t know the rules. You’ll be dead before you take three steps inside. Quinn yanks her arm free, her gaze locking on his warm brown eyes. Then give me the rules. Or get out of my way. Tomás sighs, his shoulders slumping with a weariness that suggests he’s had this conversation too many times before. He nods toward the bone token in her pocket, his voice steady. First rule: never let anyone see you take your token out until you’re standing directly in front of the curtain. If they see it before that, they’ll steal it and leave you to rot down here. Second: don’t make eye contact with the cloaked vendors—they’ll trap you in a memory loop, forcing you to relive your worst nightmares until you’re catatonic. Third: if someone offers you a drink—any drink, no matter how harmless it looks—spit it out. It’s laced with a potion that makes you spill every secret you have, every lead you’re following, every person you care about. Fourth: stay away from the back corner of the market—they sell information there, and the vendors will tie you to a chair and torture you for every scrap of knowledge you have before they sell it. Quinn commits the rules to memory, repeating them silently in her head as she stares at the market’s rippling curtain. The faint chatter from the market grows louder, mixing with the rain’s drumbeat and her watch’s ticking, the sounds of a world she’s never known but is about to step into. She takes a step toward the curtain. Wait. Tomás’ voice stops her. He pulls a small vial from his coat pocket—clear glass, filled with a thick, amber liquid—and holds it out to her, his fingers wrapping around the vial’s cool surface. It’s a counteragent. For the memory loops. I keep it on me for the clique members who get caught by the cloaked vendors. Don’t use it unless you have to—it’s hard to come by, and I can’t get more for another month. It’ll burn your throat when you drink it, but it’ll break the loop before it can turn you catatonic. Quinn stares at the vial. She doesn’t trust Tomás, but she knows she needs every advantage she can get if she’s going to survive the market. She takes the vial, tucking it into her coat pocket next to the bone token, her fingers brushing the warm glass. Why are you helping me? Tomás’ scar tugs at his forearm as he looks toward the market’s curtain, his warm brown eyes darkening with a sadness that suggests he’s lost someone to the market’s dangers. Some of the clique members are kids. Kids who got pulled in because they had nowhere else to go—runaways, orphans, kids who found out they had supernatural abilities and were chased away by their families. I don’t want you to take them down with the ones who are actually dangerous—the ones peddling the alchemical vials, the ones selling information to the highest bidder. If you go in there, focus on the leaders. Leave the kids alone. Quinn’s sharp jaw softens for a split second. She nods, her gaze locking on the market’s rippling curtain, where the suspect’s taunting laughter echoes through the Tube station again, a sharp, cruel sound that makes her blood boil. She takes another step toward the curtain. The rain’s drumbeat grows louder, mixing with the market’s chatter, the sounds of a world that’s about to swallow her whole. Her worn leather watch ticks on, its steady pulse guiding her forward, a reminder of the seconds slipping away, the suspect getting further and further from her grasp. She pauses, her hand hovering over the bone token in her pocket. She has to decide—turn back, walk away from the answers she’s been chasing for three years, from the teens in danger, from the truth about her partner’s death, or step into the unfamiliar, dangerous territory of the Veil Market and face whatever waits inside.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:37:31.604Z" 2/20/2026, 7:37:31 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2434
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2434
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"glint"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"dancing"
count1
6
word"down her spine"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count4
8
word"echoes"
count2
9
word"whisper"
count2
highlights
0"glint"
1"pulse"
2"calculating"
3"weight"
4"silk"
5"dancing"
6"down her spine"
7"reminder"
8"echoes"
9"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences113
matches(empty)
16.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount8
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences113
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
2"watch’s"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2387
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount2314
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Quinn14
London1
Camden1
Tube4
Veil3
Market3
Tomás7
Herrera1
Seville1
Saint2
Christopher2
You7
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Quinn"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"You"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Tube"
3"Market"
4"Seville"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2387
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"slipping that vial"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean58.22
std46.33
cv0.796
sampleLengths
0134
1168
2141
3186
4130
5135
633
76
827
936
1056
1162
1259
1347
1439
1533
1669
1751
1869
1915
2059
2145
2241
2331
2446
2519
2613
2711
2830
29135
3051
317
321
3333
3461
3547
365
3730
3876
3938
40112
86.63% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences113
matches
0"led"
1"kept"
2"being peddled"
3"got pulled"
4"get caught"
5"got pulled"
6"were chased"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs368
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount33
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences32
totalSentences116
ratio0.276
matches
0"She keeps her gaze locked on the suspect’s scurrying form—hood up, hands stuffed in a tattered wool coat, a faint glint of a banned alchemical vial peeking from his pocket—as they veer off Soho’s main drag."
1"Her sharp jaw tightens; she’s tracked this clique enforcer for three nights straight, ever since she spotted him slipping that vial to a wide-eyed teen outside a corner shop, the kid’s hands shaking so hard he nearly dropped it."
2"The worn leather watch on her left wrist glints under a flickering streetlamp; its ticking cuts through the rain’s drumbeat, a steady pulse from her military days, a habit she’d never shaken—counting seconds, measuring distance, calculating every move."
3"The suspect bursts through the green neon sign-lit entrance of The Raven’s Nest—Silas’ bar, the one she’s had under surveillance for weeks, its exterior streaked with rain that blurs the neon’s glow."
4"Walls lined with frayed maps of 19th-century London supernatural hotspots and black-and-white photographs of past clique members blur past her; she ignores the barkeep’s startled squawk and zeroes in on the bookshelf tucked between two vinyl-upholstered booths, its shelves stacked with dust-covered leather-bound tomes that look never-read."
5"The suspect’s hand slaps a weathered wooden panel carved with a raven’s head; the shelf swings inward with a low creak, revealing the hidden back room, its door framed by a curtain of tattered black silk."
6"The back room reeks of sulfur and burnt parchment; a single candle guttered on a rickety oak table, its flame casting dancing shadows over a stack of smooth, yellowed bone tokens—each carved with a tiny rune that hums with faint enchantment."
7"Quinn snatches a token too—her fingers wrap around its cool, polished surface, the rune’s hum making her skin prickle, a sensation she can’t place but doesn’t have time to unpack."
8"She doesn’t stop to question it; her partner’s unexplained death three years ago taught her to grab every small advantage, every loose thread, before it slipped away."
9"She emerges into an abandoned Camden Tube station—tile walls chipped to expose rusted metal girders, tracks overgrown with weeds that sway in the faint draft, the air thick with the stench of damp earth and rotting trash."
10"This is the Veil Market’s current spot, she realizes; she’s read the scattered, redacted reports in the metropolitan police’s cold case files—a supernatural black market that moves every full moon, that demands a bone token for entry, that sells enchanted goods and information no one else can get."
11"The suspect’s hood falls back as he skids to a halt at a curtain of tattered black cloth strung between two support beams; he holds up his bone token, the rune glowing bright for a split second, and the curtain ripples open to reveal flashes of glowing enchanted goods beyond—vials of neon blue liquid, cloaks stitched with stars that twinkle in the dark, amulets that hum with the same faint energy as the token in her pocket."
12"She’s never stepped into supernatural territory before—not consciously, anyway—but her partner’s death still haunts her, the way he’d collapsed on a rainy sidewalk three years ago, his eyes turning milky white mid-sentence, his breath cut off without a wound, the coroner shrugging and labeling it natural causes when she’d known it was anything but."
13"The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticks louder, its steady pulse a counterpoint to the chaos building in her chest, a reminder of the 18 years of decorated service that’s led her here—every case solved, every criminal put away, every lead followed until it dried up, until this clique crossed her path."
14"Short curly dark brown hair matted with rain, olive skin streaked with grime from the passageway’s stone walls, a scar snaking along his left forearm—she recognizes him from her files: Tomás Herrera, former NHS paramedic, born in Seville, lost his license five years ago for administering unauthorized, experimental treatments to supernatural patients who’d showed up at his emergency room, now provides off-the-books care for the clique’s members when they get hurt in the market."
15"He nods toward the market’s rippling curtain, where the suspect’s form has already vanished into the crowd of shadowy figures—some tall and cloaked, some short and scurrying, some with voices that don’t sound fully human, high-pitched trills and guttural rumbles mixing with the faint clink of vials."
16"You don’t have a clue what you’re walking into—no guide, no knowledge of the rules, no defense against the things that live in the shadows there."
17"You patch up their wounds when they get hurt in there—scratches from enchanted claws, burns from alchemical vials, whatever they pick up inside."
18"The NHS threw me out when I tried to help people no one else would—people who couldn’t go to a regular hospital because their injuries were supernatural, because no doctor would believe them."
19"These folks—some of them are kids, just like the one you saw."
20"She doesn’t trust him—his files say he’s loyal to the clique—but she knows she needs every advantage she can get if she’s going to step into that market."
21"They’ll smell the human fear on you—every vendor, every guard, every shadowy creature looking for a quick meal."
22"They’ll eat you alive for your bone token, or worse—sell you to the highest bidder for information on the metropolitan police, on your cases, on the people you care about."
23"She shifts her weight to her balled feet, her military precision kicking in—shoulders back, core tight, every muscle ready to move."
24"Second: don’t make eye contact with the cloaked vendors—they’ll trap you in a memory loop, forcing you to relive your worst nightmares until you’re catatonic."
25"Third: if someone offers you a drink—any drink, no matter how harmless it looks—spit it out."
26"Fourth: stay away from the back corner of the market—they sell information there, and the vendors will tie you to a chair and torture you for every scrap of knowledge you have before they sell it."
27"He pulls a small vial from his coat pocket—clear glass, filled with a thick, amber liquid—and holds it out to her, his fingers wrapping around the vial’s cool surface."
28"Don’t use it unless you have to—it’s hard to come by, and I can’t get more for another month."
29"Kids who got pulled in because they had nowhere else to go—runaways, orphans, kids who found out they had supernatural abilities and were chased away by their families."
30"I don’t want you to take them down with the ones who are actually dangerous—the ones peddling the alchemical vials, the ones selling information to the highest bidder."
31"She has to decide—turn back, walk away from the answers she’s been chasing for three years, from the teens in danger, from the truth about her partner’s death, or step into the unfamiliar, dangerous territory of the Veil Market and face whatever waits inside."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount181
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.022099447513812154
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0055248618784530384
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean20.58
std14.23
cv0.692
sampleLengths
021
136
239
338
427
532
626
747
836
916
1041
1127
1230
1327
1424
1537
1648
1777
1822
1954
2054
2112
2221
2374
2428
2533
266
274
2823
2927
309
319
3247
334
3424
358
3626
378
3826
3925
4023
4124
425
439
442
4523
4620
4713
488
4933
36.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.29310344827586204
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners34
30.03% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"Then give me the rules."
ratio0.009
29.01% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences111
matches
0"She keeps her gaze locked"
1"Her sharp jaw tightens; she’s"
2"She skids around a brick"
3"She doesn’t stop to question"
4"She emerges into an abandoned"
5"She’s never stepped into supernatural"
6"Her fingers wrap around the"
7"He pushes off the pillar,"
8"You’re out of your depth,"
9"She doesn’t lower her gun,"
10"I’m three nights deep in"
11"I don’t back down when"
12"He nods toward the market’s"
13"You don’t have a clue"
14"Her worn leather watch ticks"
15"She thinks of the teen"
16"She thinks of her partner,"
17"You’re here for them, too."
18"She nods toward the market’s"
19"You patch up their wounds"
ratio0.477
41.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount93
totalSentences111
matches
0"Quinn’s boots splatter rain into"
1"She keeps her gaze locked"
2"Her sharp jaw tightens; she’s"
3"The worn leather watch on"
4"She skids around a brick"
5"The suspect bursts through the"
6"Quinn yanks open the door,"
7"Walls lined with frayed maps"
8"The suspect’s hand slaps a"
9"Quinn dives through before the"
10"The back room reeks of"
11"The suspect grabs one, shoves"
12"Quinn snatches a token too—her"
13"She doesn’t stop to question"
14"The passageway twists downward, rain"
15"She emerges into an abandoned"
16"This is the Veil Market’s"
17"The suspect’s hood falls back"
18"Quinn presses her back to"
19"She’s never stepped into supernatural"
ratio0.838
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences111
matches
0"If you go in there,"
1"To take down the ones"
2"To find out what happened"
3"If they see it before"
4"If you go in there,"
ratio0.045
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount20
matches
0"Her sharp jaw tightens; she’s tracked this clique enforcer for three nights straight, ever since she spotted him slipping that vial to a wide-eyed teen outside …"
1"Walls lined with frayed maps of 19th-century London supernatural hotspots and black-and-white photographs of past clique members blur past her; she ignores the …"
2"The back room reeks of sulfur and burnt parchment; a single candle guttered on a rickety oak table, its flame casting dancing shadows over a stack of smooth, ye…"
3"She emerges into an abandoned Camden Tube station—tile walls chipped to expose rusted metal girders, tracks overgrown with weeds that sway in the faint draft, t…"
4"This is the Veil Market’s current spot, she realizes; she’s read the scattered, redacted reports in the metropolitan police’s cold case files—a supernatural bla…"
5"She’s never stepped into supernatural territory before—not consciously, anyway—but her partner’s death still haunts her, the way he’d collapsed on a rainy sidew…"
6"The worn leather watch on her left wrist ticks louder, its steady pulse a counterpoint to the chaos building in her chest, a reminder of the 18 years of decorat…"
7"Short curly dark brown hair matted with rain, olive skin streaked with grime from the passageway’s stone walls, a scar snaking along his left forearm—she recogn…"
8"He pushes off the pillar, his boots scuffing the damp concrete, his warm brown eyes narrowing as he takes in her soaked coat, her drawn gun, the bone token peek…"
9"She doesn’t lower her gun, her brown eyes burning with the same determination that’s kept her digging for answers about her partner’s death."
10"I’m three nights deep in a chase that leads to banned alchemicals being peddled to teens and a clique that’s been preying on the city’s most vulnerable."
11"He nods toward the market’s rippling curtain, where the suspect’s form has already vanished into the crowd of shadowy figures—some tall and cloaked, some short …"
12"Inside, they sell enchanted goods that can melt your bones from the inside out or rewrite your memories so you forget your own name."
13"A shadowy figure steps through the market’s curtain, tall and cloaked, holding a vial of glowing blue liquid that casts a neon hue over the damp concrete."
14"The figure’s head tilts, as if it can smell her human fear, before it turns and vanishes back into the market."
15"His hand is warm, his grip tight, his scar pressing into her skin, a reminder of the knife attack that had left him with that wound, a story she’d never been ab…"
16"Tomás sighs, his shoulders slumping with a weariness that suggests he’s had this conversation too many times before."
17"She takes the vial, tucking it into her coat pocket next to the bone token, her fingers brushing the warm glass."
18"I don’t want you to take them down with the ones who are actually dangerous—the ones peddling the alchemical vials, the ones selling information to the highest …"
19"She nods, her gaze locking on the market’s rippling curtain, where the suspect’s taunting laughter echoes through the Tube station again, a sharp, cruel sound t…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
80.0121%