Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8XFFNZ8BSV16HMWHC9EK3

Run Details

Duration:
38.7s
Cost:
$0.001662
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant as its deep crimson core throbbed against her chest, a insistent warmth that seeped through her shirt like spilled wine. The air in Isolde's grove hummed with unnatural tension, the ancient oak standing stones groaning as if alive, their bark twisting into faces that leered and whispered. Wildflowers bowed under an unfelt wind, petals scattering like confetti from a madman's feast. Isolde stood before the largest stone, her silver hair cascading like a waterfall of moonlight, pale lavender eyes fixed on nothing and everything. "The boundary bends," Isolde murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk. "What hungers must pass through the throat of the world." Rory shot a glance at Nyx, the Shade hovering at her shoulder like a smear of midnight ink. In solid form, they cut an imposing six-foot-two silhouette, faintly glowing violet eyes peering from the hooded void of their face. Nyx's whisper-voice slithered into her ear: "The Veil thins here. Your trinket sings of it." She nodded, swallowing the knot in her throat. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched—a ghost of childhood folly amid this descent into madness. They'd come to the Fae Grove in Richmond Park chasing Isolde's cryptic summons, her visions promising answers about the pendant's origins. Answers that pointed south, to Hel. To Dymas. Gluttony incarnate. Rory wasn't sure if she believed in princes of sin or realms of excess, but the pendant's pull had dragged her here, from her dingy flat above Silas' bar, away from Yu-Fei's deliveries and Eva's worried calls. Isolde traced a finger along the stone—no footprint marred the moss behind her—and the air shimmered, a faint distortion ripping open like torn silk. Beyond it, warm amber light bled through, carrying scents of ripening fruit and roasting meat that twisted Rory's gut with sudden, ravenous hunger. "Through the maw we go," Isolde said, stepping forward without hesitation. Rory gripped the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, its moonsilver chill grounding her. She followed, Nyx dissolving into shadow to flank her. The crossing hit like plunging into honey—thick, golden resistance that clung to her skin, muffled her breath. Then release. Cool night air in the grove shattered into balmy embrace, the amber sky above vast and unblinking, streaked with clouds like veins of caramel. She stumbled onto soft earth, knees sinking into loamy soil perfumed with overripe berries and spices she'd never smelled. Vines heavy with glistening grapes snaked across the ground, their leaves broad as dinner plates, veined in gold. Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees bowed under fruits the size of her head—pears swollen purple, apples veined with crimson, clusters of berries that pulsed faintly, as if breathing. "What the hell," Rory breathed, straightening. Her boots squelched in mud that smelled of dark chocolate and smoked meats. The air thrummed with distant laughter, clinking glasses, the sizzle of fat on open flames. Hunger clawed at her insides, sharper than it had any right to be. Nyx solidified beside her, head tilting. "Dymas. Prince Belphegor's playground. Smell the traps in the air—sweet lies on every breeze." Isolde had already wandered ahead, her ethereal form gliding over the vines without snagging. "Feast follows the seeker, but the seeker devours the feast," she called back, voice lilting like wind chimes. Rory pushed forward, the pendant's warmth now a steady heartbeat against her ribs. The path—if it could be called that—wound through the vineyard, grapes dangling temptingly close, skins taut and beaded with dew that shimmered iridescent. She batted one away, but her stomach growled in protest. Nyx chuckled, a rustle like dry leaves. "Resist. Gluttony doesn't kill outright. It swells you from within." Deeper in, the orchards gave way to terraced gardens, tiers carved into hillsides that defied earthly gravity, cascading upward into the amber haze. Exotic blooms unfurled petals wide as umbrellas, releasing puffs of pollen that sparkled like ground glass. Spices hung in the air—cinnamon bark peeling from trees, peppercorns swelling on vines like black pearls. Rory's mouth watered despite herself, vision blurring at the edges with phantom tastes: salted caramel, truffled honey, flesh seared rare. A low murmur drew them onward. They crested a rise, and the land opened into a vast amphitheater of feasting halls. Marble pavilions ringed a central plaza, columns carved with writhing figures mid-bite, mouths distended around impossible delicacies. Tables groaned under spreads: whole roasted beasts with glazed ribs arching skyward, pies oozing jewel-toned fillings, towers of pastries flaking gold leaf. Helbound souls—mortals contracted from Earth, their eyes hollow with eternal servitude—scurried between stations, faces smeared with sauces, knives flashing in culinary frenzy. One chef, a burly man with a soul-brand scar on his neck, bellowed orders at a team deboning a creature Rory couldn't name—limbs like lamb shanks but scaled, eyes glazed in jelly. "Morel essence! Bind the terror-glaze!" Steam billowed, carrying notes of earth and umami that hooked into Rory's brain. Unease prickled her skin. The laughter echoing from the pavilions rang too loud, too desperate. Diners—demons in humanoid guise, their skins mottled with gluttonous stretch marks—shoveled food with abandon, bellies distended, chins dripping. One paused, violet eyes locking on the newcomers, lips curling in invitation. Rory's hand drifted to the Fae blade, its cold bite steadying her pulse. "This place... it's alive. Watching us." Isolde paused at the plaza's edge, silver hair stirring though no wind blew. "The garden whispers secrets to empty bellies. Fill one, and the other starves." Nyx's form flickered, incorporeal tendrils probing the shadows under tables. "Portals within portals. The prince's larder hides rifts to deeper Hel. Your pendant leads true." They skirted the plaza, hugging the vine-choked walls. Rory's boots sank deeper into the soil with each step, as if the ground savored her weight. A low vibration hummed through her soles—drums? Heartbeats? Discovery tugged her onward: amid a cluster of fruit trees, a pedestal rose from the earth, cradling a single, massive peach, its fuzz silken gold, nectar beading at the stem like blood. She reached out, mesmerized, but Nyx's shadow-hand clamped her wrist. "Illusion fruit. Bites back." As if summoned, the peach split open, revealing teeth like shattered porcelain. A maw snapped shut inches from her fingers, then the fruit-thing burrowed into the soil with a wet slurp, leaving a burrow steaming with acidic sap. Rory jerked back, heart hammering. "Jesus. Okay, not touching anything." Deeper still, the gardens thickened into a labyrinth of hedgerows woven from herb stalks thick as her thigh—rosemary spears piercing the sky, basil leaves broad as shields dripping fragrant oil. The air grew heavier, laced with fermentation's tang, the amber sky darkening to burnt orange as unseen suns dipped. Sounds amplified: the wet smack of chewing from hidden nooks, guttural moans of overindulgence, a symphony of mastication. Wonder crept in despite the dread. A waterfall tumbled nearby, not water but deep red wine cascading over mossy rocks into pools where fish with golden scales darted, bellies fat and translucent. Vines bridged chasms, laden with figs that split to reveal caviar-like seeds. Rory paused at one pool, dipping a finger—the wine tasted of black cherries and regret, igniting a fire in her veins that demanded more. She yanked her hand away, shaking droplets that burned like whiskey. "Time slips here," Isolde said, appearing beside her without a sound. "An hour's sip, a lifetime's thirst." Nyx scouted ahead, their solid form melting into shadow to slip through gaps. They reformed ahead, violet eyes urgent. "Competition grounds. Fresh. Smell the rivalry." The group emerged into a coliseum carved from living pastry dough, walls golden-crusted and flaking. Bleachers overflowed with spectators—demons bloating mid-cheer—encircling an arena where two chefs dueled. One sculpted a swan from spun sugar and hellfire peppers; the other layered a mille-feuille tower with soul-trapped essences, each bite releasing screams of ecstasy. Flames licked without burning, aromas assaulting Rory's senses: smoked soul, candied brimstone. A competitor glanced up, spotting them. "Fresh palate! Join the judges' circle!" Rory's stomach lurched, traitorous hunger warring with nausea. The pendant flared hot, pointing toward a shadowed archway beyond the arena—black marble veined with pulsing veins, exhaling cool mist that cut the ambient warmth. "There," she said, voice firm. "That's our way deeper." Isolde nodded, misleading smile playing on her lips. "The core rots sweetest." They darted through the fringes, dodging platters borne by skeletal imps, their trays heaped with wriggling delicacies. Unease peaked as shadows lengthened unnaturally, whispers coalescing into words: *Stay. Taste. Forever.* Nyx shoved Rory through a gap. "Belphegor's gaze stirs. Run light." The arch swallowed them, mist coiling like serpents. Beyond, the true heart of Dymas unfurled: endless banquet halls merging into caverns of crystal-embedded lard, chandeliers dripping tallow candles that wept waxen tears. Rivers of gravy carved canyons, bridges of baguette spanning them. In the distance, a throne loomed—massive, upholstered in velvet skin—empty, but throbbing. Rory's breath caught, wonder eclipsing fear for a heartbeat. This was creation unbound, indulgence sculpted into eternity. The pendant burned now, a beacon amid the excess. But beneath the splendor, something gnawed—a hollowness echoing their footsteps, promising that all this bounty hid teeth sharper than any fruit's. Isolde halted, lavender eyes distant. "The prince sleeps, but his dreams feed the vines. What you seek wakes him." Rory drew the Fae blade, its luminescence faint in the amber gloom, cold steel whispering readiness. They pressed on, the alien wonders of Dymas folding around them like a lover's too-tight embrace.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:37:35.488Z" 2/20/2026, 7:37:35 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.391
leniency0.783
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1616
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1616
totalAiIsms40
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"tension"
count1
3
word"cascading"
count3
4
word"silk"
count2
5
word"imposing"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count2
9
word"maw"
count2
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count2
12
word"glistening"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count2
15
word"marble"
count2
16
word"echoing"
count2
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"flickered"
count1
19
word"weight"
count1
20
word"porcelain"
count1
21
word"symphony"
count1
22
word"lurched"
count1
23
word"crystal"
count1
24
word"loomed"
count1
25
word"velvet"
count1
26
word"beacon"
count1
27
word"footsteps"
count1
28
word"gloom"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"warmth"
2"tension"
3"cascading"
4"silk"
5"imposing"
6"whisper"
7"traced"
8"shimmered"
9"maw"
10"chill"
11"shattered"
12"glistening"
13"pulsed"
14"stomach"
15"marble"
16"echoing"
17"pulse"
18"flickered"
19"weight"
20"porcelain"
21"symphony"
22"lurched"
23"crystal"
24"loomed"
25"velvet"
26"beacon"
27"footsteps"
28"gloom"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences100
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences115
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1575
ratio0.002
matches
0"Stay. Taste. Forever."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1404
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Isolde11
Rory18
Nyx9
Shade1
Fae4
Grove1
Richmond1
Park1
Hel1
Dymas3
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Earth1
Unease2
One3
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Isolde"
2"Rory"
3"Nyx"
4"Shade"
5"Dymas"
6"Unease"
7"One"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Hel"
5"Earth"
globalScore0.859
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if breathing"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.635
wordCount1575
matches
0"not water but deep red wine cascading over mossy rocks into pools"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences115
matches
0"called that—wound"
1"promising that all"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean40.38
std24.79
cv0.614
sampleLengths
091
122
254
394
447
511
668
766
847
920
1032
1163
1275
1382
1450
1545
1619
1726
1825
1965
2014
2138
2210
2367
2479
2517
2625
2764
2812
2933
309
3112
3230
3311
3454
3526
3621
3719
3832
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs279
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences115
ratio0.148
matches
0"The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched—a ghost of childhood folly amid this descent into madness."
1"Isolde traced a finger along the stone—no footprint marred the moss behind her—and the air shimmered, a faint distortion ripping open like torn silk."
2"The crossing hit like plunging into honey—thick, golden resistance that clung to her skin, muffled her breath."
3"Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees bowed under fruits the size of her head—pears swollen purple, apples veined with crimson, clusters of berries that pulsed faintly, as if breathing."
4"The path—if it could be called that—wound through the vineyard, grapes dangling temptingly close, skins taut and beaded with dew that shimmered iridescent."
5"Spices hung in the air—cinnamon bark peeling from trees, peppercorns swelling on vines like black pearls."
6"Helbound souls—mortals contracted from Earth, their eyes hollow with eternal servitude—scurried between stations, faces smeared with sauces, knives flashing in culinary frenzy."
7"One chef, a burly man with a soul-brand scar on his neck, bellowed orders at a team deboning a creature Rory couldn't name—limbs like lamb shanks but scaled, eyes glazed in jelly."
8"Diners—demons in humanoid guise, their skins mottled with gluttonous stretch marks—shoveled food with abandon, bellies distended, chins dripping."
9"A low vibration hummed through her soles—drums?"
10"Deeper still, the gardens thickened into a labyrinth of hedgerows woven from herb stalks thick as her thigh—rosemary spears piercing the sky, basil leaves broad as shields dripping fragrant oil."
11"Rory paused at one pool, dipping a finger—the wine tasted of black cherries and regret, igniting a fire in her veins that demanded more."
12"Bleachers overflowed with spectators—demons bloating mid-cheer—encircling an arena where two chefs dueled."
13"One sculpted a swan from spun sugar and hellfire peppers; the other layered a mille-feuille tower with soul-trapped essences, each bite releasing screams of ecstasy."
14"The pendant flared hot, pointing toward a shadowed archway beyond the arena—black marble veined with pulsing veins, exhaling cool mist that cut the ambient warmth."
15"In the distance, a throne loomed—massive, upholstered in velvet skin—empty, but throbbing."
16"But beneath the splendor, something gnawed—a hollowness echoing their footsteps, promising that all this bounty hid teeth sharper than any fruit's."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount540
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.020370370370370372
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.005555555555555556
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences115
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences115
mean13.7
std7.72
cv0.564
sampleLengths
027
127
214
323
412
510
618
721
815
98
1018
1121
126
132
142
1537
1624
1723
1811
1916
209
2117
222
2324
2419
2518
2629
276
2813
2915
3013
316
3214
3314
3418
3513
3623
3710
387
3910
4023
4116
4216
4320
446
4515
4617
4722
4822
4932
82.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4956521739130435
totalSentences115
uniqueOpeners57
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences94
matches
0"She nodded, swallowing the knot"
1"They'd come to the Fae"
2"She followed, Nyx dissolving into"
3"She stumbled onto soft earth,"
4"Her boots squelched in mud"
5"she called back, voice lilting"
6"She batted one away, but"
7"They crested a rise, and"
8"They skirted the plaza, hugging"
9"She reached out, mesmerized, but"
10"She yanked her hand away,"
11"They reformed ahead, violet eyes"
12"she said, voice firm"
13"They darted through the fringes,"
14"They pressed on, the alien"
ratio0.16
39.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences94
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The air in Isolde's grove"
2"Wildflowers bowed under an unfelt"
3"Isolde stood before the largest"
4"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
5"Rory shot a glance at"
6"Nyx's whisper-voice slithered into her"
7"She nodded, swallowing the knot"
8"The small crescent scar on"
9"They'd come to the Fae"
10"Answers that pointed south, to"
11"Rory wasn't sure if she"
12"Isolde traced a finger along"
13"Isolde said, stepping forward without"
14"Rory gripped the hilt of"
15"She followed, Nyx dissolving into"
16"The crossing hit like plunging"
17"She stumbled onto soft earth,"
18"Vines heavy with glistening grapes"
19"Orchards stretched into hazy distance,"
ratio0.84
53.19% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"As if summoned, the peach"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the Heartstone Pendant as its deep crimson core throbbed against her chest, a insistent warmth that seeped through her shirt l…"
1"The air in Isolde's grove hummed with unnatural tension, the ancient oak standing stones groaning as if alive, their bark twisting into faces that leered and wh…"
2"They'd come to the Fae Grove in Richmond Park chasing Isolde's cryptic summons, her visions promising answers about the pendant's origins."
3"The crossing hit like plunging into honey—thick, golden resistance that clung to her skin, muffled her breath."
4"Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees bowed under fruits the size of her head—pears swollen purple, apples veined with crimson, clusters of berries that …"
5"Her boots squelched in mud that smelled of dark chocolate and smoked meats."
6"The path—if it could be called that—wound through the vineyard, grapes dangling temptingly close, skins taut and beaded with dew that shimmered iridescent."
7"Deeper in, the orchards gave way to terraced gardens, tiers carved into hillsides that defied earthly gravity, cascading upward into the amber haze."
8"Exotic blooms unfurled petals wide as umbrellas, releasing puffs of pollen that sparkled like ground glass."
9"As if summoned, the peach split open, revealing teeth like shattered porcelain."
10"Vines bridged chasms, laden with figs that split to reveal caviar-like seeds."
11"The pendant flared hot, pointing toward a shadowed archway beyond the arena—black marble veined with pulsing veins, exhaling cool mist that cut the ambient warm…"
12"Beyond, the true heart of Dymas unfurled: endless banquet halls merging into caverns of crystal-embedded lard, chandeliers dripping tallow candles that wept wax…"
13"But beneath the splendor, something gnawed—a hollowness echoing their footsteps, promising that all this bounty hid teeth sharper than any fruit's."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk"
1"she called back, voice lilting like wind chimes"
2"she said, voice firm"
19.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2"she called back (call back)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.261
leniency0.522
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.261
75.9495%