Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8ZEM9KK67X25B1MYC6VM5

Run Details

Duration:
52.3s
Cost:
$0.001975
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora's fingers tightened around the Fae-Forged Blade's hilt, the moonsilver cold as winter frost even through her glove. The Heartstone Pendant burned hot against her skin, its crimson glow pulsing like a heartbeat in sync with her own racing pulse. Richmond Park's fog-shrouded oaks loomed behind them, but ahead, the air split open—a jagged tear in reality, the Veil frayed like rotten silk. Faint whispers slithered from the rift, oily and inviting, carrying scents of roasted meats and spiced wines that clawed at her empty stomach. Isolde stepped forward first, her silver hair swaying like moonlight on water, pale lavender eyes fixed on the shimmer. "The glutton waits with open maw," she murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk. "Feast or be the feast, wanderers of the breach." No footprints marred the dew-kissed grass where she trod; she glided, ethereal as mist. Nyx coalesced beside Aurora, their shadowy form solidifying into a tall silhouette, faintly glowing violet eyes peering from the void of their face. "The shadows here are... thick," they whispered, voice like wind through cracked stone. "They hunger too." A tendril of darkness uncurled from their hand, probing the rift, then recoiled as if stung. Aurora swallowed, her throat dry. Twenty-five years on Earth—Cardiff grit, London drudgery, deliveries for Yu-Fei's greasy takeout—hadn't prepared her for this. But Evan's bruises had, and the pendant's anonymous drop in her flat above Silas' bar had pulled her here. Quick thinking, her friends called it. Desperation, she knew better. "No turning back," she said, voice steadier than she felt. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched, a ghost of childhood folly. She sheathed the blade and gripped the pendant chain. "Together." They crossed as one. The world inverted in a rush of vertigo—her stomach lurched, ears popped, and the Veil sealed behind them with a wet smack, like lips closing on a morsel. Aurora stumbled forward, boots sinking into loamy soil that smelled of overripe fruit and baking bread. No Richmond chill nipped her skin; warmth enveloped her, heavy and cloying, like stepping into a crowded kitchen. She blinked, bright blue eyes widening. The sky arched above in a dome of warm amber, veined with lazy swirls of gold, as if the heavens simmered in honeyed light. No sun pierced it, yet everything glowed with diffused radiance. Vines heavy with clusters of jewel-toned grapes snaked across the ground, their leaves broad and waxy, rustling without wind. Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees groaning under fruits the size of her head—pears blushing crimson, apples veined with blue, peaches dripping nectar that sizzled faintly on the earth. "What... is this place?" Aurora breathed, turning in a slow circle. Her shoulder-length black hair stuck to her neck in the humid air. The ground quivered subtly beneath her, alive with hidden movement—worms? Roots? Something burrowing in perpetual feast. Isolde tilted her head, silver strands cascading like a waterfall. "Dymas calls, where bellies bloat and boundaries blur. Prince Belphegor's table is set eternal." Her lavender eyes gleamed with knowing mischief, but she offered no more; the Fae compulsion twisted truths into knots. Nyx's form flickered, shadows rippling across their humanoid frame. They towered over Aurora at six-foot-two, but here their edges frayed, as if the ambient light diluted them. "Hel's gut," they hissed. "Gluttony's realm. I smelled it on the winds between realms—souls contracted, bound to cook their own damnation." Their violet gaze swept the horizon. Laughter echoed distantly, booming and wet, mingled with clinking goblets and the slurp of unseen mouths. Unease coiled in Aurora's chest. The air tasted sweet, too sweet, coating her tongue like syrup. Her stomach growled traitorously, louder than it had any right to. She pressed a hand to it, scar flexing. "Feels wrong. Like it's... watching us." "Indulge," came a voice from the vines, syrupy and deep. A figure lumbered into view—a helbound soul, Aurora guessed, corpulent and grinning, skin stretched taut over endless meals. He wore a chef's whites stained with sauces of every hue, carrying a platter of glistening pastries that steamed with impossible heat. "First taste's free in Dymas, pretties. Prince's hospitality." Aurora's hand drifted to the blade, but Isolde raised a pale palm. "Gifts from the vine bear thorns unseen," she warned, misleading as always. Nyx lunged incorporeal, a blur of shadow engulfing the chef's arm. The man yelped, pastry tumbling—but when Nyx reformed, holding a flaky turnover oozing custard, their whisper held hunger. "It's real. Smells of Earth spices, but twisted." "Don't," Aurora snapped, but her mouth watered despite herself. She batted it away; it splattered on the ground, and the soil drank it greedily, vines twitching toward the spot. A low rumble vibrated up her legs, like the earth belching contentedly. They pressed deeper, weaving through orchards where trees whispered temptations. "One bite," murmured a peach, its flesh parting wetly under invisible pressure. "Heal your scars, fill your voids." Aurora's wrist burned; she yanked her sleeve down, quick-stepping past. The Fae blade hummed faintly in its sheath, cold comfort against the growing heat. A grand archway loomed ahead, carved from petrified fruits—apples for columns, grapevines twining the lintel. Beyond: a sprawling feast hall, open to the amber sky. Tables groaned under roasts crackling with fat, towers of cakes weeping cream, rivers of wine carving channels in the floor. Demons in aprons darted about, horns glinting, while souls—contracted mortals, their eyes hollow with addiction—stirred cauldrons that bubbled with elixirs promising ecstasy. Wonder struck Aurora like a slap. Chefs dueled in a central arena, flames leaping from pans in shapes of beasts, crowds of gluttonous shades cheering with mouths full. One hurled a fireball pie; it exploded in savory shrapnel, eliciting moans of delight. The air thrummed with music—harps strung with gut, flutes carved from bones—pulsing like a feast-goer's heartbeat. "Beautiful," she whispered, hating herself for it. Her delivery routes flashed in mind: rain-slick London streets, Yu-Fei's stern nod for a job well done. This was excess unbound, a dream turned nightmare. Isolde laughed, a chime of silver bells. "Beauty bloats to beast when the sun forgets to set." She knelt by a wildflower bed—impossibly vibrant amid the gluttony—plucking a bloom that unfurled into a tiny fruit. She popped it in her mouth, eyes distant. "Time fattens here. An hour may birth a lifetime... or starve it." Nyx solidified fully, hand on Aurora's shoulder, cool shadow against her flush skin. "Feel it? The pull." Their voice crackled. "Gluttony doesn't just feed the body. It devours will." Aurora nodded, unease sharpening to fear. Her pendant cooled slightly, inner glow dimming as they delved inward. A shadow detached from the hall's edge—not Nyx's—slipping toward them with wet, sucking steps. Demon scout? She drew the blade; it sang free, luminescent despite the amber light, edge keen as Fae spite. The shadow resolved into a hound-thing, bloated belly dragging, jaws unhinging to reveal rows of fruit-pit teeth. Saliva dripped, sizzling vines to ash. It lunged, baying a gurgle of hunger. Nyx dissolved into smoke, reforming behind it, violet eyes blazing as shadows coiled like nooses around its throat. "Back to your master's gut!" Isolde spun, hands weaving riddles into air—illusions? Vines erupted, thorns impaling the beast mid-leap. It shrieked, bursting in a spray of juice and ichor that splashed Aurora's boots. She wiped her face, breath ragged, blade dripping cold nectar. "Discovery number one: everything wants to eat us." Laughter bubbled from the hall, drawing eyes. A distant horn blared—culinary games commencing. Cheers swelled, plates clashing. "We go deeper," Aurora said, sheathing the blade. Her scar throbbed, a reminder of fragility. But the orchards called, paths winding to unseen groves, scents intensifying: chocolate rivers, meat mountains. Wonder warred with dread; this realm seduced as surely as it devoured. Isolde smiled enigmatically. "Deeper, where the prince digests his dreams." Nyx nodded, form wavering. "Shadows thicken ahead. Secrets fester." Aurora led, boots squelching through nectar-puddles, the amber sky pressing down like a full belly. Each step deepened the immersion—vines brushing her legs with feather touches, air humming promises. A cluster of grapes brushed her palm; she snatched her hand back, but not before juice stained her skin, warm and insistent. Her hunger gnawed fiercer. In a clearing, they found a pavilion of living pastry, dough walls breathing yeast-scent. Inside, holographic feasts projected by sorcery: phantom banquets where souls gorged eternally, faces twisting in bliss-pain. One reached out, translucent hand grasping—Aurora jerked away, heart slamming. "Bound by contract," Nyx whispered, violet eyes pitying. "Chefs for eternity, feeding the damned." Unease peaked as a tremor shook the ground—massive jaws grinding below? Aurora gripped the pendant; it warmed again, pointing onward. Toward the heart of excess, where Prince Belphegor's silhouette loomed faint on the horizon, a mountain of reclined flesh amid eternal revels. They moved, the realm unfolding in waves of sensory assault: birds with beaks of candy dropping sugared songs, flowers exhaling intoxicating pollen that blurred vision. Aurora's mind raced—out-of-the-box: the blade cut wards, perhaps portals too. Nyx's shadows could scout unseen. Isolde's riddles hid maps. Wonder resurfaced amid peril—a tree bore lanterns of glowing jam, illuminating murals of gluttonous history etched in caramel. Demons danced, tails whipping steam. For a heartbeat, Aurora imagined surrender: endless plates, no Evan, no flights from abuse. But the pendant burned warning. "Not yet," she muttered. Deeper still, the air thickened to soup, sounds muffling to heartbeats—hers, theirs, the realm's. Vines parted on a chasm: a pit of writhing forms, souls merged in orgy of consumption, moans rising like steam. Isolde halted, lavender eyes prophetic. "The core awaits, where want becomes wound." Aurora steeled herself. First steps in Hel's belly, and already changed. The group plunged on, alien wonders beckoning, unease their only anchor.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:38:40.15Z" 2/20/2026, 7:38:40 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1666
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
6.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1666
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"racing"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"loomed"
count3
3
word"silk"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count3
5
word"maw"
count1
6
word"lurched"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"quivered"
count1
10
word"cascading"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"glistening"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"vibrated"
count1
16
word"glinting"
count1
17
word"delved"
count1
18
word"resolved"
count1
19
word"throbbed"
count1
20
word"reminder"
count1
21
word"wavering"
count1
22
word"raced"
count1
23
word"peril"
count1
24
word"etched"
count1
25
word"steeled"
count1
highlights
0"racing"
1"pulse"
2"loomed"
3"silk"
4"stomach"
5"maw"
6"lurched"
7"chill"
8"warmth"
9"quivered"
10"cascading"
11"flickered"
12"echoed"
13"glistening"
14"whisper"
15"vibrated"
16"glinting"
17"delved"
18"resolved"
19"throbbed"
20"reminder"
21"wavering"
22"raced"
23"peril"
24"etched"
25"steeled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences121
matches
0"d with dread"
1"g in bliss"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences121
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1618
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"A figure lumbered into view—a helbound soul, Aurora guessed, corpulent and grinning, skin stretched taut over endless me…"
72.92% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount1427
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity1.54
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Park1
Veil2
Nyx10
Aurora22
Earth1
Cardiff1
London2
Yu-Fei2
Evan2
Quick1
Richmond2
Fae4
Laughter2
Isolde8
Unease2
Prince1
Belphegor1
Deeper1
Hel1
Vines3
Wonder3
persons
0"Blade"
1"Pendant"
2"Veil"
3"Nyx"
4"Aurora"
5"Earth"
6"Yu-Fei"
7"Evan"
8"Laughter"
9"Isolde"
10"Unease"
11"Prince"
12"Belphegor"
13"Vines"
14"Wonder"
places
0"Park"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Richmond"
4"Hel"
globalScore0.729
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1618
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean41.49
std20.95
cv0.505
sampleLengths
086
157
255
384
466
588
639
743
870
941
1058
1124
1237
1341
1452
1567
1658
1732
1855
1929
2050
2130
2223
2328
2418
2517
2642
2710
289
2955
3040
3114
3242
3344
3437
359
3634
3712
3822
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs284
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount10
flaggedSentences30
totalSentences133
ratio0.226
matches
0"Richmond Park's fog-shrouded oaks loomed behind them, but ahead, the air split open—a jagged tear in reality, the Veil frayed like rotten silk."
1"\"Feast or be the feast, wanderers of the breach.\" No footprints marred the dew-kissed grass where she trod; she glided, ethereal as mist."
2"Twenty-five years on Earth—Cardiff grit, London drudgery, deliveries for Yu-Fei's greasy takeout—hadn't prepared her for this."
3"The world inverted in a rush of vertigo—her stomach lurched, ears popped, and the Veil sealed behind them with a wet smack, like lips closing on a morsel."
4"No Richmond chill nipped her skin; warmth enveloped her, heavy and cloying, like stepping into a crowded kitchen."
5"Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees groaning under fruits the size of her head—pears blushing crimson, apples veined with blue, peaches dripping nectar that sizzled faintly on the earth."
6"The ground quivered subtly beneath her, alive with hidden movement—worms?"
7"\"Dymas calls, where bellies bloat and boundaries blur. Prince Belphegor's table is set eternal.\" Her lavender eyes gleamed with knowing mischief, but she offered no more; the Fae compulsion twisted truths into knots."
8"A figure lumbered into view—a helbound soul, Aurora guessed, corpulent and grinning, skin stretched taut over endless meals."
9"The man yelped, pastry tumbling—but when Nyx reformed, holding a flaky turnover oozing custard, their whisper held hunger."
10"She batted it away; it splattered on the ground, and the soil drank it greedily, vines twitching toward the spot."
11"\"Heal your scars, fill your voids.\" Aurora's wrist burned; she yanked her sleeve down, quick-stepping past."
12"A grand archway loomed ahead, carved from petrified fruits—apples for columns, grapevines twining the lintel."
13"Demons in aprons darted about, horns glinting, while souls—contracted mortals, their eyes hollow with addiction—stirred cauldrons that bubbled with elixirs promising ecstasy."
14"One hurled a fireball pie; it exploded in savory shrapnel, eliciting moans of delight."
15"The air thrummed with music—harps strung with gut, flutes carved from bones—pulsing like a feast-goer's heartbeat."
16"\"Beauty bloats to beast when the sun forgets to set.\" She knelt by a wildflower bed—impossibly vibrant amid the gluttony—plucking a bloom that unfurled into a tiny fruit."
17"A shadow detached from the hall's edge—not Nyx's—slipping toward them with wet, sucking steps."
18"She drew the blade; it sang free, luminescent despite the amber light, edge keen as Fae spite."
19"Isolde spun, hands weaving riddles into air—illusions?"
20"A distant horn blared—culinary games commencing."
21"Wonder warred with dread; this realm seduced as surely as it devoured."
22"Each step deepened the immersion—vines brushing her legs with feather touches, air humming promises."
23"A cluster of grapes brushed her palm; she snatched her hand back, but not before juice stained her skin, warm and insistent."
24"One reached out, translucent hand grasping—Aurora jerked away, heart slamming."
25"Unease peaked as a tremor shook the ground—massive jaws grinding below?"
26"Aurora gripped the pendant; it warmed again, pointing onward."
27"Aurora's mind raced—out-of-the-box: the blade cut wards, perhaps portals too."
28"Wonder resurfaced amid peril—a tree bore lanterns of glowing jam, illuminating murals of gluttonous history etched in caramel."
29"Deeper still, the air thickened to soup, sounds muffling to heartbeats—hers, theirs, the realm's."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount328
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount8
adverbRatio0.024390243902439025
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.006097560975609756
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean12.17
std6.64
cv0.546
sampleLengths
018
122
223
323
419
515
623
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813
919
105
1116
1219
136
144
1510
1614
179
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236
2424
2510
2619
2729
2811
2912
3010
311
325
3310
3433
359
3618
374
3823
3916
405
4111
4211
438
446
4510
4618
4722
488
4912
76.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.45864661654135336
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners61
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences117
matches
0"she murmured, her voice a"
1"they whispered, voice like wind"
2"she said, voice steadier than"
3"She sheathed the blade and"
4"They crossed as one."
5"She blinked, bright blue eyes"
6"Her shoulder-length black hair stuck"
7"Her lavender eyes gleamed with"
8"They towered over Aurora at"
9"Their violet gaze swept the"
10"Her stomach growled traitorously, louder"
11"She pressed a hand to"
12"He wore a chef's whites"
13"she warned, misleading as always"
14"She batted it away; it"
15"They pressed deeper, weaving through"
16"she whispered, hating herself for"
17"Her delivery routes flashed in"
18"She knelt by a wildflower"
19"She popped it in her"
ratio0.248
45.47% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences117
matches
0"Aurora's fingers tightened around the"
1"The Heartstone Pendant burned hot"
2"Richmond Park's fog-shrouded oaks loomed"
3"Isolde stepped forward first, her"
4"she murmured, her voice a"
5"Nyx coalesced beside Aurora, their"
6"they whispered, voice like wind"
7"A tendril of darkness uncurled"
8"Aurora swallowed, her throat dry."
9"Desperation, she knew better."
10"she said, voice steadier than"
11"The small crescent scar on"
12"She sheathed the blade and"
13"They crossed as one."
14"The world inverted in a"
15"Aurora stumbled forward, boots sinking"
16"She blinked, bright blue eyes"
17"The sky arched above in"
18"Vines heavy with clusters of"
19"Orchards stretched into hazy distance,"
ratio0.829
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
ratio0
42.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences64
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Faint whispers slithered from the rift, oily and inviting, carrying scents of roasted meats and spiced wines that clawed at her empty stomach."
1"Aurora stumbled forward, boots sinking into loamy soil that smelled of overripe fruit and baking bread."
2"The sky arched above in a dome of warm amber, veined with lazy swirls of gold, as if the heavens simmered in honeyed light."
3"Orchards stretched into hazy distance, trees groaning under fruits the size of her head—pears blushing crimson, apples veined with blue, peaches dripping nectar…"
4"They towered over Aurora at six-foot-two, but here their edges frayed, as if the ambient light diluted them."
5"He wore a chef's whites stained with sauces of every hue, carrying a platter of glistening pastries that steamed with impossible heat."
6"Demons in aprons darted about, horns glinting, while souls—contracted mortals, their eyes hollow with addiction—stirred cauldrons that bubbled with elixirs prom…"
7"It shrieked, bursting in a spray of juice and ichor that splashed Aurora's boots."
8"They moved, the realm unfolding in waves of sensory assault: birds with beaks of candy dropping sugared songs, flowers exhaling intoxicating pollen that blurred…"
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she murmured, her voice a riddle wrapped in silk"
1"she said, voice steadier than she felt"
2"Aurora snapped, but her mouth watered despite herself"
3"murmured a peach, its flesh parting wetly under invisible pressure"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"they whispered (whisper)"
2"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
3"they hissed (hiss)"
4"she warned (warn)"
5"Aurora snapped (snap)"
6"murmured a peach (murmur)"
7"she whispered (whisper)"
8"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
9"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.625
75.5400%